2026年广州二模续写-拯救金鱼 课件-2026届高三英语三轮复习专项

读后续写 这是一篇家庭协作与问题解决主题的记叙文，讲述了一家人如何通过动手和智慧，在突发寒潮中拯救池塘小鱼的故事。 Last summer, we moved into a beautiful house where sunlight flooded the kitchen every morning. The only downside was the backyard: behind tall, messy bushes lay an old pond, dry and smelly. “Let’s bring it back to life!” I suggested. My parents smiled and agreed. It became our family’s summer project. We cleaned out the mud and lined the edge with pretty stones. At the garden shop, I chose cattails and water lilies. “They float like little umbrellas,” Mum said. “Yes,” I replied proudly, “and they keep the water cool and clean.” Then came the best part: two tiny goldfish — Spotty and Sparkly. I also asked about a pond heater. I’d read that if the pond froze solid in winter, the fish would run out of oxygen. They needed a small hole in the ice to breathe, which a heater could keep open. But they were sold out. As we left, I noticed a poster listing clever ideas to prevent ice from sealing (封住) the pond — for example, keeping the water moving, since flowing water doesn’t freeze easily. I thought we’d get a heater long before winter, so I didn’t think much of them. Soon, baby fish appeared! Frogs and butterflies often visited too. Our pond felt like a living ecosystem. Then one evening, the weather report warned of an early freeze — colder and sooner than usual. My stomach dropped. We still didn’t have a heater! Dad immediately ordered one online. “It’ll arrive before the ice forms,” he promised. Early the next morning, I woke to a world covered in white. I threw on my coat and ran to the pond. It was frozen with clear ice — no open water! Yet I could still see the fish moving slowly beneath. I rushed back inside. Dad had already called the delivery company, but they said it wouldn’t arrive today because of the icy roads. “The fish can only last half a day without fresh air!” I cried. “Let’s think of something now,” Mum said. Paragraph 1: So we started brainstorming ideas together. Paragraph 2: By nine o’clock, we had built a simple device to keep a hole open in the ice. 部分 段落 段落大意 引入 Para 1 建设 Para 2 伏笔 Para 3 发展 Para 4 冲突 Para 5 高潮 Para 6-7 Last summer, we moved into a beautiful house where sunlight flooded the kitchen every morning. The only downside was the backyard: behind tall, messy bushes lay an old pond, dry and smelly. “Let’s bring it back to life!” I suggested. My parents smiled and agreed. It became our family’s summer project. We cleaned out the mud and lined the edge with pretty stones. At the garden shop, I chose cattails and water lilies. “They float like little umbrellas,” Mum said. “Yes,” I replied proudly, “and they keep the water cool and clean.” Then came the best part: two tiny goldfish — Spotty and Sparkly. I also asked about a pond heater. I’d read that if the pond froze solid in winter, the fish would run out of oxygen. They needed a small hole in the ice to breathe, which a heater could keep open. But they were sold out. As we left, I noticed a poster listing clever ideas to prevent ice from sealing (封住) the pond — for example, keeping the water moving, since flowing water doesn’t freeze easily. I thought we’d get a heater long before winter, so I didn’t think much of them. Soon, baby fish appeared! Frogs and butterflies often visited too. Our pond felt like a living ecosystem. Then one evening, the weather report warned of an early freeze — colder and sooner than usual. My stomach dropped. We still didn’t have a heater! Dad immediately ordered one online. “It’ll arrive before the ice forms,” he promised. Early the next morning, I woke to a world covered in white. I threw on my coat and ran to the pond. It was frozen with clear ice — no open water! Yet I could still see the fish moving slowly beneath. I rushed back inside. Dad had already called the delivery company, but they said it wouldn’t arrive today because of the icy roads. “The fish can only last half a day without fresh air!” I cried. “Let’s think of something now,” Mum said. Paragraph 1: So we started brainstorming ideas together. Paragraph 2: By nine o’clock, we had built a simple device to keep a hole open in the ice. 原文情节 部分 段落 段落大意 引入 Para 1 搬进新家，后院有个干臭的旧池塘，“我”提议把它修复好，父母同意。 建设 Para 2 全家动手清理、装饰，买了香蒲、睡莲，还养了两条金鱼 Spotty 和 Sparkly。 伏笔 Para 3 “我”想买加热器但售罄，看到防冻小妙招的海报，觉得冬天还早，没太在意。 发展 Para 4 池塘里生了小鱼，青蛙、蝴蝶常来，池塘成了一个小生态乐园。 冲突 Para 5 天气预报说寒潮提前到来，家里还没买到加热器，父亲紧急下单。 高潮 Para 6-7 第二天一早池塘已结冰，鱼还在但缺氧；快递因冰路延误，鱼只能撑半天。 1. 搬进新家，后院有个干臭的旧池塘，“我”提议把它修复好，父母同意。 2. 全家动手清理、装饰，买了香蒲、睡莲，还养了两条金鱼 Spotty 和 Sparkly。 3. “我”想买加热器但售罄，看到防冻小妙招的海报，觉得冬天还早，没太在意。 4. 池塘里生了小鱼，青蛙、蝴蝶常来，池塘成了一个小生态乐园。 5. 天气预报说寒潮提前到来，家里还没买到加热器，父亲紧急下单。 6. 第二天一早池塘已结冰，鱼还在但缺氧；快递因冰路延误，鱼只能撑半天。 Paragraph 1: So we started brainstorming ideas together. Paragraph 2: By nine o’clock, we had built a simple device to keep a hole open in the ice. 池塘结冰后，鱼死亡的原因不是“冷”，而是 “冰封水面导致水中溶氧耗尽可能且有毒气体无法排出” 。因此，我们的目标不是化掉整池冰，而是在冰面上维持一个不被封死的通气孔。 全家人头脑风暴，利用物理知识和家里物品设计出防止冰封的简易装置。 装置成功运作，冰面上维持了一个通气孔，鱼儿得救，全家欢呼。 小型潜水泵（也常叫鱼缸潜水泵 / 喷泉潜水泵/水族循环泵） 🔍 详细介绍 核心功能 它既是鱼缸里用来循环水质、给水体增氧的循环泵，也能作为喷泉水泵，接上喷头就能喷出水花，打造水景效果。 2. 工作原理 它是利用离心力工作的： 通电后，内部的电机带动叶轮高速旋转； 水从底部 / 侧面的进水网罩被吸入泵体； 叶轮把水甩向四周，中心形成低压区，持续吸水； 水被加压后，从顶部或侧面的出水口喷出，形成喷泉效果。 3. 常见用途 鱼缸 / 鱼池水循环、过滤增氧； 桌面喷泉、流水摆件、小型假山造景； 也能用来抽鱼缸里的脏水换水。 段落 主要内容 回扣原文细节 情感基调 第一段 全家人头脑风暴，利用物理知识和家里物品设计出防止冰封的简易装置。 第二段 装置成功运作，冰面上维持了一个通气孔，鱼儿得救，全家欢呼。 从焦虑到希望，从无助到行动 欣慰、成就感 段落 主要内容 回扣原文细节 情感基调 第一段 全家人头脑风暴，利用物理知识和家里物品设计出防止冰封的简易装置。 ① a poster listing clever ideas to prevent ice from sealing the pond → 海报上的点子被用上了。 ② keeping the water moving, since flowing water doesn’t freeze easily → 利用流动的水不易结冰的原理。 ③ I chose cattail and water lilies. “ They float like little umbrellas.”...→借助植物固定设备 从焦虑到希望，从无助到行动 第二段 装置成功运作，冰面上维持了一个通气孔，鱼儿得救，全家欢呼。 ① The fish can only last half a day without fresh air → 时间压力下成功救援。 ② My stomach dropped → 对比现在的如释重负。 ③ two tiny goldfish — Spotty and Sparkly → 情感驱动力。 欣慰、成就感 续写具体情节（角色 + 行为/想法/情感 + 环境/时空） 第一段：So we started brainstorming ideas together. ①  ②  ③ ④ ⑤  第二段：By nine o’clock, we had built a simple device to keep a hole open in the ice. ①  ②  ③ ④  ⑤  续写具体情节（角色 + 行为/想法/情感 + 环境/时空） 第一段：So we started brainstorming ideas together. ① 场景设定：厨房里，早餐还没吃完，全家人围坐在餐桌前，窗外是白茫茫的雪景。 ② 母亲：妈妈拿出纸笔，“我记得你说过那张海报，上面有防止结冰的办法。” ③ “我”：我恍然大悟道 “没错，流动的水不容易结冰！我们得让水动起来。” ④ 父亲/“我”：爸爸一拍大腿“家里有一个小水泵可以用”，没一会，他翻出一个旧鱼缸里拆下来的潜水泵。我的眼睛一亮，“那我们快把它装上看看。” ⑤ 一家人：我们三人赶紧来到院子里，妈妈用水杯接了热水，小心地在冰面上融出了一个孔洞。爸爸将水泵卡到冰洞里，并用细绳把它固定在旁边睡莲的根上。看着这一切，我的心里不再慌乱，而是充满了希望-- 我们一定能救活 Spotty 和 Sparkly！ 第二段：By nine o’clock, we had built a simple device to keep a hole open in the ice. ① “我”（关键时刻）：我紧张地插上电源，水泵开始工作。水柱“咕噜咕噜”地喷出来，冰洞的边缘没有继续冻结。 ② “我”（观察与确认）：“我”趴在池边，眼睛一眨不眨地盯着水面。大约过了十分钟，Spotty 游到了洞口，嘴巴一张一合，没一会Sparkly和宝宝鱼们也都游到了洞口附近。 ③“我”（情感高潮）：“它们有氧气了！” 我激动得跳起来，抱住妈妈。爸爸走过来，拍了拍我的头，“看来，我们成功了。” ④ 环境呼应：阳光从云层后面探出头来，照在冰面上，也照在那条细细的水柱上。整个后院不再是一片死寂的白，而是有了生机。 ⑤ 结尾升华：院子里，我们三人相视而笑。那一刻，我明白了一个道理：面对困境时，不必一味等待外援，只要我们愿意用心思考、亲手尝试，就能用自己的力量守护所爱，这便是最温暖、最踏实的成长。 ① 场景设定：厨房里，早餐还没吃完，全家人围坐在餐桌前，窗外是白茫茫的雪景。 极简版: In the kitchen, the family sat around the table, unfinished breakfast on it, with heavy snow outside the window. 升级版: In the kitchen, the whole family gathered around the dining table, with breakfast unfinished. Outside the window lay a world of white snow. ② 妈妈拿出纸笔，“我记得你说过那张海报，上面有防止结冰的办法。” 极简版：Mum took out paper and a pen. “I remember you mentioned that poster. It has ways to prevent ice from sealing the pond.” 替换词升级版：Mum pulled out paper and a pen. “I recalled you talked about that poster. It offers tips to keep the pond from freezing.” 句式升级版:Mum pulled out paper and a pen, reminding me of the poster, which provided ways to prevent the pond from freezing. ③ “我”：我猛地一拍脑袋，恍然大悟：“对呀！流动的水是不会轻易结冰的！我们只要让水一直动起来就行了！” 极简版：I patted my head suddenly and realized it. “Right! Flowing water doesn’t freeze easily! We just need to keep the water moving!” 替换词升级版：I patted my head hard and it dawned on me. “Yes! Running water seldom freezes! We just have to make the water circulate!” 句式升级版（同位语从句 / 非谓语）：I patted my head hard, realizing the truth that running water doesn’t freeze easily and we just need to keep the water moving! ④ 父亲/“我”：爸爸一拍大腿“家里有一个小水泵可以用”，没一会，他翻出一个旧鱼缸里拆下来的潜水泵。我的眼睛一亮，“那我们快把它装上看看。” 极简版:Dad slapped his thigh. “We have a small pump at home.” Soon he found a submersible pump taken from an old fish tank. My eyes lit up. “Let’s install it quickly and have a try.” 替换词升级版：Dad slapped his thigh. “We have a tiny water pump here.” Soon he dug out a submersible pump removed from an old fish tank. My eyes sparkled. “Let’s fix it up and try it at once!” 句式升级版:（非谓语 + 定语从句）：Dad slapped his thigh, saying that we had a small pump at hand. Soon he dug out a submersible pump that was taken from an old fish tank, making my eyes sparkle. I begged to fix it up and try it right away. ⑤ 一家人：我们三人赶紧来到院子里，妈妈用水杯接了热水，小心地在冰面上融出了一个孔洞。爸爸将水泵卡到冰洞里，并用细绳把它固定在旁边睡莲的根上。看着这一切，我的心里不再慌乱，而是充满了希望-- 我们一定能救活 Spotty 和 Sparkly！ 极简版：The three of us hurried to the yard. Mum filled a cup with hot water and carefully melted a hole in the ice. Dad fixed the pump in the hole and tied it to the root of the water lily with a string. At the sight of this, I was no longer worried but full of hope—we would surely save Spotty and Sparkly! 替换词升级版：The three of us rushed to the yard. Mum filled a cup with hot water and carefully melted a hole in the frozen pond. Dad placed the pump in the hole and secured it to the water lily root with a thin string. At the sight of this, I felt no longer panic but filled with hope—we were sure to save the two goldfish! 句式升级版（非谓语 + 伴随结构）：The three of us rushed to the yard, with Mum melting a hole in the ice with hot water and Dad securing the pump in the hole, tying it to the root of the nearby water lily. Seeing what was happening, I was no longer anxious but hopeful that we could save Spotty and Sparkly. 整合成段 In the kitchen, the whole family gathered around the dining table, with breakfast unfinished. Outside the window lay a world of white snow.Just then, Mum pulled out paper and a pen, reminding me of the poster, which provided ways to prevent the pond from freezing. At once, I patted my head hard, realizing the truth that running water doesn’t freeze easily and we just need to keep the water moving!Hearing this, Dad slapped his thigh, saying that we had a small pump at hand. Soon he dug out a submersible pump that was taken from an old fish tank, making my eyes sparkle. Overjoyed, I begged to fix it up and try it right away.Immediately after that, The three of us rushed to the yard, with Mum melting a hole in the ice with hot water and Dad securing the pump in the hole, tying it to the root of the nearby water lily. Seeing what was happening, I was no longer anxious but hopeful that we could save Spotty and Sparkly. ① “我”（关键时刻）：我紧张地插上电源，水泵开始工作。水柱“咕噜咕噜”地喷出来，冰洞的边缘没有继续冻结。 极简版：I nervously plugged in the power. The pump started working. Water sprayed out with a gurgling sound, and the edge of the ice hole didn’t freeze any more. 替换词升级版：I anxiously plugged in the device. The pump began to function. Water poured out with a gentle gurgle, and the edge of the hole remained unfrozen. 句式升级版（非谓语 + 时间状语从句）: I nervously plugged in the power, watching the pump start working as water sprayed out with a gurgle, leaving the edge of the ice hole unfrozen. ② “我”（观察与确认）：“我”半趴半跪在池边，眼睛一眨不眨地盯着水面。大约过了十分钟，Spotty 游到了洞口，嘴巴一张一合，没一会Sparkly和宝宝鱼们也都游到了洞口附近。 极简版：I knelt and lay by the pond, staring at the water without blinking. About ten minutes later, Spotty swam to the hole, opening and closing its mouth. Soon Sparkly and the baby fish also swam close to the hole. 替换词升级版：I knelt down beside the pond, keeping my eyes fixed on the water surface. After some ten minutes, Spotty drifted to the ice hole, gasping repeatedly. Before long, Sparkly together with the little fish swam to the vicinity of the hole. 句式升级版（非谓语 + 独立主格）：Kneeling and leaning by the pond, I stared motionlessly at the water. Ten minutes later, Spotty made its way to the hole, its mouth opening and closing constantly, with Sparkly and the baby fish soon gathering nearby. ③“我”（情感高潮）：“它们有氧气了！” 我激动得跳起来，抱住妈妈。爸爸走过来，拍了拍我的头，“看来，我们成功了。” 极简版："They have oxygen now!" I jumped with excitement and hugged Mum. Dad walked over and patted me on the head. "It seems we have made it." 替换词升级版："They can breathe again!" I leaped in excitement and threw my arms around Mum. Dad came up and patted my head gently. "It turns out that we have succeeded." 升级版（非谓语 + 高级句式）: "They can breathe again!" I jumped with joy, throwing my arms around Mum. Dad stepping over to pat me on the head, he said with relief that we finally pulled it off. ④ 环境呼应：阳光从云层后面探出头来，照在冰面上，也照在那条细细的水柱上。整个后院不再是一片死寂的白，而是有了生机。 极简版：The sun peeked out from behind the clouds, shining on the ice and the thin water column. The backyard was no longer a lifeless white but full of life. 替换词升级版：The sun emerged from behind the clouds, casting light upon the ice and the slim stream of water. The whole backyard was no longer a dead white, but filled with vitality. 升级版（非谓语）: Peeking out from behind the clouds, the sun shed its light on the ice as well as the thin water column, turning the once lifeless white backyard into a place full of vitality. ⑤ 结尾升华：院子里，我们三人相视而笑。那一刻，我明白了一个道理：面对困境时，不必一味等待外援，只要我们愿意用心思考、亲手尝试，就能用自己的力量守护所爱，这便是最温暖、最踏实的成长。 极简版：In the yard, the three of us smiled at each other. At that moment, I learned a lesson. Faced with difficulties, we needn’t wait for help all the time. If we think carefully and try with our own hands, we can protect what we love, which is the warmest and most solid growth. 替换词升级版：In the yard, we three exchanged warm smiles. At that moment, a truth dawned on me. When trapped in tough situations, we don’t have to rely on outside aid blindly. As long as we think thoughtfully and make attempts on our own, we are able to guard what we cherish, which counts as the warmest and most genuine growth. 升级版（非谓语 + 从句）: Smiling at one another in the yard, I suddenly realized that when facing hardships, we should never merely wait for others’ help. Instead, by thinking wisely and trying with our own hands, we can protect what we love, which serves as the warmest and most down-to-earth growth. 整合成段 I nervously plugged in the power, watching the pump start working as water sprayed out with a gurgle, leaving the edge of the ice hole unfrozen.Then, Kneeling and leaning by the pond, I stared motionlessly at the water. Ten minutes later, Spotty made its way to the hole, its mouth opening and closing constantly, with Sparkly and the baby fish soon gathering nearby."They can breathe again!" I jumped with joy, throwing my arms around Mum. Dad stepping over to pat me on the head, he said with relief that we finally pulled it off. At that moment, Peeking out from behind the clouds, the sun shed its light on the ice as well as the thin water column, turning the once lifeless white backyard into a place full of vitality. As we stood there, smiling at one another in the yard, I suddenly realized that when facing hardships, we should never merely wait for others’ help. Instead, by thinking wisely and trying with our own hands, we can protect what we love, which serves as the warmest and most down-to-earth growth. So we started brainstorming ideas together. “What about hot water?” I suggested. Dad shook his head. “It would just freeze faster and might shock the fish.” I thought hard. Then it hit me — the poster at the garden shop! “It said keeping water moving stops ice from forming,” I recalled. Dad’s eyes lit up. “The old fountain pump in the garage — it still works!” We rushed to find it. After testing it in a bucket, Dad grabbed a hammer. Back at the pond, he carefully broke through the ice near the edge. Then we positioned the pump’s outlet just below the surface. Mum and I carefully tied the pump pipe to a small plant near the pond, so it wouldn’t slip away. By nine o’clock, we had built a simple device to keep a hole open in the ice. And it worked! A small opening had appeared where the water flowed, like a tiny window to the world below. Spotty swam up, her orange body bright against the dark water. Sparkly followed, and soon the baby fish gathered near the surface too. I pressed my palm against the ice, feeling the pump’s faint vibration beneath — a steady heartbeat. Mum wrapped her arm around me. “Sometimes the best solutions are the ones we create ourselves,” Dad said softly. That circle of open water was our hope — and I understood then that love doesn’t just wait, it figures things out. 范文 评分原则： 本题总分为 25 分，按以下 5 个档次给分。评分时，先根据作答的整体情况初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 第一档：（1-5 分）与段落开头衔接较差，产出内容太少，全文内容不连贯； 第二档：（6-10 分）与所给短文有一定的关系，与段落开头有一定程度的衔接，写出了一些有关内容，较少使用语句间连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性； 第三档：（11-15 分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与段落开头有一定程度的衔接，写出了若干有关内容，应用简单的语句间连接成分，全文内容连贯； 第四档：（16-20 分）与所给短文融洽度较高，与段落开头衔接较为合理，内容比较丰富，比较有效地使用了语句间连接成分，所续写短文结构紧凑； 第五档：（21-25 分）与所给短文融洽度高，与段落开头衔接合理，内容丰富，有效地使用了语句间连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。 评分时还应注意：(1) 词数少于 120 的，酌情扣分。(2) 单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。(3) 书写较差以至影响交际的，酌情扣分。 $