写作寻芳 专题1 层级1 第3讲 恰当增加细节，语言魅力动人（配套教参Word版）-【创新教程】2027年高考英语总复习大一轮讲义（北师大版）

该高中英语讲义聚焦高考书面表达核心考点，围绕细节拓展能力构建复习体系，按实例列举、描写增添、时空信息补充、逻辑关系拓展、结尾升华五个策略分层递进。通过考点梳理明确评分标准要求，方法指导结合典型例句解析，真题训练以范文示范“Technology and Life”写作，帮助学生突破表达空洞难点，体现复习的系统性与针对性。 讲义创新采用“基础句—拓展句—范文应用”三阶训练法，如引导学生将简单句扩展为含动作描写的丰富表达，培养语言能力与思维品质。设置环保、日常活动等多情境练习，配合即时反馈与仿写训练，确保学生高效掌握细节拓展技巧，为教师把控复习节奏提供清晰路径，有效提升学生书面表达的丰富度与应考能力。

　　　第三讲　恰当增加细节，语言魅力动人 根据高考英语作文的评分标准，作文被分成了五个档次。其中分数较高的档次对于考生作文的要求都涉及了覆盖所有内容要点、使用较多语法结构和词汇、有效使用语句间的连接成分。其中，一个重要的方面就是在作文中要注意细节的体现。具体方法如下： 列举具体的实例进行补充说明 (1)我们青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地球。 We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth. →We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth, For example, we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags, refuse to use singleuse products, plant more trees and save water and energy. (2)我要花一些时间和父母待在一起。 I'll spend some time staying with my parents. →I'll spend some time staying with my parents, chatting with them and doing some housework. (3)我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。 I would like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me. →I would like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me. If possible, we can travel together or share traveling. 增添与所写信息相关的神态、动作、心理描写以及背景渲染等内容 (1)我有时去村西的小河游泳。 I went swimming in the river in the west of the village now and then. →I went swimming in the river in the west of the village now and then. The water in the river was very clear.(背景渲染) →Weather permitting, I went swimming in the river in the west of the village now and then. (相关背景) (2)我发现了一些不良行为。 I found some bad behavior. →I found some bad behavior. Some people scribbled on the wall; some played soccer on the lawn and some people threw rubbish everywhere. (相关行为描述) 增加相关信息的时间、地点等内容 (1)我要和父母一起去超市购物。 I'm going to do some shopping with my parents in the supermarket. →I'm going to do some shopping with my parents in the supermarket and won't be back until about 5：00 in the afternoon. (增加时间) (2)我已经带来了你让我归还的这两本书。 I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return. →I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library.(增加地点) 适当增加与所给信息相关的原因、结果、条件、让步、手段、目的、地点等内容 (1)假设你是李华，你的英国笔友Henry 最近来信询问你高考后的暑假安排。请根据下面要点写一封回信，说明你的计划，并简述理由。 要点：1.休息；2.读书；3.参加社会活动。 ①I need a good rest. I'll do some reading. →I need a good rest because I do feel tired after the hard work of all these years. Of course, I'll do some reading for fun, and for knowledge as well.(因果关系) ②I'll take part in some social activities. →If I have free time, I'll take part in some social activities.(条件状语) →If possible, I'll take part in some social activities. (条件状语) →If possible, I'll take part in some social activities so that/in order that I can know more about society. (结果状语) (2)Tracy 来电话说和你在咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)的见面取消。 Tracy called, saying that she couldn't meet you at Bolton Coffee. →Tracy called, saying that she couldn't meet you at Bolton Coffee as she had something important to do. (原因状语) 结尾适当发挥，写出个人感受、评价、希望、愿景、倡议等 (1)Tired as I was this summer holiday, I felt very happy for what I did.(个人感受) (2)As far as I'm concerned, such activities are necessary and meaningful. (评价) (3)In a word, if she would like to learn Chinese, I hope she will do it well. (愿景) (4)As students, it's our duty to protect our school environment and make it clean. (倡议) 某英文报将举办一场中学生英语作文比赛。请以“Technology and Life”为题，写一篇短文参赛。内容包括： 1．科技在生活中的运用；2.你的感想。 注意：1.词数80左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ [参考范文] Technology and Life Over the last few decades, technologies have been constantly springing up, which has greatly changed our life. It is acknowledged that facial recognition makes it easy for us to get into stations, the airport and other places. Also, the high­speed railway shortens the travelling time between two cities, enabling us to visit more places conveniently. In addition, mobile payment allows us to pay for everything wherever there is a QR code. As is known to us, technologies are all around us. Obviously, they have made our life more efficient and colorful. Only by making better use of them can we become the master of life. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $