专题09 读后续写 出彩结尾（二）（课件）-2026年高考英语复习写作系列

专题9 高考英语读后续写 出彩结尾（二） 二、角度 (一)情感升华 每一个故事的创作，不只为了讲清楚一件事情的来龙去脉，还要包含作者想要传达的寓意、想与读者分享的感悟。这种思想往往贯穿全文，并在故事结尾时得到升华。在读后续写的结尾部分，可以采用情感升华的方式，让读者产生情感上的共鸣，激发读者思考。情感升华的结尾要求有较高的立意，是故事的灵魂所在，这样的结尾能够产生强烈的艺术感染力。通常，我们可以通过表现人生感悟、生活真谛、生活哲理、人生观或价值观来达到结尾部分的情感升华。 这类升华需要从故事中的具体事件提炼出普遍性道理，但又要避免空洞说教，而是通过细腻的描写和自然联想来实现。 一、五大升华方向及对应句型 1. 挫折与成长 核心哲理：困难是成长的催化剂 【高分句型】 Not until...did I understand that... The...was not just..., but a hidden lesson in... 【高考例句】Not until the last petal of the wilted rose fell did I understand that failures, like seasons, are nature’s way of preparing us for new blooms. （直到玫瑰最后一片花瓣凋落，我才明白失败如同四季轮回，是大自然让我们重获新生的方式） 【适用场景】考试失利、比赛失败、技能学习受挫等情节 2. 平凡中的珍贵 核心哲理：简单事物蕴含真正幸福 【高分句型】 It was in...that I found... How ironic that...while... 【高考例句】It was in Mom’s routine question “Did you sleep well?” that I found the deepest love — unspoken yet steadier than mountain. （在妈妈每天例行的“睡得好吗”中，我发现了最深沉的爱——无言却比山更稳固） 【适用场景】家庭场景、日常小事（如一杯热牛奶、修补的衣物等） 3. 选择与责任 核心哲理：每个选择定义我们是谁 【高分句型】 The real test wasn’t..., but whether... Choosing to...was my declaration that... 【高考例句】Helping the injured puppy meant missing the exam, but some choices aren’t about gain — they’re about who you refuse to become. （救助受伤的小狗让我错过了考试，但有些选择无关得失，而是关乎你拒绝成为怎样的人） 【适用场景】道德困境、利他行为、放弃机会帮助他人等 4. 时间与传承 核心哲理：瞬间即永恒，精神永续 【高分句型】 As..., I realized... ...was no longer..., but... 【高考例句】As Grandma’s wrinkled hands guided mine to plant the sapling, I realized true legacy isn’t in what we leave behind, but in what we help grow. （当奶奶布满皱纹的手教我种树苗时，我明白真正的传承不是留下什么，而是培育什么） 【适用场景】祖孙互动、传统手艺、文化传承等 5. 自我接纳 核心哲理：完美不如完整 【高分句型】 For the first time, I embraced... The...taught me that... 【高考例句】Staring at my scar in the mirror, I finally saw it not as a flaw, but as proof that even broken things can heal stronger. （凝视镜中的疤痕，我终于明白它并非缺陷，而是破碎之物也能愈合成钢的证明） 适用场景：外貌焦虑、能力缺陷、与他人比较等情节 二、避免俗套的3种方法 用反常识表达哲理 ❌ 俗套： Helping others makes us happy. ✅ 新颖： That day I learned a paradox — the more we give away, the richer we become. （那天我学到一个悖论——我们给予越多，内心反而越富足） 2.将抽象哲理具象化 ❌ 直白： Time is precious. ✅ 生动： Grandpa’s pocket watch, forever stuck at 3:15, screamed a silent truth: some moments can’t be rewound. （爷爷永远停在3:15的怀表无声呐喊：有些时刻无法重来） 3.用自然意象隐喻 ❌ 普通： Life has ups and downs. ✅ 诗意： Like bamboo that bends in storms but never breaks, resilience isn’t about avoiding falls, but dancing with the wind. （如竹子在风暴中弯曲却不折断，坚韧不是避免跌倒，而是与风共舞） 三、真题应用 原文梗概：城市男孩在山区迷路，被独居老人所救 【升华段落】The oil lamp in Old Li’s cabin flickered like a persistent star. As he handed me homemade herb soup — bitter yet strangely comforting — it struck me: we city dwellers chase artificial lights, while true warmth often hides in places without WiFi signals. Maybe being “lost” was life’s way of reminding me that happiness coordinates aren’t always found on smartphones. （李老汉小屋里的油灯如固执的星星般闪烁。当他递来自制的苦中带甘的草药汤时，我突然醒悟：我们都市人追逐人造光芒，而真正的温暖常藏在没有WiFi信号的地方。或许“迷路”是生活提醒我：幸福的坐标不一定在智能手机上） 【技巧解析】 1.物品象征：油灯（传统温暖）vs 智能手机（现代冷漠） 2.味觉描写：bitter yet comforting 隐喻生活真谛 3.双关修辞：“lost” 既指迷路，也指现代人的迷失 四、万能哲理短句 The deepest lessons are written in life’s margins, not textbooks. Gratitude turns ordinary moments into golden memories. Courage isn’t the absence of fear, but the will to act despite it. Kindness is the only language that needs no translation. What defines us isn’t what happens to us, but what we choose to become through it. （注：所有例句均控制在25词以内，符合高考写作要求） 建议考生建立“哲理素材本”，按主题分类收集： ❊自然现象 → 人生比喻（如彩虹需要风雨） ❊日常物品 → 抽象意义（如旧鞋象征走过的路） ❊动作描写 → 心理成长（如“松开紧握的拳头”代表释怀） Sample Back in 2004 when my daughter Becky was ten, she and my husband Joe were united in their desire for a dog. As for me, I shared none of their enthusiasm for having a pet. “But why?” they pleaded. “Because I don’t have time to take care of a dog.” “But we’ll do it.” “Really? You’re going to walk the dog? Feed the dog? Bathe the dog?” “Yes, yes, and yes.” “I don’t believe you.” They didn’t. From day two (everyone wanted to walk the cute puppy that first day), neither thought to walk the dog. While I gradually accepted that I would be the one responsible for keeping track of her shots, to schedule her vet appointments, to feed and clean her, Misty knew this on day one. Misty and I quickly developed something very similar to a Vulcan mind-meld (心灵融合). She’d look at me with those sad brown eyes of hers, beam (流) her need, and then wait, trusting I would understand — which, strangely, I almost always did. In no time, she would rest at my feet as I read and spread out on my stomach as I watched television. Even so, part of me continued to resent the walking duty. Joe and Becky had promised. It’s not fair. I’d complain to myself silently as she and I went for a walk. “It’s not fair,” I’d loudly remind anyone upon our return home. Then one day, my husband’s doctor uttered an unthinkable word: leukemia (白血病). I spent eight to ten hours a day with Joe in the hospital, doing anything and everything I could to ease his discomfort. During those six months of hospitalizations, Becky, 12 at the time, adjusted to other adults being in the house when she returned from school. My work colleagues adjusted to my taking off at a moment’s notice for medical emergencies. Every part of my life changed; no part of my old routine remained. Misty still needed walking. At the beginning, when friends offered to take her, I declined because I knew they had their own households to deal with. As the months went by, I began to realize that I actually wanted to walk Misty. ___________________________________ After Joe died in 2009, Misty slept on his pillow. ___________________________________________________________ 【结尾设计】读后续写文章结尾需要引导主人公情绪朝正向发展，因此，故事的结局应该是圆满的。在此基础上，可以通过结尾句进行情感升华。在这段故事中，主人公一开始抱怨 Misty给她添麻烦，后来主动遛狗，并享受遛狗的过程，针对主人公对待Misty的态度转变，可以从不同的角度，分析主人公最后的情感变化，以及所得出的生活感悟。 版本一：主人公从 Misty 的陪伴中获得很多安慰，Misty 也渐渐成为主人公的情感寄托，情感自然而然地发生着变化。主人公彻底改变了看待宠物的方式，不再把宠物看成负担，而是把宠物升级为家庭成员，从而给予了更多的尊重和关爱。 参考范文： As the months went by, I began to realize that I actually wanted to walk Misty. Every time I saw the big figure walking around me, hearing the sound she made with her four paws, I felt a calm that had not existed before. At that moment, I forgot everything that was happening in the hospital or at Becky’s school or in my workplace, everything except Misty’s brown eyes. As Joe’s illness got worse, Misty perceived the depressing atmosphere in our house. She became gentler and often accompanied Becky and me in silence. After Joe died in 2009, Misty slept on his pillow. She always buried her face in the pillow and lay on her stomach, still and motionless. I know she misses Joe, just like we do. It’s moments like this that I remember when I met Misty at the very beginning, I told Joe I didn’t like dogs and complained about walking Misty. But now I realize that they also have emotions, like humans. Pets like Misty are not simply animals, but family members. They are also our best friends. 【点评】从与Misty 的朝夕相处中，主人公慢慢转变对待宠物的态度，这是大家比较容易想到的一种情感升华。这一结尾的优点在于，情感升华自然，情节发展流畅，能够很好地打动读者。 版本二：虽然遛狗会占据主人公的时间和精力，但在遛狗的时候，看到Misty调皮捣蛋，她可以暂时从生活的烦恼中解脱出来，从而得到短暂的放松。在艰难的生活中，这样的片刻放松是很珍贵的，可以让主人公调整心情勇于面对困难，主人公从 Misty身上获得生活感悟：无论现实有多艰难，未来有多坎坷，都应该学会乐观面对，享受当下。 参考范文： As the months went by, I began to realize that I actually wanted to walk Misty. When Joe’s illness became more serious, pretty much everyone around me acted differently. Yet throughout it all, Misty remained the same. While I took her for a walk, she had no interest in Joe’s blood counts or the test results. On the street or in the park, she had only one thing on her mind: squirrels! She was so joyous that even on the worst days, she could make me smile. On a daily basis, she reminded me thar life went on. After Joe died in 2009, Misty slept on his pillow. I haven’t once tried to chase her off the bed. The truth is, after years of complaining, I’ve come to enjoy Misty’s company. As I watch her chasing after a squirrel, throwing her whole being into the here-and-now of a practice that has never once ended in victory, she reminds me, too, that no matter how harsh the present or unpredictable the future, there’s almost always some measure of joy to be extracted from the moment. 【点评】这个版本的结尾的立意相对更高，不是仅仅局限在人与动物之间的情感关系上，而是升华到了对生活的感悟。这样的感悟也能够带给读者反思，让人眼前一亮。 练习：根据原文及续写内容，使用情感升华的手法补全第二段结尾。 It was eight o’clock on a cold spring night. I was so tired. I had been on crutches for seven weeks, recovering from surgery, and I couldn’t find a way to cheer myself up. The phone rang — for the sixth time in less than an hour. We knew who it was. When my mother was 68, a stroke had damaged her brain, putting her in a coma (昏迷). She pulled through, but ever since then, she had been suffering from dementia (痴呆) and mental distress. There was little we could do to help her. As her eldest daughter, I tried my best to help her. Though we visited every few days, she believed that her daughters had not visited in months. She thought that her friend Jimmy never wanted to see her again, even though he called her and visited weekly. She had no idea that she had repeated the things she was about to say a hundred times today and a hundred times the day before. She had no idea that I had undergone surgery, nor could she remember her own granddaughter’s name. She was not aware of most of her own past. She drifted through the present all alone. This time, I got angry with my mother. “Mom!” I yelled. “We care about you. We visited two days ago! Mom, you have to believe me, and if you don’t, I cannot talk to you anymore!” Silence. Then she said, “I am only calling to say hello. Why are you yelling?” “I’m yelling because you keep calling me a hundred times every single day! I’m yelling because you are asking me the same question a thousand times every time you call me! I’m yelling because I have repeated the answer ten thousand times! I’m yelling because I don’t know what to say!” I sat on the couch, aware that my danghter was watching me. She heard me blame my mother, heard me lose my patience and announce that someonc I loved was a burden. I curled up (蜷缩) on the couch, defeated. My five-year-old daughter asked to speak to her grandmother on the phone. ___________________________________ I watched my daughter care about her fragile grandmother with such deftness. _________________________________ 【结尾设计】这篇文章讲述了激烈的家庭矛盾被小女儿温柔化解的故事。这是一篇充满爱与感悟的故事。而续写部分的情感升华，更是全篇的精华所在。我们可以从不同角度分析主人公从小女儿与自己母亲的通话中所获得的感悟，从而设计续写结尾部分的情感升华。 版本一：从女儿与外婆的交谈中，主人公感受到了亲人之间无私的关爱、浓浓的亲情。这份无条件的、亲人之间的关爱应该是宽容与耐心。女儿的举动给予人公上了一课，让她学会了如何与家人和睦相处。 完成结尾部分的创作： My five-year-old daughter asked to speak to her grandmother on the phone. I handed it over without a word. She gave a warm greeting to her grandmother on the phone. I heard my mother exclaim through the receiver. My daughter shared something interesting happening in the kindergarten with her. I heard her cheering on the other side of the phone. My mother expressed her love for her. But then she asked my daughter the same questions again. My daughter patiently answered again and then offered to sing for her grandmother. I watched my daughter care about her fragile grandmother with such deftness. She did much better than me. She answered every question asked by my mother with patience and offered to do something that made her grandmother happy, while I just yelled at my mother like a mad woman. _______________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【点评】这个版本的结尾是为了突出家人之间的情感，主人公从女儿身上学会了如何与家人和睦相处。该结论简单直白，较容易得出，对读者也有一定的教育意义。 My daughter taught me how to answer the phone of a beloved family member like a grown-up, even though she was just five years old. She taught me that it was normal and important for everyone to care about the people we loved in our life. 版本二:故事中的主人公和外婆产生矛盾,小女儿理智化解矛盾,外婆对待自己女儿(主人公)的态度恢复如初:即使失去记忆，也记得要爱自己的女儿，母爱就是如此伟大。 完成结尾部分的创作： My five-year-old daughter asked to speak to her grandmother on the phone. I handed it to her and shook my head slightly. “Hi, grandmother!” After a cordial greeting, she talked to my mother in a more natural manner. My daughter burst out laughing from time to time, with a pleasurable expression upon her face. Their conversation went on smoothly as if they were old friends. Gradually, my mother’s voice also lightened like a song bird, which caused me to reflect on why I had been yelling in the first place. I watched my daughter care about her fragile grandmother with such deftness. My heart was filled with a mix of comfort and shame. “Do you want to talk to my mother?” I waited for the response anxiously. _______ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ She handed me the phone and my heart leaped with joy as I heard my mother say hello again. She had no recollection of my angry outburst. We talked calmly, as my mother treated me like a child. Eventually, she said goodbye. Tears rolled down my cheeks. In that moment, I realized that a mother's love was like tears from the stars. 【点评】这一续写结尾的设计更加突出了母爱这一主题，主人公爱自己的女儿，但她同时也是自己母亲的女儿，也是被母亲深爱着的。这样的情感升华更能打动读者，触动读者内心柔软的地方，给人留下更深刻的印象。 版本三:故事中的外婆受失忆困扰，并不记得自己的外孙女，但这并不妨碍五岁的小女孩去爱自己的外婆。主人公从自己女儿这份无私的关爱中，感悟到家人之间的爱不是索取，而是不求回报的奉献。 完成结尾部分的创作： My five-year-old daughter asked to speak to her grandmother on the phone. I handed her the speaker hesitantly, not sure if I had scared her with all of my yelling and angry complaints. What I never expected was her next words. “It’s me, granny,” she said in her joyous, youthful voice. The conversation flowed smoothly as they talked about school, trees and the new ice-cream shop. At some point I overheard my mother laughing through the phone and realized with regret that I was unable to recall the last time she had sounded so happy. I watched my daughter care about her fragile grandmother with such deftness. I remembered a time when I would talk to my mother just like she did, but such was the power of time that it seemed to wear away one’s patience and cover up one’s love with annoyance. _________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I sat and watched them talk and laugh, reflecting on my earlier behavior. My daughter, whose name my mother could not remember, taught me a valuable lesson that day: love is an act of greatness in that it expects no returns. 【点评】在此版本中,作者探讨了什么是“爱”，在作者眼中，爱不是索取，而是奉献。这样的情感更真挚、更深沉，也更弥足珍贵，所以作者赋予了“爱”更高的立意。这样的故事情感充沛，自然最能打动人心。 （二）剧情升华 在读后续写的结尾部分，可以采用剧情升华的方法，给出一个情理之中，却又意料之外的故事结局。在结尾的设计中,尤其需要注意剧情发展的张力。所谓的剧情张力，即由情景矛盾冲突而形成的期待式悬念，通过对人物、事件、时空场景等诸多因素的有机结合，在有限的篇幅内巧妙设置剧情张力，可以达到增加故事深度和内涵的效果，使续写故事更具艺术魅力。要想达到剧情升华，需要结合人物性格和故事主题，设计一个巧妙的结局。 高考英语读后续写的剧情升华是让故事从普通叙事上升到有思想深度的关键环节，需要将情节发展、人物成长和主题表达有机结合。 I.剧情升华的3种核心方式 1. 人物弧光（Character Arc） 公式：初始状态 → 经历冲突 → 认知改变 → 行动体现 高考适用例句： Before: I used to believe winning meant being perfect. After: But that fall on the gymnastics mat taught me — true victory isn’t about flawless performance, but about standing up with grace every time you stumble. （但那次体操垫上的跌倒教会我——真正的胜利不是完美表现，而是每次跌倒后优雅站起的姿态） 【技巧】用对比句突出变化（适用考试常见主题：比赛失利/自卑心理/人际矛盾） 2. 象征物呼应（Symbolic Echo） 公式：前文出现关键物品 → 结尾赋予新意义 高考真题应用（以“祖传怀表”为例）： 前文: The antique pocket watch from Grandpa always ran 10 minutes slow. 升华: When the watch’s familiar ticking stopped at my graduation, I finally understood --what it truly measured wasn’t time, but the patience and love he poured into me. （当怀表熟悉的滴答声在我毕业那天停止时，我终于明白——它衡量的从来不是时间，而是他倾注在我身上的耐心与爱。） 【高分特征】 物品重现（怀表） 双关修辞（measure既指计时也指衡量爱） 情感留白（不直说“爷爷去世”，用“stopped”含蓄表达） 3. 环境隐喻（Environmental Metaphor） 公式：天气/景色变化 = 人物心理成长 高考例句： 前文设定：暴雨中迷路 升华段：The retreating storm left diamond raindrops on spiderwebs — nature’s way of showing even the most broken paths can lead to unexpected beauty, if only we dare to continue walking. （退去的暴雨在蛛网上留下钻石般的雨滴——大自然在告诉我们，即使最破碎的路也能通向意外之美，只要我们敢继续前行。） 提分点： 用spiderweb（脆弱但坚韧）和diamond（珍贵）形成隐喻 broken paths呼应前文“迷路”情节 二、4步打造自然升华 以“救助流浪狗”为例： 1.埋下伏笔（前文）：The stray dog limped away whenever humans approached. 2.关键转折（续写部分）： I knelt down and placed the food tin quietly, humming the lullaby Mom used to sing. 3.认知改变： Its trembling sniff toward my hand wasn’t just trust — it was a mirror reflecting my own loneliness after transferring schools. 4.哲理升华： Perhaps kindness works both ways: the hand that gives comfort also receives warmth in return, like sunlight bouncing off the moon. （或许善意是双向的：给予安慰的手也会收获温暖，如同阳光在月亮上的回响。） 【阅卷亮点】 动作描写（kneeled/humming）展现性格 比喻新颖（sunlight/moon比喻善意的循环） 不强行说教，用perhaps保持探讨语气 三、高频剧情升华模板 1. 误解 → 理解 模板句：It wasn’t until...that I realized...had never been..., but... 例句：It wasn’t until Dad’s “annoying” daily calls stopped during my boarding school days that I realized his nagging had never been about control, but about keeping his love on speed dial. （直到住校时爸爸“烦人”的每日来电停止，我才明白他的唠叨从来不是控制，而是把他的爱设为快捷拨号。） 2. 失去 → 获得 模板句：Losing...cost me..., but gifted me... 例句：Losing the debate competition cost me a trophy, but gifted me something far brighter — the courage to embrace imperfections and the wisdom to listen. （输掉辩论赛让我失去奖杯，却赐予更珍贵之物——接纳不完美的勇气和倾听的智慧。） 3. 恐惧 → 突破 模板句：What once terrified me now became... — not because...changed, but because I... 例句：The stage lights that once blinded me now felt like warm hugs — not because their glare dimmed, but because I’d learned to see them as spotlights for my authentic self. （曾经让我目眩的舞台灯光现在如温暖拥抱——并非灯光变柔和，而是我已学会将其视为照亮真实自我的聚光灯。） 四、必须避免的3类错误 强行拔高 ❌ This taught me the profound Marxist truth about... ✅ 改用个人化表达： Maybe the universe wasn’t sending me a grand message — just a gentle reminder that... 2.脱离情节 ❌ 前文讲学习压力，结尾突然跳到环保 ✅ 紧扣前文元素（如试卷/时钟）： The crumpled test paper in my hand seemed lighter now, its wrinkles not failures but proof I’d faced challenges head-on. 3.过度抒情 ❌ 大量使用magnificent / destiny等大词 ✅ 用具体意象承载情感： Mom’s mending needle wove through my torn backpack straps, stitching something far stronger than fabric — resilience. 五、真题实战 原文梗概：矮个子球员最后3秒绝杀 升华段示范： As the buzzer echoed through the stadium, my still-tingling fingertips knew what my mind hadn’t yet processed: giants aren’t measured in centimeters, but in the height of one’s determination when the odds tower against you. That shot wasn’t just a basket — it was my declaration that limitations exist only in dictionaries, not in human spirit. 得分点分析： 感官描写（tingling fingertips）增强代入感 关键词重构（giants/height 呼应前文“矮个子”） 金句节奏（limitations exist...短句有力） 主题提升（体育精神 → 人类意志力） 六、万能升华短句 The real miracle wasn’t..., but the ordinary courage to... Sometimes life’s best answers come wrapped in... What seemed like an ending turned out to be... “I came for..., but left with...” It’s strange how...can teach you more than...” （所有例句均含高考核心词汇，字数控制在18-25词） 【考前训练建议】 从历年真题中提取5个常见情节（如：帮助他人/克服恐惧/误会解除） 为每个情节准备： ①1个象征物（如：破风筝→成长） ②1个环境隐喻（如：暴雨转晴→希望） ③1句哲理升华（模板句+个性化改编） Sample On Sunday, Nicholas, a teenager, went skiing with his father at Sugarloaf Mountain in Maine. They had a wonderful day and decided to drive home to Massachusetts after a final run. They took a chairlift to the top of the mountain, where they split up (分开) to go down in different trails (路线). When the father finished his run, he headed to the parking lot to wait for his son. However, Nicholas never showed up. It turned out that a fierce snowstorm had swept into the area as Nicholas was on his way down. Unable to see far, he accidentally turned off the path and ventured down the west side of the mountain. Before he knew it, Nicholas was lost and all alone. His way back to the ski trails was blocked. What’s worse, he didn’t have any food or water with him, let alone his cell phone or other supplies. The sun began to sink and he was getting colder by the minute. Nicholas had no idea where he was. He tried not to panic. He thought about Bear Grylls’ survival show Man vs. Wild that he used to watch on TV. In the show, Grytls is abandoned in wild area and has to help himself out. It was time to put the tips he had learned to use. He decided to stop moving around. He needed the energy, and the winds weren’t as strong in the valley where he stood as they were up on the mountain. Plus, there was a better chance of someone finding him if he stayed out. The first thing he did was to seek shelter from the freezing wind and snow. Using his skis, Nicholas built a snow cave. He gathered a huge mass of snow and dug out a hole in the middle. Then he piled branches on top of himself, like a blanket, to stay as warm as he could. When evening came, Nicholas was really hungry. He ate some snow and drank some water from a nearby stream so that he wouldn’t dehydrate (脱水). Then he returned to his cave and slept. When Nicholas didn’t show up, the father realized there must be something wrong. ______________________________ The next day, Nicholas heard the sound of a snowmobile. ___________________________________________________ 【结尾设计】故事的结尾，主人公面临的问题需要得到解决，因此Nicholas最终一定会脱离危险，但脱险方式可能有很多种。 版本一（普通版）：驾驶机动雪橇的人发现并营救了 Nicholas，而 Nicholas也并无大碍，经历了这件事后，反而变得更勇敢。 参考范文: When Nicholas didn’t show up, his father realized there must be something wrong. The father contacted the police, and a search team was gathered to look for the missing teenager. Although the weather condition was poor and the wind was still fierce, they didn’t lose hope of finding Nicholas alive. However, they knew the clock was ticking, and Nicholas stood a better chance of survival the earlier they found him. The team split up, and one of the searchers who knew the area better decided to sweep a mountain trail he used to hike up. The next day, Nicholas heard the sound of a snowmobile. He went out and followed the sound to find help. He had walked for about a mile before he heard someone calling his name. He moved towards the sound, and sure enough, a few minutes later, he came face-to-face with the searcher. Despite feeling weak, Nicholas was generally in a good condition, and he was really happy as he was carried back to the ski resort to reunite with his family. 【点评】本篇续写采用了常规的结尾设计，它的优点是情节发展逻辑合理、张弛有度，并且刻画了人物性格，描述了人物的成长。这样的故事情节设计对于大多数考生来说比较容易掌握，创作起来压力较小。 版本二(升华版):第一个驾驶机动雪橇的人没有发现Nicholas, Nicholas知道自己必须做些什么来吸引搜救人员的注意力，于是他把红色围巾绑在树枝上并举高，如此一来，营救人员终于发现并营救了他，这件事证明了 Nicholas 的勇气和智慧。 参考范文： When Nicholas didn’t show up, his father realized there must be something wrong. He contacted the local search team for help, and they made a detailed study of Nicholas’ possible route. Nicholas’ father was burning with anxiety but still tried his best to calm down and provide useful information. As the minutes ticked away, Nicholas’ situation was getting more dangerous. The search team had to split up to rescue the trapped kid as soon as possible. In the meantime, Nicholas was exhausted, hungry, and thirsty. He encouraged himself ceaselessly to survive in this harsh (严酷的) environment. The next day, Nicholas heard the sound of a snowmobile. He ran out of the snow cave and called for help with all his strength. Unfortunately, the first rescuer didn’t notice him and just passed. Though filled with fright and sadness, Nicholas knew he must do something to attract the rescuers’ attention. Wasting not a minute, he tied his red scarf on the end of a long twig and held it high in the winds. Before long, his flamboyant (艳丽的) flag caught a rescuer’s attention. It was his bravery and intelligence that saved him. 【点评】这一剧情结尾的设计相对复杂，但它的优点在于：故事情节更加引人入胜、出其不意；人物性格刻画更鲜明，进一步突出了Nicholas在困境中的临危不乱、机智冷静。当然，从创作角度来说，难度是有所增加的。 练习：根据原文及续写内容，使用剧情升华补全的手法全第二段结尾。 A city child’s summer was spent in the street in front of his home, and all through the long summer vacations I sat on the edge of the street and watched enviously as the other boys on the block played baseball. I was never asked to take part, even when one team had a member missing--- not out of special cruelty, but because they took it for granted I would be no good at it. They were right, of course. I will never forget the wonderful evening when something changed. The baseball ended when it grew dark. Then it was the custom of the boys to retire to a little stoop (门廊) that stuck out (突出) from the candy store. There the boys would sit, mostly talking about the games played during the day and of the game to be played tomorrow. Suddenly, one of the boys raised a question to me. “What’s in those books you’re always reading?” he asked casually. “Stories,” I answered. “What kind?” asked somebody else without much interest. Nor did I know what drove me to behave as I did, for usually I just sat there in silence; but this time I told them for two hours about the story I was reading at the moment. The book was Sister Carrie. They listened, bug-eyed and breathless. I must have told it well, but I thought there was another and deeper reason that made them keep an audience. I was offering them a new and exciting experience, one that they didn’t know existed. The books they themselves rend were the ones I had long left behind. Being alone so much, I had become an enthusiastic reader and had gone through the books-for-boys series. In those days there was no reading material between children’s and grownups’. I had gone right from Tom Swiff and His Flying Lab to Theodore Dreiser and Sister Carrie. Dreiser had hit my young mind, and the boys listened to me tell the story with some of the wonders that I had had in reading it. The next night and many nights thereafter, a kind of unspoken ritual (仪式) took place. ___________________________ I enjoyed the long summer evenings until school began in the fall. ____________________________________________ 【结尾设计】故事中的“我”发现了自己的特殊才能和优势，成为了男孩子们的“中心”，很享受自己的特殊“地位”。但随着暑假的结束，“我”不能再像之前一样继续给大家讲故事了。失去了难得的“中心地位”，“我”难免会感到不甘和失落。那么开学后，“我”会做些什么，继续发挥自己的长处呢？ 版本一：在“我”感到失落的时候，之前听“我”讲故事的小伙伴突然找到“我”，请“我”继续给大家讲故事。受到这个请求的鼓励，“我”也振作起来，继续扮演自己 story teller的角色。 完成结尾部分的创作： The next night and many nights thereafter, a kind of unspoken ritual took place. The moon appeared just after the sun went down below the skyline and if there were clear skies on that day, it would be highly visible around the world. I was bathed in the moonlight and immersed (沉浸 ) in the sense of achievement when telling stories to them. In order to collect good material and enrich my feelings, I found lots of books to read, from Edgar Allan Poe to Agatha Christie, from O. Henry to Emily Bronte. These reading materials were all my trump cards. I enjoyed the long summer evenings until school began in the fall. My faithful followings were disbanded (解散) by schools and teachers. I turned back into the silent kid. One day, after completing my homework, I sat on the doorstep in a daze (迷茫). ______________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Suddenly, one of my audience showed up, told me that he missed those stories, and asked me if I could tell the stories to them when I had time. Those evenings and the baseball boys came back, and so did my confidence. 【点评】这版结尾的设计简洁，故事情节发展流畅，相对容易构思。结局积极向上，使读者内心倍感温暖，读完会心一笑。 版本二：通过这个暑假，“我”认识到自己的爱好和特长，开学后，“我”继续发挥自己的特长，主动在学校组织读书俱乐部，把同样喜欢阅读的同学组织到一起，大家一起阅读、讨论、演讲。通过读书俱乐部，“我”也更快地成长起来。 完成结尾部分的创作： The next night and many nights thereafter, a kind of unspoken ritual took place. As it went dark, I would take my place in the center of the stoop and begin the evening's tale. Some nights, in order to taste my victory more completely, I cheated. I would stop at the most exciting part of a story by Jack London or Bret Harte, and without warning, tell the baseball boys that was as far as I had gone in the book and it would have to be continued the following evening. I enjoyed the long summer evenings until school began in the fall. I had to leave my new-found power and position behind and wave goodbye to my faithful audience. ________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ But quickly, I made use of what I was good at and started a reading club in school. Since then, other words of mine were listened to by larger and more fashionable audiences. But for those story-telling nights on the stoop outside the candy store, I have an unreasoning love that will last forever. 【点评】这版结尾的剧情设计，“我”不再被动地讲故事，而是主动采取行动，发挥自己的特长，寻求自己的发展方向。这样的设计，让故事中的人物性格更丰满、更积极向上，也能够带给读者更多的正能量。 版本三:故事中的“我”通过自己的特长，成功结交到子新朋友。在与新朋友的交往过程中，我不仅通过讲故事展现了自己的才华，而且成功地熟入了新群体，和大家一起参与更多活动，比如棒球。在结尾的设计中，我回到学校后也变得更加自信、更拥有活力。 完成结尾部分的创作： The next night and many nights thereafter, a kind of unspoken ritual took place. All the baseball-boys rang me, and I was sitting in the center of the circle, telling vividly about the stories I read. The audience listened to the stories whole-heartedly, with their eyes gleaming. Unconsciously, the stoop became a distinctively cozy scene, with dozens of children enjoying stories with me. Besides, they invited me to join the baseball team and taught me with much patience, which paved a path to my physical fitness. I enjoyed the long summerevenings until school began in the fall. It was time to end the ritual. We made a deal that the next summer vacation wonld be the continuation of it. __________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ This experience not only prompted me to get acquainted with (开始熟悉) new friends, but it also laid a foundation for me to be a member of the school baseball team. Furthermore, a habit of reading books at the library each day came into being as a beautiful moment, which gave me the impetus (动力) to explore the world. The more I read, the more I could present and share what I learned with others. 【点评】在这版故事中，“我”的世界发生了翻天覆地的变化，不仅吸引了忠实听众，还参与了其他男孩子们的活动，而这种改变很自然地渗透到后来的学校生活中。正是这种转变，激励着“我”更努力地去生活、去阅读、去探索。这样的结尾设计，赋予了角色更鲜明、更积极向上的人物性格，也使得文章寓意更深刻。 $$