内容正文:
Section Ⅵ Writing
写作项目——Writing a postcard
明信片是简化的书信表达形式,其格式通常包括日期、称呼、正文、结束语(祝福语)、签名及收信人地址等。本单元的写作任务是写一张以旅行为主题的明信片,写作中应交代清楚时间、地点、旅行路线,并重点描述旅途见闻及游览感悟。受文体所限,行文应力求言简意赅,描述要做到详略得当。
由教材学写作
一、学文体架构
由文中所给的Alice写给Emma的明信片可知,此类文章的主体部分应以时间为线索介绍旅行的“所至—所见—所感”,具体内容为:
目前
所至:简要介绍所游览的地方
如文中第一句介绍了自己是在云南旅行。
所见:详略得当介绍自己的游览见闻
如文中第二、三句提到自己游览了玉龙雪山,且看到了巨大的牦牛。
所感:表达自己的感受
文中第一句在介绍旅游所在地时穿插有自己的感受,然后又在第四句表达了心中的感慨。
此后
所至:下一步的行程安排
文中第五句简要提及下一步的目的地是丽江,计划去参观丽江古城。
所见:计划去游览的目标
所感:预期会有的收获
文中第七句表达了对丽江之行的期待:肯定会很有趣。
二、学行文逻辑
1.首尾呼应,情境融洽度高
本文首句 “I'm having a really great time in Yunnan, China!”开门见山地表明自己在中国云南玩得很开心,吸引读者继续读下文。结尾部分“It's going to be a lot of fun!”与首句相呼应,语言情境高度融洽。
2.时空转移,自然过渡
本文以时间和空间的转移为线索进行叙述,思路清晰,行文流畅。第二句中“At the moment”和第五句中“Tomorrow”顺畅衔接,过渡自然,既表达了作者对当下美景的享受,又表明了作者对未来美景的期待。同时,第二句中的“Yulong Snow Mountain”和第五句中的“the famous old town of Lijiang”实现了空间的切换,描绘了不同地方的美景。
三、学高级表达
本文第一句中的“really”一词的运用强调了作者在这次旅程中玩得很开心。第三句中的“whole, even, huge”凸显了作者一整天都沉浸在对美丽景色的欣赏中,并且因为看到了牦牛很是兴奋。第四句中的 “so beautiful” 再次感叹了云南的风景之美。
四、学语言风格
本文以简单句为主,辅以少量的并列句,体现了此类文体言简意赅的特色。文中描述多采用生活化的口吻,语言生动活泼,情感真挚浓郁。
写作项目指导
Write a postcard to introduce your travel
——写一张明信片来介绍你的旅途见闻
第一步:构思谋篇
Part 1
Where are you?
Part 2
What have you done so far? And what are you going to do next?
Part 3
How do you feel?
第二步:要点表达
(一)介绍所至
1.目前游览了哪些地方?
①At the moment, I'm staying at Sanya and I_am_having_a_great_time!
现在我在三亚,我玩得非常开心!
②Yesterday we went_to_the_Great_Wall and today we visited the Palace Museum.
昨天我们去了长城,今天我们参观了故宫。
③On the first day, we visited the West Lake and spent_the_whole_day_there.
第一天我们游览了西湖,在那儿待了一整天。
④So far I_have_been_to_many_famous_tourist_spots,_including the Daming Palace National Heritage Park, Xi'an City Wall, the Great Wild Goose Pagoda and so on.
到目前为止,我去过了许多著名的旅游景点,包括大明宫国家遗址公园、西安城墙、大雁塔等等。
2.下一步计划去什么地方?
①Our next destination is Jiuzhaigou, which we have been expecting_to_visit for a long time.
我们的下一个目的地是九寨沟,这是我们期待已久的地方。
②Tomorrow we_are_going_to_take_a_walk in the Summer Palace and have a taste of the famous Beijing roast duck.
明天我们要去颐和园散步,品尝一下著名的北京烤鸭。
③After reaching your destination, we will have_a_day_to_explore this amazing ancient city.
到达目的地之后,我们将有一天的时间来探索这座令人叹为观止的古城。
(二)描述所见
旅途中见到了什么?遇到了什么?
①We admired its amazing traditional architecture and enjoyed_the_excellent_local_food such as Dongpo Pork.
我们欣赏到令人赞叹的传统建筑,并享用了东坡肉等当地美食。
②We saw crowds of visitors — some_were_surfing and others were diving in the deeper part of the sea.
我们看到了成群结队的游客——有些人在冲浪,有些人在更深的海域潜水。
③We met_some_young_people from a local university. They helped_us_take_a_lot_of_pictures and told us some interesting facts about the museum.
我们遇到了一些来自当地一所大学的年轻人。他们帮我们拍了很多照片,并向我们讲述了一些关于这座博物馆的有趣的事实。
④I chose_the_walking_route,_going along the wooden pathways to enjoy the changing view from various angles of the Buddha, from its foot to its head.
我选择了步行路线,沿着木板小路一路向上,欣赏到乐山大佛从脚部到头部的各个角度不同的景色。
(三)抒发所感
这趟旅程带给了你哪些感受?
①The_weather_here_is_very_pleasant and the scenery is beautiful.
这里气候宜人,景色优美。
②I've heard that it is an amazing sight, and _I_can't_wait_to_go.
我听说这是一个令人惊叹的景点,我迫不及待想去了。
③It is definitely an exciting trip. If I have a chance, I will be more than happy to_visit_the_place_again.
这绝对是一次激动人心的旅行。如果我有机会,我会很乐意再次游览这个地方。
[针对练笔]
假定你是李华,现在正在杭州游览西湖,晚上打算去品尝当地的特色小吃。请你给笔友Eric写一张明信片,介绍一下自己的旅行。
参考范文:
Hi Eric,
Now, I'm visiting Hangzhou. It is a beautiful city, attracting lots of visitors from home and abroad. I've visited the West Lake, and learned more about its folklores and traditional cultures. Its beautiful scenery is really a feast for the eyes and its long history has impressed me so much. Tonight I plan to enjoy the special snacks here. Visitors all think highly of them. I can't wait!
Bye for now.
Li Hua
写作素材储备
1.旅程安排
(1)We're taking the train, leaving the day before the October holiday begins. We're arriving at 9:30 a.m. and will start sightseeing right away, so I hope we sleep well on the train!
我们打算坐火车,在十一假期开始的前一天出发。上午9:30到达之后,我们马上就开始观光,但愿我们能在火车上睡个好觉!
(2)We're also planning to visit several other places in Xi'an. My dad and I are both looking forward to going to the Shaanxi History Museum, because my dad loves history and I have heard that this museum is known as a “Chinese treasure house”! We're also going to visit the Xi'an City Wall and a few other famous sights.
我们还计划游览西安的其他景点。爸爸和我都期待着参观陕西历史博物馆,因为我爸爸热爱历史,而且我听说这家博物馆被誉为“中国宝库”!我们还打算游览西安古城墙和其他一些著名景点。
2.景点介绍
Jinli is a street lying in Chengdu, Sichuan. The street has a long history and is rich in traditional Chinese culture. The street is about 550 meters long. I saw all kinds of ancient-style buildings along the well-known street, and enjoyed many local snacks, all of which made my mouth water.
锦里是四川成都的一条街道。这条街历史悠久,蕴含着丰富的中国传统文化。街长大约有550米。我在这条著名的街道上看到了各种各样的古建筑,并享用了许多当地小吃,每种都让我垂涎三尺。
3.旅行感受
I'm having a really great time in Harbin. I've admired the ice sculpture exhibition and visited the world of lanterns wandering about the main street. The scene was one of breathtaking beauty.
我在哈尔滨玩得很开心。我欣赏了冰雕展,徜徉在主街上的灯笼世界之中。美妙的景色令人叹为观止。
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