内容正文:
话题七 救人脱困类
[典题示例]
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使其构成一篇完整的短文.
Itwasjustbefore8a.m.,October17.PamBalessteppedontothesnowGcoveredJewelTrail
(小路).SheplannedasixGhourclimbinghikethroughNew Hampshires MountWashington
StatePark.Shehadpackedforalmosteveryaccident,includingclothes,heatpacks,abottleof
hotchocolate...Andsheintendedtowalkalone.ApieceofpaperonthedashboardofhercardeG
tailedhertrip:startupJewelTrailandreturntohercarbeforesomeforecastedbadweatherarG
rives.Pamalwaysleftherhikingplansinhercar.ShewasavolunteeronthePemigewassetValG
leySearchandRescueTeam(说明身份,伏笔).
At10:30a.m.,theweatherwasshowingitsteeth.(天气,伏笔)Pamaddedevenmore
clothestoprotectherselffromthecoldwindsandfog.(加衣)Thenshenoticedsomething:asinG
glesetoffootprintsinthesnowaheadofher.(一个人的脚印,伏笔)Shedbeenfolowingfaint
tracksal dayandhadntgiventhem muchthought,becausesomanypeopleclimbedJewel
Trail.Butthese,sherealised,hadbeenmadebyapairoftrainers.
By11a.m.,Pamwasgettingcold,despitemovingfast.Sheputonanextratop.(再次加衣)
GoodthingIpackedheavy,shethought.Shedecidedtoabandonherplan.Returningtohercar
wasarequirement.StronggustsofwindattackedherbackandleftsideandtheonlythingkeepG
ingheronGulfsideTrailwasthetracksinthesnow.(天气,伏笔)Asshefoughtthewindand
heavysleet,hereyessearchingforsometypeofshelter,thetracksmadeahardleftGhandturnoff
thetrail.
Alofasudden,shefeltalarmed
.Shewassurethehikercouldlosehiswayandwasheading
straighttowardthechalengingtrailsoftheGreatGulf.Pamfolowedthetrackscarefuly.She
roundedacornerandsawamansitting motionlessbesideastone.Hestaredinthedirectionof
GreatGulf.Sheapproachedhim.Hisheadwasbare.Helookedsoakingwet.Thickfrostcovered
hisjacket.Ashiseyestrackedherslowly,hebarelyturnedhishead.(故事高潮,远足者出事)
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答.
Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.
Theyhadtogetoutofthere.
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[五步续写]
第一步 把握原文大意 明主旨和两线
主旨
大意
搜救队志愿者PamBales安排好一切后独自登山远足,由于天气恶劣,她放弃远足,返回
途中却发现一个冻伤的人
原文
两线
情节线:登山远足→天气变冷加衣,发现独自远足者脚印→天气更冷,放弃远足→发现
远足者冻伤
情感线:thoughtful→welGorganized→determined→alarmed
写作
意图
PamBales如何带着冻伤的男子安全脱险
第二步 根据首句信息 定续写方向
两段首句
定一框
①根据段首句关键信息“turnedintorescuingtheman”可推出该段可叙述男人冻
伤的状况、如何施救和施救的结果;②尾句可营造故事冲突,如男子冻伤无法
行走
二框二首
正能量
①根据段首句“Theyhadtogetoutofthere”可描写:如何带被冻坏的男子离开,
安全脱险的艰难,该段可再次营造冲突,如天气变得更加恶劣;②尾句可写男子
的感激
第三步 原、续两线同 加合理细节
◎高度融洽 续写部分两情线的发展应与原文两情线一致,以使“两情相悦”.情节线是:男人的
状况→施救→施救结果→天气恶劣→艰难返回→安全脱险;情感线可以是:surprised→decisive→
worried→struggling→relieved→grateful.
◎添加细节 动作细节:第一段涉及如何施救,可详细描述施救的动作;环境细节:原文对环境的
描写很多,续写部分可添加对恶劣天气的描写,营造人与环境的冲突,也是与原文的呼应.
第四步 沿原语言特点 完美连贯表达
原文利用了大量的简单句、非谓语动词、并列句和时间状语从句,续写部分应沿用该特点描写
PamBales的动作和环境.
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第五部分 读后续写
第五步 临摹衡水字体 打造完美卷面
Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.Shefoundhewassuferingfromfrostbiteon
hisfeet.Hecouldhardlymoveanythingexcepthiseyes.Withouthesitation,shecleanedthefrost
fromhisjacketandquicklywarmedhisheadwithwarmclothes.Shetookouttheheatpacksshe
hadpreparedforherselfbeforeshelefttowarmthemansstiflegs,andpouredhimsomehot
chocolate.Slowly,themanwasabletomoveslightly,buthewastooweaktospeak.Hewasso
badlyhurtthathecouldntwalk.
Theyhadtogetoutofthere.Thewindwashowling.Itwasgetingcolderandcolder,andif
theydidnotgetoutofthere,theywouldsoondie.Shecarriedthemanonherbackandwalked
slowlyalongthepath,notdaringtorest,notdaringtostayforwalkingalsobroughtwarmth.With
alotofefort,Pamfinalyreachedhercarandsavedthemanslife.Shewasexhaustedanditwas
alworthit.Themanwasevenmoregrateful.
(2025山西晋中模拟预测)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之
构成一篇完整的短文.
Wewereapoorfamily,livinginasmalapartmentintheheartofthecity.Mymomworked
tirelesslyasawaitress,strugglingtomakeendsmeet.Despiteourfinancialstruggles,shealG
waysfoundwaystobringjoyintoourlives.
Oneautumnday,shetookmysisterandmetothezooandlaterthemuseumwiththemonG
eyshehadsavedforalongtime.Thezoowasfiledwithlaughteraswewatchedthemonkeys
swingfrombranchtobranchandthegiraffesstretchtheirlongneckstoreachtheleaves.The
museumwasequalyfascinating.IthadavastcolectionofancienthandGmadeobjectsandinterG
activeexhibits.Wewereinaweoftheworldthatopenedupbeforeus.Eventhoughitwasa
simpleouting,itfeltlikealuxuriousadventure.Weeventreatedourselvestoamealatanearby
dinerforlunch,enjoyingeverybiteasifitwereafeast.
Butaswewalkedtowardsthebusstoptoheadhome,mymomsfacesuddenlyfel—We
hadoverspent,andtherewasntenoughmoneyleftforalthreeofustoaffordthebusfare.The
realityofoursituationhituslikeacoldwave.Wewerefacinga6Gmilewalkbackhome,andto
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makemattersworse,ithadjuststartedsnowing.Theskywaspaintedgray,andthesnowflakes
werefalinggentlybutsteadily,promisingtoturnintoaheavysnowfalsoon.
WeduckedintoasmalChineserestaurantnearby,hopingtofindawayoutofourproblem.
Mymom,withamixofembarrassmentanddetermination,askedtheownerifwecouldusethe
phonetoasksomeoneforaride.Theowner,Mr.Chen,lookedatuswithkindnessinhiseyes.
Heaskedwhathappenedandmymomexplainedoursituation.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
Withouthesitation,Mr.Chengaveusthemoneyweneededtotakethebus.
AsIenjoyedthefoodfrom Mr.Chen,thewords“payitforward”crossedmymindagain.
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第五部分 读后续写
话题四 学以致用
[参考范文]
Justthen,shesawaflashlightapproaching.Inthe
dimlight,EmilyrecognizeditwasnobodyelsebutZoe.
Herface wasfiled withconcern whenshesaw Emily
strugglinginthecold.“Ithoughtyoumightneedhelp,”
Zoesaidsoftly.EmilyseyeswidenedwithamixofsurG
priseandrelief.Withoutaword,Zoesteppedforwardand
examinedthetent.Sheexplainedthatshecouldfixitwith
thespareraincoatshehadbrought.AstheyworkedtoG
gether,theawkwardnessgradualymeltedaway.EmilyreG
alizedthatZoestil caredandtherainseemedtohave
washedawaythemisunderstandingsbetweenthem.
WithZoeshelp,theysoonfixedthetent.Backinside
thetent,Emilytookadeepbreathandsaid,“Iwassohurt
whenyouchoseDaisyfortheproject.”ZoelookedatheraG
pologeticalyandreplied,“Im sorry.Ijustthoughtit
wouldbebettertoincludethenew comer,butInever
meanttohurtyou.”Thatnight,theyhadanopenGhearted
conversation,clearingupaltheconfusion.Untilthendid
theyrealizethatfriendsneedopencommunicationandtheir
bondbecameevenstronger.Fromthenon,theyworetheir
matchingbraceletsagain,asymboloftheirunbreakable
friendship.
话题五 学以致用
[参考范文]
Guyotookadeepbreathandstretchedouthisarm.“I
candoit!Icandoit!”herepeated.Heclosedhiseyesand
forcedhishandintothehole.Nostings! Thesmoke
worked.Reachingasfarashecould,hepuledoutseveral
largepiecesofthehoneycombfiled withstickyhoney.
Grandfathersaid,“Thatsfine.Weneedtoleaveenough
forthebees.”Theybackedawayfromtheholejustasthe
beesstartedtomakenoiseagain.
Grandfatherputmostofthehoneycombinsidehis
container.HehandedGuyoapiece.“GivethistothehonG
eyguide.”Guyoplacedthepieceatthebaseofthetree
wherethehoneyguidesat.“Thankyouforsharingthis
treasurewithus.”Thehoneyguidedroppedtotheground
toeathisreward.Asthey walked home,Grandfather
placedahandonGuyosshoulder.“Welbeabletoselthe
honeyinthevilage.Itsagreathelphavingyouaround.”
Guyosmiled,“Iguessbeinglittleissometimesagood
thing.”
话题六 学以致用
[参考范文]
Hearinganoise,Alanfroze,feelingsomethingwas
thereinthedarkness.Arippleoffearcreptuponhimas
hecastaglancethere.Heartbeatingwildly,Alanmadehis
waytothenoise,withbothofhislegstremblingunconG
trolably.Acloserlookconvincedhimthatitwasonlya
rabbit,whichquicklydisappearedinthedark.Inrelief,he
feltthegentlebreezerubbinghisface.Themoonshedding
itssilverlightonthe woods,Alan wasgreetedbythe
soundofbirdsandinsects.Envelopedbyfragrantair,he
feltasifinthewonderland.
Thenextmorning,theofficeraskedforreports.
Othercampersbraggedabouttheiradventureinthedark—
howtheyranintosome “horrible”creaturesandbravely
scaredthemoff.Theofficer,wearingadoubtfullook,ofG
ferednocomments.WhenitwasAlansturn,hetoldthe
truththattherewerenoscaryanimalsbutbreathtakingscenery
tobeexplored.Asmileblossomedontheofficersface.
Thatwasexactlywhatthecampingwasalabout.OnlyafG
teroneovercamethefearinhisownheartcouldheembrace
therealbeautyofnature.
话题七 学以致用
[参考范文]
Withouthesitation,Mr.Chengaveusthemoneywe
neededtotakethebus.Inaddition,hepackedsomefood,
insistingthatwetakeithome.Mymom,deeplymoved,
expressedgratitudeandtoldhimwedtrytopayhimback
oneday.ButMr.Chenjustsmiledandsaid,“Youdont
needtopaymeback.Payitforwardinstead.”Hiswords
echoedinourhearts.Asthebuspuledawayfromthe
stop,Ilookedatthefalingsnow,feelingluckytobeheadG
inghomeinwarmth.MysisterandIheldthebagoffood
tightly,imagininghowdeliciousitwouldbe.
AsIenjoyedthefoodfrom Mr.Chen,thewords
“payitforward”crossed my mindagain.Mom also
sharedherthoughtsaboutMr.Chenskindness.“Wemay
nothavemuch,”shesaid,“butwecanalwaysfindwaysto
helpothers.RememberwhatMr.Chensaid—payitforG
ward.”Fromthatdayon,welookedforopportunitiesto
spreadkindness,justasMr.Chenhaddoneforus.Even
smalacts,likesharingoursnackswithclassmatesorhelpG
ingelderlyneighborswiththeirgroceries,becamemeanG
ingfulwaystohonorhisgenerosity.ThelessonMr.Chen
taughtuscontinuedtoguideouractions,creatingachain
ofkindnessthatwehopedwouldreachfarbeyondoursmal
apartment.
话题八 学以致用
[参考范文]
ThetailorseemedtounderstandwhatIwasthinking
atthemoment.“Doyoutrustfootbal,youngman?”InodG
ded.Hepointedtoashelflinedwithfootbals.“IlikecolG
lectingdiscardedfootbals.Repairingafootbal isquite
healing.Sewingoneisaschalengingasplayingit,forevG
erystitchcounts.Now,wouldyou...”Ihandedhim my
shirt.HeexaminedthetearandstartedhisworkprofesG
sionaly.Whilemending,heaskedaboutmyfavoritefootG
baler,andthepleasantchatperfectedtherepairing.
Suddenly,Inoticedaphotoofafootballteamnext
tothesewingmachine.Flashingaknowingsmile,heexG
plaineditwasalongtimeago,whenhewasthecaptainand
whenhedidnotundergotheoperationthatstoppedhis
dream.Hisstoryjustpushedmetospeakoutmine.He
toldmetopursuemydreamandactlikemyidol,Messi—
“thesmalestplayeronthepitchbutthegreatestplayerof
ourtime”.Ithankedhim,sayingthatnotonlydidhemend
myshirtwithhiscraftsmanshipbuthealsorepaired my
dreamwithsportsmanship.Giggling,heexclaimed,“Told
you! Alkindsofrepairsandservices!”
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