读后续写之动作描写微技能 公开课 课件-2025届高三下学期英语一轮复习专项

Continuation Writing How to Describe Characters’ Actions 读后续写之人物动作描写 1 选自朱自清《背影》 lead-in Let's compare and answer Q：Which version of the description is more vivid and touching？ Version 1：我看着父亲带着小帽，穿着大马褂和棉袍，走到铁路边。他穿过铁路，爬上了月台。 Version 2：我看见他戴着黑布小帽，穿着黑布大马褂，深青布棉袍，蹒跚地走到铁道边，慢慢探身下去，尚不大难。可是他穿过铁道，要爬上那边月台，就不容易了。他用两手攀着上面，两脚再向上缩；他肥胖的身子向左微倾，显出努力的样子。这时我看见他的背影，我的泪很快地流下来了。 Step 1 Let's compare and answer Version 2：我看见他戴着黑布小帽，穿着黑布大马褂，深青布棉袍，蹒跚地走到铁道边，慢慢探身下去，尚不大难。可是他穿过铁道，要爬上那边月台，就不容易了。 他用两手攀着上面，两脚再向上缩；他肥胖的身子向左微倾，显出努力的样子。这时我看见他的背影，我的泪很快地流下来了。 Main task: To complete a continuation writing（“A Mother's Day Surprise”）by using what we are going to review properly and accurately. How to describe characters’ actions vividly? Step 2 Let’s arrange the main task I noticed that he was dressed in his black  jacket  and  dark  blue gown, with his black skullcap on his head. He 1._________ (stagger 蹒跚) over to the tracks, 2.________ (slow)  lowered  himself down and climbed onto the other platform, which was  a rather different matter for him. 3.____________ (support)  himself  with both hands on the edge  of  the  platform,  he  drew  his feet up, inclining(倾斜)  his  body  to the  left and appearing  to be making a strenuous effort.  4.________tears streaming down my cheeks, I watched him from behind, feeling a deep sense of sorrow. --An adapted version of “The Sight of My Father’s Back” staggered slowly Supporting With Step 3 Let’s prepare Task round 1 Let’s explorePlease compare the two sentences：（1）She heard her mother say as she walked down the hall, “Don't wake your dad up.”（2）She heard her mother whisper as she tiptoed down the hall, “Don't wake your dad up.” Which one is better:__________ key verds: _______________ (2) whisper,tiptoe Micro-skill 1：为了让动作描写更生动，可以使用_____________(具体词)代替General Words（笼统词）。 Concrete words Let’s work out 词汇拓展：(See more in the “Corpus of actions”) Actions General Words（笼统词） Concrete words（具体词） 说 say/talk shout/cry/scream/yell (___________), whisper/murmur(低声说) interrupt(打断), exclaim(__________), warn(警告),add(补充说)... 看 see/look at notice/observe(注意到),spot(发现), _________(瞥一眼), gaze/stare at(________), glare at(怒视), peep at(偷看)... 走/跑 walk/run approach(靠近), ________(蹒跚)，wander(闲逛)，tiptoe(踮着脚走)，sneak into(____),skip(蹦跳着走), dash/rushto(冲向)... 哭 cry sob(啜泣), weep(哭泣)，burst into tears（突然大哭）... 笑 smile (sb’s face)beam(喜笑颜开), laugh at(嘲笑),giggle(咯咯笑), ________(咧嘴笑), smirk(得意地笑)，sneer(冷笑)... 大叫/大喊 大声说道 glance at 凝视，盯着 stagger 溜进 grin Let’s practice with skill 1 1. At the sight of the little dog, _________________________. 一看到这只狗，Poppy喜笑颜开。（2020浙江卷） 2.With only twenty seconds left,______________________.(我冲进车站) 3.___________________________________, “Believe in youself.” 我盯着David并坚定地大声说到:“相信你自己！”（2022年新高考Ⅰ卷） Poppy’s face beamed I rushed into the station I stared at David and firmly exclaimed Step 3 Let’s prepare Task round 2 Let’s explore 1.He nodded in/with _________(grateful), tears blurring his eyes. (2022年浙江卷) 2.The fierce wolf stared at Mac with its __________(frighten) teeth. （2017年浙江卷） 3._____________(breathless), he jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the car. gratitude frightening Micro-skill 2：为了让动作描写更生动,可以添加________,______修饰动作。 Breathlessly 介词短语 副词 Let’s work out 词汇拓展：1. 常用副词：suddenly（突然）， firmly(坚定地，紧紧地)，immediately（立刻）， hurriedly（匆忙地），fiercely（猛烈地）, heavily（沉重地）, skillfully（巧妙地）, sincerely（真诚地）, thoughtfully（体贴地）, hesitantly（犹豫不决地）, fearfully（胆怯地，非常地）, cautiously（谨慎/小心地）, breathlessly （气喘吁吁地）... 2. In/with+情绪名词(fear/ fright/ horror/ delight/ astonishment/ annoyance/ regret/ gratitude/ panic...） 翻译为：______________________或 相应的情绪副词“...地” “因为+情绪名词” Let’s practice with skill 2 1.The twins were filled with__________(excite) as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. (2021年新高考1卷) 2. As the hungry wolf was almost reaching him, Mac closed his eyes ______________________. (因为恐惧 用 “in/with+名词”结构)（2017年浙江卷） 3. Fixing her eyes on the absoute darkness of the forest, _______________________________. 看到完全黑暗的森林，Jane的心猛烈跳动。(2016浙江卷) excitement in/with fright/horror/fear Jane’s heart pounded/beat wildly/fiercely Step 3 Let’s prepare Task round 3 Let’s explore Please put the following sentences in order： 1.I ①tear up the package ② take a big bite ③squeeze out one strip (吃辣条) Correct order: I ________, _________ and ___________. 2.The girl ①jumped up ②dashed forward ③hugged the boy tightly.(拥抱) Correct order: The girl________, _________ and ___________. ① ③ ② ② ① ③ 一把抱住 she dashed forward,jumped up and hugged the boy tightly. 拥抱 hug 冲向前 跳起来 the steps we should take to eat spicy strips(辣条) step 1 step 2 step 3 撕开包装 tear up the package 挤出一根 squeeze out one strip 大咬一口 take a big bite I tear up the package, squeeze out one strip, and take a big bite. Micro-Skill 3:为了让你的动作描写既丰富又生动，可以按动作发生的时间先后把单一动作分解成一连串的动作，构造____________(动作链)，其中非常借助连词______的使用。描述连续的动作，基本结构为：________________________________________。 Let’s work out Action chains and 主语+谓语 A, 谓语B and 谓语 C Let’s practice with skill 3 1.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate, ______________________________. Jeff打了两个鸡蛋在盘子里，倒入了一些牛奶，还加了两片面包。(2021年新高考Ⅰ卷) 2._____________________________________and threw it straight to the fierce animal. 他拿出了肉，瞄准了这只狼，然后直接扔向了它。（2017年浙江卷） poured some milk and added two slices of bread He pulled out the meat, aimed at the wolf Step 3 Let’s prepare Task round 4 Let’s explore 句型1：With his arms drooping(低垂/耷拉), Beibei sat beside the pool, wondering whether he was white or black. 句型2：Standing beside the empty road, they looked up to the sky, feeling the precious peace. 贝贝坐在泳池边，双臂低垂，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。 肢体 肢体 心理 With his arms drooping, Beibei sat beside the pool, wondering whether he was white or black. Micro-skill 4: 为了让动作描写更生动有画面感，可以把肢体动作和面部表情，心理描写和语言描写等结合，构造_________(Creating a whole picture)。 句型1: __________________________________________________. 动作面 with+n+doing，句子主干（sb do...），doing 他们站在空旷的路边， 仰望着天空， 心理 感受着这份珍贵的宁静。 Standing beside the empty road, they looked up to the sky,feeling the precious peace. 肢体 面部 Micro-skill 4: 句型2: __________________________________________________. doing，句子主干（sb do...），doing Let’s practice with skill 4 1.___________________________, he leaned on the tree, reflecting on his previous mistake. （使用句型1） 他【头耷拉】着，【背靠】在树上，【反思】之前的错误。 2. Gathering around the campfire, they feasted on BBQ, ________________________________.(使用句型2) 围在营火旁，他们吃着烧烤，享受这一令人难忘的时光。 With his head drooping enjoying the unforgettable moment Step 4 Let’s summarize Please draw a mind map about what we have learned. Step 4 Let’s apply Complete the sentences in this continuation writing--A Mother's Day Surprise with the fours skills we have learned properly and accurately. Paragraph 1：As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. One look and he knew what they were up to. 1.__________________________,(“看到他们沮丧的脸”） he told them to clean up the kitchen, helping them make breakfast for Mother. （skill 4 句型2) The twins cheered up and did as told. Within an hour, the kitchen was cleaned, and Father had successfully made some French toast and chicken porridge as the children wished. Then 2._______________________(他溜进卧室)（skill 1）. The twins prepared the breakfast tray, 3.________________________________________.(加了一张卡片，然后朝妈妈房间走去。)（skill 3） Seeing their discouraged face he sneaked into the bedroom added a card and headed for their mom’ s room Step 4 Let’s apply Complete the sentences in this continuation writing--A Mother's Day Surprise with the fours skills we have learned properly and accurately. Paragraph 2：The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. "Happy Mother's Day, darling Mummy!"  thrilled voice yelling from their throat, 4. _________________________________.(双胞胎快乐地和妈妈紧紧相拥)(skill 2) Moved and excited, mother held the twins with her warm arms as well. 5._________________________, she caught the sight of the breakfast tray, feeling a strong sense of happiness and pride. (随着她的眼睛张开，)（Skill 4 句型1）She shook father who was pretending to snore. He whistled in astonishment when seeing the breakfast. Mother bit into a sandwich and said she had never  tasted a better one. Jeff immediately wanted to have a bite. Jenna caught her father's eye and they winked at each other secretly. the twins hugged their mom tightly With her eyes widening Step 6 Homework Finish the continuation writing---2022年浙江卷高考真题 Requirement: use the four skills we have learned (可参考课前学案上的动作语库) 谢谢观看 THANK YOU $$