读后续写--兄妹齐心：用家务与心意编织的生日礼赞 讲义-广东省东莞市七校联考2024-2025学年高一下学期5月考试英语试题

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Jane was still asleep when the phone rang in the living room.She opened her sleepy eyesand looked at the clock on the table.It was already nine o'clock!Although Jane was stillvery sleepy,she knew she had to get up because her mother was working in her office andshe couldn't expect her younger brother Tom,who was always sleeping like a pig,to answerthe phone.She quickly put on a coat and ran to the living room.When she picked up thephone,on the other end came the warm greeting,“Good morning!”

It was from her father,who was a sailor and rarely came home.Suddenly,Jane'ssleepiness disappeared.

Born into a not-so-rich family,Jane and Tom felt the stress of life,but they were happyto enjoy the family atmosphere.At school,they were straight-A students and took part invarious after-school activities.They were the pride of the family.

“Good morning,Dad.Why are you calling us so early on the weekend?”Janesaid,pretending to be annoyed."Tom and I have been very nice recently.”"My dear,todayis your mother's birthday,and I have ordered a cake online and it will be sent to our homelate this afternoon.Do remember to take the cake.It is my surprise for your mother.”

Hearing her father's words,Jane felt a little ashamed.How could she forget her mother'sbirthday?

While she was chatting with her father,Jane looked around the room and saw a lot ofdirty clothes on the sofa.The floor had not been cleaned for days,since her mother had beenat work all week.

She looked at the clock again and was sure that she still had enough time to prepare asurprise for her mother.

“Well,Dad,now I'm going to wake Tom up.We will give Mum a surprise,too!”Janesaid and hung up the phone.

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式作答。

Paragraph 1:

Jane hurried to Tom's room and shared her plan with him.

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Paragraph 2:

“Happy birthday,Mum!”Jane and Tom shouted when their mother opened the door.

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一、续写分析

第一段续写分析

首段以 “Jane hurried to Tom's room and shared her plan with him.” 开头，核心任务是展现兄妹二人如何分工协作完成惊喜准备。需通过细节描写体现两人的默契与行动力：

唤醒汤姆：可描述汤姆赖床的样子（如用枕头蒙头、嘟囔抱怨），Jane 如何软硬兼施（如掀开被子、威胁 “不给蛋糕”）让他起床，体现兄妹间的日常互动。

分工计划：Jane 作为姐姐主导全局，分配任务（如汤姆打扫客厅、整理杂物，自己负责洗衣、布置餐桌），突出两人的责任感。

过程细节：插入小插曲，如汤姆被脏袜子熏到皱眉，Jane 在厨房发现妈妈未吃完的面包（暗示妈妈忙碌），增强画面感。

情感铺垫：通过对话（如 “妈妈上次说客厅窗帘该洗了”）展现兄妹对妈妈的观察与关心，为后文惊喜做情感伏笔。

第二段续写分析

次段以 “‘Happy birthday, Mum!’ Jane and Tom shouted...” 开头，重点刻画妈妈回家后的反应及惊喜氛围：

场景呈现：描述焕然一新的房间（如洁净的地板、叠好的衣物、餐桌上的鲜花），蛋糕与爸爸的礼物（如围巾）的摆放，突出 “家” 的温馨感。

妈妈的情感变化：从疲惫开门到震惊落泪，通过动作描写（手捂嘴巴、抚摸孩子头发）和语言（“这是我收到的最好的礼物”）展现妈妈的感动。

电话惊喜：爸爸来电时，全家围坐听电话，补足 “父亲缺席但爱在场” 的情感线，强化家庭凝聚力。

主题升华：以 Jane 的心理活动收尾（“幸福不在于物质，而在于用心陪伴”），点明平凡生活中的亲情温度。

二、故事线

晨起危机：Jane 被电话吵醒，发现周末赖床错过接电话，意识到要独自应对。

父亲委托：爸爸来电透露妈妈生日惊喜（蛋糕），Jane 因忘记生日而愧疚，决

定加码惊喜。

兄妹协作：Jane 唤醒汤姆，分工打扫房间、准备礼物，过程中穿插日常互动与对妈妈的观察。

惊喜时刻：妈妈回家收到双重惊喜（整洁的家 + 蛋糕礼物），感动落泪，爸爸电话补位祝福。

情感升华：通过平凡的家庭小事，展现亲情的温暖与 “用心经营爱” 的主题。

三、短语积累

sleep like a pig 睡得很沉（非正式表达）

pretend to be annoyed 假装生气

feel a little ashamed 感到有点愧疚

hang up the phone 挂断电话

wake sb. up 叫醒某人

share a plan with sb. 与某人分享计划

in a hurry 匆忙地

take turns doing sth. 轮流做某事

fold the clothes 叠衣服

set the table 布置餐桌

a burst of laughter 一阵笑声

hold back tears 忍住眼泪

wrap sb. in a hug 紧紧拥抱某人

on the phone 在通电话

cherish every moment 珍惜每一刻

四、主旨升华句（含汉意）

The most precious gifts in life are not bought with money, but crafted with love and care.
（生命中最珍贵的礼物不是用钱买来的，而是用爱与关怀精心打造的。）

In the hustle and bustle of daily life, taking the time to notice others’ needs is the best way to show love.
（在日常生活的忙碌中，花时间留意他人的需求是表达爱的最佳方式。）

A clean home and a shared meal are not just chores and food—they are the threads that weave a family together.
（整洁的家与共享的餐食不仅是家务和食物，更是将家庭凝聚在一起的纽带。）

Even small acts of thoughtfulness can light up someone’s day and create memories that last a lifetime.