第二部分 第五讲 续写语言提升-【衡中学案】2026年高考英语一轮总复习学案（人教版）

but to pay family expense like you."At that,my dad nodded and let me keep the money(与第二段首句 主语一致) I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.Staring at my confused expression 【范文赏读】 (分词作状语衔接)，my dad explained:“Though I When I brought my paycheck home-it was $119- can't understand your world of school activities,still I my dad wanted to talk to me..Obviously(副词作状语衔 will stand by you".Moved by the touching words )my dad would try to persuade me to contribute all and seeing his increasingly hunching back,I felt a my earning.It's never fair.I thought in my mind sense of guilt and selfishness welled up in my mind hopelessly,grabbing the money tightly in my and surged through myself.At exactly that moment,I sweating fist.After a long silence,he didn't ask as realized why my father let me have the money-it was expected,instead,he gently said"How do you plan to his expectation for my future,his encouragement and spend the money from the farmer?"Without any quiet love.It was this unique experience that made hesitation,the following words popped out,"There are many things I wanted,such as a new football,,a调句型). me realize I would never surpass his love for me( baseball bat and a pair of sneakers and so on,anything 第五讲续写语言提升 (对应学生用书学案P) 由读后续写评分原则可知，读后续写作文对词汇应用的丰富性、准确性都做出了明确的要求。文中除 了要准确使用词汇外，也要注意所用词汇的丰富性：减少基础词汇（如笼统词、低年级常用词等）的使用，培 026 养使用复杂词汇（如具体词、派生词、短语等）的习惯，从而使文章内容更加生动、丰富，提升文章档次。 年 第一节词汇升级 创 新 常用词汇升级方法如下： 无法展现小狗对主人的友好，不符合句子的语境。 基础用法 高级用法 按照词性进行划分，常用的笼统词变具体词示 计 低年级学习的词语 高年级学习的词语 例如下： 中 笼统的词语（如walk) 具体的词语（如tiptoe,wander等） 名词 学 笼统词 单词（如visit) 短语（如pay a visit to) 具体词 business(事情)，issue(问题)，affair(事件)， thing 单词原形（如happy) 单词的派生词（如happily, matter(事态)，event((大事)，trifle(琐事) happiness等) virtue(优点；长处)，merit(优点；价值)， 就读后续写来说，最主要的升级方法是笼统词 advantage benefit(优势：益处） 变具体词和单词变短语。 shortcoming(缺点；短处)，drawback(缺点； 类型1笼统词变具体词 disadvantage 不利条件)，demerit(短处》 笼统词指一些描述范围较大、指向信息不明确 climax(极点；顶点)，peak(顶峰)，summit 的词语，而具体词往往是这类词语的具体描述。笼 top (最高点；顶点) 统词变具体词可以使叙述的内容更加准确，行文更 加生动。 method(方法；办法)，approach(方式；方 way 法)，avenue(途径；手段) As soon as the puppy heard his footsteps,it ran towards him. 形容词和副词 一听到他的脚步声，波比就朝他跑了过来。 笼统词 具体词 如果将句中的ran改为darted(飞奔，像飞镖 handsome(英俊的)，attractive(吸引人的)， beautiful 样射出去)，可以更准确地表现出小狗激动的情绪， graceful(优雅的)，ine(精美的) 使读者产生更直接的观感，这是笼统词变具体词的 excited(兴奋的)，pleasant(愉快的)，joyful glad 一大好处。但是在使用的时候也需要注意用词是否 (欢喜的) 符合语境，如上句中，若将run改为sprint((冲刺)，则 vital(至关重要的)，critical(决定性的）， 况也比较常见，例如：valuable-→of great value。.现将 important significant((意义重大的)，primary(首要的)， 些高频的单词替换成短语的情况归纳如下： profound(深刻的） 单词 短语 mean(刻薄)，evil(邪恶的)，selfish(自私 like have a passion for bad 的)，disgusting(令人厌恶的) begin get down to excellent(优秀的)，awesome(令人惊叹的)， use make use of good outstanding(杰出的) desire long for impoverished(赤贫的)，needy(贫困的)， decide make up one's mind,be determined to poor poverty-stricken(一贫如洗的) cry burst into tears terribly(极度地)，extremely(极其)，highly meet come across very (非常)，greatly(大大地) think(认为) hold the view completely(彻底地)，absolutely(绝对地)， all bear put up with fully(充分地) affect have an effect/influence on only merely(只不过)，solely(单独地；唯一地) remember bear...in mind 即时演练1 own be in possession of 结合语境，将句中笼统词替换成具体词以优化 表达 believe be convinced of 1.I decided that I am very bad.I've been mainly tired worn out concerned with myself. stress lay emphasis on I decided that I am very I've been solve work out,figure out 轮总复习 mainly concerned with myself. replace take the place of 2.It was only a flicker of light in the distance,yet it filled them with hope. see catch sight of →It was a flicker of light in the suit be suitable for distance,yet it filled them with hope. refuse turn down 3.Feeling tired and helpless,Mauro left a appeal to 翦 attract goodbye note to his wife on the wall of the tomb and usually more often than not prepared to meet his untimely end. 459 →Feeling and Mauro about with regard to left a goodbye note to his wife on the wall of the tomb finally in the end,at length and prepared to meet his untimely end. important of importance 4.Seeing this,the guy quickly let go of Kim and 即时演练2 broke into a run. 结合语境，将单词替换成短语以优化表达 →Seeing this,the guy let go of Kim 1.Usually,he would walk alone by the lake in a and broke into a run. daze. 5.Through this unforgettable and remarkable 2.It has given us a richer understanding of certain thing,it eventually dawned on me that nothing is learning mechanisms,particularly about non-humans. difficult with a willing heart. -Through this unforgettable and remarkable 3.The minute I heard the first note of her voice,I it eventually dawned on me that cried. nothing is difficult with a willing heart. 4.Remember that the rules we're talking about 类型2单词变短语 here are not rules you explicitly know. 用意思相同或相近的短语替换单词，可以达到 5.Keep an eye out for the beautiful,observe the 优化表达的效果。较为常见的是将动词替换成动词 unusual,and see the surprising 短语，也有一些将副词替换成副词短语、介词替换成 介词短语的情况，将形容词替换成“o+名词”的情 6.It is important to keep calm in such an much larger audience. emergency 8.We were so tired when we returned from the 7.She is a good singer,and her music attracts a fields that we went to bed immediately 第二节句式升级 要提高读后续写的语言表达能力，我们除了掌握读后续写常用的一些词语外，在平时的学习中还要注 意积累一些常用句式，并背诵、默写、仿写，最后做到运用自如。 提分句式1无灵主语句，写情更细腻 在英美人的思维中，往往更注意客观事物和现 普通：She felt very delighted when I gave her the 象对人的作用和影响，反映在语言表达上就是经常 present. 用无生命名词作主语。无灵主语句的使用可以有效 升级：Her face brightened when I gave her the 地提升作文的档次。 present. 句型公式1：A wave of/A sense of...+情感名词 我给她礼物时，她的脸上焕发出了光彩。 +有灵动词+sb. 句型公式3：情感名词+有灵动词+sb.(使某人 不能做某事) happiness/joy/ seized/caught/ (1)情感名词+deprived/,robbed sb.of sth.（使 delight开心 struck抓住 anger/,fury狂怒 swept/flooded/ 某人丧失…的能力) sadness/SOrTOw悲伤 rushed over袭来 普通：I was too astonished to speak anything. a wave of gratitude/ flooded over充满 升级：Astonishment deprived me of my power of 460 a surge of appreciation感激 ran through/passed speech. a spark of admiration钦佩 through掠过 惊讶使我说不出话来。 2026 a sense of guilt/remorse愧疚 overwhelmed淹没； (2)情感名词+prevented sb.from doing sth.. a feeling of 悔恨 压倒 (使某人无法做某事) 年 a burst of fear/terror/panic/ took hold of控制 普通：He was too afraid to move. 创 fright害怕；惊恐 enveloped笼罩 astonishment/ gave way to被… 升级：A strong wave of fear prevented him 计 shock/surprise惊讶 代替 from moving. nervousness紧张 welled up涌出 强烈的恐惧感使他无法动弹。 衡 (3)words等名词+failed sb.(某人无法做某事) 学 普通：I felt regretful when I heard the bad news. 普通：I was speechless when I tried to express my 升级1：A wave of regret swept over me as I heartfelt thanks. heard the bad news. 升级：Words failed me when I tried to express my 当我听到那个坏消息时，一股悔恨的浪潮席卷 heartfelt gratitude. 了我。 当我试图表达我衷心的感谢时，我说不出话来。 升级2：A strong sense of regret took hold of 即时演练I me the moment I heard the bad news. I.用无灵主语升级下列句子 当我听到那个坏消息时，一种强烈的悔恨之情 控制了我。 1.I felt happy as I heard the good news. the moment I 句型公式2：身体部位的名词/“音、容、笑”的名 heard the exciting news.(delight) 词+有灵动词（短语） 2.When she realized the little boy had lied,she flashed/passed over felt very disappointed. face,eye, 掠过 -Realizing the little boy had lied, heart,hand, brightened/lighted up finger, +sb./sb.'s 照亮 laughter, face,eye, 3.On the stage,he was too nervous to speak. welled up涌出 smile, heart等 On the stage,nervousness spread across浮现 tears,voice, (deprive) clouded over显得阴沉 disappointment (恐惧、愤怒、忧愁) +On the stage,nervousness prevent) →0 n the stage, because he怀疑。(surround) was too nervous.fail) When I realized that I was the winner of Gold 4.As soon as I saw the rescuers,I got very medal, excited. 2.当他看着烟花照亮天空时，他感到一种令人 ->The instant I saw the rescuers, 难以置信的幸福。(sweep) (blood) 5.She cried as she realized what her friend had as he watched fireworks light up the sky. done for her. 3.当小女孩醒来时，她母亲转哭为笑。(give as she realized way to) what her friend had done for her.(tear,well up) As the little girl woke up, 6.I felt guilty after I heard what he said. -Having heard what he said, 4.当她见到她分开多年的最好的朋友时，她的 .(guilt) 脸上洋溢着纯粹的喜悦和幸福。(light up) 7.He was relieved to learn that no one was hurt in the accident. when she saw her best friend after years apart. when 5.她心中涌起一阵骄傲，因为她成功地救了那 he learned that no one was hurt in the accident.(relief)个老人。(well up) 8.When she realized that the shop was on fire, she felt frightened. ->When she realized that the shop was on fire, 6.我伤心得说不出话来。（rob) (fear) Ⅱ.用无灵主语完成/翻译下列句子 1.当我意识到我是金牌的赢家时，满是惊讶和 轮总复习 提分句式2形容词（短语）作状语，描写更生动 句型公式：①形容词（短语），主+谓 即时演练2 ②主+谓…，形容词（短语） 用形容词作状语完成/翻译下列句子 形容词（短语）作状语可位于句首、句末或句中。 1.他的父母对他的表现很满意，于是给他买了 其主要功能是表达人物做某个动作的原因、结果或者 一辆自行车作为奖励。 伴随状态，可以增强感染力，使描述更生动形象。 his parents 1.表原因 bought him a bicycle as a reward. 46 (2023·新高考I卷)Afraid of hearing the 2.我转过身来面对她，准备好了让她看到我眼 other name,I lowered my head and thought to myself. 中的愤怒和失望。 我害怕听到另一个名字，我低下头想了想。 I turned over and faced her, Eager to see the sunrise,they got up at four. 他们渴望看日出，4点钟就起床了。 3.我们看着房屋被暴风雨摧毁，无助而绝望。 2.表结果 We watched the houses being destroyed by the After the long journey,he finally got home,tired storm, out/worn out/exhausted. 4.由于担心她母亲的健康状况，她不得不提前 经过长途跋涉，他终于回到了家，累的精疲力尽。 回家。 Jack came back home from the disaster area,safe and sound. 杰克从灾区安然无恙地回到家中。 5.五个小时后，他们终于回到了家，疲惫而又 3.表伴随 兴奋。 Deep in thought,Mary sat still against the door. 玛丽静静地坐在门口，陷入沉思。 Lost in the forest,Mary lay under a tree,full of 6.我担心女儿的安全，给女儿打了很多次电话。 fear and despair. 玛丽迷失在森林里，躺在树下，充满了恐惧和绝望。 提分句式3非谓语动词作状语，表达更简洁 非谓语动词doing,having done和done作状语 3.Sam felt so angry that he stormed out of the 时，主要表示原因、结果或伴随情况。doing/having room,and slammed the door angrily behind him. done形式所表达的动作与主语之间构成主动关系， -Sam felt so angry that he stormed out of the doe则与主语构成被动关系。用非谓语动词把同时 ￥r00n. behind him. 发生或先后发生的两个动作连接起来，这样句子就 4.After the woman waited in line for an hour 不会显得单调，每个动作也能更紧密地衔接在一起。 at the bank,she grew impatient and left. 句型公式1：主语+did sth.,doing.或者 → Doing..,主语+did sth. the woman grew impatient and left. 分析：两个动作同时发生，而且主语都一样，就 5.He was misunderstood by his teacher and 可以用分词作状语，doing表示主动。 laughed at by everyone,he felt rather upset and (2023·新高考I卷)We talked for a while, depressed. recalling the journey I embarked on and the doubts I overcame. he felt rather upset and depressed. 我们聊了一会儿，回忆起我开始的旅程和我克 6.The teacher sat down on the bench,next to 服的疑虑。 Gemma,patted her shoulder gently,and said gently, 句型公式2：主语+did sth..,done.,.或者 "I know you were just too nervous,but it's okay. Done..,主语+did sth. next to Gemma, the teacher patted her shoulder gently, 分析：done与逻辑主语是被动关系。 (2023·新高考I卷)Dominated by an "I know you were just too nervous,but it's okay." 462 7.After he reviewed his lessons for a whole overwhelming sense of excitement and pride at his weekend at home,he expected the coming exam with 026 words,I simply stood there dumbfounded. confidence. 年 我对他的话感到了一种强烈的兴奋和自豪，但 我只是目瞪口呆地站在那里。 he expected the coming exam with 新 Immersed in a strong sense of fear,she could not confidence. say a word. 计 Ⅱ，用非谓语动词作状语完成/翻译下列句子 她沉浸在一种强烈的恐惧感中，一句话也说不 1.(2023·新高考I卷)听到老师的鼓励，我对 出来。 中 写作更有信心了。 学 句型公式3：Having done sth..,sb.did sth 案 I am even 分析：如果想强调同一个主语一个动作做完之 more confident to writing. 后又做了另一个动作，就可以把先发生的用having 2.(2023·新高考I卷)我被他的话打动了，于 done的形式来表示。 是我决定在写作上取得更大的进步，以达到他的 Having walked for quite a long time,she found期望。 herself lost. I made up my mind to After she walked for quite a long time,she make more progress in writing so as to live up to his found herself lost. expectation. 走了很长时间后，她发现自己迷路了。 3.（2023·新高考I卷)在欢呼声中，我在记者 即时演练3 的镜头前，在数千名家长和学生的目光下接受了金 I·用非谓语动词作状语升级下列句子 牌。(overwhelm) 1.She felt exhausted and sat by the stream,and I accepted the gold rested her aching feet. medal in front of cameras of reporters and thousands of She felt exhausted and sat by the stream, eyes of parents and students. 4.(2022·1月浙江卷)我深知自己的优点和缺 2.She was dressed in a Santa Claus costume,点，所以我决定专注于与这些主题打交道的工作。 she slipped into the room without being noticed. she I decided to focus on the task of working with the slipped into the room without being noticed. subjects. 5.听到这话，简用尽全力抓住把手，把门拉开了。 7.她感到令人难以忍受的寒冷和疲惫，她不知 Jane took hold of the handle, 道如何应对这种可怕的情况。 and was able to pull the door open. she 6.承诺了五点之前我们能到那儿，所以当车抛had no idea how to cope with the terrible situation. 锚的时候，我非常慌张。 8.她感到一阵悲伤，忍不住地哭了起来。 I was seized with panic when the car broke down 提分句式4独立主格与w山复合结构，句式更灵活 非谓语动词作状语时，其逻辑主语须与主句主 .(独立主格结构) 语保持一致。若不一致，非谓语动词形式须另带主 →He cast us a glance, 语，从而构成复合结构的形式作状语，这种结构称为 ·(with复合结构) 独立主格结构。独立主格结构，一般用逗号与主句 4.His wife was in deep sorrow and her eyes were 分开，其作用相当于一个状语从句或并列句，常用来 full of tears. 表示时间、原因、条件或伴随情况等。独立主格经常 ->His wife was in deep sorrow, 可以和with复合结构互换。 ·(独立主格结构) 句型公式：①独立主格结构：名词/代词+非谓 >His wife was in deep sorrow, 语动词(-ing形式、-ed形式或不定式)、形容词、 .（with复合结构) 副词或介词短语。 Ⅱ.用独立主格与with复合结构完成/翻译下列 ②with复合结构：with+名词/代词+非谓语动 句子 词(-ing形式、ed形式或不定式)、形容词、副词 1.(2023·新高考I卷)我是如此的高兴和激 轮 或介词短语。 动，（与）泪水模糊了我的眼睛。 总 (2023·新高考I卷)As I entered,he looked up I was so happy and thrilled, 习 from his desk,with)a warm smile spreading across his face. 2.几秒钟后，那个女孩出现了，手里紧紧地拿着 英 语 我进去的时候，他从桌子上拾起头来，脸上露出 一个纸袋。 了温暖的微笑。 In a few seconds,the girl turned up Her father was lying on his back,(with)his dog trapped under the truck. 3.它披着棕色的卷发，四下张望，眼睛里闪烁着 她的父亲仰面躺着，他的狗被困在卡车下面。 好奇和有点不安。 即时演练4 Coated with brown curly hair,it looked 463 I.用独立主格与with复合结构升级下列句子 everywhere, 1.He struggled to run towards the finishing line. 4.眼睛凝视着家庭相册，他想到了他和祖父母 His mouth was dry and his legs trembled. 在一起的快乐时光。 ->He struggled to run towards the finishing line, he ·(独立主格结构) thought of the fun he had when he lived with his He struggled to run towards the finishing line, grandparents. .(with复合结构) 5.泪水涌上眼睛，他用颤抖的声音向警察道谢。 2.Her eyes sparkled with excitement,and she he struggled to her feet and shouted,“I'm here！” thanked the police in a trembling voice with excitement,she 6.天逐渐变黑，所以简在森林中迷路了。 struggled to her feet and shouted,“I'm here！”(g独立主 格结构) with excitement,she 7.他冲进房间，心脏狂跳，满脸通红。 struggled to her feet and shouted,“I'm here！”(with复 合结构) 3.He cast us a glance,and his face wore a 8.他躺在草地上，双手交叉在头顶下。 warm smile. ->He cast us a glance, 提分句式5运用虚拟语气，文采更出众 虚拟语气是通过语法手段来表达出对别人的尊(not)done sth. 敬或尽量使自己的语气委婉、客气的效果。虚拟语 I was rooted on the ground due to being 气的形式多种多样，在写作中，虚拟语气能够表达其 frightened,wishing that I had refused my mother's 他任何语气所无法取代的丰富的感情色彩。 advice yesterday. 我们使用虚拟语气时，多数情况是因为表达者 我由于恐惧而站在地上，真希望我昨天拒绝了 的语用目的，而不是简单表达一个相反的事实。说妈妈的建议。 话者一般都是借助这个“虚拟情况”委婉表达一个 句型公式6：“sb.+谓语，as if sb.had done'”表 言外之意，达到一个特定的交流目的，在很大程度上 达形象生动 避免出现尴尬处境。例如： The glasses dropped into the river,as if the water If I had enough money,I would help you had swallowed them. 如果我有足够的钱，我就会帮助你。 眼镜掉到河里，好像被水吞没了。 分析：这句话的真正含义是I will not help you, 二、虚拟语气表达不同情绪 通过使用f条件句，help的行为便成了一种假设的 1.后悔、遗憾、悔恨 虚拟行为。听话者从该条件可以自己推断出这样的 If I had taken his advice,I wouldn't have been 结论：我可能不帮你。 trapped in the awful situation now! 一、虚拟语气的常用句式 如果我采纳了他的建议，我现在就不会被困在 句型公式l:“Ifsb.had done..,sb.would have 这个可怕的境地了！ done”或者“Had sb.done..,sb.would have 2.生气、愤怒 464 done”如果某人过去…，某人就 "If you had been more patient,the situation would (2023·新高考I卷)If I hadn't attended the not have been so terrible.”I couldn't contain my anger 026 contest,I wouldn't have won the gold medal! and shouted at him. 年 =Had I not attended the contest,I wouldn't “如果你能再耐心点，情况就不会那么糟糕，” have won the gold medal! 我不能抑制我的愤怒并大声对他喊叫。 如果我没有参加比赛，我就不会获得金牌！ 3.感激 的 句型公式2：“Without/But for..,sb.would 计 But for/Without his help,I wouldn't have got out have done'”要不是… of trouble.I owed all my luck to him. 衡 中 分析：该句式相当于If there had not been.·, If it had not been for his help.I wouldn't have 学 sb.would have done或者Had there not been.·,sb. got out of trouble.I owed all my luck to him. 案 would have done 如果没有他的帮助，我不可能走出困境。我把 (2023·新高考I卷)Without your recognition我所有的运气都归功于他。 and guidance,I couldn't have written this article. 即时演练5 Again thank you very much! I.用虚拟语气升级下列句子 如果没有你的认可和指导，我就不可能写这篇L.If it hadn't been for your advice,I wouldn't have 文章。再次非常感谢你！ succeeded. 句型公式3：“If only sb.had done.,."某人要 .I wouldn't have 是…就好了。 succeeded.but for/without) If only I had been the third runner who had got to 2.If you had taken my advice,you wouldn't have the finish line made such a mistake. 要是我是第三位到达终点线的跑步者该多 you wouldn't have 好啊！ made such a mistake.(倒装) 句型公式4：How sb.wished that.,.had(not) 3.If it had not been for your selfless help,I done sth.！某人多么希望… wouldn't have finally made great progress in my How Timmy wished that he hadn't been so rude English. to his coach！ I 蒂米多么希望他没有那么粗鲁的对待教练啊！ iwouldn't have finally made great progress in my 句型公式5：sb.+谓语，wishing that sb.had English.(倒装) I wouldn't He turned over the photo album, have finally made great progress in my English.but for/without) 4.没有埃里克的鼓励，我剩下的时间都沉浸在 Ⅱ.用虚拟语气完成/翻译下列句子 悲伤之中。 1.我几乎快要崩溃了。我多么希望我以前好好 I would 努力了。(how) have been immersed in sorrow for the rest of the day. I was almost on the edge of breaking down. 5.要不是我的粗鲁，我们就不会吵架了。 2.(2023·新高考I卷)“要不是因为你，先生， 我就不会成功的。”我衷心地感谢了他。（倒装） 6.“要是我当初听取了妈妈的建议该多好！”小 女孩低声对自己说。 ."I thanked him with heartfelt gratitude. 3.他翻了相册，希望自己昨晚参加了派对。 提分句式6运用倒装句，句子更亮眼 倒装句的使用丰富了语言表达，让句式更加多 他一意识到自己的错误就向朋友道歉。 样。因此，写作中适当用一些倒装句式会使文章的全部倒装6：Here/There/,Out/In/Up/Down/ 表达更生动、有力、让阅卷老师眼前一亮。 Away/Now/Then.,.+谓语（表示运动的不及物 部分倒装1：So+ad./ad.+be动词/助动词+ 动词)+主语 主语..hat..,如此…以至于… Following the roar,out rushed a tiger from During the exam,so nervous was I that my mind among the bushes. went blank. 一声吼叫，呼地从丛林中窜出一只老虎。 总 考试中我如此紧张以至于大脑一片空白。 全部倒装7：介词短语+谓语（不及物动词，如 部分倒装2：n,/ad./ad.+as/though+主语+lie,stand,.sit,exist,stretch,come)或系动词be 英 谓语，主句“尽管/虽然…” +主语（名词） 纪 Disappointed as/though I was,I still managed a In the doorway stood a man with a hammer. weak smile on my face. 门口站着一个拿锤子的人。 虽然我很失望，我依然挤出一丝微笑。 全部倒装8：分词短语+be+主语（名词） 翦 部分倒装3：0nly+状语/状语从句+助动词/情 Lying on the floor was a boy aged about 17. 态动词/be动词+主语+其他“只有…” 躺在地板上的是一个约17岁的男孩。 465 (2023·新高考I卷)Only by daring to try can 即时演练6 we make a breakthrough. I.用倒装升级下列句子 只有敢于尝试，我们才能取得突破。 1.Though we were stressed out,our eyes were (2022·新高考I卷)I encouraged David who glittering with hope. was at a loss,"Do keep in mind that only by → our eyes possessing a good state of mind can you attain were glittering with hope. success..” 2.Hearing the cry,the boy rushed out in an 我鼓励不知所措的大卫：“务必记住只有拥有良instant,,trying to find out what had happened.. 好的心态你才能获得成功。” ->Hearing the cry, 部分倒装4：Not until+状语/状语从句+助动词t trying to find out what had happened. +主语.. 3.The little girl was so particular about/over food Not until he had failed in the job interview did he that her parents shed tears of anxiety and worry. realize how important confidence was. 直到他面试失败，他才意识到自信是多么重要。 部分倒装5：Hardly had sb.done..when../No 4.I didn't realize a small act of care can melt sooner had sb.done..than..一…就 people's loneliness until I experienced the event. No sooner had he realized his mistake than he apologized to his friend. 5.Mike had hardly finished his performance when 3.他突然发现自己站在一座山的山脚下，山顶 the audience all rose to their feet,clapping wildly 上有一座古寺庙。 He suddenly found himself standing at the foot of a hill Ⅱ，用倒装完成/翻译下列句子 4.直到我经历了这场事故，我才意识到坏运气 1.(2022·新高考I卷)尽管他很痛苦，也有点 有可能是正在等待开启的门。 尴尬，但他仍然拖着脚继续前进。 bad fortune might be the door waiting to be he still dragged his feet to keep moving forward. opened 2.看到考试的结果，我是如此的绝望，我觉得自 5.我打开门，迈克尔站在那里，浑身都是泥。 己好像被撕成了碎片。 Seeing the result of the exam, 提分句式7运用强调句，习作更出彩 强调句型的使用是为了突出强调句子的某一部 分，它是一种比较容易掌握的高级表达方式。其构 成为：Itis/was+被强调部分+that/who+其他。 4.(2022·新高考I卷)Devin made his final (2023·新高考I卷)I said,“t's you who make decision at that moment me fall in love with writing,my social studies teacher." 466 我说：“是你让我爱上了写作，我的社会研究 老师。” Ⅱ.用强调句型翻译下列句子 026 It was not until then that I realized Mama lied to 1.(2023·新高考I卷)就在这时，一股暖流涌 年 us just out of love. 过了我的身体。 度 直到那时我才意识到出于爱，妈妈对我们说 创 新 了谎。 计 即时演练7 2.（2022·新高考I卷)正是他勇敢的心和坚强 I·用强调句型升级下列句子（强调黑体部分） 的信念，最终会让一些不寻常的事情发生。 衡 中 1.My determination and efforts helped me 学 achieve my dream. 案 3.正是这次特别的经历让我意识到宽恕是一种 重要的美德。 2.I came to know a truth-a small act of kindness can make a big difference on that day. 4.就在那天，我意识到爸爸在我这个年龄所取 得的成就比我所做的要大得多。 3.We created a harmonious atmosphere with sincerity and faithfulness. 第三节生动描写 叙述和描写都是记叙文写作中的主要表达方式。 l.叙述(narration)是将事情的前后经过记录下来，主要用来交代人物活动和事件经过，展开情节。 2.描写(description)则指通过各个感官的细节描述，用生动形象的语言把人物、景物的状态具体地描 绘出来。 高效技法1过程化：运用动作链，营造画面感 考生要学会分解动作，形成一个细化的动作链，的描述使描写空洞乏味，学生要善于捕捉这个关键 比如浙江高考读后续写中Mac遇到狼上车的动作，；的慢镜头，并将Mac的动作按照时间轴分解为jump 不是简单的get in the car就可以解决的，过于笼统off the bicycle-一dash into the back seat of the car- slam the door-lean against the seat,breathless grass,staring at the vast sky,frightened and 作链来描写，通过动作链可形成动作面，使情景具有！ravenous. 画面感，那么如何设计动作链和动作面呢？ 分析：此处将环境描写，动作描写以及情感描写 一、分解动作，形成动作链 结合在一起，形成了饱满的动作面。 句型公式1：主语+动作A,动作Band动作C 即时演练1 该句式中连词and连接三个或三个以上的动 I.根据提示，用英语写出动作链或动作面 作，构成动作链，动词的时态是一致的。 1.洛娜(Lorna)看夜空：走到窗前+打开窗户+ DI approached Dad,proudly took out of my 拾头看着外面的夜空。（并列谓语） own money and handed it to him 我走近爸爸，骄傲地拿出我自己的钱递给他。 2Her pulses beat fast,and the blood warmed 2.她看照片：拿起照片+盯着它看了一会儿+ and relaxed every inch of her body 小心翼翼地把它放进了相册里。（并列谓语） 她的心跳加快，热血温暖了全身，身心完全地放 松下来。 句型公式2：主语+动作Aand动作B,非谓语动 3.简沿着小溪走：感觉更强壮+沿着小溪走着 词/非谓语动词，主语+动作Aand动作B +希望它能把她带到湖边。（非谓语动词） 该句中连词and连接两个或两个以上的动作，构 成动作链。非谓语动词作状语，可置于句首或句尾。 (2023·新高考I卷)When I handed in the 4.他们仰望天空：站在空荡的路边+仰望天空 局 essay to my teacher,he read it,laughed out loud, +感受到珍贵的宁静。（非谓语动词） saying,“Great.Vow,write it again.” 轮 当我把文章交给我的老师时，他读了它，大声笑 着，说：“很好。现在，再写一遍。” 5.我跑步：穿着平常的跑步服+带着自信的微 Putting on his coat,he stormed out and 笑+迅速掠过了他们。（非谓语动词；介词短语） slammed the door shut. 他穿上外套，怒气冲冲地跑了出去，把门重重地 人 关上。 Ⅲ.运用动作链和动作面的技巧完善下面的作文 句型公式3：时间状语从句+主句 In the morning,as scheduled, 动作链的表达可用状语从句，如when,while, as,before,after引导的时间状语从句来体现。 (双胞胎早早起床，踮着脚走进了厨房 467 After I had left something in the cloakroom,I 从袋子里舀出面粉).Once they set about making went inside to get it. bread,they felt confused.At that time, 我在衣帽间落下了点东西，然后就进去拿了。 二、动作链可以和情感，环境，心理，语言等结 (他们的爸爸溜进厨 合，形成动作面 房，轻拍双胞胎的肩膀，柔声安慰道)，“Don't quit. DBurning with anger,he glared at me with his You can overcome the challenge."The twins made the bread smoothly.Then big frightening eyes,yelling,"You're such an idiot." 分析：此处的burning with anger是情感描写， (他们端 glare和yell是动作链，同时将动作和语言描写结合 着早餐，向楼上走去，喊醒他们的妈妈).With her 在了一起，形成了饱满的动作面，属于高分表达。 eyes glittering with excitement,so content was the 2As night was beginning to fall,Jane sat on the mother that she gathered her children into her arms 高效技法2精准化：精选动词，刻画具体的动作 不用抽象或虚化的动词描述，而是使用含义比 2The little boy hung his head and mumbled an 较精确的描写。试比较下面两句： apology to his mother. DThe little boy said sorry to his mother. 小男孩垂着头，咕哝着向他母亲道歉。 小男孩对他妈妈说对不起。about nature,and I've found three poems.Could you be kind enough to newspaper is scheduled to hold a writing competition,whose theme is help me choose the most suitable one?Besides,I hope you could also "Hand in Hand,Save the Food". give me some advice on how to recite it. Anyone in our school interested in the competition is welcome to I would be very grateful if you could offer me some help.Looking:participate.Entries should consist of an original piece of writing with forward to hearing from you soon! 400 words or fewer.They should be related to the theme and show how Yours sincerely we can contribute to saving food.Please mail your entry to our email Li Hua! address englishpaper@hotmail.com by January 31 and the result will 七、演讲稿 激情洋溢，畅所欲言 be published on May 1,2024. Looking forward to your active participation and creative writings. 演练提能 参考范文： 第二部分 读后续写 Good morning,everyone. Many teachers have taught me in my life but I think Miss Green is i the most respectable one. 第二讲续写文本解读 Miss Green teaches us English,who I think is smart and pretty. When I was in You can always see a smile on her face.She goes to school early and -,1.I,my social studies teacher,my older sister middle school in middle school goes back home late.She is helpful and patient.She is always ready to help students in need.She teaches English well.She tries her best to i 2.my social studies teacher I (a middle school student)my older sister make her lessons interesting.With her help we have made great 二、I.my teacher asked me to enter a writing contest→my teacher progress in English.She is not only a good teacher but also our close encouraged me to have a try-I chose a subject and began to write friend,playing with us after class and sharing little secrets with us. Miss Green loves us and is loved by us.We will respect her resistant-→*willing to do→persistent-→enjoyable forever. !3.1When I was in middle school,my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. 八、倡议书一发现问题，呼吁行动 2My family came from Brazil,so English was only my second 演练提能 language. 参考范文： 3Encouraged by his words,I agreed to give it a try. Say No to Phubbing 4When I finally finished it,the thought of winning had given way to With the wide use of the mobile phone,phubbers can be seen the enjoyment of writing.If I didn't win,I wouldn't care. everywhere-at home,in the office,on the bus,and on the street. 第三讲 续写情节构建 Those so-called phubbers usually lower their heads looking at their smartphones and ignore whatever happens around them.Needless to 第一节 拟定续写框架 say,it's bad manners to neglect your friends or family members around you.What's worse,phubbing can be dangerous.For example,if you 【情节设计】 stare at your phone while crossing the street,chances are that accidents 1.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. may happen. My fellow students,it's time to raise your head and pay attention 2.As a special education teacher at the school,I was familiar with the to people around you.Look at them,talk to them,and care about challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. them.After all,you should live in real life instead of virtual life. 二、作者鼓励David继续完成比赛→David经过激烈的心理斗争→ The Students'Union 最终决定参加比赛Dvid开始参赛→虽然中途遇到困难仍 然坚持到最后，完成比赛 九、投稿—抓住时机，直抒胸臆 第二节 续写情节优化 演练提能 参考范文： :【续写分析】 The impact of technology on our lives i1.(1)Did we share our ideas with each other? The impact of technology on our lives is profound,with both (2)Would that boy like to accept my opinions? benefits and drawbacks.Technology has greatly improved our efficiency, (3)What should I do when he ignored my advice? allowed for global communication,and enhanced our entertainment (4)How would I feel when he ignored my advice? options.It has revolutionized the way we communicate,learn,work, 2.(1)How would I feel when I got the news that he was admitted to and entertain ourselves.However,it has also led to issues such as eye hospital for a serious disease? strain,addiction,and privacy concerns.Balanced use is crucial to (2)Did I go to the hospital to see him? maximize its benefits as well as minimize its negative impacts.We must (3)How would he feel when he saw me in his ward? prioritize real-world interactions,protect our privacy,and ensure that (4)How did we do the project from then on? technology does not overshadow our daily lives. (5)Was the project completed on time? (6)Was the teacher satisfied with our project? 十、报道—所见所闻，客观陈述 (7)What did we learn from the project? 演练提能 第五讲续写语言提升 参考范文： A climbing event to celebrate the New Year 词汇升级 To welcome the new year,our school hosted a climbing activity on 第一节 New Year's Day 即时训练1 The climb began at 10 a.m.and lasted for an hour and a half. 1.selfish 2.merely 3.exhausted desperate 4.hurriedly We took part in a launching ceremony at the Happy Valley gate to5.event/experience war up before the climb began.We wrote our New Year's wishes on即时训练2 red ribbons and tied them to trees along the way,Reaching the top,wei1.More often than not 2.with regard to 3.burst into tears 4.Bear got a bird's-eye view of the entire resort. in mind 5.catch sight of 6.of importance 7.appeals to As"climbing high"symbolizes growth and new accomplishments ini8.worn out Chinese culture,the event helped demonstrate the spirit of "striving upward"and express our wishes for a happy and prosperous 2025. 第二节句式升级 十一、通知—提前告知，周全准备 即时训练1 : I.1.A wave of delight seized me 演练提能 2.a look of disappointment passed over/spread across/flashed her face 参考范文： 3.deprived him of his power of speech prevented him from speaking Welcome to Join the English Writing Competition words failed him To raise students'awareness of saving food,our school English 4.blood passed over/rushed to my head 646 5.Tears welled up in her eyes 4.Not until I experienced the accident was I aware that 6.a wave of guilt washed over me 5.I opened the door,and there stood Michael,all covered in mud. 7.A feeling of relief/Relief swept over him 即时训练7 8.(a sense of)fear seized her I.1.It was my determination and efforts that helped me achieve my II.1.surprise and unbelief surrounded me dream. 2.A feeling of incredible happiness swept over him 2.It was on that day that I came to know a truth-a small act of 3.her mother's tears gave way to laughter kindness can make a big difference. 4.Her face lit up with sheer delight and happiness 3.It was with sincerity and faithfulness that we created a harmonious 5.A burst of pride/Pride welled up inside her as she successfully saved atmosphere. the old man. 4.It was at that moment that Devin made his final decision. 6.The sadness robbed me of the power to say anything. II.1.It was at that moment that a warm surge of streams washed 即时训练2 through my body. 1.Satisfied with his performance 2.It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something 2.ready to let her see the anger and disappointment in my eyes unusual happen finally. 3.helpless and hopeless 3.It was the special experience that made me realize forgiving is an 4.Worried about her mother's health,she had to return home ahead of important virtue 4.It was on that day that I realized what Dad had accomplished at my 5.Five hours later,they arrived home eventually,tired but excited. age was much greater than I did. 6.Anxious about my daughter's safety,I called her many times. 即时训练3 第三节生动描写 I.1.resting her aching feet 即时训练1 2.Dressed in a Santa Claus costume I.1.Lorna came to the window,opened it and looked out up at the 3.slamming the door angrily night sky. 4.Having waited in line for an hour at the bank 2.She picked up the photo,stared at it for a while and placed it 5.Misunderstood by his teacher and laughed at by everyone carefully into the album. 6.Sitting down on the bench saying gently 3.Feeling stronger now,Jane walked along the stream,hoping that it 7.Having reviewed his lessons for a whole weekend at home would lead her to the lake. II.1.Hearing my teacher's encouragement 4.Standing beside the empty road,they looked up into the sky,feeling 2.Struck by his words the precious peace 3.Overwhelmed with cheers 5.Wearing my usual running clothes,I brushed past them with a 4.Knowing my strengths and weaknesses all too well confident smile. 5.Hearing that using all her strength II.the twins got up early,tiptoed to the kitchen and scooped some 6.Having promised that we would get there before five flour out of the bag their father slid into the kitchen,patting the 7.Feeling unbearably cold and exhausted twins'shoulders and comforting them in a soft voice they carried 8.Feeling a surge of sadness,she couldn't help crying. the breakfast,advanced upstairs and woke up their mother 即时训练4 即时训练2 I.1.his mouth dry and his legs trembling with his mouth dry and hisi 1.She crept along the path,bent over swiftly and cupped her hands legs trembling around the butterfly gently. 2.Her eyes sparkling With her eyes sparkling i2.She dashed forward,knelt down and gathered her son into her arms. 3.his face wearing a wam smile with his face wearing a warm smile i 3.The children rushed excitedly to the lake,took off their clothes and 4.her eyes full of tears with her eyes full of tears dived into the water. II.1.(with)tears blurring my eyes 4.The singer glanced at the audience,took a deep breath and began to 2.with a paper bag held tightly in her hand | sing 3.eyes sparkling with curiosity and a little uneasiness 5.The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder,and flashed a bright 4.With)his eyes fixed on the family album smile. 5.With)tears welling up in his eyes 6.Putting the book where it belonged,the boy tiptoed out of the room 6.With the sky turning dark gradually,Jane got lost in the forest. as lightly as possible. 7.He rushed to the room with his heart beating wildly and his face即时训练3 flushing. 1.hugged him tightly saying thankfully 8.He was lying on the grass,(with)his hands crossed under his head. :2.burst into a big toothy smile waved to me with excitement 即时训练5 i3.felt a gentle pat with a smile Amazingly I.1.Without/But for your advice i4.I was gradually overwhelmed by a strong sense of joy and happiness. 2.Had you taken my advice 5.He patted me gently.It is my considerate teacher who inspires me to 3.Had it not been for your selfless help face my fear bravely and positively. But for/Without your selfless help 6.Without hesitation,David nodded in agreement,finally deciding to II.1.How I wish I had worked hard before join in the cross-country team. 2.Had it not been for you,mister,I wouldn't have made it 7.When the students stepped off the bus,James's eyes widened in 3.wishing that he had joined the party last night surprise. 4.Without/But for Eric's encouragement 8.My teacher entered the classroom with an infectious smile spreading 5.But for my rudeness,we wouldn't have quarreled with each other. on his face. 6."If only I had listened to my mother's advice!"the little girl whispered to herself. 第六讲续写话题演练 即时训练6 Writing 1 I.1.Stressed out as/though we were 第一步 2.out rushed the boy in an instant I,my dad,Mr.Slaight,Mr.Slaight'secretary before working in 3.So particular about/over food was the little girl that her parents shed television at home,at Ryerson in Toronto,at the station A dream of tears of anxiety and worry. working in television-my dad encouraged me-I was admitted to the 4.Not until I experienced the event did I realize a small act of care can radio and television arts program-His secretary asked me to come and melt people's loneliness. audition for a new school life show ambitious-afraid-confident- 5.Hardly had Mike finished his perfommance when the audience all rose anxious-→excited努力奋斗，实现梦想 to their feet,clapping wildly. 第二步 II.1.Painful and a bit embarrassed as/though he was :1.只有我面试通过，这样才有机会在电视上表演。所以我的表现 2.so desperate was I that I felt as if I were torn into pieces 最后一定是不错的，并且获得了面试机会。开始感到紧张+受 3.on top of which stood an old temple 到鼓励→建立信心→努力排练 647