【人物成长+社会温情类】暴雪封路，有人闭门自保，理发师Elston开门照 讲义 -2024-2025学年高二英语作文复习专项

标黑加粗斜体（环境描写）可积累文本，绿色衔接点！！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单下划线（状从）；非谓语形式都会标注；其他重点，红色字体为重要单词B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释)! () 河南省天一大联考2024-2025学年高二下学期6月摸底考试 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Craig Elston grew up in Buffalo. During his school days, he was on the basketball team at Riverside High School. His team coach, Bill Russell, not only taught him how to play basketball but also planted a seed of kindness in his heart. The real success is to devote yourself to the people around you-a sentence from the coach has been rooted in Elston’s mind. He even wrote down the words on their team photo and put it up on the wall. Years later, as he ran a barbershop(理发店)in Buffalo , he would often recall his coach’s teachings and make the effort to reach out to others in their time of need. It was a tough December(时间感). The day started warmly in the morning, but by midday, temperatures dropped sharply(对比描写), winds blowing hard and snow piling up fast(独立主格). News reports grew urgent: Get off the roads. Find shelter fast. Roads became impossible to travel on. The emergency crew rescued 65 people before abandoning the effort as it was too dangerous. More than 30 ,000 people lost power(交代背景信息). Much of Elston’s neighborhood lost power too, but not his barbershop. Elston looked out the window at the heavy wind and snow, remembered his coach's words and realized(动作串并列) it was time to do something. He immediately opened TikTok, sweeping(现在分词做伴随动作)the camera across the shop’s space heaters , charging sockets, and stockpiled food(名词并列). “ Anybody who’s stuck out there , do not stay in your car, man,” Elston announced in his video. “The barbershop here welcomes you. Get some heat, get some electricity, charge your phone and get in contact with your family(祈使句并列).The address is 32 Elmwood Avenue, and the door is always open for you !The first person to knock on his door was a neighbor who barely spoke English. But Elston didn’t need a translator to see the trouble. He had frostbite(冻伤)on his fingers and toes-it was really bad. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Elston quickly brought the man inside. Paragraph 2: Elston’s action was noticed by a local newspaper. 河南省天一大联考2024-2025学年高二下学期6月摸底考试 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Craig Elston grew up in Buffalo. During his school days, he was on the basketball team at Riverside High School. His team coach, Bill Russell, not only taught him how to play basketba lbut also planted a seed of kindness in his heart. The real success is to devote yourself to the people around you-a sentence from the coach has been rooted in Elston'’s mind. He even wrote down the words on their team photo and put it up on the wall. Years later, as he ran a barbershop(理发店)in Buffalo , he would often recall his coach’s teachings and make the effort to reach out to others in their time of need. It was a tough December. The day started warmly in the morning, but by midday, temperatures dropped sharply , winds blowing hard and snow piling up fast. News reports grew urgent: Get off the roads. Find shelter fast. Roads became impossible to travel on. The emergency crew rescued 65people before abandoning the effort as it was too dangerous. More than 30 ,000 people lost power. Much of Elston’s neighborhood lost power too, but not his barbershop. Elston looked out the window at the heavy wind and snow, remembered his coach's words.and realized it was time to do something. He immediately opened TikTok, sweeping the camera across the shop’s space heaters , charging sockets, and stockpiled food. “ Anybody who’s stuck out there , do not stay in your car, man,” Elston announced in his video. “The barbershop here welcomes you. Get some heat, get some electricity, charge your phone and get in contact with your family.The address is 32 Elmwood Avenue, and the door is always open for you !The first person to knock on his door was a neighbor who barely spoke English. But Elston didn’t need a translator to see the trouble. He had frostbite(冻伤)on his fingers and toes-it was really bad. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Elston quickly brought the man inside. Paragraph 2: Elston’s action was noticed by a local newspaper. 1. 文章分类与续写思路分析 文章类型：人物成长+社会温情类（主题围绕“善良与互助”，核心冲突为“暴风雪中的救援”）。 · 续写构思方向： 主题延续：强调“无私帮助他人”的价值观，呼应教练的教导。 情节发展： 第一段：救助邻居的具体行动（治疗冻伤、提供食物等），体现细节描写。 第二段：善举的影响力（媒体报道、社区响应），升华主题。 情感层次：从“个人善行”到“群体感动”，传递温暖。 框架提炼： 段落 内容重点 衔接原文的关键点 第一段开头 Elston救助邻居的细节（动作、语言） “frostbite”“door is always open” 第二段开头 媒体报道引发连锁反应 “coach’s words”“30,000 lost power” 续写注意事项： 承接原文： 必须提到“教练的教导”（如直接引用团队照片上的句子）。 环境描写需延续暴风雪设定（如“snow piling up”“lost power”）。 巧妙设计：用对话体现人物性格（如邻居的感激、Elston的谦逊）。 2. 故事山模式与原文分析 故事山模式： 阶段 原文内容 续写方向 背景 Elston的成长与教练的教导 强调价值观的传承 冲突 暴风雪危机，居民受困 具体化危机（冻伤、断电） 高潮 Elston开放理发店救助 扩大救助规模/媒体报道 解决 邻居敲门求助 展现救助细节与社区影响 衔接点与关键分析： 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Elston的善良与行动力 “real success is to devote yourself to the people around you” 情感层次 从回忆教练到实践善行 “remembered his coach’s words and realized it was time to do something” 关键情节点 暴风雪危机 → 开放理发店 “News reports grew urgent: Get off the roads.” 语言特色 口语化号召（TikTok视频） “Anybody who’s stuck out there... the door is always open for you!” 心理描写 Elston的决心 “realized it was time to do something” 动作描写 救助邻居的急切 “Elston quickly brought the man inside” (续写开头) 环境描写 暴风雪的恶劣 “winds blowing hard and snow piling up fast” 隐含主题 善良的传递与社区精神 “planted a seed of kindness in his heart” 情感转折 从个人行动到群体感动 “The first person to knock on his door...” → 媒体报道（续写第二段） 伏笔/冲突点 断电、冻伤、语言障碍 “barely spoke English”“frostbite on his fingers and toes” 解决方案 开放理发店作为避难所 “sweeping the camera across the shop’s space heaters, charging sockets” 设计亮点： 呼应教练的教导 环境对比（“laughter” vs. “storm”）。 升华主题（“kindness... is a team sport”）。 3. 动作、心理、环境描写 动作描写 1. He swiftly wrapped the man’s frostbitten fingers in a warm towel. （他迅速用温暖的毛巾包裹住男人冻伤的手指。） 2. She hurriedly ushered the shivering family inside, shutting the door against the howling wind. （她匆忙将颤抖的一家人带进来，关上门挡住呼啸的风。） 3. He knelt down to check the elderly man’s pulse, his hands steady despite the chaos. （他跪下检查老人的脉搏，尽管混乱，他的手仍然稳定。） 4. The baby clung to her mother, tiny fingers gripping the blanket tightly. （婴儿紧紧抓住母亲，小手紧紧攥着毯子。） 5. Elston rushed to the stove, stirring the soup to keep it from burning. （埃尔斯顿冲到炉子旁，搅拌着汤以防烧焦。） 6. A young man staggered in, his clothes coated in snow, his lips blue with cold. （一个年轻人踉跄着走进来，衣服上覆盖着雪，嘴唇冻得发紫。） 7. She handed out steaming mugs of cocoa, her smile easing their fear. （她递出一杯杯冒着热气的可可，她的微笑缓解了他们的恐惧。） 8. He propped open the door with a chair, ensuring no one else would be left outside. （他用椅子撑开门，确保没有人被留在外面。） 9. The children huddled together under thick blankets, their breaths visible in the cold air. （孩子们蜷缩在厚厚的毯子下，呼出的气在寒冷的空气中可见。） 10. Elston’s hands trembled slightly as he bandaged the wound, but his voice remained calm. （埃尔斯顿的手在包扎伤口时微微颤抖，但他的声音仍然平静。） 心理描写 1. A surge of determination filled him—he couldn’t let anyone suffer in this storm. （一股决心涌上心头——他不能让任何人在暴风雪中受苦。） 2. Memories of Coach Russell’s words echoed in his mind: “Real success is helping others.” （拉塞尔教练的话在他脑海中回荡：“真正的成功是帮助他人。”） 3. Fear gnawed at him—what if the power went out and they were all trapped? （恐惧啃噬着他——如果断电了，他们全被困住怎么办？） 4. A warm sense of purpose settled over him as he handed out food. （当他分发食物时，一种温暖的使命感笼罩着他。） 5. He hesitated for a moment, wondering if he was doing enough. （他犹豫了一下，想知道自己是否做得足够。） 6. Gratitude shone in the neighbor’s eyes, and Elston felt a lump in his throat. （邻居的眼中闪烁着感激，埃尔斯顿感到喉咙发紧。） 7. The weight of responsibility pressed on him, but he refused to show weakness. （责任的重压让他喘不过气，但他拒绝表现出软弱。） 8. A quiet pride swelled in his chest as he saw the strangers helping each other. （当他看到陌生人互相帮助时，一种安静的骄傲在他胸中膨胀。） 9. For a fleeting second, he questioned if he could handle so many people. （一瞬间，他怀疑自己是否能应付这么多人。） 10. The coach’s voice in his head silenced his doubts: “Step up when others need you.” （教练的声音在他脑海中消除了他的疑虑：“当别人需要你时，挺身而出。”） 环境描写 The wind howled like a wounded animal, rattling the windows. （风像受伤的野兽一样咆哮，震动着窗户。） Snowflakes swirled violently, reducing visibility to near zero. （雪花猛烈地旋转，能见度几乎降为零。） The barbershop’s warmth was a stark contrast to the icy hell outside. （理发店的温暖与外面的冰冷地狱形成鲜明对比。） Frost crept up the glass panes, forming intricate, ghostly patterns. （霜爬上玻璃窗，形成错综复杂的幽灵般的图案。） The dim glow of emergency lanterns cast long shadows on the walls. （应急灯的微弱光芒在墙上投下长长的影子。） The scent of hot soup and coffee filled the air, a small comfort in the storm. （热汤和咖啡的香气弥漫在空气中，是暴风雪中的一丝安慰。） Outside, the snowdrifts had swallowed cars whole, leaving only vague shapes. （外面，雪堆已经吞没了整辆车，只留下模糊的形状。） The crackling of the space heater was the only sound in the tense silence. （暖炉的噼啪声是紧张寂静中唯一的声音。） Icicles hung like jagged teeth from the roof’s edge, threatening to fall. （冰柱像锯齿状的牙齿一样悬挂在屋檐边缘，随时可能坠落。） The streetlights flickered weakly, as if struggling against the storm’s fury. （路灯微弱地闪烁，仿佛在与暴风雪的狂怒抗争。） 4. 高级替换词 & 常见搭配解析 高级替换词（场景分类） 普通词 高级替换词 适用场景 cold frigid / biting 恶劣天气描写 happy elated / heartened 积极情绪 sad despondent / crestfallen 消极情绪 quickly swiftly / promptly 动作迅速 help aid / assist / rally to 救援/互助 固定搭配 & 词法解析 Plant a seed of kindness（播下善良的种子） 近义词：instill values, nurture compassion 反义词：spread hatred, foster indifference 例句： His mentor planted a seed of kindness that grew into a lifetime of service. Education should plant seeds of empathy in young minds. Lost power（断电） 近义词：blackout, electricity outage 反义词：restored power, functioning grid 例句： The storm caused widespread power loss, leaving thousands in darkness. Emergency generators kicked in after the power failure. Frostbite on fingers（手指冻伤） 近义词：numbness from cold, hypothermia 反义词：warmth, circulation 例句： The hiker suffered severe frostbite after hours in the blizzard. Frostbitten toes can lead to permanent damage if untreated. Stockpiled food（储备食物） 近义词：hoarded supplies, emergency rations 反义词：scarcity, depleted resources 例句： Before the hurricane, residents stockpiled food and water. The shelter’s stockpile ran low after days of feeding refugees. Howling wind（呼啸的风） 近义词：roaring gale, shrieking blast 反义词：calm breeze, still air 例句： The howling wind made it impossible to hear shouts for help. Trees bent under the force of the fierce gusts. 可积累的语料（生词短语） Urgent news reports（紧急新闻报道） 词义：breaking news demanding immediate attention 例句： Urgent news reports warned residents to evacuate before the flood. The emergency broadcast interrupted regular programming. Abandon the effort（放弃努力） 词义：give up due to danger or impossibility 例句： Rescuers had to abandon the effort when the avalanche risk increased. Never abandon hope, even in dire situations. Barely spoke English（几乎不会说英语） 词义：minimal language ability 例句： The immigrant barely spoke English, relying on gestures. Language barriers can complicate emergency responses. Sweeping the camera across（用摄像头扫视） 词义：panning a camera to show a scene 例句： The journalist swept the camera across the devastation. His TikTok video panned over the stocked shelves. A surge of determination（决心的涌现） 词义：sudden strong motivation 例句： A surge of determination pushed her to finish the marathon. He felt a rush of resolve when seeing others in need. 总结 动作描写：多用 swiftly, ushered, staggered, clung 等动词增强画面感。 心理描写：使用 gnawing fear, quiet pride, determination surged 等体现情感层次。 环境描写：howling wind, frost crept, snowdrifts swallowed 等增强沉浸感。 高级替换词：如 frigid → cold, elated → happy，提升语言质量。 固定搭配：plant a seed of, lost power, stockpiled food 等需熟记。 5. Possible Versions(3) Version 1 Paragraph 1: Elston quickly brought the man inside. He laid the man on a warm barber chair and wrapped him in thick blankets. Noticing the severe frostbite on his fingers and toes, Elston immediately filled a basin with warm water and carefully treated the affected areas, recalling the emergency steps(现在分词做伴随动作) his coach had once drilled into him. “You’re safe here,” he whispered, again and again, as he offered the man his a bowl of hot soup. The man's eyes filled with gratitude, though no words were exchanged. Outside, the snow kept falling, wind howling like a warning(独立主格). Inside, Elston moved quietly, tidying the space, checking the heaters, restocking(动作串并列) what little supplies he had left.News about the barbershop shelter went viral on TikTok. A few uncertain knocks followed over time, but he opened the door without hesitation. As he moved between the chairs and the heater, the photo of his coach caught his eye. In that moment, Elston realized—this was his way of passing on that lesson of selfless care. Paragraph 2: Elston’s action was noticed by a local newspaper.The next morning, a young reporter showed up, wrapped tightly in a coat(过去分词做后置定语), notebook in hand(独立主格). “Are you the man who opened his doors last night?” she asked, eyes wide with admiration(独立主格). Elston nodded modestly. During the brief interview, he downplayed his role, insisting(现在分词做伴随动作) that anyone in his place would’ve done the same. But the article painted him as a community hero. Photos of the shop, filled with people(过去分词做后置定语) wrapped in blankets(过去分词做后置定语), were shared widely. Messages poured in, thanking(现在分词做伴随动作) Elston for his courage and warmth. Someone had pinned a note on the door: “You didn’t just cut hair. You saved lives.” Looking at the message(现在分词做伴随动作), Elston felt a quiet pride. Not for the praise, but because he had lived out the words, once his coach told him, that shaped his life—and passed them on through his actions. Version 2 Paragraph 1 Elston quickly brought the man inside. Seeing the neighbor’s frostbitten fingers(现在分词做伴随动作), he immediately grabbed clean towels, soaked in warm water and gently wrapped them around the injured areas(动作串描写), recalling(现在分词做伴随动作) how Coach Russell had once treated his own sprained ankle with the same care. The man, shivering uncontrollably(现在分词做伴随动作), murmured something in his native language, but Elston understood the gratitude in his eyes. He handed him a steaming cup of cocoa, the rich aroma filling the small space(独立主格). Outside, the storm raged on(有没有背景音乐响起 let it go~), the wind howling like a wounded beast(独立主格刻画人物), but inside the barbershop(对比描写), an unspoken bond of warmth and safety formed.Like a storm, the barbershop shelter trend took over TikTok. Paragraph 2 Elston’s action was noticed by a local newspaper. A reporter, who had taken shelter in a nearby café, spotted the growing crowd at the barbershop and rushed over with a camera. The next morning, the headline read, “A Beacon of Hope in the Blizzard,” accompanied(过去分词短语做后置定语)by a photo of Elston handing out blankets(现在分词短语做后置定语). Inspired by the story(过去分词短语做原因状语), volunteers arrived with supplies, and soon, the barbershop became a temporary shelter. Years later, with his coach’s words echoing in her mind(with复合结构), Elston would still smile at the framed newspaper clipping beside the old team photo—proof that kindness, like a snowball, grew bigger when pushed forward(同为语从句). Version 3 Paragraph 1 Elston quickly brought the man inside. The neighbor’s lips were blue, and his breath came in shallow gasps. Without hesitation, Elston guided him to a barber chair near the space heater, grabbing a thick woolen blanket(现在分词短语做伴随动作) to cover his shoulders. He remembered Coach Russell’s words: “Real success is to devote yourself to others.” Rummaging through his supplies(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he found an emergency thermal pack and pressed it into the man’s trembling hands. The barbershop, now a refuge, buzzed with quiet activity—people charging phones, sipping soup, and exchanging relieved glances(独立主格刻画人物). Outside, the blizzard continued its assault(无灵主语句), but inside, the air was thick with warmth and kindness.The barbershop shelter became a TikTok sensation overnight. Paragraph 2 Elston’s action was noticed by a local newspaper. The journalist, stranded nearby(过去分词或adj做主语补语), had been documenting storm-related acts of courage and was struck by the scene at 32 Elmwood Avenue through Tiktok. The article, titled(过去分词做后置定语) “The Barber Who Opened His Doors,” highlighted how one man’s decision had saved dozens from the wind and snow. By the next day, donations poured in—blankets, food, even a portable generator(名词并列). Elston, humbled by the response(过去分词做主语补语), simply said, “I just did what my coach taught me.” The story spread, reminding(现在分词做伴随动作) the city that even in the fiercest storms, humanity could shine brightest. 情绪描写亮点词汇 原文词汇 升级替换 例句 grateful heartened The man’s eyes were heartened with relief. scared terrified The terrified family huddled together. happy elated She felt elated when help arrived. 动作描写亮点短语 原文短语 升级替换 例句 handed out distributed He distributed blankets to the crowd. rushed over hastened to The journalist hastened to document the scene. wrapped gently swathed carefully She swathed the wound carefully. 可积累语料 "Avalanche of change"（变革的雪崩效应） 近义词：ripple effect, chain reaction 反义词：stagnation, inertia 例句： His speech triggered an avalanche of change in policy. Small kindnesses can create an avalanche of goodwill. "Buzzed with quiet activity"（低声忙碌） 近义词：hummed with life, murmured with energy 反义词：fell silent, stood still 例句： The café buzzed with quiet activity as students studied. The shelter hummed with life despite the storm. Elston quickly brought the man inside. He laid the man on a warm barber chair and wrapped him in thick blankets Noticing the severe frostbite on his fingers and toes, Elston immediately filled a glass with warm water and gently deal with the affected areas, recalling the first-aid knowledge he’d learned from his coach. Elston even then shared his last cup of hot soup with the man, reassuring him repeatedly, “ You're safe here." Word of the barbershop shelter spread like wildfire through TikTok. As the days passed, the barbershop became a temporary community center. Elston'’s action was noticed by a local newspaper. A reporter visited the shop the next day, witnessing a scene of unity : Children played games on the floor, finding happiness in simple things during the disaster; Elston gave a haircut to an elderly woman. When the reporter asked what led him to do that, Elston simply said, “I’m just doing what anyone should," gesturing to the coach's photo on the wall. By the time the storm ended, over 50 people had taken shelter there. One morning, the frostbitten neighbor reappeared with a gift : a handwriten note in his native language, translated to say, “ You've taught me what community means. " Elston knew the lesson of kindness had come full circle. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $