2025年3月广州一模读后续写（十句五定法）课件-2025届高三英语二轮复习

广东一模 读后续写 文 体：记叙文 题 材：主题语境下的自我成长 主题语篇：人与社会 本文通过中国交换生李明在英国的文化适应过程，展现了一个青少年从自我怀疑到自信建立的心路历程。李明在语言障碍、社交困境与自我突破之间努力平衡，最终通过传统武术找到归属感，体现了跨文化交流中的成长与勇气。 2 写作步骤1——通读全文，理清脉络 1、读要素，弄懂故事大意 2、读人物，抓住关键人物 3、读时态，确定主题时态 李明初到英国遭遇语言与社交挑战，通过武术表演重拾自信。 李明、英国同学、武术团队成员。 一般过去时 写作步骤1——通读全文，理清脉络 写作步骤2——依据首句，构思框架 1、读懂两段首句，生成写作框架 第一段首句译文： During their practice, the group was amazed by Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu. （在练习中，团队对李明的中国功夫感到惊叹。） 第二段首句译文： After the show, Li Ming noticed some changes happening. （表演结束后，李明注意到一些变化正在发生。）的空虚。 两段首句定一框 二框二首正能量 三大原则 补充中间段落其他句子（情绪+动作，扩充神态，心理等） 1. Action—Response原则  角色A的所作所为所感引起其他角色的反应 2. Conflict—Solution原则  提出问题+解决方案（问题可以在第一段出现，也可以第二段。） 3.Negative—Positive原则 情感变化，积极正能量 Actions--Reactions--Emotions During their practice, the group was amazed by Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu. That evening, Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy’s absence had left behind. What was the group's reaction? How did Li Ming feel? 3. Buddy went home with its owner 4. Parents’ reaction 5. Result 6. Inspiration What was the group's reaction? How did Li Ming feel? What did they achieve during practice? What changes did Li Ming notice? How did these changes affect him? What was the result? 2、写好三个衔接句 第一段首句后的衔接句：非谓语,sb did,独立主格 看到他们温馨团聚，Fauna后退了一步，心痛着。 Recognizing the warmth of their reunion, Fauna stood back, her hearting aching. 第一段尾句（须与第二段首句衔接）：非谓语，sb did and did，时间状从 明白那才是属于它的地方，Fauna强颜欢笑，强忍住泪水，当她看到Buddy和它的主人一起回家是多么开心的时候。 Understanding that Buddy was exactly where he belonged, Fauna forced a smile and tried to hold back her tears as she saw how happy Buddy was to go home with his owner. 第二段首句后的衔接句：sb did and did,+adj 她回忆起他们一起度过的快乐时光，非常想念Buddy, 失落极了。 She recalled the happy moment they spent together and missed Buddy greatly, upset. 写作步骤2——十句五定，构思框架 3、写好结局和升华句 第二段的倒数第二句故事结局：sb did，非谓语，独立主格 结局+情感 她立刻轻轻地把小狗抱在怀里，感受着它的温暖，甜蜜的微笑在他们的脸上绽放。 She gently took the puppy into her arms immediately, feeling its warmth, a sweet smile spreading on their faces. 第二段的尾句升华：sb did+宾从，despite 她知道，尽管和Buddy说再见很悲伤，但她最终选择了正确的事情。 She knew that, despite the sadness of saying goodbye to Buddy, she finally chose the right thing to do. 写作步骤2——十句五定，构思框架 写作步骤3——十句五定，补充内容 基于第一段的框架，我们可以补充以下细节： When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy.Recognizing the warmth of their reunion, Fauna stood back, her hearting aching. 他的眼里充满了泪水，紧紧地把Buddy抱在怀里。（with短语+sb did） “非常感谢你照顾他”, 他用颤抖的声音说，向Fauna投去感激的目光。(对话，sb did，非谓语） With tears welling up in his eyes, the man held Buddy tightly in his arms. Understanding that Buddy was exactly where he belonged, Fauna forced a smile and tried to hold back her tears as she saw how happy Buddy was to go home with his owner. “Thank you so much for taking care of him.” he said in a trembling voice, casting a thankful look to Fauna. 基于第二段的框架，我们可以补充以下细节： That evening, Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy’s absence had left behind. She recalled the happy moment they spent together and missed Buddy greatly, upset. She gently took the puppy into her arms immediately, feeling its warmth, a sweet smile spreading on their faces. She knew that, despite the sadness of saying goodbye to Buddy, she finally chose the right thing to do. 肩膀，牵起她的手走出房间。(三联动） Just then, her mom came in, patted her 写作步骤3——十句五定，补充内容 这时候她的妈妈进来了，安慰地拍拍她的 shoulders with comfort, and took her hand walking out her room. 爸爸打开一个箱子，一只小狗跳出来，高兴地绕圈圈跑动着。（sb did and sb did,非谓语） Dad opened a box and a puppy jumped out, running around in circles happily. 考场作文赏析 得分：23分 续写内容与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供段落开头语衔接合理，主要情节Fauna的情感变化和故事情节发展符合原文逻辑，例如，Fauna在看到Buddy与主人重逢时的复杂情感，以及她在Buddy离开后的反思，都与原文的主题和情感线索一致；使用了较为丰富的句式和词汇，虽有个别语法错误，但不影响理解；在衔接上，有效地使用连接词和过渡句，例如evidently, as the man and Buddy had already departed等使情节连贯。全文故事结构紧凑，意义连贯。 得分：17分 卷面上，清晰，虽然涂改但是不影响阅读。续写内容与所给短文融洽，与所提供段落开头语衔接合理；所写the man与小狗的互动与第一段第一句后能衔接；第二段开头从失落到看见Buddy衔接自然，合理；最后的主体是do the right thing从而有所收获，符合情节设定。但是第一段最后一句写成了新的时空，不符合第二段第一句that evening的设定；以及狗主人送狗给Fauna没有足够的铺垫，情节跳跃不够合理。文章从失去小狗的失落到主人赠送小狗，同时提及了父母和狗主人对事件的推动，发挥了辅助人物的作用。语言上，有一些错误，但是使用了许多细节的刻画，主人公情绪的变动，还有小狗对主人公的依恋；并且使用了非谓语，代词，连词，no sooner...than...的倒装等各种句型。语法结构变化多。 得分：15分  字数符合要求，内容与原文情景相关，续写情节完整，但有一定的不合理性；行文有一定的逻辑性，句子基本通顺。使用了较为恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达多样性欠缺，偶有表达错误，但不影响理解。行文使用了一些衔接手段，结构清晰、表达连贯。书写大体上工整，但个别标点符号使用不规范。 $$