英语新教材人教版八年级下册Unit 5 Nature's Temper 单元写作专练

Unit 5 Nature's Temper 【参考范文一】 A Heavy Rainstorm I Experienced Last summer, a heavy rainstorm hit my city. I will never forget that day. That afternoon, while I was doing my homework, the sky suddenly turned dark. Loud thunder came from far away. When I looked out of the window, I saw trees bending in the strong wind. Soon, heavy rain began to pour down. The rain was so heavy that I couldn't see the buildings across the street. My mother quickly closed all the windows. We sat together and waited for the storm to stop. I felt scared but safe with my family. After two hours, the rain finally stopped. The streets were full of water and leaves. This storm taught me that nature is powerful and we should always respect it. 【好句积累与解析】 1. While I was doing my homework, the sky suddenly turned dark. 解析： while + 过去进行时设置背景，suddenly + 一般过去时表示突发动作。 仿写： While I was walking home, it suddenly began to rain. 2. The rain was so heavy that I couldn't see the buildings across the street. 解析： so... that... 结构，强调雨大到什么程度。 仿写： The wind was so strong that I could hardly stand. 3. I felt scared but safe with my family. 解析： 用but连接两种相反的感受，真实细腻。 仿写： I felt nervous but excited before the exam. 【参考范文二】 When the Earthquake Came I still remember the day when the earthquake came. It was a quiet evening. While I was watching TV with my little brother, the sofa began to shake. At first, I thought it was a truck passing by. But then the pictures on the wall fell down. "Earthquake!" Mom shouted. When she ran into the room, she grabbed our hands and pulled us under the strong table. We held each other tightly and waited. I could hear things falling and breaking. My heart was beating fast. After about thirty seconds, the shaking stopped. We quickly ran out of the building. That night, we slept in a tent outside. I learned that staying calm and helping each other is very important in danger. 【好句积累与解析】 1. While I was watching TV with my little brother, the sofa began to shake. 解析： while引导背景动作，began to shake引出突发情况。 仿写： While I was reading a book, the lights suddenly went out. 2. When she ran into the room, she grabbed our hands and pulled us under the strong table. 解析： when引导时间状语，连续动作描写妈妈的果断反应。 仿写： When he heard the news, he jumped up and ran outside. 3. I learned that staying calm and helping each other is very important in danger. 解析： 动名词短语staying calm and helping each other作主语。 仿写： I learned that keeping together and never giving up is the key to success. 【参考范文三】 A Snowstorm That Stopped Our City Last winter, a heavy snowstorm hit our city. It was the biggest snow in fifty years. That morning, while I was getting ready for school, I looked out and saw everything white. The snow was falling so fast that I couldn't see the road. Soon, my dad got a call: "All schools are closed today!" I was happy at first. But then the power went out. The house became cold and dark. We lit candles and sat together, telling stories. Outside, the wind was howling like a wild animal. We stayed inside all day. The next morning, the snow stopped. Neighbors came out to help clear the streets. This snowstorm taught me that family and community are important when things get hard. 【好句积累与解析】 1. The snow was falling so fast that I couldn't see the road. 解析： so... that... 结构，强调雪下得大。 仿写： The rain was falling so hard that I couldn't hear anything. 2. Outside, the wind was howling like a wild animal. 解析： 比喻手法，把风声比作野兽嚎叫，生动形象。 仿写： The thunder was roaring like a angry lion. 3. This snowstorm taught me that family and community are important when things get hard. 解析： 宾语从句点明感悟，when things get hard指困难时期。 仿写： This experience taught me that friends are like sunshine on cold days. 【参考范文四】 Learning from a Flood Two years ago, a flood hit my town. I learned a lot from that terrible experience. It happened in July. That afternoon, while I was playing at home, it started raining heavily. It rained for hours without stopping. When I looked outside, water was everywhere. It covered the streets and entered people's houses. My family moved all our things to higher places. We put sandbags at the door, but water still came in. We had to stay upstairs. I felt worried and scared. The flood went away after two days. Many people lost their homes. I felt so sad for them. This experience taught me to be thankful for what I have and to help others in need. Now I know that we should protect our environment to stop such disasters. 【好句积累与解析】 1. When I looked outside, water was everywhere. 解析： was everywhere夸张手法，强调洪水泛滥的程度。 仿写： When I opened the door, snow was everywhere. 2. We put sandbags at the door, but water still came in. 解析： but表示转折，体现洪水的凶猛和人们的无奈。 仿写： We tried our best, but we still failed. 3. This experience taught me to be thankful for what I have and to help others in need. 解析： 两个不定式并列，表达从灾难中学到的两个道理。 仿写： This trip taught me to be brave in difficulties and to enjoy every moment. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 5 Nature's Temper 【单元话题】 2025年5月12日是第17个全国防灾减灾日，结合你所经历的一次自然灾害，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈你印象深刻的事以及你的感受。 提示： ①以时间为线索，描述从清晨到晚上的具体经历； ②运用“while+过去进行时”，“when+一般过去时”等结构，衔接事件发展； ③融入环境描写和个人感受。 要求： 以第一人称叙事，结合过去进行时，生动展现一天中因天气或灾害引发的系列事件。短文须包括所有提示要点，可适当发挥；意思连贯，字迹工整。词数80-100词。 参考词汇：unexpectedly 出乎意料地；struggle 挣扎；instantly 立即；rising 上涨的；flood 洪水；importance 重要性；prepared 有准备的；shake 摇晃；fear 恐惧 __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________. 【审题指导】 动笔之前，我们先来理清这篇作文的写作要点： 1. 人称： 本文是讲述自己亲身经历的一次自然灾害，因此必须用第一人称“I”（我）来叙述。用“I”讲述自己的所见、所闻、所感，让读者有身临其境之感。 2. 时态： 描述事件发生的背景和经过——用一般过去时和过去进行时。 过去进行时（was/were doing）用于描述背景动作或正在发生的事情。 一般过去时（did）用于描述突然发生的事件或先后动作。 结尾谈感悟——可用一般现在时。 3. 时间线索： 按照时间顺序叙述，如：that morning → while I was... → when I... → then → finally 4. 写作小技巧： 运用环境描写烘托氛围（如dark clouds, heavy rain, loud thunder） 运用感官描写增强画面感（如I heard..., I saw..., I felt...） 运用心理描写表达感受（如I was so scared, My heart pounded） 正确运用while和when连接动作 【谋篇布局】理清文章要素，构建文章结构。 Beginning Time flies, but I still clearly remember ______. It was a day when ______. Body That morning, while I ______, the ground suddenly ______. Everything around me ______. I heard people ______. When I ______, I saw ______. My heart ______. We ______ and waited for ______. Ending This experience taught me ______. Now I understand that ______. 【遣词造句】 1. 时光飞逝，但我依然清晰记得那个可怕的下午。 Time flies, but I still clearly remember ______. 2. 那天早上，当我正在睡觉时，外面突然下起了暴雨。 That morning, while I ______, it suddenly ______ outside. 3. 当我跑到外面时，我看到水已经淹没了街道。 When I ______, I saw that water ______ the streets. 4. 这次经历教会了我自然的力量和做好准备的重要性。 This experience taught me ______. 【参考答案】： 1. that terrible afternoon 2. was sleeping; began to rain heavily 3. ran outside; had flooded 4. the power of nature and the importance of being prepared 【参考范文】 A Day I Will Never Forget Time flies, but I still clearly remember that terrible afternoon. It was a day when a heavy rainstorm hit my hometown. That morning, while I was sleeping, it suddenly began to rain heavily outside. The wind was so strong that trees shook back and forth. When I woke up, I saw water rising quickly in the street. My mother shouted, "We must move to higher ground!" We grabbed some important things and ran upstairs. While we were waiting on the second floor, the water kept rising. I was so scared that I held my mother's hand tightly. We could hear people calling for help everywhere. This experience taught me the power of nature and the importance of being prepared. Now I understand that we should always stay calm and help each other in times of danger. 【范文赏析】 这篇范文按照时间线索叙述清晰，情感真挚，值得同学们学习： 1. 开头简洁： "Time flies, but I still clearly remember that terrible afternoon." 直接点题，引出难忘的经历。 2. 时间线索明确： That morning → While I was sleeping → When I woke up → While we were waiting 按照时间顺序推进，条理清晰。 3. 时态运用准确： 过去进行时：was sleeping, were waiting（背景动作） 一般过去时：began, shouted, grabbed, ran（突然发生的动作） 过去完成时：had risen（过去的过去） 4. 环境描写生动： "The wind was so strong that trees shook back and forth." "water rising quickly in the street" 用具体描写让读者感受到暴风雨的猛烈。 5. 心理描写真实： "I was so scared that I held my mother's hand tightly." 表达恐惧之情，真实感人。 6. 细节描写丰富： "We grabbed some important things and ran upstairs." "We could hear people calling for help everywhere." 通过具体动作和声音，让故事更加生动。 7. 结尾升华主题： "the power of nature and the importance of being prepared" "stay calm and help each other in times of danger" 从个人经历上升到人生感悟，点明主题。 8. 词汇亮点： hit袭击 shake back and forth来回摇晃 rise quickly快速上涨 move to higher ground转移到高地 grab抓起 call for help呼救 in times of danger在危险时刻 【同主题练习题目】 练习一 题目： A Heavy Rainstorm I Experienced 提示： 暴雨是什么时候发生的？当时你正在做什么？ 你看到了什么？听到了什么？你当时的感受是什么？ 要求： 词数80-100词，注意运用过去进行时和一般过去时。 练习二 题目： When the Earthquake Came 提示：地震发生时你在哪里？在做什么？ 你看到了什么？听到了什么？你和家人是怎么做的？这次经历让你明白了什么？ 要求： 词数80-100词，注意运用while和when连接动作。 练习三 题目： A Snowstorm That Stopped Our City 提示：暴风雪是什么时候发生的？它给城市带来了什么影响？你和家人是怎么度过的？这次经历给你什么感受？ 要求： 词数80-100词，注意描写环境和感受。 练习四 题目： Learning from a Flood 提示：洪水发生时你在哪里？你看到了什么可怕的景象？你和家人做了什么？这次经历教会了你什么？ 要求： 词数80-100词，注意结尾要写出感悟。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $