读后续写：Jude帮助邻居解决网络问题，开展视频带货，弥补心中以前的愧疚 讲义-2025届广东省深圳市高三下学期第一次调研考试英语试题

阅读下面材料，标黑加粗斜体黄，可积累文本！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单斜体（状从）；其余非谓语形式都会标注；B-eli-eve in every day’s accumulation!(注释) 2025年深圳市高三年级第一次调研考试英语试题 第二节 （满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The car turned onto the familiar road that led to Grandma’s farm. “Jude, this summer holiday will be a great chance for you to stay with your grandma,” Dad said as he drove. Every moment, we were moving farther away from the city, the place where I knew how to do things right. The car engine wasn’t off before Grandma hugged me. I slowly dragged myself out of the car. “Jude, you look unhappy. Why?” Grandma asked. She acted like nothing bad had happened last time. Could I ask how much money her neighbor Mr. Jackson had lost because of my mistake? Was he still upset with me ?” “ I’m fine.” I answered. “I’m just missing my computer camp. Computers are something I’m good at.” “That sounds disappointing,” Grandma nodded. I liked visiting the farm during breaks before I messed things up last summer. Grandma lived alone, and Mr. Jackson was like family to her. Then one day I forgot to lock the gate and let the goats into his flower beds. He lost almost all his roses for the farmer’s market. Now, back at the farm, I felt nervous. I was trying to hide in the room when I saw Mr. Jackson! He was opening the door and calling Grandma. “ I need your help!” he yelled to her. “Just a second for the freshly harvested roses!” That was when he saw me. I felt my heart tighten and was ready for his criticism. I deserved it. He had probably been waiting for this moment since last summer. However, Mr. Jackson greeted me happily, “Great, Jude is here! Your Grandma always tells us you are a wonderfully competent computer programmer!” I shook my head. “I am not competent. I am sorry I messed things up.” He was surprised and comforted me, “It was an accident. Being competent doesn’t mean you never make mistakes.” I looked out of the window. There were piles of roses waiting to be sold. “ Jude, can y ou help us? We want to sell roses online. We have a computer and all the parts for our internet connection, but we just can’t set it up.” Grandma asked. No internet. They seemed to live in the twentieth century. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Maybe I could be someone who was really competent. Paragraph 2: Within a few hours, orders for roses flooded in. 2025年深圳市高三年级第一次调研考试英语试题 第二节 （满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The car turned onto the familiar road that led to Grandma’s farm(定从). “Jude, this summer holiday will be a great chance for you to stay with your grandma,” Dad said as he drove(状从). Every moment, we were moving farther away from the city, the place where I knew how to do things right(定从). The car engine wasn’t off before Grandma hugged me(状从). I slowly dragged myself out of the car.(动作反应Jude不情愿的心情) “Jude, you look unhappy. Why?” Grandma asked. She acted like nothing bad had happened last time(宾从). Could I ask how much money her neighbor Mr. Jackson had lost because of my mistake(宾从)? Was he still upset with me ?” “ I’m fine.” I answered. “I’m just missing my computer camp(主人公纠结点). Computers are something I’m good at(定从).” “That sounds disappointing,” Grandma nodded. I liked visiting the farm during breaks before I messed things up last summer(状从). Grandma lived alone, and Mr. Jackson was like family to her(反应和邻居的关系). Then one day I forgot to lock the gate and let the goats into his flower beds. He lost almost all his roses for the farmer’s market(交代事件的背景). Now, back at the farm, I felt nervous. I was trying to hide in the room when I saw Mr. Jackson(状从)! He was opening the door and calling Grandma. “ I need your help!” he yelled to her. “Just a second for the freshly harvested roses!” That was when he saw me(状从). I felt my heart tighten and was ready for his criticism(心理描写). I deserved it. He had probably been waiting for this moment since last summer.(状从)(与主人公内心想法产生的对比) However, Mr. Jackson greeted me happily, “Great, Jude is here! Your Grandma always tells us you are a wonderfully competent computer programmer(宾从)!” I shook my head. “I am not competent. I am sorry I messed things up(宾从，坦白认错).” He was surprised and comforted me, “It was an accident. Being competent doesn’t mean you never make mistakes(文章主旨处矛盾点).” I looked out of the window. There were piles of roses waiting to be sold(现在分词短语做做后置定语). “ Jude, can you help us? We want to sell roses online. We have a computer and all the parts for our internet connection, but we just can’t set it up(核心事件).” Grandma asked. No internet. They seemed to live in the twentieth century. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Maybe I could be someone who was really competent. Paragraph 2: Within a few hours, orders for roses flooded in. 1. 读后续写类型与思路分析 该文章属于成长与和解类读后续写，主要围绕Jude从自责到自信的转变，以及他与Mr. Jackson和奶奶之间的情感修复。续写应围绕Jude如何通过帮助奶奶和Mr. Jackson解决如何上网销售玫瑰的实际问题，重新找回自信，并修复和邻居间关系。这样的关系在我们每个人的童年都可能出现过，所以现在英语的试题侧重于学生能够在事件中提升思维，改变观念和体现英语学习的能力要求。 续写思路 布局：续写分为两段，第一段承接Jude的心理转变，第二段描写他如何通过实际行动证明自己的能力。 框架提炼： 第一段：Jude从自责中走出，决定帮助奶奶和Mr. Jackson，展现他的成长。 第二段：Jude成功帮助他们在网上销售玫瑰花，获得认可，完成情感和解。 实施：通过心理描写、动作描写和对话，展现Jude的成长和情感变化。 续写注意事项 承接原文：需承接Jude的自责心理、Mr. Jackson的宽容态度以及奶奶的请求。 整体注意：保持情感连贯性，突出Jude的成长，避免情节突兀。 巧妙设计：通过细节描写（如Jude的专注、玫瑰花的销售成功）深化主题。 2. 故事山模式与衔接点分析 故事山模式 开端：Jude因去年的错误自责，回到农场感到不安。 发展：Mr. Jackson的宽容态度和奶奶的请求让Jude看到希望。 高潮：Jude决定帮助奶奶和Mr. Jackson解决网络问题。 结局：Jude成功完成任务，重新找回自信。 衔接点 心情描写：I felt my heart tighten（紧张），I shook my head（自责）。 动作描写：I slowly dragged myself out of the car（犹豫），He was opening the door and calling Grandma（急切）。 关键转折点：Mr. Jackson的宽容态度和奶奶的请求。 伏笔与冲突：Jude的自责与Mr. Jackson的宽容形成对比，隐含线索是Jude的计算机技能。 解决方案：Jude通过帮助奶奶和Mr. Jackson解决问题，完成情感修复。 3. 表格分析 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Jude从自责到自信的转变 I felt my heart tighten and was ready for his criticism. 情感层次 Jude的自责、Mr. Jackson的宽容、奶奶的信任 He was surprised and comforted me, “It was an accident.” 关键情节点 Mr. Jackson的宽容态度和奶奶的请求 “Jude, can you help us? We want to sell roses online.” 语言特色 简洁生动，突出心理和情感变化 I slowly dragged myself out of the car. 关键词分析 自责、宽容、自信、帮助 I am not competent. I am sorry I messed things up. 心理描写 Jude的紧张、自责、希望 I felt my heart tighten. 动作描写 Jude的犹豫、Mr. Jackson的急切 He was opening the door and calling Grandma. 环境描写 农场的宁静、玫瑰花的堆积 There were piles of roses waiting to be sold. 隐含主题 通过帮助他人修复关系，找回自信 Being competent doesn’t mean you never make mistakes. 情感转折 从自责到自信 Maybe I could be someone who was really competent. 空间转换 从城市到农场 The car turned onto the familiar road that led to Grandma’s farm. 时间过渡 从去年夏天到今年夏天 I liked visiting the farm during breaks before I messed things up. 4. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句 动作描写（Action Descriptions） Jude slowly dragged himself out of the car. （Jude慢慢地从车里挪出来。） He was opening the door and calling Grandma. （他打开门，喊着奶奶。） Jude set up the computer with focused determination. （Jude专注地设置电脑。） He typed quickly, his fingers flying over the keyboard. （他快速打字，手指在键盘上飞舞。） Grandma handed him a cup of tea, her eyes filled with hope. （奶奶递给他一杯茶，眼里充满希望。） Mr. Jackson carried the roses into the house, his face beaming. （Mr. Jackson把玫瑰花搬进屋里，脸上洋溢着笑容。） Jude clicked the final button, completing the online setup. （Jude点击了最后一个按钮，完成了在线设置。） They celebrated with a warm hug, their laughter filling the room. （他们用温暖的拥抱庆祝，笑声充满了房间。） 心理描写（Psychological Descriptions） Jude felt his heart tighten as he saw Mr. Jackson. （Jude看到Mr. Jackson时，心一紧。） A wave of relief washed over him when Mr. Jackson smiled. （当Mr. Jackson微笑时，一股宽慰感涌上他的心头。） He shook his head, still haunted by guilt. （他摇摇头，仍然被内疚困扰。） A spark of hope ignited in his chest as Grandma asked for his help. （当奶奶请求他帮忙时，他心中燃起了一丝希望。） He felt a surge of confidence as he worked on the computer. （他在电脑上工作时，感到一股自信涌上心头。） His doubts melted away with each successful step. （随着每一步的成功，他的疑虑消失了。） He couldn’t help but smile as the first order came in. （当第一个订单进来时，他忍不住笑了。） A sense of pride filled him as he realized he had made a difference. （当他意识到自己有所作为时，一种自豪感充满了他的内心。） 环境描写（Environmental Descriptions） The farm was quiet, with only the sound of rustling leaves. （农场很安静，只有树叶沙沙作响。） Piles of roses filled the room, their sweet scent lingering in the air. （成堆的玫瑰花填满了房间，甜美的香气在空气中弥漫。） The sun set behind the hills, casting a golden glow over the farm. （太阳在山后落下，给农场投下金色的光芒。） The computer screen glowed softly in the dimly lit room. （电脑屏幕在昏暗的房间里发出柔和的光芒。） The sound of typing echoed through the house, a sign of progress. （打字的声音在房子里回荡，标志着进展。） The roses stood in neat rows, ready to be sold. （玫瑰花整齐地排列着，准备出售。） The farm felt alive with the buzz of activity. （农场因活动的喧嚣而充满生机。） The first rays of sunlight peeked through the curtains, signaling a new day. （第一缕阳光透过窗帘，预示着新的一天。） 5. 常见单词的高级替换词 场景分类与替换词 Help (帮助) 高级替换：assist, aid, support, facilitate, contribute 例句：Jude assisted them in setting up the online store. Confident (自信的) 高级替换：assured, self-assured, poised, self-reliant, assertive 例句：He felt self-assured as he completed the task. Mistake (错误) 高级替换：error, blunder, oversight, fault, slip-up 例句：It was just a small oversight, not a major fault. Sell (销售) 高级替换：market, promote, distribute, retail, merchandise 例句：They marketed the roses online successfully. Fix (修理) 高级替换：repair, mend, rectify, restore, resolve 例句：Jude resolved the internet issue quickly. 6. 高中语法现象与地道搭配 地道搭配 Set up (设置) 例句：Jude set up the computer in no time. 近义词：install, configure 反义词：dismantle, remove Feel guilty (感到内疚) 例句：He felt guilty about the mistake. 近义词：regretful, remorseful 反义词：proud, unashamed Make a difference (有所作为) 例句：Jude’s help made a big difference. 近义词：impact, contribute 反义词：neglect, ignore Be competent (有能力) 例句：Jude proved he was competent. 近义词：capable, skilled 反义词：incompetent, unskilled Flood in (涌入) 例句：Orders flooded in after the store went live. 近义词：pour in, stream in 反义词：trickle, dwindle 7. Possible Versions Version 原创版： Paragraph 1: Maybe I could be someone who was really competent. The thought gave me a surge of determination(心情描写) as I sat down at the computer(状从). I quickly fixed the internet connection, and then an idea struck me—why not set up a live stream to sell the roses? I explained the plan to Grandma and Mr. Jackson, and their eyes lit up with excitement(心情描写). “Let’s do it!” Grandma said, clapping her hands(现在分词短语做伴随动作) I set up the camera, adjusted the lighting, and created a simple online store. My fingers flew over the keyboard, and for the first time in months, I felt like I was in control(宾从). This was my chance to prove that I could turn things around(宾从). Paragraph 2: Within a few hours, orders for roses flooded in. The live stream was a hit, with viewers praising the beauty of the roses and the charm of Grandma and Mr. Jackson(with复合结构). “These roses are from our farm, grown with love(过去分词短语做后置定语),” Grandma said on camera, her voice warm and inviting(宾从). Mr. Jackson, though initially shy(补语), soon relaxed and shared stories about the flowers. The notifications kept coming, and the pile of roses dwindled rapidly. I felt a sense of pride as I watched them work together(状从), their laughter filling the room(独立主格). By the end of the day, we had sold out, and I realized that I had not only helped them but also rediscovered my own worth(宾从). The farm, once a place of guilt(同位语，对比), now felt like a place of new beginnings. Version 1 Paragraph 1: Maybe I could be someone who was really competent(定从). The thought sparked a flicker of hope in my chest(心情描写). I looked at the piles of roses and the old computer, realizing this was my chance to make things right(宾从，描述主人公心理). “I’ll help,” I said, my voice steady. Grandma’s eyes lit up, and Mr. Jackson nodded with a smile. I sat down at the computer, my fingers trembling slightly(紧张的情绪描写) as I began to set up the internet connection(状从). With each step(方式状语), my confidence grew. Maybe I wasn’t just the kid who messed up(定从); maybe I could be the one who fixed things(定从). Paragraph 2: Within a few hours, orders for roses flooded in. The sound of the computer mixing with notifications(现在分词短语做伴随动作) filled the room. Grandma and Mr. Jackson watched in awe(情绪描写) as the numbers climbed(状从). “Jude, you’ve done it!” Grandma exclaimed, her voice filled with pride(独立主格描述心理). Mr. Jackson clapped me on the back, his earlier kindness now mixed with admiration(独立主格描写心理). I felt a warmth spread through me(心理描写), a sense of accomplishment(同位语) I hadn’t felt in a long time(定从). The rose farm, once a place of guilt(同位语，对比，衔接原文), now felt like a place of redemption. I had proven to myself and everyone else that I could be competent(宾从后置)—and maybe even a little more. Version 2 Paragraph 1: Maybe I could be someone who was really competent. The idea took root in my mind(心理描写) as I stared at the computer. I took a deep breath and began typing, my fingers moving (独立主格，描写动作)with a purpose I hadn’t felt in months(定从). Grandma and Mr. Jackson watched silently, their hopeful eyes giving me strength(独立主格描写环境). As the internet connection came to life(状从), I felt a surge of pride(心理描写). This was my chance to show that I could do more than just make mistakes(宾从). I was determined to make this work, not just for them, but for myself.(递进，升华主题) Paragraph 2: Within a few hours, orders for roses flooded in. The computer screen lit up with notifications(状态描写), each one a testament to my efforts(独立主格，补充说明). Grandma hugged me tightly, her tears of joy mixing with her laughter(独立主格描写心情). Mr. Jackson, usually reserved(adj做主语补语), couldn’t stop smiling. “You’ve done it, Jude,” he said, his voice filled with gratitude(独立主格描写心情). I felt a weight lift off my shoulders, replaced by a sense of accomplishment(过去分词短语做结果状语). The farm, once a place of regret(同位语，对比描写), now felt like a place of new beginnings. I had not only helped them but also rediscovered my own worth.(升华主旨) Version 3 Paragraph 1: Maybe I could be someone who was really competent. The thought gave me a newfound determination(心理描写). I sat down at the computer, my hands steady(独立主格) as I began to set up the internet connection. Grandma and Mr. Jackson stood behind me, their silent support fueling my focus(独立主格 描写心情). When we saw the Internet Explorer displaying some ads, cheers erupted, and then I began to set up the online store and (状从). With each click and typing(状语), I felt more in control, more like the person I wanted to be(定从). This was my chance to prove that I could do more than just make mistakes—I could fix them. Paragraph 2: Within a few hours, orders for roses flooded in. Within a few hours(时间状语), orders for roses flooded in. The sound of the computer pinging with notifications(现在分词短语做后置定语)was music to my ears. Grandma’s face lit up with joy(情绪描写), and Mr. Jackson’s usual stern expression softened into a smile. “You’ve done it, Jude,” Grandma said, her voice filled with pride(独立主格). I felt a warmth spread through me, a sense of accomplishment I hadn’t felt in a long time(定从). The farm, once a place of guilt, now felt like a place of redemption. I had proven to myself and everyone else that I could be competent—and maybe even a little more(宾从后置). 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$