Week 4 申请自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写（Word练习）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

素材4　申请/自荐 1.Interested in your recently advertised position for guides to welcome the coming foreign students, ____________________________________. 我对你们最近为欢迎外国留学生的到来刊登的招聘导游的广告很感兴趣,我很乐意写信申请这份工作。 2.____________________________________________, __________________________ __________________________. 得知即将到来的中国画展览需要志愿者,我迫不及待地申请这个职位。 3.__________________________________________, I’m convinced that I’m qualified to teach foreigners to learn Chinese. 我精通中文而且有合理的教学方法,我相信我能胜任教外国人学习中文。 4.________________________, I do believe I’m perfectly qualified to work in your art gallery as a volunteer. 我善于交际,有责任心,我相信我完全有资格在你们美术馆做志愿者。 5.____________________________________________________________________. 我外向开朗、精力充沛,而且乐观热情。 6.____________________________________________________________________. 我出色的英语口语会使我很轻松地与外国游客交流。 7.____________________________________, I could also conduct classes for your visitors to help them learn more about this beautiful aspect of Chinese culture. 我精通中国书法,还可以为来访者开设课程,帮助他们更多地了解中国文化中这优美的一面。 8.____________________________________________________________________. 我以前做志愿者的经验使我能胜任这个职务。 9.____________________________________________________________________. 我组织过几次这样的大型活动,积累了相关经验。 10.____________________________________________________________________. 如果您认为我是这份工作的最佳人选,请尽早联系我。 11.____________________________________________________________________. 如果您看中我的申请,我将不遗余力地提供我最佳的服务。 12.____________________________________________________________________. 如果有机会做导游,我会竭尽全力。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Week 4 申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写　　 Monday　满分范文晨诵 五档优范文　感悟范文亮点并背诵 Dear Sir or Madam, I’m Li Hua, a student taking summer courses in London now. (说明工作信息,提出申请) I’m convinced I’m equal to the job. Firstly, my fluent English will enable me to communicate smoothly with British painting lovers. (语言能力) Moreover, the art form better. (特长) Better yet, I’ve participated in several activities, equipping me with relevant experience. (经验) (个人优势) 　　If accepted, I will spare no effort to introduce those paintings on 　　省略句式简洁明了,再次为文章添彩 display and answer questions patiently. I’d appreciate it if you could consider my application. (表达决心,期待回复) Yours, Li Hua (全国卷Ⅰ改编)假定你是李华,暑假在伦敦学习,得知当地美术馆要举办中国画展览。请写一封信申请做志愿者,内容包括: 1.写信目的; 2.个人优势; 3.能做的事情。 注意:写作词数应为80个左右。 积累 ①enable sb. to do sth.使某人能够做某事 ②spare no effort不遗余力 教考衔接 人教选B3U1,外研B3U4,北师大选B3U7 仿写再借鉴　仿照范文中的衔接过渡词汇和句式补全下文并背诵 Dear Sir or Madam, ①________________________________________________ (我是李华,来自中国的交换生). I am writing to apply for the Chinese workshop, a cultural exchange event aimed at promoting Chinese and British cultural understanding. Particularly interested in activities related to handicrafts, I would love to show and teach participants how to create Chinese knots. Chinese knots hold deep cultural symbolism, ②________________________________________________ (象征好运、团结和繁荣,分词短语作状语). ③__________, by demonstrating the art of making Chinese knots, I hope to share the rich heritage and cultural values associated with this traditional craft. ④ 　 (感谢您考虑我的申请). Looking forward to contributing to the success of this meaningful event. Yours, Li Hua (2023·天津卷改编)假定你是李华,是英国某学校的交换生,该校要举办一个名为Chinese workshop的促进中英文化交流的活动,活动内容包括中国美食、手工艺品和书法,其中有一项是教别人做中国传统手工艺品。请你写信自荐参加此次活动,内容包括: 1.阐述活动意义; 2.你想参加的内容及想法。 注意:写作词数应为80个左右。 积累 ①hold deep cultural symbolism具有深厚的文化象征意义 ②be related to/be associated with与……有关 教考衔接 人教选B2U2,人教B2U1,人教B3U3,外研选B4U3,外研选B2U4 Tuesday　黄金素材&模板 素材4　申请/自荐 背模板佳句 夺人眼球开头句(开篇表意,提出申请) 1.Interested in your recently advertised position for guides to welcome the coming foreign students, I’m gladly writing to apply for the job. 我对你们最近刊登的为欢迎外国留学生的到来招聘导游的广告很感兴趣,我很乐意写信申请这份工作。 2.Learning that volunteers are needed for the coming Chinese painting exhibition, I can’t wait to apply for the position. 得知即将到来的中国画展览需要志愿者,我迫不及待地申请这个职位。 亮点出彩篇中句(阐述优势:资格、性格特征、交际能力、语言能力和相关经验) 3.Having acquired a good knowledge of Chinese and reasonable teaching methods, I’m convinced that I’m qualified to teach foreigners to learn Chinese. 我精通中文而且有合理的教学方法,我相信我能教外国人学习中文。 4.Sociable and responsible, I do believe I’m perfectly qualified to work in your art gallery as a volunteer.我善于交际,有责任心,我相信我完全有资格在你们美术馆做志愿者。 5.Not only am I outgoing and energetic, but I’m also optimistic and enthusiastic. 我外向开朗、精力充沛,而且乐观热情。 6.My good command of oral English will enable me to communicate with foreign visitors with great ease.我出色的英语口语会使我很轻松地与外国游客交流。 7.With my proficiency in Chinese calligraphy, I could also conduct classes for your visitors to help them learn more about this beautiful aspect of Chinese culture. 我精通中国书法,还可以为来访者开设课程,帮助他们更多地了解中国文化中这优美的一面。 8.My previous volunteering experience will qualify me for the position. 我以前做志愿者的经验使我能胜任这个职务。 9.I have organized several such great activities, equipping me with relevant experience. 我组织过几次这样的大型活动,积累了相关经验。 韵味无穷结尾句(表决心,盼回复) 10.If you consider I’m the perfect person for the job, please contact me at your earliest convenience. 如果您认为我是这份工作的最佳人选,请尽早联系我。 11.Should you treat my application favorably, I would spare no effort to offer my best service. 如果您看中我的申请,我将不遗余力地提供我最佳的服务。 12.If given the opportunity to be the guide, I’ll do everything to the best of my ability. 如果有机会做导游,我会竭尽全力。 背黄金模板 Dear Sir or Madam, I’m Li Hua. Learning you are recruiting some volunteers to work in your museum, I’m gladly writing to apply for the job. (点明目的,说明信息) I’m convinced I am equal to the job. Firstly, with a good command of oral English, I can communicate with foreigners with ease. (语言能力) Additionally, I’m outgoing and warm-hearted, which makes it easy for me to offer services to visitors. (性格和交际能力) Moreover, my similar experience as a volunteer will enable me to settle potential problems. (相关经验) (详述个人优势) If chosen, I will live up to your expectations through my enthusiasm and devotion. (表达决心) Yours, Li Hua 　　　模板范文中的加粗内容是可通用内容,未加粗内容可按照写作要求灵活更换。 ·主体部分阐述个人优势(语言能力使沟通无障碍、交际能力很好、经验丰富)。 ·文章通常以第一人称为主。 Wednesday　考场作文研析 读后续写微技能4　“CARE”原则细化续写细节 ▼ 续写部分用2个首句、3个衔接句和结局构建好框架后,应细化过程性细节(即过渡句),使行文流畅。在推动情节发展时,应遵从coherence→action→response→emotion(“CARE”)的模式,添加角色之间的互动,如比赛、表演类应加入观众或群体的反应或与主人公的互动。一般创设3个场景,每个场景中涉及具体的动作、情感、神态描写或借助环境描写烘托人物情感变化。如下所示: 在构建场景时,还应注意协同原则(coherence),协同原文的伏笔信息。 好题探索　(2025·全国一卷) 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.② There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire.⑨ Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.③ My plan was working out just fine.① Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room.⑤ Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors. It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue. A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice.⑦ Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.⑧长短句结合 Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first.⑥ However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.④ 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　I realized it was me who was at fault. 　　With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. 请参考附录二~六 四步续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who I (自负),my brother(丧妻,健康问题,对狗的依赖), my wife, Toby When in the early summer→a few days later→two months later Where in our new house What “我”担心弟弟的狗Toby影响聚会,要求弟弟看好狗并不让狗进屋,后来下雨,弟弟提前带狗离开,心生芥蒂。两个月后,“我”意识到自己的过错,主动带着妻子做的饼干登门。 理2情线 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　I realized it was me who was at fault. ◆衔接1　衔接首句“我意识到错在自己”:“我”在内心反问自己什么? “我”感觉如何? ◆过渡句1　妻子给“我”什么建议,她说了什么?(如带上biscuits去弟弟家) ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句“我带着妻子做的饼干,来到弟弟家门前”:“我”接受妻子的建议,带着饼干出发。Para. 2　With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“来到弟弟家门前”:弟弟打开门后看到“我”是什么反应?他是什么表情? ◆过渡句2　“我”说了什么?Toby是否欢迎“我”(描写狗的动作)?→“我”做了什么?→弟弟是否同意“我”进门?→“我”向弟弟道歉,弟弟接受道歉。 ◆结尾+主题　(协同尾段中的constant companion)兄弟俩聊天, Toby相陪。可写笑声填满了兄弟俩之间的隔阂,升华为家是无条件包容接纳。 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 Para. 2　I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside→“我”固执(坚持不让Toby进屋) Para. 6　I resisted, thinking he should call first→以自我为中心(认为弟弟应先联系自己) 第一段协同描写“我”反思自我;第二段应描写“我”主动道歉。 Para. 4　my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog Para. 6　He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away ... Toby was his constant companion ...→因失去妻子而依赖Toby 第二段可描写弟弟看到“我”和狗的互动后态度软化并接受“我”的道歉。 Para. 6　My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother ...→妻子是温和的调解者(建议联系弟弟) 第一段可描写妻子再次建议“我”联系弟弟。 Para. 2　I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside Para. 4　I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house ... 第一段可描写“我”后悔没让Toby进屋;第二段可描写“我”为此向弟弟道歉。 Para. 6　Two months passed. 第一段可协同描写兄弟俩两个多月没见。 Para. 5　His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually:“Not a chance.” 第二段可协同描写弟弟看到“我”时眼中的表情还是“Not a chance”。 Para. 6　Toby was his constant companion→Toby是弟弟的情感依赖 Para. 1　She had prepared lots of snacks和续写第二段首句中的biscuits→食物象征善意与破冰 第二段可描写Toby成为兄弟俩和好的催化剂。 妻子烤的饼干可作为和解媒介。 通过描写“我”排斥Toby→接纳,缺乏共情→换位思考,“我”道歉→弟弟接受,体现理解与包容 结尾描写兄弟俩和狗三者相处的温暖场景:It felt good to reconnect. 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 1.简单句(原文①)、并列句(原文②)与复合句(原文③④)交替使用。2.非谓语动词描写Toby的动作(原文⑤)和人物心理活动(原文⑥)。3.直接心理描写(原文⑦⑧)。4.比喻与夸张的修辞手法(原文⑨),比喻Toby充满活力,夸大其威胁性。 ⇒完成《核心默练》10分钟随堂微练4 Thursday　练应用文写作 Writing 1　美育+德育 | 申请做国际设计艺术展志愿者 　　假定你是英国交换生Alex,得知当地美术馆正在举办主题为“新质生活:创意成就美好未来”的国际设计艺术展。请写一封邮件申请做志愿者,内容包括:1.个人优势;2.胜任事项。 注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 Dear Sir/Madam,____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ Yours sincerely, Alex 教考衔接:人教选B3U1,外研B3U4,人教选B1U2;请参考素材4 “申请/自荐”,附录一~二 Writing 2　智育 | 申请参加研学活动 　　假定你是李华,你校将组织学生开展为期三天的研学活动,现有三个主题,分别为“访问友校”“走进大学”“深入企业”。请写一封申请信给负责人,报名参加其中一项活动,内容包括:1.你选择的主题;2.你希望学到的内容;3.你学这些内容的理由。 注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 Dear Sir/Madam,____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ Yours sincerely, Li Hua 教考衔接:人教B1U1,外研B1U1,人教选B2U2,外研选B2U4;请参考素材4 “申请/自荐”,附录一~二 Friday　提分读后续写 　　阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　I’d always been told to take care of my older brother, Brian, who was born weak and small. I’d often tie his shoes or prepare another glass of water for him. My mom saw my larger size and strong body as a sign that I was to be a kind of guardian angel (守护天使) for Brian. However, that was not the case. One day our school sponsored a pumpkin-carving contest. First prize was $100, and I knew just how I would spend it. There was a brand-new game I was dying to own. So I decided the first place bonus definitely had to land in my pocket. When I had to carve the perfect pumpkin I’d picked out, it dawned on me that with my big clumsy fingers I’d surely screw it up (搞砸). I thought of Brian’s smaller, delicate hands and knew he was the man for the job. I immediately begged Brian. Unexpectedly, he asked for a cut. That was fifty-fifty. Quickly doing the math in my head, I figured out even if I split (分摊) the first prize, I’d still have enough cash for the game. So I gave in to Brian’s demands. With skillful hands Brian carved the perfect face, and now we had the best pumpkin ever. Then the unexpected happened: We came in second. Unfortunately, second prize was only $50, and I needed every penny of that to buy the game. The day of the awards ceremony, the principal handed over the money to me because Brian was home, sick with cold. If he really wanted to win, he would have been here today, I thought to myself, justifying stealing the cash from under poor Brian’s runny nose. With hardly a thought, I ran to the store and bought my dream game. That night when Brian asked if we had won, I denied, afraid to look into his eyes. The whole thing was never mentioned again until the day when Brian was packing for college. I played my usual role in helping him pack when I came across an old album filled with photos he had taken as the school photographer. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　I was enjoying the photos when one caught my eye.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　“You actually knew and didn’t say anything?” I was shocked.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 请参考附录二~六 Saturday　提分读后续写 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My grandfather was a stern man. He always stood straight, his body lean and strong from the physical work of farming. When I was young, I thought he seemed awfully big. A glance from him was enough to keep my sisters and me in line. Yet every summer I looked forward to seeing him. Grandpa tolerated us. We were like flies that hovered around him all day. He was not a man who showed emotion easily. There were times he caught us red-handed, touching some of his possessions or exploring places we weren’t supposed to, and his quiet scolding left us well-behaved for the rest of our stay. But the summer I turned nine was different. One morning I heard clickety-clack, clickety-clack, clickety-clack, ping. It stopped me in my tracks. I hid behind a pillar and peered at the source of the sound: Grandpa in his study, typing a letter. I leaned farther to see better, then tripped and fell through the door. For a while I lay on the floor. I was sorry, so sorry! I stood up, red in the face and trying to make myself invisible. He shot me a glance. I looked at the floor and hoped the scolding would be short. He called me over. I approached him slowly. He asked what I was doing.I told him I’d been fascinated by the sound of the typewriter. I’d only wanted to get a better look; I wasn’t going to touch anything, I promised. He didn’t say anything else. Unsure what to do, I stood near his elbow watching him type. I longed to touch the beautiful yellow keys and the lovely black space bar. The keys hit the ribbon, and letters appeared on the paper as if by magic. The rest of the summer I’d hear the sounds of typewriter keys and wander toward them, fearfully at first but more confidently when I realized Grandpa didn’t seem to mind. I stood silently, admiring the wonder of the words forming on the page. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　After going home, I spent the year writing stories and thinking of ways to convince Grandpa to let ____________________________________________________________ me use the typewriter when I returned to his house.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　On returning home that year, I received a letter from the post office telling me to come and collect ____________________________________________________________ a parcel.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 请参考附录二~六 Sunday　高效提分训练 言之有“序”(二)——巧妙过渡衔接 习提分技法 用于句首和句群内的过渡衔接词汇 用于句首的过渡词(词组):generally speaking, to begin/start with, first of all, in the first place, as we know, as is known to all等。 Generally speaking, the more you practice, the more skillfully you can write in English.一般而言,练习得越多,你的英语写作就越娴熟。 表示附加或递进关系的过渡词(词组):and, and then, also, in addition, additionally, besides, furthermore, moreover, what’s more, worse still, to make matters worse, more importantly, last but not least等。 Additionally, I’m open-minded and fond of making friends, which equips me with good qualities that a guide needs. 另外,我性格开朗,喜欢交朋友,这让我具备了导游所需要的素质。 Worse still, it got dark and we found ourselves lost in the mountain.更糟的是,天黑了,我们在山里迷了路。 表示让步、转折、对比或类比的过渡词(词组):but, however, although, though, yet, while, instead, in contrast, on the other hand, on the contrary, similarly等。 However, I’m afraid I won’t be able to keep my appointment to discuss Chinese paintings with you.不过,恐怕我不能如期与您讨论中国画了。 练提分好题 Ⅰ.过渡衔接词汇用于应用文写作 用恰当的过渡衔接词汇或所给词的正确形式补全下面的申请信,并背诵全文。 Dear David, ①__________ (learn) from the website that an exhibition of traditional Chinese clothing is to be held in your museum, I’d like to apply for the position as a volunteer. ②__________, interested in clothing design, I’ve read various books on the costume features of different dynasties. ③__________, being a fluent English speaker can enable me to introduce the styles and history to visitors. ④________________, it would be an honor to spread our culture and promote cultural exchange between the two countries. If ⑤__________ (give) the opportunity, I’ll do what I can to live up to your expectations. Yours, Li Hua Ⅱ.过渡衔接词汇用于读后续写 用恰当的过渡衔接词汇或所给词的正确形式补全下面的“家人之情类”读后续写片段,并体会文中的动作描写。 Suddenly Peter found his younger sister lagging behind. He ①__________ (stop) and looked back, finding Shirley standing in front of a toy shop and ②__________ (stare) at something with great interest. The boy went back to her ③__________ asked, “What do you want?” Shirley pointed at the doll, a smile on her innocent face. Peter ④__________ (hold) his younger sister’s tiny hand, walking into the shop. He ⑤__________ (tiptoe) to reach for the doll, ⑥__________ like a responsible elder brother, gave it to Shirley. 微技能小练　读后续写之动作细节描写(四) 根据汉语提示补全下面与“肩膀”相关的细节描写并背诵。 1.I 　 (拍拍汤姆的肩膀) and asked him to move. 2.When I asked him why he had done it, he just ________________________________ (耸耸肩). 3.As soon as the result was declared, 　 ________________ (我的肩膀松弛下来). 4.She could do nothing to stop him as he ________________________________ (用肩膀挤着进入) the house. 5.He ________________________________ (回头看), and caught sight of a familiar face in the crowd. 6.The policemen rushed past him, ________________________________ (用肩膀把他推到了一边). 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Week 4　申请/自荐信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写 Monday　满分范文晨诵 仿写再借鉴 ①I’m Li Hua, an exchange student from China ②representing good luck, unity, and prosperity ③Moreover　④Thanks for considering my application Wednesday　考场作文研析 原文续写语料积累　①count on 依赖,依靠,指望(某人做某事);确信(某事会发生)　②knock over 打倒(或击倒、撞倒)　③run back and forth 反复来回跑　④come as a surprise 出乎意料　⑤put oneself in sb.’s shoes 设身处地 Thursday　练应用文写作 Writing 1 文思梳理 美文诵读 Dear Sir/Madam, I’m Alex, a British exchange student in your city. (自我介绍) Learning that your museum is hosting the “New Quality Life: Creativity Shapes a Better Future” art exhibition, I’d like to apply to be a volunteer. (写信目的) I am confident I am qualified for the following advantages. Firstly, as someone who speaks both English and Chinese fluently and has a passion for (热爱) art, I can effectively communicate with international visitors. Additionally, my rich experience in guiding will enable me to lead tours and explain exhibits clearly. (个人优势+胜任事项) I’m eager to contribute to this event. Looking forward to your positive reply. (表示期待) Yours sincerely, Alex 佳句　Firstly, as someone who speaks both English and Chinese fluently and has a passion for art, I can effectively communicate with international visitors. (定语从句)   Writing 2 文思梳理 美文诵读 Dear Sir/Madam, I’m Li Hua. (自我介绍) Having learned about the three-day study tour themes, I’m applying for the “Visit Universities” program to explore higher education environments. (申请项目+目的) I’m eager to gain a better understanding of campus cultures, advanced teaching methods, and university learning environments, which are crucial for my preparation for college life. (希望学到的内容) By exploring universities, I can set clearer learning goals (设定更明确的学习目标), improve my self-discipline, and plan my studies more effectively. Furthermore, being exposed to (接触) a university setting will motivate me to study harder to achieve my goals. (学这些内容的理由) This valuable first-hand experience will inspire my passion for higher education. Your approval would be greatly appreciated. (感谢考虑申请) Yours sincerely, Li Hua 佳句　Having learned about the three-day study tour themes, I’m applying for the “Visit Universities” program to explore higher education environments. (分词的完成时作状语)  Friday　提分读后续写 读后续写 基本要素 主要人物:I:身体强壮,被赋予“守护者”身份,内在自私;Brian:体弱多病:生理缺陷(born weak and small),双手灵巧,接受合作分成,未质疑比赛结果;母亲。 原文情节线:“我”因为生得比哥哥强壮,所以被要求经常去照顾生来就“体弱多病”的哥哥。也是因为如此,妈妈总是将“我”看待成哥哥的“守护天使”→学校南瓜雕刻比赛一等奖奖金100美元,“我”渴望购买新游戏,决定参赛→“我”意识到自己笨拙(big clumsy fingers),转而求助Brian的灵巧双手(smaller, delicate hands)合作雕刻→Brian提出分成,两人合作完成南瓜雕刻→获得二等奖,Brian生病,“我”独吞奖金并撒谎→Brian大学离家前,“我”帮忙整理行李,发现他作为学校摄影师拍摄的旧相册(相册可能包含比赛相关照片,如南瓜作品或颁奖现场)。 主题:兄弟情谊 续写情节 第一段:衔接①:衔接首句中的“其中一张照片吸引了我的注意”:照片应该与参赛南瓜相关(协同原文提到的获得第二名)。过渡句:“我”看到参赛南瓜时的感受→“我”开始和哥哥坦白谎言→哥哥的反应(表情肢体动作描写)→Brian揭露已知真相(作为摄影师次日拍摄照片)。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句“‘你明明知道却不说?’我震惊道”:“我”震惊地意识到哥哥什么都知道。 第二段:衔接③:衔接首句“‘你明明知道却不说?’我震惊道”:Brian的反应→Brian说明感受(长期依赖“我”让他自卑)。过渡句:“我”反思自己忽视了哥哥的感受→(协同原文首段中older brother)Brian表达愿望→成为真正的哥哥。尾句(主题升华):沉默中领悟兄弟情的本质→互为“守护天使”。 美文诵读 　　I was enjoying the photos when one caught my eye. There it was our very own pumpkin. Its face was proudly decorated with a blue silk ribbon, signifying (表示) our second place in the contest. A sudden urge to come clean (全盘招供;和盘托出) overwhelmed me. I admitted to Brian that we had indeed secured the second position in the Halloween pumpkin-carving competition. Brian flashed a grin and scratched his head (咧嘴一笑,挠了挠头). Eyes twinkling with playfulness (眼中闪着顽皮的光), he disclosed the truth (揭开真相). As the school newspaper photographer, he had taken that picture the next day after the contest. It hit me like a punch (如遭重击): He’d known about our win all along. “You actually knew and didn’t say anything?” I was shocked. Brian glanced down at (低头看) his half-packed suitcase then up at me. He admitted that constantly relying on me had always made him feel small, and he was supposed to (理应) be the bigger brother. I’d never really thought about how he felt. I was just the big bodyguard for poor Brian. I was so caught up in my role that I never saw it from his perspective. “I just wanted to do the same for you.” Brian interrupted my thoughts. “To be the real bigger brother, for a change.” We sat silently on his bed, realizing we were more than just siblings; we were each other’s guardian angel (我们静坐在他的床沿,意识到:我们不仅是兄弟,更是彼此的守护天使). 佳句　A sudden urge to come clean overwhelmed me. (“无灵”主语句) 一股坦白的冲动涌上心头。 原文语料积累　①with hardly a thought 不假思索　②it dawned on sb. that 某人开始明白/渐渐领悟/开始理解　③look into one’s eyes 直视某人的眼睛 Saturday　提分读后续写 读后续写 基本要素 主要人物:Aminah:成绩优异; Farhan:爱玩; their father 原文情节线:Aminah和Farhan是一对姐弟(或兄妹)。姐姐好学成绩优异,每次考高分总能得到父亲给的100卢比的奖励;弟弟爱玩,父亲为了鼓励他学习,答应如果考好就奖励他一辆自行车→最终弟弟如愿拿到奖励→弟弟不愿意和姐姐分享自己的自行车,而是和自己的小伙伴骑车→姐姐的小姐妹们认为弟弟应该和姐姐分享,这时意外发生了。 主题:亲情、分享、解决问题 续写情节 第一段:衔接①:开头句衔接首句“法尔汗近在咫尺”可写姐姐怎么救弟弟?过渡句:弟弟的反应和动作?是否抓住围巾结成的绳子?衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句“父亲带着自行车去修”可写危险解除, 弟弟安然无恙,自行车坏了。 第二段:衔接③:开头句衔接首句“父亲带着自行车去修”可写听了父亲的话弟弟的反应? 他说了什么?(经历了一场意外的弟弟学会了分享, 最终愿意和姐姐分享自行车)。过渡句:姐姐是什么反应?→父亲带回家什么消息?(修车需要花100卢比)→孩子们的反应?衔接④:尾句衔接原文中的“父母奖励姐姐100卢比”可写姐姐拿出父母奖励自己的100卢比帮助修自行车(体现姐弟之间美好的亲情和分享精神)。 美文诵读 　　Farhan was seconds away. Aminah threw one end of the scarf to Farhan, stretching it across Farhan’s path to signal him to grab on. Letting go of (放手) the handlebars, he reached for his lifeline. As the girls felt the heavy tug of his weight, the bicycle sailed beneath him. They all tumbled (翻滚) a few times down the hill, stopping just in time (及时;来得及) to watch the bicycle crash into the stream. Farhan looked at Aminah, then at his ruined bicycle, then back at his sister, “Thanks.” Their father took the bike to see if it could be fixed. “If the bicycle can be fixed,” Farhan said to Aminah, “you and your friends can ride it.” Aminah smiled. On returning, their father announced, “You’ll have to save up the 100 rupees for the repairs.” The kids sighed as it was a real struggle (绝非易事). Aminah sprang to her feet (跳起来) and ran into the house. She came back grinning and held out her hand (伸出手). In her palm was the reward her parents had given her for getting top marks: exactly 100 rupees. 佳句　In her palm was the reward her parents had given her for getting top marks: exactly 100 rupees. (倒装句+定语从句,描写静态画面,衔接原文伏笔,且体现姐弟之间美好的亲情和分享精神) 原文续写语料积累　①true to one’s word 说话算话,信守诺言　②shrug/ʃrʌ􀱹/v.耸肩(表示不知道或不在乎)　③yell at the top of one’s lungs 声嘶力竭或扯破喉咙地叫喊(=yell at the top of the voice) Sunday　实效提分训练 练提分好题 Ⅰ.过渡衔接词汇用于应用文写作 ①Learning　②Firstly/To begin with/First of all　③In addition/Additionally/Besides/Furthermore/Moreover/What’s more　④Most importantly/Last but not least/Finally　⑤given Ⅱ.过渡衔接词汇用于读后续写 ①stopped　②staring　③and　④held　⑤tiptoed　⑥and 微技能小练 1.tapped Tom on the shoulder 2.shrugged his shoulders 3.my shoulders dropped with relief 4.shouldered his way into 5.looked back over his shoulder 6.shouldering him aside 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $