专题03 历险类 - 2025年冲刺高考英语万能黄金作文模板

读后续写万能模板 历险类 1 题型分析 读后续写的题型特点 逻辑性 创造性 读后续写题型：提供一段350词之内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写(150词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。 丰富性 解题步骤 解读语篇 Read 浅层信息获取：when, where, who, what 深层文本解读 理清情节和情感 分析人物性格特点 明确故事主题 品味写作风格和语言 Think 结合所给两段首句 结合正能量构思写作框架和原文呼应 增加细节编写故事 动作描写 情感描写 语言运用 细读首句推测情节发展 Write Polish 环境描写 修改润色书写整洁 情节构建 点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语； 点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 1. A wave of fear wrapped around /enveloped me 一阵恐惧将我包裹住。【心理】 2. Tears of fear and regret filled my eyes/ welled up in my eyes. 恐惧和后悔的泪水噙满我的眼眶。【行为】 3. Badly startled at/ frightened by the sudden incident, she was frozen to the spot. 受到了突然的惊吓，她定在原地动弹不得。【心理+行为】 4. The thought that we might have got lost in such darkness sent shivers down my spine. 想到我们可能要再这样的黑暗中迷失，我不禁全身打起了冷颤。【心理+原因】 在遭遇危险的时候，一定要描写的就是人物的心理，“害怕”一定是遭遇险境之中的第一反应，除了套话以外，可以加入更加复杂的心理表现，以A and B的形式出现（如害怕和后悔；害怕和紧张；开心与不自信等），或者加以描述出现这种心理的原因，显得描写真实、有别于他人，且代入感变强。 遭遇危险 1. After what seemed like ages, we heard a faint voice from the distance.仿佛过了几个世纪，我们听到了远处微弱的声音。【介词+宾从】 2. It seemed a century had passed when the sound of water in the distance caught our attention. 仿佛一个世纪过去了，就在这时远处的水声引起了我们的注意力。【时间状语从句】 3. Just as we were at the point of desperation, we heard a faint voice in the distance.就在我们绝望的那一刻，我们听到了远处微弱的声音。【时间状语从句】 4.Just as we were pondering upon how to seek a way out, a brilliant idea flashed through my mind: …. 就在我们苦苦思索如果逃脱的时候，一个绝妙的想法闪过我的脑海：……【时间状语从句】 5. About 10 minutes later, the rabbit had completely gone out of our sight when we finally realized that we got lost. 十分钟以后，就在兔子已经完全消失在我们的视线中的时候，我们终于意识到，我们迷路了。【时间状语从句】 6. Fortunately, it suddenly occurred to me/ hit me/ strike me that the river could lead us to the camp. 幸运的是，一个想法突然击中了我！那就是河水可以将我们引回营地。【主语从句】 心理描写过后，笔触要再次落回剧情的发展来推动节奏，所以不要有太多的废话，直接描写事件出现的转机。想象一下我们在一个深邃的洞穴里看到光亮，既然是转机，通常就需要交代两个事件，“深邃的洞穴”和“光亮的出现”，所以需要一个背景的铺垫，以及一个事件的主题。两种句式就非常好用，第一种：介宾作状语（铺垫），主句（转机）；第二种：从句。特别是时间状语从句，可以非常好的增加句子的节奏感。 出现转机 1. I cried with great joy and excitement. 我喜极而泣。【行为+心理】 1.With the farm house coming into view (with sth. doing), we both breathed a sigh of relief. 随着农场印入眼帘，我们都长舒了一口气。【标志性场景】 在完全脱离了险境后，我们可以描写喜悦激动的心情，再写作者感想（上价值）；当然也可以适当留白，只写到险境结束的标示性场景，再以语言（上价值）作为文章结尾，都会是高效且好操作的手段。 脱离危险 火灾救援 她闻到一股刺鼻的焦味，立刻停下手中的活→ 四处查看，发现厨房已被火焰吞噬 → 她赶紧抓起手机，冲向大门 → 一边拨打119，一边奔向街道 → 到达安全地带后，她终于松了一口气。 She smelled a sharp, acrid burning odor and immediately stopped what she was doing → She looked around and discovered that the kitchen was engulfed in flames → She quickly grabbed her phone and rushed towards the door → While dialing 911, she ran out onto the street → After reaching a safe spot, she finally breathed a sigh of relief. 地震救援 他隐约听到废墟下传来微弱的呼救声→ 立即确定声源 → 找到一根铁杆作为撬杠 → 小心翼翼地挪开瓦砾 → 成功将受困者拉出 → 他背起受困者，迅速撤离到安全区域。 He vaguely heard faint cries for help from beneath the rubble → Immediately located the source → Found a metal rod to use as a lever → Carefully lifted away the debris → Successfully pulled the trapped person out → He carried the person to a safe area. 地震救援 他感到地面剧烈震动→ 马上确定通往出口的最短路线 → 拿上背包中的急救包和水 → 沿着走廊迅速朝出口方向跑去 → 到达户外空旷地后，他停下来，检查自己是否受伤。 He felt the ground shake violently → Immediately determined the shortest route to the exit → Grabbed the first-aid kit and water from his backpack → Ran quickly down the hallway towards the exit → After reaching the open outdoor area, he stopped to check if he was injured. 落水救援 她意识到自己被困在水中，无法游到岸边→ 她拼命寻找漂浮的木板 → 抓住木板，用随身携带的手机拨打求救电话 → 等待救援时，她紧紧抓住木板 → 听到远处传来直升机的声音，她的心情逐渐平静下来。 She realized she was trapped in the water and couldn’t swim to shore → She desperately looked for a floating plank → Grabbing the plank, she used her phone to call for help → While waiting for rescue, she held onto the plank tightly → Hearing the sound of a helicopter in the distance, her anxiety started to fade. 迷路救援 她发现儿子不在卧室里→ 迅速检查了整个房子 → 问了邻居，没人见过他 → 她拿起电话，急切地拨打家人和朋友的号码 → 最终报警，并请求帮助寻找 → 整晚她都在街上四处寻找。 She noticed her son wasn’t in his bedroom → Quickly checked the entire house → Asked the neighbors, but no one had seen him → She grabbed her phone and urgently called family and friends → Finally reported to the police and asked for help → She spent the whole night searching the streets. 野生动物 他看到一只小狗被困在河边的泥潭里→ 判断必须用绳子才能把它拉出来 → 找到一根结实的树枝和绳子 → 小心接近小狗，安抚它别害怕 → 将绳子套在小狗身上，慢慢拉上岸 → 小狗获救后，他检查了一下它的四肢，确保没有受伤。 He saw a puppy trapped in a muddy bank by the river → Realized he needed a rope to pull it out → Found a sturdy branch and some rope → Carefully approached the puppy, calming it down → Looped the rope around the puppy and slowly pulled it to safety → After rescuing the puppy, he checked its legs to make sure it wasn’t injured. 主题升华句 1. My brother and I harvested a meaningful exploration and really a brand new weekend. 我和哥哥收获了一次有意义的探索，这真是一个全新的周末。 2. Our being lost added a special taste to my adventurous vacation which I would remember all my life.我们的迷路给我的冒险假期增添了一份特别的滋味，我将终生难忘。 3.Grabbing the camera, I dashed out and snapped valuable pictures of the escaping bear, making the trip unforgettable for the whole life. 我抓起相机冲了出去，拍下了这只逃跑的熊的珍贵照片，使这次旅行终生难忘。 4. Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before. The special trip to the Wild West was deeply impressed in my mind. 我以前从未度过如此惊险而又危险的假期。这次西部大荒之旅给我留下了深刻的印象。 主题升华句 5. Feeling fortunate, I made up my mind to cherish life and not to try such adventure again. 我庆幸之余决定珍惜生命，不再冒这样的险。 6. It was the journey that changed me, giving me an entirely new life.就是这次旅行改变了我，给了我全新的生活。 7. Finally, we went out of the forest that trapped us. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there's always a way out of any difficult situation as long as we stay calm. 最后，我们走出了困住我们的森林。多么难忘的经历啊！事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。 8. It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with, we shouldn't lose heart.正是这种独特的经历使我理解了无论我们面临什么困难，我们都不应失去信心。 七个不 七 个 不 4. 不用负能量结局。结局设计绝对不能负能量。内容应该积极向上, 能增长知识或传播正能量。 1、不增加人物。 续写的故事情节发展都是由原文的人物所推进, 因此, 强行增加人物有可能会偏离情节发展。 5. 不在文末设置悬念。题目要求是 “使之构成一篇完整的短文”, 若在文末设置悬念, 就会给人一种还没结束的感觉，这样的故事是不完整的。 2. 不增加旁支情节。题目要求“考生根据所给情节进行续写”，旨在延续原材料的故事情节，并不是要发展新情节。 6. 不偏离原文主题。续写的情节应时刻围绕着短文的主题去推进。 3. 不用过多对话。在续写中展示对话, 虽能丰富内容和语言, 增强语篇的连贯性, 但使用过多的对话, 会显得篇幅累赘且很难在限定的词数里把整个后续的情节发展补充完整。 7. 不违背逻辑常理。情节和细节的想象要合理, 符合生活常识及具有逻辑性。 评价修改 Self-assessment Peer-assessment  self-correction 愉 Thank you for your listening ! 19 49318.605 $$