读后续写 邻里情长：我的 “编外” 祖父母 讲义-四川省泸州市2023-2024学年高一下学期7月期末英语试题

阅读下面材料。根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My dad is a truck driver, and when I was little, he was gone most of the time. So my mom was almost like a single mother. My parents and I lived in a small house in Brighton, Colorado, where we had a big yard. We moved there on my third birthday. My first memory was our neighbor Arlene handing me strawberries from her garden through a hole in the chain-link fence. She and her husband, Bill, lived next door. Arlene spent a lot of time working in the garden, and I was always talking to her from our yard. I was a chatter-box. I think what drew me to Arlene and Rill is that they never got tired of listening to me gab (闲聊). I also think Arlene saw a lot of herself in me-we were both lonely, anxious-and that may be why she always took the time to listen to me. Bill too. It was a wonderful connection. One day, my parents asked Bill and Arlene whether they’d watch me while they went out on a date. This worked well for everyone, so it became a somewhat monthly thing. In fact, Arlene and Bill didn’t have kids. They had a spare room in their house, which became “my room”. I had a cabinet and boxes of toys and books in that room. Arlene and I would do crafts together. Bill taught me how to ride a bike and later how to drive the lawn tractor and eventually a car. He was always fixing something in his garage. I would wander over to talk to him, and he would always stop and listen to me, just like Arlene did. When I was about five, I had an idea. My parents were watching TV when I spit it out: “What if I accepted Bill and Arlene as my grandparents?” My parents said I could go over and ask them by myself. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右· 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1 The next day, I got up early, ready to visit Bill and Arlene first. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2 Over the years, Bill and Arlene supported me in all my dreams. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文章大意： 作者小时候父亲常不在家，母亲如同单亲妈妈。邻居阿琳和比尔夫妇经常倾听作者闲聊，带作者玩耍、教作者技能，还帮忙照顾作者，让作者感受到温暖。作者五岁时，想认他们做爷爷奶奶，展现出作者与邻居之间深厚的情谊，也体现了这种非血缘关系带来的亲情温暖，引发读者对邻里情和亲情定义的思考。 故事山分析： · 开端：介绍作者的家庭背景，父亲是卡车司机常不在家，母亲独自照顾家庭，营造出一种有些孤单的家庭氛围，为邻居的出现做铺垫，引发读者对作者家庭生活的关注，也让读者好奇邻居会给作者的生活带来怎样的改变，吸引读者继续阅读故事。 · 发展：作者回忆与邻居阿琳和比尔的相处点滴，如阿琳通过围栏递草莓、一起做手工，比尔教骑车等，这些情节丰富了人物关系，展现出邻居给予作者的关怀和陪伴，使故事更加温馨，也让读者看到作者与邻居之间感情逐渐加深的过程，推动故事向高潮发展。 · 高潮：作者产生认邻居为爷爷奶奶的想法并打算去询问，这一情节将故事的情感推向顶点，引发读者对邻居反应的强烈期待，增强了故事的戏剧性和紧张感，使读者更加关注故事的结局，也突出了作者对亲情和温暖的渴望。 · 结局：尚未揭示邻居的回应以及后续故事发展，给读者留下悬念，使故事具有开放性和回味性，强化了读者对人物关系发展的好奇，进一步深化了故事的教育意义，即温暖的邻里情可以像亲情一样珍贵，也让读者更加期待看到故事的后续，增强了故事的吸引力和感染力。 五处伏笔及续写中的回应： 1. 伏笔：“My dad is a truck driver, and when I was little, he was gone most of the time. So my mom was almost like a single mother.”（我爸爸是一名卡车司机，在我小时候，他大部分时间都不在家。所以我妈妈几乎就像一个单亲妈妈。） · 回应：此伏笔交代了作者家庭环境的特殊性，缺少父亲陪伴的家庭氛围使得作者内心渴望更多的关爱，为后文作者与邻居建立深厚情感并想认他们为爷爷奶奶做铺垫。续写中，作者向邻居提出认亲的请求，正是因为在成长过程中从邻居那里获得了类似亲情的温暖和关怀，弥补了家庭中父亲角色缺失带来的情感空缺，与开头的家庭背景相呼应，使故事的发展更加合乎逻辑，也让读者更加深刻地理解作者的行为动机，进一步深化了故事的主题，即温暖的邻里关系可以在一定程度上填补家庭情感的不足，使读者更加重视邻里之间的情感交流和支持，增强了故事的教育意义和感染力。 2. 伏笔：“My first memory was our neighbor Arlene handing me strawberries from her garden through a hole in the chain-link fence.”（我的第一个记忆是我们的邻居阿琳从她花园里通过铁丝网的一个洞递给我草莓。） 4. 回应：这一温馨的场景是作者与邻居美好回忆的开端，为后续一系列相处情节的展开奠定了情感基础，也让读者感受到邻居最初对作者的友好和关怀。续写中，当作者去询问认亲之事时，阿琳的热情回应与之前递草莓的友好举动相呼应，体现出他们之间感情的延续和升温，使故事更加连贯自然，也让读者看到邻里之间的善意和友好往往能发展成深厚的情谊，进一步强调了在人际关系中，小小的善举可能会带来意想不到的情感回报，深化了故事的主题，使读者更加珍惜生活中的点滴善意，增强了故事的情感共鸣和可读性，同时也使读者更加期待看到他们之间的感情在认亲之后会有怎样的进一步发展，增强了故事的吸引力和感染力。 3. 伏笔：“I think what drew me to Arlene and Bill is that they never got tired of listening to me gab (闲聊). I also think Arlene saw a lot of herself in me - we were both lonely, anxious - and that may be why she always took the time to listen to me. Bill too.”（我想吸引我接近阿琳和比尔的是他们从不厌烦听我闲聊。我也认为阿琳在我身上看到了很多她自己的影子 —— 我们都孤独、焦虑 —— 这也许就是为什么她总是花时间听我说话。比尔也是。） 4. 回应：揭示了作者与邻居之间情感联系的内在原因，因为相似的情感状态而产生共鸣，使他们的关系更加紧密，也为作者对邻居产生亲情般的依赖做铺垫。续写中，邻居接受作者的认亲请求，正是因为这种深厚的情感共鸣和相互理解，他们愿意给予作者更多的关爱和支持，与之前的伏笔相呼应，使故事更加真实可信，也让读者看到在人际关系中，理解和共鸣是建立深厚情感的重要基础，进一步深化了故事的主题，即真正的情感连接源于内心的理解和共鸣，我们应该用心去感受和理解他人，增强了故事的教育效果和启示作用，使读者更加关注身边人的情感需求，也更愿意在生活中与他人建立真挚的情感联系，同时也使读者更加期待看到他们在新的亲情关系下的生活场景，增强了故事的吸引力和可读性。 4. 伏笔：“They had a spare room in their house, which became ‘my room’. I had a cabinet and boxes of toys and books in that room.”（他们家有一个空房间，成了 “我的房间”。在那个房间里我有一个橱柜和几箱玩具和书。） 4. 回应：体现了邻居对作者的关爱已经超出了普通邻居的范畴，为作者提供了专属的空间，这是他们之间亲密关系的一种象征，也为故事的发展增添了温暖的细节。续写中，当作者认亲后，这个房间可能会承载更多的亲情故事，比如在这里度过更多欢乐的时光，与之前房间的存在相呼应，使故事的情节更加丰富，也让读者看到物质上的关怀往往伴随着情感的投入，进一步强调了在亲情和友情中，为对方提供实际的支持和关怀是表达情感的重要方式，深化了故事的主题，即真挚的情感需要通过实际行动来体现，我们应该用行动去关爱身边的人，增强了故事的教育效果和可读性，也使读者更加期待看到他们在这个房间里创造的新回忆，增强了故事的吸引力和感染力。 5. 伏笔：“Bill taught me how to ride a bike and later how to drive the lawn tractor and eventually a car. He was always fixing something in his garage. I would wander over to talk to him, and he would always stop and listen to me, just like Arlene did.”（比尔教我骑自行车，后来又教我开割草机，最后教我开车。他总是在车库里修理东西。我会走过去和他聊天，他也会像阿琳一样停下来听我说话。） 4. 回应：展示了比尔对作者成长的重要影响，通过传授技能体现出一种长辈对晚辈的关怀和培养，进一步加深了作者与邻居之间的情感联系，也为作者将他们视为亲人提供了有力的支撑。续写中，在作者的成长过程中，邻居作为爷爷奶奶可能会继续在各方面给予支持和指导，与之前比尔的教导相呼应，使故事更加连贯，也让读者看到在一个人的成长过程中，来自非血缘关系的长辈的关爱和教导同样具有重要意义，进一步深化了故事的主题，即亲情不仅仅局限于血缘关系，那些在成长中给予我们关爱和教导的人都可以成为我们生命中重要的亲人，增强了故事的教育意义和鼓舞人心的力量，使读者更加珍惜身边那些像亲人一样的朋友和邻居，也更愿意在他人的成长过程中扮演积极的角色，同时也使读者更加期待看到作者在邻居的关爱下实现自己的梦想，增强了故事的吸引力和可读性。 续写要点： 第一段： · 情节：详细描述作者走到邻居家门口的紧张心情，心跳加速，手微微颤抖着按下门铃。阿琳开门后，作者鼓起勇气说出了自己的想法：“阿琳奶奶，比尔爷爷，我很喜欢和你们在一起，你们就像我的爷爷奶奶一样，我可以这么叫你们吗？” 阿琳听后，眼中闪过惊喜与感动的泪花，她蹲下身子，紧紧地抱住作者，轻声说：“当然可以，亲爱的，我们也一直把你当作自己的亲孙女。” 这时，比尔从屋里走出来，听到他们的对话，脸上露出了灿烂的笑容，走过来摸摸作者的头说：“以后你就是我们的小宝贝了。” 作者的脸上洋溢着幸福的笑容，三人在门口温馨地拥抱在一起，为故事营造出温暖、感人的氛围，使读者感受到亲情的美好，也为下一段作者的成长经历做铺垫，让读者期待看到他们在新的家庭关系下的生活。 · 情感：作者的情感是紧张、期待和幸福，紧张于邻居的反应，期待能够得到肯定的回答，在得到认可后感到无比幸福；阿琳和比尔则是惊喜、感动和欣慰，他们惊喜于作者的请求，感动于作者对他们的深厚感情，欣慰于能够给予作者家庭的温暖，这种情感的交融使整个场景充满了温情，也让读者更加深入地体会到亲情的力量和邻里情的珍贵，增强了故事的情感共鸣和可读性，同时也使读者更加关注他们未来的生活，期待看到更多温暖的故事发生。 第二段： · 情节：描绘作者在成长过程中，邻居爷爷奶奶给予的各种支持。在作者上学期间，阿琳会每天为作者准备营养丰富的午餐，还会在作者遇到学习困难时耐心辅导；比尔则会在作者参加学校的科技比赛时，利用自己的手艺帮作者制作精美的参赛作品。当作者大学毕业面临职业选择时，他们会认真倾听作者的想法，给予中肯的建议。在作者的婚礼上，阿琳和比尔坐在前排，眼中满是骄傲和不舍的泪水，他们看着作者幸福的样子，感到无比欣慰。多年后，作者带着自己的孩子去看望他们，孩子甜甜地叫着 “太爷爷、太奶奶”，一家人围坐在一起，欢声笑语，将故事推向一个温馨、圆满的高潮，升华故事的主题，让读者深刻体会到亲情的延续和邻里情的珍贵，也给人以鼓舞和启示，使读者在感动之余，能够反思自己在生活中是否珍惜身边的亲情和友情，进一步强化了故事的教育意义和价值。 · 情感：作者对邻居爷爷奶奶充满了感激、敬爱和依赖，在成长的各个阶段都因他们的支持而感到安心和幸福；阿琳和比尔则始终怀着慈爱、关怀和自豪的情感，看着作者成长、成家，为她的每一个成就感到骄傲，这种情感的传递和升华使整个故事充满了正能量和温暖，也让读者深刻感受到在给予和接受爱的过程中，每个人都能收获心灵的满足和成长，进一步强化了故事的主题，即亲情和友情是人生中最宝贵的财富，我们应该用心去经营和珍惜，同时也使读者更加珍惜自己生活中的亲情和友情，增强了故事的教育效果和启示作用，使读者更加期待自己也能拥有这样真挚的情感关系，增强了故事的吸引力和感染力。 情感线： 故事开始，作者由于父亲经常不在家，内心有些孤独，对邻居阿琳和比尔的关怀充满感激和依赖，处于一种渴望关爱的情感状态；随着与邻居相处渐多，作者在他们的陪伴下感受到温暖和快乐，情感逐渐升温；产生认亲想法时，作者内心紧张又期待，希望能得到邻居的回应；认亲成功后，作者感受到幸福和安心，阿琳和比尔也充满惊喜和欣慰；在后续成长过程中，作者对邻居爷爷奶奶的敬爱和感激不断加深，他们也始终给予作者慈爱和支持；最终，作者带着自己的孩子与邻居共享天伦之乐，亲情得以延续，整个情感线从孤独渴望、温暖依赖、紧张期待、幸福安心、敬爱感激到慈爱自豪、亲情延续，充分展现了人物在故事发展过程中的情感变化，也让读者深刻感受到亲情和邻里情的力量，引发读者对自己情感和人际关系的反思，体会到珍惜身边人的重要性，具有深刻的情感教育意义和感染力。 故事线： 1. 作者小时候父亲常不在家，母亲似单亲妈妈。 2. 邻居阿琳和比尔常陪伴作者，倾听闲聊、给予关怀。 3. 父母让邻居照顾作者，邻居给作者准备房间。 4. 比尔教作者骑车等技能，阿琳与作者做手工。 5. 作者想认邻居为爷爷奶奶并去询问。 6. 邻居答应，多年来支持作者成长，体现亲情不限于血缘，邻里情可如亲情般珍贵。 主旨升华句（英文）： 1. Love knows no boundaries of blood or fences. It is the kindness and care we offer and receive that truly define the family we create, whether by birth or by heart.（爱不分血缘或围栏的界限。正是我们给予和接受的善良与关怀，真正定义了我们所创造的家庭，无论是血缘上的还是心灵上的。） 2. In the tapestry of life, the threads of friendship and neighborly love are woven as tightly as those of kinship. For it is the bonds we form through shared moments and genuine affection that enrich our journey and give meaning to our days.（在生活的织锦中，友谊和邻里之爱的丝线与亲情的丝线交织得同样紧密。因为正是我们通过共同的时刻和真挚的感情所形成的纽带，丰富了我们的旅程，赋予了我们的日子以意义。） 3. The family we choose, with hearts full of love and open arms, can often be the ones who hold us up and see us through. Let us cherish these connections, for they are the true treasures that make life's journey worthwhile.（我们选择的家人，怀着充满爱的心和张开的双臂，往往是那些支持我们、陪伴我们度过难关的人。让我们珍惜这些联系，因为它们是使人生旅程有价值的真正宝藏。） 4. True kinship is not measured by DNA but by the depth of our hearts and the warmth of our actions. When we open our lives to those around us and embrace them as our own, we discover the beauty of a family that extends far beyond the traditional.（真正的亲情不是由 DNA 衡量的，而是由我们内心的深度和行动的温暖衡量的。当我们向周围的人敞开生活并像对待自己人一样拥抱他们时，我们发现了一个远远超出传统的家庭之美。） 5. A home is not just a building; it is a place filled with love and care. And sometimes, that love comes from the most unexpected corners, like the kindness of neighbors who become family, teaching us that the heart has room for all kinds of love.（家不仅仅是一座建筑；它是一个充满爱和关怀的地方。有时，那种爱来自最意想不到的角落，比如成为家人的邻居的善意，教导我们内心有空间容纳各种爱。） 写作示范： 第一篇 Paragraph 1: The next day, I got up early, ready to visit Bill and Arlene first. My heart was pounding as I walked across the yard. When I reached their door, I took a deep breath and rang the bell. Arlene opened the door, and I looked up at her with a mixture of nervousness and hope. "Arlene... Grandma," I stammered, "I was wondering if I could call you Grandma and Bill Grandpa? You've been so nice to me, and I feel like you're family." Arlene's eyes widened in surprise, and then softened with affection. She knelt down and hugged me tightly. "Oh, sweetheart, of course you can! We've always thought of you as our little granddaughter." Just then, Bill came out from the back room. Hearing what had happened, he smiled broadly and joined our embrace. "Welcome to the family, little one," he said, his voice filled with warmth. I felt a rush of happiness and relief, knowing that I now had two more people to love and who would love me back. Paragraph 2: Over the years, Bill and Arlene supported me in all my dreams. When I was in school, Arlene would help me with my homework and make sure I had a healthy snack every day. Bill would take me to the park to play baseball and teach me about cars and how things worked. As I grew older and started thinking about my future career, they listened attentively to my ideas and offered valuable advice. They were there for me through the good times and the bad, cheering me on at my graduations and comforting me when I faced setbacks. On my wedding day, they sat in the front row, beaming with pride. Years later, I brought my own children to visit them, and they became the beloved great-grandparents. Our bond grew stronger with each passing year, proving that family is not just about blood, but about the love and care we share. This experience taught me that the most precious relationships can sometimes be found right next door, and that kindness and love have the power to create a family that lasts a lifetime. 第二篇 Paragraph 1: The next day, I got up early, ready to visit Bill and Arlene first. I tiptoed across the yard, my heart pounding with a mix of excitement and nervousness. As I reached their door, I took a deep breath and rang the bell. Arlene opened the door, and her warm smile immediately put me at ease. I looked up at her and blurted out, "Arlene, can I call you Grandma? And Bill, Grandpa?" Her eyes widened in surprise, then softened with affection. She knelt down and hugged me tightly, "Oh, sweetie, of course you can!" Just then, Bill emerged from the kitchen, and upon hearing our conversation, his face lit up with joy. He joined in the hug, and I felt a sense of belonging I had never known before. Paragraph 2: Over the years, Bill and Arlene supported me in all my dreams. They attended every school play and sports event, cheering me on from the front row. When I decided to study art in college, they provided me with art supplies and words of encouragement. Bill even built me a custom easel. After graduation, when I opened my own art studio, they were there, beaming with pride. They became the loving grandparents I had always longed for, and our bond grew stronger with each passing year. Their love and support showed me that family isn't just about blood; it's about the people who are there for you through thick and thin. 范文 The next day, I got up early, ready to visit Bill and Arlene first. With a bouquet of wildflowers I had picked from our yard, I skipped over to their house, determined to make my feelings known. As I approached the door, I took a deep breath and knocked. Arlene answered with a warm smile, her eyes twinkling in anticipation. “Good morning, sweetheart! What brings you by so early?” I handed her the flowers and, with a quiver in my voice, began to explain my idea. “Arlene, Bill...I was wondering if you’d be my grandparents. I love you both so much, and I feel like you’re already like family to me.” Over the years, Bill and Arlene supported me in all my dreams. They never hesitated to encourage my passions, whether it was building forts in their backyard, exploring the local nature trails, or even when I announced my intention to become a writer. Arlene would read my stories aloud, her voice filled with emotion, and offer constructive feedback that helped me grow as a writer. Bill, on the other hand, would share his own life experiences and lessons learned, inspiring me to strive for excellence in everything I did. As I grew older and faced challenges, they were always there with open arms and wise words of advice. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$