Unit 5 Education 看图作文（单元同步写作讲义）英语北师大版2019选择性必修第二册

Unit 5 Education看图作文 同步写作课讲义-北师大版2019选择性必修第二册 ( ⭐话题解读⭐ ) 图画作文大致可分为两类：事件记叙类和描画感怀类。对于事件记叙类图画作文而言，要求考生按照图画次序将事件的发生、发展及结果表达出来，此类图画作文主要采用叙述这一表达方式。描图感怀类图画作文要求考生首先描写图画内容，之后在图画内容的基础上表达个人感想，此类图画作文通常采用描写和议论的写作手法。 ( ⭐写作任务⭐ ) 本单元写作要求是学会写叙事类图画作文，步奏如下： 方法指导五步法: 1.仔细审题:包括文体,人称,时态. 理解到位：整体把握一组图的连贯性理解及题目要求。 2.归纳要点:保证文章内容的完整. 基础到位：用简单句写出每幅图的主题句。 3.扩展成句:注意英语表达的习惯,根据提纲扩展句子. 细节到位：注意每幅图的次要内容（时间，地点，方式，原因等） 4.连句成篇:利用一些表示转折,因果,选择等关系的关联词和过渡句,把句子连接起来. 表达到位：按情节发展先后，承上启下整理成文。 5.全面检查:格式文体要点语法字数等. // 检查到位：对照各幅图，检查全文定稿。 ( ⭐审题指导⭐ ) 　　如今,随着智能手机等电子设备的普及,人们沉迷于手机等电子设备而忽略了和他人的沟通交流。请根据下图写一篇英语短文,内容要点如下: 1.描述图画内容; 2.针对图画内容加以分析; 3.针对该现象提出自己的看法或建议。 注意:1.词数80左右; 2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 写作步骤 1.描述图画的内容 2.分析图画现象 3.提出看法和建议 ( ⭐写作框架⭐ ) ( ⭐素材宝库⭐ ) ( 词汇积累 ) 1.vivid adj.生动的,逼真的  2.enthusiastic adj.热衷的  3.obvious adj.显然的,明显的  4.imply vt.表明;意味着  5.tendency n.倾向  6.restrict vt.约束,限制  7.precious adj.宝贵的  8.be of great significance非常重要   ( 句型积累 ) 1.开头:根据画面,予以描述 ①This is an interesting but thought-provoking picture.这是一幅有趣但是引人深思的图画。 ②From the picture we can see that...从图画上我们可以看到…… ③As is vividly shown in the picture...正如画中生动显示的那样…… 2.主体:分析现象,找出原因 ①There are two main reasons. On the one hand...On the other hand...有两个主要原因。一方面……另一方面…… ②There are three reasons for this phenomenon. To begin with...What's more...Last but not least...产生这个现象有三个原因。首先……其次……最后但同样重要的是…… 3.结尾:总结问题,提出建议 ①We ought to/should...我们应该…… ②It is suggested/advised that...建议…… ③Consequently/As a result...因此…… ④In consequence/In brief/To sum up/In conclusion/To summarize/All in all...总之/简而言之/作为结论/总之/总的来说…… ( ⭐参考范文⭐ ) 　　As can be seen from the vivid picture, a big family get together to have a splendid dinner. But at the table, the young are enthusiastic about playing with their electronic devices, regardless of the elders' obvious awkwardness and disappointment. The picture implies that electronic devices have bad influence on our lives. Overuse of electronic devices widens the distance between teenagers and their elders. Worse still, young addicts have a tendency to show poor academic performance, adding to the elders' worry. 　　As far as I'm concerned, it is of great significance to restrict the time we spend on electronic devices and value precious face-to-face communication with our family members, which contributes to a harmonious family atmosphere. ( ⭐写作拓展⭐ ) ( 变式提升训练 ) 1．（2024·陕西汉中·一模）In your spoken English class, your teacher slows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it. 注意：词数100左右 基本分析： 1.三分之一描写要点：阳光，楼(很靠近)，弯曲的树。(the sun，two apartments flats closely-locate d.the winding/twisted tree) 2.三分之二议论着眼立意： —人生角度：在成长的道路上(树的成长)，有曲折，有困难，(建筑的阻挡，弯曲)但是只要向着光明和希望(太阳)去努力拼搏，坚持不懈，还是能够冲破桎梏取得成功(树在楼的夹缝中长高了，超出建筑)。 3.立意与现实生活关系：引导青年学生要具有积极的生活态度，生活就是不断克服各种艰难险阻而取得“大直若曲”的成功与胜利。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．（2023·江西抚州·模拟预测）请你根据下面图片，以“Labor Education Counts”为题写一篇英语短文，内容包括： 1.你对图片的解读； 2.你的一次劳动体验。 注意：1.词数100左右； 2.题目已为你写好。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．（22-23高三上·山西太原·阶段练习）假如你是李华，你们学校要举行一个主题为“Nature is our best teacher”的英语作文比赛，请根据你对下图的理解写一篇参赛文章，内容包括： 1. 简要描述图画内容; 2. 概述图画内容对你的启示。 注意：1. 词数100左右; 2. 可设当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 读后续写 ( ⭐审题指导⭐ ) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the big cross­country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him，” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.” I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross­country team. It just took him longer—that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意：续写词数应为150左右。 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第一步　读原文——弄清信息点， 梳理两情线 阅读原文，理清故事中的人物、时间、地点、冲突，确定原文大意和主题，故事情节的发展脉络。把握如下关键信息： What (事件) figured out the reason why David hesitated whether to run or not Who (人物) David，I (a special education teacher)，the coach Where (地点) the scene where the big cross­country run would take place Why (起因) David, a disabled and determined boy, gave up taking part in the competition because of being laughed at by other boys. How (发展) 第二步　细读首句　构思框架 结合对原文脉络和两情线的把握，根据两段所给首句中的已知信息推测新信息，合理推断续写框架。 1．以两首句，定续写框架 两段首句定一框： ①第一段开头句衔接段首句“我们挨着坐着，但大卫不看我”，由此可描写David决定不参加比赛后的神态，心理状态→我设法劝说、鼓励David参加比赛。 ②尾句：根据第二段所给句中的关键信息句可想象David决定参加比赛。 二框二首正能量： ①第二段开头句衔接段首句可知“大卫开始参赛”，可写David比赛过程中遇到什么困难→观众的鼓励→David的反应→坚持到最后，完成比赛。 ②尾句：完成比赛的感悟。 2．兼顾两情相悦 ·续写部分情节线体现：David决定不参加比赛→作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛→大卫强烈的心理斗争→David最终决定参加比赛。 ·人物的情感变化线：(David)伤心→(I)frustrated→(David)determined 第三步　完成续写——精细打磨续写语言，丰富细节描写 一、细节描写　学涉笔成雅 续写部分应沿用原文语言特点衔接呼应，同时利用丰富的句式使续写部分斐然成章。 1．续写对David决定不参加比赛的心理、动作描写细腻，体现出David的无助、矛盾的心理状态。 2．在描写鼓励David参加比赛时，利用直接引语呈现人物对话，栩栩如生。 ( ⭐审题指导⭐ ) 续写第一段(侧重描写鼓励David参加比赛) 1．他低下头，尽量避免和我有眼神接触 ①He hung his head and tried to avoid eye contact with me.(双连动词) ②He hung his head, trying to avoid eye contact with me. (非谓语动词作状语) 2．他咬着嘴唇点了点头。 He nodded，biting his lip. (非谓语动词作状语) 3．仔细想了想，我提到了一些让人对他的决心和毅力赞不绝口的事情。 Having thought it over, I mentioned some events which won people's praise for his determination and perseverance. 4．但如果你不跑步是因为你害怕被嘲笑，这就不是一个足够好的理由。 But if you're not running because you're afraid of being laughed at, that's not a good enough reason. (条件状语从句) 5．听了我的话，他终于下定决心要跑步，我催促他去起跑线。 ①When he heard my words, he finally made up his mind to run and I urged him to go to the starting line．(时间状语从句) ②Hearing my words, he finally made up his mind to run and I urged him to go to the starting line．( 分词作状语) 续写第二段(侧重比赛场景描写和情感细节描写) 6．大卫坚定地站在自己的位置上，无视周围的一切。 David stood firmly in his position，ignoring anything around. (分词作状语) 7．幸运的是，全场爆发出雷鸣般的欢呼声和掌声。 Luckily, the audience burst into thunderous cheers and applause． 8．在热情和鼓励的鼓舞下，大卫兴高采烈地加快了脚步。 Inspired by the enthusiasm and encouragement, David quickened his pace in high spirits. (分词作状语) 9．他看到早餐时装出惊讶的样子。 He faked astonishment when he saw the breakfast. 满分结尾句(升华主题式结尾) 10．有了征服自己的力量，他就能征服通向美好未来的路上的任何事情。 With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future.(with复合结构) ( ⭐参考范文⭐ ) We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. He hung his head, trying to avoid eye contact with me. I asked him if he really decided not to run. He nodded, biting his lip. Having thought it over, I mentioned some events which won people's praise for his determination and perseverance. Then I quietly said, “David, if you don't want to run today, no one is going to make you do. But if you're not running because you're afraid of being laughed at, that's not a good enough reason. The real question is whether you are going to let those few people stop you from doing something you really want to do. ” Hearing my words, he finally made up his mind to run and I urged him to go to the starting line. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.David stood firmly in his position, ignoring anything around. But he had only gone a few metres before he tripped and fell flat on the ground. My heart sank. Luckily, the audience burst into thunderous cheers and applause. Inspired by the enthusiasm and encouragement, David quickened his pace in high spirits. It turned out that he crossed the finish line eventually. Seeing his confident smiles, I sighed in relief. With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future. ( ⭐写作拓展⭐ ) ( 变式提升训练 ) （24-25高二下·安徽·期中）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The final buzzer sounded, signaling the end of my high school basketball career. As I walked off the court for the last time, the scoreboard displayed our disturbing loss: 68-72. My heart sank as I realized I’d never wear the blue and gold jersey again. The locker room was unusually quiet that night. No one spoke as we changed out of our uniforms. I sat on the wooden bench, staring at the number 23 on my jersey, remembering how proud I’d been when I first earned it three years ago. My fingers traced the slightly worn edges where I’d pulled it on and off countless times. “Hey, Mike,” Coach Johnson’s voice broke the silence. “Can I talk to you for a minute?” I followed him to his office, the weight of the loss still heavy in my chest. “Mike,” he began, his voice softer than usual, “I know tonight didn’t go the way we wanted, but I want you to know something.” He leaned forward, his elbows on the desk. “You’ve been the heart of this team for three years. Your leadership, your dedication — it’s been remarkable to watch.” I opened my mouth to protest, but he held up his hand. “Basketball is about more than just winning games,” he continued. “It’s about the lessons we learn, the character we build. And you, Mike, have grown into an exceptional young man through this sport.” As I left the locker room that night, I noticed a group of students waiting outside. Among them was Emily Carter, a quiet girl from my English class who I’d partnered with on a project last semester. “Mike,” she said hesitantly, stepping forward. “We just wanted to say… thank you.” I blinked, confused. “Thank me? For what?” “For always playing with heart,” she said, her voice gaining confidence. “Win or lose, you never gave up. You inspired us to keep trying in our own lives, even when things get tough.” The other students nodded in agreement, and in that moment, I realized that maybe Coach Johnson was right. Maybe basketball was about more than just the score at the end of the game. 注意： 1．续写词数应为150左右; 2．请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 I stood there, my basketball bag slung over my shoulder, completely astonished by their words. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ When I got home, the porch light was on, and I could see my parents waiting through the living room window. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ( 7 ) 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Unit 5 Education看图作文 同步写作课讲义-北师大版2019选择性必修第二册 ( ⭐话题解读⭐ ) 图画作文大致可分为两类：事件记叙类和描画感怀类。对于事件记叙类图画作文而言，要求考生按照图画次序将事件的发生、发展及结果表达出来，此类图画作文主要采用叙述这一表达方式。描图感怀类图画作文要求考生首先描写图画内容，之后在图画内容的基础上表达个人感想，此类图画作文通常采用描写和议论的写作手法。 ( ⭐写作任务⭐ ) 本单元写作要求是学会写叙事类图画作文，步奏如下： 方法指导五步法: 1.仔细审题:包括文体,人称,时态. 理解到位：整体把握一组图的连贯性理解及题目要求。 2.归纳要点:保证文章内容的完整. 基础到位：用简单句写出每幅图的主题句。 3.扩展成句:注意英语表达的习惯,根据提纲扩展句子. 细节到位：注意每幅图的次要内容（时间，地点，方式，原因等） 4.连句成篇:利用一些表示转折,因果,选择等关系的关联词和过渡句,把句子连接起来. 表达到位：按情节发展先后，承上启下整理成文。 5.全面检查:格式文体要点语法字数等. // 检查到位：对照各幅图，检查全文定稿。 ( ⭐审题指导⭐ ) 　　如今,随着智能手机等电子设备的普及,人们沉迷于手机等电子设备而忽略了和他人的沟通交流。请根据下图写一篇英语短文,内容要点如下: 1.描述图画内容; 2.针对图画内容加以分析; 3.针对该现象提出自己的看法或建议。 注意:1.词数80左右; 2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 写作步骤 1.描述图画的内容 2.分析图画现象 3.提出看法和建议 ( ⭐写作框架⭐ ) ( ⭐素材宝库⭐ ) ( 词汇积累 ) 1.vivid adj.生动的,逼真的  2.enthusiastic adj.热衷的  3.obvious adj.显然的,明显的  4.imply vt.表明;意味着  5.tendency n.倾向  6.restrict vt.约束,限制  7.precious adj.宝贵的  8.be of great significance非常重要   ( 句型积累 ) 1.开头:根据画面,予以描述 ①This is an interesting but thought-provoking picture.这是一幅有趣但是引人深思的图画。 ②From the picture we can see that...从图画上我们可以看到…… ③As is vividly shown in the picture...正如画中生动显示的那样…… 2.主体:分析现象,找出原因 ①There are two main reasons. On the one hand...On the other hand...有两个主要原因。一方面……另一方面…… ②There are three reasons for this phenomenon. To begin with...What's more...Last but not least...产生这个现象有三个原因。首先……其次……最后但同样重要的是…… 3.结尾:总结问题,提出建议 ①We ought to/should...我们应该…… ②It is suggested/advised that...建议…… ③Consequently/As a result...因此…… ④In consequence/In brief/To sum up/In conclusion/To summarize/All in all...总之/简而言之/作为结论/总之/总的来说…… ( ⭐参考范文⭐ ) 　　As can be seen from the vivid picture, a big family get together to have a splendid dinner. But at the table, the young are enthusiastic about playing with their electronic devices, regardless of the elders' obvious awkwardness and disappointment. The picture implies that electronic devices have bad influence on our lives. Overuse of electronic devices widens the distance between teenagers and their elders. Worse still, young addicts have a tendency to show poor academic performance, adding to the elders' worry. 　　As far as I'm concerned, it is of great significance to restrict the time we spend on electronic devices and value precious face-to-face communication with our family members, which contributes to a harmonious family atmosphere. ( ⭐写作拓展⭐ ) ( 变式提升训练 ) 1．（2024·陕西汉中·一模）In your spoken English class, your teacher slows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it. 注意：词数100左右 基本分析： 1.三分之一描写要点：阳光，楼(很靠近)，弯曲的树。(the sun，two apartments flats closely-locate d.the winding/twisted tree) 2.三分之二议论着眼立意： —人生角度：在成长的道路上(树的成长)，有曲折，有困难，(建筑的阻挡，弯曲)但是只要向着光明和希望(太阳)去努力拼搏，坚持不懈，还是能够冲破桎梏取得成功(树在楼的夹缝中长高了，超出建筑)。 3.立意与现实生活关系：引导青年学生要具有积极的生活态度，生活就是不断克服各种艰难险阻而取得“大直若曲”的成功与胜利。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】In the picture, between two closely-located buildings grows a big tree. Unlike most trees, this one — bends in the middle, struggling all the way up to get more sunshine. The picture reminds me of those who succeed in unfavorable condition. Faced with difficulties, they never give up but try their best to find a way out. Life can be hard. But if we have the courage and determination, we will finally get the sunshine we want as the tree in the picture does. 【导语】本篇书面表达属于图画作文。要求考生描述这幅画并解释你是如何理解它的。 【详解】1. 词汇积累 不利的：unfavorable→detrimental 困难：difficulty→trouble 尽最大努力：try one’s best→do one’s best 获得：get→obtain 2. 句式拓展 简单句变复合句 原句：Faced with difficulties, they never give up but try their best to find a way out. 拓展句：The people who are faced with difficulties never give up but try their best to find a way out. 【点睛】[高分句型1]The picture reminds me of those who succeed in unfavorable condition.(who引导的定语从句) [高分句型2]But if we have the courage and determination, we will finally get the sunshine we want as the tree in the picture does.(if引导条件状语从句，省略关系代词的定语从句和as引导的方式状语从句) 2．（2023·江西抚州·模拟预测）请你根据下面图片，以“Labor Education Counts”为题写一篇英语短文，内容包括： 1.你对图片的解读； 2.你的一次劳动体验。 注意：1.词数100左右； 2.题目已为你写好。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Labor Education Counts The picture vividly illustrates that labor education plays an important role in nurturing teenagers’ development, cultivating their all-round development of morality, intelligence and physique. Just like the tree in the picture, it is thriving on the boy’s watering. When it comes to my experiences of labour, making a fruit plate after Tiktok struck me as an unforgettable one. I first collected some kinds of fruit like apples, oranges, strawberries and bananas. Then came the most challenging part, cutting them into the style in the video, which took me about thirty minutes. After that, I shaped them on a plate into a blossoming flower with delicious sauce. To my delight, when I served it to my families, they all spoke highly of it. No pains, no gains. Through the hands-on experience, not only do I gain a sense of achievement, but I also appreciate that labour itself is a kind of enjoyment and a must for our personal growth. 【导语】本篇书面表达属于夹叙夹议文。要求考生以“Labor Education Counts”为题，描述对所给图片的解读，并讲述一次劳动的体验。 【详解】1.词汇积累 重要的：important →significant 难以忘怀的：unforgettable → memorable 美味的：delicious →delicate 赞扬：speak highly of → applaud 2.句式拓展 强调句 原句：The picture vividly illustrates that labor education plays an important role in nurturing teenagers’ development, cultivating their all-round development of morality, intelligence and physique. 拓展句：The picture vividly illustrates that it is labor education that plays an important role in nurturing teenagers’ development, cultivating their all-round development of morality, intelligence and physique. 【点睛】【高分句型1】The picture vividly illustrates that labor education plays an important role in nurturing teenagers’ development, cultivating their all-round development of morality, intelligence and physique.（运用了that引导的宾语从句，动名词作宾语） 【高分句型2】Then came the most challenging part, cutting them into the style in the video, which took me about thirty minutes. （运用了倒装句，which引导的非限定性定语从句） 3．（22-23高三上·山西太原·阶段练习）假如你是李华，你们学校要举行一个主题为“Nature is our best teacher”的英语作文比赛，请根据你对下图的理解写一篇参赛文章，内容包括： 1. 简要描述图画内容; 2. 概述图画内容对你的启示。 注意：1. 词数100左右; 2. 可设当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】One possible version: As we all know, nature is often regarded as our best teacher, so it’s not surprising for us to draw wisdom from it. As long as we carefully observe and study, we will take inspiration from it. As the picture shows, there are two birds, one sleeping while the other with a worm in its mouth. This presents a well-known Chinese idiom “The early bird catches the worm”. The idiom reminds us of the importance of diligence. It is also a metaphor that preparation plays an important role on the road to success. Opportunities are always for those prepared minds, and only when we are well-prepared can we make achievements, attaining our goals. 【导语】这是一篇图画作文。要求考生先描绘图上所展示的内容，再概述图画内容对自己的启示。 【详解】1.词汇积累 被看作，被认为：be regarded as→be considered as 重要性：importance→significance 起重要作用：play an important role→play an important part 达到：attain→achieve 2.句型拓展 同义句转换 原句：As the picture shows, there are two birds, one sleeping while the other with a worm in its mouth. 拓展句：What the picture shows is that there are two birds, one sleeping while the other with a worm in its mouth. 【点睛】[高分句型1]As long as we carefully observe and study, we will take inspiration from it. （运用了as long as引导的条件状语从句） [高分句型2]Opportunities are always for those prepared minds, and only when we are well-prepared can we make achievements, attaining our goals.（运用了部分倒装） 读后续写 ( ⭐审题指导⭐ ) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the big cross­country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him，” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.” I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross­country team. It just took him longer—that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意：续写词数应为150左右。 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第一步　读原文——弄清信息点， 梳理两情线 阅读原文，理清故事中的人物、时间、地点、冲突，确定原文大意和主题，故事情节的发展脉络。把握如下关键信息： What (事件) figured out the reason why David hesitated whether to run or not Who (人物) David，I (a special education teacher)，the coach Where (地点) the scene where the big cross­country run would take place Why (起因) David, a disabled and determined boy, gave up taking part in the competition because of being laughed at by other boys. How (发展) 第二步　细读首句　构思框架 结合对原文脉络和两情线的把握，根据两段所给首句中的已知信息推测新信息，合理推断续写框架。 1．以两首句，定续写框架 两段首句定一框： ①第一段开头句衔接段首句“我们挨着坐着，但大卫不看我”，由此可描写David决定不参加比赛后的神态，心理状态→我设法劝说、鼓励David参加比赛。 ②尾句：根据第二段所给句中的关键信息句可想象David决定参加比赛。 二框二首正能量： ①第二段开头句衔接段首句可知“大卫开始参赛”，可写David比赛过程中遇到什么困难→观众的鼓励→David的反应→坚持到最后，完成比赛。 ②尾句：完成比赛的感悟。 2．兼顾两情相悦 ·续写部分情节线体现：David决定不参加比赛→作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛→大卫强烈的心理斗争→David最终决定参加比赛。 ·人物的情感变化线：(David)伤心→(I)frustrated→(David)determined 第三步　完成续写——精细打磨续写语言，丰富细节描写 一、细节描写　学涉笔成雅 续写部分应沿用原文语言特点衔接呼应，同时利用丰富的句式使续写部分斐然成章。 1．续写对David决定不参加比赛的心理、动作描写细腻，体现出David的无助、矛盾的心理状态。 2．在描写鼓励David参加比赛时，利用直接引语呈现人物对话，栩栩如生。 ( ⭐审题指导⭐ ) 续写第一段(侧重描写鼓励David参加比赛) 1．他低下头，尽量避免和我有眼神接触 ①He hung his head and tried to avoid eye contact with me.(双连动词) ②He hung his head, trying to avoid eye contact with me. (非谓语动词作状语) 2．他咬着嘴唇点了点头。 He nodded，biting his lip. (非谓语动词作状语) 3．仔细想了想，我提到了一些让人对他的决心和毅力赞不绝口的事情。 Having thought it over, I mentioned some events which won people's praise for his determination and perseverance. 4．但如果你不跑步是因为你害怕被嘲笑，这就不是一个足够好的理由。 But if you're not running because you're afraid of being laughed at, that's not a good enough reason. (条件状语从句) 5．听了我的话，他终于下定决心要跑步，我催促他去起跑线。 ①When he heard my words, he finally made up his mind to run and I urged him to go to the starting line．(时间状语从句) ②Hearing my words, he finally made up his mind to run and I urged him to go to the starting line．( 分词作状语) 续写第二段(侧重比赛场景描写和情感细节描写) 6．大卫坚定地站在自己的位置上，无视周围的一切。 David stood firmly in his position，ignoring anything around. (分词作状语) 7．幸运的是，全场爆发出雷鸣般的欢呼声和掌声。 Luckily, the audience burst into thunderous cheers and applause． 8．在热情和鼓励的鼓舞下，大卫兴高采烈地加快了脚步。 Inspired by the enthusiasm and encouragement, David quickened his pace in high spirits. (分词作状语) 9．他看到早餐时装出惊讶的样子。 He faked astonishment when he saw the breakfast. 满分结尾句(升华主题式结尾) 10．有了征服自己的力量，他就能征服通向美好未来的路上的任何事情。 With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future.(with复合结构) ( ⭐参考范文⭐ ) We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. He hung his head, trying to avoid eye contact with me. I asked him if he really decided not to run. He nodded, biting his lip. Having thought it over, I mentioned some events which won people's praise for his determination and perseverance. Then I quietly said, “David, if you don't want to run today, no one is going to make you do. But if you're not running because you're afraid of being laughed at, that's not a good enough reason. The real question is whether you are going to let those few people stop you from doing something you really want to do. ” Hearing my words, he finally made up his mind to run and I urged him to go to the starting line. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.David stood firmly in his position, ignoring anything around. But he had only gone a few metres before he tripped and fell flat on the ground. My heart sank. Luckily, the audience burst into thunderous cheers and applause. Inspired by the enthusiasm and encouragement, David quickened his pace in high spirits. It turned out that he crossed the finish line eventually. Seeing his confident smiles, I sighed in relief. With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future. ( ⭐写作拓展⭐ ) ( 变式提升训练 ) （24-25高二下·安徽·期中）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The final buzzer sounded, signaling the end of my high school basketball career. As I walked off the court for the last time, the scoreboard displayed our disturbing loss: 68-72. My heart sank as I realized I’d never wear the blue and gold jersey again. The locker room was unusually quiet that night. No one spoke as we changed out of our uniforms. I sat on the wooden bench, staring at the number 23 on my jersey, remembering how proud I’d been when I first earned it three years ago. My fingers traced the slightly worn edges where I’d pulled it on and off countless times. “Hey, Mike,” Coach Johnson’s voice broke the silence. “Can I talk to you for a minute?” I followed him to his office, the weight of the loss still heavy in my chest. “Mike,” he began, his voice softer than usual, “I know tonight didn’t go the way we wanted, but I want you to know something.” He leaned forward, his elbows on the desk. “You’ve been the heart of this team for three years. Your leadership, your dedication — it’s been remarkable to watch.” I opened my mouth to protest, but he held up his hand. “Basketball is about more than just winning games,” he continued. “It’s about the lessons we learn, the character we build. And you, Mike, have grown into an exceptional young man through this sport.” As I left the locker room that night, I noticed a group of students waiting outside. Among them was Emily Carter, a quiet girl from my English class who I’d partnered with on a project last semester. “Mike,” she said hesitantly, stepping forward. “We just wanted to say… thank you.” I blinked, confused. “Thank me? For what?” “For always playing with heart,” she said, her voice gaining confidence. “Win or lose, you never gave up. You inspired us to keep trying in our own lives, even when things get tough.” The other students nodded in agreement, and in that moment, I realized that maybe Coach Johnson was right. Maybe basketball was about more than just the score at the end of the game. 注意： 1．续写词数应为150左右; 2．请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 I stood there, my basketball bag slung over my shoulder, completely astonished by their words. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ When I got home, the porch light was on, and I could see my parents waiting through the living room window. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version I stood there, my basketball bag slung over my shoulder, completely astonished by their words. My throat tightened as I struggled to find the right response. “I…I don’t know what to say,” I finally managed, my voice cracking slightly. “I thought tonight was a failure, but hearing this…it means more than any game we could have won.” Emily stepped forward and handed me a small blue and gold ribbon — our school colors. “We made these for the whole team,” she explained. “to remind you that you’re all champions to us, no matter what the scoreboard says.” As I took the ribbon, I felt a warmth spread through me, melting away the disappointment of the loss. When I got home, the porch light was on, and I could see my parents waiting through the living room window. As I opened the door, my little sister came running, her eyes wide with excitement. “Mike! Mike! Did you win?” she asked eagerly. I knelt down to her level and showed her the ribbon. “We didn’t win the game,” I said, “but something even more important happened tonight.” As we sat around the kitchen table, I told them about the students’ unexpected show of support. My mom’s eyes glistened with tears as she listened, and my dad put a firm hand on my shoulder. “That,” he said, “is what true victory looks like.” That night, as I lay in bed, the ribbon pinned to my bulletin board, I realized that while my time as a high school basketball player was over, the lessons and connections I’d made would stay with me forever. 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，文章讲述了作者作为高中篮球运动员的最后一场比赛以失利告终，赛后陷入失落。教练约翰逊肯定了作者三年来的领导力和奉献精神，指出篮球的意义不止于输赢，更在于成长与品格塑造。当作者离开更衣室时，一群学生等候致谢，称作者在球场上始终全力以赴、永不言弃的精神激励了他们在生活中坚持努力。最终，作者领悟到篮球的价值远超比赛结果，更在于对他人的积极影响和自我成长。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“我站在那里，肩上挎着篮球包，完全被他们的话惊呆了。”可知，第一段可描写作者被同学们致谢的话感动，领悟到篮球的价值远超比赛结果。 ②由第二段首句内容“当我回到家时，门廊的灯亮着，我可以通过客厅的窗户看到我的父母正等着我。”可知，第二段可描写作者给家人讲述篮球比赛失败，但是学到了更宝贵的内容的过程。 2.续写线索：感到惊讶——同学们致谢和支持——感到温暖——回到家——给家人讲述过程——感悟 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①迈步：step forward / make a step ②解释：explain/expound ③发生：happen/take place 情绪类 ①失望：disappointment/be disappointed ②激动的：with excitement/be excited 【点睛】[高分句型1]As I took the ribbon, I felt a warmth spread through me, melting away the disappointment of the loss.(运用了as引导的时间状语从句) [高分句型2]“That,” he said, “is what true victory looks like.”(运用了what引导的表语从句) [高分句型3]That night, as I lay in bed, the ribbon pinned to my bulletin board, I realized that while my time as a high school basketball player was over, the lessons and connections I’d made would stay with me forever.(运用了that连接的宾语从句和while引导的让步状语从句) ( 7 ) 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $