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个人成长类 伯克利学生面对成绩挫折 在老师帮助下摆脱外部评价找到学习真谛 福建泉州五校2025届高三联考英语试题 原文分析 读后续写 原文审读 多篇范文呈现 解题思路分析 读后续写可积累文本 1、 原文审读： 49. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I entered Berkeley, I hoped to earn a scholarship. Having been a StraightA student, I firmly believed that I could take tough subjects and really learn something. One such course was World Literature given by Professor Jayne. I was extremely interested in the ideas he presented in class. When I took the first exam, I was shocked to find a 77, Cplus, on my test paper, for English was my best subject and I had expected to score much higher. Upset and disappointed, I went to Professor Jayne, who listened to my arguments but remained unmoved. I decided to try harder, although I didn’t know what that meant because school had always been easy for me. I read the books more carefully. But my efforts seemed in vain as I received another 77. Again, I reasoned with Professor Jayne. Again, he listened patiently but wouldn’t change his mind. One more test before the final exam. One more chance to improve my grade. So I doubled my efforts, reviewing my notes carefully and for the first time, I truly understood the meaning of the word “thorough.” But my effort did no good and everything went as before. The last hurdle (障碍) was the final. No matter what grade I got, it wouldn’t cancel three Cpluses. I realized that I might as well give up on the idea of receiving a scholarship, as it was highly unlikely that I would achieve a high enough grade. As a result, I stopped working hard. I felt I knew the course material as well as I ever would. In the days leading up to the final, I spent less and less time on study, and was even caught absent-minded in class. Without punishment, Professor Jayne just shook his head and said, “You alone must set your own standard of excellence.” 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1：That day, the words kept ringing in my mind. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2：A week later, I was surprised to find I got an A. 2、 原文审读 红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，从句斜体；下划线+标黄单词+斜体 为需掌握积累单词、短语；黑体标黄，非谓语；可积累部分为 embody； 注释(定语从句) When I entered Berkeley(状从), I hoped to earn a scholarship. Having been a Straight-A student(非谓语动词作原因状语), I firmly believed that I could take tough subjects and really learn something. One such course was World Literature given by Professor Jayne(非谓语动词做伴随动作). I was extremely interested in the ideas he presented in class(定从). When I took the first exam(状从), I was shocked to find a 77, C-plus, on my test paper, for English was my best subject and I had expected to score much higher(状从). Upset and disappointed, I went to Professor Jayne, who listened to my arguments but remained unmoved(定从). I decided to try harder, although I didn’t know(状从) what that meant(宾从) because school had always been easy for me(状从). I read the books more carefully. But my efforts seemed in vain as I received another 77(as状从). Again, I reasoned with Professor Jayne. Again, he listened patiently but wouldn’t change his mind. One more test before the final exam. One more chance to improve my grade. So I doubled my efforts, reviewing my notes carefully(非谓语动词做伴随动作) and for the first time, I truly understood the meaning of the word “thorough.” But my effort did no good and everything went as before. The last hurdle (障碍) was the final. No matter what grade I got(状语从), it wouldn’t cancel three C-pluses. I realized that I might as well give up on the idea of receiving a scholarship(宾从), as it was highly unlikely that I would achieve a high enough grade(宾从). As a result, I stopped working hard. I felt I knew the course material as well as I ever would(宾从). In the days leading up to the final, I spent less and less time on study, and was even caught absent-minded in class. Without punishment, Professor Jayne just shook his head and said, “You alone must set your own standard of excellence.” 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1：That day, the words kept ringing in my mind.   Paragraph 2：A week later, I was surprised to find I got an A. 故事山模式 ： 衔接点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 衔接点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 衔接点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语； 衔接点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 对提示句P1,P2做逐词逐句的解读，理解其背后深意； 回溯原文，找到对应的文本，确定基本元素，时间，地点，人物，所涉及的物品，细节等信息； 试图对时间线，地点线结合P1,P2的提示句，看是否有所变化，以确定是否需要展开； 构思情节 读懂最后2段尤其是最后1段的信息，合理结合生活实际，构思文章，并完成 成长前的困扰 情境描写+消极情绪的累积→高潮  成长中的蜕变 成长的动机+过程中变化的心情成长后的升华 成长后的收获+积极情绪(喜悦、满足和骄傲等) 1. 读后续写类型分析与构思 （1）文章类型分析 这篇文章属于情感转折型读后续写。文章的开头描述了主人公进入大学后，面临世界文学课的挑战，以及他对成绩的失望。续写部分需要呈现主人公如何面对挫折，接受自己目前的状况，并最终克服困难，获得成绩上的突破。这种类型的读后续写通常需要对人物的心理变化进行深入刻画。 1、 高考英语读后续写分析 （2）读后续写思路构思 情感的起伏：故事的情感转折集中在主人公从失落到反思，再到最终的突破。因此，续写需要展示他内心的挣扎和转变。例如，在第一段，主人公可以回想老师的那句话，“You alone must set your own standard of excellence”，并开始思考自己在这场挑战中的真正收获。 心理的转变：在第二段中，主人公可能会意识到，真正的“优秀”并不仅仅是依赖外部的标准，而是从自己内心找到的满足和成就感。因此，续写可以强调他在努力和接受自己成绩的过程中经历的心灵成长。 1、 高考英语读后续写分析 布局与框架： 第一段： 起承：可以写主人公反复思考老师的话，尝试摆脱对外部评价的过度依赖，开始进行自我审视和内心的平衡。 心理描写：描述主人公从失望到反思的过程，如何接受自己的成绩并找到内心的平和。 第二段： 高潮与结局：主人公的转变带来了奇迹，他最终在考试中取得了意外的好成绩。这一段需要体现出主人公的成长以及“自我标准”的内涵，最终通过实际行动获得了意外的A。 情感升华：通过主人公的反思和成果，体现“努力与心态”的双重力量。 1、 高考英语读后续写分析 （3）承接原文的事项 情节连贯性：续写需要紧密承接原文的情节。文章已经说明主人公对成绩的不满、对老师反馈的无力感，以及他最终决定放弃。续写需要合理地从放弃的状态过渡到主人公的心理变化。 心理描写连贯性：要注意续写中心理描写的连贯性。主人公的情感从失望、焦虑、到反思，最后到接受并重新定义自己的标准。这些转变要自然呈现。 1、 高考英语读后续写分析 （4）注意事项 情节不宜过于复杂：续写的内容应简洁明了，避免引入不必要的细节或转折。 语言自然且富有感染力：要用清晰、简练的语言表达主人公的心境变化，同时通过合适的情感描写增强感染力。 情感逐步深化：续写的情感描写应该逐步深化，从最初的失落和困惑，到后来的顿悟与内心的升华。 2、 文章中的语法现象分析 （1）语法现象分析 过去完成时：“I had hoped to earn a scholarship” — 表示过去的期望和当时的事实相对比。 虚拟语气：例如“if I had studied more, I would have succeeded” 这种虚拟语气的用法在表达假设与现实的对比时尤为常见。 感叹句：“You alone must set your own standard of excellence.” — 这种句式可以有效地加强语气，突出“标准”和“自我设定”的重要性。 2、 文章中的语法现象分析 （2）常见搭配与短语 Set a standard：设定标准（例如“set your own standard of excellence”）。 Do one's best：尽最大努力（例如，“I decided to try harder”）。 In vain：徒劳无功（例如，“my efforts seemed in vain”）。 Shake one's head：摇头（表示否定或不满，例如，“Professor Jayne just shook his head”） 2、 文章中的语法现象分析 （3）生词短语与词意 Absent-minded (adj.) — 心不在焉的，走神的 近义词：distracted, forgetful 反义词：attentive, focused 例句： 1. He was so absent-minded that he left his phone at the restaurant. 2. She couldn’t focus in class because she had been feeling absentminded for days. 2、 文章中的语法现象分析 Thorough (adj.) — 彻底的，全面的 近义词：comprehensive, exhaustive 反义词：superficial, cursory 例句： 1. The investigation was thorough, covering all possible aspects. 2. He gave the assignment a thorough review before submitting it. 2、 文章中的语法现象分析 Unmoved (adj.) — 不为所动的，冷漠的 近义词：indifferent, impassive 反义词：moved, emotional 例句： 1. Despite his pleas, she remained unmoved by his arguments. 2. He was unmoved by the criticism and continued working on his project. Possible Answer 1: Paragraph 1: That day, the words kept ringing in my mind. “You alone must set your own standard of excellence.” I had always been driven by the desire to meet the expectations of others, but now I realized that the true meaning of success was not in grades but in my own efforts(宾从). I decided to take a step back, reflect on my learning process, and embrace the fact that I had already grown in ways(同位从) I hadn’t noticed before(定从).   Paragraph 2: A week later, I was surprised to find I got an A. It wasn’t just the grade that mattered, but the realization that I had learned to push myself beyond the limitations(宾从) I had set before(定从). The knowledge that my hard work and personal growth had led me to this result(定从) made it even more meaningful. Possible Answer 1 加分点分析： 虚拟语气：“I had always been driven by the desire...” — 显示了过去的心理状态与现在的反思。 感叹句：“You alone must set your own standard of excellence.” — 强化了主人公转变的关键句。  Possible Answer 2: Paragraph 1: That day, Professor Jayne’s words kept echoing in my ears. It was clear that I had been too focused on achieving external validation(主从), but his advice opened my eyes. I understood that the true standard of excellence was not something(宾从) set by others(非谓语动词作后置定语), but by my own growth and efforts. I began to embrace the challenges I faced(定从) as opportunities to improve myself(非谓语动词作后置定语).   Paragraph 2: A week later, when I saw my grade, I was stunned to find I had earned an A(宾从). But even more surprising was how I had changed(倒装). The journey from frustration to self-discovery had taught me more than any grade ever could. I realized that I had achieved excellence not just in my work(宾从), but in my approach to life. 加分点分析： 反思表达：“I began to embrace the challenges...” — 表达了从外部追求转向自我成长的过程。 情感转折：“But even more surprising...” — 引出了主人公的深层变化 Possible Answer 3: Paragraph 1: That day, I couldn’t stop thinking about Professor Jayne’s words. At first, they had seemed harsh, but now I saw them as a wake-up call. I realized that I had been running after external rewards without understanding the deeper purpose of learning. From that point on, I decided to redefine my goals and focus on truly mastering the material.   Paragraph 2: A week later, to my surprise, I received an A. It wasn’t just the grade that amazed me, but how much I had changed. The journey had taught me that the pursuit of knowledge, rather than just grades, was the real measure of success. And for the first time, I felt proud of my efforts. 反思与顿悟：“I realized that I had been running after external rewards...” — 突出思维转变和内心升华。 对比使用：“It wasn’t just the grade...” — 强调改变的真正价值 Possible version 官方 That day, the words kept ringing in my mind. I began to reflect on my learning attitude. Maybe I had been too focused on grades and ignored the true meaning of learning. I realized that I should set my own standard of excellence and not just aim for a high score(宾从). I started to enjoy the process of acquiring knowledge, not just the results. I continued to work hard and strive for better understanding. Soon the final exam came. I finished it and waited for the result anxiously. A week later, I was surprised to find I got an A. A wave of accomplishment and delight swept over me. I immediately called Professor White to express my profound gratitude. Without his insightful approach, I would not have achieved such a breakthrough.(虚拟语气) The next year, I received a scholarship, proof of the impact of Professor White’s lesson(同位语): we alone set the bar for our own excellence. 激动与兴奋词块 1.be in high spirits精神高涨 2.be excited with joy at the success为成功而欣喜 3.be on top of the world心满意足 4.a mixture of excitement and happiness既兴奋又开心 5.to one’s excitement/thrill令某人激动的是 6.contain one’s excitement抑制内心的激动 7.tremble with excitement激动地发抖 8.dance/jump with excitement激动地雀跃/跳起来 9.with/in excitement激动地 10.thump/pound with excitement心激动地怦怦跳 焦虑不安词块 1.with anxiety焦急地 2.cause/create/lead to anxiety造成焦虑 3.in despair绝望地 4.with growing uneasiness越来越不安 5.decline one’s head in despair垂头丧气 6.abandon oneself to despair陷入绝望 7.heart be torn with despair撕心裂肺地绝望 48. 假定你是李华，在参加野生动物保护夏令营(Wildlife Protection Summer Camp) 时结识了英国朋友Jack，现在他已回国。请你给他写一封邮件，内容包括： 1. 回忆活动经历； 2. 分享个人感悟； 3. 希望保持联系。 注意：     1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Dear Jack, _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Li Hua Possible Answer官方: Dear Jack, How is everything going? It has been a month since we parted at the Wildlife Protection Summer Camp(状从). I miss you so much. I can still remember the enjoyable and meaningful time we have spent together(状从), observing those once endangered animals and appreciating the great efforts to protect them(非谓语动词做伴随动作). What impresses me most(主从) is the story of the volunteers watching over(非谓语动词短语做后置定语) antelopes day and night to keep them from attacks(非谓语动词做目的抓关于). Through this experience(状语), I’m fully aware that only when we learn to exist in harmony with nature can the world be a better place.(宾从+倒装句) Let’s stay in touch. Looking forward to your early reply. Yours, Li Hua 环境描写 高分技巧 情绪描写 心理描写 介词+情绪词，in/with/out of /to 无灵主语句 状语从句/定语从句 非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作 副词或形容词做状语；adv,或 a.+ a. 强调/倒装/感叹句 独立主格，with复合结构 非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作 亮点动词; mirror/ linger / echo etc. $$