Unit 1 People of Achievement 征文投稿（单元同步写作讲义）高中人教版选择性必修第一册

本高中英语讲义聚焦“卓有成就的人”主题征文写作，系统构建从结构框架（标题、开头、主体、结尾）到内容要点（人物成就、品质、启发）的学习支架，通过核心词汇表（如achievement, committed）、句型模板（含非限制性定语从句）及典例精练的分步指导，帮助学生实现单元词汇迁移与写作能力提升。 该资料亮点在于分层设计（简洁版与高分版模板）和多主题拓展练习（校园榜样、科学精神等），结合屠呦呦等实例训练语言运用，提升语言能力。通过分析人物品质与启发培养思维品质，评价表的自评互评功能助力学生反思，发展学习能力。课中辅助教师系统教学，课后帮助学生查漏补缺，强化写作技能。

Unit 1 People of Achievement 征文投稿（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题：卓有成就的人 应用文体裁：征文投稿 写作任务：介绍榜样人物，表达人物成就、精神品质和个人启发。 本讲义重点训练： 1. 介绍人物成就与品质。 2. 用具体事例支撑观点。 3. 用非限制性定语从句补充说明人物影响。 4. 把单元词汇自然迁移到写作中。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 标题 标题居中，点明人物或精神主题，如 A Person I Admire / The Power of Commitment。标题不计入正文。 开头（1句） 引入人物或对象，并给出总体评价，说明其为什么值得尊敬。 主体（3—4句） 展开人物主要成就、具体事例和精神品质，结合 commitment, objective attitude 等表达。 结尾（1—2句） 总结启发，呼应主题，写出个人计划或行动。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 achievement 成就 概括人物贡献 crucial 至关重要的 强调品质或发现的重要性 vital 必不可少的 描述努力、坚持或合作的重要性 committed 坚定的，尽心尽力的 描写人物品质 objective 客观的 描述科学态度 evaluate 评估 描述分析问题 obtain 获得 描述取得成果 acknowledge 承认，感谢 表达社会认可 scientific 科学的 描述方法或精神 remarkable 非凡的 评价人物成就 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 commit oneself to 致力于 描写长期投入 insist on 坚持 描写不放弃 draw a conclusion 得出结论 描述研究过程 take up a position 担任职位 介绍人物经历 sum up 总结 结尾概括启发 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空 1. Tu Youyou _______(致力于) finding a treatment for malaria.（commit oneself to） 2. Her discovery was _______(至关重要的) to millions of patients.（vital） 3. A good scientist should keep a(n) _______(客观的) attitude.（objective） 4. After many experiments, the team finally _______(获得) useful results.（obtain） 5. We should learn from people with great _______(成就).（achievement） 句子翻译 1. 屠呦呦把自己的一生投入到医学研究中。（commit oneself to） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 她客观的态度和持续的努力帮助她取得了非凡成就。（objective; remarkable） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 从她的故事中，我明白真正的成功来自责任和坚持。（achievement; commitment） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 四、写作句型 开头句 1. The person I admire most is _______, who has made remarkable contributions to _______. 我最敬佩的人是_______，他/她为_______作出了非凡贡献。 2. When it comes to people of achievement, _______ is the first person that comes to my mind. 谈到卓有成就的人，_______是我首先想到的人。 3. _______, whose commitment has inspired many people, is a true example for us. _______的奉献精神激励了许多人，是我们真正的榜样。 中间句 1. He / She committed himself / herself to _______, which was crucial to _______. 他/她致力于_______，这对_______至关重要。 2. Instead of giving up, he / she insisted on _______ and finally obtained _______. 他/她没有放弃，而是坚持_______，最终获得了_______。 3. With an objective and scientific attitude, he / she evaluated _______ again and again. 他/她以客观、科学的态度一次又一次评估_______。 4. What impresses me most is not only his / her achievement but also his / her passion for _______. 最打动我的不仅是他/她的成就，还有他/她对_______的热情。 结尾句 1. His / Her story teaches me that real achievement comes from commitment and hard work. 他/她的故事让我懂得，真正的成就来自投入和努力。 2. From him / her, I have learned to stay curious, objective and committed. 从他/她身上，我学会了保持好奇、客观和坚定。 3. In a word, people of achievement encourage us to become better versions of ourselves. 总之，卓有成就的人激励我们成为更好的自己。 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 _______(文章标题) When it comes to people of achievement, _______(人物) is the first person that comes to my mind. He / She is widely known for _______(主要成就). To begin with, he / she committed himself / herself to _______(事业或目标). Although he / she faced _______(困难), he / she never gave up. Besides, he / she always kept a(n) _______(品质) attitude and tried to _______(具体行动). Because of these efforts, he / she finally _______(结果或贡献). His / Her story teaches me that _______(启发). I hope I can learn from him / her and _______(自己的行动). 模板2：分层高分版 _______(文章标题) When it comes to people of achievement, _______(人物), who has made remarkable contributions to _______(领域), is the first person that comes to my mind. What impresses me most is his / her strong commitment to _______(事业或目标). Faced with _______(困难), he / she insisted on _______(行动), which was crucial to _______(积极结果). With an objective and scientific attitude, he / she kept evaluating _______(研究或任务) until he / she finally _______(成果). From his / her experience, I have learned that true achievement is built on passion, patience and responsibility. Inspired by him / her, I will _______(自己的行动). 六、典例精练 假定你是李华，你校英文报正在举办主题为 “The Person I Admire Most” 的征文活动。请你写一篇英文短文投稿，介绍一位你敬佩的人物。内容包括： 1. 人物简介； 2. 主要成就或事迹； 3. 你从他/她身上获得的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80词左右； 2. 题目已给出，不计入总词数。 The Person I Admire Most ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作指导 第一步 审题谋篇 项目 内容 体裁 征文投稿 对象 校英文报读者 写作目的 介绍榜样人物并表达启发 主题 卓有成就的人与个人成长 时态 一般现在时介绍人物品质，一般过去时介绍经历 人称 第三人称介绍人物，第一人称写个人启发 语气 正式、积极、有感染力 布局 标题居中；开头引入人物；主体写成就和品质；结尾写启发 第二步 要点拆解与表达 中文要点 英文表达 句式说明 我最敬佩的人是屠呦呦。 The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, who has made remarkable contributions to medicine. 用非限制性定语从句补充人物贡献。 她致力于寻找治疗疟疾的方法。 She committed herself to finding a treatment for malaria. 使用单元短语 commit oneself to。 她的坚持让我明白成就来自责任和努力。 Her story teaches me that achievement comes from responsibility and hard work. 用宾语从句表达启发。 第三步 句式升级 原句 升级句 仿写句 说明 Tu Youyou is a great scientist. Tu Youyou, who has saved millions of lives, is a great scientist. Yuan Longping, who devoted his life to rice research, is a great scientist. 用非限制性定语从句补充影响。 She did not give up. Faced with many difficulties, she still insisted on her research. Faced with repeated failures, he still stayed committed to his dream. 用非谓语结构增强表达。 I learned a lot from her. Her experience has taught me the value of commitment. His story has taught me the importance of an objective attitude. 用抽象名词提升表达。 第四步 同义替换 普通表达 升级表达 使用场景 great remarkable 评价人物成就 important crucial / vital 强调品质或发现的重要性 work hard at commit oneself to 描述长期投入 keep doing insist on doing 描述坚持 get obtain 描述获得成果 think about evaluate 描述客观分析 in the end finally / eventually 描述结果 七、拓展练习 练习1：校园榜样人物投稿 你校英文报正在征集主题为 “A Role Model Around Me” 的文章。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍你身边的一位榜样人物。内容包括： 1. 人物身份； 2. 具体事迹； 3. 对你的启发。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 A Role Model Around Me ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习2：科学精神主题投稿 你校英文公众号正在举办 “The Spirit of Science” 征文活动。请你写一篇英文短文投稿。内容包括： 1. 你理解的科学精神； 2. 一个体现科学精神的人或事； 3. 对高中生的启发。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 The Spirit of Science ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习3：青年责任主题投稿 你校英文报正在征集 “Young People and Responsibility” 主题文章。请你写一篇短文投稿。内容包括： 1. 你对青年责任的理解； 2. 一个榜样人物或具体行动； 3. 你的行动计划。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 Young People and Responsibility ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习4：普通劳动者主题投稿 你校英文报正在举办 “Ordinary People, Great Spirit” 征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位普通但值得尊敬的人。内容包括： 1. 人物身份； 2. 让你感动的事； 3. 你对“成就”的新理解。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 Ordinary People, Great Spirit ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 练习5：AI时代的榜样力量投稿 你校英文公众号正在征集 “Role Models in the Age of AI” 主题文章。请你写一篇短文投稿。内容包括： 1. AI 时代为什么仍需要榜样； 2. 你心中的一个榜样品质； 3. 你将如何向榜样学习。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 Role Models in the Age of AI ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 三段结构清楚，文章标题居中，开头、主体、结尾安排合理。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 覆盖题目要点，人物事例具体，启发或观点明确。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能使用本单元核心词汇和目标句式，表达准确连贯。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 书写清楚，拼写、大小写和标点规范。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价：结构、内容、语言、书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分 15分；13-15 优秀；10-12 达标；7-9 需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 1 People of Achievement 征文投稿（单元同步写作讲义） 一、写作主题 单元主题：卓有成就的人 应用文体裁：征文投稿 写作任务：介绍榜样人物，表达人物成就、精神品质和个人启发。 本讲义重点训练： 1. 介绍人物成就与品质。 2. 用具体事例支撑观点。 3. 用非限制性定语从句补充说明人物影响。 4. 把单元词汇自然迁移到写作中。 二、写作框架 部分 内容要点 标题 标题居中，点明人物或精神主题，如 A Person I Admire / The Power of Commitment。标题不计入正文。 开头（1句） 引入人物或对象，并给出总体评价，说明其为什么值得尊敬。 主体（3—4句） 展开人物主要成就、具体事例和精神品质，结合 commitment, objective attitude 等表达。 结尾（1—2句） 总结启发，呼应主题，写出个人计划或行动。 三、写作词汇 核心单词 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 achievement 成就 概括人物贡献 crucial 至关重要的 强调品质或发现的重要性 vital 必不可少的 描述努力、坚持或合作的重要性 committed 坚定的，尽心尽力的 描写人物品质 objective 客观的 描述科学态度 evaluate 评估 描述分析问题 obtain 获得 描述取得成果 acknowledge 承认，感谢 表达社会认可 scientific 科学的 描述方法或精神 remarkable 非凡的 评价人物成就 主题短语 英文表达 中文释义 写作用途 commit oneself to 致力于 描写长期投入 insist on 坚持 描写不放弃 draw a conclusion 得出结论 描述研究过程 take up a position 担任职位 介绍人物经历 sum up 总结 结尾概括启发 核心词汇写作运用 词汇填空 1. Tu Youyou _______(致力于) finding a treatment for malaria.（commit oneself to） 2. Her discovery was _______(至关重要的) to millions of patients.（vital） 3. A good scientist should keep a(n) _______(客观的) attitude.（objective） 4. After many experiments, the team finally _______(获得) useful results.（obtain） 5. We should learn from people with great _______(成就).（achievement） 1. 【答案】commits herself to 【解析】主语 Tu Youyou 为第三人称单数，commit oneself to 用一般现在时，oneself 变为 herself。 2. 【答案】vital 【解析】be vital to 表示“对……至关重要”。 3. 【答案】objective 【解析】attitude 前用形容词 objective，表示“客观的态度”。 4. 【答案】obtained 【解析】finally 提示动作结果，句子叙述过去的实验过程，obtain 用过去式 obtained。 5. 【答案】achievements 【解析】great 后用名词 achievements，表示“成就”。 句子翻译 1. 屠呦呦把自己的一生投入到医学研究中。（commit oneself to） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2. 她客观的态度和持续的努力帮助她取得了非凡成就。（objective; remarkable） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 从她的故事中，我明白真正的成功来自责任和坚持。（achievement; commitment） ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 1. 【答案】Tu Youyou commits herself to medical research all her life. 【解析】翻译时注意 commit oneself to 的主谓一致和反身代词变化。 2. 【答案】Her objective attitude and continuous efforts helped her make remarkable achievements. 【解析】objective 和 remarkable 用作形容词修饰名词。 3. 【答案】From her story, I understand that true achievement comes from responsibility and commitment. 【解析】achievement 与 commitment 用名词形式表达抽象含义。 四、写作句型 开头句 1. The person I admire most is _______, who has made remarkable contributions to _______. 我最敬佩的人是_______，他/她为_______作出了非凡贡献。 2. When it comes to people of achievement, _______ is the first person that comes to my mind. 谈到卓有成就的人，_______是我首先想到的人。 3. _______, whose commitment has inspired many people, is a true example for us. _______的奉献精神激励了许多人，是我们真正的榜样。 中间句 1. He / She committed himself / herself to _______, which was crucial to _______. 他/她致力于_______，这对_______至关重要。 2. Instead of giving up, he / she insisted on _______ and finally obtained _______. 他/她没有放弃，而是坚持_______，最终获得了_______。 3. With an objective and scientific attitude, he / she evaluated _______ again and again. 他/她以客观、科学的态度一次又一次评估_______。 4. What impresses me most is not only his / her achievement but also his / her passion for _______. 最打动我的不仅是他/她的成就，还有他/她对_______的热情。 结尾句 1. His / Her story teaches me that real achievement comes from commitment and hard work. 他/她的故事让我懂得，真正的成就来自投入和努力。 2. From him / her, I have learned to stay curious, objective and committed. 从他/她身上，我学会了保持好奇、客观和坚定。 3. In a word, people of achievement encourage us to become better versions of ourselves. 总之，卓有成就的人激励我们成为更好的自己。 五、写作模板 模板1：简洁标准版 _______(文章标题) When it comes to people of achievement, _______(人物) is the first person that comes to my mind. He / She is widely known for _______(主要成就). To begin with, he / she committed himself / herself to _______(事业或目标). Although he / she faced _______(困难), he / she never gave up. Besides, he / she always kept a(n) _______(品质) attitude and tried to _______(具体行动). Because of these efforts, he / she finally _______(结果或贡献). His / Her story teaches me that _______(启发). I hope I can learn from him / her and _______(自己的行动). 模板2：分层高分版 _______(文章标题) When it comes to people of achievement, _______(人物), who has made remarkable contributions to _______(领域), is the first person that comes to my mind. What impresses me most is his / her strong commitment to _______(事业或目标). Faced with _______(困难), he / she insisted on _______(行动), which was crucial to _______(积极结果). With an objective and scientific attitude, he / she kept evaluating _______(研究或任务) until he / she finally _______(成果). From his / her experience, I have learned that true achievement is built on passion, patience and responsibility. Inspired by him / her, I will _______(自己的行动). 六、典例精练 假定你是李华，你校英文报正在举办主题为 “The Person I Admire Most” 的征文活动。请你写一篇英文短文投稿，介绍一位你敬佩的人物。内容包括： 1. 人物简介； 2. 主要成就或事迹； 3. 你从他/她身上获得的启发。 注意： 1. 词数 80词左右； 2. 题目已给出，不计入总词数。 The Person I Admire Most ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作指导 第一步 审题谋篇 项目 内容 体裁 征文投稿 对象 校英文报读者 写作目的 介绍榜样人物并表达启发 主题 卓有成就的人与个人成长 时态 一般现在时介绍人物品质，一般过去时介绍经历 人称 第三人称介绍人物，第一人称写个人启发 语气 正式、积极、有感染力 布局 标题居中；开头引入人物；主体写成就和品质；结尾写启发 第二步 要点拆解与表达 中文要点 英文表达 句式说明 我最敬佩的人是屠呦呦。 The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, who has made remarkable contributions to medicine. 用非限制性定语从句补充人物贡献。 她致力于寻找治疗疟疾的方法。 She committed herself to finding a treatment for malaria. 使用单元短语 commit oneself to。 她的坚持让我明白成就来自责任和努力。 Her story teaches me that achievement comes from responsibility and hard work. 用宾语从句表达启发。 第三步 句式升级 原句 升级句 仿写句 说明 Tu Youyou is a great scientist. Tu Youyou, who has saved millions of lives, is a great scientist. Yuan Longping, who devoted his life to rice research, is a great scientist. 用非限制性定语从句补充影响。 She did not give up. Faced with many difficulties, she still insisted on her research. Faced with repeated failures, he still stayed committed to his dream. 用非谓语结构增强表达。 I learned a lot from her. Her experience has taught me the value of commitment. His story has taught me the importance of an objective attitude. 用抽象名词提升表达。 第四步 同义替换 普通表达 升级表达 使用场景 great remarkable 评价人物成就 important crucial / vital 强调品质或发现的重要性 work hard at commit oneself to 描述长期投入 keep doing insist on doing 描述坚持 get obtain 描述获得成果 think about evaluate 描述客观分析 in the end finally / eventually 描述结果 参考范文 基础版范文 The Person I Admire Most The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a great scientist in China. She is well known for discovering artemisinin, which has helped save many people's lives. In her research, she met many difficulties, but she never gave up. She read a large number of old medical books and evaluated different methods carefully until she finally obtained a useful treatment for malaria. What I admire most is her strong sense of responsibility. Her story teaches me that real achievement comes from hard work and a committed heart, and I hope to learn from her and face challenges bravely. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 great remarkable 提升人物评价 never gave up insisted on her research 强化坚持品质 useful vital 强调成果重要性 hard work continuous efforts 表达持续努力 face challenges bravely stay committed when facing challenges 呼应单元主题 提高版范文 The Person I Admire Most The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a remarkable scientist in China. She is widely known for discovering artemisinin, which has proved vital in saving many people's lives. During her research, she faced numerous difficulties, but she insisted on her research instead of giving up. With an objective attitude, she evaluated different methods and finally obtained a useful treatment for malaria. What I admire most is not only her achievement but also her continuous efforts. Her story teaches me that true success comes from passion and responsibility. Inspired by her, I will stay committed when facing challenges. 七、拓展练习 练习1：校园榜样人物投稿 你校英文报正在征集主题为 “A Role Model Around Me” 的文章。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍你身边的一位榜样人物。内容包括： 1. 人物身份； 2. 具体事迹； 3. 对你的启发。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 A Role Model Around Me ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于征文投稿，写作对象是校英文报读者，写作目的在于介绍身边榜样。 2. 要点：第一点写人物身份；第二点写具体事迹；第三点写个人启发。 3. 结构：开头点明人物；主体写行动和品质；结尾写学习方向。 4. 表达：可使用 committed, vital, insist on 等表达，并自然融入定语从句。 基础版范文 A Role Model Around Me The role model around me is my class monitor, Wang Ming. He is not the best student in every subject, but he is always ready to help others. Last semester, several classmates had difficulty with English. Wang Ming spent his free time helping them review words and practise speaking. He also encouraged them when they felt nervous. What touches me most is his kindness and patience. Because of his help, our class became more united. From him, I have learned that a real role model is someone who brings warmth to others. I will try to be helpful like him. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 ready to help others willing to give others a hand 增强助人表达 had difficulty with struggled with 表达困难更自然 spent his free time devoted his spare time to 强化投入感 encouraged them gave them confidence 突出积极影响 helpful make a difference to others 升华结尾 提高版范文 A Role Model Around Me The role model around me is my class monitor, Wang Ming. Although he is not the best student in every subject, he is always willing to give others a hand. Last semester, several classmates struggled with English. Wang Ming devoted his spare time to helping them review words and practise speaking. More importantly, he gave them confidence when they felt nervous. His kindness and patience, which made our class more united, impressed me deeply. From him, I have learned that a real role model is someone who can make a difference to others. I will try to become a warm-hearted person like him. 练习2：科学精神主题投稿 你校英文公众号正在举办 “The Spirit of Science” 征文活动。请你写一篇英文短文投稿。内容包括： 1. 你理解的科学精神； 2. 一个体现科学精神的人或事； 3. 对高中生的启发。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 The Spirit of Science ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于征文投稿，面向英文公众号读者，目的在于阐释科学精神。 2. 要点：第一点解释科学精神；第二点举例；第三点联系高中生。 3. 结构：开头提出观点；主体举例论证；结尾发出启发。 4. 表达：可使用 objective, scientific, evaluate, draw a conclusion，并使用非限制性定语从句补充说明。 基础版范文 The Spirit of Science In my opinion, the spirit of science means being curious, careful and honest. A scientist should not accept an answer too quickly. Instead, he or she needs to evaluate facts and keep trying. Tu Youyou is a good example. To find a treatment for malaria, she and her team read old books, did many experiments and checked the results again and again. Their work was difficult, but they did not stop. This spirit is also important for us students. When we meet problems in study, we should think carefully and keep looking for better answers. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 being curious, careful and honest staying curious, objective and honest 呼应科学态度 accept an answer too quickly jump to a conclusion 表达更地道 keep trying insist on exploring 强化探索精神 did many experiments carried out numerous experiments 提升研究表达 important of great importance 增强正式度 提高版范文 The Spirit of Science From my point of view, the spirit of science means staying curious, objective and honest. A real scientist should not jump to a conclusion too quickly. Instead, he or she needs to evaluate facts and insist on exploring. Tu Youyou is a good example. To find a treatment for malaria, she and her team read old books, carried out numerous experiments and checked the results again and again. Their work, which was full of difficulties, finally brought hope to many people. This spirit is also of great importance to us students. When facing problems, we should think carefully and keep looking for better answers. 练习3：青年责任主题投稿 你校英文报正在征集 “Young People and Responsibility” 主题文章。请你写一篇短文投稿。内容包括： 1. 你对青年责任的理解； 2. 一个榜样人物或具体行动； 3. 你的行动计划。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 Young People and Responsibility ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于征文投稿，写作对象是校英文报读者，写作目的在于表达责任意识。 2. 要点：第一点写责任含义；第二点写榜样或行动；第三点写自己的计划。 3. 结构：开头提出观点；主体举例；结尾联系自身。 4. 表达：可使用 committed, vital, take up a position 等表达，并自然使用宾语从句。 基础版范文 Young People and Responsibility Responsibility is important for young people. It means doing what we should do and trying to help others when possible. Many people of achievement show us the value of responsibility. For example, some scientists spend years solving difficult problems because they want to make life better. Their work may not be easy, but they keep going. As senior high school students, we also have our own responsibility. We should study hard, care about people around us and take part in useful activities. I believe small actions can help us become responsible young people. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 important vital 强化责任意义 doing what we should do taking on what we are expected to do 表达责任承担 spend years solving commit themselves to solving 呼应单元词汇 make life better improve people's lives 表达社会贡献 useful activities meaningful activities 提升活动表达 提高版范文 Young People and Responsibility Responsibility is vital for young people. It means taking on what we are expected to do and trying to help others when possible. Many people of achievement show us the value of responsibility. For example, some scientists commit themselves to solving difficult problems because they hope to improve people's lives. Their work, which may last for years, is never easy, but they keep going. As senior high school students, we also have our own responsibility. We should study hard, care about people around us and take part in meaningful activities. I believe small actions can help us become responsible young people. 练习4：普通劳动者主题投稿 你校英文报正在举办 “Ordinary People, Great Spirit” 征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍一位普通但值得尊敬的人。内容包括： 1. 人物身份； 2. 让你感动的事； 3. 你对“成就”的新理解。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 Ordinary People, Great Spirit ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于征文投稿，面向校报读者，目的在于拓展“成就”的含义。 2. 要点：第一点介绍身份；第二点写具体事例；第三点升华对成就的理解。 3. 结构：开头点题；主体写人物行动；结尾总结观点。 4. 表达：可使用 remarkable, committed, make contributions to 等表达，并用定语从句补充说明。 基础版范文 Ordinary People, Great Spirit When we talk about achievement, we often think of famous scientists or great heroes. However, ordinary people can also show a great spirit. The person I want to write about is our school cleaner. Every morning, she arrives early and makes the classrooms clean before we come. During rainy days, she always puts warning signs in the halls to keep us safe. Her work seems simple, but it is necessary for our school life. She teaches me that achievement is not only about prizes or fame. It can also be found in quiet and responsible work. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 famous well-known 表达更自然 great spirit remarkable spirit 强化主题 necessary vital 强调重要性 keep us safe protect us from danger 具体化作用 responsible work committed work 呼应人物品质 提高版范文 Ordinary People, Great Spirit When we talk about achievement, we often think of well-known scientists or great heroes. However, ordinary people can also show a remarkable spirit. The person I want to write about is our school cleaner, who arrives early every morning and makes the classrooms clean before we come. During rainy days, she always puts warning signs in the halls to protect us from danger. Her work seems simple, but it is vital to our school life. She teaches me that achievement is not only about prizes or fame. It can also be found in quiet and committed work. 练习5：AI时代的榜样力量投稿 你校英文公众号正在征集 “Role Models in the Age of AI” 主题文章。请你写一篇短文投稿。内容包括： 1. AI 时代为什么仍需要榜样； 2. 你心中的一个榜样品质； 3. 你将如何向榜样学习。 注意：词数 80词左右，行文连贯。 Role Models in the Age of AI ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 1. 审题：本文属于征文投稿，写作对象是公众号读者，目的在于联系稳定科技热点表达榜样价值。 2. 要点：第一点写 AI 时代仍需要榜样；第二点写榜样品质；第三点写个人行动。 3. 结构：开头引出现象；主体分析品质；结尾写行动计划。 4. 表达：可使用 objective, committed, evaluate, passion 等表达，并自然融入定语从句。 基础版范文 Role Models in the Age of AI Today, AI can help us learn faster and solve many problems. However, we still need role models. AI may give us information, but role models teach us values. In my eyes, the most important quality of a role model is commitment. A committed person knows his or her goal and keeps working for it. This quality is useful in study and life. When I use AI for learning, I should not simply copy answers. Instead, I should think carefully, evaluate information and keep improving myself. A good role model reminds me to use technology wisely and responsibly. 词汇升级 基础表达 升级表达 升级作用 help us learn faster make learning more efficient 表达科技作用 give us information provide us with information 表达更正式 important crucial 强化品质重要性 keeps working for it stays committed to it 呼应单元词汇 use technology wisely make wise use of technology 提升结尾表达 提高版范文 Role Models in the Age of AI Today, AI can make learning more efficient and help us solve many problems. However, we still need role models. AI may provide us with information, but role models teach us values. In my eyes, the most crucial quality of a role model is commitment. A committed person knows his or her goal and stays committed to it. This quality, which is useful in both study and life, matters greatly. When I use AI for learning, I should not simply copy answers. Instead, I should evaluate information and keep improving myself. A good role model reminds me to make wise use of technology responsibly. 八、写作评价表 评价维度 分值 自评 同伴评 评价说明 结构 Structure 3分 ____ / 3 ____ / 3 三段结构清楚，文章标题居中，开头、主体、结尾安排合理。 内容 Content 6分 ____ / 6 ____ / 6 覆盖题目要点，人物事例具体，启发或观点明确。 语言 Language 4分 ____ / 4 ____ / 4 能使用本单元核心词汇和目标句式，表达准确连贯。 书写 Handwriting 2分 ____ / 2 ____ / 2 书写清楚，拼写、大小写和标点规范。 总分 Total 15分 ____ / 15 ____ / 15 综合评价：结构、内容、语言、书写整体表现。 自我反思与改进 我最需要改进的一项：□结构 □内容 □语言 □书写 具体改进计划：________________________ 评分参考 满分 15分；13-15 优秀；10-12 达标；7-9 需修改；6分及以下建议重写。 3 / 13 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $