2025届高考英语读后续写语篇练习：困境中的温暖——旧搅拌器带来的惊喜 课件

高考英语读后续写语篇练习：困境中的温暖——旧搅拌器带来的惊喜 1 王 均艳 (王) - 题目分析 读后续写 题目再现 范文呈现 努力方向 2 2 Part 1 题目呈现 3 3 续写原文 We’d just downsized our home. As grateful as I was to have a roof over our heads, I couldn’t help but feel blue. Our old house was beautiful and huge. Our current home? Half the size and crowded. We’d had to give away or throw away a lot of our stuff. But there were still boxes everywhere, from the family room to the garage (车库). The day after the move, while the kids were in school, I tackled more boxes. By the afternoon, I’d made real progress. The furniture was unpacked. The photos were hanging on the walls. But it just didn’t feel like home. 4 4 续写原文 Maybe I could change that. I checked the kitchen cupboard and saw that I had enough ingredients to bake chocolate chip cookies. Just like my grandma used to make whenever I needed cheering up. Wouldn’t that be a nice surprise for the kids? When they got home from school, there’d be fresh cookies waiting for them on the kitchen counter. I put on my apron (围裙), measured out the brown sugar and butter and got to work. One by one, I added eggs to the mixer (搅拌机). POP! What in the world? The mixer stopped working. My mixer was broken. “Really?!” I felt like screaming. It was just a kitchen device, but it felt like the last straw. What more did I have to give up? 5 5 续写原文 What would my grandma do? She’d lived through the Great Depression and had lost everything. Even in the face of hardship, she’d kept her family together. She used whatever she had to get by. Grandma wouldn’t quit. She’d find another way. Inspired, I ran to the garage and searched the remaining boxes. Found it! I pulled out Grandma’s old white mixer. The one she’d passed on to me. She’d purchased it back in the 50’s and it was ancient. I’d marked the box it was in as “easily broken”, but the movers hadn’t paid attention. They’d dropped it anyway. 6 6 段首句 Paragraph 1: I wondered if it still worked. Paragraph 2: Two hours later, the kids opened the door and said, “Mmmm, cookies!” 7 7 Part 2 题目分析 8 8 续写原文分析 9 本文讲述了作者搬家后，新住所又小又挤，作者试图通过烤巧克力饼干让家更温馨。然而，新搅拌机损坏，关键时刻作者想起奶奶，找到了奶奶传下来的旧搅拌机。故事围绕家庭搬迁的困境、营造家的温暖的努力以及旧搅拌机的出现展开，为续写留下了关于旧搅拌机能否使用、饼干能否成功制作以及孩子们反应的悬念。 9 点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语； 点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 情节构建的重点 10 10 续写思路分析 Paragraph 1: I wondered if it still worked. 分析：此段承接上文找到旧搅拌机，应着重描述作者尝试使用它时的心情，如既希望它能正常工作，又担心它已损坏。详细描写旧搅拌机启动的过程，比如插上电源后的反应、搅拌时的声音等。同时，可回忆奶奶使用这台搅拌机的场景，体现这台旧搅拌机对作者的特殊意义，展现作者对奶奶的怀念和对家的情感寄托。 11 11 续写思路分析 Paragraph 2: Two hours later, the kids opened the door and said, “Mmmm, cookies!” 分析：这一段要突出孩子们看到饼干时的惊喜反应，描述他们的表情、动作和言语，展现出孩子们的快乐。接着描写一家人分享饼干的温馨场景，体现家庭的温暖氛围。最后，通过作者的内心感受，表达出在这个看似困难的时刻，小小的饼干却带来大大的幸福，升华主题，强调家人之间的爱和家的真正意义。 12 12 Part 3 范文呈现 13 13 范文呈现 Paragraph 1: I wondered if it still worked. I plugged it in with a bit of hesitation. To my delight, the old mixer started to work, though it made a strange noise. I added the ingredients carefully. As the mixer blended them, I thought of how my grandma always made delicious cookies with it. It wasn't as fast as my new mixer, but it was working. I was glad I could still make cookies for the kids. Paragraph 2: Two hours later, the kids opened the door and said, “Mmmm, cookies!” Their eyes lit up when they saw the cookies on the counter. They rushed over and took a bite. “Mom, these are great!” they said. We sat at the table, eating cookies and chatting. I felt happy to see them enjoying the cookies. This small thing made our new house feel more like home. 14 14 范文呈现 Paragraph 1: I wondered if it still worked. With a mix of hope and nervousness, I plugged in the old mixer. It hummed to life, a bit slowly but steadily. I carefully added the remaining ingredients, watching as the mixer did its job. I remembered the times when Grandma made cookies for me with this very mixer. Those memories made me feel warm inside. Paragraph 2: Two hours later, the kids opened the door and said, “Mmmm, cookies!” They were really excited. They each took a big bite and smiled. We shared the cookies and laughed together. The smell of cookies filled the house. It made our new, small home feel cozy and full of love. 15 15 升级版范文呈现 Paragraph 1: I wondered if it still worked. With a blend of trepidation and anticipation, I inserted the plug into the socket. To my pleasant surprise, the aged mixer roared to life, emitting a slightly grating yet reassuring hum. I meticulously measured and added the ingredients, observing intently as the beaters churned through the batter. Memories of Grandma, her kind face illuminated by the warm glow of the kitchen light as she deftly used this very mixer, flooded my mind. Those cherished moments of childhood comfort and love were rekindled, and I felt a deep sense of connection to her. Despite its age, the mixer was performing its task admirably, and I was filled with gratitude for this piece of family history. Paragraph 2: Two hours later, the kids opened the door and said, “Mmmm, cookies!” Their eyes widened with delight, and their faces lit up like Christmas trees. They dashed towards the kitchen counter, their footsteps echoing through the house. “Mom, these look amazing!” exclaimed one of them. We gathered around the table, sharing the cookies and stories. Laughter filled the air, and the sweet aroma of the freshly baked cookies permeated every corner of our new home. In that moment, I realized that home wasn't just about the size of the house or the amount of stuff we had. It was about the love and warmth we shared, and these simple cookies had the power to transform our new dwelling into a place filled with joy and belonging. 16 16 升级版范文呈现 Paragraph 1: I wondered if it still worked. With bated breath and a flutter of excitement in my chest, I gingerly plugged in Grandma's old white mixer. For a heart - stopping moment, nothing happened, and my spirits sank. But then, with a hesitant whir, it sprang into action. The sound it made was a symphony of nostalgia, transporting me back to the days of my childhood spent in Grandma's cozy kitchen. I added the ingredients with a newfound sense of purpose, my hands steady as I watched the mixer blend them together. Each rotation of the beaters seemed to stir up not just the batter but also a flood of precious memories of Grandma's gentle guidance and the love that permeated her every action. This mixer, though old and battered, was a link to a past filled with warmth and security. Paragraph 2: Two hours later, the kids opened the door and said, “Mmmm, cookies!” Their voices were filled with unbridled enthusiasm, and their faces were alight with anticipation. They practically leaped towards the kitchen, drawn by the irresistible scent of the freshly baked cookies. “Mom, you're the best!” they chorused. We sat around the table, enjoying the cookies and each other's company. The simple act of sharing these cookies became a moment of pure bliss, a celebration of family and togetherness. As I looked around at my children's happy faces, I felt a profound sense of contentment. In this new, smaller home, with the help of Grandma's mixer and these delicious cookies, we had created a haven of love and warmth. It was a powerful reminder that home is where the heart is, and that the most precious things in life are the simple joys shared with loved ones. 17 17 Part 4 努力方向 18 18 高级结构 名词性从句 高级结构 三连动 虚拟语气 形容词做状语 无灵主语 19 定语从句 状语从句 （包含倒装句） 强调句 副词做状语 非谓语 （包括独立主格） 19 20 Thank you! $$