第15讲 续写有方法——如何写-【红对勾讲与练·写作突破】2026年高考英语大一轮复习全新方案通用版（人教版）

第15讲 续写有 写是读的最终落脚点。优秀的文章一定要以阅读 所获得的文本信息为基础，把文中所读到的事实和情节 进行进一步创造性描述，让作者的思想、情感以及文章 主题进一步升华。 一写动作，活情节 写情绪，显性格 精雕细刻的 写心理，读内心 写作手法 写环境，造氛围 写对话，现场景 写什么？ 写人物，塑形象 如何写？ 一用比喻，更形象 情景交融的 用拟人，更生动 修辞手法 用夸张，造特效 用排比，展阵容 一、精雕细刻的写作手法 1.写动作，活情节（动作描写） 在续写中，利用恰当的动词进行符合特定情境的动 作描写，真实准确地描述动作过程，以“动”传神；同时， 适当利用契合人物性格特点的心理描写和对话描写，使 续写短文体现出画面感。 【典例】品读材料中的黑体部分，体会动作描写的 用法。 Finally John started his long walk.Having trekked for two hours.he came to the deep forest.Besides the rustling(沙沙声)of trees,the wood was in a deathly silence.He quickened up and held onto the bat tightly Abruptly,a terrible howl,which sounded like a wolf, broke the silence and frightened him.He jumped to his feet and ran as fast as his legs could carry him.He didn't stop running until he saw a flash of light at a distance,moving quickly towards him. 2.写情绪，显性格（情感描写） 情绪描写（高兴、悲伤、犹豫、惊恐、好奇、愤怒等） 是指对于人物在特定场景中的主观心理状态和变化的 描写。例如人在内心不安和焦急的时候可能会来回踱 步、眉头紧皱；人在愤怒的时候可能会满脸通红、拳头紧 握；人在悲痛的时候可能会两手抱头、沉默不语等。 【典例】“Thank you,Joy,”Mr Dow said as he gently took the pipe from the boy's hand.Joy was so surprised that he couldn't believe what Mr Dow did.He stared at the man,confused.He thought he should have been criticized severely because of what he did. 烟闪·讲与练·高三英语RJ -12 方法一如何写 Speechless and moved,he felt ashamed,not knowing how to appreciate the boss's generous deed. Joy felt Mr Dow's big hand on his shoulder.It seemed as if Mr Dow could read Joy's mind.Smiling to Joy,he patted Joy on the shoulder,which made Joy warm and removed his burden.Mr Dow explained,"I believed you would return the pipe to me and what you did deserved my trust.Therefore,I should thank you for your courage.” 点评：（文中黑体部分） ①本篇范文通过使用恰当的词汇surprised,stared at,speechless and moved,ashamed,appreciate等，刻画 了人物情绪的变化，描述了做错事的Joy对Mr Dow出 乎意料的举动的惊讶、不解和羞愧等，勾勒出栩栩如生 的场景。 ②通过criticized,smiling,warm,deserved等词汇 以及句子“It seemed as if Mr Dow could read Joy's mind.”,衬托出Mr Dow对Joy行为的信任。 3.写心理，读内心（心理描写） 心理描写有直接描写和间接描写之分。直接描写 主要是通过内心独白的方式来直接展现人物的想法，而 间接描写是结合环境描写、动作描写等方式侧面表现人 物的内心活动。在用英语进行人物活动刻画时，应避免 重复使用fee/hink/sense等词汇，以免给人以语言刻 板、僵化的印象。 ①(2021·新高考I卷)A warm current surged in her heart,and her eyes were moistened by the pain as if being pricked by a needle. 一股暖流在她的心里涌动，她的眼睛湿润了，感觉 像被针扎了一样疼痛。 ②(2021·新高考I卷)The aroma of food filled their mother's bedroom,which seemed to make it even more charming and lovely. 母亲的卧室里充满着食物的香气，这使卧室也变得 更加充满魅力、更加可爱了。 4.写环境，造氛围（环境描写） 环境描写分为客观和主观两种角度。客观从环境 事物本身入手，主观则从观察者角度描述。在描写时通 常主、客观交替进行。环境描写时要做到有声有色、有 味道、有质感、有动态、有画面感。续写时可以借助描写 天气、描写自然景物、描述自然环境来传达故事中人物 的心境或情绪。充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事 高潮的作用。 20- 【典例】品读材料中的加黑部分，体会环境描写的 用法。 When Nicholas didn't show up,his father realised there must be something wrong.When the sun was setting,the temperature was dropping.He soon calmed down and turned to the police for help.After analyzing the map of the vast and high mountain,they rode snowmobiles immediately to the possible place where Nicholas was trapped.It was completely dark and the snow fell again.All around was the howling wind )Frightened as Nicholas was,he believed he would survive from the freezing wind and snow. 5.写对话，现场景（语言描写） 在读后续写中展示对话，能够丰富续写的内容和语 言，增强语篇的连贯性，有利于推动情节的发展。对话 一般由引用部分、标点符号、对话提示语和其他成分构 成。对话提示语后如适当增加其他成分，则能够生动传 神地展示对话。在读后续写中我们可以利用下列方法 来刻画人物对话： (1)增加副词：在对话提示词后增加副词，加强描 绘说话人的语气情感，使对话更形象化。 "You must have seen great changes since you were a young man,"said Winston tentatively. “从你年轻时至今，你一定看到了巨大的变化，”温 斯顿试探性地说。 (2)并列动词：在对话中增加动作描写，能够渲染 故事气氛，增添画面感。 “Perhaps we had better go on,”said Miss Keats, and moved towards the door. “也许我们还是继续吧，”济慈小姐说，然后向门口 走去。 (3)增加介词短语：在对话提示词后增加介词短 语，能够更详细地表现出说话者的神态、语调、声音等具 体情况。 "The company certainly has done a good job this year,"he said with a knowing nodding of his head. “公司今年确实做得很好，”他会心地点头说道。 (4)增加分词（短语）：在对话中增加分词（短语）表 示伴随状况，不仅能够增添画面感，而且能够使句子结 构更加复杂，表达更加丰富。 “Yes,”said Mustapha Mond,nodding his head, “you may well shudder.” “是的，”穆斯塔法·蒙德点着头说，“你可能会不 寒而栗。” (5)增加状语从句：在对话中增加从句，使得续写 的语法结构更加复杂，同时，更细节化地表达说话人说 话时的具体情况。 1 "We'll win,"she said excitedly as she stepped out of the cab. “我们要赢了，”她走出驾驶室时兴奋地说。 6.写人物，塑形象（人物描写） 人物描写主要包括外貌、品格、性格和言行等方面。 英语读后续写中刻画人物形象的方法主要有以下四种： 利用情绪描写，凸显人物性格；细化动作描写，刻画思想 品质；强化心理描写，展现内心独白；升华语言描写，抒 发情感态度。 【典例】Alice is20 years old.She is a little overweight.But she is tall and fair-skinned,so she looks healthy.Her hair is jet-black and straight.She always has a very pleasant smile and she has a twinkle in her big eyes.When smiling,Alice's special dimples (will appear.When working,she always puts on her glasses.She always dresses very elegantly and neatly.Because of her fair skin and kindness,we all like her very much. 艾丽斯20岁了，她有一点超重，但是由于她很高而 且皮肤白皙，所以看上去很健康。她有一头乌黑的直 发。她时常灿烂地微笑，两只大眼睛闪闪发光；她微笑 时，露出两个特别的酒窝她工作的时候，总是戴上眼 镜。她的穿着总是优雅而整洁。由于她白皙的皮肤和 善良的性格，我们都很喜欢她。 点评：文中加黑部分对Alice的外貌、品格、性格等 方面都进行了描述，特别对眼睛和皮肤进行了突出描 写，集中展现了Alice的完美形象，仿佛Alice就站在读 者的面前。 二、情景交融的修辞手法 在续写中若能适当运用比喻、拟人、夸张、排比等修 辞手法进行细节描写，便能加强文章的表现力和感染 力，为文章添彩。 1.用比喻，更形象 比喻是最常见的修辞手法，是将两种具有共同特征 的事物或现象进行对比，从而更生动、更深刻地说明道 理，增强语言的表现力。比喻分为明喻和暗喻。 (1)明喻：直接表明本体和喻体的相似之处，常用 的明喻标志词有like,as,seem,as.as,asif,as though,similar to等。下面以2022年1月浙江卷读后 续写为例，体会如何用明喻修辞手法提升表达效果。 Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully,I failed to do so as if I were a monster to him to draw him back in the study.(描述个人形象) 虽然我想和他充分分享我的想法，但我没有这样 做，好像我是一个会在学习上拖他的后腿的怪物， 第五部分写作之读后续写 写。 I just kept nodding like a machine when he asked me whether it is OK to do this way or that way..(描述个 人行为反应) 当他问我是否可以这样做或那样做时，我只是像一 台机器一样不停地点头。 (2)暗喻：也叫隐喻，本体喻体都出现，中间常用喻 词“是”等连接，有时不用喻词。暗喻的典型形式为：甲 是乙，而不用like,as等喻词。 Money sometimes is a poison. 钱有时候是一种毒药。 She is an angel 她是一个天使。 【典例】①Hearing the bad news,I felt a lump in my throat,tears welling up in my eyes.The wind whistled through the trees,as if mourning for the death of Donovan.I realised gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other.However,he left us a hidden treasure-his kind heart,which will never die away with the passage of time. 点评：文中加黑部分采用了明喻的写作手法，增加 了语言的表现力和感染效果。 2Suddenly,I realised it was no longer raining in the house.Looking up,I saw rubber-looking material covering the roof.He'd done it.I was so grateful for his help because now I could save more of my parents' cherished possessions.My parents were so grateful to have those precious memorials.The man was a light in the darkness 点评：文中加黑部分采用了暗喻的修辞手法，生动 地描写了the man的作用，达到了奇妙的语言表现力。 2.用拟人，更生动 拟人是把无生命的事物当作有生命的事物来描写， 赋予无生命之物以感情和动作，或是把动物人格化，使 语言生动、形象、更有感染力。 (1)把自然现象当作人来描写 Stars winked at me in a darkening sky.(景物描写) 夜空中的星星向我眨眼睛。 (2)把含蓄抽象的概念当作人来描写 Anger choked my words.(情感描写) 我气得说不出话来。 (3)把动物当作人来描写 Birds on the tree are singing a beautiful song. 描写) 树上的鸟儿们在唱着一首美妙的歌曲。 【典例】Telling himself he still had a job to do, Robert went back to check on the cars.As Robert aboard 2对勾·讲与练·高三英语RJ -12 rested in the train,his pent-up emotions rushed to the surface.It had all unfolded so fast,and the reality of what he had done was only now hitting him.Within minutes,Lindley was standing beside Robert,taking the controls again.They looked at each other,their expressions of relief and gratitude more persuasive than words.Robert's overalls were still spotted with blood. The train pulled slowly out of Lafayette. 点评：文中描述情绪外泄时用了句子his pent--up emotions rushed to the surface,赋予无生命的事物以感 情，语言生动，感染力强。 3.用夸张，造特效 夸张是运用丰富的想象力，在客观现实的基础上有 目的地放大或缩小事物的形象特征，以增强表达效果。 Her heart beat so violently that she felt nearly suffocated.(心理描写) 她的心跳得厉害，几乎室息而死。 I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness. 感描写) 我仿佛漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。 My heart broke into about a million pieces.(情感 描写) 我的心成了碎片。 She was half dead with fear..(情感描写) 她吓得半死。 When they told me the news,I was over the moon/ on the top of the world.(情感描写) 当他们告诉我这个消息时，我乐不可支。 【典例】Another time,Daniel was to give a graduation speech in front of 1,500 students.Before hopping the stage,he inquired,"Mom,do you have any word for me?”“No,son,just believe in yourself.”I escaped his searching eyes and retreated into my seat. "I take pride in you because you possess the courage which I failed to have in pursuing your dream.Please take care and my love is always by your side."As a lump formed in my throat,I could no longer continue. My son was also touched beyond words as tears brimmed in his eyes.Finally out came his mother's reminder and words he had been waiting for in the last 20 years. 点评：文中在描述眼睛时用了searching eyes,.形容 眼睛的锐利，夸大了眼睛的作用；形容说不出话来时，对 “哽咽”的描述是As a lump formed in my throat,生动展 现了人物说话时的艰难，夸大了事实，增强了语言的感 染力。 22- 4.用排比，展阵容 day,I watched my former classmate handle the pig,and I 排比是把结构相同或相似、意思密切相关、语气一 could tell she didn't like it any more.The pig was tiny, 致的词语或句子成串地排列在一起的一种修辞手法。 maybe eight inches from nose to tail.The poor thing had 其目的是增强气势，提升表达效果，达到一种加强语势 pink nails.When I returned to my apartment,the only 的效果。 positive thing I could say to my roommate was,"She's a Pain makes you stronger,tears make you braver, mini pig!She'll stay small!She'll never grow up！” heartbreak makes you wiser,so thank the past for a 点评：文中加黑部分使用了三个相似的句子，强调 better future.(哲理) “迷你猪”长不大的情况，增强了语言表达效果。 痛苦会让你更强大，眼泪会让你更勇敢，心碎会让 三、续写技法的综合运用 你更睿智，所以为了更好的未来感谢过去吧。 下面，我们以2024年1月浙江卷读后续写为例，结 【典例】I knew nothing about mini pigs..I didn't合前面有关读文技巧、情节构思、续写方法等内容，进行 know what they ate;I had no idea how big they got. 读后续写的“读”“思”“写”示范。 Once I started doing some Internet research,I found a 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写 few people saying that "there's no such thing as a mini 两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 pig".But I didn't pay attention.When we met the next 步骤一：读 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water.DOne of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building.(此处读出冲突1：学校里认路的挑战)（从前两句可以读出主人公Eva适应性强但初期迷茫的性格品质）t was a six-story building.On each floor,hallways stretched in four directions,leading to classrooms,laboratories,and teachers' offices.Somewhere in the building,there was also a library,a cafeteria,and a gym 2Having a poor sense of direction,Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about,let alone commit to memory.(负)（此处重复冲突l:学校里认路的挑战）She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn't exist..(从本段可以读出主人公Eva方向感差但能努力 应对、做事有策略的性格品质) (①②两处读出续写第二段的伏笔，为克服学校建筑的复杂性，成功地适应了新环境做了铺垫) In her first P.E.class,Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. 处读出续写第一段的伏笔，为成功地完成了跑步，并意外地获得了教练的表扬做了铺垫)She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic.There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile.To Eva,"a mile"was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather's,and that always seemed like a long way,even in a car!（负)（此处读出冲突2：体育 课上完成一英里跑步的挑战) When Coach Pitt blew his whistle ()Eva figured she would be left in the dust.However,while some of her classmates edged ahead,others actually fell behind.“If's just the beginning,”she thought.“I'll come in last for sure..”(此处读出续写第一段的伏笔，为 成功完成跑步且不是最后一名做了铺垫) Soon Eva began to breathe hard,with her heart pounding and legs shaking.Feeling desperate,Eva started using a mind trick on herself.She stopped thinking about the word "mile".Instead,she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead.Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved ()After that,she tried to see if she could complete her first lap.One lap turned into two,then three,then four.(此处读出主人公Eva通过将长距离分解为小目标，创造性地克服了对长跑的 恐惧，体现了Ea自我激励、心态积极、勇敢面对恐惧、做事有策略的性格品质) (本文的主要矛盾冲突：E个人对于挑战的恐惧和如何克服这些挑战：体育课上的挑战、学校里认路的挑战：本文的主题：面对 恐惧、适应新环境、自我成长和克服困难) 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右： 2.请按如下格式作答 When Coach Pitt said "Nice work !to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised. (转)》 Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. (正) -123- 第五部分写作之读后续写 步骤二：思 When Coach Pitt said“Nice work”to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised. 衔接句：Eva为什么受到教练的夸奖？Eva的跑步 结果是什么？ 过渡句：描写Eva的心理描写一一意识到低估了自 己的能力，也取得了克服挑战的唯一方法就是将其分解 成更小目标去完成的经验。 衔接句：用这个经验面对未来其他的挑战。 Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. 衔接句：Eva是如何使用同样的策略应对学校大 楼的？ 过渡句：通过这个策略，Eva发现不再对学校大楼 恐惧了。 升华句：专注脚下，一步一个脚印，把困难分解，没 有什么克服不了的！ 步骤三：写 I.翻译句子 When Coach Pitt said“Nice work”to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised. 1.她本以为自已会是最后一个冲过终点线的，但她却排 在了队伍的中间。（并列句） 2.Eva意识到她低估了自己的能力。（宾语从句） 3.她也学到了宝贵的一课：有时，克服挑战的唯一方法 就是将其分解成更小、更易于管理的部分。（动词不 定式短语作表语)》 4.这次经历给了她对自己能力的新信心，并为她未来面 对其他挑战奠定了坚实的基础。(lay a foundation for) 红对勾·讲与练·高三英语RJ 一 12 Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. 5.她自信且富有冒险精神，专注于学习通往她的班级和 食堂的路线，而不是试图一次性记住整个建筑的布 局。（形容词短语作状语） 6.她还在空闲时间特意探索大楼，以便逐渐熟悉不同的 走廊和房间。（目的状语从句） 7.通过这个新策略，Eva发现学校大楼不再是她的压力 来源。（介词短语） 8.实际上，她甚至开始享受探索大楼的不同部分和发现 新地方的乐趣。（动名词短语作宾语） 9.回顾这一系列的成就，她充分意识到：只要愿意，再加 上一个可行的策略，以及立即行动，没有什么是不可 能的！（现在分词短语作状语） Ⅱ.连句成篇 When Coach Pitt said“Nice work!”to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. 24-In the survey,"career prospects"emerges as the most significant,accounting for 35%of the decision-making process. This shows the practical approach many applicants adopt when selecting their academic major.They seek majors that do not necessarily correspond to the trends but offer opportunities for advancement,competitive salaries,and stability. Different factors mean different preferences.Individuals are seeking paths that lead to their own goals. 二、图画作文 参考范文： Great changes have taken place in the way of communication in people's life in recent years. In the past,people kept in touch with each other mainly by writing letters or using the public telephone.But now almost everyone has his own mobile phone.People can communicate with each other almost at any place and at any time.What's more,people have easy access to the Internet,which enables them to send and receive e-mails whenever they like.With these changes,people's pace of life has been quickened and people's work has been made more efficient.It used to take several days to hear from each other, but now it takes only several minutes,even if they are in two different continents. In a word,people have an easier life nowadays 三、评论 参考范文： The online class was absolutely wonderful.Themed on the Appreciation of Classic Poetry,it unfolded the etemal charm of classic poetry to us.Online as it was,this class created a totally immersive atmosphere. The highlight of the class was the short clip named "When Li Bai Meets William Wordsworth".By comparing the differences and similarities of these two great romantic poets,the video gave us a new insight into their writing skills and the emotions hidden behind the lines.It also triggered our passion to explore more about the ever-lasting beauty of poems. Honestly,it would be better if more interactive elements,such as mini-games or real-time comments,are included in this class Generally speaking,it was truly fantastic. 第五部分写作之读后续写 第15讲续写有方法一如何写 I.翻译句子 1.She had expected to be the last one to cross the finish line,but instead she had come in the middle of the pack. 2.Eva realized that she had underestimated her own abilities. 3.She also learned a valuable lesson:sometimes,the only way to overcome a challenge is to break it into smaller,more manageable parts. 4.This experience gave her a new sense of confidence in her abilities and laid a solid foundation for her to face other challenges in the future. 5.Confident and adventurous,she focused on learning the routes to her classes and the cafeteria instead of trying to memorize the entire layout of the building at once. 一 1 6.She also made a point of exploring the building during her free time,so that she could gradually become familiar with the different hallways and rooms. 7.With this new strategy,Eva found that the school building was no longer a source of stress for her. 8.In fact,she even began to enjoy exploring the different parts of the building and discovering new places. 9.Reflecting on the series of accomplishments,she was fully aware that with a willing heart,a workable strategy,as well as immediate action,nothing is impossible! Ⅱ.连句成篇 When Coach Pitt said "Nice work !to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.She had expected to be the last one to cross the finish line,but instead she had come in the middle of the pack.Eva realized that she had underestimated her own abilities.She also learned a valuable lesson:sometimes,the only way to overcome a challenge is to break it into smaller,more manageable parts.This experience gave her a new sense of confidence in her abilities and laid a solid foundation for her to face other challenges in the future. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.Confident and adventurous,she focused on learning the routes to her classes and the cafeteria instead of trying to memorize the entire layout of the building at once.She also made a point of exploring the building during her free time,so that she could gradually become familiar with the different hallways and rooms. With this new strategy,Eva found that the school building was no longer a source of stress for her.In fact,she even began to enjoy exploring the different parts of the building and discovering new places.Reflecting on the series of accomplishments,she was fully aware that with a willing heart,a workable strategy,as well as immediate action,nothing is impossible! 第16讲读后续写话题演练 一、个人成长 步骤二：思 作者一直把自己深深埋在地下，甚至扼杀自己的成长和潜力。 (心理活动描写) 应该像松树一样向外生长，踏出自己的舒适区。 决定参加艺术营，告知妈妈自已的决定。（与前文协同）》 一开始遇到陌生人很紧张。 慢慢地走出舒适区，和同样热爱艺术的人成为朋友，共同探讨艺 术，个人得到成长。很快艺术营接近尾声，作者带着友谊和成长 回来。 最强劲的成长往往来自对未知世界的探索。 步骤三：写 I.翻译句子 1.With Mr Weston's comment lingering in my mind,I realized that I had been burying my own roots too deep,suffocating my growth and potential,no matter how often I was told about my talent in drawing. 2.Unknowingly,I had always turned a deaf ear,forgetting to spread my roots outward,to seek nourishment and reach for the sky. 3.Encouraged by Mr Weston's words,I decided to reassess my approach to life and started branching out 4.Maybe,just like the pine,I needed to branch out and grow in a different direction to flourish. 参考答案 答。