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新高考英语读后续写高分通关学案 语料筑基 · 双线突破 · 升格提分 分册三 升格突破篇 二轮复习 | 从"写得出"到"写得好" 二轮策略 【二轮定位】一轮解决"写得出"，二轮解决"写得好"。高分续写不是靠华丽辞藻堆出来的，是靠"情节合理+细节到位+情绪真实+衔接自然"。本册五个升格点：词汇、细节、情绪、衔接、情节逻辑——最后一讲是多数学生最缺的。 【阅卷提醒】续写评分看四点：与原文融洽度（最重要）、情节合理性、语言丰富度、书写卷面。语言只是其中一项，不要只顾着换高级词而忽略了情节。 第一讲 词汇升格：从"说情绪"到"演情绪" 【原则】very+adj.是"告诉读者情绪"，动作/生理反应是"演给读者看"。但不是每个情绪都要换——只有情绪转折点才用高级表达，日常叙述用普通词就行，否则通篇华丽反而假。 【替换参考】 情绪/场景 普通表达（别这么写） 升格表达（高分这么写） 开心 very happy A smile lit up his face. / His heart swelled with joy. 激动 very excited His eyes sparkled. / He jumped with joy. 难过 very sad Tears welled up in her eyes. / She cried her heart out. 失望 very disappointed A wave of disappointment washed over him. 害怕 very afraid My heart raced wildly. / I froze. / My legs trembled. 紧张 very nervous Hands sweating, he took a deep breath. 生气 very angry Eyes burning with anger, he shouted. 惊讶 very surprised She froze in amazement. / His jaw dropped. 【练一练】 ① She was very happy → ________________________ ② He was very afraid → ________________________ ③ They were very sad → ________________________ 第二讲 细节升格：动作的"关键时刻" 【方法】不是所有动作都要细写。读后续写150词，只在"关键时刻"拆动作——人物做决定的瞬间、遇到危险的瞬间、情感爆发的瞬间。拆法：①起势（准备动作）②过程（核心动作）③余波（动作后的反应）。 【范例】普通：She cried. 关键时刻拆解：A tear welled up in her eye（起势）→ She buried her face in her arms（过程）→ Her shoulders shook uncontrollably（余波）. 【反例】不要写：She stood up → She walked to the door → She opened the door → She went out. 日常动作不用拆，一句She walked out就够了。 【练一练】用关键时刻法改写：He ran to the station.（提示：假设是赶火车的紧张时刻） 答：________________________________________________________ 第三讲 情绪升格：情绪的"两次转弯" 【方法】读后续写的情绪不能一条直线。一段150词至少有两次转弯： 第一次转弯——遇到意外：原本平静/开心→突然出现问题（紧张/害怕/困惑） 第二次转弯——解决领悟：问题解决/想通了→释然/感动/成长 【范例·森林迷路】 起点：I walked along the path, enjoying the birdsong.（平静） 第一次转弯：Suddenly, the path disappeared. I looked around — nothing but trees.（紧张→恐惧） 第二次转弯：Then I heard a distant dog bark. Following the sound, I finally found the main road.（释然→感激） 收尾：I breathed a sigh of relief, promising myself never to wander off the path again. 【过渡词】However | All at once | To my relief | Eventually | It was then that 【练一练】写一个"图书馆找书：期待→失望→惊喜"的情绪两次转弯，不少于3句。 答：________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________ 第四讲 衔接升格：与原文的"三个接口" 【方法】续写第一段必须承接原文最后一句，第二段必须承接第一段段首句。三个接口： 接口1——动作承接：Hearing this / At these words / Seeing this / Looking up（承接上文的动作或话语） 接口2——心理承接：Without thinking twice / It struck him that / An idea flashed through his mind（承接上文的心理活动） 接口3——道具承接：原文出现的道具（旧照片、手表、信件），续写中再用一次，形成伏笔照应。 【范例】原文结尾：She held the old photo tightly, tears in her eyes. 续写开头：Staring at the photo, she realized it was time to visit her grandmother.（道具承接+心理承接） 【练一练】上文：She stood at the platform, waiting. 续写开头：____, she saw a familiar face. 答：________________________________________________________ 第五讲 情节逻辑：从段首句到完整故事 【为什么最缺这个】很多学生语言不错但分数不高，问题出在情节——要么和原文脱节，要么逻辑不通，要么结尾仓促。记住四步： 第一步 读段首句，找三个线索：人物在哪？在做什么？情绪怎样？ 第二步 设一个核心冲突：人物想要什么？什么挡住了他？（冲突不能太简单，也不能太复杂） 第三步 用"尝试→失败→再尝试→成功"推进：不要一次就解决，要有波折。 第四步 结尾回扣原文主题：原文讲什么主题，结尾就升华什么。 【完整范例】 原文段首句1：The old man handed the boy a wooden box, saying, "Open it when you're ready." 段首句2：Many years later, the boy, now a young man, returned to the old house. 情节推导： · 线索：老人给了木盒，说"准备好再打开"；多年后年轻人回来 · 核心冲突：盒子里是什么？年轻人这些年经历了什么？ · 尝试→结果：他打开盒子→里面是一封信和一块旧手表→信里说"时间是最珍贵的礼物"→他终于明白老人的用意 · 结尾回扣：他戴上手表，明白了"珍惜当下"的主题 【练一练】给下面的段首句设计情节大纲（不用写全文，写冲突和结尾）： 段首句1：When she arrived at the shelter, the dog barked loudly at her. 段首句2：An hour later, the dog was sitting quietly beside her. 你的情节设计：________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________ 综合升格实战 【任务】把下面这段学生作文改成高分版，用上五个升格点。 【学生原文】Tom was very afraid. He walked into the dark room. He was very nervous. Then he saw a black cat. He was very surprised. He sat down. He was not afraid anymore. 【升格要求】① 去掉所有very；② 关键时刻拆动作；③ 情绪两次转弯；④ 开头衔接；⑤ 情节合理（为什么进黑房间？看到猫后为什么不怕了？） 你的升格版： ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 参考答案 【第一讲】① Her eyes sparkled. ② His heart raced wildly. ③ Tears rolled down their faces. 【第二讲】He grabbed his bag → He sprinted down the street → He burst onto the platform, gasping, just as the train whistled. 【第三讲参考】I scanned the shelves eagerly, looking for the novel. But the last copy was gone. I was about to turn away, when the librarian handed me a reserved copy — someone had returned it that morning. 【第四讲】Looking up / At that moment 【第五讲参考】冲突：狗一开始对她狂吠，她害怕想走；但她发现狗是在保护受伤的幼崽。结尾：她决定收养这只狗，狗从警惕到信任。 【综合升格·范文】The floorboard creaked under his foot. Tom froze, then pushed the door open. His heart pounded as he stepped into the darkness — until something soft rubbed against his leg. It was a black cat, purring loudly. Tom knelt down, stroking its fur, and the fear melted away. 【范文亮点】开头衔接（creak暗示有人来）；零very；关键时刻拆动作（froze→pushed→stepped→knelt）；情绪两次转弯（紧张→恐惧→释然）；情节合理（猫蹭腿→不怕了）；结尾回扣not afraid anymore。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $