Week 12 志愿服务社区力量&哭泣篇（Word练习）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 Monday　跟着名著学续写 仿效再背诵 ①the husband burst into tears, pushed his wife behind him and jumped onto the lifeboat himself ②broke into a fit of weeping and shouted something desperately to her husband, without taking her eyes off his face Tuesday　黄金素材巧背练 练能生巧 　 Ⅰ.1.The little boy burst into tears/burst out crying 2.Their kindness brought tears to my eyes/reduced me to tears. 3.his voice was choked with sobs 4.He was moved with tears streaming/running/rolling down his face/cheeks. Ⅱ.1.(1)a lump in her throat; clouded/misted/blurred; wept (2)shed; her eyes filled/swimming with tears 2.(1)She cried with a sudden burst of tears. (2)She turned on the water works. Ⅲ.The girl’s friend rushed towards her, hesitated but finally told the girl that she failed the exam. When the girl heard the news, her heart ached, and tears clouded/blurred/misted her eyes. She lowered her head, trying to hold/fight/force back her tears, but in vain. Her lips trembled, and big tears of sadness and disappointment rolled/ran/streamed down her cheeks. She finally threw herself into her bed, sobbing bitterly. Her friend stood silently beside her with misty eyes, not knowing how to comfort her. She nearly cried her eyes out before she finally stopped. At last, she struggled out of bed, her eyes red and swollen from crying. Wednesday　续写句式多维练 练能生巧 　 Ⅰ.1.During the exam, so nervous was I that my mind went blank. 2.Out of the darkness came a deep voice. 3.Off rushed Tom without so much as a “goodbye”. 4.At the foot of the mountain runs a small stream. 5.On his face stood an expression of horror. Ⅱ.1.So desperate was she that she cried her heart out. 2.From the valley came the beautiful song. 3.The car suddenly stopped and out stepped a girl. 4.Under the blue sky glitters the river. 5.On his red face was a look of embarrassment. Ⅲ.①so tired was Jane that she had to stop for the night　②At/From a distance came the sound of water trickling　③then came a familiar voice　④Under a big tree stood Tom Thursday　巧学续写微技能 微技能4 1.that they began to wolf the food after getting it 2.my heart was filled with warmth and joy 3.My previous fear and concern gradually melted away. 4.earned something more valuable; a warm home; a touch of kindness; a bright happy smile 5.said a “thank you” to the lady; warming each other 6.not only just serve food to feed their stomachs Version 2 　　As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. I truly hoped my smile could be some of the comfort. To my relief, some of them smiled politely back at me when they saw my smile, and I could see the exhaustion in some people’s eyes (看到一些人眼中的疲惫). I wanted to know what they were going through and I was desperate to know what I could do for them. They nodded gratefully as I pushed my spoon into the pot and took a large spoonful (舀了一大勺) and poured it into their bowls. Helped by the lady, the work went smoothly (顺利进行). I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. It was more than a good thing to do. What I got was a precious experience of a deep dip into society, learning more about those needy people. And I came to the realization that (意识到) the poor were also friendly. Although they might appear dangerous sometimes, they still left saying a “thank you” when taking the food, which was so comforting to me. Hopefully, in the near future, our community’s soup kitchen would not only just serve food to feed their stomachs, but also offer “soup” to feed their souls. 原文续写语料积累 ①face to face with　②give up on life　③make the best of the situation　④sadden sb.　⑤I got a little scared Friday　练续写最新好题 读后续写 　 基本要素 主要人物 I, Monica, Ivan 原文情节线 Monica邀请“我”一起给社区修剪树篱→“我”与Monica和10岁大的Ivan三个人一起修剪树篱→Mr. Brown 感激“我们”为他带来方便→社区捐了各种园艺工具→美化收拾“我们”家附近的小公园。 主题 致力改变社区 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句“我在我们当地的Facebook群组发布了我们辛勤工作的照片”,可写 “我”发的帖子在社交媒体上获得的积极的响应(人们点赞、转发、评论)。过渡句:“我”感到自豪、激动→邻居们想和“我们”一起改善社区环境。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句“随着更多的邻居加入,我们朝着社区中心附近的花坛走去”,可写确定好另外一件要做的事。 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句“随着更多的邻居加入,我们朝着社区中心附近的花坛走去”,可写“我们”做了什么,(协同原文的cut it with shears等修剪细节和提及的各种工具)如修剪灌木丛、翻土、整理落叶等。过渡句:邻居们的努力带给社区的变化。尾句(升华):致力改变社区,使它成为一个更好的地方。 美文诵读 　　I posted photos of our hard work on our local Facebook Group. Shared and forwarded, the photos made a splash immediately. Hundreds of likes poured in (涌入) like snowflakes after people knew the story. Someone commented that it inspired him to help the community. Thinking highly of the small park, another expressed his gratitude for our effort to bring convenience to the residents here. With our project getting around, we felt thrilled. Many people wanted to get involved to make our community more beautiful. Then, the second project was born. With more neighbors joining in, we headed for the flower bed near the community center. The task of this time was heavier than before. Trimming the bushes with shears, turning the soil with spades, and tidying the withered fallen leaves with leaf blowers, we put our project in full swing (在热烈进行中). Some time later various beautiful flowers donated by our neighbors were transplanted perfectly. Seeing the brand new flower bed, I was consumed with joy (满心欢喜), because we all devoted ourselves to making a difference to our community, making it a better place for the residents. 佳句　Shared and forwarded, the photos made a splash immediately. (过去分词作状语)  原文续写语料积累　①come in sight 出现在眼前　②in charge of 负责　③at one’s leisure 有空时;空闲时 ④My heart swelled with pride because our efforts paid off. 我心中倍感自豪,因为我们的努力得到了回报。 Saturday　练续写最新好题 读后续写 　 基本要素 主要人物 Harry Caine:无私、社区意识(do something for his community)、利用修理技能(highly skilled repairs)免费修车并捐赠给有需要的人。受助者(如小男孩)。邻居群体:集体参与善举,体现社区互助文化。志愿者。 原文情节线 Harry退休→发现废弃自行车(社区资源浪费)→在网上发起免费修车项目→邻居捐赠闲置或废弃自行车→修理翻新→首次在食物赈济处附近捐赠→小男孩免费获得自行车→社会影响力扩大,废弃自行车过多, Harry无法应付。 主题 社会责任、社区互助、公益事业 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句“得知Harry的状况后,一群志愿者主动前来帮忙”,可写志愿者们主动加入,以及志愿者们的构成(来自各行各业)。过渡句:他们分工协作,按尺寸和车况对自行车进行分类→Harry的车库氛围转变→Harry决心扩大项目。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句“为了给每辆自行车找到合适的主人,Harry详细收集受赠者的具体需求”,可写Harry考虑“精准匹配”需求(个性化服务理念)。 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句“为了给每辆自行车找到合适的主人,Harry详细收集受赠者的具体需求”,可写Harry和志愿者们收集受赠者的各种需求(车型/颜色/尺寸)并考虑他们的年龄/职业/地址等。过渡句:根据需求修理并亲自配送自行车→受赠者收到自行车后感动并致谢。尾句(升华):个性化做法带来的积极影响,可写社区凝聚力增强(归属感与沟通)。 美文诵读 　　Knowing Harry’s situation, a group of volunteers came to help him. They came from all walks of life (来自各行各业)—students, retirees and even some stay⁃at⁃home parents, each eager to lend a hand (伸出援手). They selflessly devoted their time, skills, and knowledge to tackling piles of the donated bikes. Together, they sorted the bikes by size and condition before the repairs. Harry’s garage came alive with energy (充满活力), filled with laughter and lively conversations as the volunteers worked side by side (并肩工作). With the volunteers’ support, Harry was determined to expand the project to more people. And he thought it was necessary to offer each of them a right bike. To match each bike with its new owner, Harry gathered their specific needs. Along with the volunteers, Harry carefully took into account (考虑) individual preferences, such as bike styles, colors, and sizes, as well as ages, addresses and occupations. With the valuable information, every bike was perfectly tailored (定做) to meet the recipients’ needs (满足……的需求). Once the bikes were fully repaired, they delivered each bike in person (亲自) to the recipient’s home, ensuring it was an ideal fit. The recipients were overjoyed, expressing their heartfelt gratitude for the thoughtful gesture. This personalized approach not only warmed their hearts but also strengthened community bonds, fostering a deeper sense of belonging and connecting (这种个性化服务不仅温暖了人心,而且增强了社区联系,增强了归属感与情感连接). 佳句　Harry’s garage came alive with energy, filled with laughter and lively conversations as the volunteers worked side by side. (分词短语作状语+时间状语从句)  原文续写语料积累　①beam a broad smile 眉开眼笑　②grin with delight 高兴得咧着嘴笑　③a sense of satisfaction满足感 ④However, with more abandoned bikes flooding in, Harry had his hands full and the repairing work was more than he could deal with. (with复合结构) 然而,随着废弃自行车源源不断涌来,哈里忙得不可开交,无法应付修理工作。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 默写 12 　 先背诵P104素材12必背佳句,再默写 A组 1.________________________________________ (哽咽) and I couldn’t speak. 2.She swallowed hard and ________________________________________(强忍住了眼泪). 3.Her hands were shaking. She was ______________________________ (快要哭了). 4.Every time Mary saw a picture of her mother, _______________________________________________________ (就泪眼蒙眬). 5.________________________________________她泪眼模糊。 6.______________________________ (泪眼模糊), I walked towards the door. 7.________________________________________她两眼噙满泪水。 8.She watched her son leave, ______________________________ (泪水涟涟). 9.She hugged her child tightly, ______________________________ (双眸满是泪水). 10.Her lips trembled, and ______________________________ (眼泪汪汪). 11.He received our gifts and thanked us ________________________________________(含泪). B组 12.She burst into tears/burst out crying—______________________________ (哭的声音很大). 13.His bottom lip trembled, and tears __________ (well) up in his eyes. 14.Her tears __________ (brim) over again as she started to speak. 15.________________________________________他眼里淌下的是喜悦的泪水。 16.Her heart ached and ________________________________________ (泪流满面). 17.________________________________________她突然大声地哭了起来。 18.She began to __________ (抽噎) again, burying her face in the pillow. 19.One after another people began to __________ (哽咽), and in the end all the women were __________ (哭泣). 20.She ____________________ (泪流满面) when she heard the news. 21.Greatly sad, the little boy ________________________________________ (哭着睡着了). 22.He ____________________ (痛哭不止), asking me to forgive him. 23.________________________________________ 她的眼睛哭得又红又肿。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Week 12　志愿服务/社区力量&哭泣篇 Monday　跟着名著学续写 　　《爱的教育》是一部日记体小说,写的是小学四年级学生安利柯一个学年的生活,其间穿插着老师每月给学生讲述的“故事”,还有父母为他写的许多具有启发意义的文章。 阅读下面的节选部分(选自《爱的教育》中的《爸爸的看护人》),学习仿效文中描写人物的哭泣的手法。(有删改) 　　Arriving at the room, the nurse halted (停下) at the head of a bed, drew aside the curtains, and said,“Here is your father.” The boy burst into tears, dropped his head on the sick man’s shoulder, and clasped (握紧)① with one hand the arm which was lying motionless on the coverlet. The sick man did not move. The boy rose to his feet, looked at his father, and broke into a fresh fit of weeping.② Then the sick man gave a long look at him, and seemed to recognize him; but his lips did not move. Poor daddy, how he was changed! The son would never have recognized him. His hair had turned white, his beard had grown, his face was swollen, of a dull red hue (颜色), with the skin tightly drawn and shining; his eyes were diminished (变小) in size, his lips very thick, his whole appearance altered (改变). There was no longer anything natural about him but his forehead and the arch of his eyebrows. He breathed with difficulty.③ “Daddy! Daddy!”said the boy,“it is I; don’t you know me? I am Cicillo, your own Cicillo. Take a good look at me; don’t you know me? Say one word to me.” But the sick man, after having looked attentively at him, closed his eyes. Then the boy, still weeping, took a chair, seated himself and waited, without taking his eyes from his father’s face.④ ①三个肢体动作+“哭泣”相关词汇,描写男孩见到病人大哭起来 ②三连动词构成的动作链+“哭泣”相关词汇,描写男孩又哭起来 ③外貌描写+动作描写,描述了一个病人的模样:头发花白、胡子长了、脸肿、嘴唇厚、呼吸困难 ④肢体动作描写+神态描写+“哭泣”描写,表现男孩的悲伤 仿效再背诵　尝试仿效上文中的描写方式补全短文,并背诵 　　Once there was a couple on a ship. All of a sudden, the ship met with an accident and the couple had no choice but to run to the lifeboat without delay. Unfortunately there was space only for one person. At that very moment, ①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (丈夫哭了起来,把妻子推到身后,自己跳上了救生艇). His wife stood on the sinking ship, ②　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (突然大哭起来,拼命地向她丈夫喊着什么,眼睛盯着他的脸). The ship sank eventually and the husband went home and brought up their daughter alone.   Tuesday　黄金素材巧背练/默写 素材12　哭泣 必背好词 介词+tears ①be close to tears快要哭了　②in tears哭了　③be wet with tears泪流满面　④in floods of tears泪如雨下　⑤break down in tears哭了出来　⑥with flowing tears眼泪直流 tears+of+名词 ①tears of joy/excitement/gratitude幸福/激动/感激的泪水　②tears of anger/disappointment/sadness, etc.愤怒/失望/悲伤的泪水等　③tears of happiness and sadness悲喜交加的泪水 tears+动词(短语) ①tears spring to/into/come to/fill sb.’s eyes泪水涌上双眼/眼里满是泪水　②tears well up in one’s eyes热泪盈眶 动词(短语)+tears ①fight/choke back tears; force/hold back one’s tears强忍眼泪　②blink back one’s tears抑制住泪水　③weep/shed bitter tears伤心落泪　④burst into tears突然大哭　⑤bring tears to one’s eyes/reduce sb. to tears使某人流泪　⑥move sb. to tears让某人感动得落泪 必背佳句　先背诵再完成《6分钟素材默写》默写12 Ⅰ.酝酿泪水快要哭 1.There was a lump in my throat and I couldn’t speak. 我哽咽得说不出话来。 2.She swallowed hard and forced back her tears.她使劲咽了一下口水,强忍住了眼泪。 3.Her hands were shaking. She was close to tears/on the verge of crying.她两手颤抖,快要哭了。 Ⅱ.眼里有泪(泪眼模糊、泪花闪闪、双眸含泪、眼泪 汪汪、热泪盈眶) 4.Every time Mary saw a picture of her mother, her eyes grew misty/she was misted/blurred with tears.每次看到母亲的照片,玛丽就泪眼蒙眬。 5.Tears clouded/misted/blurred her eyes.她泪眼模糊。 6.Blinded by tears, I walked towards the door. 我泪眼模糊,朝着门口走去。 7.Her eyes were swimming with tears. 她两眼噙满泪水。 8.She watched her son leave, tears in her eyes.她泪水涟涟地目送儿子离去。 9.She hugged her child tightly, with her eyes filled with/full of tears.她紧紧地抱住孩子,双眸满是泪水。 10.Her lips trembled, and her eyes were drowned in tears.她的嘴唇颤抖着,眼泪汪汪。 11.He received our gifts and thanked us with watery/tearful eyes.他拿着礼物,含泪感谢我们。 Ⅲ.哭出来(突然大哭、泪水涌/溢出、洒泪、泪水落下、泪水流淌、哭出声、痛哭) 12.She burst into tears/burst out crying—very noisy tears. 她突然痛哭流涕,哭的声音很大。 13.His bottom lip trembled, and tears welled up in his eyes.他的下嘴唇颤抖,热泪盈眶。 14.Her tears brimmed over again as she started to speak. 她一张口说话,又泪如泉涌了。 15.The tears he shed were tears of joy. 他眼里淌下的是喜悦的泪水。 16.Her heart ached and tears poured/streamed/rolled/ran/flowed down her cheeks/face.她心痛如绞,泪流满面。 17.She cried with a sudden burst of tears.她突然大声地哭了起来。 18.She began to sob again, burying her face in the pillow. 她把脸埋在枕头里,又开始抽噎起来。 19.One after another people began to choke, and in the end all the women were weeping.人们一个接一个哽咽起来,最后女人们全都哭了。 20.She broke down in tears when she heard the news. 她听到这个消息时,禁不住泪流满面。 21.Greatly sad, the little boy cried himself to sleep.小男孩非常伤心,哭着睡着了。 22.He cried his eyes out, asking me to forgive him. 他痛哭不止,求我原谅。 23.Her eyes were all red and swollen from crying. 她的眼睛哭得又红又肿。 练能生巧 Ⅰ.利用并仿效素材补全以下各句,并背诵 1.当有人把糖从他面前拿走时,小男孩放声大哭起来。 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 when the sweets were taken away from in front of him.  2.他们的善举令我落泪。 __________________________________________________ 3.得知妈妈病重, 他泣不成声。 When he heard his mother fell seriously ill, 　　　　　　　　　　　　.  4.他感动得泪流满面。 __________________________________________________ Ⅱ.按要求完成以下各题 1.用恰当的表“哭”的词汇和表达补全下面描写“哭”的片段。 (1)过了一会儿,她回过头来看着他,有点哽咽。然后当她开始说话时,泪水模糊了她的双眼。一个小时后,当她回到自己的房间时,她哭了。 After a while she turned round to look at him, and there was 　　　　　　　　. Then tears 　　　　her eyes as she started to speak. An hour later, when she returned to her room, she 　　　　.  (2)看到所有的苹果都卖完了,农夫流下了喜悦的泪水。他的妻子站在门口,眼里噙满了泪水。 Seeing all the apples sold out, the farmer 　　　　tears of joy. His wife stood at the door, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   2.根据所给情节,用一句话续写描写Mary哭泣的情节。注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 Mary was playing with the knife when it cut her finger. (1)__________________________________________________ (哇的一声哭出来) (2)__________________________________________________ (眼泪哗哗地流出来) Ⅲ.续写微作文 请根据所给情节,尝试续写人物哭泣的情节,可按“泪眼模糊→落泪→大哭出声→眼睛哭肿”的顺序描写人物的哭泣(词数80个左右) The girl’s friend rushed towards her, hesitated but finally told the girl that she failed the exam. __________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ Wednesday　续写句式多维练 　构建极具画面感的倒装句 续写中适当用一些倒装句式能使表达更生动,让阅卷老师眼前一亮。 高分句式40　表运动方向的副词away, off, down, up, in .../地点副词短语+go/flee/run/rush/dash等表运动的谓语动词+名词 在描写人或物空间位置变化时,可灵活使用这类倒装句作为衔接过渡。 ①Down the hill ran the children.孩子们跑下山了。 ②Hearing the dog barking fiercely, away fled the thief.听到狗狂吠,小偷逃走了。 高分句式41　表地点的副词/介词(短语)+ be/lie/stand/sit等静态动词+主语 这个句式可用来描写静态的场景,非常生动,有画面感,使读者身临其境。 In front of her was another long passage and she just managed to catch sight of the rabbit hurrying down it.在她的前面是另一条长长的通道,她正好看到兔子匆匆沿着通道跑去。 高分句式42　so+情感形容词+be+主语+that ... 该句式中的so也可修饰表情感的副词,如happily, angrily等。 So scared was I that I could hardly move an inch.我吓得寸步难行。 高分句式43　not until +从句/时间状语+助动词/情态动词/系动词+主语+谓语 注意该句式从句不倒装,主句用部分倒装,可用于衔接过渡。 Not until then did a smile light up George’s face.直到那时,乔治脸上才露出喜色。 练能生巧 Ⅰ.用倒装句升级以下各句,并背诵 1.During the exam, I was so nervous that my mind went blank. __________________________________________________ 2.A deep voice came out of the darkness. __________________________________________________ 3.Tom rushed off without so much as a “goodbye”. __________________________________________________ 4.A small stream runs at the foot of the mountain. __________________________________________________ 5.An expression of horror stood on his face. __________________________________________________ Ⅱ.对Ⅰ中各句进行一对一仿写,并背诵 1.她非常绝望,哭得死去活来。 __________________________________________________ 2.从山谷中传来美妙的歌声。 __________________________________________________ 3.车突然停下,从车里走出一个女孩儿。 __________________________________________________ 4.蓝天下,河水在阳光下闪闪发光。 __________________________________________________ 5.他涨红的脸上满是尴尬。 __________________________________________________ Ⅲ.微续写 根据汉语提示,利用倒装句填写空白部分,使之构成一个完整的故事。 As night fell, ①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (简太累了,她得停下来过夜). Jane climbed onto a rock. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom. Jane rose at dawn, hungry and thirsty. ②　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 [从远处传来水滴落(trickling)的声音]. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, ③　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (然后传来一个熟悉的声音). Jane was wild with joy. ④　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (Tom站在一棵大树下) who was anxious when she was nowhere to be found.  Thursday　巧学续写微技能 好题探索　社区服务　(2022·浙江高考) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　I needed to do something in my community in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do. →不了解(为了完成社区服务) I thought that we would just be passing out dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner.① We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering.② It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner. →所为(准备食物,调制沙拉,分离冻肉) As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared.④ I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act? How would they treat me? Would they hate me for having more than they did? While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous.⑤ I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.⑥ I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking.③ Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.⑦ →所见(源源不断的流浪者排着队等着食物。他们有的衣衫褴褛,有的亲切友善,有的面露凶相,或目光呆滞,或苦中作乐)　→了解参与服务 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. 　　I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. (请参考素材3,素材8,主题素材7,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 理6要素 ①Who I, the lady, the homeless people ②When before graduation ③Where in my community ④What I joined in the community service to graduate from high school. ⑤Problem 完成社区服务 ⑥Theme 体会助人工作的不易,有同理心,懂得感恩,尽自己所能贡献力量、守望相助 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“当他们朝我走来时”:“我”开始忐忑地分发食物。 ◆过渡句1　(协同上文中自己的几个疑问)无家可归者的表现(看起来危险的人其实特别友好)让“我”放下戒备之心→在服务的过程中,the lady一直协助“我”,给了“我”很多的帮助。 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“获得了服务时间”:社区服务进展顺利,“我”开始享受社区活动。 Para. 2　I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“我很高兴我用这种方式获得了服务时间”:(与happy协同)简单回顾并对这样的社区服务持肯定态度。 ◆过渡句2　“我”主动和无家可归者交流→对他们看法的改变、情感的变化(不再害怕)。 ◆结尾+主题　(协同原文提到的the lady) “我”与the lady创建了慈善小组,去更好地帮助无家可归者。点出公益服务的深层意义。 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.1 had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen Para.2 I thought that we would just be passing out dinners→对社区服务的态度 Para.4 It saddened me to think of ... who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.→“我”的同理心和怜悯 段一协同描写“我”态度的另一个转变:“我”开始喜欢社区服务 段二协同描写“我”呼吁或主动组织大家参与社区服务 Para.3 I was assigned to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.→忙前忙后,微笑待人 段一可协同描写the lady对“我”的帮助 段二可协同描写“我”对the lady的感谢 情节的协同 Para.2 We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. 段一协同描写发放肉三明治 Para.3 I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act? How would they treat me? Would they hate me for having more than they did?→“我”心中的顾虑:如何行动?会被如何对待?无家可归者是否会为难“我”? 段一交代消除了心中的顾虑,改变了态度 Para.3 While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous. 段二协同描写看似危险的人其实很友好 Para.1 I needed to do something in my community in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. 段二应协同交代“我”完成社区服务,顺利毕业 主题的协同 原文提及从对社区服务的“不了解”到“了解”,结合首段中的“It seemed like a good thing to do”,暗示这次社区服务对“我”的积极影响 段二可协同描写a good thing;尾句可协同描写“我”组织活动帮助无家可归者 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.并列句(原文①②③)。2.从句,如状语从句、定语从句和宾语从句(原文④⑤⑥⑦) 描写“我”的社区服务经历,并推动情节发展。 续写第一段(场景1 分发领取食物　场景2 打破“以貌取人”的偏见　场景3 内心温暖快乐) 场景1　分发领取食物(有序排队的人群、不同人吃饭) 1.有些人太饿了,他们拿到食物后就开始狼吞虎咽,而有些人则直接把食物拿走。(倒装句+并列句) So hungry were some 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, while some just took it away.  场景3　内心温暖快乐 2.虽然我四肢酸痛,但我的心里满是温暖和喜悦。(“无灵”主语句) Though my limbs were stiff, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.  续写第二段(场景4 肯定这次经历的意义　场景5 主动尝试和他们交流　场景6 恐惧消失) 场景6　恐惧消失 3.我先前的恐惧和担心逐渐消失了。(“无灵”主语句) __________________________________________________ 吸睛结尾句 感悟式,点出公益服务的深层意义 4.通过这次经历,除了服务时间,我也收获了更有价值的东西:虽然我们不能给那些有需要的人一个温暖的家,但我们至少可以尽自己的一份力,用一点同情、一点善良、一个灿烂快乐的微笑温暖他们的心。 Through the experience, aside from the service hours, I also 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　: while we can’t give those needy soul 　　　　　　　　, at least we can contribute our share to warm their hearts by a touch of sympathy, 　　　　　　　　, and 　　　　　　　　　　.   5.我也对帮助我的女士说了一声“谢谢”,因为我知道,正是我们共同的善意——不仅是为了毕业,而且是在相互温暖——使我们更紧密地联系在一起。 I also 　　　　　　　　　　　　who helped me out, for I knew it was the kindness we shared together, not only for graduating but also for 　　　　　　　　, that bonded us closer together.  6.希望在不久的将来,我们社区的施食处不只是让他们吃饱,还能提供慰藉心灵的“汤”。 Hopefully, in the near future, our community’s soup kitchen would 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, but also offer “soup” to feed their souls.  As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. With a little nervousness, I began to distribute hamburgers with the meat, which were badly in need. But to my great relief, those homeless were in a quiet well-ordered queue, waiting for the food to be served. So hungry were some that they began to wolf the food after getting it, while some just took it away. What touched me was that hundreds left with friendly thanks. Indeed, one couldn't be judged by his clothes. Though my limbs were stiff, my heart was filled with warmth and joy. I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. It was truly a good thing to do! Taking the lady's advice, I even tried to befriend them. And it turned out that those seemingly dangerous people were actually quite friendly. My previous fear and concern gradually melted away. Through the experience, aside from the service hours, I also earned something more valuable: while we can't give those needy soul a warm home, at least we can contribute our share to warm their hearts by a touch of sympathy, a touch of kindness, and a bright happy smile. 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　　　　 面对　　　　　　　　②　　　　　　　　　　　 放弃生活  ③　　　　　　　　　　　 最大限度地利用现状 ④　　　　　　　　　　　 使某人悲伤;使某人难过  ⑤As the line of people came toward me, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.  当这队人朝我走来,我有点害怕。 Friday　练续写最新好题 读后续写　社区公益服务 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　I spotted my neighbor, Monica, working in her garden one day when I returned home from school. It was sunny, and the smell of cut grass made me feel refreshed. I popped my head over the fence, and Monica and I got talking. “I’ve seen you’re very good at using a lawn mower (割草机) and gardening tools,” Monica said. “There’s a hedge (树篱) growing over the pathway near here. It’s so over grown that it becomes a headache for the passers-by. I was planning to cut it back myself. Would you like to help out?” I loved the idea of helping Monica and our community. We agreed to cut the hedge the following Sunday. My brother Ivan, aged 10, also came along to help us. We wheeled Monica’s garbage can down to the hedge, which the community council was responsible for. All three of us cut it with shears (大剪刀) until a trouble-free pathway came in sight. Mr. Brown, a wheelchair user, was grateful that he didn’t have to make a detour (绕行) any more to pass the hedge. Encouraged by his words, I suggested doing more for our community, to make it a better place. When we first started, we just made the best of the equipment we already had in my parents’ garage. But as time went on, donations came in from the local community. Our garage got filled up quickly with brushes, gardening tools, and even donated power tools like leaf blowers. With everything ready, our first project was to beautify the small park near our houses, which looked a bit run-down. Ivan was in charge of painting the fence around, Monica cleared the lawn with a leaf blower, and I was responsible for repairing the benches where our neighbors usually sat at their leisure. After two weeks’ hard work, we felt stunned when stepping back and appreciating the clean and brand new small park. My heart swelled with pride because our efforts paid off. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　I posted photos of our hard work on our local Facebook Group. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　With more neighbors joining in, we headed for the flower bed near the community center. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ (请参考素材8,素材11,主题素材7,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) Saturday　练续写最新好题 读后续写　退休后为社区修车献爱心 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Harry Caine retired from a local power company. After his retirement, he just wanted to do something for his community. One day, he spotted many abandoned bikes, which were gathering dust in the neighbouring garages. “Why not fix them up and give them to the needy?” he thought. So, he posted to an online group in his Alaska Homer, offering to fix people’s bikes for free. Soon some neighbors began to donate their abandoned bikes after their kids had outgrown them or adults had upgraded to new models. Then, in Harry’s tidy little garage, he set about working. Its inner walls lined with tools, the garage held a workbench and repair stand. Classic rock music often drifted from its open doors, a sign that Harry was working hard. After Harry’s highly skilled repairs, the donated bikes took on new looks and functioned very well. One Saturday, Harry transported the first batch of six repaired bikes to a nearby food bank, a place that gave food to the poor. He camped out with his Free Bikes sign and waited to see whether the bikes were needed. Five minutes later, a little boy wearing worn-out clothes came up to Harry with a doubtful look, his eyes glued to a blue bike. “Is it really free?” the boy asked. “Yes. If you like it, it’s yours.” Harry answered joyfully. The boy beamed a broad smile. He briskly walked towards the blue bicycle. Then he touched its handle, pressed its bell, and explained how he had dreamed of owning one bicycle. Grinning with delight, Harry watched him pedal away and disappear in the distance. The following 30 minutes saw the remaining bikes ridden away, which gave him a sense of satisfaction. As word of Harry’s project spread, neighbors admirably called him Uncle Harry, and they kept him busy with a steady supply of bikes, helmets and even locks. However, with more abandoned bikes flooding in, Harry had his hands full and the repairing work was more than he could deal with. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　Knowing Harry’s situation, a group of volunteers came to help him. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　To match each bike with its new owner, Harry gathered their specific needs. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ (请参考素材2,素材8,素材13,主题素材7,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $