辽宁名校联读后续写：个人成长 情绪控制类主题的 讲义 -2026届高三英语二轮复习专项

个人成长.情绪控制类主题的读后续写 （2025年9月辽宁名校联考题） 这篇读后续写范文，我会用‘三步教学法’带大家拆解：先吃透原文情节逻辑和伏笔，再合理构思情绪转变情节，最后用‘五句定位法’搭建高分框架。全程对照范文实操，新手也能直接套用！ 原文呈现： 第二节(满分25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Ethan enjoyed riding the school bus home. The ride home gave him some time to relax after a busy day of fifth grade. He usually sat alone and enjoyed that too. With four siblings, he didn't get much time alone. Sometimes he sat with his younger brother Lucas,but Lucas was sick at home. The bus stopped and the tallest boy in his class, Troy, stepped off followed by his younger brother,Jamie. As the bus pulled away, Ethan looked back over his shoulder to watch the boys. Troy was yelling and waving his hands at his little brother. Jamic said something Ethan could not hear. Troy yelled, gave his younger brother a hard shove and knocked him to the ground. Jamie was on the ground wiping at his eyes, but Troy walked away. Ethan turned in his seat,feeling disgusted.(He hated seeing little kids get picked on.The sight of Jamic on the ground crying was burned into his memory. He tried to think of something else. He thought of the model car he was working on at home, a 1967 Corvette. He started building it over a week ago and just finished putting it together last night. Tonight, as soon as he finished his homework, he could start painting the car. That was his favorite part. He already had the perfect color of blue picked out. He hurried off the bus, ran through his yard, and breezed through the kitchen with a quick hello to his mom. She was making spaghetti,which smelled delicious. He ran up the stairs two at a time and rushed into his room. “Surprise!” his brother Lucas said, throwing his arms into the air. “What are you doing in my room? I thought you were sick!” “I feel better!” “What's on your face? Are you bleeding?" “No! I'm not bleeding. " Lucas wiped at his face. “It's probably just paint. Look! Look what I did!" He pointed at the desk in the corner of Ethan's room, 注意: 1.续写词数应为150 左右; 动作 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Ethan looked down at his desk in horror. Ethan took a deep breath and then unfolded his fist 一、先看懂原文情节逻辑 原文主线： Ethan 在校车上看到同学Troy粗暴地推弟弟Jamie，心里非常反感暴力。 他回家想玩自己辛苦拼的模型车。 发现弟弟Lucas在他房间，脸上有颜料。 结尾暗示：模型被弟弟弄坏了。 核心伏笔（必须在续写里呼应）： Ethan讨厌别人欺负弱小、使用暴力。 续写必须写：他自己生气，但克制住不凶弟弟，完成人物成长。 二、合理构思情节 第一段 ： 看到模型被涂颜料 生气、发火、吼弟弟 弟弟害怕、想哭、低头 Ethan攥拳，但马上想到校车上Troy的行为 Ethan的情绪链条如下： 震惊 → 愤怒 → 发泄 → 看到弟弟害怕 → 内心触动 → 回忆伏笔 → 开始反思 第二段： 1. 严格跟着所给首句走，不跑题 开头：took a deep breath → unfolded his fist 完全承接第一段结尾的 squeezed into fists，动作连贯，逻辑丝滑。 2. 情绪转变自然，不突兀 生气消失 → 安慰弟弟 → 一起清理 → 和好 要没有生硬转折，符合人物心理变化。 3. 主题升华非常标准（高考满分句） From that day on, Ethan learned that true strength is not about getting angry, but about controlling it. 三．用5句定位搭框架（红色字体）： 第一段：首句（已给出）---①衔接句（回应首句内容--主述位推进法）----②心理/环境-----③动作----④对话/独白----⑤心理/环境----⑥动作----⑦衔接句启下（过渡到第二段给出句） Ethan looked down at his desk in horror. ①He saw his model car, which he'd spent weeks making, was covered in messy red paint. ②Ethan’s heart sank and a surge of anger swept over him. ③He stepped forward , shouting ，④“I told you not to touch my things! This was important to me!”Lucas's smile faded. “I ... I wanted to help," he uttered, voice shaking. ⑤The tears of fear were shining in his eyes. ⑥He lowered his head, not daring to look at Ethan. ⑦Ethan's hands squeezed into fists .But then he thought of Troy shoving Jamie-he didn't want to be like that. 第二段：首句（已给出）---①衔接句（回应首句内容）---②心理/环境-----③动作----④对话/独白----⑤心理/环境----⑥动作（解决问题）---⑦主题句（情感升华） Ethan took a deep breath and then unfolded his fist. ①He sat next to Lucas and patted him on his shoulder. ②A feeling of guilt welled up in his heart. ③He looked into Lucas’s eyes and apologized, ④“I'm sorry I yelled. It's okay. We can fix it together.”⑤Hearing his words, Lucas’s tears of excitement rolled down without control. ⑥The two brothers hugged each other tightly . The rest of the day was a cheerful one. They got some water and cleaned the paint off, then painted it blue slowly. As they worked, Ethan was filled with a sense of relief .⑦ From this experience , Ethan realized that sometimes, being kind was better than being angry, which was the source of happiness. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $