故乡的味道--读后续写讲评课 课件-2026届高三英语二轮复习专项

What do you do if you feel homesick? 读后续写讲评课 ---“故乡的味道” Sunlight flooded through the window when Tomás was sitting at the kitchen table, struggling with a literary classic. Streamers of clouds drifted by high above in the sky. Not far away, the huge new tower blocks lined the road. The faint sound of cars was dimly heard. His mother was chopping tomatoes for their dinner as usual. Suddenly she said, “You know, the thing I miss most is cooking a really hot salsa(辣番茄酱), with fresh peppers straight from the garden.” She sighed. “That’s what I miss most about Mérida.” Tomás looked up from his book in surprise. His mother had never talked like this about their old life before. He studied her now. She looked a little sad, but then she smiled at him and swept the pile of chopped tomatoes into the cooking pot. “But I’ve already learned a lot about this new country, Tomás,” she said. “For a start, I’ve learned that there’s more than one way to make a salsa!” She waved a packet of chili spice powder at him, and they both laughed. Watching his mother busy in the kitchen preparing dinner, Tomás thought about the insight his mother had given him into her feelings, and he realized that he felt the same way about leaving. Sure, it had been great for his father to get this good job, but it had also been hard. Tomás missed his old home -- especially the sun and the beach. And his mother missed Mérida, too. She had loved working in her market garden, selling the fresh vegetables that she had grown herself and then coming home to cook up huge, tasty meals for her family. Tomás’s stomach rumbled at the memories. He thought about how different things were for them now, living in this large, gray apartment block where there was no garden and no friends dropping by to share their delicious meals. He sighed. At least they were still able to speak regularly every night after dinner with his grandmother back in Mexico over the computer - Grandmother! Abuela! Suddenly Tomás had an idea. ________________________________________ A week later, a box arrived from Mexico._____________________________ Q1: What is the conflict of the story? Q2: How can the conflict be solved? Read and infer Excerpt 1 Identify unreasonable content Para.2 “...the thing I miss most is cooking a really hot salsa(辣番茄酱), with fresh peppers straight from the garden.. Para.6 And his mother missed Mérida, too. She had loved working in her market garden, selling the fresh vegetables that she had grown herself and then coming home to cook up huge, tasty meals for her family. Excerpt 2 Identify unreasonable content Para.8... they were still able to speak regularly ... over the computer...! Identify unreasonable content Excerpt 3 Para.8... able to speak regularly ... over the computer - Grandmother! Abuela! Narrative tempo 叙事节奏是指故事中人物、事件、场景等整体向前运动变化时出现的张弛、强弱、跳跃、平稳等各种状态。 Comment：from the perspective of narrative tempo 跳跃式叙事： 未考虑叙事场景的空间构建；重要场景节奏太快。 Tip1: 避免跳跃式逻辑，补充必要的过渡信息；重要场景放慢节奏，增添细节描写。 Excerpt 4&5 Think and rewrite Suddenly Tomás had an idea. “Grandma, can you send some peppers to us...” Tomás asked. ... Why not turn to Abuela for help? Seized by the increasing eagerness to contact his grandmother, Tomas raced to the computer, leaving his mother in curiosity. The moment he got through to his grandmother via the video chat, he lowered his voice. Tip1:避免跳跃式逻辑，补充必要的过渡信息；重要场景放慢节奏，增添细节描写。 lowered got through to raced Seized 叙事节奏太快：未充分体现矛盾解决的积极影响，没有刻画出主要人物的情感 Tip2: 慢镜头捕捉关键人物的内心活动、动作、表情、语言等，丰富细节描写。 Comment：from the perspective of narrative tempo Excerpt 6 Think and rewrite A week later, a box arrived from Mexico. Inside it were many kinds of vegetables and a letter reading “love from Mérida. Moments later, his mother set out to cook a huge tasty meal. "That's what I miss most! A taste from HOME!", blurted out his mother, her lips curving into a broad beam and eyes glittering with excitement. Never had Tomás seen his mother so cheerful since they moved here. Tip2: 慢镜头捕捉关键人物的内心活动、动作、表情、语言等，丰富细节描写。 表情 语言 叙事拖沓:次要信息占据较大篇幅，迟迟没有进入正题。 Tip3:利用概述描写次要情节，剔除无关的、具体而感性化的细节。 Comment：from the perspective of narrative tempo Excerpt 7 Think and rewrite Suddenly Tomás had an idea.Why not turn to Abuela for help? Seized by the increasing eagerness to contact his grandmother, Tomas raced to the computer and got through to his grandmother via the video chat. Tomás said, “...Could you please send us some vegetables?” After learning that the market garden still fed the family， Tip3:利用概述描写次要情节，剔除无关的、具体而感性化的细节。 Review: ways to end a continuation 1.首尾呼应 2.点题式/感悟式/议论式 3.以景结情 4.画面定格 Read and comment 1. By the window was a big bowl containing the seeds shining in the brilliant sunlight. 2. One year later, Tomás’s family could eventually eat some delicious food grown by themselves and their lives were getting better and better. 3.Moonlight was cast on the seeds, which, as if by magic, had turned into peppers already. 4. Tomás let out a hiccup, beamed and said, “I think I begin to enjoy our new life now.” 5. Sharing the salsa with his classmates, Tomás made the acquaintance of a lot of new friends. He got accustomed to his new life gradually. 6. That night they enjoyed an extraordinary dinner, laughter lingering around the house. 7. That night, they sampled the palatable salsa, as well as the taste of hometown. 8. They knew it was the taste of home that made it so special and palatable. 9. It is love that makes the world go around. 10. What was sown was not only the vegetable seeds but also the seed of determination to continue their tradition deep in their hearts. 过渡拓展延伸 偏离主要矛盾 偏离主要矛盾 生搬硬套式 Ways to end the continuation 1. By the window was a big bowl containing the seeds shining in the brilliant sunlight. 3.Moonlight was cast on the seeds, which, as if by magic, had turned into peppers already. 6. That night they enjoyed an extraordinary dinner, laughter lingering around the house. 7. That night, they sampled the palatable salsa, as well as the taste of hometown. 8. They knew it was the taste of home that made it so special and palatable. 10. What was sown was not only the vegetable seeds but also the seed of determination to continue their tradition deep in their hearts. 以景结情+首尾呼应 以景结情+点题 画面定格 点题 感悟点题 点题 Ways to end the continuation 4. Tomás let out a hiccup, beamed and said, “I think I begin to enjoy our new life now.” 画面定格+点题 “That’s it! The real taste of hometown!” Outline for the continuation: Suddenly Tomás had an idea. _______________________________ A week later, a box arrived from Mexico.____________________ Self- revision eg.1. excitment 2. Could you sent.../ask grandmother to sent... Summary 1.细读原文： 找准主要矛盾，充分挖掘前文伏笔。 2.把握叙事节奏： 慢节奏：细节描写。 快节奏：概述描写。 3.续写切题/深刻的结尾： 首尾呼应、感悟点题、以景结情、画面定格 Suddenly Tomás had an idea. Why not turn to Abuela for help? Seized by the increasing eagerness to contact his grandmother, he wolfed down his supper once it was ready. Right after dinner, Tomas raced to the computer before he had even had his favourite dessert, leaving his mother in curiosity. The moment he got through to his grandmother via the video chat, he lowered his voice, whispering, "Abuela, I need your help!" After Tomas poured out his idea, Abuela clapped her hands, promising, "Excellent! You'll receive what you want!" Beside himself with joy（unable to control yourself because of the strength of emotion you are feeling ）, Tom waved goodbye to Abuela, expectantly waiting for the package. Possible version A week later, a box arrived from Mexico. Bubbling over with excitement, Tomas invited his mother to open the box together. Unfolding before their eyes were a sealed package of dried peppers and a colorful packet of seeds. "That's what I miss most! A taste from HOME!", blurted out his mother, her lips curving into a broad beam and eyes glittering in amazement. Never had Tomas seen his mother so cheerful in weeks. Moments later, his mother was preparing a salsa using the peppers, chopping tomatoes and humming a merry tune. Outside the kitchen window, a big pot containing the seeds gleamed in the sunlight. Possible version $