Unit 1 People of Achievement 征文投稿（含学习地图）（单元同步写作讲义）高中英语人教版选择性必修第一册

本高中英语讲义聚焦“卓有成就的人”主题征文写作，系统构建从结构框架（标题、开头、主体、结尾）到内容要点（人物成就、品质、启发）的学习支架，通过核心词汇表（如achievement, committed）、句型模板（含非限制性定语从句）及典例精练的分步指导，帮助学生实现单元词汇迁移与写作能力提升。 该资料亮点在于分层设计（简洁版与高分版模板）和多主题拓展练习（校园榜样、科学精神等），结合屠呦呦等实例训练语言运用，提升语言能力。通过分析人物品质与启发培养思维品质，评价表的自评互评功能助力学生反思，发展学习能力。课中辅助教师系统教学，课后帮助学生查漏补缺，强化写作技能。

Unit 1 People of Achievement｜征文投稿写作学习地图 主题 体裁 建议词数 核心任务 卓有成就的人 征文投稿 80词左右 介绍榜样人物的成就与精神品质，并写出个人启发 一、本讲义内容导航 模块 学什么 帮你解决什么问题 01 写作主题 明确对象、任务、重点与语气 知道写什么、写给谁 02 写作框架 开头亮明观点、主体论证、结尾总结 搭出完整论证结构 03 写作词汇 主题词汇与实用表达 积累可直接使用的表达 04 写作句型 表达观点、举例论证的常用句式 把观点写得有理有据 05 写作模板 标准版与提升版结构 快速组织完整征文 06 典例精练 结合真实情境练习方法 把方法落实到任务中 07 写作指导 审题、谋篇与表达方法 解决写什么、怎么写 08 参考范文 学习结构、语言与表达逻辑 借鉴完整成篇表达 09 拓展练习 不同情境下的迁移写作 形成独立写作能力 10 写作评价表 对照标准自查、修改、提升 发现问题并完成改进 二、本单元5个拓展练习练什么？ 练习主题 写作任务 重点训练 练习1｜科学家成就投稿 人与社会·科学家 人物成就叙述与品质提炼 练习2｜平凡榜样投稿 人与自我·乐于助人 平凡人事例刻画与感悟升华 练习3｜时代楷模投稿 人与社会·政治家 楷模事迹梳理与敬意表达 练习4｜艺术家匠心投稿 人与社会·艺术家 艺术成就评价与匠心提炼 练习5｜体育名人投稿 人与社会·体育名人 赛场叙事与奋斗品质总结 三、系列训练亮点与学习路径 教材同步 结构完整 表达可用 练习分层 评价促改 紧扣单元主题与体裁 从审题到修改形成闭环 词汇句型模板可迁移 五类情境训练不重复 对照标准自查修改 学习路径 定任务 → 明信息 → 学描写 → 写成篇 → 完成练习 → 修改提升 Unit 1 People of Achievement（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题：卓有成就的人 应用文体裁：征文投稿 写作任务：为校英文报"人物榜样"主题征文写一篇投稿，介绍人物的成就与精神品质。 本讲义重点训练： 1. 介绍人物成就与品质。 2. 用具体事例支撑观点。 3. 用非限制性定语从句补充说明人物影响。 4. 把单元词汇自然迁移到写作中。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 开头（1—2句） 引入人物或对象，并给出总体评价，说明其为什么值得尊敬。 主体（3—4句） 展开人物主要成就、具体事例和精神品质，结合 commitment, objective attitude 等表达。 结尾（1—2句） 总结启发，呼应主题，写出个人计划或行动。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 achievement 成就 概括人物贡献 crucial 至关重要的 强调品质或发现的重要性 vital 必不可少的 描述努力、坚持或合作的重要性 committed 坚定的，尽心尽力的 描写人物品质 objective 客观的 描述科学态度 evaluate 评估 描述分析问题 obtain 获得 描述取得成果 acknowledge 承认，感谢 表达社会认可 remarkable 非凡的 评价人物成就 gradually 逐渐地 描述人物的成长过程 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 commit oneself to 致力于 描写长期投入 insist on 坚持 描写不放弃 draw a conclusion 得出结论 描述研究过程 take up a position 担任职位 介绍人物经历 sum up 总结 结尾概括启发 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空（用所给短语的适当形式填空） 1. Tu Youyou _______(commit oneself to) finding a treatment for malaria. 2. Her discovery was _______(vital) to millions of patients. 3. A good scientist should keep a(n) _______(objective) attitude. 4. After many experiments, the team finally _______(obtain) useful results. 5. We should learn from people with great _______(achievement). 参考答案： 1. 【答案】commits herself to 【解析】主语 Tu Youyou 为第三人称单数，commit oneself to 用一般现在时，oneself 变为 herself。 2. 【答案】vital 【解析】be vital to 表示"对……至关重要"。 3. 【答案】objective 【解析】attitude 前用形容词 objective，表示"客观的态度"。 4. 【答案】obtained 【解析】finally 提示动作结果，句子叙述过去的实验过程，obtain 用过去式 obtained。 5. 【答案】achievements 【解析】great 后用名词 achievements，表示"成就"。 句子翻译（将下列句子翻译成英文） 1. 屠呦呦把自己的一生投入到医学研究中。（commit oneself to） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 她客观的态度和持续的努力帮助她取得了非凡成就。（objective; remarkable） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 从她的故事中，我明白真正的成功来自责任和坚持。（achievement; commitment） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 我们所敬佩的科学家往往在成功之前经历过无数次失败。（who, admire） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 正是她对研究的坚持使她获得了重要的发现。（it, insist on） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考答案： 1. 【答案】Tu Youyou commits herself to medical research all her life. 【解析】翻译时注意 commit oneself to 的主谓一致和反身代词变化。 2. 【答案】Her objective attitude and continuous efforts helped her make remarkable achievements. 【解析】objective 和 remarkable 用作形容词修饰名词。 3. 【答案】From her story, I understand that true achievement comes from responsibility and commitment. 【解析】achievement 与 commitment 用名词形式表达抽象含义。 4. 【答案】The scientists who we admire often experienced countless failures before success. 【解析】考查定语从句：who we admire 修饰先行词 scientists，关系代词 who 在从句中作宾语，也可省略或用 that；countless failures 表示"无数次失败"。 5. 【答案】It was her insisting on the research that led to the important discovery. 【解析】考查强调句：It was + 强调部分 + that...；强调主语 her insisting on the research；lead to 表示"导致；带来"，符合语境。 四、写作句型 开头句 1. The person I admire most is _______, who has made remarkable contributions to _______. 我最敬佩的人是_______，他/她为_______作出了非凡贡献。 2. When it comes to people of achievement, _______ is the first person that comes to my mind. 谈到卓有成就的人，_______是我首先想到的人。 3. _______, whose commitment has inspired many people, is a true example for us. _______的奉献精神激励了许多人，是我们真正的榜样。 中间句 1. He / She committed himself / herself to _______, which was crucial to _______. 他/她致力于_______，这对_______至关重要。 2. Instead of giving up, he / she insisted on _______ and finally obtained _______. 他/她没有放弃，而是坚持_______，最终获得了_______。 3. With an objective and scientific attitude, he / she evaluated _______ again and again. 他/她以客观、科学的态度一次又一次评估_______。 4. What impresses me most is not only his / her achievement but also his / her passion for _______. 最打动我的不仅是他/她的成就，还有他/她对_______的热情。 结尾句 1. His / Her story teaches me that real achievement comes from commitment and hard work. 他/她的故事让我懂得，真正的成就来自投入和努力。 2. From him / her, I have learned to stay curious, objective and committed. 从他/她身上，我学会了保持好奇、客观和坚定。 3. In a word, people of achievement encourage us to become better versions of ourselves. 总之，卓有成就的人激励我们成为更好的自己。 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 _______(文章标题) When it comes to people of achievement, _______(人物) is the first person that comes to my mind. He / She is widely known for _______(主要成就). To begin with, he / she committed himself / herself to _______(事业或目标). Although he / she faced _______(困难), he / she never gave up. Besides, he / she always kept a(n) _______(品质) attitude and tried to _______(具体行动). Because of these efforts, he / she finally _______(结果或贡献). His / Her story teaches me that _______(启发). I hope I can learn from him / her and _______(自己的行动). 模板2：分层高分版 _______(文章标题) When it comes to people of achievement, _______(人物), who has made remarkable contributions to _______(领域), is the first person that comes to my mind. What impresses me most is his / her strong commitment to _______(事业或目标). Faced with _______(困难), he / she insisted on _______(行动), which was crucial to _______(积极结果). With an objective and scientific attitude, he / she kept evaluating _______(研究或任务) until he / she finally _______(成果). From his / her experience, I have learned that true achievement is built on passion, patience and responsibility. Inspired by him / her, I will _______(自己的行动). 六、典例精练 假定你是李华，你校英文报正在举办主题为 “The Person I Admire Most” 的征文活动。请你写一篇英文短文投稿，介绍一位你敬佩的人物。内容包括： 1. 人物简介； 2. 主要成就或事迹； 3. 你从他/她身上获得的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 The Person I Admire Most ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作指导 第一步 审题谋篇 项目 内容 体裁 征文投稿 对象 校英文报读者 写作目的 介绍榜样人物并表达启发 主题 卓有成就的人与个人成长 时态 一般现在时介绍人物品质，一般过去时介绍经历 人称 第三人称介绍人物，第一人称写个人启发 语气 正式、积极、有感染力 布局 标题居中；开头引入人物；主体写成就和品质；结尾写启发 第二步 要点拆解与表达 中文要点 英文表达 句式说明 我最敬佩的人是屠呦呦。 The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, who has made remarkable contributions to medicine. 用非限制性定语从句补充人物贡献。 她致力于寻找治疗疟疾的方法。 She committed herself to finding a treatment for malaria. 使用单元短语 commit oneself to。 她的坚持让我明白成就来自责任和努力。 Her story teaches me that achievement comes from responsibility and hard work. 用宾语从句表达启发。 第三步 句式升级 原句 升级句 仿写句 说明 Tu Youyou is a great scientist. Tu Youyou, who has saved millions of lives, is a great scientist. Yuan Longping, who devoted his life to rice research, is a great scientist. 用非限制性定语从句补充影响。 She did not give up. Faced with many difficulties, she still insisted on her research. Faced with repeated failures, he still stayed committed to his dream. 用非谓语结构增强表达。 I learned a lot from her. Her experience has taught me the value of commitment. His story has taught me the importance of an objective attitude. 用抽象名词提升表达。 第四步 同义替换 基础表达 升级表达 使用场景 great remarkable 评价人物成就 important crucial / vital 强调品质或发现的重要性 work hard at commit oneself to 描述长期投入 keep doing insist on doing 描述坚持 get obtain 描述获得成果 think about evaluate 描述客观分析 in the end finally / eventually 描述结果 参考范文 基础版范文 The Person I Admire Most The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a great scientist in China. She is well known for discovering artemisinin, which has helped save many people's lives. In her research, she met many difficulties, but she never gave up. She read a large number of old medical books and evaluated different methods carefully until she finally obtained a useful treatment for malaria. What I admire most is her strong sense of responsibility. Her story teaches me that real achievement comes from hard work and a committed heart, and I hope to learn from her and face challenges bravely. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 great remarkable 提升人物评价 never gave up insisted on her research 强化坚持品质 useful vital 强调成果重要性 hard work continuous efforts 表达持续努力 face challenges bravely stay committed when facing challenges 呼应单元主题 提高版范文 The Person I Admire Most The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a remarkable scientist in China. She is widely known for discovering artemisinin, which has proved vital in saving many people's lives. During her research, she faced numerous difficulties, but she insisted on her research instead of giving up. With an objective attitude, she evaluated different methods and finally obtained a useful treatment for malaria. What I admire most is not only her achievement but also her continuous efforts. Her story teaches me that true success comes from passion and responsibility. Inspired by her, I will stay committed when facing challenges. 范文点评 本文紧扣人物榜样主题，使用 remarkable, vital, insist on, commit 等单元重点表达，并通过非限制性定语从句增强句式层次，结构清楚、感染力强。 七、拓展练习 练习1：科学家成就主题投稿（人与社会-科学家） 你校英文报正在举办主题为 “A Scientist Around Us” 的征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位你敬仰的科学家，呈现其成就并阐释其精神品质。内容包括： 1. 科学家简介； 2. 主要成就； 3. 值得学习的品质。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Scientist Around Us ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 本文属于征文投稿，写作对象是校英文报读者，写作目的在于介绍科学家并阐释其精神品质。开头点明人物与总体评价；主体写主要成就与代表品质；结尾总结启发。可使用 committed, vital, insist on 等表达，并用定语从句补充人物影响。 基础版范文 A Scientist Around Us The scientist I admire most is Yuan Longping, the father of hybrid rice. He devoted his whole life to rice research. He developed hybrid rice that greatly increased rice output. Thanks to his work, millions of people have enough food to eat. Even in his nineties, he still worked in the rice fields and tried to make his dream come true. From him, I have learned that real achievement comes from lifelong commitment. I will study hard and face difficulties bravely like him. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 admire most respect most deeply 表达敬意更有分量 devoted his whole life to committed himself to 呼应单元短语 greatly increased remarkably increased 用单元词评价成就 have enough food to eat are free from hunger 表达粮食安全更准确 worked in the rice fields stayed committed to field research 突出科学家的坚守 提高版范文 A Scientist Around Us The scientist I respect most deeply is Yuan Longping, the father of hybrid rice, whose work has changed the world. He committed himself to rice research all his life. He developed hybrid rice that remarkably increased rice output. Thanks to his efforts, millions of people are free from hunger today. Even in his nineties, he still stayed committed to field research, chasing his dream of rice as tall as sorghum. From him, I have learned that real achievement comes from lifelong commitment. Inspired by him, I will face difficulties bravely. 练习2：平凡榜样主题投稿（人与自我-乐于助人） 你校英文报正在征集主题为 “Great from the Ordinary” 的文章。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍身边默默奉献的平凡榜样，诠释伟大出自平凡。内容包括： 1. 人物身份； 2. 具体事迹； 3. 对你的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Great from the Ordinary ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 本文属于征文投稿，写作对象是校英文报读者，写作目的在于刻画平凡人物并诠释伟大出自平凡。开头点出"平凡中见伟大"的观点；主体用具体事例刻画人物；结尾升华对成就的理解。可使用 vital, committed, gradually 等表达，注意细节描写。 基础版范文 Great from the Ordinary When we talk about great people, we often think of famous names. However, ordinary people can also show a great spirit. The person I want to write about is our school cleaner. Every morning, she arrives early and makes the classrooms clean before we come. During rainy days, she always puts warning signs in the halls to keep us safe. Her work seems simple, but it is necessary for our school life. She teaches me that achievement is not only about prizes or fame. It can also be found in quiet and responsible work. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 famous names household names 表达家喻户晓更地道 necessary vital 强调重要性用单元词 keep us safe protect us from danger 具体化作用 simple ordinary yet remarkable 形成对比，突出主题 responsible work committed work 呼应人物品质 提高版范文 Great from the Ordinary When we talk about great people, we often think of household names. However, ordinary people can also show a remarkable spirit. The person I want to write about is our school cleaner, who arrives early every morning and makes the classrooms clean before we come. During rainy days, she always puts warning signs in the halls to protect us from danger. Her work seems ordinary yet remarkable, for it is vital to our school life. She teaches me that achievement is not only about prizes or fame. It can also be found in quiet and committed work. 练习3：时代楷模主题投稿（人与社会-政治家） 你校英文报正在征集 “Young People and Responsibility” 主题文章。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位鞠躬尽瘁的时代楷模，讲述其事迹并表达敬意。内容包括： 1. 楷模简介； 2. 主要事迹； 3. 你的敬意与行动计划。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Young People and Responsibility ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 本文属于征文投稿，写作对象是校英文报读者，写作目的在于讲述时代楷模事迹并表达敬意。开头点明人物身份与责任担当；主体梳理主要事迹；结尾表达敬意并联系自身计划。可使用 commit oneself to, vital, take up a position 等表达。 基础版范文 Young People and Responsibility Zhang Guimei is a great teacher who has devoted herself to girls' education in the mountains. In 2008, she took up a position as the headmaster of a free high school for girls. For years, she got up early and visited students' homes one by one. Although her health became worse and worse, she never stopped. More than 2,000 girls have entered university because of her. Her story teaches me that responsibility means giving. As a student, I will study hard and try to help people around me. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 a great teacher a committed educator 用单元词描写品质 devoted herself to committed herself to 呼应单元短语 got up early rose before dawn 描写辛劳更有画面感 never stopped insisted on her mission 强化坚守的表达 because of her thanks to her commitment 突出贡献来源 提高版范文 Young People and Responsibility Zhang Guimei is a committed educator who has devoted herself to girls' education in the mountains. In 2008, she took up a position as the headmaster of a free high school for girls. For years, she rose before dawn and visited students' homes one by one. Although her health became worse and worse, she insisted on her mission. More than 2,000 girls have entered university thanks to her commitment. Her story teaches me that responsibility means giving. As a student, I will study hard and try to help people around me. 练习4：艺术家匠心主题投稿（人与社会-艺术家） 你校英文报正在举办 “Art and the Artist” 征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位德艺双馨的艺术家，呈现艺术追求并传递匠心精神。内容包括： 1. 艺术家简介； 2. 艺术成就； 3. 匠心精神的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Art and the Artist ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 本文属于征文投稿，写作对象是校英文报读者，写作目的在于呈现艺术追求并传递匠心精神。开头引入艺术家与领域；主体介绍艺术成就与匠心细节；结尾提炼精神启发。可使用 committed, obtain, gradually 等表达，并用定语从句补充说明。 基础版范文 Art and the Artist The artist I admire most is Qi Baishi, a great Chinese painter who was famous for painting shrimps. He began to learn painting seriously in his late fifties. Day after day, he observed shrimps in the water and practised painting them. Gradually, the shrimps in his paintings seemed to swim on the paper. His works are loved by people all over the world. His story teaches me that success is built on daily practice. I will keep this patient heart in my study and never give up easily. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 a great Chinese painter a remarkable Chinese painter 用单元词评价成就 famous for widely acknowledged for 表达社会认可 practised painting them evaluated every stroke carefully 突出匠心细节 seemed to swim on the paper came alive on the paper 表达更生动 never give up easily insist on what I love 呼应单元短语 提高版范文 Art and the Artist The artist I admire most is Qi Baishi, a remarkable Chinese painter who was widely acknowledged for painting shrimps. He began to learn painting seriously in his late fifties. Day after day, he observed shrimps in the water and evaluated every stroke carefully. Gradually, the shrimps in his paintings came alive on the paper. His works, which are full of life, are loved by people all over the world. His story teaches me that success is built on daily practice. I will insist on what I love and never give up easily. 练习5：体育名人主题投稿（人与社会-体育名人） 你校英文报正在征集 “Never Say Die” 主题文章。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位永不言弃的运动员，讲述赛场人生并提炼奋斗品质。内容包括： 1. 运动员简介； 2. 赛场经历； 3. 奋斗品质的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Never Say Die ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 本文属于征文投稿，写作对象是校英文报读者，写作目的在于讲述运动员的赛场人生并提炼奋斗品质。开头点明人物与"永不言弃"主题；主体叙述挫折与坚持；结尾总结品质启发。可使用 vital, commit oneself to, insist on 等表达，注意叙事时态。 基础版范文 Never Say Die The athlete I admire most is Su Bingtian, a Chinese sprinter who never says die. In the Tokyo Olympics, he became the first Asian-born sprinter to run into the 100-meter final in nearly a century. Behind this success were years of hard training. He once changed his starting foot at the age of 28, which meant starting all over again. But he kept going and finally made history. His story teaches me that limits are made to be broken. I will commit myself to my dream and never give up. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 admire most respect most 表达敬意更庄重 years of hard training years of committed training 用单元词概括付出 starting all over again rebuilding himself from zero 突出挑战之大 kept going insisted on breaking his limits 强化永不言弃主题 made history obtained a historic breakthrough 用单元词评价成果 提高版范文 Never Say Die The athlete I respect most is Su Bingtian, a Chinese sprinter who never says die. In the Tokyo Olympics, he became the first Asian-born sprinter to run into the 100-meter final in nearly a century. Behind this success were years of committed training. He once changed his starting foot at the age of 28, which meant rebuilding himself from zero. But he insisted on breaking his limits and finally obtained a historic breakthrough. His story teaches me that limits are made to be broken. I will commit myself to my dream and never give up. 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 三段结构清楚，文章标题居中，开头、主体、结尾安排合理。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 覆盖题目要点，人物事例具体，启发或观点明确。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能使用本单元核心词汇和目标句式，表达准确连贯。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 书写清楚，拼写、大小写和标点规范。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价：结构、内容、语言、书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分 15分；13-15 优秀；10-12 达标；7-9 需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 1 People of Achievement｜征文投稿写作学习地图 主题 体裁 建议词数 核心任务 卓有成就的人 征文投稿 80词左右 介绍榜样人物的成就与精神品质，并写出个人启发 一、本讲义内容导航 模块 学什么 帮你解决什么问题 01 写作主题 明确对象、任务、重点与语气 知道写什么、写给谁 02 写作框架 开头亮明观点、主体论证、结尾总结 搭出完整论证结构 03 写作词汇 主题词汇与实用表达 积累可直接使用的表达 04 写作句型 表达观点、举例论证的常用句式 把观点写得有理有据 05 写作模板 标准版与提升版结构 快速组织完整征文 06 典例精练 结合真实情境练习方法 把方法落实到任务中 07 写作指导 审题、谋篇与表达方法 解决写什么、怎么写 08 参考范文 学习结构、语言与表达逻辑 借鉴完整成篇表达 09 拓展练习 不同情境下的迁移写作 形成独立写作能力 10 写作评价表 对照标准自查、修改、提升 发现问题并完成改进 二、本单元5个拓展练习练什么？ 练习主题 写作任务 重点训练 练习1｜科学家成就投稿 人与社会·科学家 人物成就叙述与品质提炼 练习2｜平凡榜样投稿 人与自我·乐于助人 平凡人事例刻画与感悟升华 练习3｜时代楷模投稿 人与社会·政治家 楷模事迹梳理与敬意表达 练习4｜艺术家匠心投稿 人与社会·艺术家 艺术成就评价与匠心提炼 练习5｜体育名人投稿 人与社会·体育名人 赛场叙事与奋斗品质总结 三、系列训练亮点与学习路径 教材同步 结构完整 表达可用 练习分层 评价促改 紧扣单元主题与体裁 从审题到修改形成闭环 词汇句型模板可迁移 五类情境训练不重复 对照标准自查修改 学习路径 定任务 → 明信息 → 学描写 → 写成篇 → 完成练习 → 修改提升 Unit 1 People of Achievement（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题：卓有成就的人 应用文体裁：征文投稿 写作任务：为校英文报"人物榜样"主题征文写一篇投稿，介绍人物的成就与精神品质。 本讲义重点训练： 1. 介绍人物成就与品质。 2. 用具体事例支撑观点。 3. 用非限制性定语从句补充说明人物影响。 4. 把单元词汇自然迁移到写作中。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 开头（1—2句） 引入人物或对象，并给出总体评价，说明其为什么值得尊敬。 主体（3—4句） 展开人物主要成就、具体事例和精神品质，结合 commitment, objective attitude 等表达。 结尾（1—2句） 总结启发，呼应主题，写出个人计划或行动。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 achievement 成就 概括人物贡献 crucial 至关重要的 强调品质或发现的重要性 vital 必不可少的 描述努力、坚持或合作的重要性 committed 坚定的，尽心尽力的 描写人物品质 objective 客观的 描述科学态度 evaluate 评估 描述分析问题 obtain 获得 描述取得成果 acknowledge 承认，感谢 表达社会认可 remarkable 非凡的 评价人物成就 gradually 逐渐地 描述人物的成长过程 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 commit oneself to 致力于 描写长期投入 insist on 坚持 描写不放弃 draw a conclusion 得出结论 描述研究过程 take up a position 担任职位 介绍人物经历 sum up 总结 结尾概括启发 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空（用所给短语的适当形式填空） 1. Tu Youyou _______(commit oneself to) finding a treatment for malaria. 2. Her discovery was _______(vital) to millions of patients. 3. A good scientist should keep a(n) _______(objective) attitude. 4. After many experiments, the team finally _______(obtain) useful results. 5. We should learn from people with great _______(achievement). 句子翻译（将下列句子翻译成英文） 1. 屠呦呦把自己的一生投入到医学研究中。（commit oneself to） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 她客观的态度和持续的努力帮助她取得了非凡成就。（objective; remarkable） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 从她的故事中，我明白真正的成功来自责任和坚持。（achievement; commitment） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 我们所敬佩的科学家往往在成功之前经历过无数次失败。（who, admire） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 5. 正是她对研究的坚持使她获得了重要的发现。（it, insist on） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 四、写作句型 开头句 1. The person I admire most is _______, who has made remarkable contributions to _______. 我最敬佩的人是_______，他/她为_______作出了非凡贡献。 2. When it comes to people of achievement, _______ is the first person that comes to my mind. 谈到卓有成就的人，_______是我首先想到的人。 3. _______, whose commitment has inspired many people, is a true example for us. _______的奉献精神激励了许多人，是我们真正的榜样。 中间句 1. He / She committed himself / herself to _______, which was crucial to _______. 他/她致力于_______，这对_______至关重要。 2. Instead of giving up, he / she insisted on _______ and finally obtained _______. 他/她没有放弃，而是坚持_______，最终获得了_______。 3. With an objective and scientific attitude, he / she evaluated _______ again and again. 他/她以客观、科学的态度一次又一次评估_______。 4. What impresses me most is not only his / her achievement but also his / her passion for _______. 最打动我的不仅是他/她的成就，还有他/她对_______的热情。 结尾句 1. His / Her story teaches me that real achievement comes from commitment and hard work. 他/她的故事让我懂得，真正的成就来自投入和努力。 2. From him / her, I have learned to stay curious, objective and committed. 从他/她身上，我学会了保持好奇、客观和坚定。 3. In a word, people of achievement encourage us to become better versions of ourselves. 总之，卓有成就的人激励我们成为更好的自己。 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 _______(文章标题) When it comes to people of achievement, _______(人物) is the first person that comes to my mind. He / She is widely known for _______(主要成就). To begin with, he / she committed himself / herself to _______(事业或目标). Although he / she faced _______(困难), he / she never gave up. Besides, he / she always kept a(n) _______(品质) attitude and tried to _______(具体行动). Because of these efforts, he / she finally _______(结果或贡献). His / Her story teaches me that _______(启发). I hope I can learn from him / her and _______(自己的行动). 模板2：分层高分版 _______(文章标题) When it comes to people of achievement, _______(人物), who has made remarkable contributions to _______(领域), is the first person that comes to my mind. What impresses me most is his / her strong commitment to _______(事业或目标). Faced with _______(困难), he / she insisted on _______(行动), which was crucial to _______(积极结果). With an objective and scientific attitude, he / she kept evaluating _______(研究或任务) until he / she finally _______(成果). From his / her experience, I have learned that true achievement is built on passion, patience and responsibility. Inspired by him / her, I will _______(自己的行动). 六、典例精练 假定你是李华，你校英文报正在举办主题为 “The Person I Admire Most” 的征文活动。请你写一篇英文短文投稿，介绍一位你敬佩的人物。内容包括： 1. 人物简介； 2. 主要成就或事迹； 3. 你从他/她身上获得的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 The Person I Admire Most ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 七、拓展练习 练习1：科学家成就主题投稿（人与社会-科学家） 你校英文报正在举办主题为 “A Scientist Around Us” 的征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位你敬仰的科学家，呈现其成就并阐释其精神品质。内容包括： 1. 科学家简介； 2. 主要成就； 3. 值得学习的品质。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 A Scientist Around Us ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习2：平凡榜样主题投稿（人与自我-乐于助人） 你校英文报正在征集主题为 “Great from the Ordinary” 的文章。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍身边默默奉献的平凡榜样，诠释伟大出自平凡。内容包括： 1. 人物身份； 2. 具体事迹； 3. 对你的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Great from the Ordinary ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习3：时代楷模主题投稿（人与社会-政治家） 你校英文报正在征集 “Young People and Responsibility” 主题文章。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位鞠躬尽瘁的时代楷模，讲述其事迹并表达敬意。内容包括： 1. 楷模简介； 2. 主要事迹； 3. 你的敬意与行动计划。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Young People and Responsibility ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习4：艺术家匠心主题投稿（人与社会-艺术家） 你校英文报正在举办 “Art and the Artist” 征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位德艺双馨的艺术家，呈现艺术追求并传递匠心精神。内容包括： 1. 艺术家简介； 2. 艺术成就； 3. 匠心精神的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Art and the Artist ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习5：体育名人主题投稿（人与社会-体育名人） 你校英文报正在征集 “Never Say Die” 主题文章。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位永不言弃的运动员，讲述赛场人生并提炼奋斗品质。内容包括： 1. 运动员简介； 2. 赛场经历； 3. 奋斗品质的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右。 2. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Never Say Die ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 三段结构清楚，文章标题居中，开头、主体、结尾安排合理。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 覆盖题目要点，人物事例具体，启发或观点明确。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能使用本单元核心词汇和目标句式，表达准确连贯。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 书写清楚，拼写、大小写和标点规范。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价：结构、内容、语言、书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分 15分；13-15 优秀；10-12 达标；7-9 需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $