读后续写主题通关——家庭亲情（课件）-2025年高考英语读后续写精讲

——家庭亲情 2021 年新课标全国 Ⅰ卷 读后续写主题通关 Learning Objectives 解读续写原文并提取关键信息，掌握逻辑连贯、细节支撑、呼应主旨等续写技巧，积累场景化英语表达（高频动词、短语及高分句型） 借助实际续写练习提升英语写作与创新思维能力 独立完成相关写作练习，深刻体会亲情中的情感联结与价值导向。 原文解码 What to read 构思逻辑 What to write 语言提升 How to write 实践演练 01 02 03 04 目录 迁移训练 05 01 原文解码 What to read 原文解码 What to read A Mother's Day Surprise The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the 5 原文解码 What to read egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But 6 原文解码 What to read the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意： 1.续写词数应为 150 左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 7 原文解码 What to read As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 8 原文解码 What to read Para. Who What When Emotion 1 2 3 双胞胎 （Jenna, Jeff） 双胞胎 双胞胎 计划在母亲节为母亲准备早餐（法式吐司和鸡肉粥），认为自己能做好。 清晨 6 点起床，先煮粥，再做法式吐司，杰夫煎面包时烤焦， Jenna 调整火候后成功。 粥溢出浇灭火苗，杰夫冷静关火；清理时杰夫手被烫伤， Jenna 处理时发现面包又烤焦。 母亲节前 母亲节当天清晨 6 点 同上（紧接 Para.2） 兴奋 （excitement） 顺利（smoothly） → 小挫折（无明显负面情绪） 恐慌（panicked）→ 失望（disappointment） 9 原文解码 What to read 时间： _________________________________________________________​ 地点： _________________________________________________________​ 人物关系：_________________________________________________________​ 未解决冲突：_________________________________________________________ 母亲节当天清晨 6 点（the alarm rang at 6 a.m.） 家中厨房（kitchen）、母亲的卧室（后续续写暗示） 双胞胎（Jenna 和 Jeff）与父母（核心为母子 / 女关系），兄妹 / 姐弟间协作且互补（Jenna 慌乱时 Jeff 冷静） 早餐制作多次失败（吐司烤焦、粥溢出、杰夫烫伤），母亲节惊喜计划濒临落空 10 原文解码 What to read 常见误读案例 1.误将 “chicken porridge” 理解为 “鸡肉汤”，忽略 “porridge”（粥）的烹饪特点（需长时间熬煮，与后续 “溢出” 情节相关）。 2.过度强调双胞胎的 “笨拙”，忽略原文中 “they knew exactly what to do” 体现的自信，续写时未体现从失败到成长的转变。 3.遗漏 “父亲出现” 的线索，未让父亲发挥引导作用，直接跳过解决冲突的过程。 11 02 构思逻辑 What to write 构思逻辑 What to write 原文情感词 / 动作词提炼​ 情感词：_________________________________________________________​ 动作词：_________________________________________________________​ 主旨预判​ ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ excitement（兴奋）、pleased（愉悦，预期）、proud（自豪，预期）、panicked（恐慌）、disappointment（失望） planned（计划）、watched（观察）、boil（煮）、fry（煎）、turned off（关闭）、clean up（清理）、put...in cold water（冷敷） 原文通过双胞胎为母亲准备早餐的波折，展现亲情中的温暖与成长：即使计划受挫，孩子们的心意与努力终将被母亲感知，过程中的协作与坚持也是成长的体现。续写需围绕 “挫折后的补救”“亲情的包容”“孩子的成长” 展开，传递 “心意重于完美” 的核心。 13 构思逻辑 What to write 烹饪相关： ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________情感相关： ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 动作相关： ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 高频动词 / 动词短语 boil over（溢出）、fry（煎）、burn（烤焦）、scrape off（刮掉）、stir（搅拌）、arrange（摆盘） sigh（叹气）、smile through tears（含泪微笑）、hug tightly（紧紧拥抱）、pat gently（轻拍） rush in（冲进来）、clean up（清理）、hold carefully（小心捧着）、wake up（叫醒） 14 03 语言提升 How to write 语言提升 How to write 动作描写类 ① v-ing/v-ed + 其它，主语 + 动作 1 + 其它 例：Burning with embarrassment, Jeff stared at the blackened toast in the sink.（感到尴尬，杰夫盯着水槽里烤焦的吐司。） ② 主语 + 动作 1 + 动作 2， and 动作 3 + 其它 例：Jenna grabbed a cloth, wiped the stove, and signaled Jeff to restart the porridge.（Jenna 抓起抹布擦炉子，示意杰夫重新煮粥。） 情感描写类 ③ 形容词 1 and 形容词 2，主语 + 动词 + 其它 例：Tired and frustrated, the twins sank onto the chairs, unsure what to do next.（又累又沮丧，双胞胎瘫坐在椅子上，不知下一步该做什么。） 高分句型及例子 16 语言提升 How to write ④ Sb. felt a sense of + 情绪名词 + welling up from one’s heart. 例：Jeff felt a sense of relief welling up from his heart as Dad showed them how to adjust the heat.（当爸爸教他们调火候时，杰夫心中涌起一阵释然。） 主旨句 ⑤ 强调句型 例：It was not the perfect breakfast but the love behind it that touched Mother deeply.（不是完美的早餐，而是背后的爱深深打动了母亲。） ⑥ 倒装句 例：Never had the twins realized that even messy efforts could be full of warmth.（双胞胎从未意识到，即使笨拙的努力也能充满温暖。） ⑦ 定语从句 例：The kitchen, which had been a mess an hour ago, now smelled of fresh porridge and toast.（一小时前还一片狼藉的厨房，现在弥漫着新鲜粥和吐司的香味。） 17 语言提升 How to write 其它 ⑧ With 复合结构 例：With Dad’s guidance, the twins managed to fix the breakfast in no time.（在爸爸的指导下，双胞胎很快就做好了早餐。） ⑨ 无灵主语 例：Morning sunlight streamed through the window, lighting up the small table set with their creations.（晨光透过窗户，照亮了摆着他们作品的小桌子。） ⑩ 独立主格结构 例：Hands trembling, the twins carried the tray upstairs, their hearts beating fast.（双胞胎双手颤抖地捧着托盘上楼，心跳得飞快。） 18 语言提升 How to write 小试牛刀 ① 意识到自己的错误后，我知道是时候主动联系哥哥，修复我们的关系了。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ② 刮掉烤焦的部分，Jenna 努力让吐司看起来像样些，眼里满是决心。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Realizing my mistake, I knew it was time to reach out to my brother and fix our relationship. Scraping off the burnt part, Jenna tried to make the toast look presentable, her eyes filled with determination. 19 语言提升 How to write ③ 又担心又焦虑，母亲躺在床上，纳闷孩子们那天早上怎么这么安静。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ④ 看着双胞胎全力以赴，爸爸心中涌起一阵自豪。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Worried and anxious, Mother lay in bed, wondering why the kids were so quiet that morning. Dad felt a sense of pride welling up from his heart as he watched the twins trying their best. 20 语言提升 How to write ⑤ 正是这顿虽不完美却充满诚意的早餐，让母亲热泪盈眶。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ⑥ 随着第一缕阳光照进厨房，孩子们脸上露出了期待的笑容。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ It was the messy but sincere breakfast that made Mother’s eyes water. With the first ray of sunlight streaming into the kitchen, the kids wore expectant smiles on their faces. 21 语言提升 How to write ⑦ 从未有人告诉过他们，失败中蕴含的努力比成功本身更有意义。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ⑧ 那碗热气腾腾的粥，寄托着孩子们对母亲最真挚的爱。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Never had anyone told them that the effort in failure was more meaningful than success itself. The bowl of steaming porridge held the most sincere love of the children for their mother. 22 04 实践演练 实践演练 情节构思三原则: 逻辑连贯： ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 细节支撑： ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 呼应主旨： ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 父亲的出现需自然衔接 “双胞胎失望” 的场景，他的引导应解决 “早餐失败” 的核心问题（如教调火候、补救食材），避免突然出现 “新食材” 等不合理情节。 通过动作细节（如父亲示范搅拌粥的手法、双胞胎小心翼翼摆盘）和环境描写（厨房逐渐整洁、食物香气弥漫），让补救过程真实可感。 结尾需体现母亲对 “心意” 的认可（如拥抱时说 “这是最好的礼物”），呼应 “亲情重于完美” 的主题，同时可加入双胞胎的感悟（如 “失败也没关系，只要用心”）。 24 实践演练 写作示例： As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. He glanced at the messy stove and the blackened toast, then knelt down to meet their eyes. “Want to know a secret?” he said with a grin. “Your mom’s favorite breakfast when she was your age was ‘imperfect toast’—burnt edges and all.” Jenna and Jeff perked up as Dad showed them how to scrape off the worst bits, then stirred the remaining porridge with a pinch of sugar. “See? Messy doesn’t mean bad,” he winked, handing Jeff a clean cloth to wipe his still-pink hand. Together, they arranged the lopsided toast and wobbly porridge in a mismatched tray, adding a sprig of mint from the windowsill. 25 实践演练 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. “Happy Mother’s Day!” they chorused, tripping over the rug in their hurry. Mother sat up, her eyes widening at the tray. Jeff pointed to his bandaged hand proudly. “We tried really hard,” Jenna added, biting her lip. Instead of laughing, Mother lifted the toast to her mouth, her eyes shining. “It’s perfect,” she said through a mouthful, pulling them onto the bed for a hug. Dad leaned in the doorway, filming with his phone as Mother declared, “This might just be the best meal I’ve ever had.” Outside, sunlight spilled over the tray, turning the messy breakfast into something golden. 26 05 迁移训练 迁移训练 核心步骤回顾 文本解读融主旨，段落拆解要素明。 人事物时情细看，时空人物冲突清。 背景信息莫轻弃，误读陷阱要绕行。 情感动作细提炼，主旨方向早判定。 贴合原文不偏离，核心思想显其形。 价值导向藏文中，呼应主题贯始终。 28 迁移训练 故事背景： 奶奶从老家来城里小住，带了一麻袋自己种的红薯，堆在阳台角落占了大半空间。初三的儿子嫌红薯土气又占地方，趁奶奶午睡时偷偷把半麻袋红薯丢进了楼下的垃圾桶。奶奶醒来发现红薯少了，坐在阳台抹眼泪，嘴里念叨着 “这是特意给娃留的蜜薯，蒸着吃最甜了”。妈妈在楼下倒垃圾时看到垃圾桶里的红薯，认出是奶奶带来的，她拎着半袋红薯上楼，推开儿子房间的门时，看到他正对着习题册发呆。​ Mother put the sweet potatoes by the door, her tone calm but heavy as she sat beside her son. ____________________________________________________________ The boy slowly raised his head, his voice tight as he twisted the corner of his clothes. __________________________________________________________________ 29 迁移训练 参考范文 Mother put the sweet potatoes by the door, her tone calm but heavy as she sat beside her son. "Do you remember how grandma walked three miles to the market last winter just to buy you your favorite candied haws?" she asked, pointing to the wrinkles on the potato skins. "These sweet potatoes have been in her backyard since spring. She turned over the soil, watered them every dawn, and picked the biggest ones just for you." The son's pen stopped moving, his ears turning red as he stared at the exercise book.​ 30 迁移训练 The boy slowly raised his head, his voice tight as he twisted the corner of his clothes. "I... I thought they were in the way," he mumbled. Mother pulled out her phone, showing him a photo of grandma bending over the sweet potato field, her back curved like a crescent moon. "Grandma said you used to wait at the door every autumn, clapping when she dug out the first sweet potato." The son suddenly jumped up, grabbing the sweet potatoes and rushing to the kitchen. "I'll steam them right now. I want to give grandma the first one." 31 Thank You $$