【周周有招】新教材同步尖子班讲义第9讲 Unit 5 The Value of Money（戏剧评论写作-The Review of a Play）-2026-2027学年高中英语（人教版）必修第三册（教师版+学生版）

2027年春高一下 · 新教材同步尖子班讲义 · 人教版必修三 · 高中英语 Unit 5 The Value of Money （教师版） 第9讲 戏剧评论写作 · The Review of a Play 【课型】读写课 【课时安排】本讲为Unit 5 The Value of Money板块Reading for Writing，建议用时2课时。 【学习目标】 1. 能一句话点破“叙事概要”与“评论观点”的分界，并判断一段文字是复述还是评论。 2. 能按“钩子—概要—观点与证据—推荐”四段法搭建一份结构完整的戏剧评论。 3. 能借助角色的态度变化这一具体证据支撑评论观点，写出有说服力的review。 【重难点】重点：四段结构、观点句、证据句。难点：概要压缩、证据主体一致、because连接观点与细节。易错：复述癖、空转炮、标签化评价。 一、问题案例：这篇评论为什么不及格？ 阅读下面这篇学生习作。它被老师判了“不及格”。请先合上书想一遍：老师为什么给分这么低？ Yesterday I read the play The Million Pound Bank Note, adapted from Mark Twain’s short story. It is about a poor American named Henry Adams who comes to London with no money. Two rich brothers make a bet on him and give him a one-million-pound bank note. Henry goes to a tailor’s shop to buy a suit. At first the clerks treat him rudely and think he is poor. But when they see the bank note, they change their attitude completely and become very polite. Then Henry leaves the shop. This is a very interesting story. 【思考题】 ① 这段文字里，作者自己的“判断”出现了几次？ ② 如果把“very interesting”这个评价删掉，这段话还剩下什么？ ③ 它读起来像一篇“评论”，还是像一篇“故事梗概”？ 【答案】 ① 1次（This is a very interesting story.） ② 只剩剧情复述，没有作者立场。 ③ 像故事梗概，不像评论。 【判断标准】 删掉评价句后，正文若仍然成立，说明没有评论，只有复述。 二、核心精讲：如何把“讲故事”变成“评故事”？ 【思维陷阱】你中招了吗？ 请判断，以下哪段文字是有效的“观点与证据”组合？ A. 这个场景很有趣。因为店员的态度变了。 B. 这个场景揭示了社会的虚伪。因为店员对亨利的态度从“See him there”的粗鲁，变成了“Please, please, come in”的恭敬。 【陷阱解析】 很多同学会误选A。A错在用一个模糊的判断（有趣）去解释另一个模糊的现象（态度变了），这叫“空转炮”。而B用一个具体的判断（揭露虚伪）去锚定一组具体的、可对比的证据（两句台词），这才是有效的论证。 判断标准只有一条：观点要锋利，证据要具体，两者之间必须有一条清晰的“because”链条。 （一）评论的四段结构 一份合格的戏剧评论，由四段组成，缺一段都不完整。但这四段不是各顾各的，是靠一条因果链串起来的： 钩子 → 制造疑问 概要 → 提供事实 观点与证据 → 给出判断，并用证据撑住 推荐 → 收束理由 这里把“观点”和“证据”并成一段，因为它们是同一件事的两面——观点是判断，证据是支撑。判断不配证据就是空话，证据不挂判断就是流水账。绑在一起，才构成评论的主体。 1. 钩子 Hook：用一句话抓住读者。可以是戏剧最让人意外的点、一个尖锐的提问，或一个总体判断。 示例：What makes the tailor’s shop scene unforgettable is not the bank note itself, but the way it changes people. 2. 概要 Summary：用两到三句概括剧情，只讲“发生了什么”，不发表评价。忌讳从头到尾的流水账。 示例：Henry enters a tailor’s shop to order a suit, but the clerks first treat him rudely. When the owner sees his million-pound note, he immediately orders the finest cloth and bows to him. 3. 观点与证据 Opinion + Evidence：评论的心脏。先给一个明确的判断（精彩、拖沓、打动人或令人失望），再用剧中的具体细节来证明。 示例：What strikes me most is that the scene exposes snobbery. The first clerk says “See him there” in a rude manner, yet the owner later bows and says “Please excuse us for keeping you waiting.” 4. 推荐 Recommendation：收束。值不值得看？推荐给谁？给出理由。 示例：I would strongly recommend this scene to anyone who wants to see how money can change attitudes in seconds. （二）证据从哪里来？——戏剧证据工具箱 戏剧和小说的最大区别：没有大段心理描写，人物的态度全部写在台词、舞台指示、动作、道具里。所以评论一部戏，最锋利的证据来自以下四个维度： 证据类型 说明 示例（裁缝店场景） 台词对比 同一角色在不同情境下的语言差异 店员先说“See him there”（粗鲁），后说“Please, please, come in”（恭敬） 舞台指示 剧本中对动作、表情、语调的描述 “(in a rude manner)” vs “(bowing)” 道具象征 关键物品如何揭示主题 百万英镑——既是钞票，也是人性的试金石 场景对比 不同场景之间的氛围反差 亨利进门时的冷漠气氛 vs 出示钞票后的热烈气氛 【证据提取三步法】 1. 找前后：同一角色或同一群体的前后言行。 2. 标触发：标出触发态度变化的物件或事件。 3. 连本质：用because把“观点—证据—本质”连成一句。 （三）两种典型病 病症 表现 判断标准 修正方法 复述癖 整篇review几乎全是Summary，最后甩一个空洞评价 删掉所有评价句，正文依然成立 压缩概要至2-3句，留出空间写观点和证据 空转炮 观点很响亮，证据是空的 观点后面接不上“because + 具体细节” 用because连接观点和剧中具体台词/动作 （四）语言工具箱 表达观点： What strikes me most is that... The most impressive / disappointing part is... What makes the scene powerful is... The play succeeds / fails in showing... 表达推荐： I would strongly recommend it to... It is well worth seeing, especially for... If you enjoy stories about..., don’t miss it. 表达对比与因果： While..., ... What makes... is not... but... This contrast proves/shows that... It is well worth seeing because... 词汇替换（告别interesting/good）： 夸亮点：impressive, powerful, dramatic, thought-provoking, vivid 说不足：disappointing, flat, predictable, rushed 三、实战演练：用裁缝店场景走一遍 下面是《百万英镑》第二幕第一场的节选（已压缩）。读完后，完成“概要—观点—证据”三步任务。 【测试材料】 THE MILLION POUND BANK NOTE — Act 2, Scene 1 (excerpt) Narrator: Henry walks along the street, holding the bank note. His coat is worn in several places. He sees a sign for a tailor’s shop. (Henry enters the shop) Henry: I’d like to have a suit coat. 1st Clerk: (in a rude manner) See him there. (pointing to another clerk) 2nd Clerk: Ready-made suits? Downstairs. Henry: I’d like to have a suit coat made to measure, please. (The two clerks laugh and look down on Henry.) Owner: (seeing the clerks laughing) What is happening here? (He turns to Henry and sees the bank note in his hand.) Please, please, come in. Let me show you some suits. (Within minutes, the owner orders the clerks to prepare the finest cloth.) Owner: (bowing) This suit will be ready tomorrow. Please excuse us for keeping you waiting, sir. Henry: (leaving) I’ll come back tomorrow. 【作答区】 任务1 · 写概要：用两句话概括这段剧情，只讲“发生了什么”，不发表评价。 任务2 · 写观点：用一句英文给这一幕下判断，可套用 What strikes me most is... 句式。 任务3 · 找证据：圈出剧中最能支撑你观点的两个细节。要求：至少包含一处“舞台指示”或“动作描写”，再用because把它们连起来。 【参考答案与解析】 任务1参考：Henry enters a tailor’s shop to order a suit, but the clerks first treat him rudely and even try to send him downstairs. When the owner sees his million-pound note, he changes his attitude and orders the clerks to serve Henry respectfully. 解析：概要只保留“转折”——店员态度从冷到热，删去了具体对话细节。 任务2参考：What strikes me most is that the scene exposes snobbery because the clerks’ rude words contrast sharply with the owner’s respectful bow. 解析：观点必须点出本质（snobbery/hypocrisy），而非只说“interesting”。 任务3参考：The first clerk rudely says “See him there” (in a rude manner), and the second clerk asks “Ready-made suits? Downstairs?” However, the owner later bows and says “Please excuse us for keeping you waiting.” Because these details form a sharp contrast, the scene proves that the staff judge Henry by his appearance and money. 解析：证据包含了两处舞台指示“(in a rude manner)”和“(bowing)”，并用because连接了观点与证据。 【点拨】 概要的纪律是“砍掉枝叶、留住转折”——这一段真正的转折只有一个，即店员态度从冷到热。 观点要具体：说 impressive 不如说 exposes the hypocrisy，因为后者点出了态度变化的本质。 四、分层练习 （一）热身阶段：分辨概要与观点 判断下面五句话，哪些是概要（填S），哪些是观点（填O）： 1. Henry Adams is a poor American who arrives in London with no money.（　） 2. The scene is most striking because it shows how quickly people change their attitude when they see money.（　） 3. Two rich brothers make a bet and give Henry a million-pound note.（　） 4. The clerks laugh at Henry.（　） 5. The playwright criticizes the clerks’ snobbery.（　） 【答案】 1. S　2. O　3. S　4. S　5. O 【解析】 判断标准只有一条：这句话是在描述可以验证的事实（S），还是在表达主观立场（O）。 第1、3、4句的剧情可被直接核对，是概要。 第2句的 most striking 是主观判断，并带上了because理由，是观点。 第5句的 criticizes 是主观立场，是观点。 （二）核心训练：观点与证据的生成 任务A（半开放）：阅读下面的戏剧片段，围绕给出的观点，从剧中寻找至少两组证据，并写成一个逻辑连贯的“观点与证据”段落（60-80词）。 【素材】（《威尼斯商人》法庭审判节选） Shylock: I crave the law. The bond is forfeit. I demand my pound of flesh. Portia: (disguised as a lawyer) Is your name Shylock? Then the law allows it. But wait—this bond gives you no drop of blood. If you shed one drop of Christian blood, your lands and goods are forfeit. Shylock: (hesitating) Then give me three times the money. Portia: No. You shall have only the penalty. Take your pound of flesh, but shed no blood. Shylock: (backing away) I’ll take the money. I’ll take nothing. 观点：The scene reveals the conflict between strict law and human mercy. 【参考段落】 What strikes me most is that Portia uses the letter of the law to defeat Shylock’s cruelty. At first Shylock insists on “the law” and demands “a pound of flesh”. But when Portia points out that shedding blood would forfeit his property, Shylock immediately backs down and offers to take money instead. This contrast proves that strict law without mercy leads only to destruction. 【解析】 证据1：Shylock最初的强硬台词“I crave the law. I demand my pound of flesh.” 证据2：Shylock退缩后的台词“Then give me three times the money.” 用because连接观点与证据，形成因果链。 任务B（全开放）：阅读下面的戏剧片段，自主提炼观点，并写出一篇完整的、100词左右的英文评论（四段法）。 【素材】（《雷雨》节选，简化版） Zhou Puyuan: (to Lu Shiping) You’re still alive? After thirty years, you come back to ask for money? Lu Shiping: I didn’t come for money. I came to see my daughter—your wife drove her out. Zhou Puyuan: (angry) Get out! Don’t mention the past. I am a respectable man now. Lu Shiping: (bitterly) Respectable? You threw me out when I was pregnant. Now you pretend to be a gentleman. 【参考范文】 What makes this scene unforgettable is the exposure of hypocrisy behind social respectability. The scene shows Zhou Puyuan confronting Lu Shiping, a woman he abandoned thirty years ago. When she appears, he first shows shock, then anger, and finally tries to drive her away. What strikes me most is the sharp contrast between Zhou’s claim of being “respectable” and his cruel treatment of Lu. His command “Get out!” reveals that his respectability is merely a mask. This contrast powerfully shows that true character is tested by how we treat those we have wronged. I would recommend this scene to anyone interested in how drama reveals hidden truths beneath social masks. 【解析】 钩子：点出“虚伪”这一核心。 概要：压缩到“周朴园与鲁侍萍对峙”这一核心事件。 观点与证据：用“respectable”与“Get out”的对比支撑观点。 推荐：明确推荐对象和理由。 五、高考对接与转化策略 高考题型 本讲对接点 转化策略 应用文写作（推荐信、影评、书评） 四段法 钩子=开头句，吸引阅卷老师；概要=背景介绍；观点与证据=主体段落，得分关键；推荐=结尾升华 概要写作 压缩剧情，保留转折 2-3句概括，砍枝叶、留转折 读后续写 人物态度变化 用前后对比分析人物性格，预测后续行为 阅读理解 观点与证据 区分事实与观点，找支撑细节 【一句话总结】 四段成链，因果贯穿——钩子抓人、概要简洁、证据撑观点、推荐收个尾。 六、课后作业 请就下面这部短片的故事，写一篇120词左右的英文评论（review）。要求用四段法：钩子—概要—观点与证据—推荐。 【测试材料】The Story of the Golden Touch（点金术） Long ago, King Midas loved gold more than anything in the world. One day a god granted him a wish: everything he touched would turn to gold. At first Midas was overjoyed and turned stones, flowers and furniture into gold. But soon his joy turned to horror—the food he tried to eat became gold, and when he hugged his little daughter, she turned into a golden statue. Weeping, Midas begged the god to take back the power. He finally understood that real wealth is not measured in gold, but in the people we love. 【作业要求】 1. 必须使用“What strikes me most is that...”或“What makes the story...is...”句式来表达核心观点。 2. 证据必须包含至少一处对主人公“态度变化”的具体描述（引用原文或用自己的话转述）。 3. 推荐部分必须明确推荐对象和理由。 【参考范文】 What makes this story unforgettable is the moment King Midas’s daughter turns into gold—a warning that money, if worshipped, destroys the very things we treasure. The story follows a greedy king who is granted the power to turn everything into gold. At first he is delighted, but he soon realizes that gold means nothing when it takes away his food and his daughter. What strikes me most is the sudden change in Midas’s emotion: his joy turns to horror in just a few lines. This contrast powerfully shows that happiness cannot be bought. I would strongly recommend this tale to anyone who equates wealth with happiness, for it reminds us to value people over possessions. 【评分标准】 项目 要求 分值 内容要点 钩子、概要、观点、证据、推荐，各2分 10分 结构 四段清晰 3分 语言 至少2个高级句式 2分 卷面 书写工整，无涂改 1分 扣分点：概要超过3句扣1分；观点无because证据扣2分；推荐无对象扣1分。 七、课后巩固练习 巩固练习一：The Necklace（项链） 【素材】莫泊桑《项链》短剧片段，主题为“虚荣与代价”。 任务： 1. 判断三句是S还是O： （　）Mathilde borrows a necklace and loses it.　（　）The story is most striking because it shows the price of vanity.　（　）She works for ten years to pay for the necklace. 2. 写一句观点，必须用 What strikes me most is that...，并用because连接证据。 【答案与解析】 1. S；O；S 2. 参考：What strikes me most is that the story exposes the cost of vanity because Mathilde’s one night of pride leads to ten years of hard work. 解析：观点必须含本质词 vanity，证据必须是“十年劳作”这一具体细节。 巩固练习二：The Gift of the Magi（麦琪的礼物） 【素材】欧·亨利《麦琪的礼物》短剧片段，主题为“爱与牺牲”。 任务： 1. 给观点 The story is powerful. 补两处证据并写because句。 2. 把 The story is powerful. 改为具体观点句。 【答案与解析】 1. 参考：The story is powerful because Della sells her hair to buy a watch chain, while Jim sells his watch to buy combs. 2. 改为：This contrast proves that love is measured by sacrifice, not by possessions. 解析：必须指出 powerful 太泛，改为 love is measured by sacrifice 才具体。 巩固练习三：The Fisherman and His Wife（渔夫和金鱼） 【素材】格林童话《渔夫和金鱼》短剧片段，主题为“贪婪与满足”。 任务：写一篇120词左右review，四段法：钩子—概要—观点与证据—推荐。 【参考范文】 What makes the story unforgettable is the wife’s endless greed. A fisherman catches a magical fish and releases it. His wife demands a new house, then a palace, then to be queen. Each time the sea grows darker, until finally everything is lost and they return to their old hut. What strikes me most is that greed destroys happiness because the wife’s demands grow while her satisfaction disappears. The sea’s changing color mirrors her growing discontent. I would recommend it to anyone who believes more possessions always mean more happiness, for it shows that enough is better than too much. 【解析】 钩子：点出“无尽的贪婪”。 概要：压缩到“要房子→要宫殿→要王位→失去一切”。 观点与证据：用“demands grow”与“satisfaction disappears”的对比支撑观点。 推荐：明确推荐对象和理由。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 第 9 讲 戏剧评论写作 · The Review of a Play 读写课 · 人教版必修三 · 高一英语（下）· 学生版 【课型】读写课 【课时安排】本讲为 Unit 5 The Value of Money 板块 Reading for Writing，建议用时 2 课时。 【学习目标】 1. 能一句话点破“叙事概要”与“评论观点”的分界，并判断一段文字是复述还是评论。 2. 能按“钩子—概要—观点与证据—推荐”四段法搭建一份结构完整的戏剧评论。 3. 能借助角色的态度变化这一具体证据支撑评论观点，写出有说服力的 review。 【重难点】 重点：四段结构、观点句、证据句。难点：概要压缩、证据主体一致、because 连接观点与细节。易错：复述癖、空转炮、标签化评价。 一、问题案例：这篇评论为什么不及格？ 阅读下面这篇学生习作。它被老师判了“不及格”。请先合上书想一遍：老师为什么给分这么低？ Yesterday I read the play The Million Pound Bank Note, adapted from Mark Twain’s short story. It is about a poor American named Henry Adams who comes to London with no money. Two rich brothers make a bet on him and give him a one-million-pound bank note. Henry goes to a tailor’s shop to buy a suit. At first the clerks treat him rudely and think he is poor. But when they see the bank note, they change their attitude completely and become very polite. Then Henry leaves the shop. This is a very interesting story. 【思考题】 ① 这段文字里，作者自己的“判断”出现了几次？ 答：____________________________ ② 如果把“very interesting”这个评价删掉，这段话还剩下什么？ 答：____________________________ ③ 它读起来像一篇“评论”，还是像一篇“故事梗概”？ 答：____________________________ 【判断标准】 删掉评价句后，正文若仍然成立，说明没有评论，只有复述。 二、核心精讲：如何把“讲故事”变成“评故事”？ 【思维陷阱】你中招了吗？ 请判断，以下哪段文字是有效的“观点与证据”组合？在括号里写 A 或 B： A. 这个场景很有趣。因为店员的态度变了。 B. 这个场景揭示了社会的虚伪。因为店员对亨利的态度从“See him there”的粗鲁，变成了“Please, please, come in”的恭敬。 你的判断：（　） 【陷阱解析】 很多同学会误选 A。A 错在用一个模糊的判断（有趣）去解释另一个模糊的现象（态度变了），这叫“空转炮”。而 B 用一个具体的判断（揭露虚伪）去锚定一组具体的、可对比的证据（两句台词），这才是有效的论证。 判断标准只有一条：观点要锋利，证据要具体，两者之间必须有一条清晰的“because”链条。 （一）评论的四段结构 一份合格的戏剧评论，由四段组成，缺一段都不完整。但这四段不是各顾各的，是靠一条因果链串起来的： 钩子 → 制造疑问；概要 → 提供事实；观点与证据 → 给出判断，并用证据撑住；推荐 → 收束理由。 这里把“观点”和“证据”并成一段，因为它们是同一件事的两面——观点是判断，证据是支撑。判断不配证据就是空话，证据不挂判断就是流水账。绑在一起，才构成评论的主体。 1. 钩子 Hook：用一句话抓住读者。示例：What makes the tailor’s shop scene unforgettable is not the bank note itself, but the way it changes people. 2. 概要 Summary：用两到三句概括剧情，只讲“发生了什么”，不发表评价。示例：Henry enters a tailor’s shop to order a suit, but the clerks first treat him rudely. When the owner sees his million-pound note, he immediately orders the finest cloth and bows to him. 3. 观点与证据 Opinion + Evidence：评论的心脏。先给一个明确的判断，再用剧中的具体细节来证明。示例：What strikes me most is that the scene exposes snobbery. The first clerk says “See him there” in a rude manner, yet the owner later bows and says “Please excuse us for keeping you waiting.” 4. 推荐 Recommendation：收束。值不值得看？推荐给谁？给出理由。示例：I would strongly recommend this scene to anyone who wants to see how money can change attitudes in seconds. （二）证据从哪里来？——戏剧证据工具箱 戏剧和小说的最大区别：没有大段心理描写，人物的态度全部写在台词、舞台指示、动作、道具里。所以评论一部戏，最锋利的证据来自以下四个维度： 证据类型 说明 示例（裁缝店场景） 台词对比 同一角色在不同情境下的语言差异 店员先说“See him there”（粗鲁），后说“Please, please, come in”（恭敬） 舞台指示 剧本中对动作、表情、语调的描述 “(in a rude manner)” vs “(bowing)” 道具象征 关键物品如何揭示主题 百万英镑——既是钞票，也是人性的试金石 场景对比 不同场景之间的氛围反差 亨利进门时的冷漠气氛 vs 出示钞票后的热烈气氛 【证据提取三步法】 1. 找前后：同一角色或同一群体的前后言行。 2. 标触发：标出触发态度变化的物件或事件。 3. 连本质：用 because 把“观点—证据—本质”连成一句。 （三）两种典型病 病症 表现 判断标准 修正方法 复述癖 整篇 review 几乎全是 Summary，最后甩一个空洞评价 删掉所有评价句，正文依然成立 压缩概要至 2-3 句，留出空间写观点和证据 空转炮 观点很响亮，证据是空的 观点后面接不上“because + 具体细节” 用 because 连接观点和剧中具体台词/动作 （四）语言工具箱 表达观点：What strikes me most is that... / The most impressive / disappointing part is... / What makes the scene powerful is... / The play succeeds / fails in showing... 表达推荐：I would strongly recommend it to... / It is well worth seeing, especially for... / If you enjoy stories about..., don’t miss it. 表达对比与因果：While..., ... / What makes... is not... but... / This contrast proves/shows that... / It is well worth seeing because... 词汇替换（告别 interesting/good）：夸亮点——impressive, powerful, dramatic, thought-provoking, vivid；说不足——disappointing, flat, predictable, rushed。 三、实战演练：用裁缝店场景走一遍 下面是《百万英镑》第二幕第一场的节选（已压缩）。读完后，完成“概要—观点—证据”三步任务。 【测试材料】 THE MILLION POUND BANK NOTE — Act 2, Scene 1 (excerpt) Narrator: Henry walks along the street, holding the bank note. His coat is worn in several places. He sees a sign for a tailor’s shop. (Henry enters the shop) Henry: I’d like to have a suit coat. 1st Clerk: (in a rude manner) See him there. (pointing to another clerk) 2nd Clerk: Ready-made suits? Downstairs. Henry: I’d like to have a suit coat made to measure, please. (The two clerks laugh and look down on Henry.) Owner: (seeing the clerks laughing) What is happening here? (He turns to Henry and sees the bank note in his hand.) Please, please, come in. Let me show you some suits. (Within minutes, the owner orders the clerks to prepare the finest cloth.) Owner: (bowing) This suit will be ready tomorrow. Please excuse us for keeping you waiting, sir. Henry: (leaving) I’ll come back tomorrow. 【作答区】 任务 1 · 写概要：用两句话概括这段剧情，只讲“发生了什么”，不发表评价。 ____________________________ ____________________________ 任务 2 · 写观点：用一句英文给这一幕下判断，可套用 What strikes me most is... 句式。 ____________________________ 任务 3 · 找证据：圈出剧中最能支撑你观点的两个细节。要求：至少包含一处“舞台指示”或“动作描写”，再用 because 把它们连起来。 ____________________________ ____________________________ 【点拨】 概要的纪律是“砍掉枝叶、留住转折”——这一段真正的转折只有一个，即店员态度从冷到热。 观点要具体：说 impressive 不如说 exposes the hypocrisy，因为后者点出了态度变化的本质。 四、分层练习 （一）热身阶段：分辨概要与观点 判断下面五句话，哪些是概要（填 S），哪些是观点（填 O）： 1. Henry Adams is a poor American who arrives in London with no money.（　） 2. The scene is most striking because it shows how quickly people change their attitude when they see money.（　） 3. Two rich brothers make a bet and give Henry a million-pound note.（　） 4. The clerks laugh at Henry.（　） 5. The playwright criticizes the clerks’ snobbery.（　） 判断标准：这句话是在描述可以验证的事实（S），还是在表达主观立场（O）？ （二）核心训练：观点与证据的生成 任务 A（半开放） 阅读下面的戏剧片段，围绕给出的观点，从剧中寻找至少两组证据，并写成一个逻辑连贯的“观点与证据”段落（60-80 词）。 【素材】（《威尼斯商人》法庭审判节选） Shylock: I crave the law. The bond is forfeit. I demand my pound of flesh. Portia: (disguised as a lawyer) Is your name Shylock? Then the law allows it. But wait—this bond gives you no drop of blood. If you shed one drop of Christian blood, your lands and goods are forfeit. Shylock: (hesitating) Then give me three times the money. Portia: No. You shall have only the penalty. Take your pound of flesh, but shed no blood. Shylock: (backing away) I’ll take the money. I’ll take nothing. 观点：The scene reveals the conflict between strict law and human mercy. 你的段落： ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ 任务 B（全开放） 阅读下面的戏剧片段，自主提炼观点，并写出一篇完整的、100 词左右的英文评论（四段法）。 【素材】（《雷雨》节选，简化版） Zhou Puyuan: (to Lu Shiping) You’re still alive? After thirty years, you come back to ask for money? Lu Shiping: I didn’t come for money. I came to see my daughter—your wife drove her out. Zhou Puyuan: (angry) Get out! Don’t mention the past. I am a respectable man now. Lu Shiping: (bitterly) Respectable? You threw me out when I was pregnant. Now you pretend to be a gentleman. 提示：写前先定好四段——钩子点出核心（如“虚伪”），概要压缩到核心对峙事件，观点与证据用“respectable”与“Get out”的对比支撑，推荐明确对象和理由。 ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ 五、高考对接与转化策略 一句话总结：四段成链，因果贯穿——钩子抓人、概要简洁、证据撑观点、推荐收个尾。 高考题型 本讲对接点 转化策略 应用文写作（推荐信、影评、书评） 四段法 钩子=开头句；概要=背景介绍；观点与证据=主体段落，得分关键；推荐=结尾升华 概要写作 压缩剧情，保留转折 2-3 句概括，砍枝叶、留转折 读后续写 人物态度变化 用前后对比分析人物性格，预测后续行为 阅读理解 观点与证据 区分事实与观点，找支撑细节 六、课后作业 请就下面这部短片的故事，写一篇 120 词左右的英文评论（review）。要求用四段法：钩子—概要—观点与证据—推荐。 【测试材料】The Story of the Golden Touch（点金术） Long ago, King Midas loved gold more than anything in the world. One day a god granted him a wish: everything he touched would turn to gold. At first Midas was overjoyed and turned stones, flowers and furniture into gold. But soon his joy turned to horror—the food he tried to eat became gold, and when he hugged his little daughter, she turned into a golden statue. Weeping, Midas begged the god to take back the power. He finally understood that real wealth is not measured in gold, but in the people we love. 【作业要求】 1. 必须使用“What strikes me most is that...”或“What makes the story...is...”句式来表达核心观点。 2. 证据必须包含至少一处对主人公“态度变化”的具体描述（引用原文或用自己的话转述）。 3. 推荐部分必须明确推荐对象和理由。 【评分标准】扣分点：概要超过 3 句扣 1 分；观点无 because 证据扣 2 分；推荐无对象扣 1 分。 你的评论： ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ 七、课后巩固练习 巩固练习一：The Necklace（项链） 【素材】莫泊桑《项链》短剧片段，主题为“虚荣与代价”。 任务： 1. 判断三句是 S 还是 O： （　）Mathilde borrows a necklace and loses it. （　）The story is most striking because it shows the price of vanity. （　）She works for ten years to pay for the necklace. 2. 写一句观点，必须用 What strikes me most is that...，并用 because 连接证据。 ____________________________ 巩固练习二：The Gift of the Magi（麦琪的礼物） 【素材】欧·亨利《麦琪的礼物》短剧片段，主题为“爱与牺牲”。 任务： 1. 给观点 The story is powerful. 补两处证据并写 because 句。 ____________________________ 2. 把 The story is powerful. 改为具体观点句。（提示：powerful 太泛，改为“爱以牺牲衡量，而非财物”之类才具体） ____________________________ 巩固练习三：The Fisherman and His Wife（渔夫和金鱼） 【素材】格林童话《渔夫和金鱼》短剧片段，主题为“贪婪与满足”。 任务：写一篇 120 词左右的 review，四段法：钩子—概要—观点与证据—推荐。 提示：钩子点出“无尽的贪婪”；概要压缩到“要房子→要宫殿→要王位→失去一切”；观点与证据用“demands grow”与“satisfaction disappears”的对比；推荐明确对象和理由。 ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ ____________________________ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $