Unit 4 Growing up 介绍对你影响最深的人（单元写作精练）英语牛津译林版九年级上册

Unit 4 Growing up 介绍对你影响最深的人 单元写作精练 写作主题 识 写作主题：介绍对你影响最深的人 核心写作目标： 本单元的话题是“成长”,写作内容主要涉及介绍在成长过程中对自己有影响的人或事物。在具体的写作中,学生应做到以下几点: 1.能够列举具体的事例来表达成长过程中对自己影响最大的人或者事物; 2.能够运用所学词汇和句型对人物或事物进行评价。 写作框架： I. 开头段 (Introduction - 点明人物与核心影响) 1. 开门见山:用一句引人注目的句子引出人物或“影响”的主题。 2. 明确人物:清晰说明这个人是谁（姓名或关系，如 My father, Ms. Lee, my best friend Tom）。 3. 核心影响:用一句话概括这个人对你最大的、最核心的影响是什么（品质、观念、技能等）。 主体段 (Body Paragraphs - 详述影响与具体事例) 1. 主题句 : 明确说明这个人影响的第一个具体方面（品质、态度、技能、观念等）。例: "My grandfather's most valuable lesson was the importance of kindness." 2. 具体事例: 描述一件具体的事情（时间、地点、情境），详细说明这个人做了什么或说了什么。 3. 影响分析 : 解释这件事如何影响了你的思想、行为或成长？你现在怎么做/想不同了？ 结尾段 (Conclusion - 总结升华) 1. 重申核心影响 :*再次强调这个人对你成长的整体重要性（呼应开头）。 2. 总结具体影响 :简要总结1-2个主要的影响方面（品质/观念/技能等）。 3.表达情感与未来展望 :表达你的感激之情，并说明这些影响将如何持续帮助你面对未来的成长。 有用表达： 品德修养： 1. quality品质；人品 2. spirit精神 3. honesty诚实 4. kindness善良 5. admire钦佩 6. independent独立的 7. positive积极的 8. moral道德的 9. grateful感激的 10. behave politely举止文明 　　　　　 11. respect each other相互尊重 12. keep promises信守承诺 　　　　　 13. strong will坚强的意志 14. be friendly to对……友好 　　　　　 15. be responsible for对……负责 16. be patient with对……有耐心 　　　 17. be thankful to others感恩他人 18. be ready to help others乐于助人 　　　19. never give up永不放弃 自我认识与提升： 1. influence影响 2. experience经验；经历 3. dare敢于 4. require需要 5. fail失败 6. silent不说话的；沉默的 7. helpful有帮助的 8. valuable宝贵的 9. seldom很少 10. deal with应对；处理 11. in public公开地 12. in person亲身；亲自 13. take pride in为……感到自豪 　　　 14. be proud of为……骄傲 15. make plans制订计划 　　　　　 16. manage time管理时间 17. overcome challenges克服挑战 　　 18. stick to doing sth.坚持做某事 19. achieve the goal实现目标 　　　　 20. take… seriously认真对待…… 21. as long as只要 　　　　　 22. learn from mistakes从错误中学习 23. make progress取得进步 真题示例： 在成长的漫漫旅途中，我们总会邂逅一些如明灯般照亮我们前行道路的人。或许是为 我们构筑温暖港湾的父母；或许是为我们开启知识殿堂大门的恩师；又或许是陪伴我们共克时艰的挚友。在你心中，究竟谁才是那个影响你最深的人呢？学校英语社团在举办征文比赛，请你根据以下提示内容，以“The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most”为题，根据以下要点和要求，用英语写一篇短文。 写作要求： (1)文中不要出现所在学校的校名和师生姓名； (2)词数100左右。 The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most My mother is the person who has influenced me most. She is in her forties. She always listens to my problems patiently. And she advises me on how to solve them. As a doctor, she often says she can’t be too careful. She often works extra hours. She has devoted most of her time to her work. So I think she is not only a good mother but also a good doctor. I hope I can be a person like her. I also hope she will pay more attention to her own health. She’d better have more time to relax. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态主要为“一般现在时”； ③提示：写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏要点，可适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，开门见山，表示对“我”影响最大的人是妈妈； 第二步，详细介绍妈妈是如何影响“我”； 第三步，书写结语。 [亮点词汇] ①advise sb. on就……给某人建议 ②devote…to…把……投入到…… ③pay attention to注意 [高分句型] My mother is the person who has influenced me most. (who引导的定语从句) 1．人生如旅，在你的成长过程中，许多人感动着你，影响着你，如：父母、老师、朋友、著名人物等。最近你市正举行“The person who has influenced me most”为题的英语征文活动，请你根据要点完成征文。 要点：1. 影响你最深的人是谁； 2. 为什么他/她对你影响最深（如：这个人的品质，他/她在哪方面帮助过你等等）； 3. 你的感想。 要求：1. 包括所有内容要点，不要逐句翻译，可以适当发挥； 2. 文中不能出现考生的真实校名、人名、地名等信息； 3. 80词左右（开头已给出，不记入总词数）。 The person who has influenced me most ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】参考范文 The person who has influenced me most    The person who has influenced me most is my mother, and I think she is the greatest person in my heart.      I have respected my mother since I was a little child. My mother is an excellent teacher. She is strict with her students. At the same time, she loves her students.     Also, my mother always cares about me in her way. When I have problems at school or fail in exams, she always encourages me to solve them by myself.     Moreover, my mother is full of love. She has been a volunteer as a teacher in a poor area for a year. She often tries her best to help the children in need.     My mother was not only a kind mother but also a good teacher. I will love her forever, and I want to be a person like her. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇征文，为材料作文。 ②时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“现在完成时”。 ③提示：文章为第三人称，介绍影响自己最深的人，题目中给出的要点描述完整，适当增加细节，注意过渡词的衔接。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍妈妈是对自己影响最深的人； 第二步，具体介绍妈妈从哪些方面影响了自己，阐述其做了哪些事情，有哪些品质； 第三步，总结，表达自己对妈妈的爱。 [亮点词汇] ① not only but also不仅……而且 ② be strict with对某人严格 ③ At the same time与此同时 ④ care about关心 ⑤ encourage sb. to do sth.鼓励某人做某事 ⑥ be full of充满 ⑦ try one’s best to do sth.尽某人最大的努力做某事 ⑧ in need困难中的 ⑨ Moreover此外 ⑩ by oneself独自 [高分句型] ①The person who has influenced me most is my mother, and I think she is the greatest person in my heart.（who引导定语从句+并列句+that引导宾语从句） ②I have respected my mother since I was a little child.（since引导时间状语从句） ③When I have problems at school or fail in exams, she always encourages me to solve them by myself.（when引导时间状语从句） 2．在你成长历程中，有许多人和你一路同行，如兄弟姐妹，同学，甚至父母。你们相互学习，彼此影响，共同提高。请以“Nice to go with you all the way”为题，根据以下要点和要求，用英语写一篇短文。 1. 要点： 1）这个人是谁，有什么特点； 2）交往中对你影响最深的一件事； 3）你从这个人身上学到了什么品质。 2. 要求： 1）文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称； 2）词数100左右。 Nice to go with you all the way _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 Nice to go with you all the way My friend Jane is the person who goes with me all the way. She is very strict with herself and never troubles others. She always listens to my problems patiently and gives me some advice on how to solve them. There is one thing that has the greatest influence on me. Jane was not good at math and even failed in the math exam before. Then she knew that she must study more harder than before. She asked the math teacher or classmates for help whenever there were some math problems that she couldn’t work out by herself. She spent more time studying math. And she got the first place in the math exam at last. I have learnt from Jane that no matter what difficulties we face, we should never give up. And I am so grateful to have such a friend. 【详解】[总体分析] ① 题材：本文是一篇说明文，为材料作文； ② 时态：时态以“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”为主； ③ 提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏要点中所提及的内容，可适当添加细节，完善作文。 [写作步骤] 第一步，交代“与你一路同行”的那个人，介绍其特点； 第二步，阐述在你和他/她的交往中发生的那件对你影响最深的事情； 第三步，讲述你从那个人身上学到的品质，表达个人感受。 [亮点词汇] ① be strict with sb. 对某人严格 ② listen to 听 ③ be good at 擅长 ④ have the greatest influence on sb. 对某人的影响最大 ⑤ ask sb. for help 向某人寻求帮助 ⑥ work out 计算出，解出 ⑦ get the first place 获得第一名 ⑧ never give up 永不放弃 [高分句型] ① She always listens to my problems patiently and gives me some advice on how to solve them.（“give sb. some advice on sth.”句型，及“疑问词+to do”） ② There is one thing that has the greatest influence on me.（There be句型，及that引导定语从句） ③ She spent more time studying math. And she got the first place in the math exam at last.（“spend time doing sth.”句型） ④ I have learnt from Jane that no matter what difficulties we face, we should never give up.（that引导宾语从句） ⑤ And I am so grateful to have such a friend.（“be adj. to do sth.”句型） 3．在你的成长历程中，有许多值得感恩的人，如父母、老师、同学等。题目要求考生以“The Person I Want to Express My Thanks”为题，介绍自己最想感谢的人。 (1) 你感恩的人；(2) 简单介绍这个人 (相貌、性格、特点等)；(3) 叙述他／她对你影响最深的一件事；(4) 你想怎样感谢他／她。 The Person I Want to Express My Thanks ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文： The Person I Want to Express My Thanks The person I want to thank most is my mother. She has kind eyes and a warm smile that always makes me feel safe. Though she is busy, she never forgets to care for me. What touches me most happened last winter. When I had a high fever, she stayed up all night putting cold towels on my forehead and checking my temperature. Her hands were tired, but she never stopped. That night, I realized how deeply she loved me. To express my thanks, I made a special card with my own hands. On it I wrote: "Mom, you are my hero. I promise to study hard and make you proud." I will also help her with housework and give her hugs every day. My mother not only gave me life but also taught me about love. I will remember her kindness from the bottom of my heart forever. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”； ③提示：写作要点已给出，考生需涵盖感恩对象、人物介绍、具体事例和感谢方式，并适当扩展细节。 [写作步骤] 第一步，直接点明要感谢的人 (母亲)； 第二步，描述人物外貌性格特征； 第三步，叙述具体感恩事件 (生病照顾)； 第四步，说明感谢方式 (手工卡片/家务帮助)。 [亮点词汇] ①kind eyes and a warm smile 善良的眼睛和温暖的笑容 ②stay up all night 彻夜未眠 ③from the bottom of my heart 发自内心 ④not only...but also... 不仅……而且…… [高分句型] ①Though she is busy, she never forgets to care for me. (though引导的让步状语从句) ②That night, I realized how deeply she loved me. (how引导的宾语从句) 4．同学们，在你们初中三年成长和学习的过程中，肯定有很多陪伴在你身边的人给了你深刻的影响，教会你一些知识和人生的道理，写一篇100字左右的英文谈谈对你影响最深的一个人。内容包括： 1.对你影响最深的人是谁。 2.叙述一件发生在你们之间的事。 3.从这件事中你学到的道理。 作文要求：不得出现学校和人物的真实姓名。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 In my three years of junior high school, the person who has influenced me most is my English teacher, Mr. Wang. He is kind and patient, and he always encourages me to study hard. One day, I failed an English test and felt very upset. Mr. Wang noticed my sadness and talked to me after class. He told me not to give up and to keep trying. He helped me review the material and explained the difficult parts to me. With his help, I improved my English and passed the next test. From this experience, I learned that perseverance is very important. No matter what difficulties I face, I should never give up and always try my best. Mr. Wang’s support and help have taught me a valuable lesson in life. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态为一般过去时和一般现在时； ③提示：根据提示内容介绍对自己影响最深的人，适当增加细节。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍对你影响最深的人是谁； 第二步，叙述一件发生在你们之间的事； 第三步，介绍从这件事中你学到的道理。 [亮点词汇] ①encourage sb. to do sth.鼓励某人做某事 ②give up放弃 ③try my best尽我最大的努力 [高分句型] ①In my three years of junior high school, the person who has influenced me most is my English teacher, Mr. Wang. (定语从句) ②No matter what difficulties I face, I should never give up and always try my best. (让步状语从句) 5．    成长是生命的主旋律。生命中总有一些对我们帮助很大、影响至深的人。最近，我校电视台将举办主题为“The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most”的英语演讲比赛。谁是对你影响最大的人？请根据以下流程图写一篇英文演讲稿参加比赛。 注意： 1. 演讲稿须根据流程图自拟，要求语句通顺、意思连贯、条理清楚，书写规范； 2. 文中不得出现你的真实姓名和学校名称； 3. 词数100个左右，演讲稿开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most Good afternoon, everyone! It’s a great honor for me to speak here. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ That’s all for my speech. Thank you! 【答案】                      The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most         Good afternoon, everyone! It’s a great honor for me to speak here. In my junior school life, many people have helped me. I thank them very much. But the person who has influenced me most is my English teacher Miss Lee. Miss Lee is beautiful with long hair. And she is kind. She helps me a lot. She often helps me with my English. When I am in trouble, she always encourages me to face my difficulties and gives me good advice. I still remember that once I failed in an important English exam and was upset. She cheered me up and told me some good ways to improve my English. With her help, I made great progress in English and became interested in it. I’m very thankful for all that she has done for me. She has a great influence on me, and her help is very useful for my future development.         That’s all for my speech. Thank you! 【总体分析】①题材：本文是一篇演讲稿； ②时态：时态为“一般现在时态”和“一般过去时”； ③提示：写作要点已给出，考生注意不要遗漏，根据所给流程图及提示，注意语句的连贯性，保证词汇和语法的正确使用。突出重点，合理作答。 【写作步骤】第一门，开门见山，介绍对你影响最大的人。 第二步，介绍所感谢的人的外貌、性格及品质； 第三步，介绍与所感谢的人之间的经历或故事； 第四步，阐述他/她对你的影响并书写结语。 【亮点词汇】①help sb with sth在某方面帮助某人 ②cheer sb up使某人振作起来 ③make great progress取得很大进步 ④become interested in对……感兴趣 【高分句型】①When I am in trouble, she always encourages me to face my difficulties and gives me good advice.（when引导时间状语从句） ②I still remember that once I failed in an important English exam and was upset.（that引导宾语从句） ③She has a great influence on me, and her help is very useful for my future development.（and连接并列句） 6．假如你们学校校报组织题为My role model的英语征文活动，请根据征文要求，写一篇短文投稿。 My role modelIn your life, there must be a role model who influences you deeply. They may be great persons like a scientist, an actor or an athlete. They may also be common people around you such as your parent, your teacher or your classmate. Please write a passage to introduce him or her and your passage should include these following points: 1. Who is your role model? Please introduce his/her general information. 2. Why is he/she your role model? Please give at least two reasons. 3. What can you learn from him/her? We are looking forward to your passages. We hope more readers can share your role models with us. role model: 榜样 要求： 1. 词数100左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数； 2. 内容涵盖要点，全文连贯通顺，可适当发挥； 3. 请勿提及真实校名、姓名等信息。 My role model Role models have a great influence on our life. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文： My Role Model Role models have a great influence on our life. Everyone has a role model. My role model is Spud Webb. When Spud Webb was young, he was small, but he had a big dream. He wanted to play in the NBA. He was refused to join the school basketball team because of his height, but he never gave up. He kept on practicing playing basketball hard. His talent for basketball was fully developed through his hard work. At last, his dream came true. His story of becoming an NBA player has influenced me most. When I meet difficulties during my study, I always think of my role model Spud Webb. I can get courage from him to go ahead. I will work hard and never lose heart like him to fight for my dream. Spud Webb is always my hero! 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态为“一般过去时”和“一般现在时”； ③提示：根据提示内容介绍自己的榜样，要求要点齐全，语句连贯，可适当发挥。 [写作步骤] 第一步，直接点题，点明谁是自己的榜样； 第二步，介绍Spud Webb成为自己榜样的原因； 第三步，表达自己从榜样身上学到了什么。 [亮点词汇] ①keep on doing sth继续做某事 ②give up放弃 ③think of想起 ④go ahead前进 [高分句型] ①When Spud Webb was young, he was small, but he had a big dream.（when引导的时间状语从句） ②He was refused to join the school basketball team because of his height, but he never gave up.（but连接的并列句） 7．自古以来，人们对英雄的定义没有统一的标准。英雄可以是科学家、体育健将，也可以是医生或者见义勇为者。假如你班将要开展一次以“The hero in my heart”为主题的英语班会。请你根据下面的要点与要求写一篇英语发言稿。 要点： (1) 你心中的英雄是谁? (2) 你为什么认为他/她是你心中的英雄? (3) 你从他/她那里学到了什么? 要求： (1) 文中不要出现所在学校的校名和师生姓名： (2) 词数100左右 (开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数) 。 The hero in my heart Good afternoon, everyone! I’m glad that I have the chance to tell you about the hero in my heart— ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ That’s all. Thank you for listening. 【答案】例文 The hero in my heart Good afternoon, everyone! I’m glad that I have the chance to tell you about the hero in my heart—Lang Ping. Lang Ping is an excellent coach as well as a great volleyball player. In 1984, she, as a player, helped the Chinese women’s volleyball team win their first Olympic gold medal. And under her leadership, the Chinese women’s volleyball team has won many medals since 2013. Whatever she does, she always tries her best. However, Lang is in poor health because of hard exercise and work. But she is always strong and has never thought of giving up. Her spirit encourages me a lot. That’s why I see her as a hero. From her, I’ve learned how to stick to my dream and make it come true. That’s all. Thank you for listening. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是演讲稿； ②时态：时态为“一般过去时”和“一般现在时”； ③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏提示内容中，适当发挥。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍自己心目中的英雄是郎平； 第二步，介绍为什么她是我心目中的英雄； 第三步，书写结语。表达“感谢您的聆听”。 [亮点词汇] ①try one’s best尽某人最大的努力 ②be in poor health健康状态不好 ③come true实现 [高分句型] ①Whatever she does, she always tries her best. (whatever引导的让步状语从句) ②That’s why I see her as a hero. (why引导的表语从句) 8．榜样(role model) 不仅是一面镜子，还是一面旗帜。好的榜样激发我们对人生道路 和人生理想的思考，给予我们自我完善的力量。假设你是李华，你校英文俱乐部举办题 为“A Role Model in My Life”的征文活动。请你根据下面的提示写一篇演讲稿，向大家 介绍你心中的榜样。 内容提示： 1. Who is your role model? 2. Why is he/she your role model? 3. How does your role model influence you in your daily life? 写作要求：1. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名； 2. 词数80个左右, 开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Hello, everyone. I’m Li Hua. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文：     Role models in life set good examples for us. Yao Ming is my role model in my life. He is my favorite basketball player in the world. And he is known for his charity work. He founded his Foundation in 2008. He has built five schools in Sichuan and other areas. He has offered lots of money to help the people in trouble. He always asks us to protect the animals on the earth. I think he is very kind and helpful. I must learn from him and help people in need around us. We’ll try my best to support him and make a contribution to our society. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是话题作文； ②时态：本文一般采用一般现在时； ③提示：注意语意连贯，语句通顺。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍自己的榜样，说出具体原因。 第二步，介绍榜样如何影响自己。 [亮点词汇] ①set examples for 树立榜样 ②be known for以……被知晓 ③in trouble在困境中 ④try one’s best to do sth尽某人最大努力做某事 [高分句型] ①He has built five schools in Sichuan and other areas.(现在完成时) ②I think he is very kind and helpful.(宾语从句) 9．为了树立榜样，创建优良的校风，你校英语俱乐部近日开展主题为“A role model around me”的英语演讲大赛，写一篇演讲稿介绍你心目中的“模范少年”（Role Model）全红婵。 要求： 1）须包含提示中的所有信息，可适当发挥，条理清晰； 2）词数：不少于80词（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。 参考词汇： 中国跳水运动员 Chinese diver 奥运会 Olympic Games 冠军 champion 金牌 gold medal 世界纪录 world record A role model around me Today, I’m glad to introduce my role model to you. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 A Role Model Around Me    Today, I’m glad to introduce my role model to you. Her name is Quan Hongchan. She is a Chinese diver. She was born in a poor family in Zhanjiang on March 28, 2007. She began to receive diving training in 2014 in Zhanjiang Sports School.        Since she joined the national team in 2020, she has won many gold medals in various competitions, such as the 19th Asian Games in Hangzhou, the 32nd Olympic Games in Tokyo and the 33rd Olympic Games in Paris. It is her hard training and strong will that make her so successful.     I think I should learn from her. I will never give up when I meet difficulties in my life. And I should achieve my goals through hard work. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文，为演讲稿； ②时态：根据实际描述灵活运用各种时态； ③提示：写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏要点，可适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，根据文章已给出的开头，介绍全红婵的个人信息； 第二步，介绍她的主要成就； 第三步，谈谈自己从她身上学到的东西。 [亮点词汇] ①be born in出生于 ②learn from sb.向某人学习 ③give up放弃 ④such as例如 [高分句型] ①It is her hard training and strong will that make her so successful.（强调句） ②I will never give up when I meet difficulties in my life.（when引导的时间状语从句） 10．本模块以“Sports life”为话题，谈论了运动员刘翔，让我们领略了他的风采，请你以“My hero—Liu Xiang”为题，根据以下提示写一篇80词左右的英语短文，简要介绍一下这位体育明星。 开篇点题：刘翔是一个非常成功的运动员 (sportsman)。 成长过程：1983年出生在上海；1993年他开始在一所体育学校训练；他的跨栏天赋在1998年受到关注。 主要成就：2001年赢得了他的第一个110米跨栏国际赛冠军；他在2004年赢得了奥运会金牌；2012年他又回到了世界第一的位置。 人物评价：…… My hero—Liu Xiang ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 My hero—Liu Xiang Liu Xiang is a very successful sportsman. He was born in Shanghai in 1983. He started training at a sports school in 1993. And his hurdling ability was noticed in 1998. Liu Xiang won his first international 110m hurdles race in 2001. He won the Olympic gold medal in 2004. He returned to the first place in the world in 2012. Liu Xiang is not only a great athlete but also an inspiration to many for his perseverance and dedication. Therefore, we’ll continue to take great pride in him. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态以“一般过去时”为主； ③提示：写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏要点，可适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，简单描述刘翔是个怎样的人； 第二步，具体阐述刘翔的成长过程及主要成就； 第三步，书写结语。表达对刘翔的敬佩。 [亮点词汇] ①be born in出生于 ②be noticed in被注意到 ③not only…but also…不但……而且…… ④take pride in引以为傲 [高分句型] Liu Xiang is not only a great athlete but also an inspiration to many for his perseverance and dedication.(not only…but also…连接的并列句) 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 6 / 11 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ Unit 4 Growing up 介绍对你影响最深的人 单元写作精练 写作主题 识 写作主题：介绍对你影响最深的人 核心写作目标： 本单元的话题是“成长”,写作内容主要涉及介绍在成长过程中对自己有影响的人或事物。在具体的写作中,学生应做到以下几点: 1.能够列举具体的事例来表达成长过程中对自己影响最大的人或者事物; 2.能够运用所学词汇和句型对人物或事物进行评价。 写作框架： I. 开头段 (Introduction - 点明人物与核心影响) 1. 开门见山:用一句引人注目的句子引出人物或“影响”的主题。 2. 明确人物:清晰说明这个人是谁（姓名或关系，如 My father, Ms. Lee, my best friend Tom）。 3. 核心影响:用一句话概括这个人对你最大的、最核心的影响是什么（品质、观念、技能等）。 主体段 (Body Paragraphs - 详述影响与具体事例) 1. 主题句 : 明确说明这个人影响的第一个具体方面（品质、态度、技能、观念等）。例: "My grandfather's most valuable lesson was the importance of kindness." 2. 具体事例: 描述一件具体的事情（时间、地点、情境），详细说明这个人做了什么或说了什么。 3. 影响分析 : 解释这件事如何影响了你的思想、行为或成长？你现在怎么做/想不同了？ 结尾段 (Conclusion - 总结升华) 1. 重申核心影响 :*再次强调这个人对你成长的整体重要性（呼应开头）。 2. 总结具体影响 :简要总结1-2个主要的影响方面（品质/观念/技能等）。 3.表达情感与未来展望 :表达你的感激之情，并说明这些影响将如何持续帮助你面对未来的成长。 有用表达： 品德修养： 1. quality品质；人品 2. spirit精神 3. honesty诚实 4. kindness善良 5. admire钦佩 6. independent独立的 7. positive积极的 8. moral道德的 9. grateful感激的 10. behave politely举止文明 　　　　　 11. respect each other相互尊重 12. keep promises信守承诺 　　　　　 13. strong will坚强的意志 14. be friendly to对……友好 　　　　　 15. be responsible for对……负责 16. be patient with对……有耐心 　　　 17. be thankful to others感恩他人 18. be ready to help others乐于助人 　　　19. never give up永不放弃 自我认识与提升： 1. influence影响 2. experience经验；经历 3. dare敢于 4. require需要 5. fail失败 6. silent不说话的；沉默的 7. helpful有帮助的 8. valuable宝贵的 9. seldom很少 10. deal with应对；处理 11. in public公开地 12. in person亲身；亲自 13. take pride in为……感到自豪 　　　 14. be proud of为……骄傲 15. make plans制订计划 　　　　　 16. manage time管理时间 17. overcome challenges克服挑战 　　 18. stick to doing sth.坚持做某事 19. achieve the goal实现目标 　　　　 20. take… seriously认真对待…… 21. as long as只要 　　　　　 22. learn from mistakes从错误中学习 23. make progress取得进步 真题示例： 在成长的漫漫旅途中，我们总会邂逅一些如明灯般照亮我们前行道路的人。或许是为 我们构筑温暖港湾的父母；或许是为我们开启知识殿堂大门的恩师；又或许是陪伴我们共克时艰的挚友。在你心中，究竟谁才是那个影响你最深的人呢？学校英语社团在举办征文比赛，请你根据以下提示内容，以“The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most”为题，根据以下要点和要求，用英语写一篇短文。 写作要求： (1)文中不要出现所在学校的校名和师生姓名； (2)词数100左右。 The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most My mother is the person who has influenced me most. She is in her forties. She always listens to my problems patiently. And she advises me on how to solve them. As a doctor, she often says she can’t be too careful. She often works extra hours. She has devoted most of her time to her work. So I think she is not only a good mother but also a good doctor. I hope I can be a person like her. I also hope she will pay more attention to her own health. She’d better have more time to relax. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态主要为“一般现在时”； ③提示：写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏要点，可适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，开门见山，表示对“我”影响最大的人是妈妈； 第二步，详细介绍妈妈是如何影响“我”； 第三步，书写结语。 [亮点词汇] ①advise sb. on就……给某人建议 ②devote…to…把……投入到…… ③pay attention to注意 [高分句型] My mother is the person who has influenced me most. (who引导的定语从句) 1．人生如旅，在你的成长过程中，许多人感动着你，影响着你，如：父母、老师、朋友、著名人物等。最近你市正举行“The person who has influenced me most”为题的英语征文活动，请你根据要点完成征文。 要点：1. 影响你最深的人是谁； 2. 为什么他/她对你影响最深（如：这个人的品质，他/她在哪方面帮助过你等等）； 3. 你的感想。 要求：1. 包括所有内容要点，不要逐句翻译，可以适当发挥； 2. 文中不能出现考生的真实校名、人名、地名等信息； 3. 80词左右（开头已给出，不记入总词数）。 The person who has influenced me most ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．在你成长历程中，有许多人和你一路同行，如兄弟姐妹，同学，甚至父母。你们相互学习，彼此影响，共同提高。请以“Nice to go with you all the way”为题，根据以下要点和要求，用英语写一篇短文。 1. 要点： 1）这个人是谁，有什么特点； 2）交往中对你影响最深的一件事； 3）你从这个人身上学到了什么品质。 2. 要求： 1）文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称； 2）词数100左右。 Nice to go with you all the way _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．在你的成长历程中，有许多值得感恩的人，如父母、老师、同学等。题目要求考生以“The Person I Want to Express My Thanks”为题，介绍自己最想感谢的人。 (1) 你感恩的人；(2) 简单介绍这个人 (相貌、性格、特点等)；(3) 叙述他／她对你影响最深的一件事；(4) 你想怎样感谢他／她。 The Person I Want to Express My Thanks ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．同学们，在你们初中三年成长和学习的过程中，肯定有很多陪伴在你身边的人给了你深刻的影响，教会你一些知识和人生的道理，写一篇100字左右的英文谈谈对你影响最深的一个人。内容包括： 1.对你影响最深的人是谁。 2.叙述一件发生在你们之间的事。 3.从这件事中你学到的道理。 作文要求：不得出现学校和人物的真实姓名。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5．    成长是生命的主旋律。生命中总有一些对我们帮助很大、影响至深的人。最近，我校电视台将举办主题为“The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most”的英语演讲比赛。谁是对你影响最大的人？请根据以下流程图写一篇英文演讲稿参加比赛。 注意： 1. 演讲稿须根据流程图自拟，要求语句通顺、意思连贯、条理清楚，书写规范； 2. 文中不得出现你的真实姓名和学校名称； 3. 词数100个左右，演讲稿开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most Good afternoon, everyone! It’s a great honor for me to speak here. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ That’s all for my speech. Thank you! 6．假如你们学校校报组织题为My role model的英语征文活动，请根据征文要求，写一篇短文投稿。 My role modelIn your life, there must be a role model who influences you deeply. They may be great persons like a scientist, an actor or an athlete. They may also be common people around you such as your parent, your teacher or your classmate. Please write a passage to introduce him or her and your passage should include these following points: 1. Who is your role model? Please introduce his/her general information. 2. Why is he/she your role model? Please give at least two reasons. 3. What can you learn from him/her? We are looking forward to your passages. We hope more readers can share your role models with us. role model: 榜样 要求： 1. 词数100左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数； 2. 内容涵盖要点，全文连贯通顺，可适当发挥； 3. 请勿提及真实校名、姓名等信息。 My role model Role models have a great influence on our life. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 7．自古以来，人们对英雄的定义没有统一的标准。英雄可以是科学家、体育健将，也可以是医生或者见义勇为者。假如你班将要开展一次以“The hero in my heart”为主题的英语班会。请你根据下面的要点与要求写一篇英语发言稿。 要点： (1) 你心中的英雄是谁? (2) 你为什么认为他/她是你心中的英雄? (3) 你从他/她那里学到了什么? 要求： (1) 文中不要出现所在学校的校名和师生姓名： (2) 词数100左右 (开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数) 。 The hero in my heart Good afternoon, everyone! I’m glad that I have the chance to tell you about the hero in my heart— ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ That’s all. Thank you for listening. 8．榜样(role model) 不仅是一面镜子，还是一面旗帜。好的榜样激发我们对人生道路 和人生理想的思考，给予我们自我完善的力量。假设你是李华，你校英文俱乐部举办题 为“A Role Model in My Life”的征文活动。请你根据下面的提示写一篇演讲稿，向大家 介绍你心中的榜样。 内容提示： 1. Who is your role model? 2. Why is he/she your role model? 3. How does your role model influence you in your daily life? 写作要求：1. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名； 2. 词数80个左右, 开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Hello, everyone. I’m Li Hua. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 9．为了树立榜样，创建优良的校风，你校英语俱乐部近日开展主题为“A role model around me”的英语演讲大赛，写一篇演讲稿介绍你心目中的“模范少年”（Role Model）全红婵。 要求： 1）须包含提示中的所有信息，可适当发挥，条理清晰； 2）词数：不少于80词（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。 参考词汇： 中国跳水运动员 Chinese diver 奥运会 Olympic Games 冠军 champion 金牌 gold medal 世界纪录 world record A role model around me Today, I’m glad to introduce my role model to you. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 10．本模块以“Sports life”为话题，谈论了运动员刘翔，让我们领略了他的风采，请你以“My hero—Liu Xiang”为题，根据以下提示写一篇80词左右的英语短文，简要介绍一下这位体育明星。 开篇点题：刘翔是一个非常成功的运动员 (sportsman)。 成长过程：1983年出生在上海；1993年他开始在一所体育学校训练；他的跨栏天赋在1998年受到关注。 主要成就：2001年赢得了他的第一个110米跨栏国际赛冠军；他在2004年赢得了奥运会金牌；2012年他又回到了世界第一的位置。 人物评价：…… My hero—Liu Xiang ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 6 / 11 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$