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HEALTHY LIFESTYLE
Lesson 5 Using language
How to reuse language dexterously
Learn the writing techniques to enhance coherence and cohesion
Learn to reuse the vocabulary and expressions
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Read for structure
Analyze the organization of the letters. Label the paragraphs using the letters below. Some paragraphs may cover more than one topic.
A. identifying problem(s)
B. considering what to do
C. what he/she has done to change
D. the results
Letter 1
Para. 1--A identifying problem(s)
Para.2--B considering what to do
Para.3&4-- C what he/she has done to change
Para.5--D the results
Letter 2
Para. 1&2--A identifying problem(s)
Para.2&3--B considering what to do
Para. 4-- C what he/she has done to change
Para.5--D the results
How to transition smoothly
Problem
Decision
Action
Result
techniques to lead in to the ‘problem’:
target the reader (‘your’)
introducing the problem: general specific
a.
b.
c.
1
2
d.
e.
techniques to improve coherence:
start with the same theme
use referential words (this/that/the/such/those…)
new themes are developed from the previous theme(子主题)
make the ‘results’ resonate with the ‘problem’ by using synonyms
use time markers to highlight ‘changes’
写作效果不是落入玉盘的‘大珠小珠’,而应是润如酥的‘天街小雨’
Language reuse
--how to describe problems
Try to reuse the language to describe one aspect of your lifestyle that you would like to change
An example
…, I often felt stressed out and started to play video games to relax myself. I became distracted in class and couldn’t focus on any other things. Most worrying, I gradually got so absorbed that I couldn’t help thinking about them day and night. This has made me feel rather worn out.
Language reuse
--how to describe decisions
problem---(a stimulation)---decision
Try to reuse the language to describe your decision
An example
After realizing the significance of adjusting my lifestyle from the lesson, I made up my mind to quit those games and take control of my life.
Language reuse
--how to describe actions
verb phrases to list the actions
describe the effect (can be concise)
Try to reuse the language to describe your actions (try not to list them like a ‘menu’ )
An example
……Whenever I wanted to play computer games, I went jogging instead, which not only enhanced my quality of life but also improved my health.
Language reuse
--how to describe results
time markers and comparatives to indicate “changes”
emotions stressed by “CAN” and the quote
Try to reuse the language to describe your results
An example
….To make choices about myself is within my own power and I can change myself for the better.
Let’s revise and exchange our drafts
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