内容正文:
必修第三册重庆大学版
【诚信与关爱专题】
U2满分范文及模板
诚信专题
【E版满分范文】我的好朋友(诚信与关
爱)
写作提分攻略+范文深度解析·重庆大学版必修第三册
满分范文
Hello,everyone.My name is Li Ming.I have a good friend.Her name is Mary.
Mary is 13 years old.She is a kind and honest girl with long hair and a warm smile.She often wears a
white dress and looks very friendly.
Mary is a trustworthy person.Last month,she found a wallet on the playground.There was some money
and an ID card in it.She told the truth to the teacher and returned the wallet to the owner.The owner
thanked her a lot.Mary also always keeps her promises.Once she promised to help me with my English
homework,and she came to my home even though she was a bit sick that day.Besides being honest,
Mary is very caring.She often shows kindness to animals.After school,she usually feeds the stray cats
in our neighborhood.She is also helpful to her classmates.When Lucy hurt her leg last week,Mary took
care of her every day,helping her carry books and go to the classroom.
Mary is such a good friend.Being honest and caring makes her popular among us.We should learn from
her and try to be honest and care about others around us.I like her very much and hope we can be good
friends forever.
【满分范文逐段解析】
第一段(基础介绍):
开篇用Hello,everyone自然引入:
核心句型:My name is../I have a good friend.Her name is.,简洁清晰:
第二段(外貌描写):
用kind and honest点明核心品质;
外貌描写:long hair/warm smile/white dress生动形象;
第三段(品质事例):
必修第三册重庆大学版
【诚信与关爱专题】
U2满分范文及模板
诚信事例:found a wallet..told the truth..returned展示诚信;
守诺事例:keeps promises..helped with homework.even sick强化可信度:
关爱事例:feeds stray cats/helped injured classmate多角度展现关爱;
第四段(总结升华):
用Being honest and caring makes her popular总结品质;
呼吁行动:We should learn from her深化主题。
满分范文模板(我的好朋友)
Hello,everyone.My name is 1..I have a good friend.His/Her name is 2..
3.is 4.years old.He/She is 5..He/She has 6.and 7..He/She always wears 8.
He/She looks very 9..
10.is a 11.boy/girl.He/She likes 12..He/She is also very 13..When I 14.,he/she
always 15..We often 16.on weekends.
I like my friend very much.We are good friends forever.
【模板填写指南】
1.你的姓名(如:LiMing/Zhang Hua)
2.朋友的姓名(如:Tom/Liy)
3.填写朋友的姓名(与2一致)
4.朋友的年龄(如:twelve./thirteen)
5.性格形容词(如:kind/honest/friendly)
6.外貌特征1(如:long hair/big eyes)
7.外貌特征2(如:a warm smile/round face)
8.穿着特征(如:a white dress/blue jeans)
9.外貌评价(如:friendly./handsome)
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必修第三册重庆大学版
【诚信与关爱专题】U2满分范文及模板
10.填写朋友的姓名(与2一致)
11.品质形容词(如:trustworthy/caring)
l2.朋友的爱好(如:reading books/helping others)
l3.行为品质(如:helpful/responsible)
14.需要帮助的场景(如:need help/feel sad)
l5.帮助行为(如:helps me/comfortsme)
16.共同活动(如:study together/play sports)
填写示例:
1.Li Ming 2.Mary 3.Mary 4.thirteen 5.kind and honest
6.long hair 7.a warm smile 8.a white dress 9.friendly
10.Mary 11.trustworthy 12.helping others 13.caring
14.need help 15.helps me 16.do homework together
高分亮点总结
主题突出:紧扣”诚信与关爱”单元主题,通过具体事例展示品质
事例丰富:用钱包归还、带病守约、照顾同学三个事例多角度论证
描写生动:外貌描写(long hair/warm smile)与行为描写(feed cats/carry books)结合
情感升华:结尾呼吁学习品质,体现”诚信与关爱的教育意义
逻辑清晰:基础介绍→外貌描写→品质事例→总结升华四段式结构
写作小贴士·诚信与关爱主题
事例选择:至少包含1个诚信事例+1个关爱事例,形成主题呼应
细节描写:用具体动作(returned wallet/fed cats)替代抽象描述
品质词汇:多使用honest,trustworthy,caring,helpful等主题词汇
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【诚信与关爱专题】U2满分范文及模板
情感表达:结尾用We should learn.体现主题的教育意义
时态统一:描述品质用一般现在时,具体事例用一般过去时