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情感延续类 洪水破坏菲律宾五口之家，灾后全家坚强重筑家园 湖北省九师联盟2025届高三11月质量检测英语试题 原文分析 读后续写 原文审读 多篇范文呈现 解题思路分析 读后续写可积累文本 1、 原文审读： 第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 In a small village in the Philippines, there lived a family of five. The parents, Juan and Maria, had three children: two boys and a girl. They lived in a small house made of bamboo, surrounded by many trees and the sound of the nearby river. Juan and Maria lived a happy life with their three children: Miguel, Jose and Ana. The eldest son, Miguel, was a hardworking young man who helped his father with the farm work. He was responsible and always took care of his younger brother and sister. The couple always told their children that they were happy as long as the family was together. Though Jose and Ana were too young to understand that, Miguel, who treasured a photo of his family, bore that in mind. One day, while the family was having dinner, they heard a loud knock on the door. It was the village chief, who had come to deliver some bad news: The village was in danger of being flooded due to heavy rain, and they needed to evacuate (撤离) immediately. Juan and Maria quickly gathered their children and some essentials, and they set off towards the evacuation center. Before leaving for the center, Miguel took the precious family photo in a hurry. The journey was long and full of danger, with the rain pouring down heavily and the wind beating them violently. The children were scared and tired, but Juan and Maria held their hands to reassure them, telling them that everything was going to be alright. When they finally reached the evacuation center, they were greeted by other families who had also been forced to leave their homes. The center was crowded and uncomfortable, but the family was grateful to have a roof over their heads and some food to eat. Days turned into weeks, and Juan and Maria grew restless. They missed their home and their farm, and they were worried about what would happen to their crops. Several weeks later, the day came when the floodwaters slowly receded (消退). 注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1：Juan and Maria decided to take their children back home. Paragraph 2：“No! We still have something precious,” said Miguel. 2、 原文审读 红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，从句斜体；下划线+标黄单词+斜体 为需掌握积累单词、短语；黑体标黄，非谓语；可积累部分为 embody； 注释(定语从句) In a small village in the Philippines, there lived a family of five. The parents, Juan and Maria, had three children: two boys and a girl. They lived in a small house made of bamboo(非谓语动词短语作后置定语), surrounded by many trees and the sound of the nearby river(非谓语动词短语作后置定语). Juan and Maria lived a happy life with their three children: Miguel, Jose and Ana. The eldest son, Miguel, was a hardworking young man who helped his father with the farm work(定从). He was responsible and always took care of his younger brother and sister. The couple always told their children that they were happy(宾从) as long as the family was together(状从). Though Jose and Ana were too young to understand that(状从), Miguel, who treasured a photo of his family(定从), bore that in mind. One day, while the family was having dinner(状从), they heard a loud knock on the door. It was the village chief, who had come to deliver some bad news(定从): The village was in danger of being flooded due to heavy rain, and they needed to evacuate (撤离) immediately. Juan and Maria quickly gathered their children and some essentials, and they set off towards the evacuation center. Before leaving for the center, Miguel took the precious family photo in a hurry. The journey was long and full of danger, with the rain pouring down heavily and the wind beating them violently(with复合结构). The children were scared and tired, but Juan and Maria held their hands to reassure them, telling them that everything was going to be alright(宾从). When they finally reached the evacuation center(状从), they were greeted by other families who had also been forced to leave their homes(定从). The center was crowded and uncomfortable, but the family was grateful to have a roof over their heads and some food to eat. Days turned into weeks, and Juan and Maria grew restless. They missed their home and their farm, and they were worried about what would happen to their crops(宾从). Several weeks later, the day came when the floodwaters slowly receded(状从) (消退). 注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1：Juan and Maria decided to take their children back home. Paragraph 2：“No! We still have something precious,” said Miguel. 故事山模式 ： 衔接点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 衔接点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 衔接点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语； 衔接点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 对提示句P1,P2做逐词逐句的解读，理解其背后深意； 回溯原文，找到对应的文本，确定基本元素，时间，地点，人物，所涉及的物品，细节等信息； 试图对时间线，地点线结合P1,P2的提示句，看是否有所变化，以确定是否需要展开； 构思情节 读懂最后2段尤其是最后1段的信息，合理结合生活实际，构思文章，并完成 成长前的困扰 情境描写+消极情绪的累积→高潮  成长中的蜕变 成长的动机+过程中变化的心情成长后的升华 成长后的收获+积极情绪(喜悦、满足和骄傲等) Possible Answer 1: I was completely shocked by the news. Emma had been my partner for weeks, and the thought of performing alone was terrifying. My heart raced as I sat on my bed(状从), trying to process the situation(非谓语动词做伴随动作). How could I possibly go on stage without her? The hours we spent rehearsing together (定从)seemed pointless now. The idea of stepping into the spotlight by myself made my hands sweat and my knees shake. Finally came the big moment. As I walked backstage(状从), I took a deep breath and tried to calm my nerves. The stage was set, the audience was waiting, and there was no turning back. I stepped onto the stage, the spotlight blinding me for a second(独立主格), and the music started. Despite my nerves, something inside me shifted. I had been practicing for this moment, and now, I was going to give it my all. As I sang(状从), I felt my confidence grow with each note, and by the end, I was overwhelmed with pride. I had done it—on my own.  1. 高考读后续写分析    （1）文章类型分析   这篇文章属于情感延续型读后续写。文章描述了Juan和Maria一家人的日常生活以及他们在灾难中的经历。文章结尾处提到洪水逐渐消退，续写需要处理家庭面临的挑战，特别是在他们能够回家之后，如何恢复生活以及对失去的东西的情感反应。    （2）思路构思    情感发展：本篇文章的情感主题围绕家庭、失落与希望展开。续写应聚焦于家庭在洪水过后如何恢复平静，并通过一些富有象征意义的行动表达他们对家庭的珍视，以及对未来的希望。    情节延续：续写的情节应延续原文中的冲突和情感。家庭重新回到家中的描写应该突出他们的感情波动，尤其是Miguel对家庭照片的执着以及他在关键时刻的决心。 布局与框架：    第一段：      家庭的决定：Miguel和家人决定回到家中，尽管面临不确定性和困难，但他们的决心象征着对家的归属感。      动作描写：细致地描写家庭回家的情景，包括路途的艰辛和他们的心理活动。       第二段：      Miguel的坚持：Miguel反思洪水带来的损失，但强调家人对彼此的珍视。此时，家庭照片作为情感的象征，意味着他们始终拥有的“珍贵”东西。      结局温暖：通过Miguel的一句话，展示家庭成员之间深厚的情感纽带，给出一个希望和正能量的结局。 （3）承接原文的事项 情感延续：续写要延续原文家庭之间的亲情和困境中的坚韧。Miguel持有家庭照片的行为表明了家庭在灾难面前的重要性，续写时应保持这种情感联系。 情节过渡自然：从原文的“洪水渐退”到家庭回家的决策需要自然过渡，不要出现突兀的情节变化。 （4）整体注意事项 语气平稳且感人：续写应保持温暖和感人的语气，体现出家庭团结、对未来的信心和坚持。 细节描写：细腻的动作、心理和环境描写有助于深化情感表现，展现人物在困境中的坚韧与希望。 情感层次：通过细腻的情感描写，展示从困境中恢复过来的心路历程，展现Miguel和家庭成员之间的紧密关系。  动作描写：   1. Juan and Maria held each other’s hands tightly, their steps slow but determined as they made their way back to their home.   2. Miguel took the family photo from his pocket, his fingers brushing over the worn edges as if drawing strength from it.   3. The family trudged through the muddy path, the weight of their loss heavy on their shoulders, but their spirits unbroken.  心理描写：   1. Miguel felt a surge of determination as he stared at the family photo in his hand. No matter what had been lost, he still had something precious.   2. Juan’s heart was heavy with worry, but as they neared their home, hope began to flicker in his chest.   3. Maria looked at her children with tearfilled eyes, grateful that they were together despite the hardship.  环境描写：   1. The once lush fields were now barren, with the remains of the floodwaters still visible in the distance.   2. The sky was clearing, and rays of sunlight began to break through the clouds, signaling the end of the storm.   3. The house, though damaged, stood resilient against the changing tides, much like the family that lived inside it. Trudge (v.) — 跋涉，吃力地走 近义词：plod, slog 反义词：skip, dance 例句： 1. The family trudged through the muddy roads, exhaustion written on their faces. 2. After the storm, the workers trudged back to their homes, weary but relieved. Surge (v.) — 激增，涌现 近义词：rush, flood 反义词：decline, recede 例句： 1. Miguel felt a surge of emotion as he held the photo, knowing how much it meant to his family. 2. The crowd surged forward, eager to see the concert. Resilient (adj.) — 有弹性的，坚韧的 近义词：tough, strong 反义词：fragile, weak 例句： 1. Despite the damage, the community remained resilient and determined to rebuild. 2. The resilient tree withstood the storm’s fury. （1）高中语法现象 过去完成时：“Miguel had taken the precious family photo in a hurry” — 强调动作发生在另一个过去动作之前，突出了事件发生的时间顺序。 现在完成时：“The floodwaters had receded” — 表示洪水的消退发生在过去并延续至现在，强调动作的完成性。 虚拟语气：“If we had not evacuated, we would have been trapped” — 描述假设条件，表达与过去事实相反的情形。 （2）常见搭配与短语 Hold tightly：紧紧抓住（例如，“Juan and Maria held each other’s hands tightly.”）。 Draw strength from：从中汲取力量（例如，“Miguel drew strength from the family photo.”）。 Rise above：克服，超越（例如，“They managed to rise above the difficulties.”）。 6. 巧妙设计续写内容 自我发现与成长：可以设计主角在焦虑中找到内心的坚定，甚至在没有伙伴的情况下表现出超乎预期的才能。可以通过“突破”这一元素来增强情节的深度。 加入反转：可以设计一个小小的反转，比如主角虽然焦虑不安，但在最后一刻，通过自己的努力或外部支持（如家人的鼓励、同学的掌声）找到自信并成功完成演出。 情感对比：可以通过主角与他人的互动（如Emma恢复了，或父母的鼓励）形成情感对比，突显主角成长的过程。 Possible Answer 1: Paragraph 1: Juan and Maria decided to take their children back home. Despite the long journey and the challenges ahead, they were determined to rebuild their lives. As they walked through the muddy path(状从), Miguel held the family photo close, drawing strength from the memories it held(定从). Paragraph 2: “No! We still have something precious,” said Miguel. His words rang with determination. “We have each other, and this photo reminds us that no matter what, our family is always together.(宾从)” The family smiled, their hearts full of hope(独立主格) as they faced the future together(状从). Possible Answer 2: Paragraph 1: Juan and Maria decided to take their children back home. The journey was difficult, but their spirits were high. As they passed the river(状从), they looked at the once-flooded land, now slowly recovering. Miguel clutched the family photo, feeling(非谓语做伴随动作) it was the one thing(定从) they could hold onto(定从). Paragraph 2: “No! We still have something precious,” said Miguel. His voice was filled with emotion. “This photo is more than just a picture. It’s a symbol of our strength and love.” Together, they returned to their home, ready to rebuild their lives(主语补语形容词), knowing that they still had each other.(宾从) Possible Answer 3: Paragraph 1: Juan and Maria decided to take their children back home. The roads were tough, but their determination never wavered. As they walked(状从), Miguel felt a sense of peace, knowing that with the photo in his hand, they still had something to hold onto(宾从). Paragraph 2: “No! We still have something precious,” said Miguel. His words brought a sense of calm to the family. They all knew that as long as they had each other, they could overcome anything. The flood had taken much, but it had not taken their hope. One possible version: Juan and Maria decided to take their children back home. The return journey was full of silence and worries. When they finally arrived at the village(状从), they were depressed to see a scene of devastation: Their crops had been destroyed by the flood. Worse still, their house was in ruins and their possessions were washed away. Overwhelmed by emotion(非谓语动词作伴随动作), Maria fell onto her knees and burst into tears. Though he wanted to comfort his wife(状从), Juan couldn’t help crying out, “We’ve lost everything!” “No!We still have something precious,” said Miguel. Then Miguel showed the family photo to his parents and added, “Everything will be OK as long as we are together(状从). Remember?” Miguel looked at his parents with a determined look. “Yes!” Juan responded and turned to his wife, who was smiling(定从). The couple were delighted that their eldest son remembered(宾从) and reminded them of what mattered most for a family(宾从). They held their children’s hands tightly, believing that they could rebuild their home and farm with joint efforts(非谓语+宾从). 第四部分写作（共两节，满分40分） 第一节（满分15分） 假定你是李华，你的留学生朋友William邀请你参加他本周六的生日派对，但你因故无法前往，特提前给他邮寄了一份礼物。请你给他写封邮件，内容包括： 1.表达歉意并说明原因； 2.提醒他查收礼物。 注意：1.写作词数应为80个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Dear William, ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Li Hua Possible Answer 官方: One possible version: Dear William, I feel excited to be invited to your birthday party this Saturday. However, I regret to tell you that I’ve been scheduled to visit my grandparents in the countryside. Therefore, I won’t make it to your party, for which I’m deeply sorry(原因状语从句). To celebrate your birthday, I’ve carefully selected a Chinese novel for you since you’ve been passionate about Chinese literature. The gift, sent along with a letter of my sincere wishes(非谓语动词短语后置定语), is likely to reach you this Friday. Please remember to pick it up in time. Happy birthday to you! Yours, Li Hua 环境描写 高分技巧 情绪描写 心理描写 介词+情绪词，in/with/out of /to 无灵主语句 状语从句/定语从句 非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作 副词或形容词做状语；adv,或 a.+ a. 强调/倒装/感叹句 独立主格，with复合结构 非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作 亮点动词; mirror/ linger / echo etc. $$