营救类续写讲评导学案和课件-2025届高三上学期英语一轮复习专项

营救类 续写讲评 候课读--题目生词 1. picture vt 想象 pray v&n.祈祷 2. rise to/face up with the occasion 应对挑战 3. praiseworthy adj 值得称赞的 4. heroism n.英勇，英雄精神 5. tornado 龙卷风 6. odd stillness 反常的平静 7.head for 前往 8.fierce beast 凶猛的野兽 9. catch up with 追赶 10. howling winds 呼啸的风 11.In a second 立刻 12.a fragile toy 易碎的玩具 13.at the scene=on the spot 在现场 14. mission任务 2 细审题:给定句子+原文 构框架：十句五定法 写五定：3个衔接句+结局+主旨 补细节：余下5个句子的合理安排 Lead-in: Review three steps of continuation writing Despite尽管 the chaos混乱 and danger, he managed to climb out of the broken car. Q1: What are the chaos and danger? Q2: Did he climb out successfully ？ Q3: What will happen then? When Branson explained the situation, they immediately sprang into action开始行动. Q4: Who are they? Q5: What action will they take? Task1. ①审给定句子--带着问题找续写点 Attention！不放过每一个单词 Task1. ②5R审原文 Read for characters人称及人物：人物是故事当中涉及的人物，不能虚构。 Read for conflict / problems：读原文，确定后文solution Read for hint: 读原文，找可以呼应的续写点 Read for emotional changes:读原文，确定后文的情感方向 Read for theme：读原文，确定主题（正能量）：人与自我，人与自然，人与社会 Attention：strategies for expression 5 No parent ever pictures having to rely on our child for lifesaving help, but sometimes these things are beyond what we can control, and we can only hope and pray that our kids would have what it takes to rise to the occasion. A mom and dad in Oklahoma must be especially proud of their little boy after he rose to the occasion with rare and praiseworthy courage when their lives were in danger. His quick thinking and heroism were larger than life and well beyond what you'd expect for his years. The story began when tornadoes hit the area of Marietta, Oklahoma,at the end of April. Wayne Baker, a husband and father who lives in the area, noticed an odd stillness in the air. He didn't hesitate, gathering his wife, Lindy, and their son, nine-year-old Branson, jumped in their truck and headed for a neighbor's storm shelter. Task1. ②5R审原文 首尾呼应：Theme：courage，calmness，heroism 动作描写 动作链：A, B and C character Attention：strategies for expression But on the way there, the tornado, like a fierce beast of nature, caught up with them with howling winds and spinning (旋转的)cloud. In a second, a massive tree was lifted from the earth and hurled(猛扔) towards their truck,destroying the vehicle like a fragile toy.Wayne and Lindy were badly injured and trapped at the scene: Wayne Baker's back, neck and arm were broken. He also lost part of a finger.Lindy Baker's back, neck,jaw,ribs(肋骨)，and right hand were broken. She went through the windshield挡风玻璃 and remained halfway into the vehicle and halfway out. It was pretty horrific. Thankfully, young Branson was uninjured in the backseat, and it became his mission任务 to save his parents. This little boy had escaped death just moments before. Most of us (of any age) wouldn't want to take a single step in such conditions. Yet with all these scary things around him, somehow nine-year-old Branson found the strength to go for help. 环境描写 比喻句 Task1. ②5R审原文 Attention：strategies for expression Attention：找他人帮忙而非自救 tornado， a lifted tree a broken car ...... 续写段1： 1. 衔接句1：主位推进，述位转换（Para1首句） 2. 3. 4. 5. 衔接句2: 反向推理情节（Para2首句） 续写段2： 6. 衔接句3:主位推进，述位转换（承接Para2首句） 7. 8. 9. 结局：问题解决（获救） 10.主旨：价值观/感叹 角色的动作/神态/语言/心理/环境 关键情节（由角色特点决定） 同一角色或转化另一个角色的动作/神态/语言/心理/环境 角色的动作/神态/语言/心理/环境 同一角色或转化另一个角色的动作/神态/语言/心理/环境 Task2.Build the structure：“十句五定法” Tense（时态） 1.描写事件用过去时 2.直接引语用一般时态 3.主旨句中体现客观真理用一般现在时。 Attention before writing Q: Find an obvious error in the compisition Task3.Write the five key sentences Despite the chaos and danger, he managed to climb out of the broken car. Sentence1：What would happen to the boy then? 衔接句1：主位推进，述位转换（Para1首句） Task3.Write the five key sentences possible version: Approaching his parents, he declared, " Mom, Dad, hold on! I will be back soon!" , eyes blurred with tears. 衔接错误：Branson已经爬出车 注意时态 一...就...: no sooner...than...;hardly...when... 非谓语：不能做某事：made him fail to stand on his feet； made him unable to stand on his feet 神态描写： 非谓语,独立主格 When Branson explained the situation, they immediately sprang into action. Sentence 5：Who are they? 衔接句2: 反向推理情节（Para2首句） Task3.Write the five key sentences possible version: Branson was stumbling forward踉跄前行 and crying out for help when he spotted several figures in the distance. Confused and curious, the people came up to the boy , only to find a young child in dirt and blood. 注意时态 They may be passers-by，residents alongside the road，people in the neighbor’s shelter，rescuers and so on. be doing...when 形容词作状语 非谓语：意料之外的结果状语 When Branson explained the situation, they immediately sprang into action Sentence 6：What action will they take? 衔接句3:主位推进，述位转换（承接Para2首句） 续写点： tree was lifted抬起.. and hurled(猛扔)towards their truck..Wayne Baker's back, neck and arm were broken... She went through the windshield挡风玻璃 and remained halfway into the vehicle and halfway out. Task3.Write the five key sentences possible version:跑去，挪开树，开门救人 Equipped with tools, they charged back to the scene, pushed the tree away and broke the windshield carefully , freeing the couple from the destroyed truck. 衔接错误：“they”开始营救，而非Branson 注意时态 动作链，非谓语 9. 交代结局：问题解决（符合价值观结局） 10.点睛升华：价值观/感叹 Task3.Write the five key sentences 注意时态 1、虚拟语气：but for/without..., sb would have done... 2、强调句： It is not...that count/matter. 2、倒装句 : only +状语+句子倒装 3、what 主语从句：What matters/counts most is... 4、悟道理：it dawn on sb that ... /it hit/struck/occurred to sb that...某人突然想到 5. 谚语 首尾呼应：Theme：courage，calmness，heroism 9.结局：送医 Having been rescued from the broken truck, the couple was rushed to the hospital quickly. 10.主旨：他的勇敢与决心救了他父母。（强调句） It was Branson's great courage and calmness that saved his parents lives，which would be praised for years to come. 续写段1： 1. 衔接句1：下车后的反应 2. 3. 4. 5. 衔接句2:找到了帮忙的人 续写段2： 6. 衔接句3:别人开始营救 7. 8. 9. 交代结局：父母获救 10.点睛升华：男孩的勇敢与决心救了他父母 角色的动作/神态/语言/心理/环境 关键情节（由角色特点决定） 同一角色或转化另一个角色的动作/神态/语言/心理/环境 角色的动作/神态/语言/心理/环境 同一角色或转化另一个角色的动作/神态/语言/心理/环境 Task4.Complete the rest five sentences 恶劣环境像.. as if/like 男孩的动作和神态:非谓语，独立主格 坚持 They营救的氛围：形容词做状语 父母或男孩的反应（激动，感谢）：情绪的表达 Attention：呼应续写点 Reflection-反思归纳 细审题:给定句子+原文 构框架：十句五定法 写衔接：3个衔接句+结局+主旨 练细节：余下5个句子的合理安排 表达方法：动作链，比喻句，非谓语，独立主格 描写角度：动作描写，环境描写，神态描写 按照“十句五定法”完成 1.写出三个衔接句+结局+主旨 2. 写出剩下五个句子安排的内容和表达方法，描写角度 By nature,I'm shy person, I don't like to be front and center. I am uncomfortable in unfamiliar situations, and I dislike being the "new kid" in a group of people, My retired husband and I had moves to California to be near our daughter and her family, After everything was settled, I felt restless and somewhat lonely, When I told my elderly neighbor that I still didn't know anyone, she said, "Nobody is going to come knocking on your door, Get out there and look for them.." One afternoon, I noticed a small ad in our local newspaper asking for Support Volunteers to help out at the fire department. Maybe I could do some filing or other office work. I called and was told they were starting a class to train new volunteers. When I realized that everyone was going to be new at the same time, I smiled. I was interviewed, and passed. I was nervous on the first day. But as soon as I met the other new volunteers, I discovered this particular group was made up of retired people with interests similar to my own. They wanted to be active and wanted to be of service to the community. The Support Volunteers came from many different walks of life. Together, we made up an efficient, knowledgeable, and capable team. Assignment：营救类写作训练 When the training was completed, we were issued fire-department dress uniforms. Each of us was of day for twenty four hours, one day a week, with a partner. While on duty, we transferred mail and equipment to and from the city's seven fire stations, and fire/police headquarters. We also taught businesses and the public how to use fire extinguishers （灭火器）, and handed Out fire-prevention information at community Events. I became well qualified for my service. Although I initially joined the volunteers to meet people, I continued my satisfying work with the Support Volunteers because of something that happened a few years age. In that particular summer night, in the place I lived, a large wildfire was burning, causing a threat to people in the city. The department where I volunteered had been asked to gather up everyone to the shelter center case the fire lost control. Upon receiving the order, we sprang into action. Wheeling the elderly man to the center, I knew we had to put up there. Assignment：营救类写作训练 $$ 续写题目 No parent ever pictures having to rely on our child for lifesaving help, but sometimes these things are beyond what we can control, and we can only hope and pray that our kids would have what it takes to rise to the occasion. A mom and dad in Oklahoma must be especially proud of their little boy after he rose to the occasion with rare and praiseworthy courage when their lives were in danger. His quick thinking and heroism were larger than life and well beyond what you'd expect for his years. The story began when tornadoes hit the area of Marietta, Oklahoma,at the end of April. Wayne Baker, a husband and father who lives in the area, noticed an odd stillness in the air. He didn't hesitate, gathering his wife, Lindy, and their son, nine-year-old Branson, jumped in their truck and headed for a neighbor's storm shelter. But on the way there, the tornado, like a fierce beast of nature, caught up with them with howling winds and spinning (旋转的)cloud. In a second, a massive tree was lifted from the earth and hurled(猛扔) towards their truck,destroying the vehicle like a fragile toy.Wayne and Lindy were badly injured and trapped at the scene: Wayne Baker's back, neck and arm were broken. He also lost part of a finger.Lindy Baker's back, neck,jaw,ribs(肋骨)，and right hand were broken. She went through the windshield挡风玻璃 and remained halfway into the vehicle and halfway out. It was pretty horrific. Thankfully, young Branson was uninjured in the backseat, and it became his mission任务 to save his parents. This little boy had escaped death just moments before. Most of us (of any age) wouldn't want to take a single step in such conditions. Yet with all these scary things around him, somehow nine-year-old Branson found the strength to go for help. Despite尽管 the chaos混乱 and danger, he managed to climb out of the broken car. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ When Branson explained the situation, they immediately sprang into action.__________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 营救类续写变式题 按照“十句五定法”完成 1.写出三个衔接句+结局+主旨 2. 写出剩下五个句子安排的内容和表达方法 By nature,I'm shy person, I don't like to be front and center. I am uncomfortable in unfamiliar situations, and I dislike being the "new kid" in a group of people, My retired husband and I had moves to California to be near our daughter and her family, After everything was settled, I felt restless and somewhat lonely, When I told my elderly neighbor that I still didn't know anyone, she said, "Nobody is going to come knocking on your door, Get out there and look for them.." One afternoon, I noticed a small ad in our local newspaper asking for Support Volunteers to help out at the fire department. Maybe I could do some filing or other office work. I called and was told they were starting a class to train new volunteers. When I realized that everyone was going to be new at the same time, I smiled. I was interviewed, and passed. I was nervous on the first day. But as soon as I met the other new volunteers, I discovered this particular group was made up of retired people with interests similar to my own. They wanted to be active and wanted to be of service to the community. The Support Volunteers came from many different walks of life. Together, we made up an efficient, knowledgeable, and capable team. When the training was completed, we were issued fire-department dress uniforms. Each of us was of day for twenty four hours, one day a week, with a partner. While on duty, we transferred mail and equipment to and from the city's seven fire stations, and fire/police headquarters. We also taught businesses and the public how to use fire extinguishers （灭火器）, and handed Out fire-prevention information at community Events. I became well qualified for my service. Although I initially joined the volunteers to meet people, I continued my satisfying work with the Support Volunteers because of something that happened a few years age. In that particular summer night, in the place I lived, a large wildfire was burning, causing a threat to people in the city. The department where I volunteered had been asked to gather up everyone to the shelter center case the fire lost control. Upon receiving the order, we sprang into action. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Wheeling the elderly man to the center, I knew we had to put up there. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$