2025年浙江1月高考作文21续写：误会寻表人为小偷 课件 -2025届高三下学期英语三轮复习专项

四川省宜宾市第六中学校 胡孝刚 2025年浙江省1月高考 基于“12345策略”的读后续写 Learning Goals: 阅读一个中心(一个故事说明一个理弘扬一个正能量） 挖掘二个提示句(关键名词和动词，复现回原文，否则新建) 搭建三个情节场景(故事发展合理性逻辑性) 刻画四种描写(情感、动作、环境、结尾) 书写五种句式(语法无误，书写规范) 阅读范围 问题内容 答题 文段内容 人物关系   故事大意   尾段内容 主要问题   提示句 解决办法   全文总结 弘扬精神   1. 阅读一个中心(一件事说一理弘扬一个正能量） Kevin; … left in the care of Mrs. Hill…; …Mr. and Mrs. Green's house across the street; …the man … their front door, jumped …into the house. 找回手表的小伙被误认为是小偷 “What if he has told the truth?”是不是小偷？手表是不是他父亲的？ 将表交给警察？他不是小偷？ 人与人：勇敢，诚信，误解 挖掘范围 关键词(动词/名词) 复现/新建 第一句   第二句   2. 挖掘二个提示句（复现回原文，否则新建） went to talk to them the watch they had found the police station …the man at their front door…jumped … into the house. ...told the arriving police officers … pursued and arrested the man. “Hey, kid, put that down. It was my home. My parents used to live here and my father's watch was here," he explained, trying to lift a floorboard. When Mr and Mrs Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police station. 搭建 作用目的 情节发展(who & what) 第一段 When Mr and Mrs Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. 承接前句 情节1 故事发展 情节2 转承下段 情节3 第二段 …took the watch they had found to the police station. 承接前句 情节1 故事发展 情节2 结尾升华 情节3 3. 搭建三个情节场景（故事发展合理性逻辑性） 格：得知真相 K:找到手表 格：决定去警局 K：进入警局 K：递交手表 阳光:普照 4. 刻画四种描写（情感、动作、环境、结尾） 段落 刻画范围 情节主要动作描写（头眼嘴手腿躯） When Mr and Mrs Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. 第一段 (承前)情节1 (发展)情节2 (启后)情节3 Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police station. 第二段 (承前)情节1 (发展)情节2 (结尾)情节3 格：知晓 K:找到手表 决定去警局 阳光普照 听见/张嘴/难以置信 走到/弯腰/抬起地板/看见手表/明白真相 眼亮/抬头/直视/说：警局 开门/进屋/看见那人坐在桌边与警察交谈 递手表/解释/(警察:走来,微笑,拥抱,说:勇敢) 太阳照地，阳光+驱除黑暗+温暖 进入警局 递交手表 那人讲真相 情感：高兴 格林得 知真相 K找到 手表 格林决定 去警局 K告知 格林 When Mr and Mrs Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. When 知晓ing, the couple 握手, 张嘴 and 难以置信 ①When hearing what happened, the couple held Kevin’s hand, opened their mouth widely and couldn’t believe their ears. 听见，张嘴，难以置信 ⑤A strong sense of sorrow and regret flooded into him so that he could hardly stood on his feet. 格林得 知真相 K找到 手表 格林决定 去警局 K告知 格林 When Mr and Mrs Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. ①When hearing what happened, the couple held Kevin’s hand, opened their mouth widely and couldn’t believe their ears. 走到/弯腰/抬起地板/看见手表/明白真相 ②A few minutes later, Kevin came to the floorboard, bent down, lifted it up and saw an old watch. ③The man told the truth! ④Everything around him seemed silent and he could only hear his heart beating heavily. 动作：Kevin 来到 ，举起 ，弯腰 and 看见手表 . 动作：那人讲了真相！ 环境：无声 and 震撼 . 情感：难过后悔 and 努力站立 . ⑥With his eyes lit up, Mr Green looked up directly into Kevin’s eyes and said in a firm voice, “We’d go to the police.” ⑤A strong sense of sorrow and regret flooded into him so that he could hardly stood on his feet. 格林得 知真相 K找到 手表 格林决定 去警局 K告知 格林 When Mr and Mrs Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. ①When hearing what happened, the couple held Kevin’s hand, opened their mouth widely and couldn’t believe their ears. 眼亮/抬头/直视/说：警局 ②A few minutes later, Kevin came to the floorboard, bent down, lifted it up and saw an old watch. ③The man told the truth! ④Everything around him seemed silent and he could only hear his heart beating heavily. With 眼亮 , Mr Green 看 and 说: 去警局 . 他们进 入警局 K递交 手表 阳光 普照 K告知 格林 Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police station. 动作：开门ing and 进屋ing，he 看见那人坐着与警察交谈. ①Opening the door and entering the room, he saw the man still sitting at the desk and talking with some policemen. 开门/进屋/看见那人坐在桌边与警察交谈 他们进 入警局 K递交 手表 阳光 普照 K告知 格林 Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police station. 动作：When K 交手表 and 解释, P 过来,抱他 and 说,“勇敢!” ①Opening the door and entering the room, he saw the man still sitting at the desk and talking with some policemen. 递手表/解释/(警察:走来,微笑,拥抱,说:勇敢) ②When Kevin handed the watch and explained everything briefly, a policeman came over, gave him a warm smile, hugged him tightly in his arms and said in a soft voice, “You’re so brave.” ③Kevin felt like jumping into a world of honey, so sweet and wonderful that he couldn’t hide his smile. 情感：K felt like…, so + adj and adj + that he 微笑. 他们进 入警局 K递交 手表 阳光 普照 K告知 格林 Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police station. ①Opening the door and entering the room, he saw the man still sitting at the desk and talking with some policemen. 太阳照地，阳光+驱除黑暗+温暖 ②When Kevin handed the watch and explained everything briefly, a policeman came over, gave him a warm smile, hugged him tightly in his arms and said in a soft voice, “You’re so brave.” ③Kevin felt like jumping into a world of honey, so sweet and wonderful that he couldn’t hide his smile. 情感：K felt like…, so + adj and adj + that he 微笑. ④The sun was thrown on the ground through the windows, its beautiful rays warming him and driving all the darkness in his heart. (96 words) 5. 书写:五种句式（语法无误，书写规范） 5. 书写:五种句式（语法无误，书写规范） 评估内容 五星 四星 三星 二星 一星 1. 梳理文章六要素，获取内容和弘扬的正能量           2. 分析尾段出现的矛盾冲突或问题           3. 挖掘提示句中复现的关键名词和动词           4. 快速搭建每个段落3个故事情节           5. 快速进行情感、动作、环境和结尾句4种描写           6. 熟练and, so that, 非谓语, 无灵主语和with句           7. 正确利用时间、地点和短句子作为过渡衔接           8. 正确书写大小写、标点书写           9 正确使用时态、语态和人称           10. 控制字数，书写工整，排版规范           自我总结反思提高 $$