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初中语文作文精讲(1)
怎样的素材是好素材?
围炉作文
专注中考作文,点拨方法,点燃思维,点亮情怀。
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很多学生选材存在“假大虚空”的现象,一眼就知道是杜撰的。那么怎样的作文素材才是好素材呢?应该是那些小切口着眼,联系话题,注重可操作性的素材。
本课目标
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一、“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
二、“小”:小切口着眼,以小见大
三、“实”:真实可感,贴合生活
四、“深”:内涵深刻,立意高远
五、范文点评
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
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GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
跳出初中生作文高频“烂大街”素材,选取生活中易被忽略的新鲜小事、新视角体验,不刻意编造,让读者眼前一亮,且符合初中生的生活场景,不脱离实际。
“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“新”:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“小”:小切口着眼,以小见大
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GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“小”:小切口着眼,以小见大
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“小”:小切口着眼,以小见大
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“小”:小切口着眼,以小见大
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“小”:小切口着眼,以小见大
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“实”:真实可感,贴合生活
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GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
技法分析:
动词精准:“探出头来”“照亮”
具象化:用“五级台阶”具体化帮助
对比:LED灯与老式手电筒的对比
立意升华:从具体的光到人与人的温暖
“实”:真实可感,贴合生活
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
技法分析:
动词精准:“探出头来”“照亮”
具象化:用“五级台阶”具体化帮助
对比:LED灯与老式手电筒的对比
立意升华:从具体的光到人与人的温暖
“实”:真实可感,贴合生活
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
技法分析:
动词精准:“探出头来”“照亮”
具象化:用“五级台阶”具体化帮助
对比:LED灯与老式手电筒的对比
立意升华:从具体的光到人与人的温暖
“实”:真实可感,贴合生活
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
技法分析:
动词精准:“探出头来”“照亮”
具象化:用“五级台阶”具体化帮助
对比:LED灯与老式手电筒的对比
立意升华:从具体的光到人与人的温暖
“实”:真实可感,贴合生活
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
技法分析:
动词精准:“探出头来”“照亮”
具象化:用“五级台阶”具体化帮助
对比:LED灯与老式手电筒的对比
立意升华:从具体的光到人与人的温暖
“实”:真实可感,贴合生活
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
技法分析:
动词精准:“探出头来”“照亮”
具象化:用“五级台阶”具体化帮助
对比:LED灯与老式手电筒的对比
立意升华:从具体的光到人与人的温暖
“实”:真实可感,贴合生活
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“深”:内涵深刻,立意高远
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GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“深”:内涵深刻,立意高远
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“深”:内涵深刻,立意高远
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“深”:内涵深刻,立意高远
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“深”:内涵深刻,立意高远
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
“深”:内涵深刻,立意高远
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
范文点评
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GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
范文点评
那一刻,我的世界春暖花开
天幕渐渐阴沉下来,雨点却更密了,水滴打在地上绽开一朵朵水花。望着教学楼里寥寥的人影,我也等不及了,冲吧!
我终于挤了出去,低着头向校门口走去,身体被冰冷的风浸透,被冰冷的雨浇湿,连心里面也是凉凉的。
终于,那个熟悉的身影映入眼帘,是她——我的妈妈, 这一刻,我和她好似被什么东西阻隔着,朦胧着看不清,她好傻,打了个雨伞也不起什么作用,雨伞斜在一边,手里还抱着一个雨披。
她焦急的眼神终于在人群中发现了我,我听见她在叫我,可我没有应,也不想应,心中有一种莫名的感觉,是埋怨,委屈,还是高兴?我的眼泪再也止不住,她是来给我送雨披的,但是,我都淋成了这样,雨披还有什么作用呢?
随着嗒嗒的脚步声,她终于来到我跟前,为我披上雨披的同时一个劲地问我冷不冷,她呼出的温热气息拂过我的面颊,我感觉她瑟瑟的肩仿佛也在发着抖。我抬起了头,看着她,摇摇头,又点点头。她竟然也像一只落汤鸡。我泪如泉涌,我感谢这雨,没让她发现我的眼泪,泪水和雨水混合在一起,交织融合,凉凉的。
原来妈妈来得很早,她知道我没带雨披就去车棚等我,等不到,就去教学楼找我,而这时我正巧又离开了教学楼来到了车棚,我们就这样错过了。她一直在找我,直到现在才找到,她顾不上打伞,心里只想着我千万别被淋着,干万别被打湿。
她为我打着伞朝校门口走着,往日短短的路,今日却像是变得很长很长,一路上听着她不断地道歉,好似做错了什么大事。她本就不高的个子蜷缩成一团,更显矮小了。零乱的头发淋湿后紧紧贴在头皮上,兀自有水珠在发际间滚动。一低头,发现她的半截裤管早已湿透了,泥沙粘在上面,依稀有滴滴脏水顺着裤角流下……
那一刻,因为一份浓得化不开的母爱,我的世界在这漫天雨幕中春暖花开——
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GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
范文点评
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
怎样的作文素材才是好素材呢?我想学习了上述内容,我们应该有一个清晰的认识:新颖鲜活,避开陈腔滥调;小切口着眼,以小见大;真实可感,贴合生活;内涵深刻,立意高远。
本课总结
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
围炉作文
专注中考作文,点拨方法,点燃思维,点亮情怀。
结束
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
GENERAL TEMPLATE OF MINIMALIST TEACHING
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