Unit 5 Working the land读后续写同步写作 课件-2025-2026学年高中英语人教版选择性必修第一册

Unit 5 Working the land 人教版2019选择性必修第一册 读后续写 读话题写作文高二上 Module 5 Chemical farming Organic farming Learning objectives At the end of class, you will be able to： 1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由； 2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整； 3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。 1 2 3 技法点拨 佳句仿写 目 录 CONTENTS 写作实践 3 技 法 点 拨 ： 使续写更加形象生动 01 4 所谓协同，就是指所产出的语言与所需理解的语言趋于一致，是语言输出向语言输入看齐的一种方式。原文的语篇特征就是后续文章的语篇特征，所以要注意以下几方面的协同： 1.主题协同 以本模块典例赏析中材料为例（下同），根据原文的“From age 14，he worked.And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.”可知，文章的主题为“family responsibility”，在续文中，要紧紧围绕该主题进行，并体现出“我”已经“长大”，应该承担起自己的责任。 2.冲突协同 原文中冲突为“he didn't understand my world of school activities”“I didn'treally understand his world cither”, 在续文中要做好这两个矛盾的协同:冲突 1.父子俩互相理解；冲突2.儿子愿意拿出这笔钱用作为家庭的开销。 Tip1:协同原则写美文 3.人设协同 (1)根据原文中的“A quiet man”可知，父亲不善言辞；根据“And hisdad， Albert.took the moncy my dad carned and used it to pay family expenscs.”可知，父亲勤劳、有责任心；在续文中，要尽可能把父亲憨厚老实的性格特征体现出来；续文中父亲不要说过多的话, 而且不要出现文绉绉的说辞， 否则与父亲憨厚老实的农民身份不符合。 (2)根据原文的“the farmer said there might be more work. but I wasn't interested”“the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed” "I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.”可知，儿子的性格是聪明、自信、倔强又有点不负责任，所以才会不理解父亲。按照正能量原则，儿子最终会理解父亲，并愿意上交这笔钱，承担起相应的家庭责任。 Tip1:协同原则写美文 4. 情感协同 小男孩的情感非常丰富， 所以续文中也要把小男孩丰富的情感淋漓尽致地表达出来，做到情节和情感[让交钱“我”不愿(unwilling)——因小事被感动(moved)——负责父亲影响“我”(considerate)——心甘情愿拿出补家用(willing)]两条线同时走，让续文的情感丰盈饱满。 5.语言协同 内容要创造，语言要模仿（王初明）。原文为续文提供了语境，续文是原文的延续，自然要遵循原文的语言风格和特点。 原文用到了同位语、非谓语、定语从句、宾语从句、主语从句及一些好的词汇，句式和句型相对来说还是比较丰富的。续文作者也要遵循这一原则，做到与原文语言的合理衔接。 Tip1:协同原则写美文 名词性从句包括主语从句、宾语从句、表语从句和同位语从句。what,that所引导的名词性从句是写作中常见的高级表达方式，使用名词性从句可以使表达更加丰富、地道。 1.宾语从句 (1)I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. 我被告知我在写作比赛中获得了一等奖，并且将在两天后进行颁奖典礼。(2023新高考) 【赏析】该句使用了两个that引导的宾语从句，分别讲述了“我”得知的两件事情：一是我获奖了，二是将要参加一个颁奖典礼。 (2)Opening her cyes, she couldn't believe what she had seen.睁开眼睛，她简直不敢相信她所看到的一切。(2021新高考) 【赏析】what引导的名词性从句作谓语动词believe的宾语，其中，what在从句中作谓语动词had seen的宾语。 Tip 2:名词性从句提升表达档次 2.主语从句 (1)What concerned the children was whether Bernard could sell all the popcorn out.让孩子们担心的是伯纳德是否能卖完所有的爆米花。 【赏析】what引导名词性从句。 (2)It is of vital importance that we (should) learn somcthing from failurc.我们从失败中吸取教训是至关重要的。 【赏析】“it”作形式主语，真正的主语是后面的名词性从句。 3.同位语从句 One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.有一天，我听说他因患重病住院了。(2022年1月浙江卷) 【赏析】that引导同位语从句，解释“word”的具体内容。 Tip 2:名词性从句提升表达档次 佳 句 仿 写： 跟着课文学佳句 02 10 细节描写 1.考虑到这对双胞胎没有做母亲节早餐的经验，父亲面带笑容，乐意帮助他们。 Given that the twins had no experience in cooking a Mother’s Day breakfast, he father was willing to help them, with a smile spreading on his face. 3.为了帮助更好地种植蔬菜，他们首先轮流给植物浇水。 To help grow the vegetables well, they first took turns to water the plants. 2.这幅图画让我深信做一个好女儿甚至比做一个好学生更重要。 The picture convinces me that it is even more important to be a good daughter than a good student. 原： To tackle this crisis, he chose to study agriculture and received an education at Southwest Agricultural College in Chongqing. 原： Given that Yuan's hybrids made him quite wealthy, onc might think hc would have retired to a life of leisure. 原： Yuan was convinced that the answer could be found in the creation of hybrid rice. 细节描写 4.我没有退缩，而是专注于我所能实现的目标。 Instead of withdrawing into myself, I focused on what I could achieve. 6.当参观艺术展览时，我们讨论了伟大艺术家的作品。 While (we were) visiting the art exhibition, we discussed the great artists' works.（天津卷） 5.我习惯每天早晨看《中国日报》，因为它能让我了解国内外的时事。 I am used to reading China Daily every morning, as it can keep me informed of the present cvents both at home and abroad. 原： The goal of using different organic farming methods is to grow good food while avoiding damage to the environment or to people's health. 原： Even in his later years, Yuan Longping was still young at heart and full of vision, and everyone was always excited to see what he would dream up next. 原： Organic farmers focus on keeping their soil rich and free of disease through natural means. 细节描写 7.伯纳德感激的泪水顺着脸颊流下来，他说：“言语无法表达我对您帮助我克服困难的感激之情。” With tears of gratitude streaming down his cheeks, Bernard said, “No words can express how grateful I am to you for your helping me overcome my problem.” 原： Through intense cffort, Yuan overcame enormous technical difficulties to develop the first hybrid rice that could be used for farming in 1974. 03 写作实践: 触类旁通 14 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses. I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass(超过) anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation. Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号). The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to. At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished. My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money. 典例赏析 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Para1: When I brought my paycheck home--it was$119--my dad wanted to talk to me. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Para2: I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.  ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 22 第一步：读透文本 17 1.主题分析 本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在八年级前的暑假去农场工作, 辛辛苦苦挣到的钱，不情愿贡献给家庭，后来在看到父亲的辛劳之后, 理解了父母担心的是自己太过自私而不知奉献，终于想通，并自豪地将自己劳动所得交给父亲的故事。 2. 情节梳理：故事要素 即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。 读原文 划要素 填表格 n. 特点 （adj./v./短语） （主要）角色1 high school student, didn’t understand dad’s world （主要）角色2 Dad George quiet, a livestock trucker with low education contribute to home （次要）角色 a neighboring farmer 背景事件 I did a summer job and earned some money. 微情节 动作(v.)/ 情绪(adj.) I was hired to work in his field. (p4) I looked forward to the pay. (p5) Dad’s words made me realized my earnings may be not mine. (p6) I was not interested.(p7) I 22 第二步：构建情节 20 What’s the genre of the passage? Narration（记叙文） Argumentation（议论文） Exposition（说明文） Read for the genre Para 1. 情节 情感 Jenna and Jeff思考着如何给妈妈准备母亲节早餐。 内心充满期待的、无比激动的、兴致勃勃的。 Para 2. 情节 情感 Jenna and Jeff准备早餐的过程，精心地煎着面包片。 自信的、小心翼翼的、谨慎地、仔细地、开心的、期待的、镇定的。 Para 3. 情节 情感 厨房弄得一团糟，Jenna and Jeff分工明确、互帮互助，但是粥依然没煮出来，面包片也焦了。 面对厨房一团糟的恐惧不安与担心、手背锅烫了的痛苦难受、一直做不出母亲节早餐的焦急之情、忐忑不安、忧心忡忡。 The pay arrived at last. After hearing what he had said, I felt embarrassed. P1大意 Dad didn't want my money. I misunderstood Dad. P1角色 续写 思路 角色 I Dad 动作 (v.) 情绪(adj.) 读P1P2首句 定情节发展 I; Dad ①How did I feel after receiving the money? ②Arriving home, what did I do? ③What did he said to me? P2大意 P2角色 续写 思路 角色 动作 (v.) 读P1P2首句 定情节发展 This time I undertand Dad and am willing to share my money. I; Dad I Dad ③How did he feel? How did he react? After hearing what he had said, I felt embarrassed. ① How did I feel? ② What did I do? What’s the ending? 情绪(adj.) 续写段1. 情节 情感 爸爸的突然出现救场缓解了双胞胎俩人的窘境，描写爸爸是如何知道孩子们做好这一顿早餐的，描写出爸爸的耐心与孩子们的认真。结合续写第二段的既给首局可知爸爸领着孩子俩给妈妈做早餐成功了。 ①孩子角度：看见爸爸出现了很激动，内心如释重负，重拾信心； ②爸爸角度：知道孩子们做早餐时内心充满了对孩子和妻子的爱以及耐心。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. ________ 27 续写段2. 情节 情感 ①描写做好早餐后孩子们将其端上楼给妈妈的动作（仔细，小心翼翼，激动，期待）；②描写妈妈看见爱心早餐的动作反应；③描写双胞胎与爸爸妈妈的语言互动；④主旨升华（亲情类的名人名言）。 妈妈看见早餐后既惊喜又激动，妈妈的感动之情，以及双胞胎俩人对妈妈和爸爸的感激之情。 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. _____________________ 28 When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad wanted to talk to me . Knowing that he would talk about my earnings, I pulled a long face and intended to simply walk past him and slip back to my bedroom. “Come here, son.”Dadexclaimed, wearing an accessible expression. My heart sank. What I had been looking forward to—a dreamy new football outfit would finally give way to family expenses.Reluctantly, I inched forward and submitted the paycheck. However, Dad slid the paycheck back into my hand, saying in a tender voice, “You've grown up. You have every right to decide what to do with the money.” I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. My previous desperation was immediately erased by great bills. I stepped closer and hugged him tightly. Just at that moment I noticed his grey hair and stiff neck.Memories of his usual cry of pain on the neck came crowding in. I realized how much he had contributed to the family through his tiring work of being a trucker. Tears began to blur my vision, "Dad, thanks for your hard work these years. I shouldn't have been so selfish and not willing to contribute my money." On that day, I began to understand Dad’s world and it seemed that he was also on the way into my world. 佳作展现 At the end of the lesson, I am able to： 1 2 3 4 5 plan the layout of the story( the plot is natural, and the narrative is good) use appropriate words and sentences to express what I want to write an continuation writing properly. 自我评价 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was early spring and Nana was in the backyard with her grandchildren. Amy, Michael, and Justin were playing when Nana said, “I’m going to start planting my garden. Who wants to help me?” “What are going to plant, Nana?” asked Amy. “I like big, yellow sunflowers.” “I’m going to plant vegetables. That way we can have them to eat when they are ready,” said Nana. “How long does that take?” asked Michael. He liked vegetables sometimes, especially carrots. “It will take a few months before anything is ready to eat,” answered Nana. The children were surprised. “Months? Why would you do all that work and then have to wait so long?” asked Amy. “You should just go to the store and buy them.” “Patience, my sweeties! Don’t you know food always tastes best when you grow it yourself?” replied Nana. “And if all of you come to help, it won’t be too much work.” “I’ll help you, Nana,” offered Justin. He put down the soccer ball and went to look at the gardening tools Nana had laid out. “What do we do first?” Michael and Amy came over to look, too. Nana taught Justin how to use a trowel (小铲子) to dig small rows of holes for the seeds. Next, Nana showed Amy how to pour the seeds into each hole. And it was Michael’s job to cover up the holes with soil. Finally, Amy wrote the vegetable names on sticks that Justin pushed into the ground. “This way we can remember which vegetable seeds we have planted,” said Nana. When they had planted everything, the children took turns filling up the watering can so that Nana could make the soil nice and wet for the seeds to start to grow. “Now we just water them a little every day, and with some time and sunshine, we’ll have some delicious things to eat in the summer,” said Nana. 实战演练 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Para1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Para2: Finally, Nana said it was time for the first harvest. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 注：【思路点拨】见书P81页。 实战演练 Thank you for your listening $