高中英语读后续写方法点拨(二)课件-2026届高三英语三轮冲刺

高中英语读后续写方法点拨(二) ----以“Grandma的旧信箱”为例 CONTENTS 01 原文内容解读 02 写作思路点拨 03 情感表达句式回顾 04 动手练习之写作篇 05 参考范文 1.7.2013 本次解析将分为五个部分。首先，我们会回顾续写的原文，明确写作背景。接着，展示完整的范文内容。然后，我们会深入剖析范文中的亮点，包括词汇、句式和情感表达。之后，分析范文的篇章结构。最后，总结出实用的写作技巧，帮助大家应对高考续写任务。 ‹#› Step 1: Reading the Original Text Plot 情节 Emotion 情感 Theme 主题 Read for three aspects, pay attention to plot, emotion and theme, and underline the three aspects when Reading. Reading 01—原文内容解读 Grandma's old wooden mailbox, with a chipped(adj.有缺口的) blue coat (涂料层) and a slightly rusted hinge (铰链), had stood at the quiet corner of the community for 20 years. It was not just a simple mailbox, but a warm bond with the nearly three families. Every early morning, when the first ray of sunlight spilled over the roof, Grandma would put on her shoes, hold a small bamboo basket, and walk slowly to the corner with her slightly bent back. 原文赏析 【Para1】垫定了整篇的情感基调:温馨、和谐的画面。奶奶的信箱很破旧，但这个信箱是连接三户人家的纽带。每天早晨第一缕阳光洒在屋顶时，奶奶都会提着篮子，佝偻着腰，慢慢地走向那个信箱。 此处为后文中“信箱”破掉，埋下了伏笔，正是因为这是20多年的老物品，才特别容易破掉。 吸引读者兴趣: 1.老信箱连接了三户人家，另外两户人家是怎样的呢？ 2.奶奶佝偻着腰，每天一大早去信箱那儿做什么呢？ She would carefully collect her own letters and the daily newspapers for the elderly neighbors next door — Mr. Smith who suffered from leg pain and Ms. Brown who lived alone, both of whom could barely walk downstairs. Those newspapers were their main way to learn about the outside world, and Grandma's small act of kindness had quietly lasted for years, warming the whole neighborhood. 原文赏析 【Para2】继续铺垫:温馨、和谐和互帮互助的社区氛围。奶奶是来收取自己的信件，并且帮助腿疼的Smith先生和独居的Brown女士拿每日的报纸的，而报纸则是他们了解外面世界的主要方式。 营造了和谐、有爱、又温馨的社区生活。同时，也强调了这个信箱的重要性。为后文信封被弄破埋下了伏笔。 交代了主旨:...small act of kindness, warming the whole neighborhood. Para 2的描写——暴风雨/矛盾来临前的宁静与和谐。 On a holiday afternoon, Tom, a college student majoring in architecture, came to visit Grandma as usual. When he turned the corner, he was shocked to find the mailbox lying on the ground, its wooden body split(v.使分裂) into several pieces. He glanced around instinctively(adv.本能地;) and saw a man walking a large dog in the distance. There was a crumpled(adj.弄皱的;) note stuck on the wall beside it, which read, "Sorry, my dog knocked your mailbox over accidentally. I'll come to fix it later." 原文赏析 【Para3】矛盾转折点:Tom像往常那样拜访奶奶时，却发现信箱在地上，箱体分裂成几部分。他本能地四处张望，看到了远处的一个遛狗的男士。这个信箱上被粘了个便条，男士承认自己的狗撞了信箱，承诺他会修理的。 Tom的出场，埋下了伏笔：Tom是建筑专业的学生【此处暗示，他会做木匠活儿，能修理/制作信箱】 ----Tom心地善良、真诚，他可能是解决矛盾的人物之一。 本段揭示了信箱破掉的原因——一位遛狗男士的狗偶然撞到了信箱，他承诺稍后会进行修理。 ---遛狗的男士，诚实、真诚，他也可能是解决矛盾的人物。 本段出现的两个人——Tom和遛狗的男士，都拥有美好的品质，所以这两个人都有可能解决出现的矛盾。 Seeing the broken mailbox and scattered(散落的;散开的;) wood pieces, Grandma sighed(v.&n.叹息;) softly, her eyes filled with worry. She squatted(v.蹲坐;) down gently, stroked(v.轻抚;抚摸;n.中风) the worn wood with her rough hands, and murmured(v.耳语;小声说;) in a low voice, "What shall I do now?" Tom knew the elderly neighbors were heavily dependent on the newspapers. Without the mailbox, how could they get the news on time? What if the dog owner broke his promise and couldn't fix the mailbox today? Watching Grandma's helpless expression, he felt a strong desire in his heart. 原文赏析 【Para4】本段的矛盾达到了高潮。本段有很多的Grandma的动作、心理描写的句子，Grandma的叹息、轻抚破掉的信箱，都是在侧面描写:这个信箱非常重要，“信箱破掉”这个矛盾达到了必须解决的地步。 正面描写和侧面描写相结合的方式：凸显出“解决信箱破损”这个矛盾的紧迫性。 1.Grandma担心狗狗的主人不遵守承诺。此刻第一个站出来的人是Tom，他的内心涌起了一种渴望。 2.思考:这是一种什么样的渴望呢？ 渴望帮助解决“信箱破损”的事情。 注意：(1) 续写词数应为 150 个左右；(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1:Considering the mailbox too old, Tom decided to build a new one. ——————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————— Paragraph 2:When all the preparations were done, the dog owner arrived. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 02—写作思路点拨 已有情节回顾 1.Grandma的旧邮箱服务社区20年，她每天都为腿脚不便的老人送报。 2.信箱被狗撞坏，狗主人留下便条，承诺会修，但狗主人却未出现。 3.Grandma担心老人收不到报纸，Tom看到他的无助，决定行动。 情感基调 温暖、邻里互助、善意传递、责任与担当 主旨与升华 1.责任的担当——Tom没有等待狗主人，而是主动用专业技能解决问题。 2.过失的承认与弥补——狗主人不仅信守承诺，而且弥补了个人过错。 3.善意与温暖——社区的温暖不依赖某个物件或某个人，而依赖于人与人之间愿意主动承担、彼此回应的善意循环。 主旨落向人世间的真善美——社区人的责任感、守卫善良，构建和谐社区 Step 1:Preparations for Writing 03—情感表达句式回顾 【句式套用方法详解】 【主旨升华句—2.4的套用】 【强调句】 善意的影响、利于构建和谐社会。 1.If it had not been for the experience, Tom wouldn’t have realized that a small act of kindness could make a great difference and help build a more harmonious society(和谐的社会). 社区的温暖依赖的是人们的责任感。 2. If it had not been for the experience, Tom wouldn’t have realized that the warmth of a community depends on people’s sense of responsibility 【句式套用方法详解】 【表达感谢的句子—1-6】 【Grandma被Tom的善良所感动】 1.Overwhelmed by Tom’s kindness, Grandma could barely speak, her voice choked with emotion as she uttered a heartfelt “thank you” to Tom. 【信箱建成后，Grandma向Tom和狗的主人表达感谢时】 2.Grandma could not help giving them a big hug. With grateful tears hanging in her eyes,/With grateful tears streaming down her cheeks, she kept expressing her gratitude, “Thank you. I wouldn’t have gotten a new mailbox if it had not been for your help.” 【句式套用方法详解】 【表达感谢的句子—1-6】 【Grandma向Tom和狗的主人表达感谢时】 3.Excited and delighted, Grandma couldn’t help hugging them tightly and expressing her sincere gratitude to them. 【看着Tom为了造信箱所买的这些材料(material)和草图(sketch),狗的主人决定不遗余力地帮助制作新信箱。】 5.Looking at the materials and sketches, the dog owner determined to spare no effort to help make a new mailbox. 【句式套用方法详解】 【表达感谢的句子—1-6】 【看着制造好的信箱。Grandma的内心涌起一股复杂的情绪——感激、惊喜和爱意交织。】 4. Grandma felt a mix of emotions—gratitude, surprise, and love welling up in her mind and surging through her. 6.【Grandma无法用语言表达她的由衷的感谢。】 Words failed Grandma when she tried to express her heartfelt/sincere gratitude/appreciation/thanks. 【句式套用方法详解】 【表达高兴的句子—1、3】 【看到Tom和狗的主人帮助制作信箱，Grandma激动的两眼发亮，激动地心怦怦跳】 1. Grandma’s eyes twinkled with excitement and her heart was pounding with excitement. 【Grandma的心中涌起喜悦，当她和Tom与狗的主人拥抱在一起的时候】 2.A mixture of excitement and happiness welled up and surged through her when they hugged tightly together. 【句式套用方法详解】 【表达尴尬、羞愧—1、3】 【狗的主人看到Tom准备的材料(material)和草图(sketch),羞愧地低下了头，脸变得通红】 1. On seeing the materials and sketches prepared by Tom, the dog owner lowered his head in shame, with the color flooding his cheeks. 【感到羞愧内疚，狗的主人愣了一下，然后像Grandma道歉，他的脸颊因尴尬而泛红。】 3.Feeling ashamed and guilty, the dog owner froze for a moment and then made an apology to Grandma, his cheeks flushing with embarrassment. 【句式套用方法详解】 【表达悲伤—1】 【Grandma的信箱坏了，她很悲伤，情不自禁地痛哭起来。】 1.Overwhelmed by a deep sense of sadness/sorrow, she couldn’t help crying bitterly. 【漂浮在悲伤的海洋中；突然大哭；眼泪从脸颊上滚动；眼泪在眼睛里打转。】 2.At that moment, Grandma was so sorrowful(adj.悲伤的) that she felt as if she were floating in an ocean of sadness and words could not express her sadness. /her tears of sadness welled up in her eyes./her tears of sorrow rolled down her cheeks./she burst into tears. 【句式套用方法详解】 【说的表达—1】 【狗的主人真诚地道歉,并且以温和地声音解释道:他的狗在追一只猫时，太兴奋了，而撞到了信箱。】 1.He apologized sincerely and explained/said/ in a gentle voice that his dog had gotten excited when it chased(v.追逐) a cat and then knocked over the mailbox. 【“如释重负”的表达--1】 【听到Tom说帮助制作新信箱，Grandma如释重负的叹了口气，感觉放松】 1.Hearing what Tom said, Grandma breathed a sigh of relief, feeling relaxed. 04—动手练习之写作篇 Paragraph 1:Considering the mailbox too old, Tom decided to build a new one. 问题一:此刻Grandma的心情是怎样的呢？看到这个场景，Tom做了什么来安慰Grandma呢？ 【那一刻，奶奶是如此地悲伤，以至于她感觉自己漂浮在悲伤的海洋里，语言无法描述她的悲伤。看到这个场景，Tom轻轻地拍了拍她的肩膀，拥抱了她，他以温和的声音说，他会制作一个又新、又结实的信箱。】 At that moment, Grandma was so sorrowful(adj.悲伤的) that she felt as if she were floating in an ocean of sadness and words could not express her sadness. Seeing this, Tom patted her on the shoulder and embraced her, who promised to build her a new and stronger mailbox. 问题二:听完Tom的话，奶奶的心情是怎样的呢？ 【令Tom印象最深刻的是:Grandma如释重负地叹了口气，当她拍着Tom的手时，她的担忧消失了。】 What impressed Tom most was that, Grandma breathed a sigh of relief, her worry fading(v.逐渐消失;褪色) a little as she patted Tom’s hand. 问题三:Tom为了制作信箱，做了什么事情？ 【Tom迅速在纸上画出草图，随后立即赶往附近的五金店采购材料。回来后，他将木板整齐摆放，用尺子仔细测量、精准标记，准备动手制作新信箱。】 Tom quickly sketched(v.画草图;草拟) a design on paper, who then rushed to(匆忙做…) a nearby hardware store(硬件店/五金店) to buy materials(n.材料). After returning, he laid out(展示) all materials neatly(adv.整洁地), carefully measured(v.测量) and marked(v.标记) the boards precisely(adv.精确地) with a ruler, who got ready to(为…作好准备) craft(v.精心制作) the new mailbox. 问题三：看着Tom,Grandma会有怎样的反应呢？她可能会给Tom带来什么东西呢？Tom会有什么样的情绪呢？ 【看着Tom，奶奶满心欢喜，开心地为他鼓掌，还给他带来了水。不可否认的是:Tom喝下了这杯水时，感激的泪水在眼眶里打转。】 Watching him, Grandma was overjoyed, who clapped her hands happily and brought him some water. There was no denying that(不可否认的是) as Tom drank the water, grateful tears welled up in his eyes. 【Para1】Considering the mailbox too old, Tom decided to build a new one. At that moment, Grandma was so sorrowful(adj.悲伤的) that she felt as if she were floating in an ocean of sadness and words could not express her sadness. Seeing this, Tom patted her on the shoulder and embraced her, who promised to build her a new and stronger mailbox. What impressed Tom most was that, Grandma breathed a sigh of relief, her worry fading(v.逐渐消失;褪色) a little as she patted Tom’s hand. Tom quickly sketched(v.画草图;草拟) a design on paper, who then rushed to(匆忙做…) a nearby hardware store(硬件店/五金店) to buy materials(n.材料). After returning, he laid out(展示) all materials neatly(adv.整洁地), carefully measured(v.测量) and marked(v.标记) the boards precisely(adv.精确地) with a ruler, who got ready to(为…作好准备) craft(v.精心制作) the new mailbox. Watching him, Grandma was overjoyed, who clapped her hands happily and brought him some water. There was no denying that(不可否认的是) as Tom drank the water, grateful tears welled up in his eyes. 【Para2】Paragraph 2:When all the preparations were done, the dog owner arrived. 【问题一】狗主人到后，是什么样的情绪呢？他的狗撞坏了信箱，他会有什么样的反应呢？ 【狗的主人满脸愧疚，几乎说不出话来，声音因情绪激动而哽咽，他真诚地道了一声发自内心的“对不起”。他诚恳地道歉并解释，自家的狗追赶猫咪时过于兴奋，撞到了信箱。随后他主动提出要弥补过错。】 Looking guilty, the dog’s owner could barely speak, his voice choked with emotion as he uttered a heartfelt “sorry”. He apologized sincerely and explained that his dog had gotten excited when it chased(v.追逐) a cat and then knocked over the mailbox. He then offered to make up for(弥补) it. 【问题二】看到Tom买的材料和草图后，他做了什么事情呢？ 【看到材料和草图后，他立刻上前帮忙——在Tom的专业指导下工作起来，同时凭借自己熟练的工具操作手艺出力。随后他们一起组装、上漆并安装信箱。】 Seeing the materials and the sketch(n.草图), he immediately offered to help——working under Tom’s professional guidance(专业的指导) on structure(n.结构;构造) and contributing his own skills with tools(借助自己熟练的工具操作手艺). Then they worked together to assemble(v.组装), paint(v.涂油漆;涂颜料) and install(v.安装) the mailbox. 【问题三】Grandma, Mr. Smith和Ms. Brown有什么样的反应呢？通过这个故事，如何升华主旨呢？ 【奶奶、Smith先生和Brown女士静静地旁观，脸上满是欣慰与放松。要不是这次经历，Tom就不会意识到：建筑的意义不只是设计器物，更在于运用技艺守护善意、构建和谐社区。】 Grandma, Mr. Smith and Ms. Brown watched quietly, their faces full of joy and relief. If it had not been for the experience, Tom wouldn’t have realized that architecture(n.建筑/建筑物) was not just about designing objects(n.物品;物体), but about using his skills to safeguard(v.守卫;保护) kindness and build a harmonious community(和谐的社区). 【或者】If it had not been for the experience, Tom wouldn’t have realized that a small act of kindness could make a great difference and help build a more harmonious society(和谐的社会). 【Para2】Paragraph 2:When all the preparations were done, the dog owner arrived. Looking guilty, the dog’s owner could barely speak, his voice choked with emotion as he uttered a heartfelt “sorry”. He apologized sincerely and explained that his dog had gotten excited when it chased(v.追逐) a cat and then knocked over the mailbox. He then offered to make up for(弥补) it. Seeing the materials and the sketch(n.草图), he immediately offered to help——working under Tom’s professional guidance(专业的指导) on structure(n.结构;构造) and contributing his own skills with tools(借助自己熟练的工具操作手艺). Then they worked together to assemble(v.组装), paint(v.涂油漆;涂颜料) and install(v.安装) the mailbox. Grandma, Mr. Smith and Ms. Brown watched quietly, their faces full of joy and relief. If it had not been for the experience, Tom wouldn’t have realized that architecture(n.建筑/建筑物) was not just about designing objects(n.物品;物体), but about using his skills to safeguard(v.守卫;保护) kindness and build a harmonious community(和谐的社区). 【或者】If it had not been for the experience, Tom wouldn’t have realized that a small act of kindness could make a great difference and help build a more harmonious society(和谐的社会). 05—参考范文 【Para1】Considering the mailbox too old, Tom decided to build a new one. At that moment, Grandma was so sorrowful(adj.悲伤的) that she felt as if she were floating in an ocean of sadness and words could not express her sadness. Seeing this, Tom patted her on the shoulder and embraced her, who promised to build her a new and stronger mailbox. What impressed Tom most was that, Grandma breathed a sigh of relief, her worry fading(v.逐渐消失;褪色) a little as she patted Tom’s hand. Tom quickly sketched(v.画草图;草拟) a design on paper, who then rushed to(匆忙做…) a nearby hardware store(硬件店/五金店) to buy materials(n.材料). After returning, he laid out(展示) all materials neatly(adv.整洁地), carefully measured(v.测量) and marked(v.标记) the boards precisely(adv.精确地) with a ruler, who got ready to(为…作好准备) craft(v.精心制作) the new mailbox. Watching him, Grandma was overjoyed, who clapped her hands happily and brought him some water. There was no denying that(不可否认的是) as Tom drank the water, grateful tears welled up in his eyes. 【Para2】Paragraph 2:When all the preparations were done, the dog owner arrived. Looking guilty, the dog’s owner could barely speak, his voice choked with emotion as he uttered a heartfelt “sorry”. He apologized sincerely and explained that his dog had gotten excited when it chased(v.追逐) a cat and then knocked over the mailbox. He then offered to make up for(弥补) it. Seeing the materials and the sketch(n.草图), he immediately offered to help——working under Tom’s professional guidance(专业的指导) on structure(n.结构;构造) and contributing his own skills with tools(借助自己熟练的工具操作手艺). Then they worked together to assemble(v.组装), paint(v.涂油漆;涂颜料) and install(v.安装) the mailbox. Grandma, Mr. Smith and Ms. Brown watched quietly, their faces full of joy and relief. If it had not been for the experience, Tom wouldn’t have realized that architecture(n.建筑/建筑物) was not just about designing objects(n.物品;物体), but about using his skills to safeguard(v.守卫;保护) kindness and build a harmonious community(和谐的社区). 【或者】If it had not been for the experience, Tom wouldn’t have realized that a small act of kindness could make a great difference and help build a more harmonious society(和谐的社会). $