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父亲理解“我”不想成为医生
在读后续写中巧用状语结构可以使状态描写更生动、更具体。常见的状语结构为:形容词(短语)作状语和非谓语动词作状语;此外,with复合结构和独立主格结构也可以充当状语。
1.形容词(短语)作状语
形容词(短语)作状语时通常用来补充说明主语的状态,一般表示原因、结果或者伴随。
*Curious to know what was happening inside, Eric pushed the door open and slipped into the house. (原因状语)
埃里克好奇里面正在发生什么,便推开门,悄悄溜进了屋里。
*Jerry was encouraged by the teacher's smile, full of confidence in his plan. (结果状语)
杰瑞被老师的微笑所鼓舞,对自己的计划充满了信心。
*Lost in the forest, Mary lay under a tree, full of fear and despair.(伴随状语)
玛丽迷失在森林里,躺在一棵树下,满心恐惧与绝望。
2.非谓语动词/with复合结构/独立主格结构作状语
非谓语动词作状语时,可以表示原因、结果、伴随、时间等。v.-ing形式作状语时所表达的动作与逻辑主语之间构成主动关系;v.-ed形式作状语时所表达的动作与逻辑主语之间构成被动关系。动词不定式作状语时可以用来表示动作的目的、结果、原因等。only to do 作状语时表示出乎意料的结果,v.-ing形式作状语时表示自然而然的结果。with复合结构和独立主格结构也可以充当状语。
*Seeing what I did, my mother frowned as if to ask me to stand up quickly. (非谓语动词表示主动)
看到我的举动,妈妈皱起了眉头,像是在示意我赶紧站起来。
*Scolded by the teacher, he burst into tears. (非谓语动词表示被动)
被老师训斥后,他一下子哭了出来。
*A young man came to the police station, surrounded by a group of journalists.(非谓语动词表示被动)
一位年轻男子来到警察局,被一群记者团团围住。
*She fell asleep with the light burning.(with复合结构)
她开着灯就睡着了。
*Lamb and mother reunited, I turned back to the tractor only to see it move suddenly away from me.(独立主格结构;only to do表示出乎意料的结果)
小羊和妈妈团聚后,我转身回到拖拉机旁,却看见它突然开走了。
*His father died, leaving the family even worse off.(v.-ing形式表示自然而然的结果)
他的父亲去世了,这让家里的境况变得更糟了。
阅读下面的材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
[1]From the time I was old enough to help on our Indiana farm, I knew what my father expected of me. Three generations of men in my family were doctors. I heard stories of the lives my grandfather had saved and I heard similar tales about my father. As Dad grew ever more godlike in my mind, so did the force of the expectation that I would follow in the family tradition.
[2]But as college neared, I began to feel that becoming a doctor was not what I really wanted to do. I didn't dare tell him about my uncertainty. With the weight heavy on my mind the summer before college, I was given a challenge that I hoped would be a distraction.
[3]Dad kept several bird dogs which I trained on our farm. As usual, Dad turned Jerry over to me. “See what you can do with him,” he said.
[4]I didn't anticipate problems. Jerry was a willing dog of about ten months. The first part of his training was easy. He mastered the basics: sit, stay, down, walk. His only problem was “come”. I'd call “Jerry! Here!” He would turn and look at me, then go on about his business. In the following days, I noticed he would just take off through the grass, fast as a wild thing. Despite my intense desire to train him well, I began to feel a strange sense of joy when he ran.
[5]“Why won't he do what I want him to?” I asked myself. I had never failed with a dog before, but I was surely failing now. When September came, I finally had to tell Dad that this bird dog wouldn't hunt. The thought that I had failed us both made me guilty.
[6]“Son, I know this dog doesn't do what he should,” he said, “but what he does do is something he likes.” He continued to look at me firmly. For a moment I felt he could see into my very heart.
注意:续写词数应为150个左右。
“Dad, I don't think I can do medicine,” I took a solid breath.__________________
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He gave me a tight hug, said good night and left me.___________________________
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一审——审要素
【When & Where】
[1]From the time I was old enough to help on our Indiana farm, I knew what my father expected of me.
[3]Dad kept several bird dogs which I trained on our farm.
[5]When September came, I finally had to tell Dad that this bird dog wouldn't hunt.
【Who】
My father, I (going to college after summer)
【What & Why】
[1] Three generations of men in my family were doctors.
[1]As Dad grew ever more godlike in my mind, so did the force of the expectation that I would follow in the family tradition.
[2]But as college neared, I began to feel that becoming a doctor was not what I really wanted to do.I didn't dare tell him about my uncertainty.
[3]Dad kept several bird dogs which I trained on our farm. As usual, Dad turned Jerry over to me.
[4]His only problem was “come”.
[5]When September came, I finally had to tell Dad that this bird dog wouldn't hunt.
[6]But what he does do is something he likes.
【How】
[2]With the weight heavy on my mind the summer before college, I was given a challenge that I hoped would be a distraction.
[4]I didn't anticipate problems. Jerry was a willing dog of about ten months.
[4]Despite my intense desire to train him well, I began to feel a strange sense of joy when he ran.
[5]The thought that I had failed us both made me guilty.
[6]He continued to look at me firmly. For a moment I felt he could see into my very heart.
二定——定主题:正能量原则
Thanks to my dad, I've got the chance to stay true to myself and follow my real dream.
三构思——QA模式:构思每段三个微情节
根据第一段段首句可知,下文续写内容为:
[Question 1] How did I feel afterwards?
[Answer] I was afraid my father would be disappointed and be angry with me.
[Question 2] What did my father say?
[Answer] He told me that he understood me and asked me what I wanted.
[Question 3] What happened then?(和第二段段首句衔接)
[Answer] My father accepted my thoughts and it was time to go to bed.
根据第二段段首句可知,下文续写内容为:
[Question 1] How did I feel?
[Answer] I felt my father loved and trusted me.
[Question 2] What did I plan to do ?
[Answer] I would confirm my favorite major with my college.
[Question 3] What moral would the story express?
[Answer] Thanks to my dad, I've got the chance to stay true to myself and follow my real dream.
四成文——梳理思路,完成正文
特别关注语言协同: 模仿原文的亮点词汇、语法结构和亮点句型。
“Dad, I don't think I can do medicine,” I took a solid breath.__________________
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He gave me a tight hug, said good night and left me._______________________
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One possible version:
“Dad, I don't think I can do medicine,” I took a solid breath. The words hung in the air like a heavy fog, and I was ready for his disappointment. (微情节一:“我”担心父亲会感到失望)But to my great surprise, his eyes softened with relief. “I've been waiting for you to tell me,” he said. Then he explained, obviously, I, just like Jerry, was happiest while running free. My throat tightened. He went on, “Your grandfather and I chose our path, but you don't have to follow the same path.” Then he asked me what I wanted. (微情节二:父亲表示理解“我”并问“我”想要什么) For the first time, I spoke of the art classes I'd taken up and the paintings I'd drawn late at night. He nodded with appreciation.Time passing by so quickly, it was time to go to bed.(微情节三:父亲接受“我”的想法)
He gave me a tight hug, said good night and left me. At that moment I understood my father loved and trusted me. (微情节一:“我”感受到父亲的爱和信任)When I was lying in the dark, his words echoed in my mind. I looked at Jerry, asleep, his legs stretching suddenly as if to be running even in his dreams. Once I was too afraid to tell my dad my true feelings and even envied Jerry's freedom to follow his instincts. Now, the weight was lifted—one I had carried since my childhood. I can confirm my favorite major with the college. (微情节二:“我”放下重担,选择自己心仪的专业)It wouldn't be easy to step away from the path my family had walked for generations. However, thanks to my dad, I've got the chance to stay true to myself and follow my real dream. (微情节三:“我”的感悟)
(2025·新高考全国卷Ⅱ阅读) Kathy Ho teaches high school inside Lucile Packard Children's Hospital Stanford (LPCH). “Sometimes I don't like saying that I'm a teacher,” says Ho. “People get in their minds an idea of what teachers do, but that's not really what it is here.”
“Here” is room 386, where each year, about 500 LPCH patients also become students. The hospital school is free of parents, doctors, and medical procedures. [It's a place of learning.]① About half of Ho's students stay for a week or less; others are there for more than a year. Most of Ho's students will recover, which means that preparing them to return to school is an increasingly important component of care.
Still, in room 386, academics don't come first. [Physical health and mental health are the priority.]②“If you're scared about something and thinking only about that, there's no way you're going to be able to learn,” Ho says. “I'm a coach, an adviser, and a comforter, and that's what it means to be a hospital teacher.”
There are up to 30 students at any given time in Ho's class. She generally works with their regular teachers to get lessons and tests being used at their home schools. Some teachers don't give the kids any assignments; they express sympathy instead. “I feel like it is a disservice to the kids,” Ho says. “They think their teachers don't care about their schoolwork.”
[Ho recognizes the psychological benefit of helping kids keep up with their peers (同龄人) outside the hospital.]③ “I actually think the medicine is only a small piece for some problems,” says Julie Good, director of pain management services at LPCH. [“It's about problem-solving around what it means to have a full life. Those kids have dreams. School can keep those dreams alive by giving kids a way to learn and grow.”]④
背铺灰语料,积续写基石
[话题]
人与社会——人物故事——儿童医院教师的多重身份
[内容概要]
露西尔·帕卡德儿童医院的教师凯西·霍为患者授课,帮助患者在住院期间兼顾学业与身心健康,助其重返校园。
[注释]
①描写地点的特点
②身体和精神健康的重要性
③和同龄人保持同步对孩子心理健康的重要意义
④学校的育人功能:帮助实现孩子们的梦想
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