Unit 5 Nature's Temper（单元写作精练）英语新教材人教版八年级下册

Unit 5 Nature’s Temper 单元写作精练 写作主题 识 本单元的写作话题是围绕“糟糕天气下的一天”展开叙事，属于“人与自然”主题范畴中“灾害防范”这一主题群， 通过具体场景、动作和心理活动，描述一次自然灾害经历及应对过程（事件的起因、经过和结果或个人感受）；或者提出防灾准备建议以及分享灾害中的互助故事。重点考查学生在突发情境下的动作描写（Action）、环境描写（Environment） 及心理活动（Mental Activity） 的综合表达能力。时态主要为一般过去时，体裁多为记叙文或说明文。 本单元相关话题写作素材有： 词汇 ① 天气现象：storm (暴风雨), thunderstorm (雷暴), heavy rain (大雨), lightning (闪电), thunder (雷声), flood (洪水), typhoon (台风), hurricane (飓风) ②动作状态：shake (颤抖), tremble (发抖), panic (惊慌), rush (冲), hide (躲藏), protect (保护) ③情感心理：scared (害怕的), terrified (恐惧的), nervous (紧张的), helpless (无助的), brave (勇敢的), calm (冷静的), worried(担心的) 短语 ①描述天气：be caught in the rain (被困在雨中), rain cats and dogs (倾盆大雨), strong wind blowing strongly (狂风大作), dark clouds covered the sky. (乌云密布) ②描述动作：run for shelter (跑去躲雨), hold the umbrella tightly (紧握着雨伞), protect oneself from... (保护某人免受...伤害), stay calm (保持冷静), hold onto the rail (抓住栏杆), hide under the desk (躲在桌下), cover my ears (捂住耳朵) ③描述后果与应对：cause a lot of damage (造成巨大破坏), take measures to protect ourselves (采取措施保护我们自己), broken window (破碎的窗), be stuck in(困在...), deep water (深水), rush home (冲回家) , be trapped in the classroom (困住教室) , be blackout (停电了), be all wet ( 湿透了) 句型 1.适合描述过程 ①It rained heavily and the wind blew strongly.雨下得很大，风刮得很猛。 ② I was walking home when suddenly a heavy rain came. 我正走回家，突然一场大雨倾盆而下。) ③I had to stay at home because of the terrible storm. 因为这场可怕的暴风雨，我不得不待在家里。 2.适合描写场景与心理 ①场景叠加 (with结构)： With thunder and lightning everywhere, I was so scared that I couldn’t move. 伴随着到处的雷电，我吓得动弹不得。 ②时间状语从句 (高级时态)： While I was hiding in the room, I heard the sound of rain hitting the window heavily. 当我躲在房间里时，我听到雨水重重地敲打着窗户的声音。 ③心理与动作结合： My heart was beating fast as I tried to keep warm and calm. 当我努力保持温暖和冷静时，我的心跳得很快。 名言 ①Every cloud has a silver lining. 塞翁失马，焉知非福。/ 黑暗中总有一线光明。 ②After a storm comes a calm. 雨过天晴。 优美句子 仿 （一）基础仿写 1. 原句： It was raining heavily. 仿写： _________________________________ 雪下得很大。 2. 原句： I felt scared when I saw the lightning. 仿写： _________________________________ 听到雷声时我很紧张。 3. 原句： I walked home in the rain. 仿写： _________________________________ 我在风中跑回家。 4. 原句：I was walking home when the heavy rain began to pour. 仿写： __________________________________________ 雷暴突然来的时候，我正在做作业。 5. 原句：The wind was too strong for me to use my umbrella! 仿写： __________________________________________ 雨太大，我都不能走路去超市了！ （二）进阶仿写 1. 原句：The wind howled (呼啸) like a wolf. 仿写： __________________________________________ 雨像百万颗小石子一样拍打窗户 2. 原句：I was so terrified that my blood ran cold (毛骨悚然). 仿写： __________________________________________ 我如此无助，泪水混着雨水流下脸颊 3. 原句：Although the flood destroyed (摧毁) our yard, our family’s unity (团结) brought us hope. 仿写： __________________________________________ 妈妈的汤驱散了寒冷。 4. 原句：But while Tilly was walking along the beach with her family, she noticed something strange. 仿写： __________________________________________ 当我正在车站等校车，我看到天空突然变黑了。 5. 原句：People were screaming and running as fast as they could when they saw a huge wall of water coming from the sea. 仿写： __________________________________________ 当暴雨毫无预警地袭击我们镇的时候，我们正开心地吃晚饭。 写作步骤 懂 以“An Experience in Bad Weather”为题，描述一次你亲身经历的恶劣天气事件。 一、Before-writing（构思+素材积累） 1、Discuss the following questions with your partner. 1). What kind of bad weather was it? How would you describe it? ___________________________________ 2). What were you doing when the bad weather started? _______________________________________________________ 3). What did you see, hear, do, or feel during the bad weather? _______________________________________________________ 4). What happened or went wrong because of the bad weather? _______________________________________________________ 2、列提纲，写句子（三段式） 列提纲 示例 Beginning （20词左右）：引入主题，描述糟糕的天气。 Last Friday, I had a really bad day. While I was _______________, I __________________________________ 交代时间、天气背景（用1个天气词汇+1句简单句）。 Body （40-60词）：描述天气变化、具体事件。 When I left the house, __________________. Later, I saw__________ _________________.Then, I heard_____________________________. At last, ___________________________________ 具体场景+动作+心理（用2个when/while句，2个动作动词+1种心理）。 Ending （20词左右）： 总结感受。 As a result, I was ________________. I learned that we should stay brave when facing bad weather.（用1句名言或情感升华句）。 二、While-writing 学生根据列好的提纲开始撰写作文草稿，尽量使用新学的词汇和when/while句型。 三、Post - writing 1、自我检查清单： ✅ 时态是否正确（一般过去时/过去进行时）； ✅ 是否含2个when/while句； ✅ 词汇/短语是否准确，有无拼写错误； ✅ 心理活动是否具体（是否有scared/worried等词）。 2. 同伴互评： 两人一组，用“★（优点）+ ▲（改进建议）”形式点评，重点关注： 场景是否具体（有无细节描写，如“rain began to pour like cats and dogs”）；when/while句使用是否正确；情感是否自然（有无“relieved/brave”等感受表达）。 3. 教师点评与范文展示： 选取2-3篇不同水平的作文（基础版/提升版），针对“句型运用”“细节描写”进行点评；同时展示范文，标注核心素材和句型，供学生参考。 4. 点评后，同学对自己的作文进行修改，然后完成定稿。 写作真题 赏 假设三个月前，一场飓风(hurricane)袭击了你所居住的城市。请你发挥想象，根据以下要点和要求写一篇文章，描述飓风发生时的情况，并谈谈你的感悟。 内容包括： 1. 灾难发生时，人们可以听到雷声，看到闪电；两小时后，飓风消失了。 2. 在这次灾难中共有7人死亡，2400多座房屋倒塌。 3. 灾难后，人们开始互救，许多警察和消防员也来救援。 要求： 1. 语言通顺，要点齐全，意思连贯，条理清楚，书写规范； 2. 文中不得出现真实的姓名和学校名称； 3. 词数 80左右，文章开头已给出，不计入总词数。 思路点拨 1. 体裁：记叙文； 2. 时态：主要使用一般过去时和一般现在时； 3. 人称：第一人称； 4. 框架结构： Three months ago, a hurricane hit my city. It was a scary natural disaster. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 题型通关 练 1．假设你是Lucy，你所在的城市昨晚发生了一场地震。幸运的是，地震并不强烈，你和家人都安然无恙。请根据以下要点，用英语写一篇80词左右的短文。 要点： 1. 地震发生时你和家人正在做的事情; 2. 家人的反应及采取的行动; 3. 地震后的感受。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．以“Stay Safe in Disasters”为题，写一篇短文。 要点： 1. 自然灾害有时很危险； 2. 遇到灾害要保持冷静，学习安全知识； 3. 室内、室外简单自救方法； 4. 互相帮助，珍爱生命。 要求： 1. 紧扣本单元话题，语句通顺，语法正确； 2. 80词左右，不出现真实姓名。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．每到夏天，总有些地方洪水肆虐。如何在洪水中保护自己呢?你们班在英语课上就这一问题进行了讨论。请你根据以下提示，写一篇英语短文，表达自己的观点。 How to Protect Ourselves in Floods Before the disaster During the disaster ●often watch the news about the flood ●prepare water, food and medicine ●move to higher places at once ●don’t try to swim … 要求： 1.包含所有给出的提示要点，可适当发挥; 2.80词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Good morning, everyone!  Floods happen nearly every summer. Today I’d like to talk about how to protect ourselves in the flood. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．题目：A Natural Disaster I Experienced/Know About 要求： 1. 描述你经历过或了解的一次自然灾害 (如 typhoon, earthquake, flood 等)； 2. 说明当时你或他人正在做什么 (使用过去进行时)； 3. 描述灾害造成的影响以及人们如何应对； 4. 谈谈你从这次经历中学到了什么； 5. 语句通顺，语法正确，逻辑清晰； 6. 词数不少于80词。 A Natural Disaster I Experienced/Know About ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5．Daming 所在的城市昨天晚上遭遇了一场暴风雪。幸运的是，暴风雪持续的时间并不长，他们全家安然无恙。假如你是Daming，请描述暴风雪发生时家里人的活动情景。 内容要点: 1. 暴风雪的时间: yesterday evening 2. 暴风雪时全家人都在做什么: My mother was. . . 3. 暴风雪时的心情: scared. . . 4. 暴风雪的后果: all safe 5. 暴风雪后的思考: keep calm 要求: 1. 不得使用真实的姓名和学校名； 2. 可适当加入细节，使内容充实，行文连贯； 3. 字迹 工整、语言精练、表达准确、条理清晰。80 词(开头已给出，不计入总词数)。 My name is Daming. In my city, there was __________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6．假设你是李磊（Li Lei），上周你去福州看望你的阿姨，期间遭遇了当地的一次强台风。这是你第一次目睹台风。请根据以下提示，用英语写一篇短文描述这次经历。词数80左右。 写作提示： 1. What were the signs before the typhoon came?（turn dark, grow strong, ...） 2. What happened when the typhoon came?（blow violently（猛烈地）, ...） 3. What did the street look like after a typhoon? 注意事项： 1. 必须包含所有提示信息，可适当发挥，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数； 2. 意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范； 3. 请勿在文中使用真实的姓名、校名和地名。 Last week, I visited my aunt in Fuzhou and experienced the first typhoon in my life. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 7．为了增强全民防灾减灾意识，推广避灾自救技能，无锡防灾减灾中心将举行“防灾减灾，守护安全”短视频创作比赛。假如你是阳光中学的李华，你打算参加本次活动。请根据以下流程图为你的短视频写一篇英文旁白。 注意：词数80，开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Hello, everyone! ______________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1 / 15 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 5 Nature’s Temper 单元写作精练 写作主题 识 本单元的写作话题是围绕“糟糕天气下的一天”展开叙事，属于“人与自然”主题范畴中“灾害防范”这一主题群， 通过具体场景、动作和心理活动，描述一次自然灾害经历及应对过程（事件的起因、经过和结果或个人感受）；或者提出防灾准备建议以及分享灾害中的互助故事。重点考查学生在突发情境下的动作描写（Action）、环境描写（Environment） 及心理活动（Mental Activity） 的综合表达能力。时态主要为一般过去时，体裁多为记叙文或说明文。 本单元相关话题写作素材有： 词汇 ① 天气现象：storm (暴风雨), thunderstorm (雷暴), heavy rain (大雨), lightning (闪电), thunder (雷声), flood (洪水), typhoon (台风), hurricane (飓风) ②动作状态：shake (颤抖), tremble (发抖), panic (惊慌), rush (冲), hide (躲藏), protect (保护) ③情感心理：scared (害怕的), terrified (恐惧的), nervous (紧张的), helpless (无助的), brave (勇敢的), calm (冷静的), worried(担心的) 短语 ①描述天气：be caught in the rain (被困在雨中), rain cats and dogs (倾盆大雨), strong wind blowing strongly (狂风大作), dark clouds covered the sky. (乌云密布) ②描述动作：run for shelter (跑去躲雨), hold the umbrella tightly (紧握着雨伞), protect oneself from... (保护某人免受...伤害), stay calm (保持冷静), hold onto the rail (抓住栏杆), hide under the desk (躲在桌下), cover my ears (捂住耳朵) ③描述后果与应对：cause a lot of damage (造成巨大破坏), take measures to protect ourselves (采取措施保护我们自己), broken window (破碎的窗), be stuck in(困在...), deep water (深水), rush home (冲回家) , be trapped in the classroom (困住教室) , be blackout (停电了), be all wet ( 湿透了) 句型 1.适合描述过程 ①It rained heavily and the wind blew strongly.雨下得很大，风刮得很猛。 ② I was walking home when suddenly a heavy rain came. 我正走回家，突然一场大雨倾盆而下。) ③I had to stay at home because of the terrible storm. 因为这场可怕的暴风雨，我不得不待在家里。 2.适合描写场景与心理 ①场景叠加 (with结构)： With thunder and lightning everywhere, I was so scared that I couldn’t move. 伴随着到处的雷电，我吓得动弹不得。 ②时间状语从句 (高级时态)： While I was hiding in the room, I heard the sound of rain hitting the window heavily. 当我躲在房间里时，我听到雨水重重地敲打着窗户的声音。 ③心理与动作结合： My heart was beating fast as I tried to keep warm and calm. 当我努力保持温暖和冷静时，我的心跳得很快。 名言 ①Every cloud has a silver lining. 塞翁失马，焉知非福。/ 黑暗中总有一线光明。 ②After a storm comes a calm. 雨过天晴。 优美句子 仿 （一）基础仿写 1. 原句： It was raining heavily. 仿写： _________________________________ 雪下得很大。 【答案】 It was snowing heavily. 2. 原句： I felt scared when I saw the lightning. 仿写： _________________________________ 听到雷声时我很紧张。 【答案】I felt nervous when I heard the thunder. 3. 原句： I walked home in the rain. 仿写： _________________________________ 我在风中跑回家。 【答案】I ran home in the wind. 4. 原句：I was walking home when the heavy rain began to pour. 仿写： __________________________________________ 雷暴突然来的时候，我正在做作业。 【答案】I was doing my homework when the thunderstorm started suddenly. 5. 原句：The wind was too strong for me to use my umbrella! 仿写： __________________________________________ 雨太大，我都不能走路去超市了！ 【答案】The rain was too heavy for us to walk to the supermarket! （二）进阶仿写 1. 原句：The wind howled (呼啸) like a wolf. 仿写： __________________________________________ 雨像百万颗小石子一样拍打窗户 【答案】The rain beat against the window like a million small stones. 2. 原句：I was so terrified that my blood ran cold (毛骨悚然). 仿写： __________________________________________ 我如此无助，泪水混着雨水流下脸颊 【答案】I was so helpless that tears ran down my face with the rain. 3. 原句：Although the flood destroyed (摧毁) our yard, our family’s unity (团结) brought us hope. 仿写： __________________________________________ 妈妈的汤驱散了寒冷。 【答案】Although the weather was terrible, the warmth from my mom’s soup drove the cold away. 4. 原句：But while Tilly was walking along the beach with her family, she noticed something strange. 仿写： __________________________________________ 当我正在车站等校车，我看到天空突然变黑了。 【答案】While I was waiting for the school bus at the stop, I saw the sky turn dark suddenly. 5. 原句：People were screaming and running as fast as they could when they saw a huge wall of water coming from the sea. 仿写： __________________________________________ 当暴雨毫无预警地袭击我们镇的时候，我们正开心地吃晚饭。 【答案】We were eating dinner happily when the rainstorm hit our town without warning. 写作步骤 懂 以“An Experience in Bad Weather”为题，描述一次你亲身经历的恶劣天气事件。 一、Before-writing（构思+素材积累） 1、Discuss the following questions with your partner. 1). What kind of bad weather was it? How would you describe it? ___________________________________ 2). What were you doing when the bad weather started? _______________________________________________________ 3). What did you see, hear, do, or feel during the bad weather? _______________________________________________________ 4). What happened or went wrong because of the bad weather? _______________________________________________________ 2、列提纲，写句子（三段式） 列提纲 示例 Beginning （20词左右）：引入主题，描述糟糕的天气。 Last Friday, I had a really bad day. While I was _______________, I __________________________________ 交代时间、天气背景（用1个天气词汇+1句简单句）。 Body （40-60词）：描述天气变化、具体事件。 When I left the house, __________________. Later, I saw__________ _________________.Then, I heard_____________________________. At last, ___________________________________ 具体场景+动作+心理（用2个when/while句，2个动作动词+1种心理）。 Ending （20词左右）： 总结感受。 As a result, I was ________________. I learned that we should stay brave when facing bad weather.（用1句名言或情感升华句）。 二、While-writing 学生根据列好的提纲开始撰写作文草稿，尽量使用新学的词汇和when/while句型。 三、Post - writing 1、自我检查清单： ✅ 时态是否正确（一般过去时/过去进行时）； ✅ 是否含2个when/while句； ✅ 词汇/短语是否准确，有无拼写错误； ✅ 心理活动是否具体（是否有scared/worried等词）。 2. 同伴互评： 两人一组，用“★（优点）+ ▲（改进建议）”形式点评，重点关注： 场景是否具体（有无细节描写，如“rain began to pour like cats and dogs”）；when/while句使用是否正确；情感是否自然（有无“relieved/brave”等感受表达）。 3. 教师点评与范文展示： 选取2-3篇不同水平的作文（基础版/提升版），针对“句型运用”“细节描写”进行点评；同时展示范文，标注核心素材和句型，供学生参考。 4. 点评后，同学对自己的作文进行修改，然后完成定稿。 写作真题 赏 假设三个月前，一场飓风(hurricane)袭击了你所居住的城市。请你发挥想象，根据以下要点和要求写一篇文章，描述飓风发生时的情况，并谈谈你的感悟。 内容包括： 1. 灾难发生时，人们可以听到雷声，看到闪电；两小时后，飓风消失了。 2. 在这次灾难中共有7人死亡，2400多座房屋倒塌。 3. 灾难后，人们开始互救，许多警察和消防员也来救援。 要求： 1. 语言通顺，要点齐全，意思连贯，条理清楚，书写规范； 2. 文中不得出现真实的姓名和学校名称； 3. 词数 80左右，文章开头已给出，不计入总词数。 思路点拨 1. 体裁：记叙文； 2. 时态：主要使用一般过去时和一般现在时； 3. 人称：第一人称； 4. 框架结构： Three months ago, a hurricane hit my city. It was a scary natural disaster. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: Three months ago, a hurricane hit my city. It was a scary natural disaster. In the beginning, the sky became dark. Everyone could hear a strange noise, but nobody knew what was happening. We heard thunder and saw lightning. Two hours later, the hurricane disappeared. During the disaster, seven people lost their lives. Over 2,400 houses fell down. Many people had nowhere to live. After the disaster, people began to help each other. Many police officers and firefighters came to help us, too. I think that we should learn how to keep ourselves safe when we are facing disasters. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态以“一般过去时”为主； ③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏提示，并适当添加细节，注意字母大小写以及标点符号。 [写作步骤] 第一步，承接已给的开头，引出话题； 第二步，具体叙述过程，如飓风来临时的天气现象及过后造成的损失等； 第三步，介绍从中得到的启示。 [亮点词汇] ①natural disaster自然灾害 ②lose one’s life丧生 ③fall down倒塌 [高分句型] I think that we should learn how to keep ourselves safe when we are facing disasters.（宾语从句；时间状语从句） 题型通关 练 1．假设你是Lucy，你所在的城市昨晚发生了一场地震。幸运的是，地震并不强烈，你和家人都安然无恙。请根据以下要点，用英语写一篇80词左右的短文。 要点： 1. 地震发生时你和家人正在做的事情; 2. 家人的反应及采取的行动; 3. 地震后的感受。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 Last night around 9 o’clock, an earthquake suddenly hit our city while my family were at home. My family were busy with our own things then. My dad was reading, my mum doing dishes, and I doing homework. Suddenly the floor shook. Dad stood up quickly, asking us to stay calm. We ran to the living room with no heavy furniture. The shaking stopped in seconds. Luckily, none of us got hurt and we were safe. Though a little scared, I was glad my family were together. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：记叙文，以一般过去时、过去进行时为主要时态 明确要点：地震发生时自己和家人正在做的事情、家人的反应及采取的行动、地震后的感受 确定人称：第一人称（I/my） 注意事项：文中不得透露真实姓名与学校名称 [第二步：构思布局] 三段式结构： 开头段：总起句，交代地震发生的时间、背景，引出事件 主体段：分别介绍地震发生时家人的活动、家人的反应与采取的行动 结尾段：总结地震后的感受，升华主题 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：地震发生时你和家人正在做的事情 场景表达：My dad was reading, my mum doing dishes, and I doing homework./my dad was watching TV in the living room/my mum was cooking in the kitchen/I was reading a storybook in my bedroom/my grandparents were chatting in the yard等 要点二：家人的反应及采取的行动 行动表达：Dad stood up quickly, asking us to stay calm. We ran to the living room with no heavy furniture./We hid under the strong table immediately/My mum held me tightly to keep me safe/We rushed out of the house to the open area/We turned off the gas and power quickly等 要点三：地震后的感受 情感表达：Though a little scared, I was glad my family were together./I learned the importance of staying calm in an emergency/I felt lucky that we were all safe and sound/It made me cherish the time with my family more/I knew how to protect myself in an earthquake now等 2．以“Stay Safe in Disasters”为题，写一篇短文。 要点： 1. 自然灾害有时很危险； 2. 遇到灾害要保持冷静，学习安全知识； 3. 室内、室外简单自救方法； 4. 互相帮助，珍爱生命。 要求： 1. 紧扣本单元话题，语句通顺，语法正确； 2. 80词左右，不出现真实姓名。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】参考范文 Stay Safe in Disasters Natural disasters can be extremely dangerous, striking unexpectedly and causing widespread chaos. Earthquakes, floods, and storms pose significant threats to our lives and safety. When facing disasters, staying calm is crucial. We should learn safety knowledge beforehand to be well-prepared, as this knowledge can be our lifesaver in critical moments. Indoors, hide under sturdy furniture. Outdoors, move to open areas promptly. Remember to help each other, especially the vulnerable. Life is precious; let’s cherish it and stay safe together. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：说明文，用一般现在时为主 明确要点：自然灾害的危险性、遇到灾害的态度与准备、室内外自救方法、互相帮助与珍爱生命 确定人称：第三人称（natural disasters/our lives）为主，部分第一人称（we/us） 注意事项：不出现真实姓名 [第二步：构思布局] 四段式结构： 开头段：总起句，概括自然灾害的危险性 主体段一：说明遇到灾害要保持冷静，学习安全知识，并介绍室内、室外简单自救方法 结尾段：总结感受，强调互相帮助，珍爱生命 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：自然灾害的危险性 自然灾害：Natural disasters/earthquakes/floods/storms/hurricanes等 危险描述：can be extremely dangerous/strike unexpectedly/cause widespread chaos/pose significant threats to...等 要点二：遇到灾害的态度与准备 态度：staying calm is crucial/keep a clear mind/remain composed等 准备：learn safety knowledge beforehand/acquire survival skills/be well-prepared等 作用效果：this knowledge can be our lifesaver in critical moments/help us survive/reduce the risk of injury等 要点三：室内外自救方法 室内：hide under sturdy furniture/take cover under tables/stay away from windows等 室外：move to open areas promptly/go to high ground/avoid overpasses and tall buildings等 要点四：互相帮助与珍爱生命 互相帮助：help each other/assist the vulnerable/offer a helping hand等 珍爱生命：Life is precious; let’s cherish it/value every moment of life/protect our lives等 3．每到夏天，总有些地方洪水肆虐。如何在洪水中保护自己呢?你们班在英语课上就这一问题进行了讨论。请你根据以下提示，写一篇英语短文，表达自己的观点。 How to Protect Ourselves in Floods Before the disaster During the disaster ●often watch the news about the flood ●prepare water, food and medicine ●move to higher places at once ●don’t try to swim … 要求： 1.包含所有给出的提示要点，可适当发挥; 2.80词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Good morning, everyone!  Floods happen nearly every summer. Today I’d like to talk about how to protect ourselves in the flood. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 Good morning, everyone! Floods happen nearly every summer. Today I’d like to talk about how to protect ourselves in the flood. Firstly, we should often watch the news about the flood. We need to prepare water, food and medicine before the disaster comes. Secondly, when there is flood, we must move to higher places and stay there to wait for rescue. Remember not to try to swim through the floodwater. Thirdly, if the flood washes us away, we should keep calm. We can catch something made of wood because it can help us get out of the water. If we need help, we can also call the police. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：说明文，用一般现在时为主，部分建议可使用祈使句 明确要点：灾前准备、灾中应对措施、特殊情况处理 确定人称：第一人称复数（we）和第二人称（you，隐含在建议中） 注意事项：包含所有提示要点，可适当发挥，词数80词左右 [第二步：构思布局] 三段式结构： 开头段：引入话题，点明讨论内容 主体段：分点阐述灾前准备和灾中应对措施 结尾段：特殊情况处理及总结 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：灾前准备 观看洪水新闻：watch the news about the flood 准备必需品：prepare water, food and medicine 要点二：灾中应对 转移到高处：move to higher places 等待救援：stay there to wait for rescue 禁止游泳：Remember not to try to swim through the floodwater 4．题目：A Natural Disaster I Experienced/Know About 要求： 1. 描述你经历过或了解的一次自然灾害 (如 typhoon, earthquake, flood 等)； 2. 说明当时你或他人正在做什么 (使用过去进行时)； 3. 描述灾害造成的影响以及人们如何应对； 4. 谈谈你从这次经历中学到了什么； 5. 语句通顺，语法正确，逻辑清晰； 6. 词数不少于80词。 A Natural Disaster I Experienced/Know About ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 A Natural Disaster I Experienced Last summer, I experienced a strong typhoon. At 8 p.m. that day, I was doing my homework while my parents were watching TV. Suddenly, strong winds blew hard, and the rain poured down. The typhoon caused many trees to fall and blocked some roads. People stayed at home to keep safe. My family checked the windows and prepared food and water. From this experience, I learned that we should take natural disasters seriously and learn self-protection skills. It also taught me to stay calm and help each other in danger. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为材料作文； ②时态：时态以一般过去时和过去进行时为主； ③提示：完整覆盖“描述灾害、说明当时正在做的事、灾害影响与应对、学到的道理”四个要点，逻辑清晰。 [写作步骤] 第一步：开篇点明经历的自然灾害及时间，用过去进行时描述当时的活动； 第二步：描述灾害造成的影响及人们的应对措施； 第三步：总结从这次经历中学到的道理，升华主题。 [亮点词汇] ①pour down倾盆而下 ②block roads堵塞道路 ③self-protection skills自我保护技能 [高分句型] ① At 8 p.m. that day, I was doing my homework while my parents were watching TV. (while引导时间状语从句) 5．Daming 所在的城市昨天晚上遭遇了一场暴风雪。幸运的是，暴风雪持续的时间并不长，他们全家安然无恙。假如你是Daming，请描述暴风雪发生时家里人的活动情景。 内容要点: 1. 暴风雪的时间: yesterday evening 2. 暴风雪时全家人都在做什么: My mother was. . . 3. 暴风雪时的心情: scared. . . 4. 暴风雪的后果: all safe 5. 暴风雪后的思考: keep calm 要求: 1. 不得使用真实的姓名和学校名； 2. 可适当加入细节，使内容充实，行文连贯； 3. 字迹 工整、语言精练、表达准确、条理清晰。80 词(开头已给出，不计入总词数)。 My name is Daming. In my city, there was __________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 My name is Daming. In my city, there was a snowstorm yesterday evening. My mother was cooking dinner in the kitchen when it started.My father was watching TV, and I was doing my homework in my room. Suddenly, the wind howled loudly, and the snow fell heavily. We were all scared because it was so loud.Luckily, the storm didn’t last long. After it ended, we checked everything and felt happy that we were all safe. Remember to stay indoors during bad weather. In order to keep ourselves safe, I think we should keep calm and call 110 for help. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：材料作文； ②时态：一般过去时； ③提示：根据要点描述暴风雪发生的时间、家人活动、心情、结果及思考，需补充细节使内容连贯。 [写作步骤] 第一步：用1-2句交代人物和暴风雪发生的时间； 第二步：按要点描述家人活动及心情，用并列结构连接； 第三步：说明结果并自然引出思考。 [亮点词汇] ①snowstorm 暴风雪 ②last long 持续很久 ③keep calm 保持冷静 [高分句型] ①We were all scared because it was so loud.（运用了原因状语从句） ②In order to keep ourselves safe, I think we should keep calm and call 110 for help.（运用了不定式作目的状语） 6．假设你是李磊（Li Lei），上周你去福州看望你的阿姨，期间遭遇了当地的一次强台风。这是你第一次目睹台风。请根据以下提示，用英语写一篇短文描述这次经历。词数80左右。 写作提示： 1. What were the signs before the typhoon came?（turn dark, grow strong, ...） 2. What happened when the typhoon came?（blow violently（猛烈地）, ...） 3. What did the street look like after a typhoon? 注意事项： 1. 必须包含所有提示信息，可适当发挥，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数； 2. 意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范； 3. 请勿在文中使用真实的姓名、校名和地名。 Last week, I visited my aunt in Fuzhou and experienced the first typhoon in my life. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 Last week, I visited my aunt in Fuzhou and experienced the first typhoon in my life. Before it came, the sky turned dark and the wind grew strong. We closed all the windows and prepared some water, food and flashlights. When the typhoon hit, heavy rain poured down and strong wind blew violently. The trees were shaking wildly, their branches breaking. It was scary yet amazing to experience the typhoon. After the typhoon, the streets were dirty with leaves and water. I felt lucky to get through the typhoon safely. 【详解】写作步骤 [第一步：审题立意] 确定文体：记叙文，一般过去时 明确要点：描述台风的预兆，台风袭击的过程，台风结束后的街道 确定人称：第一人称(I/we) 注意事项：文中不得出现真实的地名，校名和人名。 [第二步：构思布局] 开头段：总起句，介绍台风来袭前的预兆 主体段：表述台风袭击的过程 结尾段：描述台风过后的街道以及总结感受 [第三步：要点展开] 要点一：台风的预兆 预兆：the sky turned dark and the wind grew strong 要点二：台风袭击的过程 过程：heavy rain poured down and strong wind blew violently/trees were shaking wildly 要点三：台风结束后的街道 景象描述：dirty with leaves and water 7．为了增强全民防灾减灾意识，推广避灾自救技能，无锡防灾减灾中心将举行“防灾减灾，守护安全”短视频创作比赛。假如你是阳光中学的李华，你打算参加本次活动。请根据以下流程图为你的短视频写一篇英文旁白。 注意：词数80，开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Hello, everyone! ______________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文： Hello, everyone! I’m Li Hua, a Grade 8 student in Sunshine Middle School. Today I want to share how to keep yourself safe during an earthquake. When an earthquake happens, there will be loud noise. Buildings will fall down because of the shaking of the earth and people will be in danger. Now I’d like to give you some tips in case there’s an earthquake. Hide under a table if you’re at home. If possible, you can also go to an open space. Remember to stay away from buildings, or you’ll get hurt. That’s all for my video. Thanks for watching. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：主要为“一般现在时”和“一般将来时”； ③提示：文章要点已经给出，按照话题展开阐述，可以适当增加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍自己； 第二步，描述地震灾害； 第三步，给出地震时的安全建议。 [亮点词汇] ①fall down倒塌 ②stay away from远离 [高分句型] ①When an earthquake happens, there will be loud noise. (when引导的时间状语从句) ②Hide under a table if you’re at home. (if引导的条件状语从句) 1 / 15 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $