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2026年春期北京朝阳区初三二模写作指导及高分范文
写 作 任 务一
成长路上,每个人都有自己独特的样子。有人觉得自己像一缕风,有人像一簇小火苗,还有人像一朵向日葵。你觉得自己像什么?
假设你是李华,你校英语社团正在开展 “成长加油站” 活动,计划在公众号做一期以 “I Am Like ______” 为主题的推送,现面向全校征集留言。请结合一段真实的成长经历,说明你为什么觉得自己像它,并分享你的成长感悟。
提示词语: sunshine, warmth, encourage, learning methods, make progress
内容提示: What do you think you are like during your growth?
What experience makes you have such a feeling?
思 路 点 拨
第一步:审题
体裁:英文短文(记叙 + 感悟),用于公众号留言
人称:第一人称 I 为主
时态:一般现在时、一般过去时结合(讲述经历用过去时,表达看法用现在时)
核心要求:
补全标题,选定喻体(参考方向:sunshine、sunflower、little fire 等)
讲述一段具体成长经历,解释比喻的原因
用上提示词:sunshine, warmth, encourage, learning methods, make progress
最后写出个人成长感悟
第二步:写作提纲
开头:直接点明自己把自己比作什么,简单解释这个事物的特点。
主体:回忆一段过往经历,比如学习遇到困难、情绪低落时,自己始终保持乐观,或是主动帮助同学、调整学习方法。结合经历说明和所选喻体的相似之处,融入温暖、鼓励、改进学习方法、取得进步等内容。
结尾:抒发成长感悟,表达未来会继续保持这份特质,勇敢前行。
第三步:选词组句可能用到的词语及中文解释:
learning methods 学习方法make progress 取得进步sunflower 向日葵
difficult 困难的upset 沮丧的keep trying 坚持努力cheer up 振作起来
face difficulties 面对困难hold on 坚持believe in oneself 相信自己
高分作文一:
I am like sunshine. I always try to bring warmth to people around me.
Once my deskmate felt upset because he failed an exam. He didn’t know good learning methods and nearly gave up. I talked with him and encouraged him not to lose heart. We studied together and shared useful ways to learn. Slowly, he made progress little by little.
From this experience, I learn that being positive matters a lot. I will keep being sunshine and spread warmth to everyone.
我像一缕阳光,我总努力给身边的人带去温暖。
有一次,我的同桌因为考试失利十分沮丧。他找不到好的学习方法,几乎想要放弃。我主动开导他,鼓励他不要灰心。我们一起学习,分享实用的学习技巧。慢慢地,他一点点取得了进步。
通过这件事我明白,积极的心态十分重要。我会一直做一缕阳光,把温暖传递给每一个人。
高分作文二:
I am like a sunflower. I always look for sunshine and keep moving forward bravely.
Last term, my grades were bad and I felt worried. I changed my learning methods and kept working hard every day. When I wanted to give up, I told myself to hold on. Gradually, I made great progress. Just like a sunflower facing the sun, sunshine inside me encourages me all the time.
I realize we should never fear difficulties. As long as we keep trying, we will finally succeed.
我像一朵向日葵,永远追寻阳光,勇敢向前。
上学期我的成绩很不理想,内心十分焦虑。我调整了学习方法,日复一日坚持努力。每当我想要放弃时,我都告诉自己要坚持下去。渐渐地,我取得了很大进步。就像向日葵永远向着太阳,我内心的阳光始终鼓舞着我。
我懂得了永远不要畏惧困难。只要坚持努力,我们终会收获成功。
好 句 背 诵 以下是上面高分作文摘取的优秀的表达:
I always try to bring warmth to people around me.中文翻译:我总努力给身边的人带去温暖。理由:句式简单地道,紧扣提示词 warmth,开篇点题,自然交代自身特质,是作文开头的优质表达。
He didn’t know good learning methods and nearly gave up.中文翻译:他找不到好的学习方法,几乎想要放弃。理由:精准使用题目给出的短语 learning methods,叙事流畅,如实还原经历细节,贴合写作要求。
I talked with him and encouraged him not to lose heart.中文翻译:我开导他,并鼓励他不要灰心。理由:用到提示词 encourage,搭配短语 lose heart 通俗易懂,动作描写连贯,让故事情节更生动。
Slowly, he made progress little by little.中文翻译:慢慢地,他一点点取得了进步。理由:运用核心提示词 make progress,little by little 增强语言画面感,用词简单却表达细腻,是初三作文加分短句。
Just like a sunflower facing the sun, sunshine inside me encourages me all the time.中文翻译:就像向日葵永远向着太阳,我内心的阳光始终鼓舞着我。理由:呼应标题与比喻,串联起 sunshine、encourage 两个提示词,句式优美,做到情景和主题完美结合。
As long as we keep trying, we will finally succeed.中文翻译:只要我们坚持努力,我们终会收获成功。理由:使用条件状语从句,句式有层次感,结尾升华主旨,道理简洁易懂,适合用作文章收尾。
写 作 任 务二
假设你是李华,你们学校正在开展英语周活动,现进行前期调研,调研内容为 “Favorite Activity in the Free Time”。要求参与者提交英文调研报告,为此你对班里 40 名同学进行了问卷调查,下图是部分统计结果。请用英语写一篇短文,简要说明图表内容,并给班级同学提出业余时间的活动建议。
饼图标题:What do you want to do most in your free time?
do volunteer work:10%
do some reading:15%
take exercise:25%
play video games:50%
提示词语: show, spend less time, care for others, communication skills
内容提示: What can you learn from the results?Offer some advice to your classmates on activities in the free time.
I did a survey among 40 classmates on activities in the free time.
思 路 点 拨
第一步:审题
体裁:英文调研报告(说明 + 建议)
时态:以一般现在时为主,介绍调查结果
核心要点:
清晰呈现饼图数据:50% 同学最喜欢玩电子游戏,25% 喜欢锻炼,15% 喜欢阅读,仅 10% 愿意做志愿工作
结合提示词,提出合理建议:减少游戏时间,多参与阅读、锻炼、志愿活动
点明活动的好处:提升沟通能力、学会关心他人、丰富课余生活
第二步:写作提纲
开头:用题目给出的句子开头,点明自己为调研做了问卷调查,引出下文。
主体:按比例从高到低说明调查结果,点出 “玩游戏占比过高,志愿活动占比很低” 的现象。简单说明过度玩电子游戏的弊端,以及阅读、锻炼、志愿活动的好处。建议同学们减少游戏时间,多参与更有意义的活动。
结尾:表达希望大家合理安排业余时间,让课余生活更有价值。
第三步:选词组句可能用到的词语及中文解释:
activity:活动favorite:最喜欢的spend time on:在…… 上花费时间
play video games:玩电子游戏take exercise:锻炼do some reading:阅读
do volunteer work:做志愿工作spend less time on:减少在…… 上的时间
care for others:关心他人communication skills:沟通能力meaningful:有意义的
advice:建议make good use of:充分利用
高分作文一:
I did a survey among 40 classmates on activities in the free time. The results show that half of the students want to play video games most, while only 10% choose to do volunteer work. 25% of them like taking exercise and 15% enjoy doing some reading.
I think we should spend less time on video games. Too much time on games is bad for our health and study. Instead, we can do more meaningful activities. Taking exercise keeps us strong, reading opens our eyes, and volunteer work helps us care for others and improve our communication skills. Let’s make good use of our free time to grow better.
我对班里 40 名同学的业余活动做了一项调查。结果显示,一半的同学最想玩电子游戏,而只有 10% 的同学选择做志愿工作。其中 25% 的同学喜欢锻炼,15% 的同学喜欢阅读。
我认为我们应该少花时间在电子游戏上。花太多时间玩游戏对我们的健康和学习都不好。相反,我们可以做更多有意义的活动。锻炼能让我们保持强壮,阅读能开阔我们的眼界,志愿工作能帮助我们关心他人,还能提升我们的沟通能力。让我们好好利用课余时间,更好地成长。
高分作文二:
I did a survey among 40 classmates on activities in the free time. The results show that playing video games is the most popular activity, taking up 50%. 25% of the students prefer taking exercise, 15% love reading, and only 10% are interested in volunteer work.
From the results, I find most of us spend too much time on video games. I think we should cut down on game time. We can take exercise to keep healthy, read more to learn new things, and join volunteer work to care for others. These activities can also help us develop better communication skills. Let’s plan our free time well and live a more colorful life.
我对班里 40 名同学的业余活动做了一项调查。结果显示,玩电子游戏是最受欢迎的活动,占比 50%。25% 的同学更喜欢锻炼,15% 的同学热爱阅读,只有 10% 的同学对志愿工作感兴趣。
从结果来看,我发现我们大多数人在电子游戏上花了太多时间。我认为我们应该减少游戏时间。我们可以通过锻炼保持健康,多阅读学习新知识,参加志愿工作来关心他人。这些活动也能帮助我们培养更好的沟通能力。让我们合理规划课余时间,过上更丰富多彩的生活。
好 句 背 诵以下是上面高分作文摘取的优秀的表达:
“The results show that half of the students want to play video games most, while only 10% choose to do volunteer work.”中文翻译:结果显示,一半的同学最想玩电子游戏,而只有 10% 的同学选择做志愿工作。理由:用 “while” 构成对比,清晰突出了不同活动的占比差异,句子结构简单又有逻辑对比感,符合初三写作的得分点。
“Too much time on games is bad for our health and study.”中文翻译:花太多时间玩游戏对我们的健康和学习都不好。理由:用简单的句式点明了过度玩游戏的弊端,用词都是初三常见词汇,表达直接自然,贴合写作的分析部分。
“Taking exercise keeps us strong, reading opens our eyes, and volunteer work helps us care for others and improve our communication skills.”中文翻译:锻炼能让我们保持强壮,阅读能开阔我们的眼界,志愿工作能帮助我们关心他人,还能提升我们的沟通能力。理由:用三个并列的短句,分别对应三种活动的好处,既用上了提示词 “care for others” 和 “communication skills”,又让句子结构整齐、读起来流畅,是很加分的表达。
“playing video games is the most popular activity, taking up 50%”中文翻译:玩电子游戏是最受欢迎的活动,占比 50%。理由:用 “taking up” 这个短语来表达 “占比”,比直接用 “is 50%” 更生动自然,也体现了对数据的规范描述。
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