高中英语续写作文语料库-动作描写 课件-2025届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

续写作文语料库--动作描写 1 How to make the action description more vivid? 1.分解动作--动作链 2.具体动词--忌笼统 3.配上表情--带情感 4.融入心理--重思维 2 感知:结合语境,如何优化表达? 1. Because of his lies, she looked at him. Because of his lies,she _________ at him. 2 With only twenty seconds left, I ran to the line. With only twenty seconds left,I ________________ to the line. 3.With only two minutes left, he ate his meal. With only two minutes left. He _______________ his meal. 4. She heard her mother say quietly as she walked down the hall,"Don't wake your dad up." She heard her mother ___________as she ________ down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up... glared rush/dashed swallowed up whispered tiptoed 3 目 录 Part one 用精准动词代替笼统动词 Part two 用恰当短语代替普通动词 Part three 添加介词短语/副词修饰动作 Part four 分解动作，形成动作链 Part five 动作描写词汇 4 Part One Choose Accurate Verbs 用精准动词代替笼统动词 5 general words(笼统的词笼统词） walk run look say/talk concrete words(具体词) chat(闲聊); whisper(耳语) weep/ sob(啜泣) bite(咬)chew(咀嚼)swallow(吞下) tiptoe(蹑手蹑脚地走) dash/rush(猛冲) glare(怒视);glance(瞥见);stare(凝视) 6 Part Two Choose properphrases 用恰当短语代替普通动词 7 start/begin decide cry remember tired see attract appeal to 动词动词 动词短语动词 get down to doing make up one's mind burst into tears keep in mind worn out catch sight of 8 Part Three 添加介词短语/副词修饰动作 9 动作描写语料库 探究 →The fierce wolf stared at Mac with its_________________ (adj.) teeth. →___________________________(adv.), he jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the car. →As the hungry wolf was almost reaching him, Mac's eyes were wide open_______________________.(in/with+名词) sharp/bloody/frightening/scary/terrible Immediately/Instantly/ Hurriedly/Breathlessly in fear/panic/horror/shock 10 Part Four 分解动作，形成动作链Action chains 11 把动作过程分解成一连串的动作，构造动作链，让你的动作描写既丰富又生动! 12 举例子： 她拥抱了Betty. (失散多年的老朋友） She dashed forward， gathered Betty into her arms and burst into tears. 冲上去-- 抱住她-- 流下眼泪-- dash forward hug/ gather her into her arms burst into tears 分析：动作链有哪些？ 形成句子： 13 举例子：他向狗扔了一块肉。 形成句子： He picked up a piece of meat , aimed at the dog and threw it to him. 捡起肉 瞄准狗 扔过去 pick up a piece of meat aim at the dog throw to 动作链： 14 I put on my coat hurriedly, grabbed my bag and rushed to school this morning. 训练：我早上匆忙去上学。 分析动作链： 穿外套 抓起书包 冲去学校 put on my coat grabbed my bag rushed to schoo! 形成句子： 15 The boys rushed excitedly to the lake, took off their clothes and jumped into the water. 训练：孩子们跳入湖中嬉戏 分析动作链： 冲向湖边 脱掉衣服 跳入水中 rushed to the lake took off their clothes jumped into the water 形成句子： 16 微写作练习---Imitate writing： ①Jim screamed. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ②He opened the door. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ③I comforted him. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ④He run to the starting line. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ⑤打篮球的动作链 _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 他运球穿过球场，躲过防守者，快速传球，然后投篮。 ⑥演讲的动作链 _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 他深吸一口气，走上舞台，调整了麦克风，开始对观众讲话。 ⑦描写读书的情景 开始：打开书本，翻开第一页。 中间：专注阅读，做记号，沉浸在故事中。 结束：合上书，思考所读内容，感受阅读的愉悦 _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Jim screamed at the top of his voice, stormed out of the room and slammed the door heavily behind him. He approached the door, turned the handle, and slowly pushed it open. I gently stroked his hair, held his hand tightly, and comforted him in a soft voice. Nodding his head, he stood up, clenched his fist and stumbled to the starting line. Dribbling the ball down the court, he dodged defenders, made a quick pass, and took a shot at the basket. Taking a deep breath, he stepped onto the stage, adjusted the microphone, and began addressing the audience. Opening the book, I'm immersed in its world; the occasional page turn echoes in the silence, and closing it leaves a lingering joy. 17 她站在山顶，仰望天空，感受着这份珍贵的宁静。 She stood on the top of the mountain ,looked into the sky and felt the precious peace . 如何句式升级？ 升级句式： 18 （1）句式：doing, 主语+谓语, doing Standing on the empty road, she looked into the sky ，feeling the precious peace. She stood on the top of the mountain ,looked into the sky and felt the precious peace . 改写下列句子： 19 （2）主语+谓语，doing and doing She stood on the top of the mountain, looking into the sky and feeling the precious peace. She stood on the top of the mountain ,looked into the sky and felt the precious peace . 改写下列句子： 20 被老师的话所鼓舞，Lucy 举起了手，说：我来。 Lucy was inspired by her teacher’s words, so she raised her hand and said :“I volunteer”. 案例分析： 如何升级该句子？ 21 Lucy was inspired by her teacher’s words, so she raised her hand and said，“I volunteer”. （3） done (by n), 主语+谓语，doing Inspired by her teacher’s words, Lucy raised her hand, saying，“I volunteer”. 改写下列句子： 22 （4）善用with 复合结构 Lucy was inspired by her teacher’s words, Lucy raised her hand and said，“I volunteer”. With teacher’s words inspiring her, Lucy raised her hand, saying:“I volunteer”. 改写下列句子： 23 Part Five describe body actions frommulti-perspectives 从头部手部腿部呼吸心跳等多角度描写肢体动作 24 头 嘴 腿 手臂 眼 手 脚 手指 动作描写： 25 肢体动作细节类短语--头 ①drop/lower/bend/bow/hang one's head 低头 ②put/hold/bury one's head in one's hands 双手抱头 ③nod one's head 点头 ④shake one's head 摇头 ⑤rest one's head on/against把头靠在...上面5 ⑥scratch one's head 挠了挠头 ⑦head for/towards 朝.....走去 26 1.史蒂文低着头，眼里含着泪，慢慢地向公交车走去。 ______________________________________________________________________________________ 2.他的朋友John向他点头微笑。 ______________________________________________________________________________________ 3.他心情不好，低下头来掩饰，勉强笑了一下。 ______________________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________________ 既学既练： Steven walked slowly to the bus, his head down, tears inhis eyes.(独立主格结构) His friend John nodded his head and smiled at him Though he was in a bad mood, he dropped/hung/loweredhis head to hide it and managed a smile. 27 肢体动作细节类短语--眼睛 ①meet sb's eyes 接触某人的目光 ②stare into one's eyes 凝视 ③fix/focus one's eyes on 盯着 ④lower/drop one's eyes 垂下眼睛 ⑤raise/lift one's eyes 抬起眼睛 ⑥one's eyes shine/sparkle/glisten with excitement 眼里闪着兴奋的光芒 28 按要求完成句子、 1.约翰坐在窗边，目光紧盯着一本书。 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2.他看完后，抬眼向窗外望去。 _______________________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ 3.他高兴地唱着歌,用天真而又好奇的眼睛注视着周围的一切。 _______________________________________________________________________________________ 既学既练： ①John sat beside the window, and fixed/focused hiseyes on a book.(并列句) ②John sat beside the window, with his eyesfixed/focused on a book.(with复合结构) When he finished the book, he raised/lifted his eyesand looked out of the window. Singing happily, he gazed at the surroundings with innocent and curious eyes. 29 肢体动作细节类短语--嘴巴 ①open-mouthed 目瞪口呆的 ②one's mouth widens 咧开嘴 ③cup/cover one's mouth 捂住某人的嘴 ④mouth drops/hangs wide open 张大嘴巴 ⑤one's heart in one's mouth 提心吊胆 30 1.闻到三明治的香味，饥饿的小女孩开始流口水了。 _____________________________________________________________________________________________ 2.她刚要拿起三明治咬一口，突然一只手捂住了她的嘴。 _____________________________________________________________________________________________ 3.她的哥哥一把抢走了三明治放入自己口中。 _____________________________________________________________________________________________ 既学既练： The hungry girl's mouth started watering when shesmelled the sandwich.(mouth作主语) She was about to pick up the sandwich and take a bitewhen suddenly a hand cupped her mouth. It was her brother who grabbed the sandwich and put itinto his own mouth. 31 肢体动作细节类短语--手 ①hold one's hand 抓住某人的手 ②shake hands with 与......握手 ③cup...in one's hands 将......捧在手心 ④open one's hands 张开双手 ⑤hand in hand 手拉手) ⑥raise/put up one's hand 举手 ⑦hold out one's hand 伸出手 ⑧take one's hand 牵某人的手 ⑨spread one's hands 摊开双手 32 1.一只小蝴蝶，正拼命扇动翅膀却无法从地面上飞起来。 _____________________________________________________________________________________ 2.在它面前是卡车的轮胎。 _________________________________________________________________________________ 3.我不假思索就下了车，举起手不让卡车司机往前走，然后弯下腰去看那只蝴蝶。 _________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________ 既学既练： A single butterfly was crazily fluttering its wings but couldnot get off the ground. It was right in front of a truck's tire. Without thinking I got out of my car, held my hand up so thetruck driver wouldn't move forward, and bent down to lookat the butterfly. 33 肢体动作细节类短语--腿 ①shaky/trembling legs 颤抖的双腿 ②tired legs 疲惫的双腿) ③cross one's legs 盘腿 ④drag one's heavy legs 拖着沉重的双腿 34 1.他继续努力向终点跑去，他嘴巴干涩，双腿抖。 2.他摔倒了，背部着地，双腿又开。 3.他费力地双腿颤抖地站了起来。 既学既练： ①He struggled to run towards the finishing line. His mouthwas dry and his legs trembled.(简单句) ②He struggled to run towards the finishing line, with his(with复合结构)mouth dry and his legs trembling. He fell over, flat on his back with his legs wide.(with复合结构) With effort, he rose to his feet on shaky legs. 35 肢体动作细节类短语--腿 1.单词:barefoot adj.&adv. 赤脚的(地) 2.短语: getleap to one's feet 直起身来/跳起来 ②)jump/rise to one's feet 跳起来/站起来 ③drag one's feet 拖着脚步 ④tap/stamp one's feet 跺脚 ⑤put one's feet up 跷起脚休息与 ⑥in bare foot 光着脚 36 肢体动作细节类短语--双臂 ①wave one's arms 挥动双臂 ②fold one's arms 某人双臂交叉 ③take one's arm 挽住某人的胳膊 ④catch/grab one's arm 抓住某人的胳膊) ⑤pull sb into one's arms 拉某人进怀 ⑥gather sb in one's arms 把某人抱在怀中 ⑦hold out/open one's arms 某人伸出/张开双臂⑧put/throw one's arms around sb 搂住某人 ⑨with open arms 双臂张开(欢迎) ⑩arm in arm 臂挽臂 37 1.他挥动着双臂朝门跑去。 2.她站在那里，双臂交叉，看上去很生气。 3. 他微笑着伸出/张开双臂。 既学既练： He ran to the door, waving his arms.(分词短语作状语) She stood there with her arms crossed/folded, lookingvery angry.(with 复合结构) He held out/opened his arms, smiling.(简单句) 38 肢体动作细节类短语--手指 ①lift/hold a warning finger 伸出一根手指警告 ②lift/hold a finger to one's lips 伸出一根手指按在嘴上③wag one's finger 摇着手指 ④point an accusing finger at sb 指责某人，怪罪某人⑤drum one's fingers on sp.用手指咚咚地敲某处 39 1.门开了又关上，老师走了进来，他伸出一根手指按在嘴上警告我们。 2.过了一会儿，一些学生又忍不住小声谈论起来。 3.老师再一次伸出一根手指按到唇边，要求安静。 既学既练： The door opened and closed and there stood the teacherholding/lifting a warning finger to his lips. After a while, some students couldn't help/resist talking ina whisper again. The teacher lifted/held a finger to his lips to ask for silence. 40 谢谢观看 41 痴颜 麦振鸿 花千骨 电视原声带 Blues 197680.05 $$