内容正文:
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I slowly eased my way into the parking space. My heart was rapidly beating as I did a quick scan of the parking lot. Looking through the crowd, I looked for a familiar face, but I didn't see her.
I was so nervous, I almost put my car in reverse to go back home. I took a deep breath and tried to control my anxiety. It’s been too long, and I’ve gone this far, I convinced myself. There was no turning back.
As I walked toward the restaurant, I remembered the good times we had. I tried not to focus on the argument that kept us apart for almost ten years. Teresa and I had been close friends. We shared interests, stayed up all night talking and laughing, and were always there for each other. That changed after our big disagreement.
There wasn’t a day I didn’t think of her. I often thought of reaching out. But I also thought, if she cared, why hadn’t she contacted me? We were both stubborn.
A month ago, it was her birthday. I found her on social media—still the same bright smile and curly hair. Photos showed she liked to travel and had grandchildren. I sent her a message, saying how much I missed her and asking if she’d like to meet.
When I didn’t hear back, I thought she didn’t feel the same. But then she replied! She said she missed me too. We arranged this lunch.
Now, after forty minutes and my third cup of coffee, I decided she wasn’t coming. She hadn’t called or texted. Maybe it really was too late to fix our friendship.
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As I was paying the bill, sad and a bit angry, I suddenly heard quick footsteps behind me.
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We hugged tightly, and for a moment, nothing else mattered.
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一、文本分析
1.角色:
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2.视角:
第__________________________人称视角
3.时空线:
“我”与特蕾莎曾是亲密好友,因一次争吵疏远近十年,两人都很固执,从未主动联系→ 一个月前,特蕾莎生日,“我”在社交媒体找到她,发送思念的消息并邀约见面→ “我”收到回复,两人约定共进午餐→ “我”提前到达餐厅,等待四十分钟、喝了三杯咖啡后,仍未见到特蕾莎,觉得修复友谊已太晚,满心失落与愤怒→ (续写)“我”结账时,突然听到身后有急促的脚步声→ (续写)_____________________
4.文章线索
(1)“修复友谊的邀约与见面”是核心线索,这一线索对情节发展有何作用?如何推动人物情感变化及主题凸显?
(2)“‘我’的情感变化”是关键情节,这一情节为何能强化“友谊与和解”的主题?如何塑造“我”的人物形象?
(3)“‘我’的紧张不安”“等待时的焦虑”“未等到人的失落愤怒”“回忆中的美好时光”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“两人和解”做了怎样的铺垫?
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“友谊破裂—思念牵挂—主动邀约—等待失落—意外重逢—和解相拥”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
5.情节线
友谊破裂:“我”与特蕾莎曾是亲密好友,有很多共同回忆,一起分享兴趣、彻夜畅谈、相互陪伴,却因一次激烈争吵,彼此固执,近十年没有联系,彻底疏远→ 思念邀约:“我”从未停止思念特蕾莎,却因固执不愿主动;一个月前特蕾莎生日,“我”在社交媒体找到她,看到她的近况,发送消息表达思念,邀约见面→ 约定见面:“我”起初未收到回复,以为特蕾莎不在意,后来收到她的回复,她也表达了思念,两人约定共进午餐→ 等待失落:“我”紧张又期待地到达餐厅,等待了四十分钟,喝了三杯咖啡,始终没见到特蕾莎,也没有收到她的电话或短信,内心充满失落与愤怒,觉得修复友谊已太晚→ 意外重逢:(续写)“我”失望地结账,内心又难过又生气,这时突然听到身后有急促的脚步声→ (续写)______________________________________________________________
6.情感线
“我”:对过往友谊的怀念、对特蕾莎的思念→ 主动邀约前的犹豫、纠结→ 发送消息后未收到回复的失落→ 收到回复后的惊喜、期待→ 等待时的紧张、焦虑→ 未等到人的失落、愤怒、失望→ 重逢后的惊讶、动容→ 相拥和解后的释然、温暖→ ______________________________
特蕾莎:对过往友谊的怀念、对“我”的思念→ 收到消息后的触动→ 约定见面后的期待→ 迟到时的急切、愧疚→ ___________________________
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8.句式示例
宾语从句:
同位语:
状语从句:
比喻:
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:As I was paying the bill, sad and a bit angry, I suddenly heard quick footsteps behind me.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感转折” 提问:身后的脚步声是谁的?特蕾莎出现时的状态是什么?“我”看到她后的反应是什么?这一过程展现了两人怎样的情感?
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何为后文两人相拥和解、主题升华做铺垫?特蕾莎的出现有何核心作用?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “和解相拥、主题升华” 做铺垫:__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段提示句:We hugged tightly, and for a moment, nothing else mattered.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感回升” 提问:两人相拥时的心理活动是什么?特蕾莎如何解释自己迟到的原因?两人说了哪些话,化解了过往的隔阂?这些互动体现了两人怎样的品质?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:结局如何呼应“友谊与和解、思念与珍惜”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
主题:
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三、段落构思
第一段:As I was paying the bill, sad and a bit angry, I suddenly heard quick footsteps behind me.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写脚步声的特点,“我”的疑惑与回头的动作;②刻画特蕾莎出现时的神态、动作(急切、愧疚);③描写“我”看到特蕾莎后的惊讶反应,两人的简短对话(特蕾莎道歉);④为后文相拥和解做铺垫。
续写:
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第二段:We hugged tightly, and for a moment, nothing else mattered.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写两人相拥时的动作与心理活动;②刻画特蕾莎解释迟到的原因,表达愧疚与思念;③描写两人化解隔阂的对话,回忆过往、珍惜当下;④点明结局,凸显友谊的珍贵与主题。
续写:
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参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色:
“我”:重情重义、内心敏感,既固执又渴望友谊,对与特蕾莎的过往情谊充满怀念,敢于主动迈出修复友谊的第一步,情绪丰富(紧张、期待、失落、愤怒、动容、释然),最终学会珍惜与和解。
特蕾莎:与“我”一样重情重义、固执,内心也一直思念“我”,收到邀约后满心期待,因意外迟到而充满愧疚,珍惜两人的友谊,愿意主动解释、化解隔阂。
2.视角:
第一人称视角
3.时空线:
“我”与特蕾莎曾是亲密好友,因一次争吵疏远近十年,两人都很固执,从未主动联系→ 一个月前,特蕾莎生日,“我”在社交媒体找到她,发送思念的消息并邀约见面→ “我”收到回复,两人约定共进午餐→ “我”提前到达餐厅,等待四十分钟、喝了三杯咖啡后,仍未见到特蕾莎,觉得修复友谊已太晚,满心失落与愤怒→ (续写)“我”结账时,突然听到身后有急促的脚步声→ (续写)脚步声是特蕾莎的,她气喘吁吁地向“我”道歉,解释自己迟到的原因,“我”又惊又喜,所有的失落与愤怒瞬间消散,两人相拥在一起,化解了近十年的隔阂,重拾友谊。
4.文章线索
(1)“修复友谊的邀约与见面”是核心线索,串联起“友谊破裂—思念牵挂—主动邀约—等待失落—意外重逢—和解相拥”的完整情节链,是推动情节发展的关键。它触发了“我”的一系列情感变化(期待—失落—惊喜—释然),也推动了特蕾莎的出场与两人的和解,让“友谊珍贵、和解可贵”的主题得以凸显,让情节更具波澜,情感更细腻动人。
(2)“‘我’的情感变化”是关键情节,既展现了“我”对友谊的执着与渴望,也展现了修复友谊过程中的忐忑与不易,反衬出友谊的珍贵和和解的意义,让“友谊与和解”的主题具象化。这一情节塑造了“我”立体的人物形象——从固执、犹豫到勇敢主动,从失落愤怒到动容释然,展现了“我”内心的柔软与对情谊的珍视,让人物更真实、更具代入感,也让读者更能感受到友谊的力量。
(3)意义:“‘我’的紧张不安”体现了“我”对这次见面的重视和对修复友谊的渴望;“等待时的焦虑”烘托了“我”的期待与忐忑;“未等到人的失落愤怒”制造了情感冲突,让情节更有波澜,也反衬出后续重逢的惊喜;“回忆中的美好时光”交代了两人友谊的深厚,解释了“我”主动邀约、执着等待的原因,凸显了友谊的珍贵。铺垫:这些细节构建了“思念—期待—失落—惊喜—和解”的逻辑链,让“我”的情感变化更自然,也让两人的和解更具合理性,为后续的主题升华奠定了情感基础。
(4)情节推进逻辑:以“我”的情感变化为内在线索,以“修复友谊”为外在线索,遵循“两人友谊破裂、彼此固执疏远—‘我’思念特蕾莎,主动在社交媒体邀约—收到回复,约定见面—‘我’提前到达,等待中逐渐失落愤怒—‘我’结账时,特蕾莎意外出现—两人相拥和解,重拾友谊”的逻辑推进。主题脉络:凸显了“真挚的友谊不会被时间和争吵打败;思念与牵挂是修复友谊的动力;学会主动迈出一步、放下固执,才能收获和解的温暖;珍惜身边的情谊,不要让遗憾延续”的主题脉络。
5.情节线
友谊破裂:“我”与特蕾莎曾是亲密好友,有很多共同回忆,一起分享兴趣、彻夜畅谈、相互陪伴,却因一次激烈争吵,彼此固执,近十年没有联系,彻底疏远→ 思念邀约:“我”从未停止思念特蕾莎,却因固执不愿主动;一个月前特蕾莎生日,“我”在社交媒体找到她,看到她的近况,发送消息表达思念,邀约见面→ 约定见面:“我”起初未收到回复,以为特蕾莎不在意,后来收到她的回复,她也表达了思念,两人约定共进午餐→ 等待失落:“我”紧张又期待地到达餐厅,等待了四十分钟,喝了三杯咖啡,始终没见到特蕾莎,也没有收到她的电话或短信,内心充满失落与愤怒,觉得修复友谊已太晚→ 意外重逢:(续写)“我”失望地结账,内心又难过又生气,这时突然听到身后有急促的脚步声→ (续写)和解相拥:“我”回头一看,发现是特蕾莎,她气喘吁吁,满脸愧疚,连忙向“我”道歉,解释自己因孙子突发小状况耽误了时间,一路上拼命赶来。“我”看着熟悉的脸庞,所有的负面情绪瞬间消散,只剩下惊喜与动容,两人对视片刻,紧紧拥抱在一起。
6.情感线
“我”:对过往友谊的深切怀念、对特蕾莎的长久思念→ 主动邀约前的犹豫、纠结(担心被拒绝)→ 发送消息后未收到回复的失落、沮丧→ 收到回复后的惊喜、满心期待→ 等待时的紧张、焦虑(害怕再次错过)→ 未等到人的失落、愤怒、失望(觉得友谊无法修复)→ 重逢后的惊讶、动容(不敢相信)→ 相拥和解后的释然、温暖、幸福,学会珍惜当下的情谊→ 重拾友谊后的安心、喜悦,对未来的相处充满期待。
特蕾莎:对过往友谊的怀念、对“我”的深深思念→ 收到“我”消息后的触动、惊喜→ 约定见面后的期待、忐忑→ 因意外迟到时的急切、慌张、愧疚→ 见到“我”后的歉意、动容→ 相拥和解后的释然、温暖,珍惜失而复得的友谊。
7.文章大意概括
中文:“我”与特蕾莎曾是亲密无间的好友,却因一次激烈的争吵和两人的固执,疏远了近十年。这十年里,“我”从未停止思念她,却始终没有主动联系。一个月前,特蕾莎生日,“我”在社交媒体上找到她,发送了思念的消息并邀约见面,意外收到她的回复,两人约定共进午餐。“我”满怀期待地提前到达餐厅,可等待了四十分钟,喝了三杯咖啡,仍未见到特蕾莎,也没有收到她的任何消息,内心充满失落与愤怒,觉得修复友谊已为时过晚。就在“我”结账准备离开时,突然听到身后有急促的脚步声,特蕾莎匆匆赶来并解释了迟到的原因,两人紧紧相拥,化解了近十年的隔阂,重拾了珍贵的友谊。
英文:I and Teresa used to be close friends, but we drifted apart for nearly ten years because of a big argument and our stubbornness. During these ten years, I never stopped thinking about her, but I never took the initiative to contact her. A month ago, on her birthday, I found her on social media, sent her a message expressing my miss and asked if she would like to meet. Unexpectedly, I received her reply, and we arranged this lunch. I arrived at the restaurant early, full of expectation, but after waiting for forty minutes and drinking three cups of coffee, I still didn’t see Teresa or get any message from her. I was filled with sadness and anger, thinking it was too late to fix our friendship. Just as I was paying the bill to leave, I suddenly heard quick footsteps behind me. Teresa hurried over and explained why she was late. We hugged tightly, resolving the estrangement of nearly ten years and regaining our precious friendship.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:I thought she didn’t feel the same. / I asked if she’d like to meet.
同位语:Teresa, my once closest friend, hurried over with a guilty look.
状语从句:When I didn’t hear back, I thought she didn’t feel the same. / As I walked toward the restaurant, I remembered the good times we had.
比喻:My heart was beating like a drum, full of nervousness and expectation.
9.主题归类
友谊与和解:真挚的友谊经得起时间的考验,不会被一次争吵或隔阂打败;放下固执,主动迈出一步,就能化解过往的矛盾,重拾珍贵的情谊;和解不是妥协,而是对过往情谊的珍惜,是对彼此的包容与理解。
思念与珍惜:长久的思念是内心深处对情谊的牵挂,不要让固执成为遗憾的借口;珍惜身边的人,珍惜每一段真挚的友谊,及时表达心意,才能避免错过与后悔。
勇气与成长:敢于主动表达思念、主动修复关系,是一种勇气;在这个过程中,学会放下、学会包容,也是一种成长,能让人收获更多温暖与幸福。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:As I was paying the bill, sad and a bit angry, I suddenly heard quick footsteps behind me.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感转折” 提问:身后的脚步声是谁的?特蕾莎出现时的状态是什么?“我”看到她后的反应是什么?这一过程展现了两人怎样的情感?
答案:身后的脚步声是特蕾莎的。特蕾莎出现时气喘吁吁、头发有些凌乱,脸上满是愧疚与急切,手里还攥着未来得及收起的手机。“我”看到她后,愣住了,脸上的失落与愤怒瞬间凝固,随即涌上满满的惊讶,眼神里充满了不敢置信。这一过程展现了特蕾莎的愧疚与急切(害怕“我”离开,害怕错过修复友谊的机会),也展现了“我”的惊讶与潜藏的期待(内心深处并未真正放弃这段友谊)。
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何为后文两人相拥和解、主题升华做铺垫?特蕾莎的出现有何核心作用?
答案:第一段描写特蕾莎的突然出现,打破了“我”失落离开的局面,制造了情节转折,也化解了前文的情感冲突(“我”的失落与愤怒);同时,特蕾莎的愧疚神态和急切模样,为后文她解释迟到原因、表达思念做了铺垫,让两人的和解更自然。特蕾莎的出现是情节的关键转折点,它让“修复友谊”的主线得以延续,让“我”的情感从低谷回升,为后文相拥和解、凸显主题提供了契机,让故事从“遗憾”走向“圆满”。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “和解相拥、主题升华” 做铺垫:
答案:第一段中,特蕾莎的出现与道歉,让“我”所有的失落与愤怒瞬间消散,只剩下惊讶与动容,为两人相拥的动作奠定了情感基础;特蕾莎急切的状态和愧疚的语气,暗示了她对这段友谊的重视,也引出了后文她解释迟到原因、表达思念的内容。同时,“我”看到特蕾莎后的反应(愣住、眼神软化),体现了“我”内心对友谊的渴望,让第二段两人相拥、化解隔阂的情节更具合理性,为展现“和解与珍惜”的核心内容、升华主题奠定了坚实的情感与情节基础。
第二段提示句:We hugged tightly, and for a moment, nothing else mattered.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感回升” 提问:两人相拥时的心理活动是什么?特蕾莎如何解释自己迟到的原因?两人说了哪些话,化解了过往的隔阂?这些互动体现了两人怎样的品质?
答案:两人相拥时,内心都充满了动容、释然与温暖,所有的争吵、隔阂、遗憾都在拥抱中消散,只剩下失而复得的珍惜。特蕾莎解释自己迟到是因为孙子突然发烧,她忙着照顾,一时慌乱忘了发消息,一路上拼命赶来,生怕“我”走掉。两人相拥时,特蕾莎不停地说“对不起”“我好想你”,“我”也哽咽着回应“我也是”,诉说着这十年的思念,坦言自己不该那么固执,没有早点主动联系。这些互动体现了两人重情重义、懂得珍惜、愿意包容的品质,也展现了她们内心的柔软与对这段友谊的执着。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:结局如何呼应“友谊与和解、思念与珍惜”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
答案:结局以两人相拥和解、诉说思念、重拾友谊收尾,呼应了“友谊与和解”的主题——时间没有冲淡情谊,争吵与固执最终被包容与理解打败;也呼应了“思念与珍惜”的主题——长久的思念促成了重逢,两人都懂得了珍惜失而复得的友谊,不再让固执留下遗憾。这一结局为故事画上了圆满温暖的句号,让情节形成了“破裂—思念—邀约—失落—重逢—和解”的闭环;同时,它将“个体的思念”升华为“友谊的力量”,让主题更深刻、更具感染力,传递了“珍惜情谊、主动和解”的正向价值观。
主题:
答案:真挚的友谊不会被时间和矛盾打败,长久的思念是修复友谊的动力;放下固执与骄傲,主动迈出和解的一步,才能化解隔阂、重拾珍贵的情谊;珍惜身边每一段真挚的关系,及时表达心意,不要让一时的倔强,成为一生的遗憾;包容与理解,是友谊长久的基石,也是人与人之间最温暖的联结。
三、段落构思
第一段:As I was paying the bill, sad and a bit angry, I suddenly heard quick footsteps behind me.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写脚步声的特点,“我”的疑惑与回头的动作;②刻画特蕾莎出现时的神态、动作(急切、愧疚);③描写“我”看到特蕾莎后的惊讶反应,两人的简短对话(特蕾莎道歉);④为后文相拥和解做铺垫。
续写:As I was paying the bill, sad and a bit angry, I suddenly heard quick footsteps behind me. They were hurried and heavy, as if the person was rushing to catch something. I frowned and turned around, and my eyes widened in surprise—it was Teresa! She was out of breath, her curly hair slightly messy, and her face was covered with sweat and guilt. Before I could say a word, she grabbed my hand tightly, her voice trembling: “I’m so sorry, I’m late. Please don’t leave.” Her eyes were full of anxiety, and I could see the sincerity in her look.
第二段:We hugged tightly, and for a moment, nothing else mattered.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写两人相拥时的动作与心理活动;②刻画特蕾莎解释迟到的原因,表达愧疚与思念;③描写两人化解隔阂的对话,回忆过往、珍惜当下;④点明结局,凸显友谊的珍贵与主题。
续写:We hugged tightly, and for a moment, nothing else mattered. All the sadness, anger and disappointment disappeared without a trace, leaving only warmth and excitement. Teresa sobbed softly in my arms, explaining that her grandson had a sudden fever this morning, and she was so busy taking care of him that she forgot to send me a message. She rushed over as soon as she could. I patted her back gently, telling her I understood and that I had missed her every day these years. We sat down again, chatting about the past and the present, and all the estrangement of ten years was gone. Our friendship, which had been broken for so long, was finally restored, and I knew we would cherish it more this time.
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