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人教版必修第三册 · 读后续写片段式训练
Unit 4 Space Exploration 太空探索
片段式阶梯训练(实用版)
本练围绕“Space Exploration 太空探索”单元主题,从课本提取 5 个可用于续写的“探索/成长”语块,按 “情境感知 → 语块建构 → 模仿操练 → 衔接迁移 → 微写实战 → 评价反思” 六步推进。每语块只点一处最易错的坑,全程提供写作支架,避免机械堆砌,可直接用于课堂讲练或自习。
适用对象
建议时长
使用方式
配套
高二/高三学生、备课教师
课堂 1 课时 / 自习 30 min
个人自学 · 小组互评 · 课堂讲练
本单元课文 + 动作/环境描写表达库
Step 1 情境感知:先读进去,再学出来
读下面这个小故事(约 100–120 词)。它把本单元 5 个语块“藏”进了一段真实叙事里——先感受它们在故事里“干什么用”,比直接背例句更有效。
(1) Looking up at the starry sky from my grandpa's backyard, I always wondered why humans never stop exploring. The land we stood on was once barren and (2) was not suitable enough to support life. Yet generation after generation, we (3) made great progress — turning deserts into fields, darkness into light. Every small act of curiosity (4) makes a difference in how we understand the universe. And that longing to know? It (5) resulted in the satellites, the stations, the first fragile step onto another world. To look up, I now see, is to move forward.
◆ 读后引导(不做空泛“找句式”,做有意义的两问)
1. 故事里 5 处加粗语块,各承担什么功能:写景起手 / 条件判断 / 成长逆袭 / 价值升华 / 因果收束?哪一句最适合做“科技/成长类”续写开头?
2. 哪一处最打动你?结合“仰望”这个动作谈它带来的情感或立意,而不是只背句式。
Step 2 语块建构·五金库:一个语块 = 一张“功能卡”
下面 5 个语块,每个都按“含义 → 续写功能 → 搭配锦囊 → 易错提醒 → 即时小练”五栏展开。重点不在“背得多”,而在“用得对”——每个语块只标一处最常见错误。
语块 1 look up at 仰望(星空/高处),常用于分词起手
课本原句:Looking up at the stars, people have always wanted to learn more about space.
【续写功能】读后续写“动作+环境”开篇神句:用现在分词短语 Looking up at ... 起手,瞬间把人物置于星空/高山/天空之下,自带诗意与遐想,极适合作文与续写开头。
【搭配锦囊】Looking up at + 名词(the sky / the stars / the peak),作时间/伴随状语置于句首。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
分词起手时,逻辑主语必须是主句主语,避免垂悬(× Looking up at the sky, the stars shone 错);
固定搭配是 look up at,不写 look at up;
用非谓语 looking,不写 looked(谓语形式)。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
1. 仿写:______________________(仰望璀璨的星河),the traveller no longer felt lonely.
语块 2 be suitable (enough) to do 足够适合做某事
课本原句:They also really wish to discover other planets that are suitable enough to support life.
【续写功能】写“条件是否成熟/人选是否合适”:既可写科幻探索,也可写现实里“某环境/某人是否适合做某事”,是稳妥的书面表达。
【搭配锦囊】be suitable (enough) to do;也接 be suitable for + 名词/doing。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
suitable 拼写:suit-able,只有一个 t(不是 suittable);
enough 置于 suitable 之后(suitable enough,不写 enough suitable);
表语后接 to do,不接 for doing(for 后直接加名词/动名词)。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
2. 填空:This place ______________________(足够适合举办一场户外音乐会)。
语块 3 make great progress 取得巨大进步(逆袭/成长)
课本原句:China's space programme started later than those of Russia and the US, but it has made great progress in a short time.
【续写功能】读后续写“逆袭/成长”句:写人物或团队从落后到突破;比 improve a lot 更有分量,常配转折 but,适合写努力终有回报的中段或结尾。
【搭配锦囊】make (great / surprising) progress (in ...);常与前文“起步晚/起初挫折”形成 but 转折。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
progress 是不可数名词,不加 s(× make great progresses);
前面不加 a(× make a great progress);
搭配用 make,不用 do / take。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
3. 填空:With the teacher's help, my English ______________________(取得了很大进步)。
语块 4 make a difference (in) 在……方面起作用;有影响
课本原句:Exploring space has already made a difference in the fight against world hunger.
【续写功能】读后续写“价值/意义”金句:写一件小事、一个举动如何“带来改变”;比 help 立意更高,是结尾升华、点明主题的万能结构。
【搭配锦囊】make a difference (in + 领域);也可 make a difference to sb.。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
固定是 a difference(单数),不写 make differences;
in 后接作用领域(in fighting poverty);
不接 of(× make a difference of)。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
4. 仿写:Education can ______________________(在消除贫困方面发挥作用)。
语块 5 result in 导致;带来(结果)
课本原句:It has directly resulted in the many satellites that now orbit Earth.
【续写功能】读后续写“因果”句:正式表达“甲导致乙”,比 so / therefore 更书面;可写正面(探索带来便利)也可写负面(疏忽酿成后果),灵活且高级。
【搭配锦囊】result in + 名词/doing(结果);区别 result from(由……导致)。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
result in + 结果,不接 to(× result to)也不直接接 that 从句;
in 后接名词或动名词;
区分 result in(导致)与 result from(起因于)。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
5. 填空:His persistence finally ______________________(带来了成功)。
🔎 直击重难点:result in 与 result from
result in + 结果:His carelessness resulted in a small fire.(A 导致 B)
result from + 原因:The fire resulted from his carelessness.(B 由 A 引起)
记忆口诀:in 进“结果”,from 出“原因”;续写表“因果推进”多用 result in。
Step 3 衔接迁移·语块串烧:把 5 个语块“缝”进一段续写
孤立造句容易,放进连贯段落才见真功夫。读下面这段微续写,用本单元语块补全 5 处空缺——注意前后逻辑与语法形式。
从爷爷家后院(1)______________(仰望星空),我常想人类为何从不停下探索。我们脚下的土地曾荒芜贫瘠,(2)______________(并不足够适合)孕育生命。但一代代人(3)______________(取得了巨大进步)——把荒漠变良田,把黑暗变光明。每一次小小的好奇,都(4)______________(在理解宇宙方面发挥作用)。而那份求知欲,最终(5)______________(带来了)卫星、空间站,以及踏向另一个世界的第一步。
提示:① Looking up at(分词起手,主语 I 一致) ② was not suitable enough to support(enough 在 suitable 后) ③ made great progress(progress 无 s / 无 a) ④ makes a difference in(a difference 单数) ⑤ resulted in(in + 名词)
Step 4 微续写实战(支架式):从“会用语块”到“写出好片段”
顺着 Step 1 的故事情境,完成约 80–100 词的微片段(可另设人物/场景,但须用上本单元 5 个语块)。
不要提笔就写。先借下面的“提纲支架 + 词汇银行”搭好脚手架,再动笔;写完用“评价量表”自评。
◆ ① 提纲支架(每段该干什么、用哪个语块)
段落
写作任务
建议调用的语块
开头 Begin
以“仰望”写景起手,引出探索之问
look up at(景物开篇)
发展 Develop
条件不足 + 逆袭成长
be suitable (enough) to do(条件)/ make great progress(成长)
结尾 End
价值升华 + 因果收束 + 点题
make a difference(意义)/ result in(因果)/ “仰望即前行”
◆ ② 词汇银行(从动作 / 环境描写库精选,提升文采)
📚 可直接化用的地道表达
【景物开篇】A river of stars spilled across the night, silent and patient. / The moon hung low, as if listening to our small, brave planet.
【动作神态】He tightened his grip on the telescope, breath caught in wonder. / She scribbled the number down before the signal faded.
【成长逆境】Failure was only a detour, not a dead end. / Each setback reshaped them into something stronger.
【金句】We explore not to escape the earth, but to understand it. / The sky is not a limit; it is an invitation.
◆ ③ 学生写作区
在此完成 80–100 词的微片段,尽量用上提纲里的 4–5 个语块,并至少借用“词汇银行”中 1 处描写:
◆ ④ 评价量表(自评 / 互评通用)
维度
优秀 4
达标 3
待改进 2
得分
内容完整
三段清晰,景物—思考—升华完整
基本完整
缺环节
语块运用
准确使用 ≥4 个本单元语块
用对 2–3 个
误用 / 少用
描写生动
有景物 / 动作 / 成长细节,画面感强
略有描写
平铺直叙
衔接自然
逻辑连词 / 过渡自然
基本连贯
跳跃
主题升华
点明“探索/坚持/成长”立意
略有点题
未升华
🔍 自评 / 互评指引
圈出你用到的本单元语块,核对形式:looking 分词逻辑主语一致、enough 在 suitable 后、progress 无 s、a difference 单数、result in + 名词;
用“△”标一处最生动的景物/动作描写,用“○”标一句点题句;
同伴互评:朗读片段,看是否“读得顺、画面清、立意明”。
参考答案与解析
◆ Step 1 读后引导(开放式,参考要点)
1. 功能对应:(1) Looking up at —— 写景起手;(2) was not suitable enough to do —— 条件判断;(3) made great progress —— 成长逆袭;(4) makes a difference —— 价值升华;(5) resulted in —— 因果收束。最适合开头的是 (1) 分词起手句。
2. 开放作答,能结合“仰望”带来的渺小感/好奇心/向往来谈即可。
◆ Step 2 即时小练答案 + 易错提醒
1. Looking up at the brilliant galaxy, the traveller no longer felt lonely.(分词起手;主语 traveller 与 looking 一致;up at 搭配)
2. This place is suitable enough to hold an open-air concert.(enough 在 suitable 后;to do 非 for doing)
3. With the teacher's help, my English has made great progress.(progress 无 s、无 a;用 make)
4. Education can make a difference in fighting poverty.(a difference 单数;in + 领域)
5. His persistence finally resulted in success.(result in + 名词;in 不接 to)
◆ Step 3 语块串烧补全
(1) Looking up at the starry sky (2) was not suitable enough to support
(3) made great progress (4) makes a difference in understanding the universe
(5) resulted in
◆ Step 4 微续写范文(≈95 词)+ 亮点标注
Looking up at the starry sky from my grandpa's backyard, I always wondered why humans never stop exploring (look up at · 写景起手). The land we stood on was once barren and was not suitable enough to support life (be suitable enough to do · 条件). Yet we made great progress, turning deserts into fields and darkness into light (make great progress · 逆袭). Every small act of curiosity makes a difference in how we see the universe (make a difference · 价值). That longing, in the end, resulted in the stations and satellites above us (result in · 因果) — and I learned: to look up is, quietly, to move forward.
亮点:① 五语块串成“景物—条件—逆袭—价值—因果”闭环;② 括号景物/成长描写(barren land / deserts into fields)以景衬志;③ 末句“仰望即前行”点题;④ 衔接词 yet / and / in the end 自然。
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