广西桂林市2023-2024学年高二下学期期末质量检测英语试题英语读后续写--指尖筑梦：钢琴路上的坚守与曙光 讲义

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I was 11 years old when I asked my mum for piano lessons. We were in the economic decline and she'd recently been out of work. She said a polite “no”. That didn't stop me. I googled the photos of a keyboard, drew the keys on to a piece of paper and stuck it on my desk. I would click notes（音符） on an online keyboard and “play” them back on my paper one—keeping the sound they made on the computer in my head. After a while I could hear the notes in my head while pressing the keys on the paper. I spent six months playing scales（音阶） and chord sequences（和弦序列） without touching a real piano. Once my mum saw it wasn't a fad（一时的怪念头）, she borrowed some money from family and friends, and bought me 10 lessons. I still remember the first one. I was struck by how organic the sound of the piano was, as I had become familiar with the artificial electronic sound. The teacher tried to explain where middle C was but I could already play all the major and minor scales. I passed my grade one after eight lessons and got distinction. By the time I started secondary school, we couldn't afford lessons again, so I returned to my paper keyboard. I passed grade three, then grade five, practicing only on my piece of paper. For the grades above that, there's an expectation that you put a certain sensitivity into your playing. The head of music at my school said I could practice on the school's piano. I would wake up at 5: 30 am to get there in time and play until lessons started. I'd skip lunch and then practice after school until the caretaker kicked me out. At home, I'd have dinner, do three hours of revision, and then mental practice until I am. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 One evening, when I was about 13, I came home, and my mom said she had a surprise for me. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ My dad was very much against me playing, but when he heard that song, something inside him changed. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文章大意： 作者 11 岁时热爱钢琴却因家庭经济衰退被母亲拒绝，于是通过在纸上画键盘练习。母亲看到其决心后借钱为其买了十节课，之后因经济问题又回到纸上练习，但作者凭借努力通过了一级和三级考试。后来学校音乐老师允许作者用学校钢琴练习，作者更加刻苦。13 岁时母亲攒钱买了二手钢琴，父亲也因作者弹奏的歌曲改变态度，最终作者在钢琴之路上不断前行，体现了对梦想的执着追求以及家人支持的重要性。 故事山分析： · 开端：作者所处的经济衰退背景下，家庭经济困难，母亲拒绝其学钢琴的请求，此为故事起点，营造出艰难的氛围，同时也激发作者追求梦想的决心，为后续通过自制纸键盘练习等情节做铺垫，引发读者对作者如何实现钢琴梦的好奇，吸引读者关注故事发展。 · 发展：作者自制纸键盘坚持练习，母亲看到其决心后借钱买课，以及后续在学校利用课余时间刻苦练琴等情节，逐步展现作者为梦想付出的努力，推动故事发展，体现其对钢琴的热爱和执着，使读者看到他在困境中不断前行，也为后续故事的转折和高潮做准备，增加故事的曲折性和吸引力。 · 高潮：母亲攒钱买二手钢琴以及父亲因作者弹奏而改变态度，是故事的高潮部分。母亲的举动令人感动，父亲的转变则出乎意料，两者形成强烈的情感冲击，使读者深刻感受到家人态度的变化对作者梦想的重要影响，也将故事的情感氛围推向顶点，让读者更加关注作者未来的钢琴之路，增强故事的感染力和戏剧性。 · 结局：虽未明确提及作者此后的成就，但从其之前的努力和家人态度的转变可以预见他将在钢琴之路上继续前行，给读者留下想象空间，同时也升华了梦想、坚持和家人支持相结合能创造美好未来的主题，使读者在故事结束后仍能回味其中的情感和力量，引发对自身梦想追求的思考，具有一定的教育意义和启示作用。 五处伏笔及续写中的回应： 1. 伏笔：“I was 11 years old when I asked my mum for piano lessons. We were in the economic decline and she'd recently been out of work. She said a polite ‘no’.”（我 11 岁时向妈妈请求上钢琴课。当时我们正处于经济衰退期，她最近也失业了。她礼貌地拒绝了我。） · 回应：此伏笔为故事的开端，引出作者追求钢琴梦想的艰难起点，也为后续母亲的态度转变以及作者通过自身努力坚持梦想做铺垫。续写中，母亲省吃俭用攒钱买二手钢琴的情节，与开头因经济困难拒绝形成鲜明对比，突出母亲对作者梦想的支持，同时也体现了作者坚持梦想的感染力，使故事发展更加自然且富有情感，让读者深刻感受到家庭对梦想的重要性，也使故事的主题更加鲜明，即无论起点多么艰难，只要坚持梦想并得到家人支持，就有可能实现目标。 2. 伏笔：“I googled the photos of a keyboard, drew the keys on to a piece of paper and stuck it on my desk. I would click notes on an online keyboard and ‘play’ them back on my paper one—keeping the sound they made on the computer in my head.”（我在网上搜索键盘的照片，在一张纸上画出琴键，然后把它贴在我的桌子上。我会在网上键盘上点击音符，然后在我的纸键盘上 “弹奏” 出来 —— 同时在脑海中记住电脑上发出的声音。） 4. 回应：展现作者在困境中对钢琴的热爱和独特的练习方式，为其后续在没有真实钢琴的情况下仍能不断提升琴艺做铺垫，也体现了作者的坚持和创造力。续写中，作者凭借之前在纸键盘上的练习基础，在得到真实钢琴后能够迅速上手并取得更大进步，这与前文纸键盘练习的情节相呼应，使读者看到作者努力的积累和成果，也让故事更加真实可信，同时也进一步强调了坚持梦想的重要性，即使条件艰苦，也能通过自身努力为实现梦想打下基础，增强了故事的励志色彩和感染力。 3. 伏笔：“Once my mum saw it wasn't a fad, she borrowed some money from family and friends, and bought me 10 lessons.”（一旦我妈妈看到这不是一时的怪念头，她就从家人和朋友那里借了些钱，给我买了十节课。） 4. 回应：体现母亲对作者梦想态度的转变，从拒绝到支持，为故事的发展注入温暖的情感，也为后续母亲继续为作者的钢琴梦努力做铺垫。续写中，母亲攒钱买二手钢琴的情节，是她支持态度的进一步深化，与之前借钱买课相呼应，使读者感受到母亲对作者梦想的坚定支持，也让故事的情感更加丰富和深厚，同时也突出了家人在实现梦想过程中的关键作用，即家人的支持是梦想前进的动力，进一步升华了故事的主题，使读者更加珍惜家人的支持和关爱，也更加坚定追求梦想的信念。 4. 伏笔：“By the time I started secondary school, we couldn't afford lessons again, so I returned to my paper keyboard.”（当我上中学时，我们又没钱上课了，所以我又回到了我的纸键盘上。） 4. 回应：再次强调家庭经济困难对作者追求钢琴梦的阻碍，也为作者在困境中继续坚持练习以及后续学校老师提供帮助等情节做铺垫，使故事的情节更加曲折。续写中，作者在学校利用课余时间刻苦练习钢琴，这一情节与回到纸键盘练习相呼应，展示了作者在困难面前不放弃的精神，同时也为故事的高潮部分 —— 母亲买钢琴和父亲态度转变 —— 做了铺垫，使故事的发展更加自然流畅，也让读者更加深刻地体会到作者追求梦想的艰辛和坚持，增强了故事的励志效果和情感共鸣，进一步突出了梦想的力量和坚持的价值。 5. 伏笔：“The head of music at my school said I could practice on the school's piano. I would wake up at 5:30 am to get there in time and play until lessons started. I'd skip lunch and then practice after school until the caretaker kicked me out.”（我们学校的音乐老师说我可以在学校的钢琴上练习。我会在早上 5:30 起床，以便及时赶到那里，一直弹到上课。我会不吃午饭，放学后继续练习，直到管理员把我赶出去。） 4. 回应：体现学校老师对作者的支持和帮助，为作者提供了继续追求钢琴梦的机会，也展现了作者为梦想付出的巨大努力和牺牲，同时为故事的发展增添了新的元素。续写中，作者在学校钢琴上的练习成果，如弹奏技巧的提升和对音乐情感的表达更加细腻，与之前老师的帮助相呼应，使读者看到作者在他人支持下的成长和进步，也让故事更加丰富多元，同时也强调了在实现梦想的道路上，他人的帮助是不可或缺的，进一步升华了故事的主题，即梦想的实现不仅需要自身的坚持，还需要外界的支持和帮助，使读者更加全面地理解梦想与现实的关系，也更加珍惜身边的支持和机会，增强了故事的教育意义和启示作用。 续写要点： 第一段： · 情节：详细描述母亲为作者准备的二手钢琴的样子，如琴身虽有一些磨损的痕迹，但擦拭得很干净，琴键在灯光下泛着柔和的光泽，仿佛在诉说着未来的音乐故事。接着，描述作者看到钢琴时的惊喜、激动的表情和反应，他可能会一下子扑到钢琴前，小心翼翼地抚摸着琴键，眼中闪烁着泪光，口中喃喃自语着对母亲的感激之词。然后，描写作者当晚迫不及待地弹奏起来，从最初的简单音阶到后来的优美旋律，展示他对钢琴的热爱和熟练的技巧，同时也可以提及母亲在一旁看着作者弹奏时欣慰的笑容，营造出温馨、感人的氛围，突出这架钢琴对作者的重要意义以及母亲的支持对他的巨大鼓舞，为故事的发展增添更多的情感色彩，使读者更加深入地感受到作者对钢琴梦想的执着追求和家庭温暖的力量，也为父亲态度的转变做铺垫，让读者期待故事的进一步发展。 · 情感：作者的情感是极度的惊喜、激动和感激，多年的梦想在这一刻因母亲的努力而更加接近现实，他对母亲的爱和对钢琴的热爱交织在一起，充满了内心；母亲则是欣慰和自豪，看到儿子对钢琴的执着以及能够为他实现这个小小的梦想，感到自己的付出是值得的，这种情感的交融使整个场景充满了温情和感动，也让读者更加深刻地体会到家庭在个人梦想追求中的重要作用，增强了故事的情感共鸣和感染力，使读者更加关注作者在钢琴之路上的未来发展，期待他能取得更大的成就。 第二段： · 情节：描绘父亲听到作者弹奏歌曲后的表情和动作变化，起初他可能只是在一旁静静地听着，脸上带着一丝惊讶和疑惑，随着音乐的推进，他的表情逐渐变得柔和，眼中也有了一丝光芒。当作者弹奏完后，父亲走上前去，轻轻地拍了拍作者的肩膀，说：“孩子，我以前错了，你弹得真好。” 然后，父亲可能会坐下来，和作者一起谈论关于钢琴的梦想，询问他的学习情况，并表示会支持他继续追求音乐梦想。可以描述作者听到父亲这番话后的感动和喜悦，他眼中再次闪烁着泪光，但这次是幸福的泪水，一家人围绕着钢琴，沉浸在温馨、和谐的氛围中。最后，提到这一事件对作者的影响，他更加坚定了在钢琴之路上走下去的决心，也更加珍惜家人的支持，努力练习，不断提升自己的琴艺，为实现更大的梦想而努力奋斗，将故事推向一个温馨、圆满的结局，升华故事的主题，让读者深刻体会到坚持梦想、家人支持以及亲情的温暖是人生中最宝贵的财富，也给人以鼓舞和启示，使读者在感动之余，能够反思自己在追求梦想过程中与家人的关系，更加珍惜身边的人和机会，进一步强化了故事的教育意义和价值。 · 情感：父亲的情感从最初的反对转变为认可和支持，这种态度的巨大转变体现了音乐的感染力和作者坚持梦想的力量，也让读者感受到亲情的温暖和包容；作者则从之前对父亲反对的无奈和难过，转变为现在的感动、喜悦和坚定，他感受到了父亲的理解和支持，内心充满了幸福和力量，对钢琴梦想的追求也更加坚定和执着；母亲则为家庭的和谐以及儿子的梦想得到父亲的支持而感到开心和欣慰，整个家庭的情感氛围从之前的有些紧张和矛盾，转变为现在的温馨、和谐与团结，这种情感的变化和升华使故事充满了正能量和感动，也让读者更加深刻地体会到家庭在个人成长和梦想实现过程中的重要性，进一步增强了故事的情感共鸣和教育意义，使读者更加珍惜家庭的温暖和支持，也更加坚定追求梦想的信念，为实现自己的人生价值而努力拼搏。 故事线： 1. 作者 11 岁时因家庭经济衰退，被母亲拒绝学钢琴请求。 2. 作者自制纸键盘坚持练习，母亲看到决心后借钱买十节课。 3. 上中学后没钱上课，作者回纸键盘练习，后学校老师允许用校钢琴。 4. 13 岁时母亲攒钱买二手钢琴，作者惊喜不已。 5. 父亲起初反对作者弹钢琴，后因听到弹奏歌曲改变态度。 6. 作者在家人支持下继续钢琴之路，体现梦想与家庭支持的力量。 主旨升华句（英文）： 1. Dreams are like delicate seeds that, when nurtured with unwavering determination and the warm embrace of family support, can break through the harshest of soils and blossom into the most beautiful of flowers, filling our lives with vibrant colors and sweet melodies.（梦想就像娇嫩的种子，当用坚定不移的决心和家庭支持的温暖怀抱来培育时，它们能够冲破最坚硬的土壤，绽放出最美丽的花朵，用鲜艳的色彩和甜美的旋律填满我们的生活。） 2. In the symphony of life, the notes of personal perseverance and the chords of family love blend together to create a harmonious melody that can overcome any discordant notes of hardship and doubt, leading us towards the crescendo of our dreams.（在生命的交响乐中，个人毅力的音符和家庭爱的和弦交织在一起，创造出和谐的旋律，能够克服任何艰难和怀疑的不和谐音符，引领我们走向梦想的高潮。） 3. The journey of chasing our dreams is often fraught with obstacles, but it is the unyielding spirit within us and the steadfast support of our loved ones that light the way, transforming the seemingly impossible into the possible, and etching a path of triumph and fulfillment.（追逐梦想的旅程常常充满障碍，但正是我们内心不屈的精神和亲人坚定的支持照亮了道路，将看似不可能变为可能，刻画出一条胜利和满足的道路。） 4. A dream, once kindled in the heart, has the power to ignite a fire that can burn through the darkest of times and the coldest of rejections. With the fuel of determination and the warmth of family, it can rise like a phoenix, soaring towards the skies of success and leaving behind a trail of inspiration for others to follow.（一旦在心中点燃梦想，它就有力量点燃一团火，这团火能够烧穿最黑暗的时刻和最冷酷的拒绝。有了决心作为燃料和家庭的温暖，它可以像凤凰一样崛起，飞向成功的天空，并留下一条激励他人追随的轨迹。） 5. True strength in the pursuit of our dreams lies not only in our individual tenacity but also in the unbreakable bonds of family that hold us up when we stumble and cheer us on when we soar. For it is in the unity of our dreams and the love of our family that we find the greatest power to transform our lives and touch the hearts of those around us.（在追求梦想的过程中，真正的力量不仅在于我们个人的坚韧，还在于家庭那牢不可破的纽带，当我们跌倒时支撑我们，当我们翱翔时为我们欢呼。因为正是在我们梦想的统一和家庭的爱中，我们找到了改变生活和触动周围人心灵的最大力量。） 写作示范： 第一篇 One evening, when I was about 13, I came home, and my mom said she had a surprise for me. I walked into the living room with anticipation, and there it was - a beautiful second-hand piano. Its polished surface gleamed in the soft light, and the keys seemed to beckon me. I was speechless with joy, tears welling up in my eyes. I rushed to my mom and hugged her tightly, unable to express my gratitude. That night, I sat at the piano and played for hours. The sound filled the room, and it was as if all my hard work and longing had finally found a home. I played every piece I knew, and with each note, I felt my connection to the piano growing stronger. My dad was very much against me playing, thinking it was a waste of time and money. But when he heard that song, something inside him changed. He stood in the doorway, listening intently. As the last note faded away, he walked over to me and placed a hand on my shoulder. "I never realized how much this meant to you," he said softly. "I was wrong to oppose it. You have a real talent, and I'll support you from now on." His words were like music to my ears. From that day on, my dad became my biggest cheerleader. He would sit and listen to me practice, offering words of encouragement and even helping me with some of the expenses for piano books and sheet music. With the combined support of my parents, I practiced even harder, knowing that I now had the full backing of my family. This newfound support not only boosted my confidence but also gave me the motivation to reach for greater heights in my piano playing, proving that with determination and family support, dreams can truly come true. 第二篇 One evening, when I was about 13, I came home, and my mom said she had a surprise for me. I followed her into the living room, and there, standing in the corner, was a second-hand piano. She told me she had been saving up for months, doing odd jobs here and there, to be able to afford it. I was overjoyed and couldn't wait to sit down and play. The moment my fingers touched the keys, I knew this was a turning point in my musical journey. I practiced on it every chance I got, and my skills improved rapidly. My dad was very much against me playing, thinking it was a waste of time and money. But when he heard that song, something inside him changed. He walked into the room quietly and stood there, listening intently. As the last note faded away, he came over and placed a hand on my shoulder. "I never realized how passionate you were about this," he said softly. "I was wrong to oppose it. From now on, I'll support you." His words brought tears to my eyes. With my dad's newfound support and the piano at home, I practiced even more diligently, determined to reach greater heights in my piano playing and prove that all the hard work and sacrifices were worth it. 参考范文 One evening, when I was about 13, I came home, and my mum said she had a surprise for me. I was expecting a chocolate bar, but it was a real piano, bought with more money borrowed from friends. It was the first time I'd played for her. She was expecting to hear a simple song but I played a very complicated one. She was in shock. And I could see that tears were rolling in her eyes as she hurried to fetch my dad from his room and almost pushed him into the sofa. “Just listen, ” she said. My dad was very much against me playing, but when he heard that song, something inside him changed. He'd wanted me to study medicine. But it seemed that from that moment on, he hardened my resolve to keep playing. And it turned out that my dad was such a music lover. He would always drop everything he was doing when-ever he heard the sound of the piano keys. “You know I wanted you to do medicine because it's a profitable career. But I can see in your eyes your passion for the piano, so if you do love playing it, play like no one else would. ” These words meant a lot to me. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$