【春考特训课】第16讲：叙议结合类英语作文（上） -【决胜春季高考】2025年春季高考英语冲刺总复习（上海专用）

第16讲： 叙议结合类英语作文（上） 知识梳理 演练 【考情链接】 夹叙夹议文是一种比较常见的写作文体,。无论记人还是叙事都要通过叙述、描写来加以表达, 把人物的经历或行为、发生的事情/事件用一定的顺序和语言技巧叙述出来。在叙述过程中“人以事显, 事由人生”, 人和事是密不可分的。高考作文一般都不会单纯的记叙某事，而是夹叙夹议。围绕主题开展叙述、讨论理由、给出结论对全文的总结和概括。值得注意的是近年试题中经常出现记叙与议论相结合的叙议形式。 【要点梳理】 1/ 充分读题 01. 全文结构 语言是表达的重要载体，读、思、写的融合便构成了写作，上海高考英语作文往往要求考生充分读题、深入思考、个性写作。要求考生熟练掌握不同应用文的格式规范与各类文体的写作逻辑。纵向对比英语改革以来的高考作文，脱出高频考查的书信体，框架上偏向文体为夹叙夹议。 02. 内容要点 如2023年上海秋考作文，本次秋考作文命题让考生立足于17、8岁回忆童年，撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。这一命题并不“刁钻”，回归写作本质：深入了解自我、传递对生活的真实感受，进而向读者传递一种感动。毕竟这一展览的真正参观者不是别人，恰恰是阅卷老师。快乐童年的物件在考场上像是时空机，借着它忆过去、思当下、望未来，相信这也是对莘莘学子的长远祝福。题干背景信息需厘清：  第一：人物设定为吴磊，场景设定为主题展览，说明书用于参观者阅读；  第二：两条要求给出主次划分：对物品本身进行简要描述，着重点落在选择原因上。 （1）对该物品的介绍（记叙部分） 首先是对于物品外形的介绍，可从以下维度入手： 第一，五感（视听闻尝触，其中‘视’包括大小、形状和颜色）； 第二，材料及功能。除外形外，还应写到该物品的背景信息（在何时何地以何种方式获得这一物品），使介绍部分更生动，但同时一定需要控制好篇幅（3~4句），确保介绍部分的“简要”。 （2）推荐参展的原因（议论部分） 在原因的陈述中，可从不同角度出发。首先是具体&抽象两个角度：① 具体：该物品本身自带的功能或效用；② 抽象：由该物品所延伸的情感价值、教育意义、技能习得、艺术价值等。也可以从题干关键词出发，对比展开该物品童年&现在的不同意义：① 快乐童年：该物品象征了简单快乐的童年时间；② 关照现实：在现代的快节奏生活里，童年的物品显得弥足珍贵，它给予了我们片刻的逃离时间，让我们短暂地变成那个无忧无虑的小时候的自己。当然，这些观点并非各自独立，各位同学可根据自选物品进行2~3个原因的组合，充分论述选择某一物品的原因。 2/ 深入思考&个性写作 如2023年上海秋考作文，构思第一关便是具体物品的选择。建议结合个人真实经历进行选取，原因论述上最能传递真情实感；但不少学生构思上会陷入“内忧”与“外患”的苦恼：前者是素材储备不足，临场发挥时构思上难聚焦，即：想了很多物品不知道选什么，或完全想不到能与“快乐童年”有联系的物品；后者往往是头部学生的思虑：选取物品若不够独特，是否还能写得出彩，在众多试卷中杀出重围、取得高分? 上述情况借助“构思辅助线”可以较好解决，即：必要时需增添条件，关注逻辑自洽，进而提高论述内容的说服力。举个例子：若从个人兴趣爱好出发，描写童年时连环画带给自己的快乐，这类描写流于平淡、角度单一、难出新意；但如果增添“同班李华同学也是连环画的爱好者，与他分享连环画带来了长远友谊”这一条件，连环画这一物品承载的快乐、于个人的意义已跃然纸上。 此外，选择物件的原因可基于兴趣爱好、技能学习、智识启发等角度出发，如能多角度结合最佳，内容上更具说服力；无论哪一种角度的选取，利用详实的个人经历来进行佐证，更能展现个性写作，此时考生需关注记叙文常见的叙述顺序，如时间顺序、空间顺序、感情变化或事件线索等。 3/ 语料积累 有时候高考作文，往年模考题中也出现过类似话题，因此，各位同学平时一定要利用好手头材料，做好内容和语言的摘抄积累，这将成为考场的素材源泉。 备考建议： 考生在备考过程中，需要关注作文评分的三个维度——内容、语言、结构。 1. 内容方面要求学生能够涵盖所有要点，表达有条理。 2. 语言方面要求学生能够避免单词拼写和语法错误，避免中式思维的干扰性表达。同时要注意长短句的交 错使用，准确运用高级词汇，适当升级句型，从而使文章的语言多元化、高级化。 3. 结构方面要求考生在写作的时候脉络清晰，重点突出。能够运用恰当得运用连接词这一显性手段或者代 词、原词重现等隐形手段使得段内和段间的衔接自然，结构紧凑。 课堂精练 演练 2023年上海秋考英语作文 假如你是明启中学的高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“快乐童年”的展览，邀请每位同学提供一件生活中的物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。你会提供什么物品？写一篇介绍，内容须包括： 1）对该物品的简要描述； 2）你选择该物品参展的原因。       审题：（提供一种思路，仅供参考） 本次秋考作文为物品介绍，文体为结合，话题为学校生活。审题过程中，需关注等关键词。 ▶基础信息：情境——英语节展览；事件——提供展品；主题——快乐童年；任务——描述并说明原因。 ▶深入分析： 1）整体结构包含“首段：阐明情境并做出选择”，“正文：物品描述+原因（2-3个）”，“结尾：表达期盼”。 2）【物品的选择】自然是来自于自己童年的，理论上可以是任何东西，不论是生日礼物还是自己制作的、或是攒钱买来的都是不错的角度，具体可以是玩具、文具、乐器、书籍、画作、工艺品、服饰等等。 3）【物品的描述】突出主要特点（外观、功能、感受、故事等等），这是个简写的段落。 4）【选择的原因】需要详写，主要是论述部分逻辑清晰完整，内容方面可以涉及“具体特点（好看/好玩/好用...）”（即为展示和分享的）、“意义价值（个人的/成长的/教育的...）”（即为共鸣和启发的）等等。 Structure: ▶Introduction： √Explain the event you are going to participate in & State your choice of the item (e.g. I am thrilled to participate in the ‘Happy Childhood’ exhibition at our school’s English Festival. For this exhibition, I have chosen to provide an item that holds a special place in my heart—a red toy car.) ▶Main body: (Part 1) √Describe briefly about your chosen item (e.g. This toy car was a gift from my grandfather on my sixth birthday. It is a shiny red sports car,with intricate details that make it look like a miniature version of a real car. The body is smooth and sleek, and the wheels can rotate, allowing it to glide effortlessly across the floor.) ▶Main body: (Part 2) √Give your reasons why you have chosen the item and link them with logical connectors (but make sure you expand on your reasons with supporting details) (e.g. ① This toy train is not just an ordinary toy. It carries many happy memories from my childhood. I remember playing with it for hours on end, imagining myself as the train driver, traveling to different places.; ② This toy train helped me learn about shapes, colors, and numbers as well as different types of locomotives and carriages, and sparked my interest in transportation and engineering. It was great fun.) ▶Conclusion： √Express your expectations (e.g. I hope that visitors to the exhibition will be able to feel the happiness of childhood through this exhibit. Perhaps it will remind them of their own cherished childhood memories and bring a smile to their faces.) 下水版： I’m delighted to be invited to the English Festival at our school, which is organizing an exhibition entitled ‘Happy Childhood’. For my contribution to the exhibits, I have elected to provide a photograph from my childhood. The image depicts a scene in which I am playing with my family in a park. The sun is shining brightly, and we are all visibly enjoying ourselves. I selected this photograph for inclusion in the exhibition because it represents a joyful moment from my childhood. It serves as a reminder of the delightful times I spent with my family, engaging in playful activities and sharing laughter. On that particular sunny afternoon, we partook in a picnic on the grass and played games, resulting in an enjoyable weekend spent together. Additionally, this photograph evokes feelings of warmth and happiness within me, and it is my hope that by sharing it with visitors to the exhibition, they too may experience a glimpse into my happy childhood. It serves as a reminder of life’s simple pleasures and the significance of spending time with those we hold dear. In brief, my contribution to the ‘Happy Childhood’ exhibition is a photograph that captures a joyous moment from my past. It represents the happiness and love that characterized my childhood experiences, and it is my hope that it will elicit similar feelings of joy in those who view it. By sharing this photograph, I aim to convey the message that childhood is a time of happiness and wonder, and that such memories are to be cherished. (257) 学霸版： I'm Senior Three student Wu Lei, and what I bring to this “Happy Childhood”exhibition is “Henry”, my giant fluffy teddy bear, who has been accompanying me for over a decade. He has brown skin, dark eyes, a red nose, and soft pads that are most comfortable to rub I choose “Henry” simply because he serves as a constant reminder of how I have come into who I am today I got “Henry when I turned seven years old. Being rather naughty back then, I wanted almost everything that came into my sight, and usually ditched them once I got tired. But Henry” was somehow different. During our time together l gradually developed a deep affection for him, alongside which a sense of responsibility came naturally. Instead of just leaving him around my home, I would place him properly either on my bed or by the window. Every time our family went for an outing I would take him along, and no matter how late we got home I always made sure Henry” was carefully cleaned. Though I don't have as much time these days to keep him company, you can tell what excellent condition he is in even after all these years Above is the story of me and my dear “Henry. I hope you have a good time and enjoy the festival! (224) 2023年秋考作文题并非以往的“问题—建议”或“多项活动方案选择”类型的模式，更为开放的同时对考生的表达要求也更高，尤其是“细节描述”。不过即便如此，这次仍旧考查考生是否能够将作文设定的情境与实际结合进行合理的论述，并且能在运用一定的衔接手段和意义的逻辑关联的前提下，准确地表达自己的观点和情感态度。 课后反馈 演练 （2024年静安区二模） 假设你是明启中学李华，你校艺术节即将举办主题为“最美瞬间”的摄影展，捕捉“热爱生活、积极向上、全面发展”等正能量的精彩瞬间。现邀请每位同学提供自己生活中的一张照片参展，并撰写摄影作品的介绍供参观者阅读。你打算提供什么样的照片？请写一篇短文作为参展摄影作品的介绍，内容包括： 1) 对该照片的简要描述； 2) 你选择该照片参展的理由。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （2024年长宁区二模） 假如你是李华，准备参加《英文报》举办的主题为 “Changes in my community”的征文活动,要求用英文介绍身边发生的变化。你的征文必须包括： 1. 描述发生的变化； 2. 客观分析变化发生的原因。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【上海市进才中学2023-2024学年高三上学期9月阶段性测试】 城市博物馆即将举行“数字时间胶囊”(digital time capsule) 的拍摄活动，该活动旨在让100年后的人们了解当代人的生活，现在向全市征集物品或者生活场景作为拍摄内容。你会提供什么物品或生活场景?写一篇物品或场景的介绍，内容需包括： 1.对物品或生活场景的简要描述； 2.你选择该物品或生活场景的原因。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （2023年1月上海春季高考） Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 你们班的口语课外教Tom发现你们班课上互动不积极，委托你了解同学们的想法，经过你对全班同学看法的了解，有些同学表示对课堂上讨论的话题不感兴趣，有些同学害怕犯错，不敢开口。 1. 向 Tom 反映同学的想法: 2. 向 Tom 提出建议并说明理由。 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ (2023年6月上海高考英语作文) 你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“ 快乐童年”的展览，邀请每个同学提供一件生活中物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读，要求描述展品以及选择原因。  内容必须包括： 1）对该物品的简要描述 2）你选择该物品参展的原因 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________     原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！第 1 页 共 1 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 第16讲： 叙议结合类英语作文（上） 知识梳理 演练 【考情链接】 夹叙夹议文是一种比较常见的写作文体,。无论记人还是叙事都要通过叙述、描写来加以表达, 把人物的经历或行为、发生的事情/事件用一定的顺序和语言技巧叙述出来。在叙述过程中“人以事显, 事由人生”, 人和事是密不可分的。高考作文一般都不会单纯的记叙某事，而是夹叙夹议。围绕主题开展叙述、讨论理由、给出结论对全文的总结和概括。值得注意的是近年试题中经常出现记叙与议论相结合的叙议形式。 【要点梳理】 1/ 充分读题 01. 全文结构 语言是表达的重要载体，读、思、写的融合便构成了写作，上海高考英语作文往往要求考生充分读题、深入思考、个性写作。要求考生熟练掌握不同应用文的格式规范与各类文体的写作逻辑。纵向对比英语改革以来的高考作文，脱出高频考查的书信体，框架上偏向文体为夹叙夹议。 02. 内容要点 如2023年上海秋考作文，本次秋考作文命题让考生立足于17、8岁回忆童年，撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。这一命题并不“刁钻”，回归写作本质：深入了解自我、传递对生活的真实感受，进而向读者传递一种感动。毕竟这一展览的真正参观者不是别人，恰恰是阅卷老师。快乐童年的物件在考场上像是时空机，借着它忆过去、思当下、望未来，相信这也是对莘莘学子的长远祝福。题干背景信息需厘清：  第一：人物设定为吴磊，场景设定为主题展览，说明书用于参观者阅读；  第二：两条要求给出主次划分：对物品本身进行简要描述，着重点落在选择原因上。 （1）对该物品的介绍（记叙部分） 首先是对于物品外形的介绍，可从以下维度入手： 第一，五感（视听闻尝触，其中‘视’包括大小、形状和颜色）； 第二，材料及功能。除外形外，还应写到该物品的背景信息（在何时何地以何种方式获得这一物品），使介绍部分更生动，但同时一定需要控制好篇幅（3~4句），确保介绍部分的“简要”。 （2）推荐参展的原因（议论部分） 在原因的陈述中，可从不同角度出发。首先是具体&抽象两个角度：① 具体：该物品本身自带的功能或效用；② 抽象：由该物品所延伸的情感价值、教育意义、技能习得、艺术价值等。也可以从题干关键词出发，对比展开该物品童年&现在的不同意义：① 快乐童年：该物品象征了简单快乐的童年时间；② 关照现实：在现代的快节奏生活里，童年的物品显得弥足珍贵，它给予了我们片刻的逃离时间，让我们短暂地变成那个无忧无虑的小时候的自己。当然，这些观点并非各自独立，各位同学可根据自选物品进行2~3个原因的组合，充分论述选择某一物品的原因。 2/ 深入思考&个性写作 如2023年上海秋考作文，构思第一关便是具体物品的选择。建议结合个人真实经历进行选取，原因论述上最能传递真情实感；但不少学生构思上会陷入“内忧”与“外患”的苦恼：前者是素材储备不足，临场发挥时构思上难聚焦，即：想了很多物品不知道选什么，或完全想不到能与“快乐童年”有联系的物品；后者往往是头部学生的思虑：选取物品若不够独特，是否还能写得出彩，在众多试卷中杀出重围、取得高分? 上述情况借助“构思辅助线”可以较好解决，即：必要时需增添条件，关注逻辑自洽，进而提高论述内容的说服力。举个例子：若从个人兴趣爱好出发，描写童年时连环画带给自己的快乐，这类描写流于平淡、角度单一、难出新意；但如果增添“同班李华同学也是连环画的爱好者，与他分享连环画带来了长远友谊”这一条件，连环画这一物品承载的快乐、于个人的意义已跃然纸上。 此外，选择物件的原因可基于兴趣爱好、技能学习、智识启发等角度出发，如能多角度结合最佳，内容上更具说服力；无论哪一种角度的选取，利用详实的个人经历来进行佐证，更能展现个性写作，此时考生需关注记叙文常见的叙述顺序，如时间顺序、空间顺序、感情变化或事件线索等。 3/ 语料积累 有时候高考作文，往年模考题中也出现过类似话题，因此，各位同学平时一定要利用好手头材料，做好内容和语言的摘抄积累，这将成为考场的素材源泉。 备考建议： 考生在备考过程中，需要关注作文评分的三个维度——内容、语言、结构。 1. 内容方面要求学生能够涵盖所有要点，表达有条理。 2. 语言方面要求学生能够避免单词拼写和语法错误，避免中式思维的干扰性表达。同时要注意长短句的交 错使用，准确运用高级词汇，适当升级句型，从而使文章的语言多元化、高级化。 3. 结构方面要求考生在写作的时候脉络清晰，重点突出。能够运用恰当得运用连接词这一显性手段或者代 词、原词重现等隐形手段使得段内和段间的衔接自然，结构紧凑。 课堂精练 演练 2023年上海秋考英语作文 假如你是明启中学的高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“快乐童年”的展览，邀请每位同学提供一件生活中的物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。你会提供什么物品？写一篇介绍，内容须包括： 1）对该物品的简要描述； 2）你选择该物品参展的原因。       审题：（提供一种思路，仅供参考） 本次秋考作文为物品介绍，文体为记叙文&议论文结合，话题为学校生活。审题过程中，需关注“快乐童年”、“展览”、“一件生活中的物品”等关键词。 ▶基础信息：情境——英语节展览；事件——提供展品；主题——快乐童年；任务——描述并说明原因。 ▶深入分析： 1）整体结构包含“首段：阐明情境并做出选择”，“正文：物品描述+原因（2-3个）”，“结尾：表达期盼”。 2）【物品的选择】自然是来自于自己童年的，理论上可以是任何东西，不论是生日礼物还是自己制作的、或是攒钱买来的都是不错的角度，具体可以是玩具、文具、乐器、书籍、画作、工艺品、服饰等等。 3）【物品的描述】突出主要特点（外观、功能、感受、故事等等），这是个简写的段落。 4）【选择的原因】需要详写，主要是论述部分逻辑清晰完整，内容方面可以涉及“具体特点（好看/好玩/好用...）”（即为展示和分享的）、“意义价值（个人的/成长的/教育的...）”（即为共鸣和启发的）等等。 Structure: ▶Introduction： √Explain the event you are going to participate in & State your choice of the item (e.g. I am thrilled to participate in the ‘Happy Childhood’ exhibition at our school’s English Festival. For this exhibition, I have chosen to provide an item that holds a special place in my heart—a red toy car.) ▶Main body: (Part 1) √Describe briefly about your chosen item (e.g. This toy car was a gift from my grandfather on my sixth birthday. It is a shiny red sports car,with intricate details that make it look like a miniature version of a real car. The body is smooth and sleek, and the wheels can rotate, allowing it to glide effortlessly across the floor.) ▶Main body: (Part 2) √Give your reasons why you have chosen the item and link them with logical connectors (but make sure you expand on your reasons with supporting details) (e.g. ① This toy train is not just an ordinary toy. It carries many happy memories from my childhood. I remember playing with it for hours on end, imagining myself as the train driver, traveling to different places.; ② This toy train helped me learn about shapes, colors, and numbers as well as different types of locomotives and carriages, and sparked my interest in transportation and engineering. It was great fun.) ▶Conclusion： √Express your expectations (e.g. I hope that visitors to the exhibition will be able to feel the happiness of childhood through this exhibit. Perhaps it will remind them of their own cherished childhood memories and bring a smile to their faces.) 下水版： I’m delighted to be invited to the English Festival at our school, which is organizing an exhibition entitled ‘Happy Childhood’. For my contribution to the exhibits, I have elected to provide a photograph from my childhood. The image depicts a scene in which I am playing with my family in a park. The sun is shining brightly, and we are all visibly enjoying ourselves. I selected this photograph for inclusion in the exhibition because it represents a joyful moment from my childhood. It serves as a reminder of the delightful times I spent with my family, engaging in playful activities and sharing laughter. On that particular sunny afternoon, we partook in a picnic on the grass and played games, resulting in an enjoyable weekend spent together. Additionally, this photograph evokes feelings of warmth and happiness within me, and it is my hope that by sharing it with visitors to the exhibition, they too may experience a glimpse into my happy childhood. It serves as a reminder of life’s simple pleasures and the significance of spending time with those we hold dear. In brief, my contribution to the ‘Happy Childhood’ exhibition is a photograph that captures a joyous moment from my past. It represents the happiness and love that characterized my childhood experiences, and it is my hope that it will elicit similar feelings of joy in those who view it. By sharing this photograph, I aim to convey the message that childhood is a time of happiness and wonder, and that such memories are to be cherished. (257) 学霸版： I'm Senior Three student Wu Lei, and what I bring to this “Happy Childhood”exhibition is “Henry”, my giant fluffy teddy bear, who has been accompanying me for over a decade. He has brown skin, dark eyes, a red nose, and soft pads that are most comfortable to rub I choose “Henry” simply because he serves as a constant reminder of how I have come into who I am today I got “Henry when I turned seven years old. Being rather naughty back then, I wanted almost everything that came into my sight, and usually ditched them once I got tired. But Henry” was somehow different. During our time together l gradually developed a deep affection for him, alongside which a sense of responsibility came naturally. Instead of just leaving him around my home, I would place him properly either on my bed or by the window. Every time our family went for an outing I would take him along, and no matter how late we got home I always made sure Henry” was carefully cleaned. Though I don't have as much time these days to keep him company, you can tell what excellent condition he is in even after all these years Above is the story of me and my dear “Henry. I hope you have a good time and enjoy the festival! (224) 小结： 2023年秋考作文题并非以往的“问题—建议”或“多项活动方案选择”类型的模式，更为开放的同时对考生的表达要求也更高，尤其是“细节描述”。不过即便如此，这次仍旧考查考生是否能够将作文设定的情境与实际结合进行合理的论述，并且能在运用一定的衔接手段和意义的逻辑关联的前提下，准确地表达自己的观点和情感态度。 课后反馈 演练 （2024年静安区二模） 假设你是明启中学李华，你校艺术节即将举办主题为“最美瞬间”的摄影展，捕捉“热爱生活、积极向上、全面发展”等正能量的精彩瞬间。现邀请每位同学提供自己生活中的一张照片参展，并撰写摄影作品的介绍供参观者阅读。你打算提供什么样的照片？请写一篇短文作为参展摄影作品的介绍，内容包括： 1) 对该照片的简要描述； 2) 你选择该照片参展的理由。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: This is a photo depicting a sunrise over a misty mountain peak. In the image, the sun is just peeking over the horizon, casting a warm golden glow across the sky and illuminating the rolling clouds that cling to the mountain slopes. I chose this photo for the exhibition because it captures a breathtaking moment of natural beauty and serenity. The vibrant colors of the sunrise symbolize hope and new beginnings, reflecting the theme that the art festival seeks to promote. Additionally, the tranquil atmosphere of the scene encourages viewers to pause and appreciate the wonders of nature, fostering a sense of mindfulness and gratitude. The photo invites viewers to connect with their surroundings and find inspiration in the simple joys of everyday life. It serves as a reminder to embrace each moment with enthusiasm and a positive outlook. 【解析】 【导语】本篇书面表达属于开放性作文。题目要求学生以李华的身份，参与学校艺术节即将举办的“最美瞬间”摄影展，为参展摄影作品写一篇介绍，需涵盖简要描述和选择的理由。 【详解】1. 词汇积累 描绘：depict→portrary 捕捉：capture→catch, seize 象征：symbolize→represent signify 激励某人做某事：encourage sb. to do→motivate sb. to do, inspire sb. to do 培养：foster→cultivate, develop 2. 句式拓展 简单句变复合句 原句：This is a photo depicting a sunrise over a misty mountain peak. 拓展句：This is a photo that depicts a sunrise over a misty mountain peak. 【点睛】[高分句型1] In the image, the sun is just peeking over the horizon, casting a warm golden glow across the sky and illuminating the rolling clouds that cling to the mountain slopes (运用了现在分词短语作状语、that引导限制性定语从句) [高分句型2] I chose this photo for the exhibition because it captures a breathtaking moment of natural beauty and serenity. (运用了because引导原因状语从句) （2024年长宁区二模） 假如你是李华，准备参加《英文报》举办的主题为 “Changes in my community”的征文活动,要求用英文介绍身边发生的变化。你的征文必须包括： 1. 描述发生的变化； 2. 客观分析变化发生的原因。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Changes in my community It’s common phenomenon in my community that electric cars take up the most parking lot in the garage instead of gas vehicles. Also, when we commute between home and company, electric scooters play a critical role in time efficiency, convenience and expense spent on transportation. People travel everywhere with faster means of transports, and make full use of digital payment system such as WeChat, Alipay. There are a few reasons contributing to this. Firstly, with the rapid development of technology, people tend to cater to mainstream lifestyle as technology aims to create a better and modern life and has achieved what it promises, which is beneficial to the public eventually. Secondly, our society has turned into a highly efficient one that people have to speed up to adapt to. So it comes as a trend that the faster, the more efficient, the better. I do hope technology will do us good more economically and bring more comfort to our community. 【解析】 【导语】本篇书面表达属于开放性作文，要求学生用英文介绍社区发生的变化，并客观分析变化发生的原因。 【详解】1.词汇积累 重要的：critical→crucial 利用：make use of→take advantage of 倾向于：tend to→be likely to 加速：speed up→accelerate 2.句式拓展 同义句转换 原句：Secondly, our society has turned into a highly efficient one that people have to speed up to adapt to. 拓展句：Secondly, our society has turned into such a highly efficient one that people have to speed up to adapt to it. 【点睛】【高分句型1】Firstly, with the rapid development of technology, people tend to cater to mainstream lifestyle as technology aims to create a better and modern life and has achieved what it promises, which is beneficial to the public eventually.（运用了what引导的宾语从句，which引导的非限制性定语从句和as引导的状语从句） 【高分句型2】It’s common phenomenon in my community that electric cars take up the most parking lot in the garage instead of gas vehicles.（运用了it作形式主语，that引导主语从句） 【上海市进才中学2023-2024学年高三上学期9月阶段性测试】 城市博物馆即将举行“数字时间胶囊”(digital time capsule) 的拍摄活动，该活动旨在让100年后的人们了解当代人的生活，现在向全市征集物品或者生活场景作为拍摄内容。你会提供什么物品或生活场景?写一篇物品或场景的介绍，内容需包括： 1.对物品或生活场景的简要描述； 2.你选择该物品或生活场景的原因。 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【参考答案01】 The city museum is organizing a special event called "Digital Time Capsule" to capture the essence of our present-day lives. The purpose of this event is to provide insights into the lives of people living in the present for those who will come across it a hundred years later. The city is now calling for submissions of items or scenes that represent our current way of life. In this composition, I will introduce the item or scene that I would like to contribute to the time capsule. I would like to submit a smartphone as a representation of contemporary life. This sleek handheld device has become an integral part of our daily routines. It embodies not only communication with loved ones and friends but also serves as a gateway to the digital world. With its advanced features, the smartphone offers access to social media platforms, online shopping, news, entertainment, and limitless information at our fingertips. I have chosen the smartphone because it symbolizes the technological advancements and rapid pace of change in our society. It has revolutionized the way we communicate, work, and entertain ourselves. Moreover, the smartphone captures the essence of the digital age, where information and connectivity play a crucial role. By including this item in the digital time capsule, future generations will gain insight into how technology has shaped our lives and the progression of human civilization. In conclusion, the smartphone represents a significant aspect of contemporary life and showcases the impact of technology on our society. Through its inclusion in the city's digital time capsule, future generations will have the opportunity to understand our way of life and appreciate the advancements made during this era. 写作思路： · 仔细阅读题目，理解要求和写作目标； · 确定自己选择的物品或生活场景； · 对选择的物品或生活场景进行简要描述，包括其外观、功能等方面； · 解释选择该物品或生活场景的原因，可以涉及其代表性、普遍性、象征意义等； · 对整篇文章进行编辑和修改，确保语言流畅、信息准确。 写作框架： 引言：介绍城市博物馆的“数字时间胶囊”项目，并说明自己将提供的物品或生活场景； 描述：对所选择的物品或生活场景进行简要描述，包括外观、功能等； 原因1：解释选择该物品或生活场景的第一个原因； 原因2：解释选择该物品或生活场景的第二个原因； 总结：总结自己的选择，并强调其代表性和重要性。 【参考答案02】 In order to take part in the “digital time capsule” shooting campaign to be held in the City Museum, which aims to give people a glimpse of contemporary life 100 years, I would like to provide mobile phones and give you a picture of how people’s use of different communication methods and mobile phones has changed over the course of two decades. Mobile phones have become such an important part of our lives and they show how much technology has advanced. People today have access to any information at their fingertips and can stay constantly connected with friends around the world. Over the past two decades, people’s communication devices have undergone rapid changes from landlines to pagers to mobile phones to smartphones. By photographing the way people talk with different communication devices in different generations, it can reflect the development of science and technology and the improvement of people’s living standards in the past 20 years, which can help people understand the life of contemporary people in 100 years. So I think mobile phones fit the theme of “digital time capsule” very well. 【解析】 【导语】本篇书面表达属于开放性作文。要求考生就城市博物馆即将举行的“数字时间胶囊”的拍摄活动，介绍自己拟提供的物品或生活场景，说明选择该物品或生活场景的原因，并作简要描述。 【详解】1. 词汇积累： 参加：take part in→participate in 旨在做：aim to do→be intended to do 拍摄：shoot→photograph 手机：mobile phone→cell phone 提供：provide→offer 2. 同义句转换： 原句： Mobile phones have become such an important part of our lives and they show how much technology has advanced. 拓展句： Mobile phones have become such an important part of our lives, showing how much technology has advanced. 【点睛】【高分句型1】 In order to take part in the “digital time capsule” shooting campaign to be held in the City Museum, which aims to give people a glimpse of contemporary life 100 years, I would like to provide mobile phones and give you a picture of how people’s use of different communication methods and mobile phones has changed over the course of two decades.（运用了以关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句和以连接副词how引导的宾语从句。） 【高分句型2】By photographing the way people talk with different communication devices in different generations, it can reflect the development of science and technology and the improvement of people’s living standards in the past 20 years, which can help people understand the life of contemporary people in 100 years.（运用了以关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句。） （2023年1月上海春季高考） Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 你们班的口语课外教Tom发现你们班课上互动不积极，委托你了解同学们的想法，经过你对全班同学看法的了解，有些同学表示对课堂上讨论的话题不感兴趣，有些同学害怕犯错，不敢开口。 1. 向 Tom 反映同学的想法: 2. 向 Tom 提出建议并说明理由。 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 范文: 一 Dear Tom, I’m writing to you on the purpose of telling you what my classmates think about your class as well as my personal suggestions. After understanding the views of the class, I found that some students conveyed lacking interest in the topics discussed in your class, which may exert a negative impact on interacting with you. Moreover, some students are not confident in their oral English level and they're afraid of making mistakes in communication, which makes then feel embarrassed in talking to you about what they want to voice. From my point of view, one beneficial step is to play games in the class, which can be an effective method to attract our attention and arouse our interest, so that we can have full expectations and imagination of your class. It is conceivable that the learning styles can create an active and colorful English  classroom environment, which is the cornerstone of building bridges between you and us students. Another is more supportive words to encourage us to talk, which plays a vital role in increasing classroom interaction. Meanwhile, our learning initiative and efficiency will be greatly enhanced. Not only can it improve the efficiency of learning, but also cause us to get more sense of achievement, stemming from what we can say a lot. And you can understand us, thus making us generate confidence and interest. I do hope that my suggestions will be taken into consideration.                                                                                                             Yours sincerely,                                                                                                                            Li Ming 范文: 二 Dear Tom, Since you asked me to inquire about the reasons why we do not interact with each other actively, I have been communicating with them and acquainted myself with the facts. Stated below are their concerns and my suggestions. As for the reasons, some mentioned that the topics discussed in your class is partially accountable for the situation, while others are merely afraid of making grammatical and pronunciation mistakes and speaking fluent English to voice themselves is a great challenge for them.  Taking the two reasons above into account, I have two solutions to tackle the issue. The first beneficial step is to assign the tasks to different students,and what you need to do is nothing more than regulating the standards of each task. For example, a couple of students should be responsible for selecting appealing and entertaining topics, and some other students can design the activities and determine the form of the class. Given that we know exactly what really inspires and appeals to our peers, we are bound to discover the most desirable topics and activities. Another solution is to use more supportive words to avoid the embarrassment sensed by students, which can play a vital role in increasing classroom interaction. With supportive words , we do not need to worry about the likelihood that we my be laughed at or receive negative responses when making mistakes, thus allowing us to speak English aloud. Consequently, not only the efficiency of learning will be improved , but also they can help to bring a greater sense of achievement. To conclude, the student-oriented measures mentioned above may both cater for the students and relieve your pressure. And we feel so proud that we have such an admirable and responsible teacher as you. And it would be highly appreciated if you reckon my suggestions sensible. Yours sincerely, LiMing 范文: 三 Dear Tom, As requested, I have gathered the opinions of our classmates regarding the lack of active participation in our oral English class. It seems that some students are simply not interested in the discussion topics presented in class, while others are afraid of making mistakes and therefore hesitate to speak up. To address these issues, I have a few suggestions. Firstly, we could try to make the topics more engaging and relevant to our lives. By incorporating current events or popular culture, students may find it easier to connect and contribute to the discussions. Additionally, implementing activities that encourage teamwork and collaboration could help alleviate the fear of making mistakes. When students feel supported by their peers, they are more likely to take risks and share their thoughts. Furthermore, it would be beneficial if you could create a comfortable and non-judgmental environment in class. This will help boost students' confidence and reduce their fear of speaking in front of others. Thank you for entrusting me with this task. I believe that by implementing these suggestions, we can foster a more interactive and engaging learning atmosphere in our oral English class. Best regards, LiMing 重难点词汇 中文解释 英文原文 active participation 积极参与 active participation discussion topics 讨论话题 discussion topics hesitate to speak up 犹豫不决，不敢开口 hesitate to speak up engaging 吸引人的，有趣的 engaging relevant 相关的 relevant current events 当前事件 current events popular culture 流行文化 popular culture teamwork 团队合作 teamwork collaboration 合作 collaboration non-judgmental 不带偏见的，不评判的 non-judgmental interactive 互动的，互相影响的 interactive 重难点句型句式 中文翻译 英文原文 I have gathered the opinions of our classmates regarding... 我已经收集了同学们关于...的意见 I have gathered the opinions of our classmates regarding... To address these issues, I have a few suggestions. 为了解决这些问题，我有几个建议。 To address these issues, I have a few suggestions. ...could help alleviate the fear of making mistakes. ...可以缓解犯错的恐惧感。 ...could help alleviate the fear of making mistakes. ...more likely to take risks and share their thoughts. 更有可能冒险并分享他们的想法。 ...more likely to take risks and share their thoughts. ...foster a more interactive and engaging learning atmosphere... ...培养一个更具互动和吸引力的学习氛围... ...foster a more interactive and engaging learning atmosphere... 2023春考下水文 Dear Tom, After seeking my classmates’ opinion, I find most students shrink from activities for fear of making mistakes and embarrassing themselves in public. Meanwhile, some topics in class hardly interest them. I’d like to offer some suggestions to motivate students. Shy and timid as we are, we youngsters are always eager to prove ourselves and long for fun and excitement. So games are most welcome here and can work wonders in boosting confidence and breaking the ice. Guessing word meanings, acting in English plays and doing crossword puzzles are our favorite. And nothing spurs us into action like group competition. Let’s have a try next time! What’s more, as far as I’m concerned, animation, comics and games enjoy massive popularity among students. We can pick such topics, form groups accordingly, and share our experience with peers. After our short presentation, you can make brief comments, and organize a follow-up session where further discussions can be made. In this way, our class can engage everyone either as a leader or a member in a group. You always want nothing but the best for us. We are all grateful to your invaluable help in oral English. So let’s deal with the problems and make progress together! Yours, Li Hua (2023年6月上海高考英语作文) 你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“ 快乐童年”的展览，邀请每个同学提供一件生活中物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读，要求描述展品以及选择原因。  内容必须包括： 1）对该物品的简要描述 2）你选择该物品参展的原因 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 解题思路： 1.描述选择物品：可以选择一件与快乐童年有关的物品，一本喜欢的童话书或者一个陪伴自己成长的玩具 2.解释原因：解释为什么选择了该物品参展，可以从个人情感回忆和影响等方面进行阐述，说明该物品与快乐童年之间的联系。 常用表达： 介绍外形： long, white, high ,round, square, big small , shape,color, pink, brown  介绍用途： be used to； be applied to； be used for different purposes 介绍材料质地：be made of/ from； steel; iron copper,  plastic; leather;wood;cloth;  cotton 句型： 1. It is …… centimeters long. 2.It is……centimeters in length and…… centimeters in width. 3. It is made in/of/from 4. The problem it may bring is  5. It can be used to 6. It is convenient for…… 参考范文1:       I’m Wu Lei.For the "Happy Childhood" exhibition, I have chosen to exhibit my cherished Barbie doll. This special doll was given to me by my mother, and she has been my constant companion throughout my entire childhood. With her beautiful black hair, pink skirt, and captivating big eyes, she exudes a sense of elegance and charm. I enjoyed dressing her up and experimenting with different styles, making her even more stunning. The Barbie doll holds immense sentimental value to me, as she played a significant role in my childhood. She was not just a toy; she became my confidante and my dearest friend. During moments of sadness or conflict with my peers, I would turn to her and pour out my heart. She patiently listened, providing solace and comfort during my loneliest and darkest days. Her presence was a source of strength and understanding.    Reflecting upon my childhood, memories of this beloved Barbie doll never fail to surface. She remains a symbol of unwavering companionship and a source of joy. Regardless of the circumstances, she was always there, faithfully accompanying me. Through this exhibition, I aim to share the significance of this doll in my life and evoke a sense of nostalgia and appreciation for the simple joys and cherished connections of childhood. 参考范文2：    I'm glad to know that our school is organizing an English festival with the theme “Happy Childhood”, where each student is invited to provide an item from their life to be exhibited. After much consideration, I have decided to exhibit my favorite childhood book, “The Adventures of Peter Rabbit ” The Adventures of Peter Rabbit is  a classic children's book.  It tells the story of a rabbit named Peter and his exciting adventures in McGregor's  Garden.  I chose this book for the exhibition because it represents the joy and innocence of my early years. It reminds me of the carefree  days of my childhood where I could immerse myself in the enchanting word of stories.  By exhibiting this book, I hope to share the happiness and wonder of my childhood with others. I believe that everyone deserves to experience the joy of a carefree and imaginative childhood. 语篇分析： 今年作文，围绕人与自我的新课标主题，再次体现关注学生心理健康和个人成长。关注社会生活，关注世道人心，关注励志成长，这是高考作文立足现实的体现，也是高考作文核心价值观的体现。所以考生们在备考的时候，应多关注这类个人成长的话题    原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！第 1 页 共 1 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$