内容正文:
话题九 优秀品行类
[典题示例]
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文.
OnewindydayinMarch,KittyMilerwasonherwaytoschoolwhensheglancedintoa
storewindowandsawagreatpileoflovelyredapples.“Oh,”Sheexclaimed(惊呼).“HowloveG
ly! IfonlyMammacouldhaveone!”Immediately,thestoreownerrecognizedthefamiliargirl
andaskedhertopickone.Kittyjustshookherheadandranawayshyly.
Kittysmotherwasextremelypoor.ShehadbeenadressmakereversinceKittysfather
died,andhadtoworkhardtoearnalivingforherselfandKitty.Unfortunately,shehadrecently
becomeverysickandhadtolieinbedaldaylong.WhenKittywasawayatschool,thehouse
wasincrediblycoldandcheerless.Kittytookgreatcareofhermother.Shecookedherfood,mostG
lysoup.Theycouldnotaffordfreshfruit.(伏笔:可衔接处)Kittywouldevensingtohermother
atnight.
WhenKittyreachedtheschoolthatday,herthoughtswerefulofhersickmotherandthe
lovelyredapples.(伏笔:可衔接处)Shewasusualyanexcelentstudent,butthatdayshemade
somanymistakesthattheteacherlookedatherinsurprise.Thelittlegirlcouldonlysitather
desk,withherbookbeforeher,anddreamofthoseredapples.
Whenschoolwasdismissed,Kittystartedslowlyhomeward.Shehadwalkedonlyashort
distancewhenshesawamaninfrontofherdrophiswalet.Running quicklyforward,she
pickeditup.ThewaletfeltquiteheavyinKittyslittlehand.
“Theremustbeagooddealofmoneyinit,”thoughtKitty.“HowIwishIcouldkeepit,so
thatIwouldthenbeabletopurchasearedappleforMamma,andsomanyotherthingsshe
needs.”(纠结)
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答.
Kittyknewthiswouldnotberight,soshehurriedaftertheman.
Thestoreownersawthefamiliargirlrushingin,onedolarinhand.
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英语写作一本通
[五步续写]
第一步 把握原文大意 明主旨和两线
主旨
大意
Kitty想给生病的母亲买苹果,却没有钱.一天放学路上,她看到一个男人掉了钱包,她
拾起钱包,里面有很多钱
原文
两线
情节线:母亲生病→Kitty想给母亲买苹果→买不起苹果→在学校想买苹果的事→放学
路上捡到钱包→纠结是否留下钱包
情感线:担忧→渴望→难过→纠结
写作
意图
是否归还钱包
第二步 根据首句信息 定续写方向
两段首句
定一框
①由第一段首句“Kitty知道这不对,所以她急忙追上那个男人”可知开头应写
Kitty追上后归还钱包;钱包主人道谢并注意到什么→Kitty回答了什么? 又根
据第二段首句中的“onedolar”可写钱包主人给她一美元作为报答;②尾句:衔接
第二段首句中店主看到女孩冲进来,可描写 Kitty拿着钱跑向店里的场景和她的
心情
二框二首
正能量
①由第二段首句“店主看到熟悉的女孩手里拿着一美元冲进来”可写店主给Kitty挑
最大最红的苹果→Kitty给钱→店主如何回应;②尾句:应以正能量结尾,点明主
旨:诚实
第三步 原、续两线同 加合理细节
◎高度融洽 续写部分情节线体现的是:归还钱包→钱包主人道谢→Kitty的回答→钱包主人感
动,给 Kitty一美元→去商店买苹果→店主不要钱→回家告诉母亲,得到表扬;Kitty的情感变化
线应为:determined→excited→delighted
◎添加细节 动作细节:第一段可描写 Kitty拿着一美元兴奋地跑向水果店的场景,利用肢体动
作描写;第二段可描写她拿着苹果和钱雀跃着回家的肢体动作,利用dance最形象.
第四步:沿原语言特点 完美连贯表达
原文并列句和从句居多,还有几处对话描写,续写部分可添加对话描写,并兼顾动作和情
感描写.
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第五部分 读后续写
第五步 临摹衡水字体 打造完美卷面
Kityknewthiswouldnotberight,soshehuriedaftertheman.Touchinghimonthearm,she
said,“Please,Sir.Youdroppedyourwalet.”“Thankyou,dear,”saidthegentleman,takingthe
walet.Then,noticinghowpoorlydressedshewas,heasked,“Whydidntyoukeepthewalet?”
“Becausethatwouldbestealing.”repliedKity.“But,”shecontinuedhonestly,“beforeIthought
Imustgiveitbacktoyou.IdidwishIcouldkeepit,forthenIcouldbuyMomaredapple.”Moved
deeply,themanhandedheradolar,smiling.“Youareagoodgirl.Takethedolarandbuyyour
motheraredapple.”Withthedolar,Kityrantothestorewithexcitement.
Thestoreownersawthefamiliargirlrushingin,onedolarinhand.Hequicklypickedoutthe
biggest,roundest,andreddestappleandgaveittoKity.Takingtheapple,Kityhappilyhanded
thedolartotheowner.Buttheownerdidnttakeit,saying,“Youkeepitandtheappleisfree.”
Kitythankedthekindstoreownerwithabroadsmile,anddancedhome.Hermotherwas
surprisedtoseetheappleandthedolar.Kitytoldhermotherthewholestory.Hermotherkissed
herandsaid.“Yousee,dear,italwayspaystobehonestandtruthful.”
(2025广东湛江市高三模拟)ItwasFriday,andIwasatmydaughtersplaceinManhatG
tan.MyhusbandandIhadgoneoutforbreakfastwithmydaughterandsonGinGlawandtheir
child.Afterbreakfast,wetookataxitoCentralPark.Theplanwastotakemy2GyearGold
grandsononhisfirsthorseandbuggy(小马车)ride,pickupourbagsfrom mydaughtershouse
anddrivetomyfriendshomeinFlatbush,Brooklyn,foravisit.
Thehorseridewentwel,andwealhadagreattime.Mygrandsonwasfiledwithjoyand
excitementalthetime.Wearrivedbackatmydaughtersapartment,pickedupourbagsand
thenIsaidtomyhusband,Moishe,“Whereisyourphone?”Usualy,Iwilcheckeverything
beforeweleaveataxisincethingscanfalout,butthistime,IguessIdidnt,andwecouldnot
seemtofindit.
Maybeweleftitinthebuggy,oritmighthavefalenoutinthetaxi?Iwondered.OrperG
hapsweleftitintherestaurantatbreakfast?Iwasinastateofpanic,wonderingwhattheone
withthephonecoulddowithit.Moishewasevidentlyatalossastowhattodo.Mysensible
sonGinGlaw,Leon,hadacleverideaofcalingthephonetoseeifanyonewouldanswerit.
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英语写作一本通
Withbutterfliesinmystomach,IwatchedasLeondialedandgotthrough.Heturnedthe
loudspeakerofhisphoneonsothatwealcouldhearbutwhatweheardwasaladyspoor,broG
kenEnglish.Thepersonontheothersideofthephoneobviouslyhaddifficultycommunicating
withLeon.LeonwasverypatientandwasspeakingveryslowlybutIcouldseethathedidntget
muchusefulinformationbeforehehadtohangup.
Aftersomediscussion,wedecidedtosendatextmessagetothelostphonesaying,“We
wilpaymoneytogetourphoneback,pleaseteluswhereyouare.”Thisideaworkedoutwel.
Soonwegotareplymessagesaying“119OceanParkway,Mrs.Hichens”.
注意:
1.续写的词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答.
Innotime,wealgotintoourcarandheadedfortheaddress.
WithLaurashelp,Mrs.Hichenswasabletoexplaintouswhathadhappened.
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第五部分 读后续写
话题九 学以致用
[参考范文]
Innotime,weallgotintoourcarandheadedforthe
address.Whenwegotthere,Leonmessagedagain,teling
theladywehadarrived.AfterawhileayoungladyapG
pearedfromtheapartmentbuilding.Wegotoutofthecar
andtheladygreetedusandtoldusinverygoodEnglish
thatshewasLaura,Mrs.Hichensneighbor.Mrs.HichG
enshadjustcomefrom MexicoandherEnglishwaslimitG
ed.Asherhusbandwasawayonbusiness,sheaskedLauG
raforhelp.Laurashowedusintoanapartment,where
Mrs.Hichensandherlittlegirlwereexpectingus.
WithLaurashelp,Mrs.Hichenswasabletoexplain
touswhathadhappened.ThatFriday,shealsotookher
kid,Judy,onahorseandbuggyride.Shedidntnoticeher
daughtertookaphonehomeuntilitrang.Shereturnedthe
phonetousandrefusedanyreward.Wefeltluckytomeet
suchkindpeopleas Mrs.HichensandLauraandhada
friendlychat.Whiletheadultswerechatting,Inoticedmy
grandsonwasplayinghappily withJudy.Sucha warm
sceneremindedmethatthelanguagebarriercanneverbea
problembetweenkindandfriendlypeople.
话题十 学以致用
[参考范文]
Tomwasshockedwhenhesawhisparentsappearat
theceremonyhall.HestoodrootedtothefloorforamoG
ment,notknowingwhattodo.Secondslater,hetriedto
containhimselfandawkwardlywalkeduptogreethisfaG
ther,ignoringhismothersexistence.Butwhenheheard
otherswhisperingabouthismumsuglyface,embarrassG
mentcameoverhim.Withangerwrittenalonhisface,he
pushedhismumhardoutofthehal.SeeingTomsmum
leavewithdeepsorrow,hisfatherfolowedherout.
Hesitatingforamoment,TomsfathertoldhimeveG
rythingthathappened manyyearsago.His mum got
burntseverelytosavehiminaterriblefire.Tearsstreamed
downhisfacewhenherecolectedhow muchhehadhurt
heraltheseyears,howhehadignoredherandherealized
theamountofpainandagonyshehadgonethrough.After
theceremony,hefoundhismumandembracedher,saying
“Sorry”againandagain.Fromthenon,hethoughtofhis
momsfaceevenwithscarsasthemostbeautifulfaceinthe
worldandhismomasthemostrespectedwomaninthe
world.
第五节 读后续写专练
基础训练篇
1.
Herealizedwhathisgrandfathersaidprovedtobe
right.However,hefelonthegroundveryheavilysothat
hedidntknowanything.
① When Mariocamebacktolife
,
lookingaround,hefelthimselflyingontheground at
school,andsawfourfriendsofhiscircledhim,afraidofhis
safety,whileothers hadaprettygoodlaughatadisG
tance.② Heunderstoodwhattherealfriendmeantatlast
andhealsofounditeasytotelwhohisrealfriendswereso
thatnoonewouldtrickhim.
③
Fromthenon,Marioseemedtobestrong,andheknew
howtomakearealfriend.Whenhecouldnttel whohis
realfriendswere,heusedthiskindofchairhisgrandfather
gavehimtotestthem.Whoeverpasseditbecamefriends
forlife,whichwasveryright.④Asaproverbsays,afriend
inneedisafriendindeed.
⑤ (146words)
①sothat引导结果状语从句;
②本句比较复杂,连词 when引导时间状语从句;现在分词
短语lookingaround作伴随状语;feelsb.doing结构中的现
在分词作宾语补足语;afraidof...是形容词短语作状语,
连词 while表示“同时性和对比性”;
③并列连词and连接两个并列分句,第一个分句中含有
what引导的宾语从句;第二个分句中含有 who引导的宾
语从句;
④whoever引导主语从句,which引导非限制性定语从句;
⑤as引导非限制性定语从句.
2.
ThefarmturnedouttobetheKimberly Diamond
Mine.Thenewfarmerbecametherichestpersontheworld
haseverknown.
① TheoriginalfarmerwasactualystandG
ingon“AcresofDiamonds”untilhesoldhisfarm.Itwas
realyapitythathefailedtorealizetherewerediamondsin
hisownland.
② HehadtraveledfarawayinsearchofdiaG
monds,butinvain.Ifhehaddugdeepinthefield,thestory
wouldhaveadiferentending.
③
Dr.Conwelltoldthisstorymanytimesandattracted
enormousaudiences.Thisstorydoesnotgetold.Itwilbe
trueforever.Actualyeachofusisrightinthemiddleof
ourown“AcresofDiamonds”.Ifwearewilingtoexplore
thegroundwearestandingoninsteadoftravelingfarto
lookfordiamonds,wearesuretofindtreasureandwealth
thatwelongtoown.
④ Opportunitydoesnotjustcome
along.Itistherealthetime.Whatweneedto do
⑤isjust
discoverit.
①本句包含一个定语从句,先行词therichestperson后面
省略了关系代词that.
②Itisapitythat...属于高级句型,意为“真遗憾/真
可惜”.其中it作形式主语,真正的主语是that引导的主
语从句.
③此处使用了if条件句,从而进一步体现了作者对农民的
惋惜之情.
④本句使用了高级表达bewilingtodo,longtodo等.
⑤what在句中引导主语从句.复杂句型的变换使用是本
文最大的亮点.
3.
Themastersaidthathebuiltalargebeautifulhouse
intown.Itwasdesignedaspaymentfortheservicethey
hadbeenoffering,andthosewhohadbeen loyaltohim
wouldstaywithhim
,① livingintheirnewhouse.Sohe
askedthetwoservantswhethertheyhadagoodharvest
thisyear.ThefirstservanthappilysaidthathehadproG
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