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标黑加粗斜体（环境描写或好词好句）可积累文本，紫色为情绪点,绿色衔接点！！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单下划线（状从）；非谓语形式都会标注；其他重点，红色字体为重要单词B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释)! () 河南省九师联盟2026届高三上学期12月联考英语 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Sitting on a chair in a beautiful garden(现在分词短语做伴随动作), an old man seemed sad about the sorrows he'd received in life. His son and daughter-in-law were too busy with work to take good care of him, and he remained dissatisfied with the situation, The joints of his legs had become stiff(伏笔). His health was poor and he was always in a bad mood. All these prevented him from enjoying anything(交代背景信息，给出伏笔). At that time, a 6-year-old boy appeared. Hearing the old man coughing(现在分词短语做伴随动作), the child came to him. Extending his hand towards the old man(现在分词短语做伴随动作), the boy said with joy, “Look! Look! What I have found!” Looking into the boy's hand(现在分词短语做伴随动作), the old man saw a withered rose flower, half of the petals having fallen off(独立主格). Seeing such a withered flower(现在分词短语做伴随动作), the old man showed impatience and wanted the boy to leave. So, without answering anything, he turned his face to the other side so that the boy would go away after seeing his impatience. However instead of leaving, the boy went closer and brought the withered flower to his nose, “Oh! It smells so good!” Then the boy said to the old man, “Do you want such a nice flower? It smells so nice! If you want this flower, I'll give it to you!" Now the old man got really annoyed. Thinking that if he took the flower(现在分词短语做伴随动作), the boy would go away later, the old man put on a forced smile, saying(现在分词短语做伴随动作), “OK, son! If it's such a beautiful flower, then give it to me!” Saying this(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he started to take the flower. The child happily extended his hand, but he couldn't recognize where the old man's extended hand was. The flower fell on the ground instead of falling into the old man's hand. The boy was blind in both eyes(重要转折点). Picking up the flower(现在分词短语做伴随动作), the old man asked, “Son! Do you come here every day? Have you ever seen the flower?’ 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: The boy's empty eyes stared ahead as he smiled. Paragraph 2: Tears started flowing from the old man's eyes and he was lost in thought. 河南省九师联盟2026届高三上学期12月联考英语 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Sitting on a chair in a beautiful garden, an old man seemed sad about the sorrows he'd received in life. His son and daughter-in-law were too busy with work to take good care of him, and he remained dissatisfied with the situation, The joints of his legs had become stiff. His health was poor and he was always in a bad mood, All these prevented him from enjoying anything. At that time, a 6-year-old boy appeared, Hearing the old man coughing, the child came to him. Extending his hand towards the old man, the boy said with joy, “Look! Look! What I have found!” Looking into the boy's hand, the old man saw a withered(枯菱的) rose flower, half of the petals(花瓣) having fallen off.Seeing such a withered flower, the old man showed impatience and wanted the boy to leave, So, without answering anything, he turned his face to the other side so that the boy would go away after seeing his impatience, However instead of leaving, the boy went closer and brought the withered flower to his nose. “Oh! It smells so good!"Then the boy said to the old man, “Do you want such a nice flower? It smells so nice! If you want this flower, I'll give it to you!" Now the old man got really annoyed, Thinking that if he took the flower, the boy would go away later, the old man put on a forced smile, saying, “OK, son! If it's such a beautiful flower, then give it to me!” Saying this, he started to take the flower.The child happily extended his hand, but he couldn't recognize where the old man's extended hand was. The flower fell on the ground instead of falling into the old man's hand, The boy was blind in both eyes. Picking up the flower, the old man asked, “Son! Do you come here every day? Have you ever seen the flower?’ 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: The boy's empty eyes stared ahead as he smiled. Paragraph 2: Tears started flowing from the old man's eyes and he was lost in thought. 一、文章类型思路 ① 类型判定： 本篇属于 “治愈系人生感悟类 / 代际温情类 / 心灵救赎类” 读后续写。 核心主题： 老人因孤独、疾病、心态消极 → 盲童用“看不见却能感知美”的方式 → 帮助老人重新理解生活、幸福与感恩。 ② 续写构思 构思步骤 任务要求 如何在本篇中落地 承接情绪 老人：不耐烦 → 转折点 在P1让老人逐渐被孩子的乐观震撼 补足信息 围绕“盲童为何如此乐观” 强调孩子对生活的感知、对花香的珍惜 情感升华 老人重新理解生活 P2老人的反思、悔悟、获得治愈 呼应原文线索 花、盲童、花香、孤独 让花作为“象征”：看不见，却能感知美 正向价值输出 积极、励志、温暖 反思亲情、生活态度 二、故事山 故事山要素 原文内容对应 续写任务 开端 老人身体不好、心态差、孤独 为“改变”做铺垫 上升冲突 对枯花不耐烦→却遇到盲童 续写中承接这一冲突 高潮 老人得知孩子失明 P1 需要处理“情感震动” 下降行动 老人被触动、反思 P2 写老人泪流、觉醒 结局 老人心态改善、获得治愈 与“人生感悟”类主题呼应 三、原文伏笔等细节 1. 伏笔 Foreshadowing 伏笔内容 作用 花是“枯萎的” 暗示老人只看到消极，不懂欣赏生活 孩子闻花“香” 暗示孩子看不见，但能感觉美 老人转头不想理孩子 情绪很闭塞，为后面的变化做铺垫 2. 冲突 Conflict 冲突类型 表现 外部冲突 老人 vs. 孩子 → 态度不耐烦 内部冲突 老人对生活不满 vs. 孩子的热情与纯真 情感冲突 老人得知孩子失明 → 震撼、愧疚、反思 3. 隐含线索 隐含线索 如何在续写使用 花香象征“感受生活的能力” P1让老人重新闻花，象征觉醒 盲童的乐观 P1老人的震惊 → P2反思 老人的孤独 最后通过“孩子的出现”得到温暖 四、原文衔接点 1. 情绪（心情） “the old man seemed sad” “he remained dissatisfied” “he was always in a bad mood” “the old man showed impatience” “got really annoyed” → 续写必须让这些情绪 逐步转变 → 感动、反思、温暖。 2. 动作描写原文句 “Sitting on a chair…” “the child came to him” “Extending his hand…” “he turned his face to the other side” “the old man started to take the flower” 3. 关键转折句 “The boy was blind in both eyes.”（剧情核心转折点） “Picking up the flower, the old man asked…” 五、文章分析表 分析角度 内容解析 原文对应句（精确引用） 人物刻画 老人孤独悲观；男孩天真乐观、盲却感知力强 “old man seemed sad”“the boy was blind in both eyes” 情感层次 老人烦躁→震撼→愧疚→感动 “showed impatience”“got really annoyed” 关键情节点 男孩出现；花落地；盲童身份揭示 “the boy was blind in both eyes” 语言特色 对比鲜明：withering vs. joy；香味象征性强 “with joy”“withered flower”“It smells so good” 关键词分析 withered, smell, blind, impatient 原文多次强调 smell/flower→象征感知生活 心理描写 老人烦躁、不满；盲童天真、满足 “the old man got really annoyed” 动作描写 伸手、闻花、捡花、转头 “Extending his hand”“brought the flower to his nose” 环境描写 美丽花园 vs. 老人心情低落 “in a beautiful garden…seemed sad” 隐含主题 感知幸福不由视力决定；态度决定风景 孩子“闻到香味”虽看不见 情感转折 得知孩子失明 → 老人被震动 “he couldn’t recognize…The boy was blind” 空间转换 花落地→老人弯腰捡花；距离拉近象征心靠近 “Picking up the flower” 时间过渡 “At that time”“then”“Now”→可在续写中用 suddenly / moments later 原文已有多次顺承连接词 六、续写提示 段落1开头：The boy's empty eyes stared ahead as he smiled. 续写重点： 老人震撼、愧疚、重新看花 盲童表达“虽然看不见，但我能闻到美” 必写元素：对比：孩子看不见 → 却能感知美 老人被柔软、被触动 段落2开头：Tears started flowing from the old man's eyes… 续写重点：老人反思生活与自己的不满 老人理解“幸福是感知而不是外物” 形成升华性的结尾 （如：老人想起儿子其实也在努力工作，他应该理解与感恩） 七、 动作、心理、环境描写 A. 动作描写（Action Verbs） He reached out his trembling hand toward the boy. 他伸出颤抖的手朝向男孩。 The old man slowly bent down to pick up the fallen flower. 老人慢慢弯腰捡起掉落的花朵。 The boy tilted his head, trying to sense the direction of the voice. 男孩侧着头，努力辨认声音的方向。 A warm breeze brushed past them, lifting the petals slightly. 一阵暖风拂过他们，轻轻扬起花瓣。 He tightened his grip on the flower as if afraid it might slip again. 他紧握着花，仿佛怕它再次滑落。 The old man turned his stiff neck and looked at the child carefully. 老人转动僵硬的脖子，认真地看向男孩。 The boy raised the flower toward the air, smelling it again. 男孩举起花，再次闻了闻它。 The old man wiped the corner of his eyes with shaking fingers. 老人用颤抖的手指擦了擦眼角。 He placed the withered rose gently on his lap. 他轻轻把枯萎的玫瑰放在膝上。 The boy stepped closer until his shoulder brushed against the old man’s arm. 男孩又靠近了一些，直到他的肩膀轻触老人的手臂。 B. 心理描写 A strange warmth slowly rose in the old man's heart. 一种奇妙的温暖在老人心中缓缓升起。 He felt a sudden sting of guilt for being impatient. 他因自己的不耐烦突感刺痛般的愧疚。 The boy’s innocence softened something long hardened inside him. 男孩的天真融化了他心中早已僵硬的某部分。 A sense of shame washed over him as he realized the boy was blind. 当他意识到男孩失明时，一阵羞愧涌上心头。 He was struck by how much beauty the boy could feel without seeing. 他震撼于男孩在看不见的情况下依然能感受如此多美好。 The old man felt his bitterness melting into quiet reflection. 老人的苦涩慢慢融化成平静的反思。 He suddenly longed to share something, anything, with the child. 他突然渴望与孩子分享一些东西，哪怕一点点。 A wave of tenderness wrapped around his once cold heart. 一股柔情包裹着他曾经冰冷的心。 He realized how unfairly he had judged his own life. 他意识到自己对生活的判断何其不公。 The boy’s words echoed in his mind, awakening a forgotten gratitude. 男孩的话在他脑海回荡，唤醒了被遗忘的感恩。 C. 环境描写 The garden was filled with fading sunlight that painted everything gold. 花园被渐渐消逝的阳光染成金色。 A gentle wind carried the faint scent of roses through the air. 微风带着淡淡的玫瑰香在空气中飘荡。 Dry leaves rustled softly under the child’s light footsteps. 干叶在孩子轻快的步伐下轻轻沙响。 Even in the quiet garden, the old man felt the weight of loneliness. 即使在宁静的花园里，老人仍感到孤独的沉重。 The withered rose lay on the ground like a tiny piece of forgotten beauty. 枯萎的玫瑰躺在地上，如同被遗忘的小小美好。 Warm sunlight rested gently on the boy’s blind eyes. 温暖的阳光轻轻落在男孩失明的眼睛上。 Birdsong floated in the distance, adding a soft background to the moment. 远处的鸟鸣声音飘来，为此刻添加了轻柔的背景。 The air felt still, as if waiting for the old man’s heart to open. 空气仿佛凝固，像在等待老人敞开心扉。 The garden path stretched quietly behind them, covered in fallen petals. 他们身后的花园小径静静延展，铺满落花。 Light shadows of leaves danced across the boy’s small face. 树叶的轻影在男孩的脸上跳动。 高级替换词 1. 表“看见/注意到”（适合老人重新注意孩子） notice → observe, perceive, take in, glimpse, catch sight of 例：He perceived something pure in the boy’s smile. 译：他从男孩的微笑中察觉到一种纯净。 2. 表情绪变化（老人由烦躁→感动） sad → downcast, distressed, disheartened, low-spirited, sorrowful moved → touched, stirred, softened, overwhelmed, affected 3. 表态度/心态 impatient → restless, irritated, annoyed, short-tempered, dismissive grateful → thankful, appreciative, humbled, relieved, warmed 4. 表“美/香气/感知”（适合盲童台词） smell good → fragrant, sweet-scented, aromatic, perfumed, delightful beautiful → graceful, charming, lovely, appealing, heartwarming 5. 表“孤独/困境” lonely → isolated, abandoned, deserted, neglected, withdrawn poor health → frail, weakened, delicate, unwell, feeble 4. 地道搭配等 A. 高级固定搭配 1. be struck by… 被……深深震撼 例：He was struck by the boy’s ability to feel beauty without sight. 2. melt into… 逐渐融化成某种情绪 例：His bitterness slowly melted into reflection. 3. wash over sb. （情绪）突然涌上心头 例：A sense of shame washed over him. 4. awaken a sense of… 唤醒…… 例：The boy awakened a sense of gratitude in him. 5. be wrapped in… 被……包围（情绪、氛围） 例：He felt wrapped in unexpected tenderness. B. 重点短语 1. withered词性：adj.词义：枯萎的 近义词：dried, faded, shriveled 反义词：fresh, blooming 例句1：He stared at the withered rose in silence. 例句2：Even a withered flower can carry a lovely scent. 2. tremble词性：v.词义：颤抖 近义词：shake, quiver, shiver 反义词：steady 例句1：His hands trembled as he reached for the flower. 例句2：The old man trembled slightly, overwhelmed by emotion. 3. scent词性：n.词义：香气 近义词：fragrance, aroma, perfume 反义词：odor, stink 例句1：The scent of roses drifted through the air. 例句2：He closed his eyes, feeling the scent rather than seeing the flower. 4. fragile词性：adj.词义：脆弱的 近义词：delicate, vulnerable, frail 反义词：strong, resilient 例句1：The boy’s smile looked fragile yet hopeful. 例句2：The old man’s spirit felt fragile, ready to break or change. 5. extend one’s hand词性：v. phr.词义：伸出手 近义词：reach out, stretch out 反义词：withdraw one’s hand 例句1：The boy extended his hand with the flower. 例句2：The old man slowly extended his hand, this time with sincerity. 8、 Possible Versions(4) Version 1 Paragraph The boy's empty eyes stared ahead as he smiled. “Yes, Grandpa! I come here every day…” Hearing the boy’s words, the old man bent slowly and picked up the withered rose, brushing the dust from its fragile petals(现在分词短语做伴随动作). He stared at it for a long moment, unable to understand(adj短语做补语) why a child who had never seen anything would cherish a dying flower. Yet the boy stood there quietly, his small hands reaching out with surprising certainty(独立主格), as if guided by something beyond sight. He explained, in a soft yet steady voice, that he always came to this garden because he felt the world here—the warmth of sunlight on leaves, the softness of petals, the gentle sway of branches in the wind. His persistence moved the old man, who looked at the boy’s peaceful smile and felt his own heart loosen, like a door that had long been shut but was now pushed open just a little. Paragraph 2 Tears started flowing from the old man's eyes and he was lost in thought. Holding the rose(现在分词短语做伴随动作) with trembling fingers, he finally understood the meaning behind the child’s words. Even sitting in such a beautiful garden(现在分词短语做伴随动作), surrounded by colors(过去分词短语做伴随动作) that others envied, he had allowed loneliness and bitterness to cloud his vision. The boy, walking away with light steps(现在分词短语做后置定语), had never seen a flower, yet he enjoyed it more deeply than anyone else. This contrast struck the old man like a gentle but undeniable truth. Feeling the cool breeze brush against his cheeks(现在分词短语伴随动作), he took a long breath, as if tasting the world anew. After thinking for a while, the old man started toward home with a brightened face, mentally preparing to rediscover gratitude(现在分词短语做伴随动作), to appreciate simple moments, and to embrace life with the fresh eyes of a child who saw beauty not with sight but with the heart. Version 2 Paragraph 1 The boy's empty eyes stared ahead as he smile. Moved by the sincerity in the boy’s tone(过去分词做原因状语), the old man reached down and picked up the withered rose, its dried petals rustling faintly between his fingers(独立主格刻画细节). He wondered how something so lifeless could still bring joy to a child who had never seen its color. The boy, unaware of the old man’s puzzled expression(adj短语做补语), continued describing how he visited the garden every day, guided only by the scent of flowers(过去分词做方式状语). He lifted his face toward the sun, letting the warmth spread across his cheeks(现在分词短语做伴随动作), and insisted that beauty could be felt even when it couldn’t be seen. His quiet persistence, paired with his unwavering smile(过去分词做方式状语), struck the old man deeply(无灵主语句), making him reflect on(现在分词短语做伴随动作) how long it had been since he himself felt such pure contentment. Paragraph 2 Tears started flowing from the old man's eyes and he was lost in thought. The boy’s soft footsteps faded(无灵主语句), but his words echoed in the old man’s heart. Sitting in a garden(现在分词短语做伴随动作)filled with life(过去分词做后置定语), he realized he had been blind in a different way—blind to gratitude, blind to simple joys, blind to the warmth that still surrounded him. The child who had never seen the world enjoyed it more profoundly than he did. A gentle breeze stirred the rose in his hand(无灵主语句环境描写), sending a faint, lingering scent into the air(现在分词短语做结果状语), awakening feelings(现在分词短语做伴随动作) he thought had long disappeared. For the first time in years(衔接原文), he smiled from the heart. Rising slowly(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he headed home, mentally preparing to welcome each new day with openness(现在分词短语做伴随动作), to see beauty where he had overlooked it, and to live with a renewed sense of appreciation. Version 3 Paragraph 1 The boy's empty eyes stared ahead as he smile. The old man knelt with effort and lifted the faded rose, surprised by(adj做主语补语) how carefully the boy had been holding it. He examined its curled petals and brittle stem, unable to imagine(adj短语做主语补语) how a child who had never seen anything could treasure such a fragile object. Yet the boy’s expression glowed with a calm confidence that made his words convincing. He explained that he visited the garden every day because he could feel the beauty others overlooked—the cool grass beneath his feet, the shifting patterns of wind, the scent drifting from every flower.(现在分词短语做后置定语) Tilting his head slightly(现在分词短语做伴随动作) as if listening to nature itself, he insisted that the flower was beautiful, not because of how it looked, but because of how it made him feel. The old man felt something stir inside him, a forgotten tenderness he hadn’t sensed in years. Paragraph 2 Tears started flowing from the old man's eyes and he was lost in thought. For a long moment he remained still, the rose resting lightly in his palm(独立主格), while the boy’s footsteps faded into the distance. He realized, with a mixture of shame and awakening, that he had spent years surrounded by beauty(过去分词短语做方式状语)yet had rarely acknowledged it. Even sitting in this lovely garden(现在分词短语做伴随动作), bathed in soft sunlight(过去分词短语做主语补语), he had let sadness blind him more thoroughly than the boy’s eyes ever could. The child enjoyed the world through touch, scent and memory—treasures the old man had never bothered to value. After thinking carefully, he rose, shoulders lighter than before(独立主格刻画人物). He walked home slowly, mentally preparing to open his heart(现在分词短语做伴随动作), to greet life with gratitude, and to begin seeing the world not only with his eyes but with his long-silent soul. 常用高级短语 / 固定搭配 extend one’s hand / reach out brushed against / touch gently wash over sb. / sweep through sb. pause around / seem to pause linger in mind / leave a lasting impression 动作亮点词 reach out, lean forward, guide, pick up, trace, hold, inhale, bend 情绪亮点词 warmth, tenderness, gratitude, guilt, humility, calm, delight, hope, amazement 词汇升级 / 替换 see → perceive, observe smile → beam, grin joy → delight, contentment beautiful → charming, lovely, heartwarming fragile → delicate, tender 例句 He perceived the beauty that others often ignored. A sense of humility washed over him as he realized his mistakes. She held the flower carefully, afraid it might break. The garden seemed to pause as the sun set behind the trees. 官方：One possible version: The boy's empty eyes stared ahead as he smiled. “Yes, Grandpa!I come here every day, I've never seen the flower, but I know it's beautiful because I can feel it." the boy said softly. Looking at the flower(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he continued, "The petals are soft like my grandma's scarf, and the beautiful fragrance reminds me of her hugs, Grandpa! If you like it, the beautiful flower can be yours from today!” After saying this, he felt his way and went away. Tears started flowing from the old man's eyes and he was lost in thought. How sad he was, even though he was able to see, know and enjoy the world. Even sitting in such a beautiful garden(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he couldn't enjoy even a fraction of the beauty of nature, while a child who had never seen a flower could fully enjoy the beauty of the withered flower. After thinking for a while, the old man started towards home with a happy face, mentally preparing(现在分词短语做主语补语) to see the world from a new perspective and enjoy it! 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $