Welcome Unit Reading for Writing 2（以读促写课讲义）英语人教版必修第一册

本讲义聚焦高中英语以读促写核心能力，通过“故事山结构”（开端、发展、高潮、下降、结尾、主题）梳理叙事要素，构建“陌生环境→意外困难→心理挣扎→他人帮助→自我成长”可迁移故事模型。以阅读文本《My First Day at Senior High》为依托，通过“读-学-写”对应关系搭建支架，结合主题词块、描写句式及衔接表达积累语言素材，分步骤开展Mini-Writing训练，形成从输入到输出的完整写作能力培养脉络。 该资料以情境化导入激发学习兴趣，结构化文本分析培养思维品质，如通过故事发展逻辑总结与可迁移模型引导学生分析、推断叙事规律。分层写作训练提升语言能力，从微写作到任务写作逐步进阶，搭配四维自我评估量表助力学生主动调适学习策略。课中辅助教师高效授课，课后学生可借助语言素材积累与评估标准查漏补缺，实现写作能力与学习能力的协同发展。

Welcome Unit Reading for Writing 2 （以读促写课讲义） 目录 1. Lead in 2. Reading 3. Text Analysis 4. Language Building 5. Mini-Writing 6. Writing Task 7. Self-assessment 8. Homework 1. Lead in 一、创设情境，回答问题 1. On your first day at senior high, you are asked to introduce yourself in front of all classmates. If your mind suddenly went blank during an introduction, what would you do? And how would you feel? 2.A boy named Meng Hao faced almost the same challenge on his first day. What exactly made him nervous, and how did an unexpected coincidence turn embarrassment into a positive beginning? 2. Reading 拓展语篇阅读 外研社 必修一 Unit 1 A New Start Understanding Ideas My First Day at Senior High After I had pictured it over and over again in my mind, the big day finally arrived: my first day at senior high! I woke up early and rushed out of the door in my eagerness to get to know my new school. The campus was still quiet when I arrived, so I decided to explore a bit. I was looking at the photos on the noticeboard when I heard a voice behind me. “New here?” Turning around, I saw a white-haired man. “Yes,” I replied. “I'm wondering what life is going to be like here.” “Don't worry,” he gave me a smile. “You'll soon find out.” How true these words were! When my English teacher stepped into the classroom, I was surprised to see the same man I had met earlier. “Good morning, everyone. Before we start, please come to the front one by one and introduce yourself to the class. I'll go first…” “What?!” I tried to turn on my brain but the engine just wouldn't start. “I should say my name, of course. But what else? What could I say to make a good first impression? Something about my insect collection, perhaps.” I was organising my words in my head when the girl next to me gave me a nudge. “It's your turn!” With butterflies in my stomach, I breathed deeply. “Hi, I'm Meng Hao.” Everyone started laughing. I looked at them in panic. “Nice to know we share the same name,” said my new teacher. I had been too nervous to pay attention when he introduced himself! Although I was embarrassed, his words made me a lot more relaxed! When we had all introduced ourselves, Mr Meng said, “Well done, everyone! I know this isn't easy for many of you. But this is just the kind of thing you are going to face at senior high. Challenges like this might sometimes put you under pressure. But it all depends on what you do. Keep calm and be prepared. That way, you'll make the most of your time at senior high.” People say, “Well begun, half done.” I guess this was a good beginning to my new school life. 3. Text Analysis 1、 结构框架 故事山结构 文本内容分析 写作功能 Beginning（开端） 时间： first day at senior high（高中第一天） 地点： new school campus（新校园） 人物： narrator（“我”）、Mr Meng（英语老师）、classmates（同学） 交代故事背景，引出“进入新环境”的主题 Rising Action（发展） “我”提前到学校探索校园，偶遇一位白发男子，后来发现他就是自己的英语老师 设置悬念，为后续冲突做铺垫 Climax（高潮） 老师要求学生逐个自我介绍，“我”因为紧张而大脑空白，却误把老师的名字当成自己的名字 制造核心冲突，突出人物紧张心理 Falling Action（下降） 同学提醒后，“我”意识到错误；老师用幽默和鼓励化解尴尬 通过人物互动推动情节转折 Ending（结尾） “我”从尴尬中恢复，认识到高中生活充满挑战，需要保持冷静并做好准备 点明主题，实现情感升华 Theme（主题升华） 面对陌生环境和挑战时，保持冷静、勇敢尝试，才能开启新的成长阶段 为读后续写提供价值导向 故事发展逻辑总结： 期待新生活 → 探索新环境 → 遭遇突发挑战 → 经历尴尬 → 获得帮助 → 调整心态 → 成长感悟 可迁移故事模型： New environment → Unexpected problem → Emotional struggle → Support from others → Self-growth （陌生环境 → 意外困难 → 心理挣扎 → 他人帮助 → 自我成长） 2、 确定“读-学-写”对应关系 阅读文本（Read） 学习迁移（Learn） 续写应用（Write） 作者通过“first day at senior high”创造陌生环境 学习“新环境”类背景构建 可用于校园、比赛、旅行、工作等新场景开篇 “I was looking at the photos... when I heard a voice behind me.” 学习“正在做某事时突然发生变化”的叙事结构 用于制造突发事件，提高故事张力 “With butterflies in my stomach, I breathed deeply.” 学习心理+动作结合描写 描写紧张、害怕、期待等复杂情绪 “I tried to turn on my brain but the engine just wouldn’t start.” 学习心理活动具体化，而非简单写 nervous 将抽象情绪转化为可视化表达 “Everyone started laughing. I looked at them in panic.” 学习冲突场景中的人物反应描写 描写误会、失败、尴尬等高潮情节 “Although I was embarrassed, his words made me a lot more relaxed.” 学习情绪转折结构 表现人物从负面情绪到积极状态的变化 “Keep calm and be prepared.” 学习主题升华语言 结尾表达成长、收获、人生感悟 “Well begun, half done.” 学习引用式结尾 用于故事结尾升华主题 4. Language Building 一、主题词块 14 / 17 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 1.对新环境充满期待 ___________________ 2.好奇地环顾四周 ___________________ 3.心里七上八下 ___________________ 4.大脑一片空白 ___________________ 5.深吸一口气 ___________________ 6.鼓起勇气向前走 _____________________ 7.给某人一个安慰的微笑 _________________ 8.重新找回信心 _____________________ 9.学会在压力下保持冷静 _________________ 10.把困难视为成长的机会 _________________ 【答案】 1.be full of expectations for the new environment 2.look around curiously 3.have butterflies in one’s stomach 4.have one’s mind go completely blank 5.take a deep breath 6.gather one’s courage and step forward 7.give someone a reassuring smile 8.regain one’s confidence 9.learn to remain calm under pressure 10.regard difficulties as opportunities for growth 二、描写句式 14 / 17 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 1.我的心怦怦直跳，手心也开始冒汗。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 2.我深吸一口气，努力让自己平静下来。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 3.尽管双腿发抖，我还是坚定地向前迈了一步。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 4.他轻轻拍了拍我的肩膀，给了我一个鼓励的微笑。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 5.听到他温暖的话语，我渐渐放松了下来。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 6.直到那时，我才意识到勇气并不意味着没有恐惧。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 7.这次经历不仅增强了我的信心，也让我变得更加成熟。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 1.My heart pounded wildly, and my palms began to sweat. 2.I took a deep breath and tried to calm myself down. 3.Although my legs were trembling, I still took a determined step forward. 4.He patted me gently on the shoulder and gave me an encouraging smile. 5.Hearing his warm words, I gradually relaxed. 6.Only then did I realize that courage did not mean the absence of fear. 7.The experience not only strengthened my confidence but also made me more mature. 三、衔接表达 1.情绪感受类（引出内心感受） To my surprise 令我惊讶的是 To my relief 令我如释重负的是 2.时间过渡类（推进情节时序） For a moment 有那么一瞬间 After a moment’s hesitation 犹豫片刻后 Having made up my mind 下定决心后 From that day on 从那以后 3.事态递进/恶化类 To make matters worse 更糟糕的是 4.外界助力类（他人影响） With his encouragement 在他的鼓励下 5.结尾升华回顾类（段落收尾、感悟） Looking back on the experience 回想起这次经历 5. Mini-Writing 一、 陌生环境：交代背景，营造氛围 写作重点：使用“时间＋地点＋人物心理”迅速交代故事背景： It was my first day at... The place was still quiet when I arrived... 1.这是我进入新学校的第一天，我对新的校园生活充满期待。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________2.当我到达时，校园里仍然很安静，于是我独自四处走了走，好奇地观察周围的一切。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 1.It was my first day at the new school, and I was full of expectations for my new school life. 2.The campus was still quiet when I arrived, so I walked around on my own and looked at everything curiously. 二、意外困难：制造突发事件，推动情节 写作重点：用“正在……这时……”和递进衔接语制造意外： I was doing... when... To make matters worse, ... 3.我正在查看教室门口的名单，突然发现上面没有自己的名字。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 4.更糟糕的是，上课铃响了，而我根本不知道自己应该去哪个教室。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 3.I was checking the name list outside the classroom when I suddenly found that my name was not on it. 4.To make matters worse, the bell rang, but I had no idea which classroom I should go to. 三、心理挣扎：描写情绪和身体反应 写作重点：避免只写“I was nervous”，应将心理、动作和身体反应结合起来： My mind went completely blank. My heart pounded wildly and my palms began to sweat. 5.有那么一瞬间，我的大脑一片空白，心里也七上八下。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 6.我的心怦怦直跳，手心开始冒汗，不知道该向谁求助。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 5.For a moment, my mind went completely blank, and I had butterflies in my stomach. 6.My heart pounded wildly and my palms began to sweat, as I had no idea whom I could turn to for help. 四、他人帮助：设置转折，缓解冲突 写作重点：通过“动作＋神态＋具体帮助”表现人物善意： pat someone gently on the shoulder give someone a reassuring smile lead someone to... 7.就在这时，一位老师注意到了我，并朝我走了过来。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 8.她轻轻拍了拍我的肩膀，给了我一个安慰的微笑，然后耐心地带我去了正确的教室。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 7.Just then, a teacher noticed me and walked toward me. 8.She patted me gently on the shoulder, gave me a reassuring smile, and patiently led me to the correct classroom. 五、自我成长：情绪转变，升华主题 写作重点：结尾应从“事件结果”自然过渡到“人物成长”： With one’s encouragement, ... Looking back on the experience, I realized that... 9.在她的鼓励下，我深吸一口气，渐渐平静了下来。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 10.回想起这次经历，我意识到，面对陌生环境时，勇气并不意味着没有恐惧，而是在害怕时仍愿意向前迈步。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 9.With her encouragement, I took a deep breath and gradually calmed myself down. 10.Looking back on the experience, I realized that courage did not mean the absence of fear, but the willingness to step forward even when I was afraid. 6. Writing Task 一、微写作训练 你第一次参加学校英语演讲比赛。走上舞台后，你突然忘记了准备好的内容。你十分紧张，但在老师的鼓励下逐渐镇定下来，最终完成了演讲，并从中获得成长。 情节框架构思 陌生环境 第一次参加英语演讲比赛，走上舞台 ↓ 意外困难 突然忘记演讲内容 ↓ 心理挣扎 大脑空白、心跳加快、想要放弃 ↓ 他人帮助 老师给予鼓励的目光或微笑 ↓ 自我成长 恢复镇定、完成演讲、理解勇气的意义 二、翻译练习 这是我第一次参加学校英语演讲比赛。当我走上舞台时，台下所有人的目光都集中在我身上。突然，我忘记了准备好的内容。那一刻，我的大脑一片空白，心怦怦直跳，双手也开始发抖。我甚至想立刻逃下舞台。就在这时，我看见英语老师朝我露出了一个鼓励的微笑。在她的鼓励下，我深吸一口气，努力回忆演讲内容。渐渐地，我恢复了镇定，并最终完成了演讲。回想起这次经历，我意识到，真正的勇气不是没有恐惧，而是在恐惧中仍然选择继续前进。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【参考译文】 It was my first time taking part in the school English speech contest. When I stepped onto the stage, all eyes were fixed on me. Suddenly, I forgot everything I had prepared. For a moment, my mind went completely blank, my heart pounded wildly, and my hands began to tremble. I even wanted to run off the stage immediately. Just then, I caught sight of my English teacher giving me an encouraging smile. With her encouragement, I took a deep breath and tried to recall my speech. Gradually, I regained my composure and finally completed it. Looking back on the experience, I realized that true courage was not the absence of fear, but the decision to move forward despite it. 7. Self-Assessment 一、四维量表 评价维度 5分：优秀 4分：良好 3分：基本达标 1—2分：有待改进 情节融洽度 与前文情境紧密衔接；事件发展符合“困难—挣扎—帮助—解决”的因果链；转折自然，无情节跳跃 与前文基本衔接；主要情节合理，但个别转折略显突然或细节不足 能完成基本情节，但事件之间多为简单罗列，因果关系不够清楚 偏离原文情境；出现明显矛盾、突兀转折或不合理情节 人物一致性 人物身份、性格、情绪和行为与原文一致；情绪变化有充分的动作、心理或语言依据 人物基本一致；情绪与行为总体合理，但转变过程略显简单 人物身份未变，但行为或语言较模板化；情绪变化缺少铺垫 人物言行与原文设定明显冲突；情绪突然改变，缺乏合理依据 主题升华 主题由具体事件自然生发；能够体现勇气、成长、自信或互助，且避免空泛说教 主题明确，与故事内容有关，但表达较直接或略显模板化 有总结或感悟，但与前文事件联系较弱 无主题升华，或结尾只是生硬添加格言和道理 语言表达 动作、心理、神态描写结合自然；句式有变化；衔接准确；语言基本无误 表达清楚，使用了部分高级语块和复合句；存在少量错误但不影响理解 以简单句为主；有一定语法或搭配错误，表达基本可理解 错误较多；句子不完整或语义不清；大量照搬原文 二、范文赏析 It was my first time taking part in the school English speech contest. As I stepped onto the stage, all eyes were fixed on me. Suddenly, the speech I had practised many times disappeared from my mind. For a moment, my heart pounded wildly and my hands began to tremble. I wanted to escape, but then I noticed my English teacher giving me an encouraging smile. Her calm expression seemed to tell me not to give up. Taking a deep breath, I slowly recalled the opening sentence and continued my speech. Although my performance was not perfect, I finished it with confidence. Looking back on the experience, I realized that courage meant moving forward despite fear. 三、四维升格示例 评价维度 原句 主要问题 升格后 升格点 核心原则 情节融洽度 Suddenly, I forgot my speech. My teacher helped me. Finally, I finished it. 情节只有结果，没有过程；“老师如何帮助”“我如何恢复”均未交代，因果链断裂。 Suddenly, everything I had prepared disappeared from my mind. Just as I was about to step off the stage, I caught sight of my teacher, who gave me an encouraging nod. Taking a deep breath, I recalled the opening sentence and continued. 补充困难 everything... disappeared from my mind　设置危机 was about to step off the stage　引入帮助 gave me an encouraging nod　补充解决过程 took a deep breath、recalled the opening sentence 不只写“发生了什么”，还要写“为什么发生”和“如何解决”。 人物一致性 I was extremely nervous, but I immediately became confident and gave a perfect speech. 人物从“极度紧张”直接变成“自信”，缺少心理转变依据；perfect也与前文危机不匹配。 Although I was still nervous, my teacher’s reassuring smile gave me the courage to continue. My voice trembled at first, but it gradually became steadier as I went on. 保留原有情绪 I was still nervous　提供转变动因 my teacher’s reassuring smile　呈现渐变过程 trembled at first → became steadier　避免人物突变“没有直接从害怕跳到完全自信” 人物成长应当是“逐渐变化”，而不是“突然变脸”。 主题升华 I learned that where there is a will, there is a way. 格言与“演讲时忘词”的具体经历联系较弱，属于外加式升华。 Looking back on the experience, I realized that courage did not mean feeling no fear. It meant choosing to continue even when my voice was trembling. 回扣具体细节 my voice was trembling　提炼人物成长“从紧张演讲中理解勇气”　避免空泛说教“感悟由事件自然生成”　保持主题一致“与面对挑战、克服紧张高度对应” 主题升华应当从故事细节中“长出来”，而不是在结尾“贴上去”。 语言表达 I was nervous. My heart beat fast. My hands shook. I did not know what to do. 连续使用简单句，信息重复，缺少句式层次。 For a moment, my mind went completely blank. With my heart pounding wildly and my hands trembling, I stood on the stage, not knowing what to do next. 整合心理描写 my mind went completely blank　整合身体反应 with my heart pounding wildly and my hands trembling　使用非谓语结构 not knowing what to do next　补充情境位置 on the stage 语言升格不是堆砌生词，而是整合“心理＋身体反应＋动作＋情境”。 8. Homework 微情景段落迁移写作 要求：任选一个所给情境，按照“陌生环境 → 意外困难 → 心理挣扎 → 他人帮助 → 自我成长”的逻辑，完成一个约 80—100 词的英文段落。注意情节融洽、人物一致，并在结尾自然升华主题。 作业一：第一次参加志愿活动 你第一次参加学校组织的社区志愿活动。到达现场后，你发现自己被安排独立照顾一位行动不便的老人。由于缺乏经验，你一时不知所措，甚至担心自己会把事情做砸。后来，一位有经验的志愿者耐心示范并鼓励你。最终，你顺利完成了任务，也对责任与关爱有了新的认识。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 作业二：第一次参加篮球选拔 你第一次参加学校篮球队选拔。面对陌生的队员和教练，你既期待又紧张。训练过程中，你连续投篮失误，开始怀疑自己的能力，甚至想退出。就在这时，一名队友主动走过来，提醒你调整动作，并鼓励你继续尝试。最终，你完成了选拔，也明白了坚持和团队支持的重要性。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【参考范文】 作业一 It was my first time taking part in a community volunteer activity, and everything around me felt unfamiliar. To my surprise, I was asked to look after an elderly man who had difficulty walking. For a moment, my mind went completely blank, and I worried that I might make things worse. Just then, an experienced volunteer came over, showed me patiently what to do, and gave me a reassuring smile. With her encouragement, I gradually calmed down and completed the task successfully. Looking back on the experience, I realized that responsibility begins with patience, while kindness can make even a difficult task meaningful. 作业二 It was my first time trying out for the school basketball team, so I felt both excited and nervous. During the training, I missed several shots in a row, and my confidence began to disappear. My heart pounded wildly, and I even thought about giving up. At that moment, one of my teammates walked over, patted me on the shoulder, and reminded me to adjust my shooting position. Encouraged by his words, I took a deep breath and kept trying. Although I was still nervous, my performance gradually improved. From that day on, I understood that persistence and support from others can help us overcome self-doubt. $Welcome Unit Reading for Writing 2 （以读促写课讲义） 目录 1. Lead in 2. Reading 3. Text Analysis 4. Language Building 5. Mini-Writing 6. Writing Task 7. Self-assessment 8. Homework 1. Lead in 一、创设情境，回答问题 1. On your first day at senior high, you are asked to introduce yourself in front of all classmates. If your mind suddenly went blank during an introduction, what would you do? And how would you feel? 2.A boy named Meng Hao faced almost the same challenge on his first day. What exactly made him nervous, and how did an unexpected coincidence turn embarrassment into a positive beginning? 2. Reading 拓展语篇阅读 外研社 必修一 Unit 1 A New Start Understanding Ideas My First Day at Senior High After I had pictured it over and over again in my mind, the big day finally arrived: my first day at senior high! I woke up early and rushed out of the door in my eagerness to get to know my new school. The campus was still quiet when I arrived, so I decided to explore a bit. I was looking at the photos on the noticeboard when I heard a voice behind me. “New here?” Turning around, I saw a white-haired man. “Yes,” I replied. “I'm wondering what life is going to be like here.” “Don't worry,” he gave me a smile. “You'll soon find out.” How true these words were! When my English teacher stepped into the classroom, I was surprised to see the same man I had met earlier. “Good morning, everyone. Before we start, please come to the front one by one and introduce yourself to the class. I'll go first…” “What?!” I tried to turn on my brain but the engine just wouldn't start. “I should say my name, of course. But what else? What could I say to make a good first impression? Something about my insect collection, perhaps.” I was organising my words in my head when the girl next to me gave me a nudge. “It's your turn!” With butterflies in my stomach, I breathed deeply. “Hi, I'm Meng Hao.” Everyone started laughing. I looked at them in panic. “Nice to know we share the same name,” said my new teacher. I had been too nervous to pay attention when he introduced himself! Although I was embarrassed, his words made me a lot more relaxed! When we had all introduced ourselves, Mr Meng said, “Well done, everyone! I know this isn't easy for many of you. But this is just the kind of thing you are going to face at senior high. Challenges like this might sometimes put you under pressure. But it all depends on what you do. Keep calm and be prepared. That way, you'll make the most of your time at senior high.” People say, “Well begun, half done.” I guess this was a good beginning to my new school life. 3. Text Analysis 1、 结构框架 故事山结构 文本内容分析 写作功能 Beginning（开端） 时间： first day at senior high（高中第一天） 地点： new school campus（新校园） 人物： narrator（“我”）、Mr Meng（英语老师）、classmates（同学） 交代故事背景，引出“进入新环境”的主题 Rising Action（发展） “我”提前到学校探索校园，偶遇一位白发男子，后来发现他就是自己的英语老师 设置悬念，为后续冲突做铺垫 Climax（高潮） 老师要求学生逐个自我介绍，“我”因为紧张而大脑空白，却误把老师的名字当成自己的名字 制造核心冲突，突出人物紧张心理 Falling Action（下降） 同学提醒后，“我”意识到错误；老师用幽默和鼓励化解尴尬 通过人物互动推动情节转折 Ending（结尾） “我”从尴尬中恢复，认识到高中生活充满挑战，需要保持冷静并做好准备 点明主题，实现情感升华 Theme（主题升华） 面对陌生环境和挑战时，保持冷静、勇敢尝试，才能开启新的成长阶段 为读后续写提供价值导向 故事发展逻辑总结： 期待新生活 → 探索新环境 → 遭遇突发挑战 → 经历尴尬 → 获得帮助 → 调整心态 → 成长感悟 可迁移故事模型： New environment → Unexpected problem → Emotional struggle → Support from others → Self-growth （陌生环境 → 意外困难 → 心理挣扎 → 他人帮助 → 自我成长） 2、 确定“读-学-写”对应关系 阅读文本（Read） 学习迁移（Learn） 续写应用（Write） 作者通过“first day at senior high”创造陌生环境 学习“新环境”类背景构建 可用于校园、比赛、旅行、工作等新场景开篇 “I was looking at the photos... when I heard a voice behind me.” 学习“正在做某事时突然发生变化”的叙事结构 用于制造突发事件，提高故事张力 “With butterflies in my stomach, I breathed deeply.” 学习心理+动作结合描写 描写紧张、害怕、期待等复杂情绪 “I tried to turn on my brain but the engine just wouldn’t start.” 学习心理活动具体化，而非简单写 nervous 将抽象情绪转化为可视化表达 “Everyone started laughing. I looked at them in panic.” 学习冲突场景中的人物反应描写 描写误会、失败、尴尬等高潮情节 “Although I was embarrassed, his words made me a lot more relaxed.” 学习情绪转折结构 表现人物从负面情绪到积极状态的变化 “Keep calm and be prepared.” 学习主题升华语言 结尾表达成长、收获、人生感悟 “Well begun, half done.” 学习引用式结尾 用于故事结尾升华主题 4. Language Building 一、主题词块 14 / 17 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 1.对新环境充满期待 ___________________ 2.好奇地环顾四周 ___________________ 3.心里七上八下 ___________________ 4.大脑一片空白 ___________________ 5.深吸一口气 ___________________ 6.鼓起勇气向前走 _____________________ 7.给某人一个安慰的微笑 _________________ 8.重新找回信心 _____________________ 9.学会在压力下保持冷静 _________________ 10.把困难视为成长的机会 _________________ 二、描写句式 14 / 17 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 1.我的心怦怦直跳，手心也开始冒汗。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 2.我深吸一口气，努力让自己平静下来。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 3.尽管双腿发抖，我还是坚定地向前迈了一步。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 4.他轻轻拍了拍我的肩膀，给了我一个鼓励的微笑。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 5.听到他温暖的话语，我渐渐放松了下来。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 6.直到那时，我才意识到勇气并不意味着没有恐惧。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 7.这次经历不仅增强了我的信心，也让我变得更加成熟。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 三、衔接表达 1.情绪感受类（引出内心感受） To my surprise 令我惊讶的是 To my relief 令我如释重负的是 2.时间过渡类（推进情节时序） For a moment 有那么一瞬间 After a moment’s hesitation 犹豫片刻后 Having made up my mind 下定决心后 From that day on 从那以后 3.事态递进/恶化类 To make matters worse 更糟糕的是 4.外界助力类（他人影响） With his encouragement 在他的鼓励下 5.结尾升华回顾类（段落收尾、感悟） Looking back on the experience 回想起这次经历 5. Mini-Writing 一、 陌生环境：交代背景，营造氛围 写作重点：使用“时间＋地点＋人物心理”迅速交代故事背景： It was my first day at... The place was still quiet when I arrived... 1.这是我进入新学校的第一天，我对新的校园生活充满期待。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________2.当我到达时，校园里仍然很安静，于是我独自四处走了走，好奇地观察周围的一切。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 二、意外困难：制造突发事件，推动情节 写作重点：用“正在……这时……”和递进衔接语制造意外： I was doing... when... To make matters worse, ... 3.我正在查看教室门口的名单，突然发现上面没有自己的名字。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 4.更糟糕的是，上课铃响了，而我根本不知道自己应该去哪个教室。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 三、心理挣扎：描写情绪和身体反应 写作重点：避免只写“I was nervous”，应将心理、动作和身体反应结合起来： My mind went completely blank. My heart pounded wildly and my palms began to sweat. 5.有那么一瞬间，我的大脑一片空白，心里也七上八下。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 6.我的心怦怦直跳，手心开始冒汗，不知道该向谁求助。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 四、他人帮助：设置转折，缓解冲突 写作重点：通过“动作＋神态＋具体帮助”表现人物善意： pat someone gently on the shoulder give someone a reassuring smile lead someone to... 7.就在这时，一位老师注意到了我，并朝我走了过来。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 8.她轻轻拍了拍我的肩膀，给了我一个安慰的微笑，然后耐心地带我去了正确的教室。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 五、自我成长：情绪转变，升华主题 写作重点：结尾应从“事件结果”自然过渡到“人物成长”： With one’s encouragement, ... Looking back on the experience, I realized that... 9.在她的鼓励下，我深吸一口气，渐渐平静了下来。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 10.回想起这次经历，我意识到，面对陌生环境时，勇气并不意味着没有恐惧，而是在害怕时仍愿意向前迈步。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 6. Writing Task 一、微写作训练 你第一次参加学校英语演讲比赛。走上舞台后，你突然忘记了准备好的内容。你十分紧张，但在老师的鼓励下逐渐镇定下来，最终完成了演讲，并从中获得成长。 情节框架构思 陌生环境 第一次参加英语演讲比赛，走上舞台 ↓ 意外困难 突然忘记演讲内容 ↓ 心理挣扎 大脑空白、心跳加快、想要放弃 ↓ 他人帮助 老师给予鼓励的目光或微笑 ↓ 自我成长 恢复镇定、完成演讲、理解勇气的意义 二、翻译练习 这是我第一次参加学校英语演讲比赛。当我走上舞台时，台下所有人的目光都集中在我身上。突然，我忘记了准备好的内容。那一刻，我的大脑一片空白，心怦怦直跳，双手也开始发抖。我甚至想立刻逃下舞台。就在这时，我看见英语老师朝我露出了一个鼓励的微笑。在她的鼓励下，我深吸一口气，努力回忆演讲内容。渐渐地，我恢复了镇定，并最终完成了演讲。回想起这次经历，我意识到，真正的勇气不是没有恐惧，而是在恐惧中仍然选择继续前进。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 7. Self-Assessment 一、四维量表 评价维度 5分：优秀 4分：良好 3分：基本达标 1—2分：有待改进 情节融洽度 与前文情境紧密衔接；事件发展符合“困难—挣扎—帮助—解决”的因果链；转折自然，无情节跳跃 与前文基本衔接；主要情节合理，但个别转折略显突然或细节不足 能完成基本情节，但事件之间多为简单罗列，因果关系不够清楚 偏离原文情境；出现明显矛盾、突兀转折或不合理情节 人物一致性 人物身份、性格、情绪和行为与原文一致；情绪变化有充分的动作、心理或语言依据 人物基本一致；情绪与行为总体合理，但转变过程略显简单 人物身份未变，但行为或语言较模板化；情绪变化缺少铺垫 人物言行与原文设定明显冲突；情绪突然改变，缺乏合理依据 主题升华 主题由具体事件自然生发；能够体现勇气、成长、自信或互助，且避免空泛说教 主题明确，与故事内容有关，但表达较直接或略显模板化 有总结或感悟，但与前文事件联系较弱 无主题升华，或结尾只是生硬添加格言和道理 语言表达 动作、心理、神态描写结合自然；句式有变化；衔接准确；语言基本无误 表达清楚，使用了部分高级语块和复合句；存在少量错误但不影响理解 以简单句为主；有一定语法或搭配错误，表达基本可理解 错误较多；句子不完整或语义不清；大量照搬原文 二、范文赏析 It was my first time taking part in the school English speech contest. As I stepped onto the stage, all eyes were fixed on me. Suddenly, the speech I had practised many times disappeared from my mind. For a moment, my heart pounded wildly and my hands began to tremble. I wanted to escape, but then I noticed my English teacher giving me an encouraging smile. Her calm expression seemed to tell me not to give up. Taking a deep breath, I slowly recalled the opening sentence and continued my speech. Although my performance was not perfect, I finished it with confidence. Looking back on the experience, I realized that courage meant moving forward despite fear. 三、四维升格示例 评价维度 原句 主要问题 升格后 升格点 核心原则 情节融洽度 Suddenly, I forgot my speech. My teacher helped me. Finally, I finished it. 情节只有结果，没有过程；“老师如何帮助”“我如何恢复”均未交代，因果链断裂。 Suddenly, everything I had prepared disappeared from my mind. Just as I was about to step off the stage, I caught sight of my teacher, who gave me an encouraging nod. Taking a deep breath, I recalled the opening sentence and continued. 补充困难 everything... disappeared from my mind　设置危机 was about to step off the stage　引入帮助 gave me an encouraging nod　补充解决过程 took a deep breath、recalled the opening sentence 不只写“发生了什么”，还要写“为什么发生”和“如何解决”。 人物一致性 I was extremely nervous, but I immediately became confident and gave a perfect speech. 人物从“极度紧张”直接变成“自信”，缺少心理转变依据；perfect也与前文危机不匹配。 Although I was still nervous, my teacher’s reassuring smile gave me the courage to continue. My voice trembled at first, but it gradually became steadier as I went on. 保留原有情绪 I was still nervous　提供转变动因 my teacher’s reassuring smile　呈现渐变过程 trembled at first → became steadier　避免人物突变“没有直接从害怕跳到完全自信” 人物成长应当是“逐渐变化”，而不是“突然变脸”。 主题升华 I learned that where there is a will, there is a way. 格言与“演讲时忘词”的具体经历联系较弱，属于外加式升华。 Looking back on the experience, I realized that courage did not mean feeling no fear. It meant choosing to continue even when my voice was trembling. 回扣具体细节 my voice was trembling　提炼人物成长“从紧张演讲中理解勇气”　避免空泛说教“感悟由事件自然生成”　保持主题一致“与面对挑战、克服紧张高度对应” 主题升华应当从故事细节中“长出来”，而不是在结尾“贴上去”。 语言表达 I was nervous. My heart beat fast. My hands shook. I did not know what to do. 连续使用简单句，信息重复，缺少句式层次。 For a moment, my mind went completely blank. With my heart pounding wildly and my hands trembling, I stood on the stage, not knowing what to do next. 整合心理描写 my mind went completely blank　整合身体反应 with my heart pounding wildly and my hands trembling　使用非谓语结构 not knowing what to do next　补充情境位置 on the stage 语言升格不是堆砌生词，而是整合“心理＋身体反应＋动作＋情境”。 8. Homework 微情景段落迁移写作 要求：任选一个所给情境，按照“陌生环境 → 意外困难 → 心理挣扎 → 他人帮助 → 自我成长”的逻辑，完成一个约 80—100 词的英文段落。注意情节融洽、人物一致，并在结尾自然升华主题。 作业一：第一次参加志愿活动 你第一次参加学校组织的社区志愿活动。到达现场后，你发现自己被安排独立照顾一位行动不便的老人。由于缺乏经验，你一时不知所措，甚至担心自己会把事情做砸。后来，一位有经验的志愿者耐心示范并鼓励你。最终，你顺利完成了任务，也对责任与关爱有了新的认识。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 作业二：第一次参加篮球选拔 你第一次参加学校篮球队选拔。面对陌生的队员和教练，你既期待又紧张。训练过程中，你连续投篮失误，开始怀疑自己的能力，甚至想退出。就在这时，一名队友主动走过来，提醒你调整动作，并鼓励你继续尝试。最终，你完成了选拔，也明白了坚持和团队支持的重要性。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ $