摘要:
本讲义聚焦高中英语人物介绍应用文写作与读后续写微技能两大核心知识点。写作一以基础句型(首段、正文、结尾)为起点,通过郎平案例的审题谋篇、遣词造句、句式升级到组句成篇,再到黄大年写作练习,构建完整写作训练支架。写作二从修辞(明喻、暗喻等)、教材语料积累到袁隆平语料运用,形成读后续写技能支架。
该资料特色在于融合语言能力与思维品质培养。提供丰富句型(如“Born in...”)和核心词汇(committed, extraordinary),助力学生精准表达。通过句式升级(如非限制性定语从句转换)训练逻辑组织能力,案例分步指导(郎平写作四步)和练习设计(黄大年、袁隆平),课中辅助教师高效教学,课后帮助学生巩固方法、弥补薄弱环节。
内容正文:
Period 5 Writing
写作一 应用文写作——人物介绍
本单元的写作任务是描述一个人物,即通过文字对人物的外貌、个性、爱好以及主要事迹和贡献进行描述和说明。常与书信、电子邮件等结合起来,作为书信或者电子邮件中的一部分内容。
1.精彩首段
Born in...,...attended schools in...
出生于……,……在……上学。
He had...hair and...eyes.
他有……头发,……眼睛。
She is...with...eyes and...hair.
她……,有……眼睛和……头发。
He/She is an outstanding man/woman with the name of...他/她是名字叫……的杰出男性/女性。
2.正文描述
He/She studied at...and graduated from...他/她在……学习,毕业于……
Such a learned/strong-willed person is he/she that we all admire/respect him/her.他/她是如此博学/意志坚定的人,我们都钦佩/尊敬他/她。
He/She devoted all his/her life to the work.
他/她终生致力于工作。
He/She made great contributions to our country.他/她为我们的国家做出了巨大贡献。
He/She was highly thought of by...
……对他/她作出了高度评价。
During her career life,she...在她的职业生涯中,她……
...made a great contribution to the development of...,which paved the way for further research.
……对……的发展做出了巨大的贡献,这为进一步的研究铺平了道路。
Known as the leading figure of...,...had a far-reaching influence.
作为……的领军人物,……发挥了深远的影响。
Not only is he gifted in...but he also has a good command of...
他不仅在……方面有天赋,而且他精通……
3.出彩结尾
His story tells us that we should value what we have,and try our best to overcome any difficulty in life.他的故事告诉我们,我们应该珍惜我们所拥有的,尽力克服生活中的任何困难。
...will live in the hearts of us forever.……将永远活在我们心中。
We regard...as our role model.我们把……看作我们的榜样。
你校准备在新建的“名人长廊”中为每一位名人画像配上英语介绍,以便让同学们有更多的机会学习英语。请你根据以下信息写一篇短文介绍郎平。
1.郎平,出生于1960年12月10日,13岁时开始练习打排球;
2.几年后,因表现突出,进入国家队;
3.从1980年起,郎平获得很多荣誉及奖励;
4.退役后,郎平成为排球教练,并于2016年带领中国女排在里约奥运会(the Rio Olympic Games)上获得金牌;
5.郎平是中国第一位作为球员和教练员均夺取奥运会冠军的排球运动员。
第一步 审题谋篇
第二步 遣词造句
核心词汇 (单元写作词汇运用)
1.在……岁时at the age of...
2.承认某人为acknowledge sb as/to be
3.尽心尽力的,坚定的committed
4.中国女排the Chinese Women Volleyball Team
5.非凡的;显著的remarkable
6.不一般的;非凡的;意想不到的extraordinary
7.坚持 insist on/upon
8.由于;因为 as a consequence of
9.因此;所以 consequently
10.众多的;许多的 numerous
11.担任;任职 take up a position
12.强大的 powerful
13.击败;战胜 defeat
14.以……为目标 with the objective of
15.显而易见;显然 apparently
连词成句 (教材句式仿写)
1.郎平出生于1960年12月10日,是公认的非凡的排球教练。(并列句)
Lang Ping was born on Dec.10th,1960 and she is generally acknowledged to be a remarkable volleyball coach.
2.她在十三岁时就坚持练习打排球,由于她非凡的表现,几年后就进入了国家队。(at the age of; as a consequence of)
She insisted on practising playing volleyball at the age of 13 and joined the national team several years later as a consequence of her extraordinary performance.
3.在她打排球的时候,她很投入,很有决心,因此,她获得许多奖项。(while;obtain)
While she was playing volleyball,she was committed and determined,and consequently,she obtained numerous awards.
4.郎平从排球队退役后,担任排球教练。
After Lang Ping had retired from the volleyball team,she took up a position as a volleyball coach.
5.尽管在她的教练生涯中充满了无数的挑战,郎平仍然设法使她强大的团队击败了许多其他球队。(defeat)
With countless challenges filling her coaching career,Lang Ping still managed to make her powerful team defeat many other teams.
6.2016年,她带领中国女排以获得金牌为目标参加了里约奥运会,并且她们成功了。
In 2016,she led the Chinese Women Volleyball Team to take part in the Rio Olympic Games with the objective of winning the gold medal and they made it.
7.显而易见,郎平是中国第一位作为球员和教练员均夺取奥运会冠军的排球运动员。
Apparently,Lang Ping is the first volleyball player to win the Olympic championship as a player and coach in China.
第三步 句式升级
1.将句1改成非限制性定语从句
Lang Ping,who was born on Dec.10th,1960,is generally acknowledged to be a remarkable volleyball coach.
2.将句3改成状语从句的省略和动词-ing形式作状语
While playing volleyball,she was committed and determined,consequently obtaining numerous awards.
3.将句4改成“介词+-ing形式”作状语
After retiring from the volleyball team,Lang Ping took up a position as a volleyball coach.
4.将句5改成独立主格结构
Countless challenges filling her coaching career,Lang Ping still managed to make her powerful team defeat many other teams.
第四步 组句成篇
用适当的过渡词语,把以上词汇和句式,再加上联想内容,组成一篇80个词左右的英语短文。
参考范文
Lang Ping,who was born on Dec.10th,1960,is generally acknowledged to be a remarkable volleyball coach.
She insisted on practising playing volleyball at the age of 13 and joined the national team several years later as a consequence of her extraordinary performance.While playing volleyball,she was committed and determined,consequently obtaining numerous awards.After retiring from the volleyball team,Lang Ping took up a position as a volleyball coach.Countless challenges filling her coaching career,Lang Ping still managed to make her powerful team defeat many other teams.In 2016,she led the Chinese Women Volleyball Team to take part in the Rio Olympic Games with the objective of winning the gold medal and they made it.
Apparently,Lang Ping is the first volleyball player to win the Olympic championship as a player and coach in China.
请根据下面的提示写一篇英语短文,介绍你所敬佩的一个人物。主要包括以下内容:
姓名
黄大年
生卒年月
1958年8月至2017年1月
职业
地球物理学家
个人经历
毕业于长春地质学院;1992年被选送英国攻读博士学位;2009年毅然回国,致力于教育与科研事业
评价
不计个人名利,把自己的科技成果和经验全部奉献给祖国,在国内外学术界享有很高的声誉
注意:写作词数应为80个左右。
参考范文
Huang Danian is the person I admire most,who made extraordinary achievements and is acknowledged to be a famous geophysicist.
He was born in August 1958 and he graduated from Changchun College of Geology.In 1992,he was sent to Britain to study for a doctor’s degree with the objective of grasping the high-end technology in physical field.In 2009,he gave up a well-paid job abroad and returned to his mother college without hesitation,committed to teaching and research.He passed away in January 2017,and our country mourned the great loss of an excellent scientist.
Under no circumstances did he care about fame and money and he always devoted all his scientific and technical payoffs to the motherland.As a consequence,he enjoyed a high reputation both at home and abroad.
写作二 读后续写微技能
Ⅰ.增分语料积累
修 辞
读后续写基本以记叙文为主,而记叙文以记人叙事为主要内容,要求我们不仅要善于捕捉细节、刻画细节,而且要善于运用拟人、夸张等修辞手法。恰到好处地运用修辞手法,不仅可使语言更鲜活、具体、逼真,也能极大增强语言的艺术表现力和感染力。以下是高中读后续写中常用的几种修辞手法。
修辞种类
定义
例句
明喻
常用like,as,as...as,as if/though
The smile on her face shone like a diamond.她脸上的笑容像宝石一样闪闪发光。
My legs felt like pieces of wood—heavy and stiff.我的腿感觉像木头一样沉重而僵硬。
His heart is as hard as a stone.他铁石心肠。
暗喻
用一个词来指代与该词所指人或事物有相似特点的另一个人或事物,不用比喻词like,as
Laughter is the sun that drives winter from the human face.笑是驱走人们脸上寒意的太阳。
I was drowning in a sea of grief.我沉浸在悲伤的海洋中。
Life is a ship on the ocean meeting both sunny days and stormy days.生活是一艘在海上航行的船,既会遇到晴天,也会遇到暴风雨。
拟人
把无生命的事物当作有生命的事物来描写,赋予无生命之物以感情和动作;或是把动物人格化
The city began to breathe again.这座城市又恢复了生机。
The wind howled in the night.夜里狂风怒吼。
The flowers danced in the gentle breeze.花儿在微风中翩翩起舞。
On seeing this,the butterfly couldn’t help shedding tears sadly.看到此景,蝴蝶不禁潸然泪下。
夸张
以言过其实的说法表达强调的目的,它可以加强语势,增强表达效果
My heart almost stopped beating.我的心几乎停止了跳动。
He felt his blood frozen.他觉得自己的血液凝固了。
I was so hungry that I could eat a horse.我饿得可以吃掉一匹马。
After seemingly a century,his mind began to race again.很久之后,他的大脑又开始转动起来。
Ⅱ.教材语料积累
词汇
人物描写
gentle adj.温柔的;文静的 passion n.酷爱;激情 extraordinary adj.不一般的;非凡的;意想不到的 committed adj.尽心尽力的;坚定的;坚信的 genius n.天才;天资;天赋
动作描写
commit vt.承诺;保证;做出(错或非法的事) vi.忠于;全心全意投入(工作、活动等)
boil vt.& vi.(使)沸腾;煮开;烧开 vi.发怒,发火
acknowledge vt.承认(属实、权威等);(公开)感谢;向……打招呼
defeat vt.击败;战胜 insist vi.& vt.坚持;坚决要求 flow vi.流;流动 encounter vt.偶然碰到;遇到 mourn vt.& vi.哀悼;忧伤
句型
1.Tu Youyou,a committed and patient scientist,was born in Ningbo,China,on 30 December 1930,and graduated from Peking University Medical School in 1955.(人物描写)
2.It is indeed an honour for China’s scientific research and Chinese medicine to be spread around the world.(主旨升华)
3.Einstein was not only a genius; he was a courageous and kind figure loved by many people.(人物描写)
4.Einstein,who was Jewish,found the doors of academic institutions closed to him.(比喻)
5.To the public,he was seen as a slightly odd-looking but kind and funny man.(人物描写)
6.He had a thick moustache and long white hair,which sometimes stood on end as though he had just received an electric shock.(夸张)
Ⅲ.续写语料运用
请从以上语料中选择合适的词汇,完成以下语段。然后核对答案并背诵该语段。
袁隆平被认为是最伟大的农业科学家之一,他于2021年5月22日在长沙与世长辞。天空下着毛毛细雨,好像在哀悼这位温和非凡的科学家的陨落。悲痛欲绝,许多中国人为之痛哭,泪水不受控制地顺着脸颊流淌。他终生满怀热情地致力于研究水稻。他始终坚持自己的梦想,无论遇到什么样的困难,他都不承认失败。袁隆平不仅是个天才,而且是一个勇敢善良的人,受到国内外人们的爱戴。
1.Acknowledged as one of the greatest scientists(过去分词短语作状语) in agriculture,Yuan Longping passed away in Changsha on May 22,2021.It was drizzling as if 2.it were mourning the great loss of the gentle extraordinary scientist.Overcome with sorrow,many Chinese people cried their hearts out,3.tears flowing down cheeks uncontrollably(独立主格).He 4.committed all his life to studying rice with passion.He always insisted on his dream and he wouldn’t 5.acknowledge defeat whatever difficulties he encountered.Not only 6.was Yuan Longping a genius but he was also a courageous and kind figure loved by people at home and abroad.
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