专题20读后续写之动作描写（培优专练）（全国通用）2027年高考英语一轮复习高效培优系列

**基本信息** 聚焦读后续写动作描写，构建“动词精准化-动作链条化-动作情感化”三阶训练体系，以真题与模拟题载法，提升语言精准表达与逻辑链条构建能力。 **专项设计** |模块|题量/典例|方法提炼|知识逻辑| |----|-----------|----------|----------| |真题·命题感知|6篇（含2025全国I卷等改编真题）|动词精准化（具体动词替代泛泛动词）、动作链条化（拆解连贯动词链）、动作情感化（动作暗示内心情感）|从基础动词选择到动作序列构建，再到情感表达，形成“词-句-情”递进逻辑| |进阶·强化演练|3篇（深圳一模等模拟题）|强化动词替换、链条拆解、情感暗示技巧|针对高频考点，巩固方法迁移应用能力| |拔高·模拟预测|6篇（广州综测等预测题）|综合运用三阶方法，提升复杂情境动作描写能力|对接高考命题趋势，聚焦思维品质与语言能力融合|

专题20读后续写之动作描写（培优专练） 目录 真题·命题感知............................................................................................................................................................01 进阶·强化演练............................................................................................................................................................10 拔高·模拟预测............................................................................................................................................................15 真题·命题感知 第一部分：动词精准化 Passage 1 2026年全国模拟题（真题改编） 跨境助人原文深度改编 阅读原文 Due to a heavy snowstorm, my flight to Prague was delayed. I landed in Vienna with only 30 minutes left to catch the last cross-country bus. I sprinted out of the airport and hailed the first taxi frantically. That was how I met Gunter, the taxi driver. I told him my destination, yet he frowned and shook his head repeatedly, unable to figure out where the bus station was. I repeated my words slowly, my voice trembling with anxiety. Just as I was about to burst into tears and give up, Gunter pulled out his old mobile phone and dialed his friend. After a long conversation, he turned to me and restarted the car without a word. 续写段首给定 Paragraph 1: Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a small bus stop. Paragraph 2: Before I boarded the bus, I reached for my wallet to pay him. 原题侧重 “善意助人” 叙事，改编后定向强化动作描写考点： 第一段要求设计下车 - 指路 - 安抚连贯动作链，用精准动词体现司机热心； 第二段要求设计掏钱 - 推辞 - 赠送动作链条，通过手部、肢体动作写出愧疚、感动两种情绪； 禁止使用 sad/happy/anxious 等直白形容词，全部靠动作传递情感。 满分参考范文 Paragraph 1 Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a small bus stop. He twisted the key to cut off the engine, hopped out of the taxi and hurried to my side. He unloaded my suitcase from the trunk, pointed firmly at the distant bus and patted my shoulder gently, gesturing me not to worry. Then he glanced at his watch, grabbed a hot chocolate from the passenger seat and handed it to me to warm my frozen hands. 动作链拆解：twisted→hopped out→hurried→unloaded→pointed→patted→glanced→grabbed→handed（精准动词串联，温柔动作体现善意） Paragraph 2 Before I boarded the bus, I reached for my wallet to pay him. Gunter waved his hands violently, pushing my wallet back into my pocket. I insisted, pulling out several bank notes and stretching them toward him. He shook his head, tapped the bus sign and gave me a warm thumbs-up, motioning me to get on board quickly. I clutched the chocolate tightly, tears blurring my sight as I stepped onto the bus and waved back at him nonstop. reached→waved→pushing→pulling→stretching→shook→tapped→tapped→clutched→stepped→waved（推拉、紧握、挥手动作承载愧疚与感激） 分层详解（紧扣三大动作考点） 动词精准化（替换笼统低级动词） 低分笼统词 高分精准动词 情感作用 open the car twisted the key / hopped out 写出司机干脆利落、主动帮忙 give me drink grabbed…handed it to me 随手递热饮，凸显细心体贴 say no to money waved violently / pushed back 大幅度动作凸显坚决不收车费 Passage 2 2025 全国新高考 I 卷读后续写 家庭宠物矛盾原文改编 阅读原文 I held a small family party at my new house, preparing snacks and tidying the backyard for guests. My brother brought his big dog Toby, an energetic puppy that easily knocked over cups and scared the kids. I asked him to keep Toby in the backyard, and everything went smoothly until supper. Suddenly heavy rain poured down, forcing everyone indoors. Toby ran wildly inside, leaving muddy paw prints all over my clean wooden floor. I grew annoyed and asked my brother to take Toby home immediately. He looked upset, grabbed Toby’s leash and left without saying goodbye. We didn’t contact each other for days. I texted him to invite them over again, but he replied coldly: “Not a chance.” 续写段首给定 Paragraph 1: One rainy afternoon, I spotted Toby’s ball lying on my backyard lawn. Paragraph 2: My brother’s eyes softened the moment he saw me holding Toby’s toy. 命题改编说明 原题侧重亲情和解，改编聚焦动作描写提分训练： 第一段设计发现小球 - 回忆 - 出门送玩具」动作链，动作体现内心后悔； 第二段设计递玩具 - 狗狗扑抱 - 兄弟和解」动作链条，肢体动作完成情绪转变； 严格要求：全程不用 regretful/sorry/happy 心理形容词，依靠动作表达愧疚、释然。 满分参考范文 Paragraph 1 One rainy afternoon, I spotted Toby’s ball lying on my backyard lawn. I bent down slowly, brushed off the mud on the rubber ball and held it tightly in my palm. Memories of Toby’s cheerful jumps flooded my mind. I snatched an umbrella from the doorway, slipped on my rain boots and hurried toward my brother’s apartment across the street, stepping carefully through puddles. 动作链拆解：bent down→brushed off→held→snatched→slipped→hurried→stepped（缓慢、紧握动作凸显内心懊悔） Paragraph 2 My brother’s eyes softened the moment he saw me holding Toby’s toy. Before he could speak, Toby dashed out of the door and leaped onto my legs, licking my hands wildly. I knelt down, stroked Toby’s wet fur and stretched the ball toward my brother. He hesitated for a second, then reached out to take it, patting my arm lightly. We stood side by side under the umbrella, watching Toby chase the ball in the rain. 动作链拆解：dashed→leaped→licking→knelt→stroked→stretched→hesitated→reached→patting（跳跃、抚摸、轻拍动作完成矛盾化解） 分层详解（三大动作考点拆解） 动词精准化（替换基础动词） 普通动词 精准高阶动词 情感表达 pick up ball bent down, brushed off mud 弯腰擦拭，体现重视与愧疚 run to brother hurried, stepping carefully through puddles 冒雨赶路，写出主动求和的诚意 touch dog stroked his wet fur 轻柔抚摸，放下之前的烦躁 第二部分：动作链条化 Passage 1 2026年全国模拟题（真题改编）（机场出租车助人原文深度改编） 原文材料 A heavy snowstorm delayed my flight to Prague. I landed in Vienna with only half an hour left for the last cross-country bus. I sprinted out of the airport and hailed a taxi in panic, which was driven by an old man named Gunter. I told him the bus station, yet he had no idea where it was. I repeated slowly, my voice shaking with anxiety. Just as I was ready to cry and give up, Gunter took out his worn phone and called his friend for directions. After a long talk, he started the car without extra words. 续写给定段首 Paragraph 1: Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a lonely bus stop. Paragraph 2: Before I stepped onto the bus, I reached into my bag to pay him. 改编命题导向（动作链专项） 第一段：构建停车→下车帮扶→安抚完整助人动作链，拆分连贯肢体动作； 第二段：构建掏钱→对方推拒→送别冲突型动作链，用连续手部、肢体动作体现感激与推辞； 硬性要求：每段至少一组 4 连动词动作链，不堆砌心理形容词，靠连续动作推进故事。 满分参考范文（标注动作链） Paragraph 1 Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a lonely bus stop. He twisted the key to kill the engine, hopped out of the taxi, dragged my suitcase from the trunk and guided me toward the waiting bus. He glanced at his watch, grabbed a cup of hot cocoa from the passenger seat and pressed it into my numb hands, patting my shoulder to calm my worry. 核心动作链拆解 停车帮扶链：twisted → hopped out → dragged → guided（4 个连续动作，完整还原下车搬行李全过程） 安抚暖心链：glanced → grabbed → pressed → patting（递进动作，体现司机细心） Paragraph 2 Before I stepped onto the bus, I reached into my bag to pay him. Gunter waved his hands wildly, pushed my wallet back and shook his head firmly. I insisted, pulling out bank notes and stretching them toward him. He tapped the bus sign, gave me a thumbs-up and gestured me to hurry aboard. I clutched the cocoa tightly, turned back and waved repeatedly at him until the bus pulled away. 核心动作链拆解 推辞链条：waved → pushed → shook（连贯拒绝动作） 送别链条：tapped → gave → gestured；clutched → turned back → waved（双向完整动作链） 分层详解（紧扣动作链条化考点） 动作链构建逻辑 遵循「先主干行为，再补充细节小动作」，把笼统的 “司机帮忙” 拆解为熄火、下车、搬行李、引路，有明确时间先后，画面动态连贯。 高分句式（动作链万能结构） 主语 + 动词 1, 动词 2, and 动词 3（并列谓语三连动作）；主句 + doing 伴随动作（补充次级小动作） 例：He grabbed the drink and handed it to me, patting my arm gently. 避坑点 不要零散单句拆分动作；禁止无序堆砌动词；每条动作链对应一个情节节点（帮扶 / 推辞 / 送别），服务故事推进。 低分 vs 高分对比 低分零散句：He stopped the car. He took my bag. He gave me hot drink. 高分动作链：He twisted the key, hopped out and dragged my suitcase, grabbing hot cocoa to warm my hands. Passage 2 2025 全国I卷读后续写（家庭宠物矛盾原文改编） 原文材料 I held a family party at my new house and tidied the backyard for guests. My brother brought his energetic dog Toby, who knocked over cups and scared little kids. I asked him to keep Toby outdoors, and everything went well until sudden heavy rain forced everyone inside. Toby ran indoors wildly, leaving muddy paw prints all over my wooden floor. I grew upset and told my brother to take Toby home right away. He looked hurt, grabbed the dog’s leash and left without a word. We lost contact for days. I texted to invite them again, but he replied coldly. 续写给定段首 Paragraph 1: One rainy afternoon, I spotted Toby’s rubber ball lying on the wet lawn. Paragraph 2: My brother’s expression softened the instant he saw me holding the toy. 改编命题导向（动作链专项，与题一无重复） 第一段：构建发现小球→擦拭→冒雨出门求和动作链，慢动作拆解愧疚行为； 第二段：构建小狗扑身→递玩具→兄弟和解破冰动作链，融合动物 + 人物双重动作链条； 区分点：题一是陌生人互助手部 / 乘车动作链，本题是家庭亲情、户外、宠物互动动作链，场景完全不重复。 满分参考范文（标注动作链） Paragraph 1 One rainy afternoon, I spotted Toby’s rubber ball lying on the wet lawn. I bent down slowly, brushed off the mud with my palm and held the ball tightly in my fist. I snatched an umbrella by the door, slipped on rain boots and hurried across the street to my brother’s flat, stepping carefully over puddles. 核心动作链拆解 捡拾愧疚链：bent down → brushed off → held（缓慢连贯动作，体现内心自责） 冒雨赶路链：snatched → slipped → hurried → stepping（4 连动作，完整写出主动道歉全过程） Paragraph 2 My brother’s expression softened the instant he saw me holding the toy. Toby dashed out of the doorway, leaped onto my legs and licked my palms nonstop. I knelt down, stroked his wet fur and stretched the ball toward my brother. He hesitated briefly, reached out to take it and patted my arm lightly. We stood side by side under the umbrella, watching Toby chase the ball in drizzle. 核心动作链拆解 宠物破冰链：dashed → leaped → licked（小狗连续动作打破僵局） 和解动作链：knelt → stroked → stretched；hesitated → reached → patted（人物双向连贯动作，完成矛盾化解） 分层详解（动作链条化专项） 双线动作链设计（本题特色） 同时设计动物动作链+人物动作链，两条链条同步推进情节，丰富画面层次，区别于第一题纯人物动作。 动作链时序技巧 心理情绪不直接写，全部通过动作快慢区分：愧疚用 slowly bent down；诚意用 hurried、stepped carefully；和解用 softly stroked、lightly patted。 考场可直接套用动作链模板 模板 1（主动弥补）：主语 + bent down, brushed..., grabbed..., and rushed... 模板 2（和解互动）：Animal dashed..., leaped..., licking...; I knelt, stroked..., stretching... 得分关键 每一条动作链必须服务情节转折：第一段动作链推动 “主动求和”，第二段动作链推动 “矛盾和解”，动作链条与故事主线绑定，不写无关零散动作。 第三部分：动作情感化 Passage 1 2026年全国模拟题（真题改编）（风雪出租车助人原文深度改编） 原文材料 A heavy snowstorm delayed my flight to Prague. I landed in Vienna with only 30 minutes left to catch the last cross-country bus. I sprinted out of the airport and hailed a taxi in panic, driven by an elderly driver Gunter. I tried to tell him the bus station, yet he had no clue about the location. I repeated my destination slowly, my voice shaking out of desperation. Just as tears welled up in my eyes, Gunter pulled out his old mobile phone and called his friend for directions. After a long conversation, he restarted the car silently and rushed toward the station. 续写给定段首 Paragraph 1: Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a lonely bus stop. Paragraph 2: Before I stepped onto the bus, I reached into my bag to pay him. 命题专项要求（动作情感化定向训练） 第一段：用舒缓、轻柔的连续动作体现司机的善良、体贴，全程不出现 kind/warm-hearted； 第二段：用拉扯、紧握、反复挥手等肢体动作外化 “愧疚、万分感激”，不用 grateful/moved； 硬性规则：所有情绪全部依附动作体现，无直白心理描写句。 满分参考范文 Paragraph 1 Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a lonely bus stop. He twisted the ignition to cut off power, hopped out and hurried round to the trunk. He dragged my heavy suitcase out steadily, then turned to me, tilting his chin toward the waiting bus. He glanced at my frozen red hands, grabbed a steaming cup of cocoa from the front seat and pressed it firmly into my palms, patting my upper arm lightly to calm my fluster. 情感动作拆解 dragged steadily、tilted chin：沉稳动作，体现司机耐心温和； grabbed cocoa、pressed into palms、patting lightly：轻柔手部动作，藏起善意与安抚。 Paragraph 2 Before I stepped onto the bus, I reached into my bag to pay him. Gunter waved both hands wildly, pushing my wallet back hard into my backpack and shaking his head from side to side. I insisted, fishing out several banknotes and stretching them forward toward him. He tapped the bus sign and gestured me to hurry aboard. I clutched the warm cocoa tight against my chest, spun around and waved my arm nonstop until the taxi faded into the snow. 情感动作拆解 waved wildly、pushed back：大幅度拒绝动作，凸显他不求回报； clutched tight、spun around、waved nonstop：紧握、不停挥手，无声宣泄满心感激。 分层详解（动作情感化核心考点） 低分直白写法 vs 高分动作情感写法对比 低分（直白抒情） 高分（动作承载情绪） |情绪逻辑 Gunter was very warm and kind. | He grabbed hot cocoa and pressed it into my frozen hands, patting my arm gently. 温柔善意全部靠手部小动作体现 I was deeply moved and grateful. I clutched the cocoa tight against my chest, waving repeatedly at him through heavy snow. | 紧握、挥手动作替代 “感动” 一词 动作情感化底层逻辑 人物内在情绪会改变肢体幅度： 温柔善意：动作幅度小、速度慢（pat lightly、press firmly）； 坚决推辞：动作幅度大、力度强（wave wildly、push hard）； 满心感激：收紧、反复重复性动作（clutch tight、wave nonstop）。 考场避坑要点 不要动作 + 情绪形容词堆砌（如：He patted me gently and he was warm.）；动作本身自带情绪，无需额外点明。 可复用句式模板 主语 + 连续动作 1, 动作 2 and 动作 3, doing 细微辅助动作（暗藏情绪） 例：I clutched the cup tightly, turning back to wave at him constantly. Passage 2 2026年全国模拟题（真题改编）（越野赛跑自卑少年原文改编） 原文材料 It was the school cross-country running race. Students warmed up along the forest track, yet I spotted David standing alone beside the fence. David suffered from a brain disease, which made him run clumsily and fall behind every classmate. Other kids laughed at his strange running posture, so he lost all confidence and refused to join the race. I walked over to comfort him, but he lowered his head and avoided my eye contact. The coach told me he had given David the right to quit, but I believed David deserved a chance to try. 续写给定段首 Paragraph 1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. Paragraph 2: I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. 命题专项要求 第一段：用低头、蜷缩、抠手指、缓慢抬眼等收缩类小动作外化少年的自卑、胆怯、自我否定，不用 shy/inferior； 第二段：用攥紧拳头、挺直脊背、稳步迈步舒展型动作体现少年鼓起勇气、重拾自信，不用 brave/confident； 区分点：题一是陌生人温情感激类动作，本题是少年内心自卑→勇敢蜕变的心理外化动作，场景、情绪、动作体系无重复。 满分参考范文 Paragraph 1 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. He hunched his shoulders inward, bending his head deep toward his chest and picking nervously at the loose thread on his sportswear. After a long silence, he slowly lifted his chin, his eyes flickering upward for just a second before he stared down at his trembling toes again. I stretched my palm out beside his hand without touching him, waiting patiently for him to open up. 情感动作拆解 hunched shoulders、bent head deep：身体向内蜷缩，外化自卑封闭； picking thread、flickering eyes、stared at toes：局促细碎小动作，凸显胆怯不安。 Paragraph 2 I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. He paused at the line, clenched both fists at his sides and drew a deep breath. He straightened his hunched back slowly, shifted his weight steadily and planted his feet firmly on the ground. When the starting whistle blew, he swung his arms wide and stepped forward without hesitation, no longer shrinking away from the surrounding gazes. 情感动作拆解 clenched fists、drew deep breath：蓄力动作，代表内心挣扎后鼓起勇气； straightened back、swung arms wide：舒展肢体动作，象征放下自卑、重拾底气。 分层详解（动作情感化专项拆解） 情绪对应动作规律（本题专属） 自卑怯懦：身体向内收缩（hunched、bent head、flicker eyes、pick clothes）； 鼓起勇气：蓄力收紧（clench fists）； 自信蜕变：肢体向外舒展（straighten back、swing arms wide）。 动作情感化升级技巧：动静对比 前文全程细碎、拘谨小动作；第二段全部舒展、有力大动作，用动作形态反差凸显人物内心情绪转折，无需文字点明心理变化。 低分 vs 高分示例 低分：David felt ashamed and lacked confidence. 高分：He hunched his shoulders, picking nervously at his clothes, daring not to lift his eyes. 通用答题思路 拿到续写段首先判断人物情绪：自卑 / 恐惧 / 愧疚 / 感动 / 释然，再匹配对应收缩 / 舒展 / 急促 / 舒缓动作链，全程不用情绪形容词。 进阶·强化演练 Passage 1 动词精准化（用具体动词替代泛泛动词） 2026届广东省深圳市高三年级第一次调研考试（深圳一模） 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The annual school sports day had finally arrived. For weeks, Sarah had trained tirelessly for the 800-meter race, determined to prove herself after last year‘s disappointing performance. As she stood at the starting line, her heart pounded against her chest. Her coach’s words echoed in her mind: “Trust your training. The moment you hear the gun, give it everything you‘ve got.” The gun went off. Sarah pushed forward, her legs carrying her swiftly around the track. By the final lap, she was in second place, but the leader was still several meters ahead. Her lungs burned and her muscles screamed for rest, but she refused to slow down. With every ounce of strength she had left, she surged forward, crossing the finish line in a blur of motion. The crowd erupted, but Sarah barely heard them. She leaned forward, gasping for air, her hands resting on her knees. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: When Sarah finally lifted her head, she saw her mother making her way through the crowd. Paragraph 2: That evening, Sarah sat quietly in her room, the gold medal resting in her palm. 【详解·动词精准化】 本题的写作重点在于用具体、形象的动词替换笼统的泛词，使人物动作“传神”，暗示其心理状态。 Paragraph 1 关键动作解析： 场景 泛词（不推荐） 精准动词（推荐） 解析 看到母亲穿过人群 saw her mother walking through spotted her mother elbowing her way through “spot”强调在人群中费力地看到；“elbow”形象写出母亲用手肘推开人群的急切-3 冲向母亲 ran to her mother dashed / rushed over to her “dash”体现冲刺般的急切和兴奋 母亲拥抱她 her mother hugged her her mother wrapped her arms around her / pulled her into a tight embrace “wrapped”展现拥抱的紧密和温暖 说话（激动时） said excitedly exclaimed / gasped “exclaim”体现激动大喊；“gasp”体现喘着气说，贴合刚跑完的状态 Paragraph 2 关键动作解析： 场景 泛词（不推荐） 精准动词（推荐） 解析 拿起奖牌 took the medal lifted / picked up / held the medal “lift”体现郑重的动作 抚摸奖牌 touched the medal stroked / traced her fingers over the medal “stroke”体现爱惜的抚摸；“trace”体现沿着奖牌轮廓慢慢描画 把奖牌放回盒子 put the medal in the box placed / laid the medal gently in the box “place gently”体现珍视和郑重 微笑 smiled a smile spread across / crossed her face 用面部动作暗示喜悦心情 【参考范文片段】 When Sarah finally lifted her head, she spotted her mother elbowing her way through the crowd, her face glowing with pride. Sarah dashed over and her mother pulled her into a tight embrace. “I’m so proud of you!” she exclaimed, her voice trembling with emotion. Sarah buried her face in her mother‘s shoulder, feeling the warmth of the moment. Wiping the sweat from her forehead, Sarah murmured, “I couldn’t have done it without you.” That evening, Sarah sat quietly in her room, the gold medal resting in her palm. She lifted it slowly, traced her fingers over the engraved words, and then held it up to the light, watching it gleam. A soft sigh escaped her lips as she placed the medal gently back into its box. A smile spread across her face, and she clutched the box to her chest, as if preserving the memory forever. Passage 2 动作链条化（将动作拆解为连贯的动词链） 2025届浙江省新阵地教育联盟高三10月联考（浙江高考模拟卷） 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The autumn leaves painted the campus in shades of gold and brown. Emily had been practicing her piano piece for months, preparing for the annual school talent show. Her grandmother, a retired music teacher, had taught her the melody when she was just a child. “The music is already inside you,” her grandmother used to say. “Just let it flow.” But when the night of the show arrived, Emily’s confidence crumbled. The bright stage lights, the sea of expectant faces, and the enormous grand piano—all of it overwhelmed her. She walked onto the stage, her legs feeling like jelly. She sat down at the piano, her fingers hovering uncertainly over the keys. The audience waited in silence. Emily closed her eyes, trying to find the music within. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Taking a deep, shaky breath, Emily placed her fingers on the cold ivory keys. Paragraph 2: When the final chord faded into the air, Emily rose from the bench. 【详解·动作链条化】 本题的写作重点是将一个笼统的动作分解成2-3个连贯的细小动作，形成“动作链”，让描写具有画面感和节奏感。 动作链条化核心公式： 句式一： 主语 + 动作A + 动作B + and + 动作C（三个并列谓语，按时间顺序发生） 句式二： Having done…（先发生的动作），主语 + 核心动作… Paragraph 1 动作链条设计： 要描写的场景 动作链（连贯拆解） 技巧说明 开始弹奏 placed her fingers on the keys → closed her eyes → began to play 三连动：放置→闭眼→开始 手指舞动 danced across the keys → flowed with the rhythm → swayed gently 用比喻动词形成动作流 从紧张到流畅 pressed down a single note → hesitated for a moment → let the melody flow 先写细小动作对比，再写大动作突破 Paragraph 2 动作链条设计： 要描写的场景 动作链（连贯拆解） 技巧说明 演奏结束 lifted her hands → held them in the air → lowered them to her lap 手部动作的三连动 起身面对观众 rose from the bench → turned to the audience → bowed deeply 起身→转向→鞠躬，形成完整动作链 【参考范文片段】 Taking a deep, shaky breath, Emily placed her fingers on the cold ivory keys. She pressed down a single, uncertain note, hesitated for a brief moment, and then let the melody flow through her. Her fingers began to dance across the keys, flowed with the rhythm, and swayed gently with each passing chord. The music rose, fell, and soared like a bird finding its wings. She leaned into the melody, swayed with the beat, and lost herself completely in the music. When the final chord faded into the air, Emily lifted her hands, held them trembling above the keys for a moment, and then lowered them to her lap. She rose from the bench slowly, turned to face the audience, and bowed deeply. As she straightened up, tears of joy welled up in her eyes. She stepped off the stage, walked toward her grandmother, and fell into her open arms. Passage 3 动作情感化（用动作暗示人物内心情感） 2025届江苏省苏锡常镇四市高三一模（江苏高考模拟卷） 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Jack had always been a quiet boy, preferring the company of books to people. His classmates often teased him for being shy, but he never let it bother him—at least, not on the surface. In truth, the loneliness weighed on him like a heavy coat that he could never take off. One rainy afternoon, Jack found an old, dusty violin in his grandmother‘s attic. When he touched the strings, a single note rang out—clear and beautiful. Something stirred inside him. He spent the next few months secretly teaching himself to play, pouring every emotion he had into the music. For the first time, he felt like he could speak without words. When his school announced a talent show, Jack’s friends urged him to sign up. He hesitated, his hands trembling as he filled out the form. He told himself it was a chance to prove something. But as the day approached, his confidence began to crack. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: The night of the talent show, Jack stood backstage, clutching his violin case. Paragraph 2: After the performance, Jack stepped off the stage, his hands still shaking. 【详解·动作情感化】 本题的写作重点是用人物的动作和肢体语言来“展现”情感（Show），而不是直接“告诉”情感（Tell） 。通过精准的动作描写，让读者“看见”人物内心。 动作情感化核心技巧： 情感状态 对应的动作/肢体语言 例句 紧张/恐惧 握拳、咬唇、膝盖发软、出汗 His hands clenched into fists 羞愧/尴尬 低下头、脸红、不敢对视 He hung his head in shame 愤怒 猛推、握紧拳头、身体僵硬 He slammed the door shut 感动/温暖 眼中含泪、微笑、拥抱 Tears welled up in his eyes 决心/勇敢 挺直肩膀、深吸一口气、大步走 She squared her shoulders and strode forward Paragraph 1 动作情感化设计： 人物情感 用动作“展现”（Show） 解析 极度紧张 clutched the violin case tightly, his knuckles turning white “紧握”+“指节发白”体现紧张到用力过猛 手心出汗 wiped his sweaty palms on his trousers 用“擦汗”的动作体现内心焦虑 自我鼓励 took a shaky breath, squared his shoulders, and strode onto the stage 深呼吸→挺直肩膀→大步走，体现强迫自己勇敢-10 情感释放 closed his eyes, pressed the bow to the strings, and let the music speak 用“闭眼”“让音乐诉说”体现情感投入 Paragraph 2 动作情感化设计： 人物情感 用动作“展现”（Show） 解析 仍然紧张/恍惚 his hands trembled as he wiped the sweat from his forehead “颤抖的手”延续紧张感 从紧张到释然 let out a long breath, his shoulders slumping in relief “长舒一口气”+“肩膀下垂”体现放松 喜悦与成就感 a genuine smile spread across his face as he clutched the violin to his heart “笑容展开”+“把小提琴抱在心口”展现珍视与喜悦 【参考范文片段】 The night of the talent show, Jack stood backstage, clutching his violin case so tightly that his knuckles turned white. He wiped his sweaty palms on his trousers and peeked through the curtain at the audience. His heart pounded so loudly he thought everyone could hear it. He swallowed hard and closed his eyes, remembering his grandmother’s words. When his name was called, he took a shaky breath, squared his shoulders, and strode onto the stage. He placed the violin under his chin, pressed the bow to the strings, and let the music speak for him. After the performance, Jack stepped off the stage, his hands still trembling as he wiped the sweat from his forehead. He let out a long breath he hadn‘t realized he’d been holding, and his shoulders slumped in relief. His friends rushed over, patted him on the back, and grinned from ear to ear. For the first time, Jack didn‘t look away. He lifted his head, a genuine smile spreading across his face. He clutched the violin to his heart, feeling the warmth of the moment—not just the applause, but the quiet realization that he had finally found his voice. 拔高·模拟预测 动词精准化 Passage 1 2026届广东省广州市普通高中毕业班综合测试 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 For as long as Mia could remember, she had been the girl who always said yes. Yes to extra homework. Yes to covering her friend‘s shift. Yes to staying late to help organize the school event. Her kindness was genuine, but somewhere along the way, she had forgotten how to say no. Her friends adored her for it; her teachers praised her for it. But Mia felt like a balloon that was slowly being filled with too much air—sooner or later, she would burst. It happened on a Tuesday. Her best friend, Chloe, asked her to swap shifts for the third time that month. Her history teacher assigned an extra research paper—due the same day as her math final. And her mother called, asking her to babysit her little brother that evening. Mia opened her mouth to say yes, as she always did, but no sound came out. She nodded numbly, hung up the phone, and stared at her reflection in the mirror. The girl staring back looked exhausted. Something had to change. The next morning, Mia walked into school with a decision. Today, she would say no. But when Chloe approached her with that familiar hopeful smile, Mia’s resolve began to crack. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Mia took a shaky step back, her hands clasped tightly behind her back. Paragraph 2: That afternoon, Mia sat alone in the library, the weight on her chest finally beginning to lift. 【详解·动词精准化】 本题聚焦“讨好型人格”第一次说“不”的场景，需要用精准动词外化内心的挣扎。以下是核心动词替换建议： 场景 泛词（不推荐） 精准动词（推荐） 解析 后退 walked back took a shaky step back “shaky”暗示腿在抖，“step back”体现退缩 手放身后 put her hands behind clasped her hands tightly behind her back “clasp”体现用力扣住，暗示内心的紧张与防御 咬唇 bit her lip bit her lower lip 咬下唇比笼统的“咬唇”更具体，体现内心挣扎 回避眼神 looked away avoided eye contact / dropped her gaze “avoid”暗示刻意回避，“dropped”体现羞愧低头 低声说话 said softly murmured / whispered “murmur”体现含糊、不确定的低语，“whisper”更具画面感 释然微笑 smiled a small smile played at the corners of her mouth “play”这一动词让微笑仿佛有了生命，生动传神 【参考范文片段】 Mia took a shaky step back, her hands clasped tightly behind her back. She bit her lower lip and dropped her gaze to the floor, avoiding Chloe‘s hopeful eyes. Her heart pounded so loudly she was sure the whole hallway could hear it. She swallowed hard, squared her shoulders, and forced herself to meet Chloe’s gaze. “I‘m sorry,” she murmured, her voice barely above a whisper, but her chin lifting slightly as she spoke. “I can’t swap shifts this time. I need to take care of myself too.” That afternoon, Mia sat alone in the library, the weight on her chest finally beginning to lift. She leaned back in her chair, and a small, genuine smile played at the corners of her mouth as she replayed the morning‘s conversation in her mind. For the first time in months, she felt she could breathe again. Passage 2 2026届浙江省杭州市高三年级教学质量检测 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eva had always been afraid of the dark. Her fear was not just a childhood phase—it had followed her into her teenage years, lurking in every shadow and every creak of the floorboard. So when her school announced an overnight camping trip to the mountains, her heart sank. But her best friend Lily had convinced her to come. “You can‘t let fear control your life,” Lily had said. “This is your chance to prove you’re braver than you think.” The first day went smoothly. The hiking, the fresh air, the laughter around the campfire—Eva almost forgot her fear. But when night fell and the campfire died down, the darkness crept in like a living thing. Eva lay in her sleeping bag, wide awake, listening to the strange sounds of the forest. Suddenly, she heard a faint cry—something between a whimper and a howl. It was coming from outside the tent. Her heart raced, but she knew she couldn‘t just lie there. She had to do something. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Summoning all her courage, Eva unzipped the tent and stepped out into the darkness. Paragraph 2: When she finally returned to the tent, her hands were still trembling, but her face wore a smile. 【详解·动词精准化】 本题场景为黑暗中的恐惧与勇气，需要用精准动词体现恐惧中行动的“小心翼翼”与“鼓足勇气”。 场景 泛词（不推荐） 精准动词（推荐） 解析 拉开帐篷拉链 opened the tent unzipped the tent 具体描述“拉开拉链”的动作，而非泛泛的“打开” 把头探出去 looked out poked her head out “poke”体现小心翼翼地探出头 蹑手蹑脚地走 walked quietly crept / tiptoed “creep”体现恐惧中猫着腰、贴着地移动 拿手电筒 took a flashlight grabbed a flashlight “grab”体现快速、紧张地抓起 屏住呼吸 stopped breathing held her breath “hold”体现有意识地憋住气息，暗示紧张 发现小狗 saw a puppy spotted a small puppy “spot”体现黑暗中费力辨认、突然看到 将小狗抱起 picked up the puppy lifted the trembling creature into her arms “lifted”体现小心的托起，而非粗鲁的抓起 爬回帐篷 went back into the tent crawled back into the tent “crawl”体现疲惫或小心的爬入姿势 【参考范文片段】 Summoning all her courage, Eva unzipped the tent and poked her head out into the pitch-black night. Her heart hammering, she grabbed a flashlight, crept toward the faint sound, and held her breath with each step. The cry grew clearer—a tiny, helpless whimper. She shone the light ahead and spotted a small, shivering puppy trapped between two rocks. Without hesitation, she rushed forward, knelt down, and gently lifted the trembling creature into her arms. When she finally returned to the tent, her hands were still trembling, but her face wore a smile. She crawled back inside, carefully placed the puppy on her sleeping bag, and wrapped it in her jacket to keep it warm. The puppy nuzzled against her, letting out a soft, grateful whimper. Eva took a shaky breath and realized that fear wasn’t something to run from—it was something to face, one small step at a time. 动作链条化 Passage 3 2025届浙江省新阵地教育联盟高三10月联考 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The autumn leaves painted the campus in shades of gold and brown. Emily had been practicing her piano piece for months, preparing for the annual school talent show. Her grandmother, a retired music teacher, had taught her the melody when she was just a child. “The music is already inside you,” her grandmother used to say. “Just let it flow.” But when the night of the show arrived, Emily‘s confidence crumbled. The bright stage lights, the sea of expectant faces, and the enormous grand piano—all of it overwhelmed her. She walked onto the stage, her legs feeling like jelly. She sat down at the piano, her fingers hovering uncertainly over the keys. The audience waited in silence. Emily closed her eyes, trying to find the music within. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Taking a deep, shaky breath, Emily placed her fingers on the cold ivory keys. Paragraph 2: When the final chord faded into the air, Emily rose from the bench. 【详解·动作链条化】 本题的核心是将演奏钢琴这一大场景拆解为连贯的“动作链”，让描写具有画面感和节奏感。 动作链条化核心公式： 句式一： 主语 + 动作A + 动作B + and + 动作C（三个并列谓语，按时间顺序发生） 句式二： Having done… / 非谓语动词，主语 + 核心动作 Paragraph 1 动作链条设计： 要描写的场景 动作链（连贯拆解） 技巧说明 开始弹奏 placed her fingers on the keys → closed her eyes → began to play 三连动：放置→闭眼→开始 手指舞动 danced across the keys → flowed with the rhythm → swayed gently 用比喻动词形成动作流 从紧张到流畅 pressed down a single note → hesitated for a moment → let the melody flow 先写犹豫再写突破，形成对比 Paragraph 2 动作链条设计： 要描写的场景 动作链（连贯拆解） 技巧说明 演奏结束 lifted her hands → held them in the air → lowered them to her lap 手部三连动 起身面对观众 rose from the bench → turned to the audience → bowed deeply 起身→转向→鞠躬，完整动作链 【参考范文片段】 Taking a deep, shaky breath, Emily placed her fingers on the cold ivory keys. She pressed down a single, uncertain note, hesitated for a brief moment, and then let the melody flow through her. Her fingers began to dance across the keys, flowed with the rhythm, and swayed gently with each passing chord. The music rose, fell, and soared like a bird finding its wings. She leaned into the melody, swayed with the beat, and lost herself completely in the music. When the final chord faded into the air, Emily lifted her hands, held them trembling above the keys for a moment, and then lowered them to her lap. She rose from the bench slowly, turned to face the audience, and bowed deeply. As she straightened up, tears of joy welled up in her eyes. Passage 4 2026届湖北省武汉市高三二月调考 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 On a freezing winter evening, an old homeless man sat on the street corner, wrapped in thin blankets. People hurried past, their faces buried in scarves, paying him no attention. A young girl named Emily was on her way home from school. She stopped when she saw him, her heart aching. She reached into her pocket and felt the warm bread her mother had given her for dinner. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Without a second thought, Emily walked over and knelt down beside the old man. Paragraph 2: As she walked away into the cold night, Emily looked back one last time. 【详解·动作链条化】 本题需要将“帮助流浪汉”这一连贯场景用动作链分解呈现，难度在于情感递进与动作安排的匹配。 Paragraph 1 动作链条设计： 要描写的场景 动作链（连贯拆解） 技巧说明 走向流浪汉 walked over → knelt down 走近→蹲下，两个动作拉开动作链序幕 拿出面包 pulled out the bread → placed it gently into his hands 掏出→轻放，体现温柔 老人接受 looked up → took the bread → bowed his head slightly 抬头→接过→低头，体现感激 解围巾 took off her own scarf → wrapped it around his thin shoulders 解下→围上，体现关爱 Paragraph 2 动作链条设计： 要描写的场景 动作链（连贯拆解） 技巧说明 告别离开 smiled → rose to her feet → walked away 微笑→起身→离开，体现温暖离去 回头看 looked back one last time → waved gently 回望→挥手，体现不舍-5 【参考范文片段】 Without a second thought, Emily walked over and knelt down beside the old man. She pulled out the warm bread from her pocket, still radiating heat from her body. “Here,” she said softly, placing it gently into his trembling hands. The old man looked up, his eyes wide with surprise. He took the bread, his fingers curling around it protectively, and bowed his head slightly in gratitude. Then Emily took off her own scarf and wrapped it around his thin shoulders. He reached up and patted her hand, a tear tracing a path down his weathered cheek. As she walked away into the cold night, Emily looked back one last time. The old man was still sitting there, holding the bread close to his chest. She smiled softly, turned around, and walked on, her heart warmer than the scarf she had given away. 动作情感化 Passage 5 2025届山东省名校联盟高三上学期期中检测 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the regional swimming finals. Leo had trained for this moment for two years—waking up at 5 a.m. every morning, swimming laps until his muscles burned, pushing through the pain when every fiber of his body screamed for rest. His grandfather, a former Olympic swimmer, had been his inspiration. “It‘s not about winning,” his grandfather always said. “It’s about knowing you gave it everything you had.” But on the morning of the finals, Leo received the devastating news: his grandfather had been hospitalized with a sudden heart attack. His parents urged him to stay home, but his grandfather had insisted—through the phone, his voice weak but firm—that Leo should compete. “I‘ll be watching,” he had said. “Don’t you dare let me down.” Now Leo stood at the edge of the pool, his eyes burning with unshed tears. The starting gun was about to go off, but all he could see was his grandfather‘s face. He took a deep breath and dove into the water. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: The first fifty meters felt like an eternity, but then something shifted inside Leo. Paragraph 2: When Leo climbed out of the pool, the world around him faded into a blur. 【详解·动作情感化】 本题的核心是用动作和身体语言“展现”（Show）悲痛与决心，而非直接“告诉”（Tell）情感。 动作情感化核心技巧： 用动作“外化”内心情感，如“眼眶发红”代替“伤心”，“咬紧牙关”代替“决心”。 Paragraph 1 情感化动作设计： 人物情感 用动作“展现”（Show） 解析 悲痛压倒意志 his arms grew heavy, his legs felt like lead 用身体感受体现心理崩溃 想起祖父的话 his grandfather‘s words echoed in his mind “回声”体现记忆冲击力 决心重生 he clenched his jaw, pumped his arms faster, and surged forward 咬牙→加速→冲刺，展现决心 情感爆发 tears mingled with the pool water “泪水与池水混合”体现情感释放 Paragraph 2 情感化动作设计： 人物情感 用动作“展现”（Show） 解析 恍惚/疲惫 his legs buckled as he gripped the edge “打颤”+“紧抓”体现力竭-5 得知结果后的释然 his face broke into a watery smile “含泪的微笑”体现悲喜交加 传承与告慰 he looked up at the sky and whispered 仰望+低语，体现与远方亲人的精神联结 【参考范文片段】 The first fifty meters felt like an eternity, but then something shifted inside Leo. His arms grew heavy, and his legs felt like lead as grief washed over him. But then—like a lifeline—his grandfather‘s words echoed in his mind: “Give it everything you had.” Leo clenched his jaw, pumped his arms faster, and surged forward with a force he didn’t know he possessed. Tears mingled with the pool water as he pushed through the final lap, pouring every ounce of pain, love, and determination into each stroke. When Leo climbed out of the pool, the world around him faded into a blur. His legs buckled as he gripped the edge, gasping for air. He squinted at the scoreboard—first place. But the number didn‘t matter. His face broke into a watery smile as he looked up at the sky, tears streaming down his cheeks. He pressed his hand to his heart, felt its steady beat, and whispered into the silent air, “I did it, Grandpa. I gave it everything.” Passage 6 2026届江苏省南京市高三期末调研测试 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 For three years, Jack had avoided his childhood friend Mike over a silly argument. Every time he saw Mike in the hallway, he would look away, pretending not to notice. But deep down, he regretted losing their friendship. One rainy afternoon, Jack saw Mike standing alone at the bus stop, drenched and shivering. He knew this was his chance to make things right. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Jack hesitated for a moment, then took a deep breath and walked toward Mike. Paragraph 2: They stood there in the rain, the old misunderstanding melting away like the raindrops on the pavement. 【详解·动作情感化】 本题需要用动作描写展现Jack从“犹豫逃避”到“勇敢和解”的情感转变。 Paragraph 1 情感化动作设计： 人物情感 用动作“展现”（Show） 解析 犹豫 hesitated for a moment, his hands shoved deep into his pockets 停顿+手插口袋，体现内心挣扎 走向朋友 took a deep breath and walked toward Mike 深呼吸+迈步，体现鼓起勇气-5 紧张 his heart pounded as he approached 心跳+靠近，体现紧张-5 开口道歉 opened his mouth, but no words came out 张嘴却无声，体现情绪的障碍-5 递伞 held out his umbrella, shielding Mike from the rain 递伞+遮挡，用动作替代言语道歉 Paragraph 2 情感化动作设计： 人物情感 用动作“展现”（Show） 解析 对方惊讶 looked up, surprised 抬头+惊讶表情，体现意外 道歉成功 managed to speak, his voice barely a whisper 终于说出话+声音微弱，体现情绪波动 和解 Mike‘s lips curved into a slight smile → he reached out to grasp Jack’s hand 微笑→伸手→握手，情感和解的动作链条 【参考范文片段】 Jack hesitated for a moment, then took a deep breath and walked toward Mike. His heart pounded as he approached, his hands shoved deep into his pockets. He stopped a few feet away, opened his mouth, but no words came out. Instead, he silently held out his umbrella, shielding Mike from the rain. Mike looked up, surprised, his shivering frame still soaked. Jack finally managed to speak, his voice barely a whisper. “I‘m sorry.” For a long moment, neither moved. Then Mike’s lips curved into a slight smile, and he reached out to grasp Jack‘s hand. They stood there in the rain, the old misunderstanding melting away like the raindrops on the pavement. Jack’s shoulders relaxed, the tension draining from his body. He felt Mike‘s hand clasp his firmly, a gesture that spoke louder than words ever could. As the rain poured around them, they stood together, two old friends finally finding their way back to each other. 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 17 / 32 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 专题20读后续写之动作描写（培优专练） 目录 真题·命题感知............................................................................................................................................................01 进阶·强化演练............................................................................................................................................................10 拔高·模拟预测............................................................................................................................................................15 真题·命题感知 第一部分：动词精准化 Passage 1 2026年全国模拟题（真题改编） 跨境助人原文深度改编 阅读原文 Due to a heavy snowstorm, my flight to Prague was delayed. I landed in Vienna with only 30 minutes left to catch the last cross-country bus. I sprinted out of the airport and hailed the first taxi frantically. That was how I met Gunter, the taxi driver. I told him my destination, yet he frowned and shook his head repeatedly, unable to figure out where the bus station was. I repeated my words slowly, my voice trembling with anxiety. Just as I was about to burst into tears and give up, Gunter pulled out his old mobile phone and dialed his friend. After a long conversation, he turned to me and restarted the car without a word. Passage 2 2025 全国新高考 I 卷读后续写 家庭宠物矛盾原文改编 阅读原文 I held a small family party at my new house, preparing snacks and tidying the backyard for guests. My brother brought his big dog Toby, an energetic puppy that easily knocked over cups and scared the kids. I asked him to keep Toby in the backyard, and everything went smoothly until supper. Suddenly heavy rain poured down, forcing everyone indoors. Toby ran wildly inside, leaving muddy paw prints all over my clean wooden floor. I grew annoyed and asked my brother to take Toby home immediately. He looked upset, grabbed Toby’s leash and left without saying goodbye. We didn’t contact each other for days. I texted him to invite them over again, but he replied coldly: “Not a chance.” 第二部分：动作链条化 Passage 1 2026年全国模拟题（真题改编）（机场出租车助人原文深度改编） 原文材料 A heavy snowstorm delayed my flight to Prague. I landed in Vienna with only half an hour left for the last cross-country bus. I sprinted out of the airport and hailed a taxi in panic, which was driven by an old man named Gunter. I told him the bus station, yet he had no idea where it was. I repeated slowly, my voice shaking with anxiety. Just as I was ready to cry and give up, Gunter took out his worn phone and called his friend for directions. After a long talk, he started the car without extra words. 续写给定段首 Paragraph 1: Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a lonely bus stop. Paragraph 2: Before I stepped onto the bus, I reached into my bag to pay him. Passage 2 2025 全国I卷读后续写（家庭宠物矛盾原文改编） 原文材料 I held a family party at my new house and tidied the backyard for guests. My brother brought his energetic dog Toby, who knocked over cups and scared little kids. I asked him to keep Toby outdoors, and everything went well until sudden heavy rain forced everyone inside. Toby ran indoors wildly, leaving muddy paw prints all over my wooden floor. I grew upset and told my brother to take Toby home right away. He looked hurt, grabbed the dog’s leash and left without a word. We lost contact for days. I texted to invite them again, but he replied coldly. 续写给定段首 Paragraph 1: One rainy afternoon, I spotted Toby’s rubber ball lying on the wet lawn. Paragraph 2: My brother’s expression softened the instant he saw me holding the toy. 第三部分：动作情感化 Passage 1 2026年全国模拟题（真题改编）（风雪出租车助人原文深度改编） 原文材料 A heavy snowstorm delayed my flight to Prague. I landed in Vienna with only 30 minutes left to catch the last cross-country bus. I sprinted out of the airport and hailed a taxi in panic, driven by an elderly driver Gunter. I tried to tell him the bus station, yet he had no clue about the location. I repeated my destination slowly, my voice shaking out of desperation. Just as tears welled up in my eyes, Gunter pulled out his old mobile phone and called his friend for directions. After a long conversation, he restarted the car silently and rushed toward the station. 续写给定段首 Paragraph 1: Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a lonely bus stop. Paragraph 2: Before I stepped onto the bus, I reached into my bag to pay him. Passage 2 2026年全国模拟题（真题改编）（越野赛跑自卑少年原文改编） 原文材料 It was the school cross-country running race. Students warmed up along the forest track, yet I spotted David standing alone beside the fence. David suffered from a brain disease, which made him run clumsily and fall behind every classmate. Other kids laughed at his strange running posture, so he lost all confidence and refused to join the race. I walked over to comfort him, but he lowered his head and avoided my eye contact. The coach told me he had given David the right to quit, but I believed David deserved a chance to try. 续写给定段首 Paragraph 1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. Paragraph 2: I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. 进阶·强化演练 Passage 1 动词精准化（用具体动词替代泛泛动词） 2026届广东省深圳市高三年级第一次调研考试（深圳一模） 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The annual school sports day had finally arrived. For weeks, Sarah had trained tirelessly for the 800-meter race, determined to prove herself after last year‘s disappointing performance. As she stood at the starting line, her heart pounded against her chest. Her coach’s words echoed in her mind: “Trust your training. The moment you hear the gun, give it everything you‘ve got.” The gun went off. Sarah pushed forward, her legs carrying her swiftly around the track. By the final lap, she was in second place, but the leader was still several meters ahead. Her lungs burned and her muscles screamed for rest, but she refused to slow down. With every ounce of strength she had left, she surged forward, crossing the finish line in a blur of motion. The crowd erupted, but Sarah barely heard them. She leaned forward, gasping for air, her hands resting on her knees. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: When Sarah finally lifted her head, she saw her mother making her way through the crowd. Paragraph 2: That evening, Sarah sat quietly in her room, the gold medal resting in her palm. Passage 2 动作链条化（将动作拆解为连贯的动词链） 2025届浙江省新阵地教育联盟高三10月联考（浙江高考模拟卷） 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The autumn leaves painted the campus in shades of gold and brown. Emily had been practicing her piano piece for months, preparing for the annual school talent show. Her grandmother, a retired music teacher, had taught her the melody when she was just a child. “The music is already inside you,” her grandmother used to say. “Just let it flow.” But when the night of the show arrived, Emily’s confidence crumbled. The bright stage lights, the sea of expectant faces, and the enormous grand piano—all of it overwhelmed her. She walked onto the stage, her legs feeling like jelly. She sat down at the piano, her fingers hovering uncertainly over the keys. The audience waited in silence. Emily closed her eyes, trying to find the music within. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Taking a deep, shaky breath, Emily placed her fingers on the cold ivory keys. Paragraph 2: When the final chord faded into the air, Emily rose from the bench. Passage 3 动作情感化（用动作暗示人物内心情感） 2025届江苏省苏锡常镇四市高三一模（江苏高考模拟卷） 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Jack had always been a quiet boy, preferring the company of books to people. His classmates often teased him for being shy, but he never let it bother him—at least, not on the surface. In truth, the loneliness weighed on him like a heavy coat that he could never take off. One rainy afternoon, Jack found an old, dusty violin in his grandmother‘s attic. When he touched the strings, a single note rang out—clear and beautiful. Something stirred inside him. He spent the next few months secretly teaching himself to play, pouring every emotion he had into the music. For the first time, he felt like he could speak without words. When his school announced a talent show, Jack’s friends urged him to sign up. He hesitated, his hands trembling as he filled out the form. He told himself it was a chance to prove something. But as the day approached, his confidence began to crack. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: The night of the talent show, Jack stood backstage, clutching his violin case. Paragraph 2: After the performance, Jack stepped off the stage, his hands still shaking. 拔高·模拟预测 动词精准化 Passage 1 2026届广东省广州市普通高中毕业班综合测试 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 For as long as Mia could remember, she had been the girl who always said yes. Yes to extra homework. Yes to covering her friend‘s shift. Yes to staying late to help organize the school event. Her kindness was genuine, but somewhere along the way, she had forgotten how to say no. Her friends adored her for it; her teachers praised her for it. But Mia felt like a balloon that was slowly being filled with too much air—sooner or later, she would burst. It happened on a Tuesday. Her best friend, Chloe, asked her to swap shifts for the third time that month. Her history teacher assigned an extra research paper—due the same day as her math final. And her mother called, asking her to babysit her little brother that evening. Mia opened her mouth to say yes, as she always did, but no sound came out. She nodded numbly, hung up the phone, and stared at her reflection in the mirror. The girl staring back looked exhausted. Something had to change. The next morning, Mia walked into school with a decision. Today, she would say no. But when Chloe approached her with that familiar hopeful smile, Mia’s resolve began to crack. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Mia took a shaky step back, her hands clasped tightly behind her back. Paragraph 2: That afternoon, Mia sat alone in the library, the weight on her chest finally beginning to lift. Passage 2 2026届浙江省杭州市高三年级教学质量检测 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eva had always been afraid of the dark. Her fear was not just a childhood phase—it had followed her into her teenage years, lurking in every shadow and every creak of the floorboard. So when her school announced an overnight camping trip to the mountains, her heart sank. But her best friend Lily had convinced her to come. “You can‘t let fear control your life,” Lily had said. “This is your chance to prove you’re braver than you think.” The first day went smoothly. The hiking, the fresh air, the laughter around the campfire—Eva almost forgot her fear. But when night fell and the campfire died down, the darkness crept in like a living thing. Eva lay in her sleeping bag, wide awake, listening to the strange sounds of the forest. Suddenly, she heard a faint cry—something between a whimper and a howl. It was coming from outside the tent. Her heart raced, but she knew she couldn‘t just lie there. She had to do something. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Summoning all her courage, Eva unzipped the tent and stepped out into the darkness. Paragraph 2: When she finally returned to the tent, her hands were still trembling, but her face wore a smile. 动作链条化 Passage 3 2025届浙江省新阵地教育联盟高三10月联考 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The autumn leaves painted the campus in shades of gold and brown. Emily had been practicing her piano piece for months, preparing for the annual school talent show. Her grandmother, a retired music teacher, had taught her the melody when she was just a child. “The music is already inside you,” her grandmother used to say. “Just let it flow.” But when the night of the show arrived, Emily‘s confidence crumbled. The bright stage lights, the sea of expectant faces, and the enormous grand piano—all of it overwhelmed her. She walked onto the stage, her legs feeling like jelly. She sat down at the piano, her fingers hovering uncertainly over the keys. The audience waited in silence. Emily closed her eyes, trying to find the music within. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Taking a deep, shaky breath, Emily placed her fingers on the cold ivory keys. Paragraph 2: When the final chord faded into the air, Emily rose from the bench. Passage 4 2026届湖北省武汉市高三二月调考 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 On a freezing winter evening, an old homeless man sat on the street corner, wrapped in thin blankets. People hurried past, their faces buried in scarves, paying him no attention. A young girl named Emily was on her way home from school. She stopped when she saw him, her heart aching. She reached into her pocket and felt the warm bread her mother had given her for dinner. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Without a second thought, Emily walked over and knelt down beside the old man. Paragraph 2: As she walked away into the cold night, Emily looked back one last time. 动作情感化 Passage 5 2025届山东省名校联盟高三上学期期中检测 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the regional swimming finals. Leo had trained for this moment for two years—waking up at 5 a.m. every morning, swimming laps until his muscles burned, pushing through the pain when every fiber of his body screamed for rest. His grandfather, a former Olympic swimmer, had been his inspiration. “It‘s not about winning,” his grandfather always said. “It’s about knowing you gave it everything you had.” But on the morning of the finals, Leo received the devastating news: his grandfather had been hospitalized with a sudden heart attack. His parents urged him to stay home, but his grandfather had insisted—through the phone, his voice weak but firm—that Leo should compete. “I‘ll be watching,” he had said. “Don’t you dare let me down.” Now Leo stood at the edge of the pool, his eyes burning with unshed tears. The starting gun was about to go off, but all he could see was his grandfather‘s face. He took a deep breath and dove into the water. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: The first fifty meters felt like an eternity, but then something shifted inside Leo. Paragraph 2: When Leo climbed out of the pool, the world around him faded into a blur. Passage 6 2026届江苏省南京市高三期末调研测试 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 For three years, Jack had avoided his childhood friend Mike over a silly argument. Every time he saw Mike in the hallway, he would look away, pretending not to notice. But deep down, he regretted losing their friendship. One rainy afternoon, Jack saw Mike standing alone at the bus stop, drenched and shivering. He knew this was his chance to make things right. 续写段落首句： Paragraph 1: Jack hesitated for a moment, then took a deep breath and walked toward Mike. Paragraph 2: They stood there in the rain, the old misunderstanding melting away like the raindrops on the pavement. 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 17 / 32 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 专题20读后续写之动作描写（培优专练） 目录 真题·命题感知............................................................................................................................................................01 进阶·强化演练............................................................................................................................................................10 拔高·模拟预测............................................................................................................................................................15 真题·命题感知 第一部分：动词精准化 Passage 1 满分参考范文 Paragraph 1 Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a small bus stop. He twisted the key to cut off the engine, hopped out of the taxi and hurried to my side. He unloaded my suitcase from the trunk, pointed firmly at the distant bus and patted my shoulder gently, gesturing me not to worry. Then he glanced at his watch, grabbed a hot chocolate from the passenger seat and handed it to me to warm my frozen hands. 动作链拆解：twisted→hopped out→hurried→unloaded→pointed→patted→glanced→grabbed→handed（精准动词串联，温柔动作体现善意） Paragraph 2 Before I boarded the bus, I reached for my wallet to pay him. Gunter waved his hands violently, pushing my wallet back into my pocket. I insisted, pulling out several bank notes and stretching them toward him. He shook his head, tapped the bus sign and gave me a warm thumbs-up, motioning me to get on board quickly. I clutched the chocolate tightly, tears blurring my sight as I stepped onto the bus and waved back at him nonstop. Passage 2 满分参考范文 Paragraph 1 One rainy afternoon, I spotted Toby’s ball lying on my backyard lawn. I bent down slowly, brushed off the mud on the rubber ball and held it tightly in my palm. Memories of Toby’s cheerful jumps flooded my mind. I snatched an umbrella from the doorway, slipped on my rain boots and hurried toward my brother’s apartment across the street, stepping carefully through puddles. 动作链拆解：bent down→brushed off→held→snatched→slipped→hurried→stepped（缓慢、紧握动作凸显内心懊悔） Paragraph 2 My brother’s eyes softened the moment he saw me holding Toby’s toy. Before he could speak, Toby dashed out of the door and leaped onto my legs, licking my hands wildly. I knelt down, stroked Toby’s wet fur and stretched the ball toward my brother. He hesitated for a second, then reached out to take it, patting my arm lightly. We stood side by side under the umbrella, watching Toby chase the ball in the rain. 动作链拆解：dashed→leaped→licking→knelt→stroked→stretched→hesitated→reached→patting（跳跃、抚摸、轻拍动作完成矛盾化解） 第二部分：动作链条化 Passage 1 满分参考范文（标注动作链） Paragraph 1 Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a lonely bus stop. He twisted the key to kill the engine, hopped out of the taxi, dragged my suitcase from the trunk and guided me toward the waiting bus. He glanced at his watch, grabbed a cup of hot cocoa from the passenger seat and pressed it into my numb hands, patting my shoulder to calm my worry. 核心动作链拆解 停车帮扶链：twisted → hopped out → dragged → guided（4 个连续动作，完整还原下车搬行李全过程） 安抚暖心链：glanced → grabbed → pressed → patting（递进动作，体现司机细心） Paragraph 2 Before I stepped onto the bus, I reached into my bag to pay him. Gunter waved his hands wildly, pushed my wallet back and shook his head firmly. I insisted, pulling out bank notes and stretching them toward him. He tapped the bus sign, gave me a thumbs-up and gestured me to hurry aboard. I clutched the cocoa tightly, turned back and waved repeatedly at him until the bus pulled away. Passage 2 满分参考范文（标注动作链） Paragraph 1 One rainy afternoon, I spotted Toby’s rubber ball lying on the wet lawn. I bent down slowly, brushed off the mud with my palm and held the ball tightly in my fist. I snatched an umbrella by the door, slipped on rain boots and hurried across the street to my brother’s flat, stepping carefully over puddles. 核心动作链拆解 捡拾愧疚链：bent down → brushed off → held（缓慢连贯动作，体现内心自责） 冒雨赶路链：snatched → slipped → hurried → stepping（4 连动作，完整写出主动道歉全过程） Paragraph 2 My brother’s expression softened the instant he saw me holding the toy. Toby dashed out of the doorway, leaped onto my legs and licked my palms nonstop. I knelt down, stroked his wet fur and stretched the ball toward my brother. He hesitated briefly, reached out to take it and patted my arm lightly. We stood side by side under the umbrella, watching Toby chase the ball in drizzle. 核心动作链拆解 宠物破冰链：dashed → leaped → licked（小狗连续动作打破僵局） 和解动作链：knelt → stroked → stretched；hesitated → reached → patted（人物双向连贯动作，完成矛盾化解） 第三部分：动作情感化 Passage 1 满分参考范文 Paragraph 1 Minutes later, Gunter pulled over beside a lonely bus stop. He twisted the ignition to cut off power, hopped out and hurried round to the trunk. He dragged my heavy suitcase out steadily, then turned to me, tilting his chin toward the waiting bus. He glanced at my frozen red hands, grabbed a steaming cup of cocoa from the front seat and pressed it firmly into my palms, patting my upper arm lightly to calm my fluster. 情感动作拆解 dragged steadily、tilted chin：沉稳动作，体现司机耐心温和； grabbed cocoa、pressed into palms、patting lightly：轻柔手部动作，藏起善意与安抚。 Paragraph 2 Before I stepped onto the bus, I reached into my bag to pay him. Gunter waved both hands wildly, pushing my wallet back hard into my backpack and shaking his head from side to side. I insisted, fishing out several banknotes and stretching them forward toward him. He tapped the bus sign and gestured me to hurry aboard. I clutched the warm cocoa tight against my chest, spun around and waved my arm nonstop until the taxi faded into the snow. 情感动作拆解 waved wildly、pushed back：大幅度拒绝动作，凸显他不求回报； clutched tight、spun around、waved nonstop：紧握、不停挥手，无声宣泄满心感激。 Passage 2 满分参考范文 Paragraph 1 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. He hunched his shoulders inward, bending his head deep toward his chest and picking nervously at the loose thread on his sportswear. After a long silence, he slowly lifted his chin, his eyes flickering upward for just a second before he stared down at his trembling toes again. I stretched my palm out beside his hand without touching him, waiting patiently for him to open up. 情感动作拆解 hunched shoulders、bent head deep：身体向内蜷缩，外化自卑封闭； picking thread、flickering eyes、stared at toes：局促细碎小动作，凸显胆怯不安。 Paragraph 2 I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. He paused at the line, clenched both fists at his sides and drew a deep breath. He straightened his hunched back slowly, shifted his weight steadily and planted his feet firmly on the ground. When the starting whistle blew, he swung his arms wide and stepped forward without hesitation, no longer shrinking away from the surrounding gazes. 进阶·强化演练 Passage 1 【参考范文片段】 When Sarah finally lifted her head, she spotted her mother elbowing her way through the crowd, her face glowing with pride. Sarah dashed over and her mother pulled her into a tight embrace. “I’m so proud of you!” she exclaimed, her voice trembling with emotion. Sarah buried her face in her mother‘s shoulder, feeling the warmth of the moment. Wiping the sweat from her forehead, Sarah murmured, “I couldn’t have done it without you.” That evening, Sarah sat quietly in her room, the gold medal resting in her palm. She lifted it slowly, traced her fingers over the engraved words, and then held it up to the light, watching it gleam. A soft sigh escaped her lips as she placed the medal gently back into its box. A smile spread across her face, and she clutched the box to her chest, as if preserving the memory forever. Passage 2 【参考范文片段】 Taking a deep, shaky breath, Emily placed her fingers on the cold ivory keys. She pressed down a single, uncertain note, hesitated for a brief moment, and then let the melody flow through her. Her fingers began to dance across the keys, flowed with the rhythm, and swayed gently with each passing chord. The music rose, fell, and soared like a bird finding its wings. She leaned into the melody, swayed with the beat, and lost herself completely in the music. When the final chord faded into the air, Emily lifted her hands, held them trembling above the keys for a moment, and then lowered them to her lap. She rose from the bench slowly, turned to face the audience, and bowed deeply. As she straightened up, tears of joy welled up in her eyes. She stepped off the stage, walked toward her grandmother, and fell into her open arms. Passage 3 【参考范文片段】 The night of the talent show, Jack stood backstage, clutching his violin case so tightly that his knuckles turned white. He wiped his sweaty palms on his trousers and peeked through the curtain at the audience. His heart pounded so loudly he thought everyone could hear it. He swallowed hard and closed his eyes, remembering his grandmother’s words. When his name was called, he took a shaky breath, squared his shoulders, and strode onto the stage. He placed the violin under his chin, pressed the bow to the strings, and let the music speak for him. After the performance, Jack stepped off the stage, his hands still trembling as he wiped the sweat from his forehead. He let out a long breath he hadn‘t realized he’d been holding, and his shoulders slumped in relief. His friends rushed over, patted him on the back, and grinned from ear to ear. For the first time, Jack didn‘t look away. He lifted his head, a genuine smile spreading across his face. He clutched the violin to his heart, feeling the warmth of the moment—not just the applause, but the quiet realization that he had finally found his voice. 拔高·模拟预测 Passage 1 【参考范文片段】 Mia took a shaky step back, her hands clasped tightly behind her back. She bit her lower lip and dropped her gaze to the floor, avoiding Chloe‘s hopeful eyes. Her heart pounded so loudly she was sure the whole hallway could hear it. She swallowed hard, squared her shoulders, and forced herself to meet Chloe’s gaze. “I‘m sorry,” she murmured, her voice barely above a whisper, but her chin lifting slightly as she spoke. “I can’t swap shifts this time. I need to take care of myself too.” That afternoon, Mia sat alone in the library, the weight on her chest finally beginning to lift. She leaned back in her chair, and a small, genuine smile played at the corners of her mouth as she replayed the morning‘s conversation in her mind. For the first time in months, she felt she could breathe again. Passage 2 【参考范文片段】 Summoning all her courage, Eva unzipped the tent and poked her head out into the pitch-black night. Her heart hammering, she grabbed a flashlight, crept toward the faint sound, and held her breath with each step. The cry grew clearer—a tiny, helpless whimper. She shone the light ahead and spotted a small, shivering puppy trapped between two rocks. Without hesitation, she rushed forward, knelt down, and gently lifted the trembling creature into her arms. When she finally returned to the tent, her hands were still trembling, but her face wore a smile. She crawled back inside, carefully placed the puppy on her sleeping bag, and wrapped it in her jacket to keep it warm. The puppy nuzzled against her, letting out a soft, grateful whimper. Eva took a shaky breath and realized that fear wasn’t something to run from—it was something to face, one small step at a time. Passage 3 【参考范文片段】 Taking a deep, shaky breath, Emily placed her fingers on the cold ivory keys. She pressed down a single, uncertain note, hesitated for a brief moment, and then let the melody flow through her. Her fingers began to dance across the keys, flowed with the rhythm, and swayed gently with each passing chord. The music rose, fell, and soared like a bird finding its wings. She leaned into the melody, swayed with the beat, and lost herself completely in the music. When the final chord faded into the air, Emily lifted her hands, held them trembling above the keys for a moment, and then lowered them to her lap. She rose from the bench slowly, turned to face the audience, and bowed deeply. As she straightened up, tears of joy welled up in her eyes. Passage 4 【参考范文片段】 Without a second thought, Emily walked over and knelt down beside the old man. She pulled out the warm bread from her pocket, still radiating heat from her body. “Here,” she said softly, placing it gently into his trembling hands. The old man looked up, his eyes wide with surprise. He took the bread, his fingers curling around it protectively, and bowed his head slightly in gratitude. Then Emily took off her own scarf and wrapped it around his thin shoulders. He reached up and patted her hand, a tear tracing a path down his weathered cheek. As she walked away into the cold night, Emily looked back one last time. The old man was still sitting there, holding the bread close to his chest. She smiled softly, turned around, and walked on, her heart warmer than the scarf she had given away. Passage 5 【参考范文片段】 The first fifty meters felt like an eternity, but then something shifted inside Leo. His arms grew heavy, and his legs felt like lead as grief washed over him. But then—like a lifeline—his grandfather‘s words echoed in his mind: “Give it everything you had.” Leo clenched his jaw, pumped his arms faster, and surged forward with a force he didn’t know he possessed. Tears mingled with the pool water as he pushed through the final lap, pouring every ounce of pain, love, and determination into each stroke. When Leo climbed out of the pool, the world around him faded into a blur. His legs buckled as he gripped the edge, gasping for air. He squinted at the scoreboard—first place. But the number didn‘t matter. His face broke into a watery smile as he looked up at the sky, tears streaming down his cheeks. He pressed his hand to his heart, felt its steady beat, and whispered into the silent air, “I did it, Grandpa. I gave it everything.” Passage 6 【参考范文片段】 Jack hesitated for a moment, then took a deep breath and walked toward Mike. His heart pounded as he approached, his hands shoved deep into his pockets. He stopped a few feet away, opened his mouth, but no words came out. Instead, he silently held out his umbrella, shielding Mike from the rain. Mike looked up, surprised, his shivering frame still soaked. Jack finally managed to speak, his voice barely a whisper. “I‘m sorry.” For a long moment, neither moved. Then Mike’s lips curved into a slight smile, and he reached out to grasp Jack‘s hand. They stood there in the rain, the old misunderstanding melting away like the raindrops on the pavement. Jack’s shoulders relaxed, the tension draining from his body. He felt Mike‘s hand clasp his firmly, a gesture that spoke louder than words ever could. As the rain poured around them, they stood together, two old friends finally finding their way back to each other. 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 17 / 32 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $