2021年新高考读后续写两步呼应法 讲义-2027届高三英语一轮复习专项

该高中英语讲义聚焦高考读后续写核心考点，围绕家庭亲情类话题，以“故事六步走”梳理叙事结构逻辑，用“句子接龙法”强化语篇连贯，通过真题解析、方法指导、范文精讲及模板应用等环节，帮助学生构建从情节发展到情感升华的写作框架，突破内容衔接与主题表达难点。 资料创新融合“两步呼应法”与“六维描写”，通过“句子接龙”训练提升语言组织能力（语言能力），“故事六步走”培养逻辑思维（思维品质），设计模板填空与要素呼应练习，确保学生快速掌握情节推进技巧，为教师提供精准复习路径，有效提升学生应考实战能力。

2021年新高考Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷读后续写 两步呼应法 · 家庭亲情类突破 （解析工具：故事六步走 + 句子接龙法；六维：动作·情绪·心理·对话·环境·升华） 一、真题原文 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 am. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 Para 1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Para 2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 二、话题分类与解析方法 话题分类 话题类型 家庭亲情 · 感恩（母亲节惊喜 / 劳动教育 / 亲子温情） 核心矛盾 双胞胎信心满满做早餐 → 接连失败（面包焦、粥溢出、手烫伤）→ 失望 → 爸爸出现帮忙 → 端给妈妈感动 写作主线 失败失望 → 爸爸出现帮忙 → 重新做好早餐 → 端给妈妈 → 感恩升华 解析方法一：故事六步走（拉波夫叙事结构） 任何一篇完整的记叙文都按六步推进，读后续写就是把原文没写完的步骤补上。先看本题原文和续写各占哪一步： 步骤 内容 本题对应 ① 背景交代 谁、何时、何地、做什么 原文：母亲节，双胞胎想给妈妈做早餐惊喜 ② 情节推进 事情怎么发展的 原文：煮粥、煎面包，一开始顺利 ③ 出问题 意外发生，情节转折 原文：面包焦了、粥溢出、手烫伤、面包又焦了 ④ 转折评价 人物反应、情绪变化、他人介入 续写第一段：失望时爸爸出现，主动帮忙 ⑤ 解决问题 问题怎么解决的 续写第一段：在爸爸指导下重新做好早餐 ⑥ 升华结尾 回到主题，情感升华 续写第二段：端给妈妈，感动感恩，爱的温暖 写作提示：续写第一段要完成④⑤两步（转折+解决），第二段完成第⑥步（升华）。不要在第一段就把妈妈感动写了，留给第二段。 解析方法二：句子接龙法（主位述位推进） 每句话先说"谁/什么"（已知信息，叫主位），再说"怎么样/做了什么"（新信息，叫述位）。前一句的新信息，变成后一句的出发点，句子像接龙一样连起来，文章就不会跳脱。以本题范文第一段为例： 句子 主位（谁/什么） 述位（怎么样） 接龙关系 Dad understood at once. Dad understood at once 承接首句 father appeared A warm smile crossed his face. A warm smile crossed his face smile 承接 Dad 的反应 "Let's fix this together," he said. he (=Dad) said quietly 回到 Dad，说对话 The twins cheered up. The twins cheered up 新角色，受 Dad 影响 Jeff reboiled the porridge while Jenna fried the bread. Jeff / Jenna reboiled / fried 承接 cheered up 后的行动 The rich smell filled the kitchen. The rich smell filled the kitchen smell 承接做饭的结果 Dad winked and slipped back. Dad winked and slipped back 回到 Dad，为第二段铺垫 写作提示：写完一段后，检查每句话的开头是否和上一句有联系。如果某句开头突然跳到一个全新的东西，中间缺了过渡，就是"断龙"了，要补上。 三、两段写法指导 第一段写什么（回应首句1：失望时爸爸出现） 写作步骤 具体内容 ① 爸爸看懂 爸爸看到焦面包和乱糟糟的炉灶，立刻明白了——不用多说 ② 爸爸表态 微笑、挽袖子、说"我们一起搞定"——言语行为，给孩子安全感 ③ 孩子振作 双胞胎立刻高兴起来，收拾残局——情绪从失望转为希望 ④ 重新做饭 在爸爸指导下，Jeff 重新煮粥，Jenna 小心煎面包——分工合作 ⑤ 成功 这次顺利，早餐香味弥漫厨房——结果 ⑥ 衔接下段 爸爸眨眼示意，悄悄回房间，让双胞胎自己端上去——为第二段铺垫 逻辑链 爸爸出现 → 看懂 → 帮忙 → 收拾 → 重做成功 → 爸爸退场 → 端早餐 第二段写什么（回应首句2：端早餐上楼叫醒妈妈） 写作步骤 具体内容 ① 叫醒祝福 双胞胎齐声喊"母亲节快乐"——对话，直接点题 ② 妈妈反应 妈妈惊讶坐起，看到早餐眼睛发亮——神态描写 ③ 表达感恩 双胞胎小声说"我们用爱做的，谢谢您为我们做的一切"——对话，感恩 ④ 拥抱流泪 妈妈泪流满面，紧紧抱住两个孩子——情绪高潮 ⑤ 品尝赞美 妈妈尝了一口，说是吃过最好吃的早餐——对话，肯定孩子 ⑥ 升华主题 爱的温暖笼罩整个房间，一家人共享珍贵清晨——升华 逻辑链 叫醒祝福 → 妈妈惊讶 → 表达感恩 → 拥抱流泪 → 品尝赞美 → 爱的升华 四、原创范文（约168词，不含首句） Para 1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Seeing the black bread and messy stove, Dad understood at once what had happened. A warm smile crossed his face as he rolled up his sleeves. "Let's fix this together," he said quietly, his voice calm and steady. The twins cheered up and began cleaning the mess. With Dad's patient guidance, Jeff reboiled the porridge while Jenna fried the bread carefully. Soon the rich smell of breakfast filled the whole kitchen. Dad winked and slipped back to the bedroom, leaving them to carry out their surprise plan. Para 2 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. "Happy Mother's Day, Mum!" they shouted, their eyes sparkling with excitement. Mother sat up in surprise, her mouth wide open at the sight of the tray. "We made this with all our love," Jenna whispered, "thank you for everything." Tears welled up in her eyes as she pulled both children into a tight embrace. She took a bite of the toast and nodded eagerly. "This is the best breakfast I've ever had," she said, her voice trembling with emotion. A warm feeling of love settled over the room as the family enjoyed this precious morning together. （全文不含首句约168词；原文要素全呼应：black bread、messy stove、porridge、French toast、father appeared、disappointment、surprise plan、Mother's Day；覆盖六维，句式含简单句/复合句/非谓语/独立主格） 五、范文解析 1. 词汇升级（均为高中范围内词汇） 原文用词 升级表达 说明 looked around in disappointment stared at the mess in dismay dismay 表"沮丧"，比 disappointment 更具体 understood at once figured out immediately / saw what had happened figure out 更地道，"弄明白" a warm smile crossed his face a knowing smile spread across his face knowing 表"心照不宣的"，更有画面感 rolled up his sleeves rolled up his sleeves 固定搭配，"准备动手"，保留 cheered up brightened up / their faces lit up light up 表"面露喜色"，更生动 cleaning the mess tidying up the mess / clearing up tidy up 更常用，"收拾整理" rich smell delicious smell / inviting smell inviting 表"诱人的"，描写香味更准确 winked and slipped back gave a knowing wink and slipped away give a wink 比 wink 作动词更自然 2. 长难句解析 句1：Seeing the black bread and messy stove, Dad understood at once what had happened. • 句型：非谓语动词作原因状语 + 宾语从句 • 解析：Seeing the black bread and messy stove 是现在分词作原因状语，表"因为看到了焦面包和乱糟糟的炉灶"；what had happened 是宾语从句，作 understood 的宾语，"发生了什么"。一句话同时交代了原因（看到乱象）和结果（爸爸明白了），句式紧凑。 句2："Let's fix this together," he said quietly, his voice calm and steady. • 句型：直接引语 + 独立主格结构 • 解析：his voice calm and steady 是独立主格结构（名词 + 形容词），表"他的声音平静而坚定"，与主句主语 he 不一致，故用独立主格。该结构同时描写了说话内容（对话）和说话状态（calm and steady），比分开写两句更紧凑。 句3：With Dad's patient guidance, Jeff reboiled the porridge while Jenna fried the bread carefully. • 句型：with 复合结构 + 并列复合句 • 解析：With Dad's patient guidance 是 with 复合结构作状语，表"在爸爸耐心的指导下"；while 连接两个并列分句，表对比"Jeff 煮粥的同时 Jenna 煎面包"。一句话写出分工合作，体现双胞胎从失败到成功的转变。 句4：A warm feeling of love settled over the room as the family enjoyed this precious morning together. • 句型：时间状语从句 + 升华主题 • 解析：as 引导时间状语从句，表"当一家人一起享受这个珍贵的清晨时"；主句 A warm feeling of love settled over the room 是点睛之笔，"一种温暖的爱意笼罩着房间"，用环境描写烘托情感，点出感恩与亲情的主题。settle over 是高级搭配，"笼罩、弥漫"。 3. 原文要素呼应表（物尽其用） 原文要素 范文中的呼应 black bread（焦面包） 第一段"Seeing the black bread and messy stove" messy stove（乱糟糟的炉灶） 第一段"messy stove" porridge（粥） 第一段"Jeff reboiled the porridge" French toast / bread（吐司） 第一段"Jenna fried the bread" / 第二段"took a bite of the toast" father appeared（爸爸出现） 第一段首句承接，Dad 全程帮忙 disappointment（失望） 第一段首句承接，后转为 cheered up surprise（惊喜计划） 第一段"carry out their surprise plan" Mother's Day（母亲节） 第二段"Happy Mother's Day, Mum!" breakfast in bed（床上早餐） 第二段端早餐上楼叫醒妈妈 4. 故事六步走验证 步骤 范文中的位置 具体内容 ④ 转折评价 第一段前半 爸爸出现，微笑帮忙，双胞胎从失望转为振作 ⑤ 解决问题 第一段后半 收拾残局，重新煮粥煎面包，成功做好早餐 ⑥ 升华结尾 第二段全部 端给妈妈，祝福感恩，拥抱流泪，爱的温暖笼罩 六、背诵模板（填空版） 以下模板适用于"家庭亲情·感恩/惊喜"类读后续写，背诵后可直接套用。 第一段模板（失败后他人帮忙/解决问题场景） As [主角] looked around in [情绪], [帮助者] appeared. Seeing [乱象], [帮助者] understood at once. A [表情] crossed his face as he [动作]. "[对话]," he said, [独立主格表状态]. [主角] cheered up and began [动作]. With [帮助者]'s guidance, [分工动作1] while [分工动作2]. Soon [结果] filled the [地点]. [帮助者] winked and slipped away, leaving them to [计划]. 第二段模板（献礼/感恩/情感升华场景） [主角] carried [礼物] upstairs and woke [亲人] up. "[祝福语]!" they shouted, [独立主格表兴奋]. [亲人] sat up in surprise, [独立主格表惊讶]. "[表达爱意/感恩]," [主角] whispered. Tears welled up in [亲人]'s eyes as she [动作]. She took [动作] and [反应]. "[赞美]," she said, [独立主格表情绪]. A warm feeling of [情感] settled over the room as [升华场景]. 模板填空练习（用本题内容填空） 第一段： As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Seeing ________, Dad understood at once. A ________ crossed his face as he ________. "________," he said, his voice ________. The twins cheered up and began ________. With Dad's ________, Jeff ________ while Jenna ________. Soon ________ filled the ________. Dad winked and slipped back, leaving them to ________. 第二段： The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. "________!" they shouted, their eyes ________. Mother sat up in surprise, ________ at the sight of the tray. "________," Jenna whispered, "________." Tears welled up in her eyes as she ________. She took ________ and ________. "________," she said, her voice ________. A warm feeling of ________ settled over the room as ________. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $