2025届高考二轮复习读后续写专项提高积累之 个人反思成长类 有妹妹的我如何克服内心焦虑变成一个合格的哥哥 课件

个人反思成长类 有妹妹的我如何克服内心焦虑变成一个合格的哥哥 英才大联考萍乡实验学校2025届高三月考试卷（四） 原文分析 读后续写 原文审读 多篇范文呈现 解题思路分析 读后续写可积累文本 1. 原文赏析 I still remember the day when we decorated the house, I was ten and it was two weeks before Christmas. I was looking forward to my presents. Since I’m the youngest in the family, all of the family members would give me a gift one way or another. Sometimes it was a cookie or a hug but it was always there. I was the only center of attention and it was feeling good. My uncles usually would ask me what I wanted before Christmas and that year I knew what I wanted. It was the spaceship I saw in the ads. I was dreaming of opening a big gift box, and it was there. But that year it came in a way that I wasn’t expecting. It was two weeks before Christmas. Just two weeks. She couldn’t wait. My dear mother told my father that it was time, and then we went to the hospital. After an hour, they told me that I had a sister now. But I didn’t want a sister. I wanted a spaceship. The next few days went so fast. No one was caring about me. Everyone was talking about her and I knew that my life is never going to be the same ever again. I wasn’t ready to grow up, to be a big brother. But it just happened in an instant. On the day before Christmas, everyone was in our home, talking only about my newborn sister. My family was becoming hers. Even my uncles didn’t ask me anything about the gift. She stole everything I’d ever had, my life and my presents. Thinking about this, I cried to sleep. I had a nightmare (噩梦) and woke up at the middle of the night. Shadows were all around me, and I was defenseless and so weak. I ran into my parents’ bedroom but couldn’t wake up my poor parents who were just too worn out. I was standing near their bed, trying not to cry when I saw her. She was awake and looking at me with her big eyes in her small bed. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Suddenly, she started crying. After having comforted her, something slowly changed inside me. 2、 原文审读 红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，从句斜体；下划线+标黄单词+斜体 为需掌握积累单词、短语；黑体标黄，非谓语；可积累部分为 embody； 注释(定语从句) I still remember the day when we decorated the house(定从), I was ten and it was two weeks before Christmas. I was looking forward to my presents. Since I’m the youngest in the family(since状从), all of the family members would give me a gift one way or another. Sometimes it was a cookie or a hug but it was always there. I was the only center of attention and it was feeling good. My uncles usually would ask me what I wanted(宾从) before Christmas and that year I knew what I wanted(宾从). It was the spaceship I saw in the ads(宾从). I was dreaming of opening a big gift box, and it was there. But that year it came in a way that I wasn’t expecting(定从). It was two weeks before Christmas. Just two weeks. She couldn’t wait. My dear mother told my father that it was time(宾从), and then we went to the hospital. After an hour, they told me that I had a sister now(宾从). But I didn’t want a sister. I wanted a spaceship. The next few days went so fast. No one was caring about me. Everyone was talking about her and I knew that my life is never going to be the same ever again(宾从). I wasn’t ready to grow up, to be a big brother. But it just happened in an instant. On the day before Christmas, everyone was in our home, talking only about my newborn sister. My family was becoming hers. Even my uncles didn’t ask me anything about the gift. She stole everything I’d ever had, my life and my presents. Thinking about this(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作), I cried to sleep. I had a nightmare (噩梦) and woke up at the middle of the night. Shadows were all around me, and I was defenseless and so weak. I ran into my parents’ bedroom but couldn’t wake up my poor parents who were just too worn out(定从). I was standing near their bed, trying not to cry (非谓语动词短语做伴随动作)when I saw her(状从). She was awake and looking at me with her big eyes in her small bed.  1. 高考读后续写要求分析  类型分析： 这篇文章属于“个人成长类”的读后续写。续写的重点是描述主人公在面对新生儿妹妹带来的心理冲突后，内心情感的转变，以及如何从抗拒到逐渐接受这个新家庭成员。续写部分应该展现主人公情感的逐渐过渡，反映出从自我为中心到开始承担责任、理解家庭成员的成长过程。  续写思路构思： 1. 情节延续：故事中的主人公因妹妹的出生而感到被忽视，产生了孤独和不安的情绪。续写应从主人公在夜晚醒来看到妹妹时展开，展现他从排斥到接受、从不安到承担责任的心理变化。 2. 布局安排：     第一段：从妹妹的哭声引入，描写主人公的心理转变——开始关注妹妹的需求，尝试安抚她。     第二段：描述主人公安慰妹妹后的情感变化，表达他逐渐接受这个新家庭成员的心态变化，并反映出他开始承担起哥哥的责任。 3. 框架提炼：    段落一：人物的心理转变，通过妹妹的哭声让主人公开始意识到自己的责任。    段落二：表现主人公逐渐从自私、孤独的情绪中走出，开始关爱妹妹，体现成长与转变。 4. 实施步骤：     承接原文：续写要自然承接文章中的情绪波动，从主人公的恐惧、孤独到安慰妹妹的心理过渡。     设计内容：通过夜晚的事件，巧妙设计妹妹的哭声、主人公的安慰动作，以及内心的变化，突出家庭成员之间的情感联系。 5. 注意事项：     情感表现：要着重刻画主人公的情感变化，从“排斥”到“接受”是关键的心理转变。     语言风格：要保持简洁、感性的语言风格，避免过多复杂的修辞，让情感显得自然、真实。 动作、心理、环境描写推荐例句：  心理描写：   1. "I was filled with confusion as I stood there, torn between my desire for attention and my growing sense of responsibility."   2. "At that moment, something shifted inside me—an unfamiliar feeling of empathy began to replace my jealousy."   3. "As I comforted her, I felt my anger slowly fade away, replaced by a deep, quiet understanding."   4. "I realized that I was no longer the center of attention, but somehow, I didn’t mind anymore."   5. "I watched her quietly, her innocent gaze pulling me into a strange, tender feeling I had never experienced before." 动作描写： 1. "I gently lifted her from her bed, cradling her in my arms as I tried to soothe her crying." 2. "I reached out to her tiny hand, my fingers brushing against hers as I whispered soft words of comfort." 3. "I sat on the edge of her crib, my hand resting lightly on her back, feeling her warm breath against my skin." 4. "My hand trembled as I wiped away her tears, unsure of what I was doing but determined to make her feel safe." 5. "I pulled the blanket tighter around her, instinctively protecting her from the shadows that still haunted me."  环境描写：   1. "The room was dark, the only light coming from the dim nightlight near her crib, casting soft shadows on the walls."   2. "Outside, the wind howled, but inside, it was peaceful—almost too peaceful, as if the world had shifted around me."   3. "The house was silent, save for the quiet whimper of my sister, which echoed in the stillness of the night."   4. "The soft hum of the heater filled the room, adding to the calm atmosphere as I sat by her crib."   5. "The moonlight filtered through the curtains, casting a pale glow over the room, making it feel like a dream." 常见单词的高级替换词： 开心： ecstatic (狂喜的) delighted (高兴的) overjoyed (无比高兴的) 悲伤： heartbroken (心碎的) melancholy (忧郁的) dismal (沮丧的) 哭泣： sob (抽泣) weep (哀哭) wail (嚎哭) 眼睛： gaze (凝视) stare (盯着看) look (目光) 手： grip (紧握) clasp (握住) clutch (抓紧) 2. 语法现象分析 1. 条件句：     "If I had known this was going to happen, I would have felt differently."     分析：虚拟语气条件句，表示与过去事实相反的假设，突出情感的后悔与变化。 2. 动词短语：     "I cried to sleep"       分析：动词短语“cry to sleep”形象地描绘了主人公因为情绪过于悲伤而在哭泣中进入睡眠。 3. 反身代词：     "I stood there, trying not to cry."     分析：反身代词的使用帮助加强动作的主观性，突出主人公在内心矛盾中的自我控制。  亮点搭配：  动词搭配：    "comforted her" → "soothe her" (安抚她)    "whisper words of comfort" → "speak softly" (轻声说话)    情感表达：    "filled with confusion" → "overcome with uncertainty" (充满困惑)    "feeling a strange tenderness" → "experiencing a warm sense of protectiveness" (感受到一种保护欲) 可积累的语料：  感情词汇替换：    joyful → ecstatic, delighted    sad → heartbroken, dismal    crying → weeping, sobbing, wailing v 尴尬羞愧的词汇短语 1.with embarrassment 尴尬地 2.with shame 羞愧地 3.be struck dead with shame 羞愧得要死 4.embarrassed smile/laugh/grin 尴尬的微笑/大笑/咧嘴笑 5.terribly/deeply embarrassed 非常尴尬 6.an awkward silence 令人尴尬的沉默 7.one’s face burns/be flushed/sb blushes/flushes with embarrassment/shame 因尴尬/羞愧而脸上发烫/脸红/面颊绯红 8.blood rushes to one’s face/colour floods one’s face 脸通红 9.give an embarrassed cough 尴尬地咳一声 10.in an embarrassed voice/tone 用一种尴尬的声音/语气 v 慰藉放松宽慰的短语 1.to one’s relief令某人欣慰的是 2.a feeling of warmth温暖的感觉 3.relieve anxiety减轻焦虑 4.relieve pressure减轻压力 5.breathe a sigh of relief/sigh with relief松了一口气 6.a relieved smile宽慰的笑容 7.a mixture of warmth and relief既温暖又宽慰 8.with a weight lifted off one’s heart心头重担卸下 Possible Answer 1: 续写内容： Paragraph 1: Suddenly, she started crying. I hesitated for a moment, unsure of what to do(主语补语+宾从). But then I reached out and cradled her in my arms. Her small hands grasped my fingers, and I felt an overwhelming sense of responsibility wash over me. Her cries gradually softened as I whispered to her(as状从), “It’s okay, you’re safe now.”   After having comforted her, something slowly changed inside me. The resentment I had felt towards her(定从) seemed to fade away. As I looked down at her peaceful face(as状从), I realized she wasn’t a threat to me(宾从). She was my sister, and for the first time, I understood that she needed me(宾从). I gently laid her back in her crib, a quiet promise forming in my heart(独立主格) that I would protect her(同位语从句) as I grew older(as状从). Possible Answer 2: Paragraph 1: Suddenly, she started crying. I froze, my heart racing with discomfort(独立主格). But as I heard her cries echoing in the room(as状从), something stirred inside me. I sat by her crib and gently stroked her back, trying to calm her down(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Her small body shivered slightly as I spoke in a soft voice(as状从), “Shh, it’s okay.”   Paragraph 2: After having comforted her, something slowly changed inside me. I no longer felt the sharp pangs of jealousy or resentment. Instead, a sense of affection grew in me, and I realized that she was part of our family now(宾从). I leaned down and kissed her forehead, a feeling of warmth spreading in my chest(独立主格). I knew, from that moment on, I would be her protector(宾从). Possible Answer 3:   Paragraph 1: Suddenly, she started crying. I wasn’t sure how to react(宾从), but I instinctively reached for her, gently lifting her into my arms(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Her cries softened as I rocked her back and forth(as状从), my own heart beginning to calm(独立主格). I whispered softly, “It’s okay, little one. I’m here.”   Paragraph 2: After having comforted her, something slowly changed inside me. I no longer felt the bitterness I had before(定从). Instead, I felt a deep sense of protectiveness. She was my sister, and in that moment, I understood what it meant to be a big brother(宾从). I promised myself that no matter what, I would always be there for her(宾从). 两种构思方法 “四到一行” “线索呼应” 看 听 想 说 做 找出线索，前后呼应 “两法六句” 第一步 依据首句，构思框架 两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。 (1) 读懂两段首句 第一段首句后的衔接句、第一段尾句 、第二段首句后的衔接句。 即第二段的尾句——能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故事给我们启示的句子。 (2) 写好三个衔接句 (3) 写好一个升华句 环境描写 高分技巧 情绪描写 心理描写 介词+情绪词，in/with/out of /to 无灵主语句 状语从句/定语从句 非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作 副词或形容词做状语；adv,或 a.+ a. 强调/倒装/感叹句 独立主格，with复合结构 非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作 亮点动词; mirror/ linger / echo etc. $$